[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

[ReXii]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Suiton:Oni-Bodi) Water Release: Demon Body
Type:Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:60 (If used to hit with)
Description: This technique is a secret technique, Passed down by the Hozuki clan, To use this jutsu first you must have a large water source around your short range vicinity.
Upon using this technique your body will triple in size making the user around 17 feet tall and comprised of flowing water entirely, This could be considered a variant of the demon fish technique.

-User is more vulnerable to Raiton in this state-
-User is immune to A rank wind blades and B rank and below vortex's-
-User is immune to S rank and below fire-
-Lasts for 4 turns & can only be used Once-
-Can only be taught by ReXii or those he permits-
~Declined~ No, just no.


(Suiton:Tenma Re-ru-hou) Water Release: Demonic Railgun
Type:Offensive
Rank:S
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:After using the Demon Body technique the user raises there arm making the hand join together like a long smooth rail, Through the use of hydrification, Once this is done the user then forms a large amount of suiton chakra hyper accelerating it along there arm and firing a giant projectile of explosive water, This is a variant of the water gun technique, On a much larger scale.

-May only be used twice, With each usage causing a turn to be lost in Demon body form-
-Capable of destroying B rank and below earth easily due to the explosive force on impact-
-May only be taught by ReXii and those he permits-



(Suiton:Saishuu Tenma Senkou) Water Release: The Final Demonic Flash
Type:Offensive/Defensive
Rank:F
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:50
Damage:100
Description:Used as a last resort by hozuki members using a demon body form, This technique whilst having huge power comes at a high cost, The user will focus all of the water chakra in there body and in the demon body form causing it to rapidly expand while keeping a solid shape, This will cause the user to explode with incredible force in to millions of razor sharp droplets of water, Similar to the shrapnel from a grenade.
This would of course cause immense damage to the surrounding area but also to the user themselves.

-Can only be used once-
-Once used causes -30 damage to the user, Also causes them to reform slowly over the course of a turn at which point they are very vulnerable-
-User cannot use hydrification related techniques for 4 turns they must also remain stationery in this time-
-Cannot use S rank and above for two turns after this technique-
-Can only be taught by ReXii-

~Both Declined~ Demon body was not approved.

(Suiton:Oni-Bodi) Water Release: Demon Body
Type:Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:60 (If used to hit with)
Description: This technique is a secret technique, Passed down by the Hozuki clan, To use this jutsu first you must have a large water source around your short range vicinity.
Upon using this technique your body will triple in size making the user around 17 feet tall and comprised of flowing water entirely, This could be considered a variant of the demon fish technique.

-User is more vulnerable to Raiton in this state-
-User is immune to A rank and below fire-
-Lasts for 3 turns & can only be used Once-
-Can only be taught by ReXii or those he permits-

Removed the immunity to wind techniqes, Lowered resistance to fire and duration.

~ Quoted original technique ? ~

(Suiton:Tenma Re-ru-hou) Water Release: Demonic Railgun
Type:Offensive
Rank:S
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:After using the Demon Body technique the user raises there arm making the hand join together like a long smooth rail, Through the use of hydrification, Once this is done the user then forms a large amount of suiton chakra hyper accelerating it along there arm and firing a giant projectile of explosive water, This is a variant of the water gun technique, On a much larger scale.

(Suiton:Saishuu Tenma Senkou) Water Release: The Final Demonic Flash
Type:Offensive/Defensive
Rank:F
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:50
Damage:100
Description:Used as a last resort by hozuki members using a demon body form, This technique whilst having huge power comes at a high cost, The user will focus all of the water chakra in there body and in the demon body form causing it to rapidly expand while keeping a solid shape, This will cause the user to explode with incredible force in to millions of razor sharp droplets of water, Similar to the shrapnel from a grenade.
This would of course cause immense damage to the surrounding area but also to the user themselves.

-Can only be used once-
-Once used causes -30 damage to the user, Also causes them to reform slowly over the course of a turn at which point they are very vulnerable-
-User cannot use hydrification related techniques for 4 turns they must also remain stationery in this time-
-Cannot use S rank and above for two turns after this technique-
-Can only be taught by ReXii-

~ Both declined, Demon Body not approved yet `

 

[Klaus]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Ki-Katana KeyBlade
Type:Weapon
Rank:S
Range:short
Chakra:N/A(-10 for every wind orb released)
Damage:40
Description: The KeyBlade was a blade made in Celestia The home of the Blue Jays. It was given to Klaus by the great Sage of Celestia after completing a challenge given to him by it. The Keyblade has a special bond with the wind element boosting all wind techniques power by +10. The KeyBlade also has the ability to be infused with wind chakra making it have a longer range and boosting its meele power. Another ability of the Keyblade is that the user can release wind orbs which he can direct at the enemy. Each Orb released by the KeyBlade's user equals a D-Rank wind technique in power and it consumes 10 chakra per orb released. The KeyBlade can also be thrown freely up to mid range and the user can just extend his hands and it would return to him istantly.

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The wind orbs released by the user of this weapon counts as 1 of the threee moves per turn.

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~ Not only does it not deserve to be S-rank, there are some 1000000000000000000000000000000 weapons with similar abilities. ~

 

[Kwalker394]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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Raiton: Raitingu Dokuro Bomu (Lightning Style: Lightning Skull Bomb)
Type: Attack
Rank: D Rank
Range: Mid-Long Range
Chakra: 10 Chakra
Damage: 20 Damage
Description:
While the user balls up his hands and by channeling the users Raiton chakra in between them the user can then mold and shape his chakra into a skull form. The user can then release all of the stored up lightning in his hands and blast it forward with great speed. When the skull hits the opponent a great blast of electricity will then erupt and spread to a 8ft diameter, electrifying anything in range.
~Can only be done 3 times during battle
~Can only be taught by Kwalker394
~Can't be used again in the same set of turns it was first used
~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

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Kuro Ken Akuma (Dark Sword of Demons)
Type: Weapon
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: (+5 for transformation +15 for ability)
Damage: 30 (+10 for ability)
Description:
Said to be forged out of the depths of the underworld, this sword was made out of the strongest metals in the universe and is said to be indestructible along with a chain. This sword was founded by Kenesu's Grandfather during the ninja war and was kept secret and safe until the day he died. Kenesu's Grandfather passed it down to him with his last breath. Over the years the sword was infused with Kenesu's chakra so it can only be recognized by him.

