[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

[Alternative]

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(Raiton: Ikari no Tetsui) - Lightning Release: Hammer of Justice
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description:
• The user will charge a plethora of lightning chakra into their fist to make their arm shrouded in a lot of lightning which takes on the form of the user's arm but about 6 times larger. They will then slam the lightning into the ground with their fist like it were a hammer. The force is capable of pulverising the ground enough to leave a small crater.
Notes:
• This can only be used a maximum of twice a match. Any more than that and the user's arm will fry from the lightning and is rendered useless.


±± Declined ±± So this can only be used to punch the ground?

(Raiton: Ikari no Tetsui) - Lightning Release: Hammer of Justice
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description:
• The user will charge a plethora of lightning chakra into their fist to make their arm shrouded in a lot of lightning which takes on the form of the user's arm but about 6 times larger. This arm can have multiple uses, such as grabbing someone and frying them using electricity, or slamming it onto the ground with enough force to leave a small crater.
Notes:
• This can only be used a maximum of twice a match. Any more than that and the user's nerves in the used arm will fry from the lightning and is rendered useless.


(Raiton: Biggū~eibu) - Lightning Release: Big Wave
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description:
• The user will charge into the target with their fist and elbow like it were a taijutsu move. From there the user will pulsate their lightning chakra throughout the target's body to electrify their insides. This is most effective when using it on the target's back, but can be used on any part of the body.
Notes:
• Can only be used three times a match. Any more uses causes the electricity to surge the user's body, severely weakening their internal organs.

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~ Both declined, do not resubmit ~

 

[Priest]

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(Fuuton: Kurushimeru tengai) - Wind Release: Dome of Torment
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 60(+20 when combined with fire)
Description: The user builds up wind chakra then perfoming the ram+bird+boar handseals and claps his hands together, then he forms a cubic dome made of thick dense air around the opponent using the air surrounding him(opponent). This technique traps the opponent and the user is not able to perform any other jutsu. The longer an opponent is trapped in the dome the lesser air he had to breathe because of the dense air within the dome so its like a torture chamber.
Note: the dome has an area of 37 x 37 inches square and a height of 80 inches which is equivalent to the size of a phone booth. this fits an average person so this take up to 5 seconds before the opponent is completely locked inside because of the small area which gives the opponent no chance of movement. The longer the opponent stays in the dome, he uses up the oxygen content which slows his movement and then he eventually passes out due to suffocation.
-This last for 3 turns.
-Can only be used 3 times in battle.
-The wind is made of chakra so a chakra absorber will easily break this jutsu.
-Can only be performed by someone that has mastered fuuton.
-Can only be taught by Mist01

~ The effect of the "dense" air makes no sense. Also tell me, what in god's name is a "cubic dome" ? It's either a cube ( which it isn't, based on your description) or a dome ( which it also isn't ), so what exactly do you mean by that ? ~

(Fuuton: Kurushimeru kou) - Wind Release: Box of Torment
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 60(+20 when combined with fire)
Description: The user builds up wind chakra then perfoming the ram-bird-boar handseals and claps his hands together, then he forms a rectangular box made of thick dense air around the opponent using the air surrounding him(opponent). This technique traps the opponent and the user is not able to perform any other jutsu. the dense air covering the opponent makes it impossible for air to come in from the outside so the longer the opponent stays in the air box the lesser internal air he has to breathe so its like a torture chamber.
Note: the box has an area of 37 x 37 inches square and a height of 80 inches which is equivalent to the size of a phone booth. this fits an average person so this take up to 5 seconds before the opponent is completely locked inside because of the small area which gives the opponent no chance of movement. The longer the opponent stays in the box, he uses up the oxygen content which slows his movement and then he eventually passes out due to suffocation.
-This last for 3 turns.
-Can only be used 3 times in battle.
-The wind is made of chakra so a chakra absorber will easily break this jutsu.
-Can only be performed by someone that has mastered fuuton.
-Can only be taught by Mist01

~ Declined, do not resubmit ~

(Raiton: zetsubou rensa) - Lightning Release: Chain of despair
Type: Offence
Rank: A
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user performs the handseals Ram->Boar->Rat->Boar->Tiger->Bird then channel raiton chakra into one or both of his hand thereby releasing an electric surge in the shape of a long chain which can be elongated and retracted through the user chakra manipulation. This can be used to bind an opponent shocking them while holding on to them and can be used to cut though boulders and opponent depending on how fast and strong the user swings it.
-It can not go past mid-range since it will be difficult to control at long range
-Can only be used 3times in a battle
-User can not perform any other jutsu while holding the chains
-Used only by Mist01 and whomever i allow

~ Declined, similar techniques exist ~

(Raiton: sujou zetsubou rensa) - Lightning Release: Birth of Chains of despair
Type: Offence
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: after performing 4 handseals the user slams his hand on the ground releasing a massive amount of lightning chakra into the earth, the lightning splits to many branches and travels through the earth in different ways while the user focus on the enemy locations, then multiple lightning chains burst out of the ground rising to a height of 20feet piercing though anything it touches. this can be done to cover the whole area at 360 degrees while the user releases raiton chakra all over his body which he uses to repel lightning below his position.
-Can only be used once per battle
-This last for 3turns
-The user won't be able to use lightning techniques for 10minutes
-Can only be used by Mist01

~ Declined, similar techniques exist ~

 

[Sterling Malory Archer]

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(Reopon Gigei: Honoo Heki) ~ Leopon Arts: Flame Burst
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Ippo, the Flame Guardian, manipulates his flame mane and creates wings. With the wings, and his powerful muscles, Ippo makes one charge (A jump forward with a strong gust from his wings) with a sudden burst of speed, Head first to know the target in to long-range with the target's breath knocked out and stunned for a short time. (Like someone hitting your Solar Plexus).
~Can only be used by Ippo
~Can be used twice (After 1 turn break)
~Opponent is stunned for the 1st move of their turn
~During burst, Ippo's speed is immensely increased

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(Reopon Gigei: Honoo Heki) ~ Leopon Arts: Flame Burst
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Ippo, the Flame Guardian, manipulates his flame mane and creates wings. With the wings, and his powerful muscles, Ippo makes one charge (A jump forward with a strong gust from his wings) with a sudden burst of speed, Head first to know the target in to long-range with the target's breath knocked out and stunned for a short time. (Like someone hitting your Solar Plexus).
~Can only be used by Ippo
~Can be used twice (After 1 turn break)
~Opponent is stunned for the 1st move of their turn
~Burst of speed can only be visible with 3T sharingan. With no 3T sharingan, Ippo will look like a blur

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(Reopon Gigei: Kasai Nenshou) ~ Leopon Arts: Fire Combustion
Type: Offense
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: Ippo the Flame guardian, uses his fire chakra and his Leopon Arts knowledge to create a giant fireball which he spews from his mouth. Ippo then roars through the fireball with his chakra to cause vibrations to run through the fire and cause multiple fireballs to spew out from the main ball and head towards the target.
~Can only be used by Ippo
~Can only be used twice (After 1 turn cooldown)
~Every 2 fireballs branched off the main decreases all the balls overall strenght by one rank

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(Reopon Gigei: Kasai Ame) ~ Leopon Arts: Fire Rain
Type: Offense/Defense
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:50
Description: Ippo, using fire chakra, spews a giant fireball up in to the sky, he then uses his chakra and roars through the fire and cause the fireball to break in to many small flames, causing anyone without the contract of the Leopon to receive many minor burns (Can become major)
~Can only be used by Ippo
~Can only be used 3 times (After 1 turn Cooldown)
~All Declined~ Far too generic, and similar technique exists for the first jutsu.

