[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

[Scorps]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

»» New Cycle of Submissions ««

New cycle of submissions. This one will be a bit shorter people, as it starting today instead of yesterday. However, it will end on the 27th of May. I must remind members that you can only submit 3 techniques between markers.

Because people don't understand it, i'm going to list things that are not acceptable as of now (this may change and if it does, we'll notify the members by either saying its now allowed or by adding more things):

-Sharingan Genjutsu
-Rinnegan related techniques
-Swift Techniques
-EIG Techniques or variations
-Sage Mode copies or versions
-Space Time techniques (although some minor variants of the FTG techniques may be submitted)
-Forbidden Rank Summons
-Infusable Swords
-Elemental blasting Swords
-Multiple Weapons in one CW
-Damage Boosting Swords
-Fuuinjutsu above S-Rank requires permission from Nexus
-CE Related techniques
-CW's for Swift, Dust, Dark and Scorch
-Anything giving you EIG speed
-Anything giving you multiplying speed bonus
-Kinjutsu


Also, please use the search option specially for summons.



Thanks, Scorps.

PS- I may add more things to this post in the next few days.​

 

[Mathias]

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(Jinton: Kangoku Rimen Seken Genshitek) - Dust Release: Imprisoned inside the Primitive World
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage point: 80
Description: Similar to the cube created by the "Dust Release: Destruction of the Primitive world" although not handicapped by its range of performance, Mū will thrust his hands outwards while focusing his chakra, creating a dust release cube 5x5 meters around his selected target with a sphere of pure concentrated dust release in the center. Mū will then bring his hands together causing the entire cube to "detonate" within, completely disintegrating anything inside of it, destroying it on a molecular level turning it into mere dust in the process.

ちゅうしゃく
☈ Can be used three times per battle
☈ No Dust Release in the same turn
☈ Can only be used by Mū/Ōnoki biographies
☈ Must be taught by Mathias

Similar Example:

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Very similar to this, except its a greater range of performance.

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-Declined-

(Jinton/Fūinjutsu: Seken Genshitek) - Dust Release/Sealing Art: Primitive World
Rank: S
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: All
Chakra cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
Damage point: 80 (If closed in on a target)
Description: After performing the Rat → Boar → Snake, Mū will thrust his hands outwards while focusing his chakra everywhere. Utilizing his dust release, Mū will create an entire cube around the battlefield of the size desired by the user. Upon creation of the cube, an overwhelming code of Knajis will spread throughout the cube to seal certain elemental affinities. While inside the cube know as the 'Primitive World', all shinobi within will be limited to the usage of only Regular Ninjutsu, Earth, Fire, Wind chakra and any other element made up of Fire, Wind or Earth mixtures (Like Dust Release)for a total of four turns or until deactivated. At any point throughout the four turns, Mū can place both of his hands together with interlocked fingers. This causes the cube to drastically shrink in size and converge on a selected target similar to the "Dust Release: Destruction of the Primitive world" technique, "detonating" within, completely disintegrating anything inside of it, destroying it on a molecular level, turning it into mere dust in the process. As seen in the fight between Sasuke and Ōnoki, Dust release has the ability to be created or phase through solid surfaces without disrupting them, meaning that the Primitive World cube can even reach into the earth itself without disrupting it in the process. Due to being his own technique and possessing his own chakra, Mū is able to freely walk in and out of his Primitive World. Should an opponent come into contact with one of the sides of the cube, the certain body part that makes contact will start to disintegrate, destroying it on a molecular level, turning it into dust.

ちゅうしゃく
☈ Can only be used once per battle
☈ Closing/creating the cube on the selected target does not fall into the Dust/Fūinjutsu restrictions
☈ No other Dust or Fūinjutsu release techniques in the previous or same turn used.
☈ No Wind, Earth, Fire, Dust or Fūinjutsu techniques above S-Rank for the next two turns.
☈ Cannot perform any summonings for the same and the following 2 turns.
☈ The user cannot perform any genjutsu in the same turn.
☈ Can only be used by Mū/Ōnoki biographies
☈ Must be taught by Mathias

Example of ground penetration:

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Located in the highlighted oval, the dust release cube is seen bypassing the solid ground without disturbing it.

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-Declined-

I included the site's Fūinjutsu restrictions of its usage in the notes just to be safe.

Resubmitting:

(Jinton: Seken Genshitek Sabishii) - Dust Release: Primitive World Solitary
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Medium
Chakra cost: 40
Damage point: 80
Description: Mū will thrust his hands outwards while focusing his chakra around a specific target. This causes a dust release cube 10x10 feet around the selected target to be created with a sphere of pure concentrated dust release in the center. Mū will then bring his hands together with interlocked fingers causing the entire cube to "detonate" from within.

ちゅうしゃく
☈ Can be used three times per battle
☈ No Dust Release in the same turn
☈ Can only be used by Mū/Ōnoki biographies
☈ Must be taught by Mathias
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-Approved-

(Jinton/Fūinjutsu: Seken Genshitek) - Dust Release/Sealing Art: Primitive World
Rank: S
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: All
Chakra cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
Damage point: N/A
Description: After performing the Rat → Boar → Snake, Mū will thrust his hands outwards while focusing his chakra everywhere. Utilizing his dust release, Mū will create an entire cube around the battlefield of the size desired by the user. Upon creation of the cube, an overwhelming code of Knajis will spread throughout the cube to seal certain elemental affinities. While inside the cube know as the 'Primitive World', all shinobi within will be limited to the usage of only Regular Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, Earth, Fire, Wind chakra and any other element made up of Fire, Wind or Earth mixtures (Like Dust Release)for a total of four turns or until deactivated. As seen in the fight between Sasuke and Ōnoki, Dust release has the ability to be created or phase through solid surfaces without disrupting them, meaning that the Primitive World cube can even reach into the earth itself without disrupting it in the process. Due to being his own technique and possessing his own chakra, Mū is able to freely walk in and out of his Primitive World. Should an opponent come into contact with one of the sides of the cube, the certain body part that makes contact will be repelled with a small force similar to being tackled by a football player. In no shape or form will this tackle be strong enough to kill the opponent unless already on the verge of death. Should part of the cube's wall be abosrbed by chakra draining/sucking techniques, the knaji around that area will easily regenerate the damaged area.

ちゅうしゃく
☈ Can only be used once per battle
☈ No other Dust or Fūinjutsu release techniques in the previous or same turn used.
☈ No Wind, Earth, Fire, Dust or Fūinjutsu techniques above S-Rank for the next two turns.
☈ Cannot perform any summonings for the same and the following 2 turns.
☈ The user cannot perform any genjutsu in the same turn.
☈ Can only be used by Mū/Ōnoki biographies
☈ Must be taught by Mathias
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-Approved-

Removed the whole closing in and detonating part.

New submission:

(Jinton: KaruiGenkai Hakuri no Jutsu) - Dust Release: Minor Destruction of the Primitive world technique
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage point: 60
Description: Essentially being the weaker version of the cannon technique "Destruction on the Primitive World". By thrusting his hands outwards, Mū will create a single three-dimensional object around his hands which consist of different functions just like the cannon version depending on the shape used. The cube version will be created around the user's hands in a miniature size and be released towards its intended target, quickly expanding and trapping the opponent within, having the concentrated sphere of dust detonate at the user's will. The cone and cylindrical version are essensially the same one. The user will create them in minature size around their hands and release it outwards in the form of an "energy" blast just like Ōnoki used it in the fight against Madara.

ちゅうしゃく
☈ Can only be three times per battle
☈ No Wind, Earth, Fire, Dust above S-Rank in the same turn used.
☈ The three-dimensional objects can't be created around the target unless short ranged of the user.
☈ Can only be used by Mū/Ōnoki biographies
☈ Must be taught by Mathias
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-Approved-

 

[BusinessManTeno]

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YESH! being patient pays off .

(Ninjutsu:kemuri sacchi) Ninja Art: Smoke Sense
Type: Sup
Rank: C
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost :15
Damage Points: N/a
Description: The user will release smoke from his wrist launcher. The smoke is infused with the user chakra letting him/her know the location of whomever is in the smoke.