Ability:
The sword has the ability to transform into a different form. The sword itself in the first form is a large claymore that takes two hands to carry and is very heavy, powerful when used but slow. The second form of the sword is a much sleeker, faster, less powerful but swift. The transformation happens when Kenesu channels his chakra into the blade and "feed" the blade. The sword then forms into a much sleeker style which is much easier to carry and swing. The sword can also be infused with Raiton chakra to make it more faster stronger and more durable. While infused with Raiton chakra the sword is surrounded by lightning making it hard for the opponent to come close to it. The sword can also blast out an electric wall around the user to protect him (4ft diameter). Once the opponent comes in contact with the electric wall the electricity will damage (temporally) his nervous system making it difficult for him to move at all (defense) The sword is very attached to Kenesu chakra and can vibrate when the sword picks up an unusual amount of static electricity is in the air to warn Kenesu.
~Can only be used by Kwalker394
~Can only transform 2 times in one battle (1st and 2nd form twice)
~Transformation counts as a turn for your 3 move limit
~Can only be infused with Raiton chakra in the 2nd form
~The sword ability can only be used once in battle
~The sword can only sense static in the air only in the 1st form
~Declined~ Similar swords already exist.

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Summoning Animal: Bird-of-paradise
Scroll Owner: Kwalker394
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
Description and Background: N/A

I will edit the description and background as well create a boss if it gets approved.

Feel free to edit if needed ^_^
~Leaving to Scorps~

±± Pending ±± Resubmit with background and general description.

 

[Roy]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Futon: Hae Hataki) - Wind Release: Fly Swatter
Type: Offensive
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user forms a single handseal to amplify their chakra and then proceeds by raising their hand focusing wind chakra above the opponent. The user then brings his hand down in a fast vertical motion and as he does so compressed wind materialized above the opponent crashes down, slamming the opponent onto the ground.
-The impact can merely cause a slight concussion but floors the opponent completely.
-Can only be taught by Tybone.
-Can be used three times.
~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.
(Futon: Sandoicchi) - Wind Release: Sandwich
Type: Offensive
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user forms a series of three handseals and then extends both arms sideways, focusing their wind chakra. The user then proceeds by swiftly clapping their hands together and as he does so a compressed gust of wind slams into the opponent from both sides simultanously.
-The impact can be compared to being body slammed by two heavyweight athletes from both sides simultanously at a high speed.
-Can only be taught by Tybone.
-Can be used three times.
~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

 

[Zoro..]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Resubmitting:

Hawk Eye's Bow - Taka Manako Senshu
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30 (+10-30)
Damage: 60
Description: A Bow forged in the ages of the First Great Ninja War. It was a magnificent weapon used by only a few who had enough chakra to use this beauty. It was a black bow made out of carbon fibers flexible enough to fire arrows far distances. The Bow was never alone, it always was with it's quiver making it a set. The Quiver was what made this weapon fearsome, the bow alone could only fire powerful arrows really far however the Quiver was filled with different Fuuinjutsu sealing tags rolled up and fit to an arrow. Each arrow's with a different Fuuinjutsu seal holds a different fletching allowing the user to distinguish the differences. The Quiver holds a great deal of arrows and at the bottom is a generic seal to let out more if they user runs out. The Quiver holds 20 arrows as it is each Fuuinjutsu seal is placed on a maximum of three arrows. Their is a Fuuinjutsu seal for each element on three arrows within the quiver and when the user flows his chakra through it from any distance they blow up giving off the equivalent of an A ranked blast. However doing so cost an extra 10 chakra to do so. After every three arrows shot the chakra amount enlarges by 5 extra until it reaches thirty. The last five arrows in the quiver without elemental seals contain generic seals for splintering shots, rope on the arrow, paper bombs, flash bombs and stun bombs.
~This weapon may only be wielded by those Zoro.. allows
~The time it takes to shoot an arrow is equivalent to three handseals
~Each arrow shot takes 40 chakra and adding +5 more after each third arrow
~The Fuuinjutsu seals only have three per element unless the Quiver is replenished with more
~Arrow's blowing up with the Fuuinseals are equivalent to A rank blasts
~Declined~ Why do none of these blasts count towards your jutsu's per turn?As it stands, you have a CW that can freely release elemental blasts without usage or jutsu post restrictions. Lastly, make sure that none of these arrows are infusable with chakra(Aside from the fuuin) because that would be reaching the similarities of my Sniper Arts.

Hawk Eye's Bow - Taka Manako Senshu
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30 (+10-30)
Damage: 60
Description: A Bow forged in the ages of the First Great Ninja War. It was a magnificent weapon used by only a few who had enough chakra to use this beauty. It was a black bow made out of carbon fibers flexible enough to fire arrows far distances. The Bow was never alone, it always was with it's quiver making it a set. The Quiver was what made this weapon fearsome, the bow alone could only fire powerful arrows really far however the Quiver was filled with different Fuuinjutsu sealing tags rolled up and fit to an arrow. Each arrow's with a different Fuuinjutsu seal holds a different fletching allowing the user to distinguish the differences. The Quiver holds a great deal of arrows and at the bottom is a generic seal to let out more if they user runs out. The Quiver holds 20 arrows as it is each Fuuinjutsu seal is placed on a maximum of three arrows. Their is a Fuuinjutsu seal for each element on three arrows within the quiver and when the user flows his chakra through it from any distance they blow up giving off the equivalent of an A ranked blast. However doing so cost an extra 10 chakra to do so. After every three arrows shot the chakra amount enlarges by 5 extra until it reaches thirty. The last five arrows in the quiver without elemental seals contain generic seals for splintering shots, rope on the arrow, paper bombs, flash bombs and stun bombs.
~This weapon may only be wielded by those Zoro.. allows
~Each time an arrow is fired it counts as one of the user's three moves
~Arrow blasts are the same size as paper bomb ones with different elements
~Plain arrows can only be infused with elemental chakra that can be infused in anything ex: Wind on a kunai=Wind on an arrow
~The time it takes to shoot an arrow is equivalent to three handseals
~Each arrow shot takes 40 chakra and adding +5 more after each third arrow
~The Fuuinjutsu seals only have three per element unless the Quiver is replenished with more
~Arrow's blowing up with the Fuuinseals are equivalent to A rank blasts

Changes: Added the three moves and blast radius. Along that they could only be infused to the same extent as normal weapons, unless used with Fuuin.