 

[AntiHero]

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(Suiton: Kuro-abura, Tora fuka) Water style: Black-oil, Tiger shark
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40(+20 if combind with a C-rank or higher katon jutsu)
Description: After peforming (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds. The user focuses their suiton chakra into the sky to form a dense projectile shaped like a tiger shark made from black oil. The shark can then be sent crashing down upon a given target causing damage.

Note: Must have performed (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds in the same turn.
Note: The shark coves a 3meter (10ft.) radius in flammable oil.
Note: The shark can be combind with a katon technique (C-rank or higher) inorder to set it ablaze.
Note: Can only be taught by AntiHero

(Suiton: Kuro-abura, Hari Himatsu) Water style: Black-oil, Needle Spary
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40(+20 if combind with a C-rank or higher katon jutsu)
Description: After peforming (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds. The user focuses their suiton chakra into the sky to forming dense neddle-like rain drops (about 2 inches long and 10cm thick) made from black oil. The "needles" can be used to impale an enemy mutipule times and/or cover the ground around the enemy (3 meter area). If combind with a katon jutsu the "needles" become a kind of burning tar that is very sticky and can cause 3 degree burns.

Note: Must have performed (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds in the same turn.
Note: The "needles" can be combind with a katon technique (C-Rank or higher) turning them into burning tar.
Note: Can only be taught by AntiHero

(Suiton: Kuro-abura Bunshin ) Water style: Black-oil Clone
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A (+40 if combinded with a Katon jutsu of C-rank or higher)
Description: After peforming (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds. The user focuses their suiton chakra into the oil rainning from the black clouds and forms a clone(s) of the user from the oil created. Black-oil clones are more dense then regular water clones, allowing them to take more damage. Black-oil clones can be set on fire using a katon jutsu of C-rank or higher, once set on fire these clones become unstable and can be exploded by the user forming the tiger seal. Being made of both water and oil, Black-oil Clones can only stay formed for two turn before the oil and water separate.

Note: Must have performed (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds in the same turn.
Note: The user can only create upto two black-oil clones per turn.
Note: Black-oil Clone count towards the Clone Jutsu Limit.
Note: Black-oil Clones cannot peform any jutsu.
Note: Black-oil Clones can only be set on fire by a C-rank katon jutsu or higher.
Note: Can only be taught by AntiHero.

~All Declined~ These are characteristic of a Custom Element. Do not submit such techniques in the Custom Jutsu Submission thread.

 

[BusinessManTeno]

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(Ninjutsu:kemuri sacchi) Ninja Art: Smoke Sense
Type: Sup
Rank: C
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost :15
Damage Points: N/a
Description: The user will release smoke from his wrist launcher. The smoke is infused with the user chakra letting him/her know the location of whomever is in the smoke.

-Can Only be used by General Phaze
-Can use 4times
~Shorten the Range. Also, how long does the smokescreen last?

(Genjutsu : tenma sazanami) Genjutsu : Demon Ripple
Type: Sup
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:20
Chakra Damage:40
Description: The User Takes out a Staff Or Sword and Stabs it in the ground infront of him. If the opponent looks at the staff/sword as it hits the ground, The opponent will start to get woozy and the area around him will start to form into a space like area he will then be floating in space. A ripple will then appear out of nowhere in space and a huge demon monster will appear from the ripple. Due to the Opponent feeling as he is in space he has nowhere to run as he would be floating. The monster will then reach for him and attempt to eat him. Making the opponent faint

-Can only use twice
-Must have a staff or sword to use this
-Only Taught By General Phaze

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~Weapon Submission~

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(Pykyouto) Pure Rebel
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: This sword blade was forge from Rare Meteorite metals found across the world and the handle was made from Hard Minerals Coated in Rubber. It was made specifically for General Phaze. and Very rare can the sword be broken. This double blade sword is not only good for close range attacks but this sword can conduct lightning. When ever I activate the sword any lightning attacks (A rank and Below) will rush towards the tip of my blade like a metal pole in the middle of a thunderstorm. Once Conducted the sword will give out an electric charge around the blade. The sword can do 2 things with it. It then gives me a boost in speed by releasing the electrical surge around me.. Similar to rock lee without his weights. The sword can also channel the lightning chakra through the ground under the opponent. Causing major lightning surges on the ground under the opponent causing them to be stunned for 1turn

-Can Activate 4turns
-Can only Keep the surge for 1turn (Regardless if its a boost in speed or sending it towards the opponent)
-The surge that travels to the opponent can reach up to mid range within 2-3 seconds
-If the sword is activated Once the user cant use lightning in the same turn. If activated twice. cant use lightning for the same turn and the next turn. Three times. , cant use lightning the same turn plus the next 2 turns and Four times. Cant use lightning for That turn plus 3 following after
-Activation Counts as 1 of the user 3 turns, Striking the opponent with the surge is count as activation. and so is the speed boost.. So they all count as 1 as an individual. (Example. I conduct Lightning (1turn). I Use it as a Boost(1turn) Earth Rampart (1turn) I just used all 3 of my moves
-Can Only be taught by General Phaze

~ Abilities make no sense, declined ~

(Genjutsu : tenma sazanami) Genjutsu : Demon Ripple[/B]
Type: Sup
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:20
Chakra Damage:40
Description: The User Takes out a Staff Or Sword and Stabs it in the ground infront of him. If the opponent looks at the staff/sword as it hits the ground, The opponent will start to get woozy and the area around him will start to form into a space like area he will then be floating in space. A ripple will then appear out of nowhere in space and a huge demon monster will appear from the ripple. Due to the Opponent feeling as he is in space he has nowhere to run as he would be floating. The monster will then reach for him and attempt to eat him. Stunning The opponent

-Can only use twice
-Must have a staff or sword to use this
-Only Taught By General Phaze
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~Leaving for Emperor~
~ -.- In all possibility, if a demon reaches for someone, they'll be running around not standing there doing nothing ~

~Weapon Submission~

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(Pykyouto) Pure Rebel
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: This sword blade was forge from Rare Meteorite metals found across the world and the handle was made from Hard Minerals Coated in Rubber. It was made specifically for General Phaze. and Very rare can the sword be broken. This double blade sword is not only good for close range attacks but this sword can conduct lightning jutsus. Like a lightning Rod. Once it conducts lightning, the sword will glow a bright yellow. due to the lightning chakra being infused inside of it. The lightning chakra inside the blade can be sent back towards the opponent, by the user stabbing the blade in the ground and channeling all of the lightning chakra that was conducted. Under the opponent. the ground will then spark with lightning and give off alot of static causing the enemy to be stunned. Or the user can use the lightning that was conducted as a Reflex Enhancer. Similar to Raikage. But Much slower and does not affect your strength. The user can only go as fast as lee without the weights. And only last for one turn


-Can Conduct 4turns
-Can Only Conduct Srank (Once), Arank (Once), B Rank (Once), Crank (Once)
-Can only Use the lightning in the blade for 1 turn
-The Lightning that travels to the opponent can reach up to mid range within 2-3 seconds
-Cant Use Lightning No time it conducts Nor Regular Ninjutsu
-Activation Counts as 1 of the user 3 turns, Striking the opponent with the surge is count as activation. and so is the speed boost.. So they all count as 1 as an individual. (Example. I conduct Lightning (1turn). I Use it as a Boost(1turn) Earth Rampart (1turn) I just used all 3 of my moves
-Can Only be taught by General Phaze
~Leaving for Emperor as well~
~ Declined, 10000000 similar weapons exist ~