-Can Only be used by General Phaze
-Can use 4times
~Shorten the Range. Also, how long does the smokescreen last?



(Genjutsu : tenma sazanami) Genjutsu : Demon Ripple[/B]
Type: Sup
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:20
Chakra Damage:40
Description: The User Takes out a Staff Or Sword and Stabs it in the ground infront of him. If the opponent looks at the staff/sword as it hits the ground, The opponent will start to get woozy and the area around him will start to form into a space like area he will then be floating in space. A ripple will then appear out of nowhere in space and a huge demon monster will appear from the ripple. Due to the Opponent feeling as he is in space he has nowhere to run as he would be floating. The monster will then reach for him and attempt to eat him. Stunning The opponent

-Can only use twice
-Must have a staff or sword to use this
-Only Taught By General Phaze
(Please Feel Free to Edit this as you see fit)
~Leaving for Emperor~
~ -.- In all possibility, if a demon reaches for someone, they'll be running around not standing there doing nothing ~

~Weapon Submission~

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(Pykyouto) Pure Rebel
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: This sword blade was forge from Rare Meteorite metals found across the world and the handle was made from Hard Minerals Coated in Rubber. It was made specifically for General Phaze. and Very rare can the sword be broken. This double blade sword is not only good for close range attacks but this sword can conduct lightning jutsus. Like a lightning Rod. Once it conducts lightning, the sword will glow a bright yellow. due to the lightning chakra being infused inside of it. The lightning chakra inside the blade can be sent back towards the opponent, by the user stabbing the blade in the ground and channeling all of the lightning chakra that was conducted. Under the opponent. the ground will then spark with lightning and give off alot of static causing the enemy to be stunned. Or the user can use the lightning that was conducted as a Reflex Enhancer. Similar to Raikage. But Much slower and does not affect your strength. The user can only go as fast as lee without the weights. And only last for one turn


-Can Conduct 4turns
-Can Only Conduct Srank (Once), Arank (Once), B Rank (Once), Crank (Once)
-Can only Use the lightning in the blade for 1 turn
-The Lightning that travels to the opponent can reach up to mid range within 2-3 seconds
-Cant Use Lightning No time it conducts Nor Regular Ninjutsu
-Activation Counts as 1 of the user 3 turns, Striking the opponent with the surge is count as activation. and so is the speed boost.. So they all count as 1 as an individual. (Example. I conduct Lightning (1turn). I Use it as a Boost(1turn) Earth Rampart (1turn) I just used all 3 of my moves
-Can Only be taught by General Phaze
~Leaving for Emperor as well~
~ Declined, 10000000 similar weapons exist ~

(Ninjutsu:kemuri sacchi) Ninja Art: Smoke Sense
Type: Sup
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost :15
Damage Points: N/a
Description: The user will release smoke from his wrist launcher. The smoke is infused with the user chakra letting him/her know the location of whomever is in the smoke. The smoke can only last for 3turns if not blown away

-Can Only be used by General Phaze
-Can use 3times

~ Approved ~

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(I pretty much made over the genjutsu)

(Genjutsu : tenma sazanami) Genjutsu : Demon Hands
Type: Sup
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Chakra Damage:N/a
Description: The User Takes out a Staff Or Sword and Stabs it in the ground infront of him. If the opponent looks at the staff/sword as it stabs the ground, Soon As the sword hits the ground a Huge Demon hand will emerge from the ground, grabbing the opponent restricting his/her movements. The Demon hand will start to squeeze the opponent crushing their bones in the genjutsu but in reality just stunning him

-Can only use twice
-Must have a staff or sword to use this
-Cant use genjutsu in the next turn
-Only Taught By General Phaze

0:34 is how the huge monster demon hands look

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~ Approved ~

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~Weapon Submission~ Changed the weapon powers. Hopefully its not TOO common

(How the weapon looks)

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(Pykyouto) Pure Rebel
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: This Weapon Blade tips was formed from very Hard dark diamond. Channeled with wind chakra on one blade and i channel water into the other blade (The tips are the blades im talking about) The sword was pass down from a family of generals and now General Phaze is the modern master of it. The sword dont respond to nobody chakra except generals. If anybody else touch or handle it. it would seem just like a regular 2bladed sword. The sword is very unique for 2 reasons A Defensive and a Offensive.. Defensive: The sword can sense any chakra presence . It will give off chakra waves into me when another unknown chakra presence is close. Also . If i Stab the sword on the ground I can also sense whats under the ground for about 15feet in the ground. Offensive: I will mix my water chakra and the wind chakra. I will then spin the weapon around real fast. and a HUGE Vortex of water Will splurge out in the shape of a Large tornado. Towards the enemy. Similar to yamato and naruto union attack except the Way larger and the attack is coming from my blade so it will be directed towards the enemy.



-Sensing an opponent counts towards the user 3turns and can only use 3times
-The Water Vortex can Travel up to long range and is S rank (change it if you must)
-The water vortex can only be used 3times and counts towards the user 3 turns
-The user cant use No Basic Ninjutsu While sword is in use (In my hand)
-Cant use S rank wind or S rank Water While sword is in use
-Only can be held by a General... >_>
(Please add or take out anything you see fit for any of these)

~ Declined. The water vortex is just you replicating an existing technique with the sword. No. ~

 

[Enzup]

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Resubmitting.

(Ninpou: Mitsukai Tsubasa) - Ninja Art: Angelic Wings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: User pours some ink on his back and then uses his brush to spread it in left and right direction. After spreading completely, the ink takes the shape of giant wings. Once done, it appears like the wings are emerging out of user's back and gives user somewhat angelic look and flying ability. Because of giant size of wings, user can fly with very great speed such that only sharingan 2T and above will be able to keep up with speed.
Note: -Must know Ink ninjutsu.
-Can only be taught by Enzup.

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~ Too fast ~

(Ninpou: Mitsukai Tsubasa) - Ninja Art: Angelic Wings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: User pours some ink on his back and then uses his brush to spread it in left and right direction. After spreading completely, the ink takes the shape of giant wings. Once done, it appears like the wings are emerging out of user's back and gives user somewhat angelic look and flying ability. Because of giant size of wings, user can fly with very great speed such that any sharingan (1T) user can keep up with speed.
Note: -Must know Ink ninjutsu.
-Can only be taught by Enzup.

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~ I'm still iffy about the speed. As it stands, this means that an opponent who does not have the Sharingan is essentially open to any Taiijutsu you do ~

(Genjutsu: Za Gyakuten Kansei) - Illusion Arts: The Reversal Trap
Type: Offense/Defense/supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90 (-30 to user)
Description: This kind of genjutsu acts as both offense and defense. This jutsu is used when user is trapped under a high ranked genjutsu and is unable to break free from it. User passes his strong amount of chakra thoroughly in his brain and reads the function(s) of the genjutsu used on him. And just after reading the function(s) carefully, user disrupts and overcomes the enemy's chakra in his brain and thus breaking free from the genjutsu. And simultaneously he passes his own chakra into his opponent's brain and shows him the same genjutsu. This all happens in just blink of an eye, so that to enemy it seems that he used the genjutsu on himself or his enemy knows the same genjutsu or this is some trick of his opponent etc.
Note: - (-30) damage to user because of concentrating very high chakra in brain.
-Concentration level decreases for next turn.
-Can't perform any genjutsu for next 2 turns.
-Can't perform any S-Rank or above jutsu in same turn.
-Can only be used once per battle.
-Can only be taught by Enzup.

~ No Forbidden rank genjutsu ~

 

[Kato.]

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(Tenrai Ya) Divine Arrow
Type: Offence
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will gather chakra in their non-dominant hand and hold it out in front of him, then he will get his dominant hand and bring it up to his non-dominant hand. He then pulls his dominant hand back, like pulling back the string on a bow, stretching the chakra in their non-dominant hand into the shape of an arrow. They will then release the chakra, firing an arrow of chakra from their hands at a great speed.
~Declined~ This collides with my Sniper Arts.
-Can only be taught by Kato Rokuemon

(Suiton: Genkotsu Kadou) Water Style: Vortex Fist
Type: Offence
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user gathers Suiton chakra into their hands and/or feet and punch/kick a vortex of water out. Similar to the cannon technique Hurricane Fist. However in Vortex fist each blow/strike releases a vortex which is equal to a C rank jutsu, but you can perform numerous strikes which will count as the one jutsu.