Resubmitting:

Raiton Kyuutai Oujou - Lightning Style Orb of Death
Type: Offensive, Denfensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 50
Damage: 90 (-10 to user)
Description: This is a lightning technique that is as complex as it's rank is. Not only does it wound the user's hand once done it also strains him mentally. When using this technique the user begins with simple shape manipulation forming a lightning orb in his hand. Once done he pumps a massive amount of chakra into it enlarging it. Once it has been enlarged to the point of having a meter diameter the user manipulates it with it's electricity flowing through it and unleashes tendrils of electricity that the user can manipulate. They move incredibly fast and are hardly trackable with average eyesight however can be seen coming and are possible to react to. The complexity in this technique comes from the user's side, he manipulates the tendrils of lightning to move unbearably fast and in a lightning pattern, zig zagging in whichever direction the user wants. This is tough on the user because he can make it zig zag out of the way of countering techniques or if his opponent attempts to dodge he can manipulate the trail of lightning to follow his opponent in zig zagging patterns until it reaches them and shocks them. The trail of lightning slowly pulls away from the lightning orb in the user's hand and he can make as many lightning tendrils as he wants at the cost of splitting their power and range. Once done the lightning chakra having rested in the users hand burns him no longer allowing him to make handseals for a while, the chakra consumption weakens him and the mental strain hurts him.
- Once used the user cannot make handseals for five turns
- 10 damage to the user due to the mental strain and the pain in the hand
- No more lightning techniques above C rank for the rest of the match
- When the lightning tendrils split into two they can only go mid range
- If their is a third lightning tendril it can only go up to short range
- This technique can zig zag out of the way of opposing techniques
- This technique can only be fully tracked by 2T and above however can still be seen if coming from a distance (further then short range is easy to see it coming)
- Can only be taught by Zoro..

~ The parts I've marked are contradictions, and make no sense. ~

Raiton Kyuutai Oujou - Lightning Style Orb of Death
Type: Offensive, Denfensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 50
Damage: 90 (-10 to user)
Description: This is a lightning technique that is as complex as it's rank is. Not only does it wound the user's hand once done it also strains him mentally. When using this technique the user begins with simple shape manipulation forming a lightning orb in his hand. Once done he pumps a massive amount of chakra into it enlarging it. Once it has been enlarged to the point of having a meter diameter the user manipulates it with it's electricity flowing through it and unleashes tendrils of electricity that the user can manipulate. They move incredibly fast and are tough to track with a naked eye. The user can make it zig zag out of the way of countering techniques or if his opponent attempts to dodge he can manipulate the trail of lightning to follow his opponent in zig zagging patterns until it reaches them and shocks them burning them. The trail of lightning quickly pulls away from the lightning orb in the user's hand and he can make as many lightning tendrils as he wants at the cost of splitting their power and range. This technique is extremely hard on the user's hand due to holding the pure lightning, it creates burns and the mental strain of having to keep up with his lightning and moving it out of the way pains the user. Once done the lightning chakra having rested in the users hand burns him no longer allowing him to make handseals for a while, the chakra consumption weakens him and the mental strain hurts him.
- Once used the user cannot make handseals for five turns
- 10 damage to the user due to the mental strain and the pain in the hand
- No more lightning techniques above C rank for the rest of the match
- When the lightning tendrils split into two they can only go mid range
- If their is a third lightning tendril it can only go up to short range
- This technique can zig zag out of the way of opposing techniques
- This technique can only be fully tracked by 2T and above however can still be seen if coming from a distance (further then short range is easy to see it coming)
- Can only be taught by Zoro..
~Both Declined~ Where are the links to the previous submissions? You simply used the quote option.

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[Professor Sarutobi]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

3rd submission this 7 day period

(Arrogante)- Great Skull Emperor
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 (to summon)
Damage points: +10 to kenjutsu
Description: Arrogante is a large, double-headed battle axe with a pair of rounded blades and a slit-eye pendant in the middle of its focal point. Despite it being roughly the same size as himself, the 2nd Mizukage wields this weapon with a single hand relatively easily due to his great strength obtained from his Hozuki style training. The Mizukage has been able to combine his water style with the axe and flow water chakra to the slit-eye pendant enabling him to use different techniques with it. This axe can easily cut through steel and most earth based techniques (B rank and below)
-Can only be wielded by characters with great physical strength (lifting several hundred pounds or more)
-Only allowed to be uses by Professor Sarutobi and those he allows.

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~Declined~ Remove the kenjutsu enhancement considering that is soley for swords. You need to include that cutting B rank and below earth techniques counts as one of the user's three jutsu. Also bare in mind that each custom weapon can only have one special jutsu made for it.
The water styles I mentioned I was going to submit as separate jutsu if approved.

 

[-Tauburn-]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Steel Bio:

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(Kōton: Ken Bibo)- Steel Release: Blade Tail
Type: Supp
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra: 25
Damage: 40
Description: The user will make three handseals then focus their fire and earth chakra into their back, then mold the chakra into a large curved double edged blade that wraps around the users body, extending out to just outside of mid range once the blade is created the user will then begin to spin rapidly, catching the opponent in the curve of the blade causeing the opponent multiple slashes across the back and/or chest if the opponent isnt caught inside of the curve on the blade. due to the size of the blade it become brittel and dull the next turn after its molded.
- Blade will only last for 2 turns after being molded.

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~Declined~ Why is this a supplementary technique? Its clearly used offensively/defensively. Lastly, correct the chakra information.
(Kōton: Eki Hada)- Steel Release: Lizard's Skin
Type: Supp
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: (10 damage per physica touch to the scales.)
Description: The user makes a fast four handseals then focuses their fire and earth chakra around thier body, then begin to mold the chakra together a make one more handseal creating steel scales which appear and cover their body, from head to toe, the scales are thin and light weight and very durable. The the scales cause damage buy being physicaly touched, the scales are strong enough to withstand attack from the Kaguya Clans Shikotsumyaku, reducing the Kaguya bone to pieces due to the scales having spikes on them. The Scales cover the body for four rounds then begin to shatter, from the legs up to the sholders. The Scaled skin makes the user imperviuse to A-Rank and down Taijutsu.
- The molding of the chakra takes two moves out of the user three per post.
- The shattering takes place the four post after the post with the justu on it.

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~Declined~ Considering this is pretty much an advanced version of the Iron skin technique, you would need to add a note in which you can only use earth and fire style techniques while the scales are active around your body. This is because you're constantly emitting chakra out of your body to keep the scales formed and move accordingly with your body motions. Lastly, I'd like you to add a usage restriction and clarify if its "posts" or "turns". If its turns then you are going to have to lower the turns that it stays active.
(Kōton: Igata)- Steel Release: Remold
Type: Supp
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra: 20
Damage: n/a
Description: The user will pull out a steel weapon, ore, or eve a simple ball of steel, the user will then heat the steel, and then reshape it into what ever shape user wishes. Giving the user the abililty to even reshape thier weapons during battle.
~Declined~ You need to state that the object you are reshaping can not exceed the mass level of the original object itself. Meaning that if I take a steel kunai, I can't reshape it into a forty foot high steel tree.