 

[Rozzy]

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(Kinezumi Kuchiyose: Ao no Jakku) -Squirrel Summoning: Jak, the Blue
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40 (+10 every turn Jak stays summoned)
Damage: N/A
Description: The summoner bites his/her left thumb, and then thrust their hand into the air in order to summon Jak, the Blue.
Jak, the Blue is a flying squirrel that is 4ft 35lbs. He is covered in a smooth white coat and has a blue mo-hawk which starts at the center of his head and travels all the way down his spine to the tip of his tall. He wears an eye patch on his right eye and has a scar is the shape of an X on his left cheek.
Although, not as skilled as Roc, the Swift in gliding, Jak makes up for it using his great diving skills and rapid swimming speed. Jok has excellent vision and well-developed senses of hearing and smell.
Jak has an affinity for suiton chakara which allows him to preform Water style jutsu with relative ease using squirrel hand-seals (3 fingers and a thumb on each forefoot). He can use ninja tools with his hands and is unaffected by fire jutsus up to C-rank due to his constant damp fur coat. Jak can only stay in the air for a short period of time (2 turns).

Note: Can only be summoned once in a battle
Note: Is unaffected by C rank katon jutsu
Note: Can only use B rank or lower suiton
Note: Any jutsu used by Jak counts as a move
Note: Can only stay summoned for 4 turns
Note: Must be a signer of the Squirrel summoning Contract to summon.
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~Declined~ Two turns is a short period of time? Anyway, change the rank also (or the chakra cost), as it's incorrect.

 

[-Albel-]

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(Katon: Debiru Maw) Fire Release: Devil's Maw
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description: The user covers his right hand in fire and swings in horizontaly to the right causing a small red cirlce to appear under the opponet. As the circle appears the user then swings his weapon down onto the cirlce causing wide crack to form under the opponet. As they form fire erupts from them with temendous force sending them into the air. Not only does fire erupt from the huge cracks in the ground but so does medium sized sharp, jagged rocks. Which they also hit the opponet.
Note: Can only be taught by AlbelTheWicked

Here is what it looks like:

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Just skip to 0:21 and watch the dude with the red hair. It will show him using Devil's Maw.

±± Both Declined ±± What you are describing doesn't match what is shown in the video. Rework the descriptions. Also, there are similar techniques to the lightning one

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(Katon: Debiru Maw) Fire Release: Devil's Maw
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description: The user will first gather up chakra in his body which he then slams his weapon onto the ground. Upon the weapon hitting the ground the user releases the chakra he just gathered up through the weapon and into the ground, which in turn causes an upward burst of flames and small, hot molten, jagged, sharp rocks to rise up hitting the opponet, and causes massive 3rd degree burns and serious punktured wounds.
Note: Can only be taught by AlbelTheWicked
~Can only be used twice

Changed the description hoping that it matches what is in the video this time.

Here is what it looks like:

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Just skip to 0:21 and watch the dude with the red hair. It will show him using Devil's Maw.

~Approved~ I noted my changes. The fissure is unnecessary. The original description was actually fine. I'm not sure if Scorps watched the right part of the video or not.

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(Katon: Oni Kobushi) Fire Release: Demon Fists
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description: The user gathers up chakra into his hands and then begins to punch the ground repeatedly(about 4-7 times). As he hits the ground he sends the chakra from his hands into the ground which causes shockwaves to form along the ground that travel towards the opponent. As they travel along the ground the user turns those shockwaves into waves of flames that burn anything in there path. The shockwaves reach up to mid range in width and once turned into flames they reach the height of 3 meters.
Note: Can only be taught by AlbelTheWicked
Note: Can only be used three times per battle
~Declined~ Can you specify at which point the shockwaves become flames, and also, do they affect things underground (and if so, how deep).

 

[Goro Kaguya]

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(Raiton: Kita no sora no ikari )- Lightning Release: Rage of the North Sky
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short- Mid (if thrown)
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80 (-20 to user)
Description: Wielding Mjollnir, user swings the hammer by it's strap in a circular fashion gathering their raiton chakra into the hammer's head. User then fires off a massive bolt of lightning, in the shape of a polar bear, from the hammers head. If thrown the bear looks as if it's running, crumbling any earth beneath it.
Notes:
Usable Twice per match. Second Time Mjollnir desummoned no longer usable for match.
Only usable with Mjollnir in play.
No lightning next two turns.
~Approved~ Good. Nice and simple.

 

[Naruto Uzumaki Bijuu Sage]

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(Raiton: Howaito daiyamondo )- Lightning Release white diamond disintegration
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short/Long
Chakra: 20 Chakra ( Another 20 if the user blows it up)
Damage: 40Damage
Description:The user puts their hand together like their praying and gathers a massive amount of chakra into each arm, then quickly shifts it into their hands immediately after this is done the user preforms this row of hand seals Ox → Dragon → Bird → Dragon → Ram → Horse→ Tiger ,Then immediately after the hands seals are completed the user holds both of his arms out in front of him and makes a diamond shape with hands, As the user does this a large white diamond shaped of pure raiton chakra forms one foot in front of them. This diamond spins parallel to the user and it spins at an extremely fast speed, the diamond is 10 feet in width,10 feet in height , and 3 inches in length. After the user forms the diamond he makes the RAM hand seal, when he does this the diamond gets shot forward at great speed (still spinning)destroying most things in its path(c-rank doton), the user can either make the OX hand seal and release the jutsu causing the chakra to disperse with minor damage or make the Dragon hand seal causing the diamond to blow up releasing all that compressed raiton chakra destroying most things(A-rank doton) in 1 half kilometer blast radius and leaves a 5 foot deep crater. After the user completes this jutsu his hands go numb for three turns, making it impossible to do hand seals and move hands.
Note:The user cannot use any jutsu above c rank after this is used
Note: This can only be used twice per battle
Note: To uses this jutsu you have to complete 7 hand seals(NO Exceptions)
Note: After the user completes this jutsu his hands go numb for three turns.
Note: It takes about 2 seconds to gather enough chakra to even start the hand seals
Notence the hand seals are completed it takes about 3 seconds to form the Diamond
Note:When the hands are numb the user cannot do hand seals or move hands
Note: If the user does this jutsu in long range his is unharmed from this justu (not talking about their ability to mold or form charka, that cannot be helped) , if used in mid-range the user will take minor damage ,and will become much slower ( by 2 speed chart levels), if the user does this in short range the user will get the same effect as the opponent does
Note: The explosion lasts for 3 seconds

