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Relevant Links: Dead Marshes ( 242 ) | Dead Marshes ( 242 ) 3rd paragraph
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Far eastern swampland said to be where the founder of the Kisei Clan raised the first dead: the Inferi. The Dead Marshes, now void of undead, are still littered with rotting corpses and other disturbing sights. The river that bisects the landmark spills over onto the land, giving it its marshy appearance. The waters of the marsh are said to be laden with sinew and body parts, remains from the risen dead that were used in a great battle between the Radiant Order, Noldor Clan, and Kisei.

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These lands used to be far eastern swampland said to be where the founder of the Kisei Clan raised the first dead: the Inferi. The Dead Marshes, now void of undead, used to be littered with rotting corpses and other disturbing sights. The river that bisects the landmark tended to spill over onto the land, giving it its previous marshy appearance. The waters of the marsh were said to be laden with sinew and body parts, remains from the risen dead that were used in a great battle between the Radiant Order, Noldor Clan, and Kisei.

The once abandoned battlefield, filled to the brim with rot, decay and decomposition seemed to have been cleaned. Or at least returned to the earth where it can feed the soil and decompose properly. The swampland has become soft-loamy soil irrigated by the river that splits through the land. The river still spills over covering the land in small waves of clean clear water that dribbles in from the river with the potential to sustain plant-life, or crops, like rice. It seems that the soil could sustain various types of plant-life or crops depending on what is built on top of the new foundation or even a fortress should one be built. The lands have been claimed in the name of Tsumigakure.

The first thing Tsumigakure did with the sprawling landscape was to build a massive wall, through the use of Earth Release. This defense was created upon the eastern border between the Mother Cult's lands and the vast number of lands claimed in the name of Tsumigakure. This defense's purpose was to stave off the chance of another Mother Cult incursion. More than anything it was a line in the sand, for the Mother Cult to learn their place in this new world as Tsumigakure began to box them in away from the mainland.
 
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Relevant Links: Motoi Drylands ( 116 )
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Some forest can be found in the Motoi Drylands, but the temperate area is mostly dominated by rolling hills of dry grassland, with intermittent ridges and rock formations. The inhabitants of the Motoi Drylands are concentrated mostly small, rural communities. An abandoned Uchiha compound can be found here, much of it having been destroyed by fire. At the edge of the landmark is the shore line which consist of multiple houses and a large sea port made entirely of wood that was created for the inhabitants.

The new paragraph:

Some forest can be found in the Motoi Drylands, but the temperate area is mostly dominated by rolling hills of dry grassland, with intermittent ridges and rock formations. The inhabitants of the Motoi Drylands are concentrated mostly small, rural communities. An abandoned Uchiha compound can be found here, much of it having been destroyed by fire. At the edge of the landmark is the shore line which consist of multiple houses and a large sea port made entirely of wood that was created for the inhabitants. The seaport has since been populated with numerous warships stolen from Tobusekai from the Ashikaga family and repurposed for use by Tsumigakure. These ships are currently used to trade between the mainland of Tsumigakure and their currently held lands in Tobusekai. It also seems that the once abandoned Uchiha compound has seen a resurgence in Uchiha who have reclaimed their home, and are now working alongside Tsumigakure for the betterment of both of their clans, deriving protection from the Golden Sabbath and Tsumigakure while providing a place for seafaring trade routes.
 
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Relevant Links: Tempest Mount (240)
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Tempest Mount is a unnatural barrier erected by the Great Mother Cult to deter outsiders from unnecessarily wandering into their eastern territory. Using chakra, the cultists have produced an eternal storm which has raged above for months. The storm is akin to a stationary category five hurricane and shows no signs of weakening or abating in the near future. It has wrought untold destruction on the land, leaving the forest that the region once housed in an ecological disaster. The storm reduces movement speed by 60% for all those that enter the landmark and reduce visibility to short-range, regardless of Doujutsu or sensory used.

The new paragraph:

Tempest Mount is a unnatural barrier erected by the Great Mother Cult to deter outsiders from unnecessarily wandering into their eastern territory. Using chakra, the cultists have produced an eternal storm which has raged above for months. The storm is akin to a stationary category five hurricane and shows no signs of weakening or abating in the near future. It has wrought untold destruction on the land, leaving the forest that the region once housed in an ecological disaster. The storm reduces movement speed by 60% for all those that enter the landmark and reduce visibility to short-range, regardless of Doujutsu or sensory used. While a small portion surrounding the outskirts of the landscape may still feel the effects of the storm, after being charted by members of Tsumigakure a huge barrier was put up to separate most of the land from the raging storm above showing the devastation left. However, while the inside of the barrier one is shielded from the raging storms effects, they would have their chakra sealed by 40% as well as not be able to use techniques above S rank due to the barriers special properties.
 