(Kōton: Ken Bibo)- Steel Release: Blade Tail
Type: Attack/Deff
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra: 25
Damage: 40 (unless used to deffend)
Description: The user will make three handseals then focus their fire and earth chakra into their back, then mold the chakra into a large curved double edged blade that wraps around the users body, extending out to just outside of mid range once the blade is created the user will then begin to spin rapidly, catching the opponent in the curve of the blade causeing the opponent multiple slashes across the back and/or chest if the opponent isnt caught inside of the curve on the blade. due to the size of the blade it become brittel and dull the next turn after its molded.
- Blade will only last for 2 turns after being molded.

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~Declined~ You still didn't correct the chakra information.
Changed the type.

(Kōton: Eki Hada)- Steel Release: Lizard's Skin
Type: Supp
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: (10 damage per physical touch to the scales.)
Description: The user makes a fast four handseals then focuses their fire and earth chakra around thier body, then begin to mold the chakra together a make one more handseal creating steel scales which appear and cover their body, from head to toe, the scales are thin and light weight and very durable. The the scales cause damage buy being physicaly touched, the scales are strong enough to withstand attack from the Kaguya Clans Shikotsumyaku, reducing the Kaguya bone to pieces due to the scales having spikes on them. The Scales cover the body for four rounds then begin to shatter, from the legs up to the sholders. The Scaled skin makes the user imperviuse to A-Rank and down Taijutsu.
- The molding of the chakra takes two moves out of the user three per post.
- The shattering takes place the four posts after the post with the justu on it.
- While the skin is active the user is only able to use Fire and Earth elemental jutsu.
- The skin can only stay on the users body four more posts after activated.

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~Declined~ You need to clearly specify that being pierced by the scales is what will cause the damage. Because simply touching them wouldn't, as seen in the picture you showed me, there are a few smooth sides on each individual scale which would cause no harm. Lastly, I'd like you to remove the "reducing the Kaguya bone to piece" considering they are stronger than steel.*
(Kōton: Igata)- Steel Release: Remold
Type: Supp
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra: 15
Damage: n/a
Description: The user will pull out a steel weapon, ore, or eve a simple ball of steel, the user will then heat the steel, and then reshape it into what ever shape user wishes. Giving the user the abililty to even reshape thier weapons during battle.
- Objects cannot be unrealistically changed. (the full mass cannot be exceed without making the weapon very then)
~Approved~

 

[Luther]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Summoning Animal: SmilodonScroll Owner:Thunderbolt

Other Users who have signed contract: N/A

Summoning Boss if existing:N.A

Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:N/A

Description and Background:: Smilodon often called a saber-toothed cat or incorrectly a saber-toothed tiger, is an extinct genus of machairodonts. This saber-toothed cat was endemic to North America and South America, living from near the beginning through the very end of the Pleistocene epoch (2.5 mya—10,000 years ago). The nickname "saber-tooth" refers to the extreme length of their maxillary canines. Despite the colloquial name "saber-toothed tiger", Smilodon is not a tiger; the latter belongs to subfamily Pantherinae, whereas Smilodon belongs to subfamily Machairodontinae. Smilodon is most famous for its relatively long canines, which are the longest found in the saber-toothed cats, at about 28 cm (11 in) long in the largest species Smilodon populator.
These canine teeth were fragile and could not have bitten into bone; thus, these cats did not use their long teeth while taking down prey, due to the risk of breaking them. Only when their prey was totally subdued did they use their teeth to simultaneously sever the blood supply and strangle the windpipe, instantly killing the prey.
Despite being more powerfully built than other large cats, Smilodon actually had a weaker bite. Modern big cats have more pronounced zygomatic arches, while Smilodon had smaller zygomatic arches which restricted the thickness and therefore power of the temporalis muscles, and thus reduced Smilodon’s bite force. Analysis of its narrow jaws indicates it could produce a bite only a third as strong as that of a lion. There seems to a be a general rule that the saber-toothed cats with the largest canines had proportionally weaker bites. However, analyses of canine bending strength (the ability of the canine teeth to resist bending forces without breaking) and bite forces indicate the saber-toothed cats' teeth were stronger relative to the bite force than those of modern "big cats". In addition, Smilodon could open its jaws 120 degrees, whereas the lion's gape is limited to 60 degrees.
It has been suggested that Smilodon's smaller temporalis muscles (controlling much of the bite force) were not used in the killing of prey; rather, Smilodon stretched its jaws around the throat and pressed its canines into the prey with the use of its immense neck and forelimb muscles. The penetration was the result of the neck flexors instead of the jaw muscles, according to this hypothesis
~Leaving for Scorps~


±± Declined ±± No extinct animals. It has been stated tons of times before. You are hereby banned from this thread for 2 cycles of submissions. You can post again in the cycle that starts on the 4th of june

 

[Akuma]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Red Footed Booby- Hi Hane)- Red Footed Booby: Fire Feathers
Type: Offensive/Attack
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Mid Range
Chakra: 20 Chakra
Damage: 40 Damage
Description:
The red footed booby, with use of his fire affinity, channels fire chakra into the feathers in his wings and even though it hurts a bit shoots multiple fire covered feathers towards the enemy that can engulf the target into flames if the feathers reach contact with the it.

~ Can only be used by the Red Footed Booby
~ Can only be used 3 times per battle.

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To contract approved.

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To approval of Red Footed Booby (second submission)
~Declined~ Specify the amount of feathers being released.
(Kuchiyose: naga-ichi bu-bi) Summoning: Peruvian Booby (Nickname: Laura)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user bites his finger and with use of the blood performs one hand seal (Bird) and hitting the ground summoning The Peruvian Booby of the Booby Birds, The Peruvian Booby is the size of the hawk owned by sasuke. By training in the Bird land this booby bird has learned to use Wind Techiques up to C rank without need of handseals due to the hard training it had in his land. She can 1 person, she can also speak English and has a great bond with the contract holder due to the time they spent together. Shee listens to any orders even when risking his life knowing his contract holder will never put him in danger. She can obiously fly.
Looks:

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~Can only be summoned for 4-turns and once per battle
~Can carry 1 person on her back
~Can be summoned if there is other Booby bird on the Field. Aslong as it isn't the chief (Blue Footed Booby, already created and approved) meaning when the red footed booby is.
~Must be a signer or the Holder of the Booby Bird contract to summon.
~Approved~

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[Alyx]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Mind Tecnique:Geass Possesion
Type:Defence,Attack
Rank:S-Rank
Range:Close
Chakra:40(60 to gain back control
Damage:80
Description:A member of the Yamanaka Clan when in trouble can channel there chakra into there eyes and change it appearance to purple with a bird like figure in it.Similar to the Sharingan the place a large amount of chakra and focus a channel between there mind and eye.they then fire the figurative bird and takes full control of the enemy for 3 turns.The bird appears in the enemys eye and knowing they are under the control.They have to gain large will power to break the jutsu.While under the influence the enemy gains a powerful headache and is under extreme pain.