~ How is C-rank doton "most things" ? ~

(Raiton: Howaito daiyamondo )- Lightning Release white diamond disintegration
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short/Long
Chakra: 15 Chakra ( + 30 if the user blows it up)
Damage: 30 Damage ( 60 if the user blows it up)
Description: The user puts their hand together like their praying and gathers a massive amount of chakra into each arm, then quickly shifts it into their hands immediately after this is done the user preforms this row of hand seals Ox → Dragon → Bird → Dragon → Ram → Horse→ Tiger ,Then immediately after the hands seals are completed the user holds both of his arms out in front of him and makes a diamond shape with hands, As the user does this a large white diamond shaped of pure raiton chakra forms one foot in front of them. This diamond spins parallel to the user and it spins at an extremely fast speed, the diamond is 10 feet in width, 10 feet in height , and 3 inches in length. After the user forms the diamond he makes the RAM hand seal, when he does this the diamond gets shot forward at great speed (still spinning) capable of destroying doton up to B rank, the user can either make the OX hand seal and release the jutsu causing the chakra to disperse with minor damage or make the Dragon hand seal causing the diamond to blow up releasing all that compressed raiton chakra capable of destroying s-rank doton in 1 half kilometer blast radius and leaves a 10 foot deep crater. After the user completes this jutsu his hands go numb for three turns, making it impossible to do hand seals and move hands.
Note:The user cannot use any jutsu above B rank after this is used
Note: This can only be used once per battle
Note: To uses this jutsu you have to complete 7 hand seals (unless mastred raiton)
Note: After the user completes this jutsu his hands go numb for three turns.
Note: It takes about 2 seconds to gather enough chakra to even start the hand seals
Note: once the hand seals are completed it takes about 3 seconds to form the Diamond
Note:When the hands are numb the user cannot do hand seals or move hands
Note: If the user does this jutsu in long range his is unharmed from this justu (not talking about their ability to move their hands that cannot be helped) , if used in mid-range the user will take minor damage ,and will become much slower ( by 2 speed chart levels), if the user does this in short range the user will get the same effect as the opponent does
Note: The explosion lasts for 3 seconds

(Raiton: sono ketteiteki tachi)- Lightning Release- The final stand
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short/Long
Chakra: 20 Chakra
Damage: 40 Damage
Description: The user puts their hand together like their praying and gathers a massive amount of chakra into each arm, then quickly shifts it into their hands immediately after this is done the user preforms this row of hand seals Bird → Ox → Bird → Dragon → Ram → Horse→ Tiger, Then immediately after the hands seals are completed the user slams their hand together like their praying ,A small but extremely compressed ball of pure raiton chakra ( comparable to that of a tailed beast ball, Not the power the compression) starts to form the user then throws this ball into the sky at a height of 100 feet and down range up to long range, by pushing his hands forward and opening them at the same time forcing it out. Once in the air the user can release all the compressed chakra by making the OX hand seal, creating a massive electrical explosion that has 1 kilometer blast radius, hitting anything that’s below it . This blast disturbs the electrical impulses in the body rendering your opponent unable to move. The reason this is called the final stand is because whoever uses this jutsu loses the ability to move their arms and their arms go numb for the rest of the battle, also whoever uses this jutsu losses their ability to mold or form charka rendering them unable to use jutsu for the rest of the battle.
Note: The user cannot use any jutsu after this is used (because they lose their ability to mold or form charka)
Note: This can only be used once per battle
Note: To uses this jutsu you have to complete 8 hand seals (NO Exceptions)
Note: once the hand seals are completed it takes about 3 seconds to form the ball of chakra
Note: From the time released this jutsu takes about 4 seconds to hit the ground
Note: If the user does this jutsu in long range his is unharmed from this justu (not talking about their ability to mold or form charka, that cannot be helped) , if used in mid-range the user will take minor damage ,and will become much slower ( by 2 speed chart levels), if the user does this in short range the user will get the same effect as the opponent does (rendering you and your opponent unable to move, thus drawing)

~ Eh, unrealistic. Declined. ~

Note:I took out the shockwave

(Raiton: sono ketteiteki tachi)- Lightning Release- The final stand
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short/Long
Chakra: 30 Chakra
Damage: 60 Damage
Description: The user puts their hand together like their praying and gathers a massive amount of chakra into each arm, then quickly shifts it into their hands immediately after this is done the user preforms this row of hand seals Bird → Ox → Bird → Dragon → Ram → Horse→ Tiger, Then immediately after the hands seals are completed the user slams their hand together like their praying ,A small but extremely compressed ball of pure raiton chakra ( comparable to that of a tailed beast ball, Not the power the compression) starts to form the user then throws this ball into the sky at a height of 100 feet and down range up to long range, by pushing his hands forward and opening them at the same time forcing it out. Once in the air the user can release all the compressed chakra by making the OX hand seal, creating a massive electrical explosion that has 1 kilometer blast radius, hitting anything that’s below it . This blast is capable of destroying s rank doton

Note: This can only be used two times per battle
Note: To uses this jutsu you have to complete 8 hand seals (unless mastred raiton)
Note: once the hand seals are completed it takes about 3 seconds to form the ball of chakra
Note: From the time released this jutsu takes about 4 seconds to hit the ground
Note: If the user does this jutsu in long range his is unharmed from this justu, if used in mid-range the user will take minor damage, if the user does this in short range the user will get the same effect as the opponent does

~ I've given you enough chances with all of these. Declined, do not resubmit. ~

 

[Vision]

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Genjutsu: Kyūkyoku Saimin | Illusionary Technique: Ultimate Hypnosis
Type: Supplementary
Rank: Forbbiden
Range: Short
Chakra: 50 (+30 Continous)
Damage: N/A
Description: One of the oldest techniques, that was lost centuries ago, is used as a last resort when engaged in a fight. It is activated by performing five hand seals Tiger → horse → Snake → Boar→ Tiger. The user would gauge at his own chakra and manipulate the flow of chakra into the pain recepters of the brain. Thus while this jutsu is active, Pain would not be felt, therefore able to continue to fight even when mortally wounded. Only time that the user will instantly die is when pierced through the heart, brain, or when the head is cut off as it is needed for the body to be able to function or any type of attack that effects these areas. However deep concentration is needed as constant manipulation of the chakra flowing through the pain recepters needs to be monitored. Once the technique is over with, whatever damage the user has taken would immediatly be felt. If the wound is too deep and can not recover the user will die.

Note: Able to use once per battle
Note: Once activated no more Genjutsu allowed during that battle
Note: Lasts four turns with the effect
Note: Mastery of Genjutsu is needed in order to use this technique
Note: -Vision- will be the only one to be using this technique
Note: Genjutsu cannot be broken through pain
Note: After four turns the user would feel the effects of all the injuries sustained.
Note: No Sage Mode or EIG stacked with this jutsu
Note: No S rank jutsu's allowed for one turn after this jutsu is active

±± Declined ±± Don't resubmit


Maboroshi Kagirinai | Eternal Vision
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40 [when active]
Damage: N/A
Description: During the acient times, highly known black smith, forged a necklace that was a mix of steel and silver. During the process of it's creation he failed many times and concentrated on his work for years. Finally through all his hard work and concentration he was able to create an undestructable necklace as he wished. When he put it on to see how it had looked, the necklace reacted to his chakra, as if the necklace had a mind of it's own. Unfortunatly he was not able to control his chakra as it was reacting to the necklace. Which, in the end the necklace sucked all the black smith's chakra into itself, thus killing the black smith. Since that day, many have tried to use the necklace and try to figure out it's mysterious power. It has said that the necklaces power are the ability to protect it's user. Through the use of pure chakra that it emmits and reacts to the users chakra. Many have tried to use the necklace however most failed and their chakra also was sucked into the necklace. The necklace would be activated by channeling the users own chakra into the necklace, thus creating a reaction with the necklace and mixing both chakra's together. Once this happens the necklace will emmit a thin chakra layer around the users body. Protecting them from projectiles and debris that may be falling from the sky or a direct attack on the user. Also since the chakra is surrounding the body, the user gains slight boots to speed, agility, and striking power. Also the necklace was forged in fire and has a natural affinity to it. Thus being able to absorb A rank and below fire by sensing the heat of the fire when approaching the user and will do this automatically. Since the necklace was forged in fire and has an affinity to fire, smoke will emmit from the user through the chakra layers around the body, long as the necklace is active. However the smoke itself is not harmful to the user as it is created from their own chakra. It is also known that when the user of the necklace activates it. Their appearance will change as if the cloths has changed and the user will glow a certain color according to gender.