-Can only be taught by Kato Rokuemon
-No water source required
~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

 

[Naruto Uzumaki Bijuu Sage]

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(washi cloak):Eagle cloak
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60 (10 to the user)
Description: The user jumps horizontally into the air and preforms the following hand seals Bird → Boar → Dog → Bird, When the user does this they are surrounded by an eagle shaped chakra cloak, The user then holds their arms out like an eagle, and when they do this their speed increase dramatically and they gain the power to pierce steel.

Note: The cloak is 6 feet in length, 6 feet in width and 2 feet in height.

Note: The cloak increases your speed by 3 speed chart levels

Note: The user can only use this jutsu to travel in a straight horizontal path.

~ You're just replicating the Bijuu cloak. Declined, do not resubmit.~

 

[Selendrile]

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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Shian Mimizawarina)- Summoning Technique: Cyan the Raspy
Rank: S
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: After drawing blood from any part of the body onto their palms, the user will clasp both hands together, summoning Cyan in sky above them, or at any place short range from the user. Cyan is the genjutsu specialist among Herons, and small enough to comfortably ride on the summoner’s shoulder. Cyan is capable of utilizing up to B-rank genjutsu known by the user, and is capable of releasing a sound based genjutsu by releasing a series of six harsh croaks from her beak. These croaks are targeted at the opponent’s most critical senses, those being sight, smell, and hearing. The first croak affects the opponent’s sight, filling their entire vision with an endless flock of Blue Herons. The second croak affects the opponent’s smell, completely eliminating any scents from the battlefield and replacing it with the smell of decaying vegetation. The third croak affects the opponent’s hearing, eliminating any sounds from the battlefield, replacing it with the sound of a massive amount of flapping wings. These croaks happen in two loops, three croaks each loop, hence the six total croaks. Each sense is affected twice, once per loop, or three croaks. Each croak lasts about two seconds, which leads to the opponent’s senses flickering on and off for a total of twelve seconds. The croak’s effects last for one full turn, and can be used up to mid-range from wherever Cyan is at the time.
*Note: Must have signed the Great Blue Heron summoning contract
*Note: The croaks are usable twice per battle, and count as a single move of the user
*Note: Cyan is able to be summoned for four turns, and once per battle

~ Declined. The genjutsu is OP; second, how does she perform all other genjutsu if she cannot do handseals being a bird ? ~

 

[Lucifer]

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(Doton: Rōzugāden) - Earth Release: Rose Garden
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90 (-30 to the user)
Description: The user makes a quick sequence of three handseals, Hare → Tiger → Snake, and focuses a large mass of doton chakra throughout the whole battlefield. As the user forms the last handseal being the snake handseal he slams both of his hands on the ground thus releasing the concentrated doton chakra in a burst, the enemies can literally see the shockwave of the doton chakra through the ground spreading into every direction. By doing this the user will create giant roses and spike branches made from silicate minerals found in the earth crust, being one of the basic earth crust elements, the gigantic roses and spike branges are made out of rare minerals only found in the earth crust thus gaining a redish-greenish, making them look like actual roses thought they are just earth minerals given actual form by chakra. These gigantic roses are sharper than blades and much denser having dozens gigantic spikes stiking out of the core not the mention the green colored branches. These gigantic roses reach out up to 30-40 meters in the air, in a mayhem of branches and leaves each capable of piercing through metal, creating a forest of deadly roses which can penetrate the targets literally from all direction, the garden reaches out to all directions, being highly infused with the users Doton chakra, granting the user the ability to use earth techniques from the garden with increased speed and reduced difficulty, from the large amount of silicate minerals.

Note: This technique can only be used/taught by Lucifer.
Note: The user can only use this technique once per battle.
Note: The users speed decreases by three ranks, following the speed chart.
Note: The user can't use earth techniques for two turns after this jutsu is used.
Note: The user will take enormous damage due to the large mass of chakra used to perform this jutsu. (-30)
Note: The user cannot participate in close combat due to the severe damage taken by this jutsu. (doing so will result in killing the user.)

~ First, the part I bolded is a contradiction. Second, the technique needs to be depowered. ~

Resubmitting: Lol, stupid of me i messed up the description..and edited/deleted a few parts.

(Doton: Rōzugāden) - Earth Release: Rose Garden
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90 (-30 to the user)
Description: The user makes a quick sequence of three handseals, Hare → Tiger → Snake, and focuses a large mass of doton chakra throughout the whole battlefield. As the user forms the last handseal being the snake handseal he slams both of his hands on the ground thus releasing the concentrated doton chakra in a burst, the enemies can literally see the shockwave of the doton chakra through the ground spreading into every direction. By doing this the user will create/cause gigantic roses and spike branches made from silicate minerals found in the earth crust, silicate is basic earth mineral that can be found in the earth crust, the gigantic roses and spike branges are made out of this mineral, that can only found in the earth crust thus gaining a redish-greenish color, making them look like actual roses thought they are just silicate minerals combined by rock hard and dense stones given actual form by chakra. These gigantic roses are sharper than blades and much denser having dozens gigantic spikes stiking out of the core not the mention the green colored branches. These gigantic roses reach out up to 20-30 meters into the air, in a mayhem of branches and leaves each capable of piercing through metal, creating a forest of deadly roses which can penetrate the targets literally from all direction, the garden reaches out to all directions, being highly infused with the users Doton chakra, granting the user the ability to use earth techniques from the garden with increased speed and reduced difficulty, from the large amount of silicate minerals the ground will also be covered by this mineral.

Note: This technique can only be used by Lucifer.
Note: The user can only use this technique once per battle.
Note: The users speed decreases by three ranks, following the speed chart.
Note: The user can't use earth techniques for two turns after this jutsu is used.
Note: The user will take enormous damage due to the large mass of chakra used to perform this jutsu. (-30)
Note: The user cannot participate in close combat due to the severe damage taken by this jutsu. (doing so will result in killing the user)

~ Now, I quite like the idea for this one. However, the roses are too huge. Second, not only are you unable to move close combat, but I think just moving around at all unless you do so very slowly and carefully will kill you. ~

(Gehena Rushifā) - Lucifer Gehenna
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 (+5 for the kenjutsu boost.)
Damage Points: 80
Description: Lucifer, this name was given to the holy double headed spear that has been said to have pierced Rikudou Sennin himself in his left side of his rib cage gaining the name

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, while this spear was inside of Rikudou it absorbed some of his blood into the blade, that's why it gained the unholy name. This spear was found later in the holy mountains of Iwagakure sealed away in an sacred shrine, it was later found by a shinobi from Iwagakure, but the spear was in terrible condition so the man, re-forged the two-headed spear by coating it with a special materials. Very rare minirals found only in the mountains of Iwagakure deep within, the blade gained a highly silverly color almost blinding, and the spear itself gained a black with sacred golden colored markings (kanji) on it and a red ribbon tied on the top, the founder also remade the sheat with the same rare material thought he upgraded it making it spilt in the middle forming two large swords, with the sheat being completly black covered in red kanji markings and three ribbons tied to it. The spear itself is indestructible it cannot be destroyed, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons, the user can also break the spear in half, making it two smaller swords. Anything above a A-Ranked attack would hit Gehenna out of the users hands, but the weapon itself cannot block elemental attacks. Lucifer Gehenna is very heavy to the point that dropping it flat on the ground would leave a huge indentation on the ground, allowing only its choses master to wield Gehenna.

◄ The abilites of this weapon are, that it is able to channel earth chakra through both blades, and whatever the blades cut or touch turn to dust or stone, the user can decide.
◄ The user is able to manipulate the form of the blade, for example into a; Hook, Scythe, Axe etc. Thought not the hilt because it was originally a spear.
◄ The user can choose any B-Ranked earth technique and boost it with two ranks.