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Relevant Links: https://animebase.me/threads/dainashi-175.756190/post-21940883
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The original paragraph: Dainashi’s surface is a cold, mountainous and hostile area, home to only a few hardly plants and animals. Beneath the surface, however, a grand city has been built, cut into the rock of a man-made cavern. The city’s origins are mysterious; a small mining expedition happened upon it while tunnelling, but since then many have flocked to it. The city itself, now named simply after the area, is a work of exquisite craftsmanship and its huge buildings were full of riches when it was discovered, but entirely abandoned with no signs of its original inhabitants. The original tunnel is still the only way to the city, which now teems miners, scavengers and even renegade ninja clans, all searching for riches.

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Dainashi’s surface is a cold, mountainous and hostile area, home to only a few hardly plants and animals. Beneath the surface, however, a grand city has been built, cut into the rock of a man-made cavern which has now been reconstructed into large fortress. The city’s origins are mysterious; a small mining expedition happened upon it while tunneling, but since then many have flocked to it. The city itself, now named simply after the area, is a work of exquisite craftsmanship and its huge buildings were full of riches when it was discovered, but entirely abandoned with no signs of its original inhabitants. The original tunnel is still the only way to the city, which leads into the magma filled cavern with a single bridge leading to the only gate into the city. This fortress is the base of operations for the Rising Cloud clan, and the inhabitants that once searched the region in search of riches have all coalesced into the beginnings of a small village.

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Relevant Links: The Battlements ( 245 ) | The Battlements ( 245 )
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The original paragraph:

The Battlements is a wall erected by the Great Mother Cult as a final line of defense before entering their sacred territory in the Shard of Evil. The Battlements is manned by an array of soldiers; a mix of undead skeletal warriors, risen dead, and cultists man the walls using an array of chakra-based techniques and steel weaponry to protect their territory. At the base of the wall wild beasts captured from the Selva Oscura roam, tamed by the Great Mother Cult they protect the wall from any intruders. Those that dare venture here frequently find themselves running away in fear as the beasts chase them, making them easy targets for the archers atop the wall.

The new paragraph:

The Battlements was a wall erected by the Great Mother Cult as a final line of defense before entering their sacred territory in the Shard of Evil. Now it does the opposite, boxing the Mother Cult in keeping them from expanding westward through Tobusekai. The Battlements used to be manned by an array of soldiers; a mix of undead skeletal warriors, risen dead, and cultists at one point manned the walls using an array of chakra-based techniques and steel weaponry to protect their territory. At the base of the wall wild beasts captured from the Selva Oscura used to roam. They were tamed by the Great Mother Cult they protected the wall from any intruders. That was until Tsumigakure came.

Soon after their landing upon the Lost Shores, Tsumigakure began to expand out into Tobusekai. Aurelius Vayne a member of Tsumigakure took the initiative to clear the land of undead, cultists, and beasts. This left the wall devoid and defenseless so the Mother Cult sent in reinforcements to grasp their hold upon the Battlements. Seeing this, Tsumigakure sent another representative to clear out the lands once more, this time sending a message to the Mother Cult. They built a wall that connects to another wall in the Dead Marshes ( 242 ) creating a defense running north to south defending against the expansion of the Mother Cult.
 
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Relevant Links: https://animebase.me/threads/grand-divide-110.756123/post-21951674
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The Grand Divide is the deepest canyon in the known world, surrounded by tall mountain formations. The wide and almost vertical gorge has mysterious origins, and its depths are permanently obscured by a thick mist. The area is mostly dominated by barren rocks and rock formations, leaving little room for animals or humans. Travelers occasionally descend into the canyon, where monsters are said to roam a hot, hellish landscape.
The new paragraph: The Grand Divide is the deepest canyon in the known world, surrounded by tall mountain formations. The wide and almost vertical gorge has mysterious origins, and its depths are permanently obscured by a thick mist. The area is mostly dominated by barren rocks and rock formations as well as a forest that spands all all over the land including the mountains, leaving little room for animals or humans. Travelers occasionally descend into the canyon, where monsters are said to roam a hot, hellish landscape. In a mountain is Skarlet's lab for her research which is done for Tsumigakure and fo her own purposes. The lab is within the mountain but appears as a normal mountain from the outside.
 

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Relevant Links: https://animebase.me/threads/moon-sanctuary-181.756196/post-21980596
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The Moon Sanctuary is essentially one very large mountain surrounded by arctic wasteland and thus rather inhospitable. However, a temple has been carved into the very rock itself and through it a network of tunnels and caves that are only partially man-made. Most of the tunnels are in ruins, but the main temple is still in use by an order of pacifist monks. The area is named for the great carvings of the moon cycle hammered into the rock above the temple.