Can only be used be FallenUchiha
Must be a Yamanaka Bio
Last for 3 turns
If ninja is lower ranked they can break the jutsu

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~Declined~ Do not resubmit.

 

[Yugure]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Raiton: Dendō) - Lightning Style: Electrical Hair
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: D
Range: short
Chakra: 10
Damage: 20
Description:
Once the user has gathered a small amount of chakra into his or her hair, the hair will be become statical. Then if the user comes in body-to-body contact with his opponent, the electrical charge will release it self, giving a small shock to the opponent.
~Declined~ How long does the static last on the users hair?

 

[Lucifer]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Gehena Rushifā) - Lucifer Gehenna
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 (+5 for the kenjutsu boost.)
Damage Points: 80
Description: Lucifer, this name was given to the holy double headed spear that has been said to have pierced Rikudou Sennin himself in his left side of his rib cage gaining the name

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, while this spear was inside of Rikudou it absorbed some of his blood into the blade, that's why it gained the unholy name. This spear was found later in the holy mountains of Iwagakure sealed away in an sacred shrine, it was later found by a shinobi from Iwagakure, but the spear was in terrible condition so the man, re-forged the two-headed spear by coating it with a special materials. Very rare minirals found only in the mountains of Iwagakure deep within, the blade gained a highly silverly color almost blinding, and the spear itself gained a black with sacred golden colored markings (kanji) on it and a red ribbon tied on the top, the founder also remade the sheat with the same rare material thought he upgraded it making it spilt in the middle forming two large swords, with the sheat being completly black covered in red kanji markings and three ribbons tied to it. The spear itself is indestructible it cannot be destroyed, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons, the user can also break the spear in half, making it two smaller swords. Anything above a A-Ranked attack would hit Gehenna out of the users hands, but the weapon itself cannot block elemental attacks. Lucifer Gehenna is very heavy to the point that dropping it flat on the ground would leave a huge indentation on the ground, allowing only its choses master to wield Gehenna.

◄ The abilites of this weapon are, that it is able to channel earth chakra through both blades, and whatever the blades cut or touch turn to dust or stone, the user can decide.
◄ The user is able to manipulate the form of the blade, for example into a; Hook, Scythe, Axe etc. Thought not the hilt because it was originally a spear.
◄ The user can choose any B-Ranked earth technique and boost it with two ranks.

Note: Lucifer Gehenna can only be used/given by Lucifer.
Note: The user can use Lucifer Gehenna only once per turn.
Note: Every move that Gehenna uses counts as one of the users 3 moves.
Note: The user must have mastered the earth element inorder to use this weapon.
~Declined~ When I first started reading it, it was very much approvable up until the point of the A-Ranked attack and everything below it. Are you trying to say that none elemental B rank and below attacks can't knock the sword of your hands? Which may in fact mean that you can block those attacks with ease. Also, I can understand a spear that can be detached into two swords but now you want it to also shape shift into a whole 'nother number of weapons? On top of all that you want to the ability to turn anything the sword touches into dust or stone AND boost B rank earth techniques by two ranks? Grossly OP.
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Summoning Animal: Centipedes
Scroll Owner: Lucifer
Other Users who have signed contract: None.
Summoning Boss if existing: None. (to be created)
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None.
Description: Centipedes have a rounded or flattened head, bearing a pair of antennae at the forward margin. They have a pair of elongated mandibles, and two pairs of maxillae. The first pair of maxillae form the lower lip, and bear short palps. The first pair of limbs stretch forward from the body to cover the remainder of the mouth. These limbs, or maxillipeds, end in sharp claws and include venom glands that help the animal to kill or paralyse its prey. Centipedes possess a variable number of ocelli, which are sometimes clustered together to form true compound eyes. Even so, it appears that centipedes are only capable of discerning light and dark, and not of true vision. Indeed, many species lack eyes altogether. In some species the final pair of legs act as sense organs similar to antennae, but facing backwards. An unusual sense organ found in some groups are the organs of Tömösvary. These are located at the base of the antennae, and consist of a disc-like structure with a central pore surrounded by sensory cells. They are probably used for sensing vibrations, and may even provide a sense of hearing.
~Declined~ Cannon contract for Pein/Nagato bios

 

[Pervyy]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

I figured i'd try and make a variation of this jutsu:

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(Sennin Fuuin: Ero Toki) - Sage Sealing art: Pervy time
Rank: S
Type: Seal breaking
Range: Short-mid
Chakra Cost: 20 (to break the seal)
Damage Points: 100
Description: Before the battle, the user will have placed a special seal on their body while in sage mode. As they did, the would have have sealed 100 chakra points worth of natural energy into this seal placed on their body (like how jiraiya sealed the black flames into the scroll). The user will then perform one quick handseal thrusting their hands outwards releasing the seal. Upon doing so, they will release the large blast of natural energy outwards in all directions from their body. This is purely for damage, the user can't use this natural energy for sage mode. (see video below)

Note: Useable once
Note: Must be placed on bio or stated at the begining of the battle.
Note: No fuuin jutsu for 2 turns
Note: Can only be used by those able to control natural energy.
Note: This takes up two of the users 3 jutsu for the turn.
Note: The natural energy acts purely as a blast of energy with no added characteristics.
Note: Can't use while in Sage Mode (or similar).

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(Fuuin: Ero Gekido) - Sealing art: Pervy Rage
Rank: S
Type: Seal breaking
Range: Short-mid
Chakra Cost: 20 (to break the seal)
Damage Points: 100
Description: Before the battle, the user will have placed a special seal on their body. As they did, the would have have sealed 100 chakra points worth of each of the basic 5 elements into this seal placed on their body (like how jiraiya sealed the black flames into the scroll). The user will then perform one quick handseal thrusting their hands outwards releasing the seal. Upon doing so, they will release the large blast of the chosen element outwards in all directions from their body. If the earth seal is released, mud will errupt from the users body. The element released wont hurt the user


Note: Useable three times
Note: Must be placed on bio or stated at the begining of the battle.
Note: No fuuin jutsu for 2 turns.
Note: This takes up two of the users 3 jutsu for the turn.
Note: Only 1 element can be released at a time
Note: See video below, but instead of a pure blast of chakra it will be a chosen element

~Declined~ Umm, no. Do not think of resubmitting it as it stands.