Note: Lucifer Gehenna can only be used/given by Lucifer.
Note: The user can use Lucifer Gehenna only once per turn.
Note: Every move that Gehenna uses counts as one of the users 3 moves.
Note: The user must have mastered the earth element inorder to use this weapon.
~Declined~ When I first started reading it, it was very much approvable up until the point of the A-Ranked attack and everything below it. Are you trying to say that none elemental B rank and below attacks can't knock the sword of your hands? Which may in fact mean that you can block those attacks with ease. Also, I can understand a spear that can be detached into two swords but now you want it to also shape shift into a whole 'nother number of weapons? On top of all that you want to the ability to turn anything the sword touches into dust or stone AND boost B rank earth techniques by two ranks? Grossly OP.

Resubmitting: Okay, so i've made a few changes and removed the part where it says that it can split into a twin sword, and edited or deleted most of the things that you said that made the spear over powered (which it did), so i hope that it's approvable now..

(Gehena Rushifā) - Lucifer Gehenna
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 (+5 for the kenjutsu boost.)
Damage Points: 80
Description: Lucifer, this name was given to the holy double headed spear that has been said to have pierced Rikudou Sennin himself in his left side of his rib cage gaining the name

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, while this spear was inside of Rikudou it absorbed some of his blood into the blade, that's why it gained the unholy name. This spear was found later in the holy mountains of Iwagakure sealed away in an sacred shrine, it was later found by a shinobi from Iwagakure, but the spear was in terrible condition so the man, re-forged the two-headed spear by coating it with a special materials. Very rare minirals found only in the mountains of Iwagakure deep within, the blade gained a highly silverly color almost blinding, and the spear itself gained a black with sacred golden colored markings (kanji) on it and a red ribbon tied on the top, the founder also remade the sheat with the same rare material thought he upgraded it, the spear does not have a sheat so the blades are always exposed, also the spear is one and a half meter long. The spear itself is indestructible it cannot be destroyed, making it quite effective in blocking and deflecting incoming attacks from basic weapons, the user can also break the spear in half, making it two smaller swords. Anything above a B-Ranked attack would hit Gehenna out of the users hands, but the weapon itself cannot block attacks. Lucifer Gehenna is very heavy to the point that dropping it flat on the ground would leave a huge indentation on the ground, allowing only its choses master to wield Lucifer Gehenna.

◄ The abilites of this weapon are, that it is able to channel earth chakra through both blades, and whatever the blades cut or touch turn to dust or stone, the user can decide.
◄ The user is able to manipulate the form of the blade, for example into a; Hook, Scythe, Axe etc. Thought not the hilt because it was originally a spear. (the user will need to add +10 more chakra to change the shape of the blade)
◄ The user can choose any B-Ranked earth technique and boost it with two ranks.

Note: Lucifer Gehenna can only be used/given by Lucifer.
Note: The user can use Lucifer Gehenna only once per turn.
Note: Every move that Gehenna uses counts as one of the users 3 moves.
Note: The user must have mastered the earth element inorder to use this weapon.

~ Remove all the history; cut it down to a sentence or two. Second, the part I boldedis incredibly OPed; and lastly, if your weapon can transform, its essentially multiple weapons in one CW that Scorpseh just posted will not be approved. ~

 

[Yugure]

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Summoning Animal: Deers
Scroll Owner: –Severus Snape-
Other Users who have signed contract: None
Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None yet
Description and Background:

Deer (singular and plural) are the ruminant mammals forming the family Cervidae. Species in the Cervidae family include white-tailed deer, mule deer such as black-tailed deer, elk, moose, red deer, reindeer (caribou), fallow deer, roe deer and chital. Male deer of all species (except the Chinese water deer) and also female reindeer grow and shed new antlers each year. In this they differ from permanently horned animals such as antelope; these are in the same order as deer and may bear a superficial resemblance. The musk deer of Asia and water chevrotain (or mouse deer) of tropical African and Asian forests are not usually regarded as true deer and form their own families, Moschidae and Tragulidae, respectively.
The word "deer" was originally broad in meaning, but became more specific over time. In Middle English der (Old English dēor) meant a wild animal of any kind.
Deer are widely distributed, with indigenous representatives in all continents except Antarctica and Australia, though Africa has only one native species, the Red Deer, confined to the Atlas Mountains in the northwest of the continent. However, Fallow Deer have been introduced to South Africa.
Deer live in a variety of biomes ranging from tundra to the tropical rainforest. While often associated with forests, many deer are ecotone species that live in transitional areas between forests and thickets (for cover) and prairie and savanna (open space). The majority of large deer species inhabit temperate mixed deciduous forest, mountain mixed coniferous forest, tropical seasonal/dry forest, and savanna habitats around the world. Clearing open areas within forests to some extent may actually benefit deer populations by exposing the understory and allowing the types of grasses, weeds, and herbs to grow that deer like to eat. Additionally, access to adjacent croplands may also benefit deer. However, adequate forest or brush cover must still be provided for populations to grow and thrive.

~ Scorps ~


±± Declined ±± Similar contract exists, even if very old.

 

[Uchiha Jinchuuriki]

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(Ranton: Kamehameha | かめはめ波)-Storm Release: Turtle Devastation Wave
Type:Attack
Rank:S
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: A storm release user begins to gather an enormous amount of ranton chakra into the palms of their hands. The user then brings his hand together and holds them back behind themselves, preparing the attack. When the attack is condensed with enough ranton chakra, the user will spring there hands toward the opponent and let loose a single focus beam of ranton chakra. The beam flies incredibly fast, due to the beams of electricity that flow like water being a property of ranton, and the chakra being forcefully pushed out towards the opponent. The beam leaves devastating damage and is definitely a kill shot if it makes direct contact.
-Can only be taught by myself, Uchiha Jinchuuriki
-Due to the large amount of ranton chakra used, the user cannot use ranton, raiton, or suiton jutsu the next turn
-Can only be used 3 times per battle

Declined.. kill shot.. really?

(Kuchiyose: Kyo Shou) Summoning: Lord Shou
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (+5 each turn summoned)
Damage points: N/A
Description: Shou is Swift Lord of the Storm Release. He is the brother of Daiki, Lord of all swifts, and he is also related to Isamu, Swift Lord of the Seas. He wears metal talon claws over his actual talons on his legs, and the talon claws are made from a special metal that can be infused with chakra increasing the damage dealt from taijutsu talon scratches by +10. He is also very big an sturdy, being able to take on any C-rank techniques and not disperse, barely being disturbed. Shou posses Storm Release, expelling the chakra from his mouth, and he can use Storm Release techniques up to S rank, although if he goes to S-rank he cannot use and Ranton the next turn, so he typically sticks to A-rank attacks. Shou has navy blue and grey wings, resembling a storm, and stands at 3/4 the size of Gamabunta. He in incredibly agile and mobile in the skies, as all Swifts are.

-This Summoning can only be summoned for 3-turns and can fly for all 3 turns
-This Summoning can only be summoned by someone with the Swift Contract.
-this Summoning can be summoned once per battle.
-Can use S-rank Ranton only once per battle but it requires no Ranton from Shou next turn. No such penalty with A-ranks

Declined explain how bird uses taijutsu? curious i am.

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Storm Release: Turtle Devastation Wave
Type:Attack
Rank:S
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: A storm release user begins to gather an enormous amount of ranton chakra into the palms of their hands. The user then brings his hand together and holds them back behind themselves, preparing the attack as it radiates a blue aura due to the large amount of storm chakra. When the attack is condensed with enough ranton chakra, the user will spring there hands toward the opponent and let loose a single focus beam of ranton chakra. The beam flies incredibly fast, due to the beams of electricity that flow like water being a property of ranton, and the chakra being forcefully pushed out towards the opponent.
-Can only be taught by Uchiha Jinchuuriki
-Due to the large amount of ranton chakra used, the user cannot use ranton, raiton, or suiton jutsu the next turn
-Can only be used 3 times per battle

(Kuchiyose: Kyo Shou) Summoning: Lord Shou
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (+5 each turn summoned)
Damage points: N/A
Description: Shou is Swift Lord of the Storm Release. He is the brother of Daiki, Lord of all swifts, and he is also related to Isamu, Swift Lord of the Seas. He wears a light metal armor over his wings, and the armor can protect him against elemental attacks up to B rank before it breaks. Shou posses Storm Release, expelling the chakra from his mouth, and he can use Storm Release techniques up to S rank, although if he goes to S-rank he cannot use and Ranton the next turn, so he typically sticks to A-rank attacks. Shou has navy blue and grey wings, resembling a storm, and stands at 1/2 the size of Gamabunta. He in incredibly agile and mobile in the skies, as all Swifts are.

