Storyboard Mission Submission

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Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen: Facilitate a major peace agreement (5)
Meet with a major faction representative (4)
Explore a landmark (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/08/2018
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Additional information: Part four of major LM development

~Mission Failed. I admire how you really tie these different missions together, but this just doesn't cut it as an S-rank for me.
 
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- Terrorize a large community
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/13/2018
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Additional information: I ain’t even come to fight or do harm. She ignored me. I’m light skinned. ������������*♂

~Mission Passed. I was going to talk about you having only one storyboard element, but except for presenting the context in a small paragraph it’s pretty much all terrorizing from there, even if you just start with the leader. You should submit this landmark change.
You're also the lucky winner of an A-ranked artifact, to be added.


(Senzo Sentan) – Ancestral Edge
Type: Artifact
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra: N/A (+25 per strike)
Damage: N/A
Description: The Ancestral Edge is a five foot spear forged from steel and imbued with a mysterious orange ore from Tobusekai, the Eastern Continent. The spear predates the Hangurian Freehold, although is thought to have come after the Sage of Six Paths spread chakra throughout the world. Unlike traditional and conventional spears, the Ancestral Edge does not cut bone or rend flesh; instead its blunt strikes siphons the essence of that which it hits. In simple terms, the spear drains chakra from those it comes in contact with, barring the wielder. A single strike, a moment of contact, drains 50 chakra from the victim and returns 25 chakra to the user. The 25 chakra that is not returned to the user is stored within the spear, which is slowly stored up within the spear in order to access its fullest potential: the ability of nullification. Once the wielder has successfully stored 25 chakra within the spear, the spear can release an invisible pulse of chakra up to the end of mid-range from the user’s position. This invisible pulse of chakra, travelling at thrice the user’s speed, has the potential to nullify all Fuuinjutsu up to, and including, S-Rank for two turns. The spear is remarkably durable, being able to sustain itself from A-Rank attacks. The spear can survive a single S-Rank attack, but after which its defenses will be nullified; this leaves it vulnerable to mere freeform damage. The spear’s chakra reserves are drained at a rate of 25 per turn outside of battle.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
Prepare one of the landmarks you own for immediate or future attacks
Experiment with very advanced ninjutsu
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 14/06 - 2018
Relevant mission links: [ ]
Additional information: N/A >_O

~Mission Failed. You stick with it, and although I hesitated at the way you combine your two SE’s I think the overall theme of getting stronger served you well here. However, I just don’t think this meets the high criteria for an S-rank.
 
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Investigate the history of a landmark ( 3 )
Cutsom: Provide medical attention to two or more people ( 3 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06-14-2018
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Additional information: Tried to work my story into the previous history of the landmark. Hope it worked.

~Mission Passed. Little too specialized a custom storyboard element for the list, but nice.
 
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- Help a friend (2)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06-14-2018
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Additional information: N/A

~Mission Passed. Helping a friend is pretty broad, but I actually think you succeed in making an overlying theme of it. That’s good in my book.
 
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Story elements chosen: Identify Traitor
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 6/19/18
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Additional information: Claiming the Land also

~Mission Failed. Nice story and a very immersive fight, but you don't spent much time identifying a traitor, though I suppose I can see how that's the overarching idea, you spend most of your time fighting. Storyboard elements must describe the components of your story, not just its overall theme. You'll do just fine in the future if you remember that and add more storyboard elements accordingly; or make your narrative much more focused on a few.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
Facilitate a major peace agreement ( 5 )
Establish control over a hostile area ( 5 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
06-15-2018
06-18-2018
Relevant mission links: [ ] [ ] [ ] [ ]
Additional information: Originally I was going to instigate a fight and create a more forceful narrative but we realized how little time we had until the end of the arc and didn't want to cut it too close. Thus when Pyro NB replied he just negated my offensive and we continued. If this causes a problem I apologize for it.

~Mission Passed. Not at all. Using techniques for RP purposes is totally fine with us. I really like how you guys progress here. I probably miss some context in between the missions, but it's nice to see some clans interacting for once.
 