Abilities:
-Actives, once the user channels chakra into the necklace
-Male's will glow black // Female's will glow purple
-Able to absorb A rank and below Katon jutsu's
-Adds a thin protection layer of chakra around the user's whole body
-Emmits smoke from the user's body from the necklace's chakra as it has affinity to fire
-Once the chakra is covered the users body, the user will gain a slight boost in speed, agility and striking power


Restrictions:
-Lasts 5 turns once active
-Able to activate two times per battle
-Need to skip two turns before activating it once more
-Necklace constantly feeds off the users chakra
-Can only absorb fire three times per battle
-Can not absorb fire consecutively on the same turn
-Can only absorb the fire when extremly close to the source or the jutsu
-Absorbing fire counts towards the users three moves allowed per turn
-Only smoke users are able to manipulate smoke emmiting from the body
-Only to be used by -Vision-

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±± Declined ±± Reduce the story and resubmit. Its too much. One thing is a text with a little story and parts about the abilities. Other is to have such a bit messy test. You can add such story to your bios.


Sakashima Chakra Henkanshi no Jutsu | Reverse Chakra Sensing Technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: More advanced technique than the Chakra sensing technique. This allows the user to concetrate and detect foriegn chakra in the users body. When using this technique sensors will be able to monitor the flow of their chakra within their own system and make sure no foriegn chakra is maniupulated into their tenketsu.

Note: Only Sensory Ninja's are able to use this technique
Note: Can only be taught by -Vision-


±± Declined ±± They can already do this =_=

Resubmitting CW, editing out the story

Maboroshi Kagirinai | Eternal Vision
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40 [when active]
Damage: N/A
Description: Made during ancient times in the high mountains by multiple black smiths. Forged in fire with silver and an unknown metal to make it indistructable. As well as infusing the necklace with their own chakra. It has said that the necklaces power are the ability to protect it's user. Through the use of pure chakra that it emmits and reacts to the users chakra. The necklace would be activated by channeling the users own chakra into the necklace, thus creating a reaction with the necklace and mixing both chakra's together. Once this happens the necklace will emmit a thin chakra layer around the users body. Protecting them from projectiles and debris that may be falling from the sky or a direct attack on the user. Also since the chakra is surrounding the body, the user gains slight boots to speed, agility, and striking power. Also the necklace was forged in fire and has a natural affinity to it. Thus being able to absorb A rank and below fire by sensing the heat of the fire when approaching the user. Since the necklace has an affinity to fire, smoke will emmit from the user through the chakra layers around the body, long as the necklace is active. However the smoke itself is not harmful to the user as it is created from their own chakra. It is also known that when the user of the necklace activates it. Their appearance will change as if the cloths has changed and the user will glow a certain color according to gender.

Abilities:
-Actives, once the user channels chakra into the necklace
-Male's will glow black // Female's will glow purple
-Able to absorb A rank and below Katon jutsu's
-Adds a thin protection layer of chakra around the user's whole body
-Emmits smoke from the user's body from the necklace's chakra as it has affinity to fire
-Once the chakra is covered the users body, the user will gain a slight boost in speed, agility and striking power [20% from base]

~ Explain the purple bit ~

Restrictions:
-Lasts 5 turns once active
-Able to activate two times per battle
-Need to skip two turns before activating it once more
-Necklace constantly feeds off the users chakra
-Can only absorb fire three times per battle
-Can not absorb fire consecutively on the same turn
-Can only absorb the fire when extremly close to the source or the jutsu
-Absorbing fire counts towards the users three moves allowed per turn
-Only smoke users are able to manipulate smoke emmiting from the body
-Only to be used by -Vision-

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Summoning Technique: Souseiki Harinezumi | Summoning Technique: Diamond
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will cut his palm till blood drips. Once that, he then does 5 hand seals and wipe the blood on his Lesser bird of paradise tattoo. Diamond (My summon) Will Appear in mid air above me circling . He is Bright blue with yellow stripes on her head and down her body. Diamond Speaclizes in Genjutsu Up to A rank. And can fly at Very high speeds which equals to Sasuke's Hawk. Diamond Wing span is wider and longer then most causing the gust he give off by flapping his wings very strong. strong enough to knock down several trees with just the flap of his wings . This summon is the same size as Sauske Hawk. The next strongest summon to the boss summon Phaze. Diamond can also speak and communicate in english.

-Only Taught By General and Used by -Vision-
-Only can stay on turn for 4 Turns
-User Cant Use Genjutsu while bird is in play
-Dosen't need to use handseals as he specializes in Genjutsu
-All Diamond moves count as 1 move for the user.
-Can only be summoned once

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~...You cannot do Gen without handseals unless you're an Uchiha ~

Katon and Raiton: Kashou Sumiyaka | Fire and Lightning Release: Speed Burn
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will perform a two hand seals Tiger and Serpent. Once done so the user will point to the desired location where they would like to strike. Then they will release a concentrated fire in a stream that is 5m long. Then the user will perform another hand seal boar and the fire stream will turn into a beam, which the velocity, speed, and the penetrating power all increased exponentially, thus reaching it's target faster. If the opponent gets hit, it will pierce them with ease and burn a hole in their body. If it misses but graze their flesh, they will burn the area that it was hit. It has the power to penetrate almost anything. An will explode once it penetrate or hits an object. Magnitude of the explosion would be like the Majestic Anniliahtion. S ranked water jutsu's are able to stop it, however soon as it makes contact it will create steam.

Note: Able to use once per battle
Note: No A rank and above Fire or Katon jutsu on the next turn
Note: Only able to use by -Vision-

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[Rozzy]

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(Byākugan Karyuu appa-katto) - Byakugan Swirling uppercut
Type: Attack/Defensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra: 15
Damage: 30
Description: The moment the oppenent attacks, once close enough, the user ducks and swiftly swirls around beneath their attack and rises up with a chakara-concentrated palm and uppercuts the opponents jaw which sends them flying.
~Declined~ Is this a gentle fist custom or a chakra-enhanced taijutsu attack? And do you process the required training for either options?

Yes this is a gentle fist custom
-Resubmission-

(Byākugan Karyuu appa-katto) - Byakugan Swirling uppercut
Type: Attack/Defensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra: 15
Damage: 30
Description: The moment the oppenent attacks, once close enough, the user ducks and swiftly swirls around beneath their attack and rises up with a chakara-concentrated palm and uppercuts the opponents jaw which sends them flying.
Note: User must be a hyuga clan member.

