Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±
Mākā:Marker
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description:Marker is a tall sword made of steel,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets If the user is struck with the sword ,the user is able to detect the opponent easily through his blood left on the sword.. The sword has great strenght and is capable of deflecting ninja tools ranging from shiruken to kunai at ease.
Note:The sword Lasts for five turns.
Note:Only thunderbolt can wield the sword
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✘ Declined ✘ It doesn't make any sense what you said, how would you exactly trace him from his blood on your sword? tracking and sensing abilities in CW's won't be allowed anymore that's why i told you to remove it.
I remove the titanium,the cutting capablites, and the chakra sensing signature and reworded it
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Genjutsu sutairu: Bāningudōruhausu: Genjutsu Style :Burning Doll House
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points:60
Description :The user performs two hand seals[Tiger and Dog] and then inserts his chakra into his opponent mind,casting him in a genjutsu where he believes he is entrapped in a huge doll house which has been set ablaze by fire and is burning, the opponent shortly after becomes unable to breath and maneuver due to the toxic smoke liberated from the fire.
Note:Can only be done twice in a battle
Note:Must be taught by thunderbolt to use
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✘ Declined ✘ define "trapped" in the house, do you mean he's paralyzed or simply caught in side of it but able to move? unable to breathe? o_o what do you mean by unable to "maneuver"?
(Samontekunikku: Barusa no Rioneru· messhi)Summon technique: Lionel Messi of the Catalans
Type: Offensive and defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Lionel Messi is a male binturong and the boss king of the other summons. He weighs 100 kilograms and is 7.00 feet in height at full stance, due to him being a binturong a specie which lives in the forest and climb high trees] he is good at jumping and is able to jump more than 20 feet into the air. He has rough scaly barks which enable him to defend against [a rank] jutsu and below. He has a roughly scaly bark which he uses to defend against basic elemetal jutsu up to A rank and below.He carries 7 katana with him on his back along with several ninja tools. He is capable of using Wind [without hand seals] And Performing genjutsu up to a rank and below with the required handseals. He has small knowledge in ninjutsu and is able to create shadow clones of himself. , he is capable of carrying a maximum of two people on his bark due to his high level of endurance, he is able to speak English and can communicate with his summoner and other summons verbally. He is normally summoned as a last resort by the user or when his life is in danger.
Note: Last for 4 turns
Note: Must have learnt jutsu to use.
Note: Defending against jutsu count as 1 move
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✘ Declined ✘ So you left the blocking of A-rank and below in elements trying to trick me by not bolding it? well unlucky for you i read the whole submission and you even added genjutsu on top of it? don't resubmit.
✘ You are hereby banned from the Custom Jutsu submission thread for the upcoming 2 weekly cycles, for trying to trick me in your submission, even though i've warned you about this in your earlier submission. your ban will be lifted on the start of the third weekly cycle from now ✘
Resubmitting(Samontekunikku: Barusa no Rioneru· messhi)Summon technique: Lionel Messi of the Catalans
Type: Offensive and defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Lionel Messi is a male binturong and the boss king of the other summons. He weighs 100 kilograms and is 7.00 feet in height at full stance, due to him being a binturong a specie which lives in the forest and climb high trees] he is good at jumping and is able to jump more than 20 feet into the air. He has rough scaly barks which enable him to defend against [a rank] jutsu and below. He carries 7 katana with him on his back along with several ninja tools. He is capable of using Wind [without hand seals] And Lightning. He has also mastered ninjutsu and is able to perform the basics up to his rank.[Rasengan and shadow clone] Due to his body appearance he is able to hide himself in the battle field and blend in easily , but can easily be located by any sensor or dojutsu, he is capable of carrying a maximum of two people on his bark due to his high level of endurance, he is able to speak English and can communicate with his summoner and other summons telepathically. He is normally summoned as a last resort by the user or when his life is in danger.
Note: Last for 4 turns
Note: Must have learnt jutsu to use.
Note: Defending against jutsu count as 1 move.
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✘ Declined ✘ OP, can block A-rank jutsu of anything? too much man i won't even allow him to be impervious to 1 elemental techniques of A-rank and below, choose only one element, not 2 and mention up to what rank can he use and does it include the ones that require handseals as well, remove the ninjutsu and speed reference, remove hiding and blending, remove the telepathic ability, mention that he's only summoned once, dunno how he would be able to wield those swords but ok ._. and lol Lionel Messi as a summon, i'm guessing he wouldn't like that very much
(Chikyū no sutairu: Dōro-bashi)Earth style: Road Bridge
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user performs the rat and dog hand seals and then slams his two palms unto the ground bringing forth a long narrow road made of earth which uproots from the ground and extends up to long range from the user default position [short range], the road can extend to as much as 40 meters long and can be created anywhere on the terrain, it also can be destroyed by the user at any point in time.