-This Summoning can only be summoned for 3-turns and can fly for all 3 turns
-This Summoning can only be summoned by someone with the Swift Contract.
-this Summoning can be summoned once per battle.
-Can use S-rank Ranton only once per battle but it requires that Shou cannot use ranton next turn. No such penalty with A-ranks
-Armor protects up to B rank elemental attacks

Raiton: Kurotsuba no Jutsu (Lightning Release: Black Spit Technique)
Rank: A
Type: Attack/Defensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: Darui gather black lightning chakra, claps his hands together and spits out a small spear of black lightning that goes racing to wherever he aims it. The spear is 2 feet long and a third of a foot around so it isn't very big. Upon colliding with an object, however, due to the large amount of compressed chakra, the spear will explode into a mass of black lightning.
-Can only be taught by Uchiha Jinchuuriki
-No A rank or above Raiton techs the next turn
-Can only be used 3 times per battle

Link to my summon:

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[Wakizashi]

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boss summoning: Kyofu
(kuchiyose no jutsu: kyofu)-summoning jutsu: kyofu-big wind
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range:mid-long
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description:the user bites their thumb to draw blood weave the summoning jutsu hand signs and place their hands on the ground. When done a gamabunta size toucan appears in a puff of smoke. This summons has the ability to create great winds with the flap of his wings that’s able to sweep the target off the ground and into the air. While the target is vulnerable in the air, some the feathers of the toucan’s get’s swept with the wind surrounding the target, then exploding as a result.
-note: can only be summoned once
-note: summoning last three turns
-note: can only use big wind once per turn
-note: no other summons can be in play
-note: must sign toco toucan contract

±± Declined ±±Rank of the wind blasts?


~ Scorps ~

resubmitting

boss summoning: Kyofu
(kuchiyose no jutsu: kyofu)-summoning jutsu: kyofu-big wind
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range:mid-long
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description:the user bites their thumb to draw blood weave the summoning jutsu hand signs and place their hands on the ground. When done a gamabunta size toucan appears in a puff of smoke. This summons has the ability to create great A-rank winds with the flap of his wings that’s able to sweep the target off the ground and into the air. While the target is vulnerable in the air, some the feathers of the toucan’s get’s swept with the wind surrounding the target, then exploding as a result.
-note: can only be summoned once
-note: summoning last three turns
-note: can only use big wind once per turn
-note: no other summons can be in play
-note: must sign toco toucan contract
~Declined~ Why is this mid-long range? Its a summoning, it should be placed as short range. How many feathers? How big are they? What in the world is causing them to explode?

 

[House]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

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(Hakke Shatā tamashī) 8 Trigrams Soul Shatter
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 in each turn)
Damage Points: N/A (+10 Gentle Fist / +10 Taijutsu)
Description: The hyuuga member will focus his chakra throughout his body, thus using his excellent chakra control over his body, convert his whole body into raw chakra. In this state, he is able to be one with Gentle Fist techniques like the Twin Lion Fist and is able to take any physical damage. While active, the user's appearance looks dark blue raw chakra which suppose to make up the user's body. While this mode is active, the user is vulnerable to lighting. If the opponent touches the user, it will burn him.
Note:
~The user won't be able to mold any of the 5 elements while this is active
~While this is active, it counts as one of the 3 jutsus per turn
~Only kages or higher
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Useable once per battle
~Lasts 5 turns
~User won't be able to use tai or gentle fist for two turns after the jutsu has de-activated.
~When this ends, user may only use elemental chakra up to A-rank for the next 3 turns.

Changes I've made
~took out the whole elemental affinity thing
~cleared it up more
~Made it so only gentle fist can be used
~Made it last 5 turn
~Declined~ Overpowered still. I like the idea though.

(Hakke Kakureta sainō) 8 Trigrams Hidden Talents
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Using the abilities where a hyuuga member is able to emit a sharp chakra line through his palms, he'll be able to access one's chakra system. As this sharp thick chakra line had impaled one's body, the user will be able to access the enemies' chakra system as the chakra from the chakra line has infected the system, by sending chakra/going through the paths of his chakra system. As the chakra spread through the chakra system, it will completely stun his body/disturbing chakra flow for a turn.It takes 3 seconds ti'll the opponent completely becomes stunned (meaning his whole body) if the opponent is hit anywhere else then his chakra core.
Note:
~It won't hurt the opponent, only paralyze him for a turn or ti'll the user is connected to the opponent.
~The chakra line is just as fast as hinata shown using it to create a barrier.
~Can be used 2x in a battle.
~Dr. House may teach it.
~No elemental chakra is allowed to be used by the user in the same turn. CW is an exception where the user can only channel raw chakra into his CW to activate any affinity the CW has.

Changes I've made:
~Put more restriction
~Made it a-ranked
~cleared it up more
~Declined~ Incorrect chakra cost. Plus, how is it mid-range?

(Katon: Geretsuna Harikēn) Fire release: Vile Hurricane
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user will channel his fire chakra to the opponent and when the katon chakra has reached the opponent, massive flames will appear around the opponent, engulfing him in massive flames, burning him alive.
Note:
~Can be used 3x
~No other Katon technique in the same turn,
~No S-ranked katon or higher in the next turn.
~Dr. House may teach it.
~Must master fire
~Declined~ Do not Resubmit.

(Hakke Shatā tamashī) 8 Trigrams Soul Shatter
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 in each turn)
Damage Points: N/A (+10 Gentle Fist / +10 Taijutsu)
Description: The hyuuga member will focus his chakra throughout his body, thus using his excellent chakra control over his body, convert his whole body into raw chakra. In this state, he is able to be one with Gentle Fist techniques like the Twin Lion Fist and is able to take any physical damage. While active, the user's appearance looks dark blue raw chakra which suppose to make up the user's body. While this mode is active, the user is vulnerable to lighting. If the opponent touches the user, it will burn him.
Note:
~The user's body won't be able to mold any of the 5 elements while this is active.
~While this is active, it counts as one of the 3 jutsus per turn
~Only kages or higher
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Useable once per battle
~Lasts 4 turns
~User won't be able to use tai or gentle fist for two turns after the jutsu has de-activated due to the restrains on the body.
~When this ends, user may only use elemental chakra up to A-rank for the next 3 turns.

for the checker:
~made it last 4 turns.
~made it a-ranked
~I've made one of the restrictions a little bit more clear.

~ Declined, do not resubmit ~

(Hakke Kakureta sainō) 8 Trigrams Hidden Talents
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Using the abilities where a hyuuga member is able to emit a sharp chakra line from his palms which is able to reach mid-range, he'll be able to access one's chakra system by having his chakra line make a contact with the opponent's body. As this sharp thick chakra line had impaled one's body, the user will be able to access the enemies' chakra system as the chakra from the chakra line has infected the system, by sending chakra/going through the paths of his chakra system. As the chakra spread through the chakra system, it will completely stun his body/disturbing chakra flow for a turn.It takes 3 seconds ti'll the opponent completely becomes stunned (meaning his whole body) if the opponent is hit anywhere else then his chakra core.
Note:
~It won't hurt the opponent, only paralyze him for a turn or ti'll the user is connected to the opponent.
~The chakra line is just as fast as hinata shown using it to create a barrier.
~Can be used 2x in a battle.
~Dr. House may teach it.
~No elemental chakra is allowed to be used by the user in the same turn. CW is an exception where the user can only channel raw chakra into his CW to activate any affinity the CW has.