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The Moon Sanctuary is essentially one very large mountain surrounded by arctic wasteland and thus rather inhospitable. However, a temple has been carved into the very rock itself and through it a network of tunnels and caves that are only partially man-made. Most of the tunnels are in ruins, but the main temple is still in use by an order of pacifist monks. The area is named for the great carvings of the moon cycle hammered into the rock above the temple.

The temple cannon be seen as it is hidden behind a distortion barrier created by technology, making the temple appear as the side of the mountain. Normal sensory is blocked by the barrier while the field also stops Sharingan and Rinnegan from being able to see through it. The temple is reinforced with graphite carbon, made by the Kage of Shimogakure, Magnus Uchiha.


Note: This is the home landmark of Shimogakure.

Declined. Reiterating past checks from ZK, one of the mods before me who alongside Drackos, LoK and others built the foundation for the Ninja World. "this is just wayyyyy too focused on giving you some advantages when being attacked. That's not what this is for." and "This thread is not designed to be used for optimizing the defenses of your clan in actual battle situations." Permanent defenses like the ones you're trying to obtain here ( and even some done by my own villagers, that have yet to be checked, Vegeta in this case ) would need to be obtained through victory in wars as a prize, or through Colonial Income/Village Kumi to buy special artifacts ( something I will need to follow up on in the future ) or artifacts obtained in the Ninja World via the Marketplace.

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Ruined Temple

The Ruined Temple is a singular religious site in Tobusekai located at the heart of an offshoot of the Strand of the Ancients. The temple is positioned along the rivers and is the only notable quality of the region, especially when compared with the sprawling religious complex that is the Strand to the North. It is noted that the temple here was destroyed by the Great Mother Cult recently, although for reasons that are not entirely clear. The amount of rubble that remains suggests that the temple was once one of the greatest structures throughout the land.


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LM: https://animebase.me/threads/ruined-temple-235.768229/
CC Approval: https://animebase.me/threads/custom-clan-submission.764487/post-21957289
Rules Post for CC claiming: https://animebase.me/threads/ninja-world-rules-1st-year-anniversary-edition.767740/post-21921310
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Ruined Temple

The Ruined Temple is a singular religious site in Tobusekai located at the heart of an offshoot of the Strand of the Ancients. The temple is positioned along the rivers and is the only notable quality of the region, especially when compared with the sprawling religious complex that is the Strand to the North. It is noted that the temple here was destroyed by the Great Mother Cult recently, although for reasons that are not entirely clear. The amount of rubble that remains suggests that the temple was once one of the greatest structures throughout the land.


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Radient Gardens:

A once quiet and peaceful part of Tobuseki, a temple was build below the Strand of the Ancients, with natural beauty through rivers and forests that surround it. A small and unimportant temple, became the target unknown to anyone of the Great Mother Cult. After being destroyed, it was built back up, and is now defended and the home of the Tenshi Clan. Renamed Radient Gardens, the Temple was rebuilt in a grand scale, housing many travellers and warriors of the Tenshi Ichizoku. The temple that is surrounded by rivers and forests stands as a monument to the guardians that are the Tenshi, dedicated to protecting the lands. The Head of the Tenshi Order sits willing to guide and give advice to anyone seeking it, looking to help anyone on their journey.

Radient Gardens is considered a Clan Sanctuary; it cannot be directly claimed and members of the Tenshi clan may spawn their biography into the Ninja World here.

Declined or Pending if you want to discuss it with @Lord of Kaos

Soooo, a few problems.

1. No in-character roleplay to facilitate this claim or to alter the landmark.
2. This LM is already claimed by Tsumigakure so, it would need you to reclaim it, not just claim it. Which at the moment is something you can't do as a member of Shimogakure due to our treaty. It would be an attack or a hostile action to reclaim an already claimed LM.
3. I'll have to ask LoK if new Custom Clans can do this as this bypasses and makes a normally claimable LM unclaimable indefinitely.

Clan Sanctuaries: This type of landmark designates a sanctuary, or home base, of a particular Custom Clan. Clans, not in the Clan Systems sense but as Custom Clans, represent one of the three major forces in Tobusekai that exert influence and compete with others. Clan Sanctuaries, like Sacred Sites, cannot be altered in any way. They also cannot be claimed or colonized by any party. Clan Sanctuaries operate as a place for new clan biographies to spawn at. This does not mean members of the clan can freely spawn there after already entering the Ninja World. This only applies for new biographies that have yet to step into the Ninja World.
 