~ Why do you even need this to be a CJ ? ~

 

[XZA]

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( Gujin Bakhatsu)- Puppet explosion
Type: Supplementary, Offense
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short - Long Range
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user sends a large amount of katon chakra into a puppet and compresses the wood or material it is made out of until it is ready to explode. The user performs a single hand-seal and causes the puppet to explode out into a huge blast of fire and wood that can cause major damage to anyone short range of the puppet.
Note: Can only be used three times a match
Note: No S-rank or above fire next turn
~Declined~
(Jikashu Ninpou: Jin Nami)- Magnet ninja art: Magnetic Wave
Type: Supplementary, Defense, Offense
Rank: S - Rank
Range: Short - Long Range
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The third kazekage puppet will open its left chest compartment and begins sending out very fast pulses of magnetic energy that fill the whole terrain and magnetizes anything it comes in contact it with. The user can give anything inside the magnetic field a either north or south polarity. The field is extremely strong.
Note: Can only be used once
Note: Last for three turns
Note: Can not use iron sand while this is active
~Declined~ Similar technique already exists. In fact, it was made by me.
(Jikashu Ninpou: Sakin Bakhatsu)- Magnetic ninja art: Iron Sand explosion
Type: Offense
Rank: S- Rank
Range: Short - long Range
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user performs a single hand-seal and compresses the iron sand until it is ready to explode. The user then preforms a single hand-seal and causes the iron sand to detonate into a huge blast of iron sand that can cause fatal damage to the opponent.
Note: Can only be used once
Note: Can't use iron sand next turn
~Declined~You're making it sound as if Iron Sand is an element of its own. The element that controls iron sand is magnetism release and even then you can't make the iron sand explode. However you can make it compress and then release outwards, but not explode like a tag or all those exploding elemental techniques.

(Jikashu Ninpou: Sakin Bakhatsu)- Magnetic ninja art: Iron Sand explosion
Type: Offense
Rank: S- Rank
Range: Short - long Range
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user compresses any or all iron sand on the battlefield. The user then preforms a single hand-seal and causes the iron sand to move outwards at high speeds, much like an explosion, but only it causes a blast of iron sand to move outwards.
Note:Can only be used once
Note:Can't use magnetism next turn

~ It's not like an explosion at all =/ ~

 

[Yugure]

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Summoning Animal: Tiger
Scroll Owner: –Severus Snape-
Other Users who have signed contract: None

Summoning Boss if existing: None yet

Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None yet

Description and Background:
The tiger is the largest cat species, reaching a total body length of up to 3.3 metres (11 ft) and weighing up to 306 kg (670 lb). Their most recognizable feature is a pattern of dark vertical stripes on reddish-orange fur with lighter under parts. They have exceptionally stout teeth, and their canines are the longest among living felids with a crown height of as much as 74.5 mm (2.93 in) or even 90 mm (3.5 in). In zoos, tigers have lived for 20 to 26 years, which also seems to be their longevity in the wild. They are territorial and generally solitary but social animals, often requiring large contiguous areas of habitat that support their prey requirements. This, coupled with the fact that they are indigenous to some of the more densely populated places on Earth, has caused significant conflicts with humans.

Tigers once ranged widely across Asia, from Turkey in the west to the eastern coast of Russia. Over the past 100 years, they have lost 93% of their historic range, and have been extirpated from southwest and central Asia, from the islands of Java and Bali, and from large areas of Southeast and Eastern Asia. Today, they range from the Siberian taiga to open grasslands and tropical mangrove swamps. The remaining six tiger subspecies have been classified as endangered by IUCN. The global population in the wild is estimated to number between 3,062 to 3,948 individuals, with most remaining populations occurring in small pockets that are isolated from each other. Major reasons for population decline include habitat destruction, habitat fragmentation and poaching.

~ Scorps ~


±± Declined ±± Tigers exist already... =_=

 

[Gutsy]

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(Katon: Raion Kusabana Inferuno)- Fire Release: Lion Flower Inferno
Type: Offense
Rank: A - Rank
Range: Short - long Range
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user performs a single handseal, before they exhale a massive fire straight upwards into the air, where it forms into a giant lion figure of flames. The fire will then come at the opponent from above with great speed created by the altitude and the force of the fire, and as it travels towards the opponent it will begin to spin around itself to create a more powerful blow on impact as it will explode into a huge inferno of flames.
Note: Can only be taught by JiraiyaEroSennin

~ Declined ~

 

[Illyasviel]

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(Katon:Ume no Kaki)- Fire release:Rope of fire
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:25
Damage:40
Description:The user will exhale a condensed fireball the size of a coconut into the air above him.Then he will attach a rope of chakra from his fingers to the fireball and once he does that he will be able to swing the fireball around as a mace.The fireball upon impact with an solid object will burst in a large fireball the size of the Great Fireball Technique.
~Note:Can be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user must wait 2 turns before using it again
~Declined~ What makes the coconut sized fireball suddenly increase in size so much? I'm not referring about the impact but exactly how is such a small sized fire ball increasing in chakra so much to acquire that size? Also you need to fix the chakra information on the template.

Resubmiting the above one:

(Katon:Ume no Kaki)- Fire release:Rope of fire
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:40
Description:The user will exhale a condensed fireball the size of about the humans stomack into the air above him.Then he will attach a rope of chakra from his fingers to the fireball and once he does that he will be able to swing the fireball around as a mace.The fireball upon impact with an solid object will explode in a sudden burst of flames,big enough to engulf someones whole body in fire.
~Note:Can be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user must wait 2 turns before using it again

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(Katon:Fudou Faia Bakudan)- Fire release:Floating Fire Mines
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:40
Description:The user will perform the Tiger hand seal and exhale a large fireball(the size of the Great Fireball Technique)into the air a little above him and his opponent but closer to the opponent.The fireball when it is close to the opponent will split into around 20 fire orbs the size of the human head wich would float around the opponent in mid air.If the fireball comes in contact with an solid object it will explode and also detonate the other mines around.The fire orbs are like the Exploding Flame Shots so they can't engulf someone in flames but cause damage to him by exploding.
~Note:Can be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user must wait 2 turns before using it again
~Note:If the orbs don't explode thay can remain on the battlefield for three turns.
~Note:No S rank fire techniques the same turn this is used.

~ TOO, TOO much ~

 

[Ryūjin]

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(Katon: Rēdōrō) - Fire Release: Ghost Lantern
Type: Offense , Defence
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A [+40 if shooting demonic floating heads]
Description: After performing the Tiger handseal, the user converts their chakra into fire chakra creating a floating orb of fire near them, using shape manipulation to shape the orb into a large "ghost" of fire, which is floating into the air, this ghost of flames has a figure resembling a demon, with it's head similar to the "Fire Release: Demon Lantern" technique but on a larger size, this demon is roughly the size of the "Earth Release: Great Stone Golem" technique, this ghost of fire is able to withstand 2 A-rank techniques of elemental ninjutsu including fire, however only able to withstand one A-rank water technique, this technique can be used as a defense in order to defend against incoming attacks, or attack the opponent by releasing several demonic floating heads that attack the opponent having the speed of the "Fire Release: Great Dragon Fire" technique and each of the heads is the same size as the Dragon head-shaped fireballs and reach up to Mid range from the floating ghost and counts as a B-rank Fire technique.
Note: Can only be used once.
Note: Lasts 3 turns once used.

~ It makes no sense for it to resist earth or lightning; clearly state it dissipates after resisting its limit; clearly state that it's floating heads attack counts as a move; add chakra cost for maintaining it ~

(Katon: Rēfudō) - Fire Release: Floating Ghosts
Type: Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After performing 3 handseals Boar → Monkey → Tiger the user convers the chakra inside their body into fire as they release it outwards, causing 3 floating demonic heads of fire to form around them in a spiraling manner , each of the orbs having an equivalent size to the "Big Ball Rasengan" technique, these demonic floating heads have the main purpose of protecting the user, as they continuously spin around the user in a motion that resembles planets orbiting around the sun, with the user's command via chakra, these floating heads "separately or all together" collide with other incoming techniques in order to cancel each other out, each of these floating demonic heads is able to withstand a C-rank elemental technique, two can withstand a B-ranked elemental technique, and altogether an A-ranked elemental technique, along with being able to deflect/melt incoming projectiles sent towards the user.
Note: Can only be used twice.
Note: Lasts 3 turns once used.