Note: Can be done twice in a battle
Note: Last for two turns
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✘ Declined ✘ Similar to a cannon technique called tunneling technique, and a CJ made long ago by Faith.
Mākā:Marker
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description:Marker is a tall sword made of titanium,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets. In short, when hit or struck at successful at the opponent ,the sword marks the opponent and copies it chakra signature making it unable for the user to hide in the battle field. The sword has great strenght and can be used to cut earth -based jutsu [A rank and below]
Note:The sword Lasts for five turns.
Note:Only thunderbolt can wield the sword.
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✘ Declined ✘ Why didn't you bold the changes about "cutting earth based jutsu of A-rank"? that could be taken as an action to trick us, you are supposed to bold all the changes and you didn't, Anyway i'm letting it go this time, remove being made from titanium, it's a CE that's made by -Mugen- and i'm against having it as material of your CW, cutting through techniques has been done constantly before, Copies the opponent's chakra signature? o_o sensing ability? remove that, basically the whole description needs to be worked.
I made all the edits, i increased it turns and i removed all those gibberish about elemental blasts. Thanks.
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Mākā:Marker
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description:Marker is a tall sword made of steel,which weighs around 14-20 Kilogram , it has a golden handle which the user holds to wield the sword during battle. The sword is quite long and about 6 feet in height and cannot be broken or shattered by the opponent. It has a unique power of marking its targets If the user is struck with the sword ,the user is able to detect the opponent easily through his blood left on the sword.. The sword has great strenght and is capable of deflecting ninja tools ranging from shiruken to kunai at ease.
Note:The sword Lasts for five turns.
Note:Only thunderbolt can wield the sword
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✘ Declined ✘ It doesn't make any sense what you said, how would you exactly trace him from his blood on your sword? tracking and sensing abilities in CW's won't be allowed anymore that's why i told you to remove it.
I remove the titanium,the cutting capablites, and the chakra sensing signature and reworded it
New
Genjutsu sutairu: Bāningudōruhausu: Genjutsu Style :Burning Doll House
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points:60
Description :The user performs two hand seals[Tiger and Dog] and then inserts his chakra into his opponent mind,casting him in a genjutsu where he believes he is entrapped in a huge doll house which has been set ablaze by fire and is burning, the opponent shortly after becomes unable to breath and maneuver due to the toxic smoke liberated from the fire.
Note:Can only be done twice in a battle
Note:Must be taught by thunderbolt to use
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✘ Declined ✘ define "trapped" in the house, do you mean he's paralyzed or simply caught in side of it but able to move? unable to breathe? o_o what do you mean by unable to "maneuver"?
(Samontekunikku: Barusa no Rioneru· messhi)Summon technique: Lionel Messi of the Catalans
Type: Offensive and defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Lionel Messi is a male binturong and the boss king of the other summons. He weighs 100 kilograms and is 7.00 feet in height at full stance, due to him being a binturong a specie which lives in the forest and climb high trees] he is good at jumping and is able to jump more than 20 feet into the air. He has rough scaly barks which enable him to defend against [a rank] jutsu and below. He has a roughly scaly bark which he uses to defend against basic elemetal jutsu up to A rank and below.He carries 7 katana with him on his back along with several ninja tools. He is capable of using Wind [without hand seals] And Performing genjutsu up to a rank and below with the required handseals. He has small knowledge in ninjutsu and is able to create shadow clones of himself. , he is capable of carrying a maximum of two people on his bark due to his high level of endurance, he is able to speak English and can communicate with his summoner and other summons verbally. He is normally summoned as a last resort by the user or when his life is in danger.
Note: Last for 4 turns
Note: Must have learnt jutsu to use.
Note: Defending against jutsu count as 1 move
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✘ Declined ✘ So you left the blocking of A-rank and below in elements trying to trick me by not bolding it? well unlucky for you i read the whole submission and you even added genjutsu on top of it? don't resubmit.
✘ You are hereby banned from the Custom Jutsu submission thread for the upcoming 2 weekly cycles, for trying to trick me in your submission, even though i've warned you about this in your earlier submission. your ban will be lifted on the start of the third weekly cycle from now ✘
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