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Pyro NB

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Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
-Facilitate a major peace agreement ( 5 )
-Meet with a major faction representative (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/15/2018 - 06/18/2018
Relevant mission links: [ ][ ]
Additional information:

~Mission Passed. Very good work. Nice to see some foreign diplomacy at work.
 
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Convince a criminal to confess ( 3 )
Identify a traitor ( 3 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06-21-2018
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Additional information: Just to fill downtime and help claim a LM and be a clan mission.

~Mission Passed.
 
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Mission Rank: 3.5 (A)
Story elements chosen: - Explore an Abandoned site (2)
- Defend yourself from wild Beasts (2)
- Win a fight without my Ninjutsu (5)
- Survive a near death situation (5)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/21/2018
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~Mission Passed. The ratio of time spent on your different storyboard elements is a bit wacky, but there's no law against a lot of exploration so I'll give this a pass.
 
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Korra.

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Story elements chosen: Explore a landmark (1)
Set up camp (1)
Build something for the Clan (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/21/2018
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Additional information: used Earth Style: Wheel Of Fortune

~Mission Failed. Yeah, nah.
 
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Story elements chosen:
-Prepare one of the landmarks you own for immediate or future attacks (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/22/2018
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Additional information: All the building would take place between arcs

~Mission Passed. This LM's history is starting to reach lore proportions because of you. Nice.
 
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Mission Rank: S-Rank
Story elements chosen:
- Custom: Prolong Meditation (1, +1 per turn)
- Survive a near-death situation (5)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/18/2018 to 06/22/2018
Relevant mission links:

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Additional information: N/A

~Well, three posts of yours makes the math 8/2, so this is an A-rank. This was short, but sweet; very innovative use of the SE. Mission Passed.
 
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Story elements chosen:
* Defend yourself from wild beasts (2)
* Capture a rare or exotic animal (2)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 22nd, June 2018
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Additional information: N/A


~Mission Passed. Hopefully you mean a 'leash,' unless that wolf is on loan.
 
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-Explore a dangerous site (3)
-Guard someone very important (5)
-Custom: Steal a large or valuable asset(4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
21/06/2018 - 22/06/2018
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Beginning :
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End :
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N/A

~Mission Passed. Wow, talk about a gauntlet. I'm adding that SE to the list. Good work.
 
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Story elements chosen: Build something for the Clan (1)
Gather resources from the land (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 18/6 - 23/6 GMT+10
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Additional information: Our second clan mission. Hoping to rank up to a Level 2 clan with this!

~A great big Mission Passed to you two. Quality work. I'm glad to see you two actually going in-depth about the building process. Kudos to you guys.
 
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Mission Rank: C Rank Total = 1.5 > 2 (Rounded Up) thus a C Rank Mission.
Story elements chosen: Perform a moderate workout routine (2)
- Draw out a picture of the scenery (1) (Custom)
- Defend yourself from wild beasts (2)
- Gather resources from the land (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 6/24/2018 to 6/24/2018
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I did everything you said you would, but it's very... disjointed? These pieces don't really seem to fit into an overall story. Mission Passed for keeping your promises, but careful now.
 
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Build technology
Defend yourself from wild beasts
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 25/6/2018 - 25/6/2018
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Mission Passed. Good work.
 
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Save a large community from danger (5)
[Custom] Battle against a natural disaster using ninjutsu (4)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 6/26-6/26
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~Sorry my dude, but I can't pass a mission about lamb chop stew without a lamb sauce to go with it. Ramsay would have my head.
In all seriousness though; you write well and construct a nice, cohesive narrative. The problem is that you use near half your space to set the scene, not on your storyboard elements, and what remains simply doesn't fulfill the criteria for an S-rank in my opinion. Mission Failed.
 
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Story elements chosen: Perform administrative duties (1), Collect taxes from those who reside in your landmarks (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27th June
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~Mission Passed.
 
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