~ Chakra cost to maintain it ? ~

 

[McRazor]

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Hyouton: Sen kōri no ya | Ice Release: Thousand Ice Arrows
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 30 Chakra
Damage points: 60 Damage
Description: User simply gathers Hyouton chakra in his mouth and does an Ox handseal after which he starts spewing out a thousand of ice arrows at the opponent. As the ice arrows travel towards the opponent they line up in order to travel parallel in a formation much resembling to a shield. The shield has a diameter of approx. 3 meters. Due to the structure of the ice arrows and their formation they have a mirror-like effect, if looked at, from the opponents side. The user, however, can clearly see the opponent and all of his actions. Due to the size of the jutsu it can serve as a source for other Hyouton jutsus.
Note: Usable only three times per battle
Note: Only McRazor can use this
~Declined~ Reduce the number of arrows released.

Hyouton: Hyaku kōri no ya | Ice Release: Hundred Ice Arrows
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 30 Chakra
Damage points: 60 Damage
Description: User simply gathers Hyouton chakra in his mouth and does an Ox handseal after which he starts spewing out a hundred of ice arrows towards the opponent at very high speed. As the ice arrows travel towards the opponent they line up in order to travel parallel in a formation much resembling to a shield. The shield has a diameter of approx. 3 meters. Due to the structure of the ice arrows and their formation they have a mirror-like effect, if looked at, from the opponents side. The user, however, can clearly see the opponent and all of his actions. Due to the size of the jutsu it can serve as a source for other Hyouton jutsus.
Note: Usable only three times per battle
Note: Only McRazor can use this

~ If you're going to start spitting a hundred arrows, you're going to be standing there, mouth open, for quite a while. ~

Hyouton: Ni tokekomu | Ice Release: Blend In
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Self
Chakra cost: 30 Chakra
Damage points: N/A
Description: User starts controlling his chakra flow and starts releasing his chakra out, through his skin. As it leaves his skin and gets in contact with his clothes it starts crystalising and creating a layer of thin ice around him. While covered with the ice he becomes invisible and can move for a very short period of time (travelling from long to mid or mid to short and vice versa). If the field is cold and/or frozen it allows the user to stay invisible for a bit longer period (travelling from long to short and vice versa). The user becomes visible again if he decides to cast a new jutsu becase his chakra flow disrupts and dissipates the layer of ice. The layer of ice protects the user against B-rank Katon jutsus.
Note: Usable only three times per battle
Note: Only McRazor can use this

~ Makes no sense. ~

 

[Erzo]

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(Katon: Nibai Batsu) Fire Release: Double attack
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his Katon chakra at the sides of his opponents (3 meters away from each of the opponents side) and creates two hawks -each roughly the size of the hawk sasuke summoned against danzo- to attack the opponent from both his left and right side, trapping the opponent in the center of the attack. Upon collision with each other and the opponent in the middle of them, the birds explode and create a giant fire viciously burning the opponent between them.
Note: Can be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank Fire in same turn.

~Declined~ You can't just "channel" fire chakra next to your opponent and create fire out of thin air pretty much. You need to either make it travel in the form of fire from the ground or be released from your body. If this was a wind or water styled technique then it would be understandable.

(Raiton: Tori Dageki) Lightning Release: Bird Strike
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his lightning chakra behind his opponent and uses shape manipulation to create a hawk -which is the same size as the one summoned by sasuke against danzo- the hawk then flies towards the opponent with its extremely sharp beak pointed at the opponents back aiming to piercing him, leaving quite a big gap in his chest. After peircing the opponent the bird disperses in all areas short range from it acting like chidori nagashi and paralyzing any opponent(s) within its vicinity. If needed the user can disperse the bird before it pierces the opponent so that the opponent(s) are only paralyzed.
Note: Can only be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank lightning same turn.

~Declined~ Same as above except for the added option of channeling your lightning chakra into the sky and bring down a lightning hawk.

~Resubmitting~

(Katon: Nibai Batsu) Fire Release: Double attack
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his Katon chakra at the ground from each of his opponents side (3 meters away from each of the opponents side) and creates two hawks -each roughly the size of the hawk sasuke summoned against danzo- to come out and shoot off towards the opponents location from both his sides (his left and right side) trapping the opponent in the center of the attack. Upon collision with each other and the opponent in the middle of them, the birds explode and create a giant fire viciously burning the opponent between them. These birds can shoot out of the ground to a maximum height of 6 meters before clashing with each other and exploding.
Note: Can be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank Fire in same turn.

~ Again, where does the fire come from ? ~

(Raiton: Tori Dageki) Lightning Release: Bird Strike
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his lightning chakra in the the sky in the area behind his opponent and uses shape manipulation to create a hawk -which is the same size as the one summoned by sasuke against danzo- the hawk then flies downwards at an angle towards the opponent with its extremely sharp beak pointed at the opponents neck area/upper back aiming to piercing him from behind. After peircing the opponent the bird disperses in all areas short range from it acting like chidori nagashi and paralyzing any opponent(s) within its vicinity. If needed the user can disperse the bird before it pierces the opponent so that the opponent(s) are only paralyzed.
Note: Can only be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank lightning same turn.

~ Needs a little more restrictions ~

 

[Wakizashi]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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boss summoning: Kyofu
(kuchiyose no jutsu: kyofu)-summoning jutsu: kyofu-big wind
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range:mid-long
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description:the user bites their thumb to draw blood weave the summoning jutsu hand signs and place their hands on the ground. When done a gamabunta size toucan appears in a puff of smoke. This summons has the ability to create great winds with the flap of his wings that’s able to sweep the target off the ground and into the air. While the target is vulnerable in the air, some the feathers of the toucan’s get’s swept with the wind surrounding the target, then exploding as a result.
-note: can only be summoned once
-note: summoning last three turns
-note: can only use big wind once per turn
-note: no other summons can be in play
-note: must sign toco toucan contract

±± Declined ±±Rank of the wind blasts?


shokku
(kuchiyose no jutsu: shokku)-summoning technique: shokku
Type: supplementary
Rank:A
Range:short-mid
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:the user bites their thumb to draw blood, weave the summoning jutsu hand signs and place their hands on the ground while calling “shokku”. The summoning that appears will be the same size as a regular toco toucan. The summon will then use it’s unbearable deep croak to render the target unable to defend itself.
-note: can only be summoned twice
-note: one turn must be in between each summons
-note: summoning last two turns
-note: target can’t use any jutsu during summons
-note: useless against s-class ninja or higher
-note: no other summons can be in play
-note: must signed the toco toucan contract

±± Declined ±± Makes little to no sense. What exactly can this toucan do?

toucan twins
(kuchiyose no jutsu: konbioohashi* Daburupiasu)-summoning technique: duo toucan double pierced
Type:summoning/attack/defense
Rank:A
Range:short-mid
Chakra:30(x2)
Damage:60
Description:the user bite their thumb to draw blood, weave the summoning jutsu hand signs and place their hands on the ground while calling the toucan twins. These two can use up to c rank ration jutsu but their signature move consist of the toucan twins using lightning strike armour while flying thru the target with their razor sharp beaks. they can also use the strike defensive raiton jutsu to protect the user.
-note: can only be summoned twice
-note: summoning last two turns
-note: no other summons can be in play
-note: can use up to c-rank raiton
-note: can’t use double pierced and raiton jutsu in the same turn
-note: raiton jutsu used by this summons will count as one move.
-note: must have signed the toco toucan contract.

