Players involved: Landfall
Mission Rank: C rank
Story elements chosen:
-(Custom) Recover from the battle (2)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 07/10/23
Relevant mission links:
https://animebase.me/threads/the-necropolis-a.778855/post-22129847
Additional information:
Using this mission to be 'void touched' for a void seer biography
Mission Passed.
The storytelling here was really well done and I appreciate that you're aiming at developing the depth of your biography through your missions, such as what abilities they end up getting. However, something I want to point out relating to missions is the focus on your storyboard element. In this particular mission, you spent a lot of time going through your bag and exemplifying the results of the injury you suffered, which was great for reading, but it didn't have a significant amount to do with "Recover from the battle" until the second-to-last paragraph where you finally found bandages, but then simply slapped them over the wound and moved on. In any rank of mission, the first and foremost focus should be on the storyboard element. Because looking for things to heal yourself is arguably part of the process of recovery, I'm giving this a pass without a fail, but in the future, please keep this in mind and be cautious not to leave your element too far out of focus as you're writing your mission. If you were to do a similar mission as this in the future, my recommendation would be to maybe expand upon what you do with the bandages after you find them. Do you take the time to examine your injury more, perhaps you utilize a fire technique to heat a kunai and cauterize the wound closed so you stop the bleeding and potentially eliminate whatever "infection" you might believe is festering in the wound. Little details like this can help draw out the depth and emphasis of your element and ultimately help minimize any risk of downgrading or failing of a mission.
No Artefact was Awarded. (63)
As a result of the Lost Gods arc, the landmark in which this mission was conducted has granted a 30% kumi bonus!
Checked by Red-Robin