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Wasn't sure if you meant do not resubmit at all, or that i had to change it alot before submitting.

(Fuuin: Ero Gekido) - Sealing art: Pervy Rage
Rank: S
Type: Seal breaking
Range: Short-mid
Chakra Cost: 20 (to break the seal)
Damage Points: 100
Description: Before the battle, the user will have placed a special seal on their body. As they did, the would have have sealed 100 chakra points worth into the seal (like how jiraiya sealed the black flames into the scroll). The user will then perform one quick handseal thrusting their hands outwards releasing the seal. Upon doing so, they will release the large blast of the chosen element outwards in all directions from their body as they do, they will change the chakra to an elemental chakra (one of the basic fice). If the earth seal is released, mud will errupt from the users body. The element released wont hurt the user.


Note: Useable once
Note: Must be placed on bio or stated at the begining of the battle.
Note: No fuuin jutsu for 2 turns.
Note: This takes up two of the users 3 jutsu for the turn.
Note: Only 1 element can be released, not combinations
Note: See video below, but instead of a pure blast of chakra it will be a chosen element
~Declined~ Nothing major changed from what Roku checked.
Editted the bolded, if that makes it any more approvable.

New submission:


(Fuuin: Bouei Shouheki) - Sealing Art: Protection Barrier
Rank: S
Type: Defence
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 20 (see below)
Description: This jutsu is similar to the way that Nagato's preta path could release a orb of chakra around him when absorbing a jutsu. The user will perform one handseal releasing their chakra around them to create an orb barrier. This barrier will only remain there until broken or the user stops it. This barrier is similar to that of the one we saw in the chuunin exams that the sound 4 set up. This means if anyone touches it they will be hit back back a burning blast of chakra from the barrier.

Note: Useable twice
Note: Can't attack while this is active
Note: No fuuin in the following turn
Note: Can only block 1 S rank.
Note: Can block 2 A ranks
~Declined do not resubmit~ This is simply a combination of two strong cannon fuuinjutsu techniques.

 

[Selendrile]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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(Bakuton: Kōdona Niji Nendo no Sōsa )- Explosion Release: Advanced Secondary Clay Manipulation
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: (+10 to existing creations)
Description: After placing a hand into a side pouch filled with the clay, the user will release a thick rope of explosive clay from either of his palms. With the clay rope, the user is able to manipulate already existing clay figurines in two different ways. The first, after attaching the cord to a clay creation, the user will pump more explosive clay into the figure, increasing it's damage by +10. The second, the user is able to split a clay creation in half, creating two of the previous singular figure. However, this action also splits the creations rank by half. (A-rank creation becomes B+B ranked)
*Note: Can only be used/taught by Selendrile
*Note: Usable three times per battle
*Note: No Clay Techniques above A-rank the same turn
*Note: The user is capable of manipulating the clay in only a single way per use, not both

~ Can only be USED/TAUGHT is a contradiction !! -.- ~

(Manipulation of already released clay was shown to be possible in Deidara's fight with Sasuke, his Explosive Clay Minion Technique is the epitome of this concept)

(Bakuton: Kōdona Niji Nendo no Sōsa )- Explosion Release: Advanced Secondary Clay Manipulation
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: (+10 to existing creations)
Description: After placing a hand into a side pouch filled with the clay, the user will release a thick rope of explosive clay from either of his palms. With the clay rope, the user is able to manipulate already existing clay figurines in two different ways. The first, after attaching the cord to a clay creation, the user will pump more explosive clay into the figure, increasing it's damage by +10. The second, the user is able to split a clay creation in half, creating two of the previous singular figure. However, this action also splits the creations rank by half. (A-rank creation becomes B+B ranked)
*Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
*Note: Usable three times per battle
*Note: No Clay Techniques above A-rank the same turn
*Note: The user is capable of manipulating the clay in only a single way per use, not both
~Approved~
Clarified the taught restriction.

 

[Mockingbird]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Last Submission: 5/02

(Suiton:Kirigakure Ryuu-Tenbatsu Hebi )Water Release:Hidden Mist Style-Wrath of the Snake Empress
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user begins by performing a row of three handsels in order to create a large reservoir of water underground. With the performance of another handseal, the water can erupt from the ground in the form of anacondas. These snakes will come up from under the ground, and constrict an opponent, beginning at their legs and wrapping themselves around a person. Like an actual anaconda that squeezes its prey to death before consuming its meal, these water snakes will squeeze the enemy, breaking several bones as they do so. With the performance of the Ram handseal, the user can add their fire chakra to the water to make it scolding hot. In the case that fire chakra is infused into the water, the constricting anacondas will deal painful second degree burns to an opponent. Up to a maximum of four snakes can erupt through the ground at a time. This underground reservoir can also be used as a water source for future Water Release techniques.
~Can only be used thrice per battle

(Suiton:Kirigakure-Hōjirosame)Water Release:Hidden Mist Style-Great White Shark
Rank:S
Type:Offense
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:The user begins to initiate this technique by performing two handsals and materializing a ponds worth of water-this step is not necessary if there is already a water source present. This suiton based technique that takes the form of a great shark very much like the Five Feeding Sharks or Kisame's Shark Ninjutsu. However the difference with this is that the shark is made of rapidly spinning water, which moves at speeds fast enough to create the appearance of white rapids, giving the entire shark a coloration of white. The user is capable of controlling the direction of the spin. The spinning gives it unparalleled piercing and maiming powers, allowing it to demolish defensive techniques and deal a great amount of damage. The shark's size is about twice the size of the average Great White Shark. After making contact with a solid object or barrier the shark shall spin for a few seconds, at which point the technique will detonate with a powerful force equivalent to Deidara's C2 clay, sending water flying for twenty meters at speeds fast enough to slice through flesh.
~Can only be used twice per battle
~Cannot be used two turns consecutively

(Katon:Guren)Fire Release:Crimson Lotus Flower
Rank: S
Type:Offense
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user alters their stance to hold their arm behind them while pushing their fire chakra into it while also drawing on the surrounding heat giving it a faint golden and orange glow and the slight outline of a claw. After the jutsu is primed the user will swing their arm in an upward fashion cleaving the ground next to them before expeling a wave of fire, they will then swing again at any angle of their choice and expel the rest of the built up fire chakra in a second wave of fire. The waves of flame are 10 feet wide that travels out to the edge of Mid range before fading into embers. If used on the ground the fire will cleave and gash the earth as it goes along. As it cleaves the ground it breaks apart the earth tossing around smaller rocks and minerals and other debris making it even harder to escape unscathed. Because of this, it makes it seem as if the waves of fire are "exploding" outwards, as shredded crystal minerals formed from the rapid heating of the earth fly towards an opponent. After the fire passes over the earth, it leaves glowing red gashes and cracks in the earth from the intense heat making it impossible to grow plants in those areas of the earth.
~Can only be used three times per battle
~Cannot be used two turns consecutively.
~Can only use A Rank and below fire next turn.