Note to the checker:
~corrected the chakra cost as was asked
~asked to make the description more clear

~ OPed ~
dropping my accepted CW's jutsu:

(Mai· Sōru jihi o motte iru!) Have Mercy Upon My Soul!
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra Cost: 30 (See Description)
Damage Points: +15 Ninjutsu
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. The sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, boosting his power. Once this system has been broken, the sword becomes unbalanced in the same turn when this chakra has been harnessed, the sword becomes useless in the same turn. Because of the unbalance of the sword, user will receive -10 health damage in the same turn. As it tries to suck it back the taken chakra at once what has once left the sword, in the next turn, user suffers -30 chakra loss. As the sword has sucked back an enormous amount of chakra in that turn (meaning 30 chakra), activating itself once again, a furious wind will surround it, leaving the area in a really windy environment for when it sucked back the 30 chakra. This means that no raiton attacks of S-rank can be made from the user in that turn when there is a windy environment. As the sword becomes out of control when it sucks back the chakra, having an S-ranked fuuton chakra surround it, only Kage or higher may be able to handle it.
Note:
~Can be used 1x
~The sword won't be useable in the same turn as this technique.
~Only Kage or higher may use this.
~Sumitsukigasa must be wielded.
~Can be taught by Dr. House

~Won't be able to sign handseals in the same and the next turn.

to this:

(Shi no rīchi) Death's Reach
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offense
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. The sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, boosting his power. After 2 turns, you can release that chakra into one of your jutsu making it one rank stronger (counts as one of the 3 jutsu per turn). If not, you can have the chakra build up for 5 turns instead of using the chakra, building up chakra which surrounds Sumitsukigasa equal to the power of forbidden rank. Once this chakra has coated Sumitsukigasa

~ Uhm...incomplete description ~

 

[Taiketsu Yagami]

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|Kei-Sekken| Strong World Long Shot
Rank:B
Type:Attack|Defend
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:40 (20 mid-range)
Description: The only ranged technique within the Kei-Sekken style. The user channels a nice amount of chakra into the arm that will be delivering the punch. The user will aim for the target and punch the air at a fast rate. As they punch, they release the chakra like a sling shot in the form of a condensed burst that shoots through the air like a cannon before laying an impact on the enemy capable of knocking them back with a serious injury on the impacted spot. The impact is capable of breaking small boulders,walls or other small obstacles. (Terrain created from a C-rank doton can be broken with this move [within reason])
Notes:
-Usable 5x

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~ Approved ~

|Kei-Sekken| Strong World Illusion
Rank:A
Type:Attack|Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description: Based off the same method as Strong World Chesto, but to a lesser exstent. The user will charge and constrict only their arm with chakra and punch the opponent, releasing all that chakra to create an impact capable of breaking bones. If the opponent manages to dodge the intial strike, the blast of chakra from the arm is capable of blowing back the opponent, placing them in a daze capable of allowing the user with a follow up technique.
Notes:
-Usable 4 times
-After use, the user's muscles in the arm collapse in a similar manner to someone using the gates. They will be unable to use that arm for a turn.

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~Leaving it to Scorps~


±± Declined ±± Define the daze effects, how long it lasts, the overall effects it produces. Also, this is more like a B-rank at most.

|Kei-Sekken| Strong World Illusion
Rank:B
Type:Attack|Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:20
Damage:40
Description: The user will charge and constrict only their arm with chakra. The charge will turn the attacking limb whitish-blue and apon punching, the user will release that chakra in a burst. The impact is capable of fracturing bones and immobolizing. If the opponent manages to dodge the intial strike, the blast of chakra from the arm is capable of blowing back the opponent, placing them in a daze that slows them down and throws them off balance for a few seconds, allowing for a perfect follow up technique.
Notes:
-Usable 4 times
-After use, the user's muscles in the arm collapse in a similar manner to someone using the gates. They will be unable to use that arm for the rest of that turn.

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~ Unlikely to place them in a daze. ~

 

[Illyasviel]

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(Katon:Fudou Faia Bakudan)- Fire release:Floating Fire Mines
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:40
Description:The user will perform the Tiger hand seal and exhale a large fireball(the size of the Great Fireball Technique)into the air a little above him and his opponent but closer to the opponent.The fireball when it is close to the opponent will split into around 20 fire orbs the size of the human head wich would float around the opponent in mid air.If the fireball comes in contact with an solid object it will explode and also detonate the other mines around.The fire orbs are like the Exploding Flame Shots so they can't engulf someone in flames but cause damage to him by exploding.
~Note:Can be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user must wait 2 turns before using it again
~Note:If the orbs don't explode thay can remain on the battlefield for three turns.
~Note:No S rank fire techniques the same turn this is used.

~ TOO, TOO much ~

(Katon:Fudou Faia Bakudan)- Fire release:Floating Fire Mines
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:40
Description:The user will perform the Tiger hand seal and exhale a large fireball(the size of the Great Fireball Technique)into the air a little above him and his opponent but closer to the opponent.The fireball when it is close to the opponent will split into around 20 fire orbs the size of the human head wich would float around the opponent in mid air.If the fireball comes in contact with an solid object it will explode and also detonate the other mines around.The fire orbs are like the Exploding Flame Shots so they can't engulf someone in flames but cause damage to him by exploding.
~Note:Can be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user must wait 2 turns before using it again
~Note:If the orbs don't explode thay can remain on the battlefield for one moreturn.
~Note:No S rank fire techniques the same turn this is used.

~ Hmm...too many and too large, I think. The idea is good ~

 

[Erzo]

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~Resubmitting~

(Katon: Nibai Batsu) Fire Release: Double attack
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his Katon chakra at the ground from each of his opponents side (3 meters away from each of the opponents side) and creates two hawks -each roughly the size of the hawk sasuke summoned against danzo- to come out and shoot off towards the opponents location from both his sides (his left and right side) trapping the opponent in the center of the attack. Upon collision with each other and the opponent in the middle of them, the birds explode and create a giant fire viciously burning the opponent between them. These birds can shoot out of the ground to a maximum height of 6 meters before clashing with each other and exploding.
Note: Can be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank Fire in same turn.

~ Again, where does the fire come from ? ~

(Raiton: Tori Dageki) Lightning Release: Bird Strike
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his lightning chakra in the the sky in the area behind his opponent and uses shape manipulation to create a hawk -which is the same size as the one summoned by sasuke against danzo- the hawk then flies downwards at an angle towards the opponent with its extremely sharp beak pointed at the opponents neck area/upper back aiming to piercing him from behind. After peircing the opponent the bird disperses in all areas short range from it acting like chidori nagashi and paralyzing any opponent(s) within its vicinity. If needed the user can disperse the bird before it pierces the opponent so that the opponent(s) are only paralyzed.
Note: Can only be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank lightning same turn.

~ Needs a little more restrictions ~

Resubmitting both the above:

(Katon: Nibai Batsu) Fire Release: Double attack
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his Katon chakra and release a stream of fire from both his hands (left and right) where they then travel in an arc to each of his opponents side (3 meters away from each of the opponents side) the stream of fire then forms into two hawks -each roughly the size of the hawk sasuke summoned against danzo- to come out and shoot off towards the opponents location from both his sides (his left and right side) trapping the opponent in the center of the attack. Upon collision with each other and the opponent in the middle of them, the birds explode and create a giant fire viciously burning the opponent between them. These birds can shoot out of the ground to a maximum height of 6 meters before clashing with each other and exploding.
Note: Can be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank Fire in same turn and previous turn
Note: After using it once, must wait another turn before using it again.


~ Say what ? ~

(Raiton: Tori Dageki) Lightning Release: Bird Strike
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Rank: A
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his lightning chakra in the the sky in the area behind his opponent and uses shape manipulation to create a hawk -which is the same size as the one summoned by sasuke against danzo- the hawk then flies downwards at an angle towards the opponent with its extremely sharp beak pointed at the opponents neck area/upper back aiming to piercing him from behind. After peircing the opponent the bird disperses in all areas short range from it acting like chidori nagashi and paralyzing any opponent(s) within its vicinity. If needed the user can disperse the bird before it pierces the opponent so that the opponent(s) are only paralyzed.
Note: Can only be used 3 times.
Note: No S-rank lightning same turn and previous turn
Note: After using it once, must wait another turn before using it again.