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Kiko Island

Kiko Island is a tropical island, home to a wide variety of flora and fauna. The island is also home to a small number of almost tribal ninja clans, who have lived there in isolation for countless generations. The island’s beaches are characterized by gentle slopes of sand, which lead up to the flat, green plateau that encompasses the island proper.
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Kiko Island is a tropical island, home to a wide variety of flora and fauna. The island is also home to a small number of almost tribal ninja clans, who have lived in isolation for countless generations. The island’s beaches are characterized by gentle slopes of sand, which lead up to the flat, green plateau that encompasses the island proper. Among the tribal ninja clans there exists a greater clan of many ninja monks, known as the Soundless Temple. A strongly resembling old Shaolin Monastery except that it only houses resigned ninja monks. Recognized for keeping their information hidden from the outside world, the temple borders have a profound secrecy. Like most Ninja Monk Temples, they too were led by a respected Council of Elders. Composed of the Wise Elder, the Enlightened Elder, the Sect Elder, and most Empathetical Elder, they were both the political and religious authority also serving as counsel for their citizens along being the Soundless temple's Ninja Monk instructors.
Approved. Taking out the part that specifies the hierarchal structure of the monks. This only needs the landmark information.

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Kiko Island is a tropical island, home to a wide variety of flora and fauna. The island is also home to a small number of almost tribal ninja clans, who have lived in isolation for countless generations. The island’s beaches are characterized by gentle slopes of sand, which lead up to the flat, green plateau that encompasses the island proper. Among the tribal ninja clans, there exists a greater clan of many ninja monks, known as the Soundless Temple. A strongly resembling old Shaolin Monastery except that it only houses resigned ninja monks. They are recognized for keeping their information hidden from the outside world, the temple borders have a profound secrecy.
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Kiko Island is a tropical island, home to a wide variety of flora and fauna. The island is also home to a small number of almost tribal ninja clans, who have lived in isolation for countless generations. The island’s beaches are characterized by gentle slopes of sand, which lead up to the flat, green plateau that encompasses the island proper. Among the tribal ninja clans, there exists a greater clan of many ninja monks, known as the Soundless Temple. A strongly resembling old Shaolin Monastery except that it only houses resigned ninja monks. They are recognized for keeping their information hidden from the outside world, the temple borders have a profound secrecy.

Below the Island, there exists a docile turtle-lion like creature with webbed feet; finger joints made of soft tissue, in-similar function to joints that cover crabs. The Lion-turtle's body resembles the anatomy of a normal turtle but, with the face, paws, and tail similar to those of a lion. While quite proportional, when compared to size of this small island. It devotes its farmable soil-rich, and nutritious hard shells to the island, which eventually feeds growth for flourishing plant-life that can sustain several species of animals (Notice: S-rank Jutsu offensively affected upon the turtle can terminate the whole island's mobility). This effectively creates small ecosystems on the back of the lion turtle, which neither benefit nor harm the host in question. Given the Island's movability, during the odd NW Arcs, this island appears to be closer to Yume Island (174).
Explanatory Notes: "This isn't giving, attaining, or receiving any Ninja World perks to the LM as the 'location change' is rather just relative. Given Ninja World landmark traveling isn't affected, nor is the whole Landmark attaining any defensive perks, this all purely role-play cosmetics that is adding flavor to the world's story building."

Declined. This is too much.

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Jiro Island


An otherwise lush island, Jiro is home to the austere fortress that is the Blood Prison. The prison itself is a huge building complex, with some of its parts in a better condition than others. The prison was abandoned by its guards after the Razing of Chungsu, but the security measures and features built into the prison’s foundations remain, caging the bodies of new inmates and the bones of old ones. The prison buildings themselves are made of grey and black metal inscribed with formulae and various scenes of humans being judged and punished for the crimes.

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An otherwise lush island, Jiro is home to the austere fortress that is the Blood Prison. The prison itself is a huge building complex, with some of its parts in a better condition than others. The prison was abandoned by its guards after the Razing of Chungsu, but the security measures and features built into the prison’s foundations remain, caging the bodies of new inmates and the bones of old ones. The prison buildings themselves are made of grey and black metal inscribed with formulae and various scenes of humans being judged and punished for the crimes. Currently an over grown copious amounts of bioluminescence Algae is found throughout the landmark across all matter, ever so growing.
Declined. The algae can stay, the sentience can't. Since it has a limited chakra pool and an arc timer it wouldn't be able to remain sentient the way you explained. It would return to normal algae eventually. Eventually being the moment you stopped supplying the -10 chakra to sustain it, it ran out of chakra, or the next arc rolled around. So as I said if you want to cover the LM in algae, that's fine. It's actually similar to something @Shady Doctor did early on with Stygian Water. However, it's not going to be a living, sentient defense, permanently the way your roleplay implies.

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