~ All OP. Depower or restrict ~

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(Suiton:Kirigakure Ryuu-Tenbatsu Hebi )Water Release:Hidden Mist Style-Wrath of the Snake Empress
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user begins by performing a row of three handsels in order to create a large reservoir of water underground. With the performance of another handseal, the water can erupt from the ground in the form of anacondas. These snakes will come up from under the ground, and constrict an opponent, beginning at their legs and wrapping themselves around a person. Like an actual anaconda that squeezes its prey to death before consuming its meal, these water snakes will squeeze the enemy, breaking several bones as they do so. With the performance of the Ram handseal, the user can add their fire chakra to the water to make it scolding hot. In the case that fire chakra is infused into the water, the constricting anacondas will deal painful second degree burns to an opponent. Up to a maximum of four snakes can erupt through the ground at a time. This underground reservoir can also be used as a water source for future Water Release techniques.
~Can only be used thrice per battle
~Cannot be used two turns consecutively
~One can only use A Rank and below Water next turn.
~Declined~ Exactly how big is the reservoir? Exactly how many anacondas erupt from the ground? How big are the anacondas? You need to specify all these things, they are way too vague. Also you can't simply focus fire chakra that way, you need a traveling medium like the earth to send fire through it and heat up the water. Yes there are a few customs out there that create fire out of thin air but that's not how it works.
(Suiton:Kirigakure-Hōjirosame)Water Release:Hidden Mist Style-Great White Shark
Rank:S
Type:Offense
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:The user begins to initiate this technique by performing two handsals and materializing a ponds worth of water-this step is not necessary if there is already a water source present. This suiton based technique that takes the form of a great shark very much like the Five Feeding Sharks or Kisame's Shark Ninjutsu. However the difference with this is that the shark is made of rapidly spinning water, which moves at speeds fast enough to create the appearance of white rapids, giving the entire shark a coloration of white. The user is capable of controlling the direction of the spin. The spinning gives it unparalleled piercing and maiming powers, allowing it to demolish defensive techniques and deal a great amount of damage. The shark's size is about twice the size of the average Great White Shark. After making contact with a solid object or barrier the shark shall spin for a few seconds, at which point the technique will detonate with a powerful force equivalent to Deidara's C2 clay, sending water flying for twenty meters at speeds fast enough to slice through flesh.
~Can only be used twice per battle
~Cannot be used two turns consecutively
~One can only use B Rank and below water the following turn.
~Declined~ Still too powerful.
(Katon:Guren)Fire Release:Crimson Lotus Flower
Rank: A
Type:Offense
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user alters their stance to hold their arm behind them while pushing their fire chakra into it while also drawing on the surrounding heat giving it a faint golden and orange glow and the slight outline of a claw. After the jutsu is primed the user will swing their arm in an upward fashion cleaving the ground next to them before expeling a wave of fire, they will then swing again at any angle of their choice and expel the rest of the built up fire chakra in a second wave of fire. The waves of flame are 10 feet wide that travels out to the edge of Mid range before fading into embers. If used on the ground the fire will cleave and gash the earth as it goes along. As it cleaves the ground it breaks apart the earth tossing around smaller rocks and minerals and other debris making it even harder to escape unscathed. Because of this, it makes it seem as if the waves of fire are "exploding" outwards, as shredded crystal minerals formed from the rapid heating of the earth fly towards an opponent. After the fire passes over the earth, it leaves glowing red gashes and cracks in the earth from the intense heat making it impossible to grow plants in those areas of the earth.
~Can only be used two times per battle
~Cannot be used two turns consecutively.
~Can only use A Rank and below fire next turn.
~Declined~ If the wave travels to the edge of mid-range and then turns into embers, it means the embers travel into long range, so why is this technique up to mid range? Yes the wave goes up to mid range but the effects of the attack are still reaching up to long.

 

[Shady Doctor]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Summoning Animal : Baboon

Scroll Owner : William24

Other users who have signed contract : N/A

Summoning boss if existing : none yet

Other summoning animals tied to contract : none

Description and background :
Baboons are African and Arabian Old World monkeys belonging to the genus Papio, part of the subfamily Cercopithecinae. There are five species, which are some of the largest non-hominoid members of the primate order; only the mandrill and the drill are larger. Previously, the closely related gelada (genus Theropithecus) and the two species (mandrill an drill) of genus Mandrillus were grouped in the same genus, and these Old World monkeys are still often referred to as baboons in everyday speech. They range in size and weight depending on species. The Guinea baboon is 50 cm (20 inches) and weighs only 14 kg (30 lb) while the largest chacma baboon can be 120 cm (47 inches) and weigh 40 kg (90 lb).

-Anatomy and physiology-
All baboons have long dog-like muzzles; heavy, powerful jaws with sharp canine teeth; close-set eyes; thick fur except on their muzzle; a short tail; and rough spots on their protruding buttocks, called ischial callosities. These calluses are nerveless, hairless pads of skin that provide for the sitting comfort of the baboon. In all baboon species there is pronounced sexual dimorphism, usually in size but also sometimes in colour or canine development. Males of the Hamadryas Baboon species also have a large white mane.

-Behavior and ecology-
Baboons are terrestrial (ground dwelling) and are found in open savannah, open woodland and hills across Africa. Their diet is omnivorous, but mostly herbivorous; yet they eat insects and occasionally prey on humans, shellfish, hares, birds, vervet monkeys, and small antelopes. [6] They are foragers and are active at irregular times throughout the day and night. They can raid human dwellings and in South Africa they have been known to prey on sheep and goats. Their principal predators are humans, the lion, both the spotted and striped hyena and the leopard. They are however considered a difficult prey for the leopard, which is mostly a threat to young baboons. Large males will often confront them by flashing their eyelids, showing their teeth by yawning, making gestures, and chasing after the intruder/predator.
~Declined~ This would fall under the cannon monkey contract.

 

[Mangomango]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Doton: Chikyū Shinbu no Torenchi) Earth Release: Deep Earth Trench
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Long
Chakra: 15
Damage: N/A
Description: The user performs the Snake hand seal and then places their palms on to the ground in front of them. After this is done the user channels their Chakra down into the earth and out towards the enemy. The user lowers the earth underground creating an underground chasm 2 meters in front of the enemy. When the enemy moves over the Chasm the small crust that hides the Chasm from the surface breaks due to the weight and the person who walked over would falls in. The Chasm is 3 meters wide both ways and 7 meters deep. The user can also recover the Chasm after the enemy has fallen in if they wished to.