~ Approved ~

New submission:

(Sono Enjin Zeus) : The ring of Zeus
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Rank: S
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A (80 if releasing as a surge of lightning)
Description: The Ring of Zeus is a ring highly compressed with lightning chakra which the user wears in order for the ring to aid him in battle. The ring has its own lightning chakra stored within it and is able to release a sudden surge of chakra as soon as it is in contact with a foreign chakra. This means, should the user manage to touch his opponent the ring automatically releases the surge of chakra into the opponents body paralyzing him/her completely and leaving them vulnerable to attacks. Another use of the ring is that should the user be caught in a genjutsu it recognizes the foreign chakra and releases that surge of lightning chakra which in return releases the user from the genjutsu he may have been caught in. In addition to that should the user need it to the surge of lightning can all be released at once and reaches up to mid range in a quick yet destructive bolt of lightning.
Note: Once all chakra is released by the user, the ring no longer has any abilities.
Note: The user needs contact with the opponent to use the paralysis version of the ring.
Note: The ring releasing it's chakra once it comes into contact with an opponents body/chakra or releasing the user from genjutsu by surging chakra into him can only happen 4 times before the ring is completely drenched of lightning chakra.

~ Similar techniques exist to do both functions of the ring, you've just combined them into one ~

 

[Crutch Kaguya]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

I based the idea of elemental flowers from two facts:
1. Common flower techniques according to the rules as seen in the filler can be used by anyone. This has nothing to do with the Plant CE or the Wood element, the ability to grow flowers has already existed on NB as canon techniques.
2. Early in the manga, it was said that trees were fed elemental chakra when they were grown giving them an elemental nature.
I simply thought to combine these ideas to create a new technique. I didn't post this to be rude, sorry if you believed I meant it to be. As you can see, this has never been attempted before so I just want to show my reasoning so they have a chance.

(Hanakotoba) Language of Flowers
Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30 (+20 for each turn this technique is active)
Damage: 60
Description: The Hanakotoba technique is an advanced style of flower arts. Unlike normal flowers grown through the basic flower arts, these flowers are unique in that in their growth they are created with an advanced active chakra network but can be grown rapidly. The reason for an advanced network is so that the flowers would be able to readily accept chakra from the creator, specifically chakra that has undergone elemental transformation. Flowers with simple chakra networks would not be able to handle such extent of chakra manipulation, but these flowers are advanced enough to easily accept and allow the elemental chakra to flow within their networks. This enables the flowers to in essence possess an element nature; the flowers are capable of possessing any element nature that the user is capable of producing. The type of elemental chakra will be clearly visible through the color of the flower: red is fire, yellow is lightning, blue is water, white or green is wind, and purple is earth. Elemental combinations are not possible through the use of this generic technique. The species of the flower does not matter as the user will be capable of reproducing any type of flower that he wishes. But for diversity the user can pick and choose from various flower species for each flower. The flower will have all the traits of the element of its affinity. The user can use a flower to block attacks from elements to which it has an natural advantage over but will be weak toward elements to which it has a natural disadvantage. The user can also infuse chakra into the flowers to increase their density to make them as hard as steel to block physical attacks or as soft as a pillow. The user can grow small flowers straight from his body. For the sake of pure diversity the user can either grow a single flower that is extremely large or a bush of flowers of equivalent value to the one large flower, all the flowers in the bush must be the same elemental nature. This is meant solely for aesthetic value and is not meant to alter the power of the flowers at all.
- The flowers due to the fact that they possess elemental natures possess the ability to allow the user to channel his chakra into the flowers and from the flowers release a blast of energy that is A-rank with medium range which has the same elemental natural of the flower. Every time this ability is used it counts as one of the user's three techniques per turn. The strength of each flower A-rank. Size of the flower does not necessarily indicate strength, as all flowers are the same strength but merely that smaller flowers are more concentrated than larger flowers; or a small bush is more concentrated than a large bush. The maximum size of a flower grown through this technique is a large tree. As long as this techniques is active, the user is able to grow one flower at the cost of one of the three techniques per turn.
~This technique can only be used once per battle, but once it is activated it will last until deactivated.
~To limit the power of this technique, it cannot be used by a character biography that possess a kekkei genkai: this applies all techniques involving elemental flowers that branch off from this main technique.

(Hana Barubu Bouei) Flower Bulb Protection
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage: None
Description: The user creates a flower that rises from the ground beneath the user incredibly fast and then encloses the user in a flower bulb. The user is inside the flower bulb and is protected from any external attacks from all angles. The inside of the bulb is a great form of flower defense as the user is protected from attacks regardless of direction or size. The user can choose which element nature of the flower for the best protection from the incoming attack. After the flower bulb takes all of the damage, it will bloom allowing the user to emerge then it will wither away back into the ground.
~Can only be used three times per battle and the user must wait one turn before reuse.

(Toge Shibu Nottori) Thorn Vine Capture
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user causes several vines infused with elemental chakra that have countless sharp thorns and small flowers growing on them to explosively burst out of the ground below the opponent and wrap onto their body, cutting deep wounds into the opponent's flesh. Then the user can choose what elemental chakra will be released from the thorns and the small flowers to deal more punishing damage directly onto the opponents body.
~Can only be used three times per battle and must wait one turn before reuse.

~ Crutch, I like the idea, you've noticed a subset of techniques from the anime that have been woefully underutilized; however, what you're doing right here and right now is not creating techniques for that style, but literally absorbing that style into your own customs while simultaneously treating it as a KG/special ability - essentially forming your own unique KG. Because if this gets approved, what would happen is that anyone else who notices these techniques later might not be able to create them without infringing on your blanket techniques. Furthermore, you've expanded too much on the style. You cannot create flowers from your body; you cannot make vines and things. Still, it's a good idea you've brought up, we staff will certainly have to see about making restrictions for this style ~

 

[Geezus]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Raiton| Gigawattohanmā - Lightning Release| Gigawatt Hammer
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates a large amount of lighting inside their body and releases all the stored lightning in one instance, the resulting affect produces a powerful lightning blast strong enough to push back an opponent or rip right through them. This technique also depends on the user’s emotional state; the angrier they are the stronger and deadlier the technique becomes.

Raiton| Indou - Lightning Release| Requiem
Rank: A
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Descritpion: The user creates a varying number of small electrical spheres within thier hands, When released, these spheres expand dramatically in size. Imbuing these spheres in this fashion serves to greatly enhance their destructive potential to the extent that they can easily destory concrete structures, subsequently obliterating the impaled object with a substantial resultant explosion and if needed increase the number of spheress to make more explosions.
(can only create 3 spheres at a time)

Raiton| Hachibi no Seki - Lightning Release| Gate of the 8-Tails
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 50
Damage: 100 (-15 to user)
Description: Kirabi charges a vast amount of the 8-tails' chakra into his hand and using shape manipulation, compresses it into a large sphere of black chakra and electrical energy. When released, this technique seeks out any electrical energy source in the area and completely absorbs it also eradicates any physical matter it touches. Once it absorbs enough electrical energy, it breaks down and starts to attack indiscriminately, shooting tree-like branches at all people who are using chakra at the moment, including the user. The user or the opponent simply must stop using chakra, to prevent the technique from attacking them. This puts a great strain on Kirabi's chakra system preventing him from doing S-rank and up techniques for the next three turns.
(last 3 turns)

~ Tell me, have you heard of the word 'restrictions' ? Two of your techniques have zero, whereas the last one, a FORBIDDEN technique, has no number of uses restrictions. ~

 

[Mangomango]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Doton: Chikyū Shinbu no Torenchi) Earth Release: Deep Earth Trench
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Long
Chakra: 15
Damage: N/A
Description: The user performs the Snake hand seal and then places their palms on to the ground in front of them. After this is done the user channels their Chakra down into the earth and out towards the enemy. The user lowers the earth underground creating an underground chasm 2 meters in front of the enemy. When the enemy moves over the Chasm the small crust that hides the Chasm from the surface breaks due to the weight and the person who walked over would falls in. The Chasm is 3 meters wide both ways and 7 meters deep. The user can also re-cover the Chasm after the enemy has fallen in if they wished to, trapping the enemy in the space.

Notes:
- Have to leave one turn between usages.
- The user doesn't know the Chasm is there, no physical signs will indicate its presence either. (Unless they have a technique stating otherwise - Chakra sensing/Byakugan)
~Declined~ Do you mean the user or the opponent?