±± Declined ±± Don't resubmit something similar please

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~ Scorps ~

 

[Wesobi]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Jinton: Kodai no Rerumu no Hageshī Yōgo-sha | Dust Release: Raging Defender of the Ancient Realm
Type: Defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short - mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The users starts by doing one(For B-rank), two (For A-rank) or three (for S-rank) hand seals. After doing the hand seals, 3 cubes start to float around the user's waist. These will spin around at a slow pace. Every time there is an incoming attack, the user can shoot activate one of these 3 cubes. Activating it will stop the cubes while one is in front of the user. The cube will then expand infront of the user and destroy any kind of incoming attack.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Can use the B-rank variant 2 times, the A-rank and S-rank once.
Note: B-rank cubes can only defend against B-rank techniques, A-rank cubes against A-rank techniques, S-rank cubes against S-rank techniques.
Note: No dust release techniques during the same turn as one of the cubes is used.
~Declined~ Either B, A, or S rank, you choose.
Kyūkyoku Meisai no Jutsu |Ultimate Camouflage technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Mu, after doing one hand seal does his signature camouflage technique. His mastery over this is formidable, but he has upgraded this technique once more. While he is in this camouflage technique, his chakra is undetectable as it normally is (considering he is a Non-Person when using this), nor can his form be seen. However, he made adjustments to the technique so that it makes him intangible. Because of this, any sticky substance or object that would normally bounce through Mu is does not work. However, the downside is that Mu can not use any offensive technique while in this form.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Requires a Mu bio
Note: Can only be used twice
Note: Lasts 3 turns
~Declined~ What exactly is making him intangible? The origin of the camouflage technique is controlling how light is reflected around their body bending the light in a certain way to blend in with the surroundings and utilizing his specialization in chakra sensory to suppress his chakra in combination with all of it.
Jinton: Honshitsu no Fukkatsu | Rebirth of Essence
Type: Offensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 100 (and 20 to the user)
Description: The user does two hand seals and creates 8 cubes around the battlefield. one infront of him at short range to the left and to the right, one to his left at long range infront of him and to his right at long range infront of him, but also 10 meters into the air at the same formation. These cubes are small at first, not being more than 1cm², but then rapidly expand. The cubes then connect to one another at such an incredible rate that it appears to be no more than a blur to the opponent. Once the cubes have made connection with one another, everything inside of the connected area is destroyed at a molecular level.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Can only be used by once
Note: No more dust release for the rest of the battle
Note: The user can not move through physical means for 3 turns after this jutsu is used
Note: The user, due to the chakra being used in this can only use up to A-rank techniques for the next 2 turns, and up to S-rank after that.
Note: The user can not use more than two more jutsus per turn after this is used.
~Declined~ 20 damage to the user? We both know that won't affect you in our RP. As for the rest, remove the "Blur" speed reference and clarify exactly what type of cubes you are creating. For all I know they could be wind cubes that are later created into Dust release cubes, etc, etc.

Jinton: Kodai no Rerumu no Hageshī Yōgo-sha | Dust Release: Raging Defender of the Ancient Realm
Type: Defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short - mid
Chakra Cost: 20 - 40
Damage Points: 40 - 80
Description: The users starts by doing two hand seals. After doing the hand seals, 4 cubes start to float around the user's waist. These will spin around at a slow pace. Every time there is an incoming attack, the user can shoot activate one of these 4 cubes. Activating it will stop the cubes. The user then directs the cube towards where the attack is coming from. The cube will then expand and destroy any kind of incoming attack.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Can use this technique twice (meaning he can create 4 cubes twice)
Note: Each cube can destroy up to an S-rank attack, or using all 4 cubes together can stop an S-rank attack.
Note: No dust release techniques during the same turn as one of the cubes is used.

~ Left for the knob, Mathias ~
~Declined~ I will give you one more chance before DNR'ing this technique. First of all, as you may or may not already know, the hands play a vital role in preparations of dust release techniques. Before ever creating the cubes, cones, cylinders, etc, you need to do the hand motion preparations to construct the three-dimensional object. Now about the technique itself in terms of power; Are you really expecting a technique that lets you take out up to four S-rank techniques, twice per battle to get approved?

I'd like to point out a flaw in the note I highlighted above. The overall technique is ranked at S because of its power and complexity, that does not mean that each individual cube has the power of an S-rank, that would be ridiculous. That being said, each individual cube would not be able to destroy up to S-Ranks attacks. Why? Because when dealing with dust release, once two similar techniques of approximately equal power collide, in this cause one of the cubes and another S rank technique, the pair would merge into a single large spherical explosion. Now if you account for the fact that each cube is not S ranked, the techniques you are trying to destroy would not be equal in power to accomplish what you are describing. Lastly, please make sure to fix the chakra cost and damage points, it seems like you left it there from your previous submission.

Kyūkyoku Meisai no Jutsu |Ultimate Camouflage technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Mu, after doing one hand seal does his signature camouflage technique. His mastery over this is formidable, but he has upgraded this technique once more. While he is in this camouflage technique, his chakra is undetectable as it normally is (considering he is a Non-Person when using this), nor can his form be seen. However, he made adjustments to the technique by infusing jinton chakra into his body and making it disintegrate on a molecular level so that it makes him intangible. Because of this, any sticky substance or object that would normally bounce through Mu is does not work. However, the downside is that Mu can not use any offensive technique while in this form. He can then, at will, reform his body.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Requires a Mu bio
Note: Can only be used twice
Note: Lasts 3 turns

~ Declined, do not resubmit. I'm sorry, do you know even basic science ? Don't you think, oh, I don't know, DISINTEGRATING your whole body would KILL YOU ? ~

Jinton: Honshitsu no Fukkatsu | Rebirth of Essence
Type: Offensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 100 (and 40 to the user)
Description: The user does two hand seals and creates 8 cubes with jinton chakra around the battlefield. one infront of him at short range to the left and to the right, one to his left at long range infront of him and to his right at long range infront of him, but also 10 meters into the air at the same formation. These jinton cubes are small at first, not being more than 1cm², but then rapidly expand. The cubes then connect to one another at such an incredible rate that only people with at least the tracking abilities of a Two Tomoe sharingan can track the speed at which it connects. To people the ability to track this speed, it just appears as if a big dome of white light appeared around them out of nothing. Once the cubes have made connection with one another, everything inside of the connected area is destroyed at a molecular level.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Can only be used by once
Note: No more dust release for the rest of the battle
Note: The user can not move through physical means for 3 turns after this jutsu is used
Note: The user, due to the chakra being used in this can only use up to A-rank techniques for the next 2 turns, and up to S-rank after that.
Note: The user can not use more than two more jutsus per turn after this is used.

~ Left for the knob, Mathias ~
~Declined do not resubmit~ After speaking with Nexus in regards to custom dust release techniques, this here is too powerful to get approved. Yes it is a Forbidden ranked technique and quite simply described but due to the nature of the element itself it is too strong to be approved.
Note to checker: Yes I know 20 damage doesn't do shit for jack, but it's a requirement stated many times that an F-rank technique needs to have damage to the user. If I didn't put it up there, it would be declined for that, hence why it's stated there anyways.