Notes:
- Have to leave one turn between usages.
- The user doesn't know the Chasm is there, no physical signs will indicate its presence either. (Unless they have a technique stating otherwise - Chakra sensing/Byakugan)
~Declined~ Good, but what does the bolded mean?

(Doton: Chikyū Shinbu no Torenchi) Earth Release: Deep Earth Trench
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Long
Chakra: 15
Damage: N/A
Description: The user performs the Snake hand seal and then places their palms on to the ground in front of them. After this is done the user channels their Chakra down into the earth and out towards the enemy. The user lowers the earth underground creating an underground chasm 2 meters in front of the enemy. When the enemy moves over the Chasm the small crust that hides the Chasm from the surface breaks due to the weight and the person who walked over would falls in. The Chasm is 3 meters wide both ways and 7 meters deep. The user can also re-cover the Chasm after the enemy has fallen in if they wished to, trapping the enemy in the space.

Notes:
- Have to leave one turn between usages.
- The user doesn't know the Chasm is there, no physical signs will indicate its presence either. (Unless they have a technique stating otherwise - Chakra sensing/Byakugan)
~Declined~ Do you mean the user or the opponent?

 

[~Depp~]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Tappu)- Toop
Type: Puppet
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30 (If summoned)
Damage: n/a
Description: Toop is a wood puppet that has iron bands, around its body, waists, and forearms along with having four arms. Its arms are made of jointed screws, along with its abdamen, Toop has a top like piece for its legs which has a groove down to a point similar to a screw, which its spins on while being controled. Toop is able to spin its hole body around and knock its self into the opponent. Toops body semperates into eleven pieces, at the arms which also detach at the wrist, where Toops head, abdamen, and lower body (the top like piece he stands on) also detach from one another; all places that detach are attached by a screw like part which needs just a little pull then unscrews. Toop can be used whole body or in pieces to spin and then screw the opponent in many places or in a single point if Toop is full bodied, and the waist area screw is able to screw deeper into the lower body to make his body one full peice the screw can also be undone then use that part as legs for the puppet while using its orginal legs as a destraction. Toop has two canisters of senbon in all of his arms, that can be shot out of each hand, Toop also has a large amount of smoke bombs in its head that he will release from its mouth.
- Toop's orginal legs being seperanted from the waist screw, count as using another puppet.
- Smoke bombs can be used 1 time per turn.
- Senbon can only be released 2 times per turn.
- All joints mentioned to detach, detach very quickly.

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~Declined~ How many smoke bombs and senbons does he exactly hold in his inventory? Also please try and re-word it a bit and make it cleaner. As it stands all I see is screw this, screw that.^^

(Tappu)- Toop
Type: Puppet
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30 (If summoned)
Damage: n/a
Description: Toop is a wood puppet that has iron bands, around its body, waists, and forearms along with having four arms. Toops body is connected by jointed screws, that allow the body to unscrew all parts of its self. Toop has a top like cone which it spins on to move along the ground very fast, the cones underside (the bottom layer that is seen) has a small 3cm blade that wraps around the cone and creates a drill out of the top. The top can be detached and used as another puppet. Each of Toop's arms contain 2 bundles of senbon, in the upper arm and forearm. While Toop's head also contains 6 smoke bombs, which release them through his mouth. Toop's body is also able pull its arms, waist, and head into its body and be used as drill able to break through the thickest rocks.
- Toop's original legs being separated from the waist screw, count as using another puppet.
- Smoke bombs can be used 1 time per turn.
- Senbon can only be released 2 times per turn.
- All joints mentioned to detach, detach very quickly.
- able to transform into a drill two times per turn.

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~Declined~ You need to specify up to what rank earth it can drill and make it count as one of the user's three jutsu. And next time make sure you bold the changes or I will forced decline the entire submission for not following the rules.
I reworded the Description, and added a restriction.

 

[Serpent]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Suiton: Te Shuuren) Water Release: Hand Drills
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will make a single handseal while using basic shape manipulation. This creates several Small hands to form out of the water around the opponent. These hands will then grab the opponents limbs and Bind them (Arms, Legs, Neck, Etc.) The user will make one more handseal causing the hands to form drills within the palms. these drills will then drill into the users Limbs causing harm to the opponent.
Notes:
-Requires a Water Source
-Can only be used 3 times per battle
-This Jutsu can only be taught by Serpent

~ So...you plan to kill yourself ? ~

(Suiton: Te Shuuren) Water Release: Hand Drills
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user will make a single handseal while using basic shape manipulation. This creates several Small hands to form out of the water around the opponent. These hands will then grab the opponents limbs and Bind them (Arms, Legs, Neck, Etc.) The user will make one more handseal causing the hands to form drills within the palms. these drills will then drill into the opponent Limbs causing harm to the opponent.
Notes:
-Requires a Water Source
-Can only be used 3 times per battle
-This Jutsu can only be taught by Serpent

Sigh.. U_U

~ How close to the opponent ? Oh, and I'm sorry for having the gall to not approve a technique that includes a description that, I don't know, KILLS THE CASTER ? I'm sorry for trying to get you to fix it and ensuring your fights don't devolve into arguing with newbies who might point that out. I'm sorry I didn't live up to your ever-so-reasonable expectations that it's MY DUTY to edit the descriptions of jutsu to make them approvable for the hundreds of jutsu I check, and for informing me it's not the DUTY of the GUY WHO SUBMITTED THE TECHNIQUE for making sure its error-free. Next time, even if you submit a technique that says accidentally that it harms you, I'll be sure to approve it and then point out in any fights you use it that you killed yourself. Thanks. ~

 

[Scorps]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

»» Closing the thread for Checking ««

I must apologize for having to do this once more, but to ensure that we can keep the thread checked I'm forced to close it for a few days once more. As some may know, i haven't been much online due to RL issues this past week which means its one less person to check cjs and that takes its toll on the thread. Because of that, the thread has at this moment 5 unchecked pages which means it will only grow and get out of hand from this point forward. So, to keep it controlled and checked, i'll be closing it for a few days. I hope you can understand and I give you my word that we'll do our best to reduce the time its closed to a minimum and hopefully it can be opened again for the new cycle of submissions.

Thanks, Scorps.​

While dear self-sacrificing Scorps would like you to believe it is entirely his fault for not having the thread checked, the truth of the matter is that all the mods in charge ( including me ) have been busy with something or the other, be it exams, trips, etcetera.
Hopefully, you all can wait, yes ? :emperor:

~ Your friendly neighbourhood cannibal, Emp