(Doton: Chikyū Shinbu no Torenchi) Earth Release: Deep Earth Trench
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Long
Chakra: 15
Damage: N/A
Description: The user performs the Snake hand seal and then places their palms on to the ground in front of them. After this is done the user channels their Chakra down into the earth and out towards the enemy. The user lowers the earth underground creating an underground chasm 2 meters in front of the enemy. When the enemy moves over the Chasm the small crust that hides the Chasm from the surface breaks due to the weight and the person who walked over would falls in. The Chasm is 3 meters wide both ways and 7 meters deep. The user can also re-cover the Chasm after the enemy has fallen in if they wished to, trapping the enemy in the space.

Notes:
- Have to leave one turn between usages.
- The opponent doesn't know the Chasm is there, no physical signs will indicate its presence either. (Unless they have a technique stating otherwise - Chakra sensing/Byakugan)

~ Approved. I like it, traps are a woefully underutilized part of our RP. ~

(Sutiru Ningyo Korekushon: Suna Purotekuta Pea: Tatajiro) Steel Puppet Collection: Suna Protector Pair: Tatsjiro
Type:Puppet
Rank:B
Range:Short
Chakra:20 (If Summoned)
Damage:N/A
Description:Tatajiro is a puppet made of wood but has steel plaiting covering its entire body and is a part of the Steel Puppet Collection made by Sho. Tatajiro is a twin puppet, one of a pair. The two puppets (The other being (Sutīru ningyō Korekushon: Suna purotekutā Pea: Kenzanko) Steel Puppet Collection: Suna Protector Pair: Kenzanko) are often used together and where made to complement each other.

Tatajiro is shaped like an Armadillo and is about human size, from floor to back and three people wide, it is known for its defensive capabilities. It is made out of wood but its back is triple layered with steel panels to make it harder to penetrate. Tatajiro is also hollowed out inside allowing for three people to enter it for defensive or travelling purposes, but it can also open up its back panels to allow entry to enemies and then can close back up the panels to trap them inside. All of Tatajiro’s joints are protected by enforced steel covers, making them hard to target and making it hard to break Tatajiro.

Tatajiro’s mouth can be used to shoot Kunai (6 per battle) and can also extend a small blade from the tip of its tail, the blade is extremely thin and can be shot out (once per battle) looking like a large Senbon. Tatajiro also has two holes on its back that lead to the hollowed out insides of the puppet; these holes are the size of a fist.

Tatajiro can also roll up into a ball, allowing its heavily plated body to cover its entire body.
Tatajiro has the Kanji for Half on its neck/back area (just back from its head) and a small Kanji for Sho on its forehead.

Notes:
-Tatajiro can only shoot 6 Kunais from its mouth per battle and can only shoot its tail out once per battle also.
-The storage of this puppet will be declared at the beginning of a battle.

~ What ranks can it resist ? How many times ? ~

(Sutiru Ningyo Korekushon: Suna Purotekuta Pea: Kenzanko) Steel Puppet Collection: Suna Protector Pair: Kenzanko
Type:Puppet
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra: 30 (If summoned)
Damage:N/A
Description:Kenzanko is a puppet made of wood but covered with steel plating and is a part of the Steel Puppet Collection created by Sho. Tatajiro is a twin puppet, one of a pair. The two puppets (The other being (Sutīru ningyō Korekushon: Suna purotekutā Pea: Tatajiro) Steel Puppet Collection: Suna Protector Pair: Tatajiro) are often used together and where made to complement each other.

Kenzanko is shaped like a Pangolin and is slightly smaller than its counterpart. It is thinner and about half the height. Although it’s smaller in height it is longer in length that Tatajiro. Kenzanko has an elongated tail which can wrap around Tatajiro body several times (3). Tatajiro isn’t hollowed out which means all its body parts are made of wooden sections all the way through. This makes it extremely dense but its joints have no protection making it easier to break than Tatajiro. Kezanko has a single layer of steel plating cover its body.

Compared to Tatajiro, Kenzanko has plenty of weapons. It has a Senbon multi-shooter in its mouth, making it possible to shoot 10 Senbons at one time (6 times per battle = 60 Senbons). Kenzanko also has blade compartments along its tail, (6 all together). These compartments are the same as Tatajiro’s. They can shoot out of the compartments and look like large Senbon needles. At the end of Kenzanko’s tail there is a blade, it is shaped like a tip of a broad sword and extends from the metal plating that covers all of Kenzanko’s back (it is only single layered). Kenzanko also has 3 metal piercings (What appear to be piercings anyway) they look like studs along his belly. These can be detached and thrown using a separate string. The stud ends that are thrown release a relatively simple gas which can knock out the enemy. Kenzanko is relatively faster than its counterpart and is made for offensive purposes.

Kenzanko has the Kanji for Half on its neck/back area (just back from its head) and a small Kanji for Sho on its forehead

Notes:
-Can only fire its 60 senbons, with 6 shots of 10 per battle, can only shoot six large senbon needles from its tail per battle. Can only use the poison bombs once each, making it a total of 3 per battle.
-It can only shoot one set of Senbons per Turn.
-The storage of this puppet will be declared at the beginning of a battle.

~ Same as above ~

 

[Smirk]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Suiton: Mizu Samaurai) Water Release: Water Samurai
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40 (+10 each time full body needs to be reformed)
Damage: 80
Description: The User forms Two 6FT. Water Samurai (each has One water sword equipped) that can be used to either attack or defend.No water source is needed to perform this Jutsu. Once activated the Jutsu remainds for the rest of the battle until it is either de-activated or destroyed. The water samurai can free form but each time the whole body reforms it takes a certain amount of the users chakra.
Note: This Jutsu can Only be used once Per battle and after its used the user cannot use any S-rank water jutsu for 2 turns
Note: This Jutsu can only be taught by Lazyboi

~ There needs to be a limit on the reforming ability. And by that I mean an ACTUAL one, not just "oh, -10 chakra" ~
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(Ninjutsu: Onion Kisoku) Ninja Arts: Onion Breath
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 10
Damage: N/A
Description: The User releases unnoticeable Aroma from their mouth that conflicts with the opponents [Senses] smell/vision causing them to become teary eye'd, vision becomes blurry, eye burning and itching causing them to close their eyes involuntarily, Until they escape the Aroma and clean their eyes.
Note: Once the opponent escapes the Aroma, the effects lasts for 2 Turns, Just blurry vision and teary eyes
Note: Jutsu can be used 3 times per battle
Note: This Jutsu can only be taught by Lazyboi

~ How exactly do you make this "aroma" ? Do you suddenly transform your head into an onion ? ~

 

[Mephistopheles]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Lightning Style: Overload (Raiton: Raikata, literally means excess lightning)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/a
Description: Overload is a precision type lightning release technique created as an alternate way of performing genjutsu. The human brain when exposed to a given frequency of brainwaves hallucinates, using precise chakra control and lightning mastery the user creates these waves and overloads the targets head with these. This does not propose any threat to the target but otherwise causes the brain to lose functionality due to hallucination. Controlling the density of these the user is able to create the desired illusions without the threat of the opponent breaking free using conventional methods while the waves themselves are generally undetectable. The drawback however is the variety the general method could provide (i.e depriving the target of his senses, hallucination can create illusion but is incapable of that).

~ Declined, do not resubmit ~
Demon’s Graveyard (Akuma no hakachi)
Rank: A
Type: Offense/Supplementary
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Using Mephistopheles’ ability to summon more weapons, the user pushes the sword in the ground and release shockwaves of chakra underground to spread chakra across the field. Mephistopheles then starts to glow blue and within seconds weapons of all sorts erupt around the entire field impaling everyone except the areas the user wants untouched. In case the target(s) survive(s) the user can then take out the sword, with a little concentrate and pointing the sword at the area where all the weapons will burst out in concussion spread the weapons across the field.
- The summoned weapon cannot be controlled via telekinesis or possess the ability to attract lightning.
-Usable thrice in battle.
-Using the chakra, one is able to control where the swords erupt
(They are normal weapons with no use but to impale the opponent, it’s just metal this time)

~ Who or what is Mephistopheles ? Link me to either your bio if its him or quote your CW if that's it ~