Storyboard Mission Submission

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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
  • Choose between what is right and what is easy (3)
  • Explore the history of something (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10-31-2018
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: This mission circles around Rebekah escorting a suspect through a forest in order to get them to the prison they must be kept in. While on her adventure to the location, the suspect tries to escape and Rebekah must then choose between an easy way out or the right thing, while also learning more about this suspects history.

Mission Failed. There's nothing wrong with fighting in your mission and it even made for a good story but you need to focus mainly on the elements you choose. You took two elements but didn't start performing them until you were halfway into your mission. This means you only had half of your mission to fit in what should be at minimum two-thirds of it. So that means your mission doesn't truly start until the middle when you're done fighting and have trapped your target. You can do a lot of things in a mission if you pick the right elements and spread your time among them accordingly. For example, if you would have chosen "Fight an individual of comparable strength" and added that into the fold it would have made your opening half more on task allowing all of the opening to count toward your mission instead of just being extra text. It would have given you the wiggle room needed for a pass. Don't be discouraged though you write well, and are succinct so I feel like you won't have much trouble with the right elements.
Players involved: Chihaya
Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
  • Torture a suspect (3)
  • Explore the history of something (3)
  • Choose between what is right and what is easy (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 11-4-2018
Relevant mission links: Click
  • Additional information: Rebekah is torturing a suspect for information on stolen scrolls. She gains information and history on the scrolls and in the end has to choose between what is right and easy.
~Mission Failed. So, this was a close one for me, because you don't have to split your attention into thirds with three storyboard elements, but your last two just seem kind of thrown in there. You spend only a few lines of dialogue, with a bit of introspection, on exploring them. I'd have gone for it on a C-rank, but for B, I'm just not inclined. You should also remember to c/p your storyboard elements into the mission post itself. Your summary was on point of course, but just for my both our peace of mind. This wasn't a bad mission though.
 
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- Develop a custom fighting style (2)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 04/11/18
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information:
Having fought the spartan with such a unique style, king would push to develop his own to get stronger for the sake of his clan,

Mission Passed. A bit heavy on the setup, but you did enough work for a C rank. I like the concept of using the NW to learn/teach your stuff to allies. What you and Akiza did before was pretty cool imo where you taught her your CJ through NW. These types of elements feel inventive and different as I haven't seen a lot of people using similar concepts. @Gajeel Redfox
 
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Story elements chosen:
Upgrade your Home base Security (2)
- Create a Bee Hives (2)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 11/4/2018
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/takinomori-117.756130/page-5#post-21853474
Additional information: Gonna be a long story of doing this so just started

First of all, what? Your link sends me to South-East Kinai on a click, but if I c/p it from edit it's the right one. You put the wrong url, but the right title when you inserted the link.
Mission Failed, though. You spend way too little time actually upgrading the base and constructing bee hives, which, by the way, you kinda combine into one.
 
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Make a Conqueror's End costume for children (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 05/11/2018 - 05/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: Just the start of an arc using the Conqueror's End SE's.Missi


Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: D
Story elements chosen:
Help a village decorate for Conqueror's End (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 05/11/2018 - 05/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed. Liking how this is going. I appreciate interconnected stories.

Players involved: Detective L
Mission Rank: D
Story elements chosen:
Help a village carve pumpkins for the holidays (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 05/11/2018 - 05/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed. I can't fault you for picking one element because you do them start to finish. You also win a D rank artifact.

Players involved: Detective L
Mission Rank: D
Story elements chosen:
Go to a haunted house with a group of children (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/11/2018 - 06/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:
Examine the corpse of a zombie for clues about necromancers (2)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/11/2018 - 06/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed.

Players involved: Detective L
Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:
Explore the history of Conqueror's End (2)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/11/2018 - 06/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed.
 
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- Capture an exotic or rare animal

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 6/11/18
Relevant mission links: here
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Just a story of how meets his companion to keep him in line with the character from the series.

Mission Passed. Felt a bit light, but you explored your element the entire time.

Players involved: Gajeel redfox
Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:

- Defend yourself from bandits

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 7/11/18
Relevant mission links: here
Additional information: King takes a dark turn...

Mission Passed. I think that dude was dead long before you caused the steel to rupture his heart.
 
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Defeat an abomination summoned by the necromancers (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 20181108
Relevant mission links: 1 Page
Additional information: None

~Mission Passed. Alright, with ya one storyboard element, but I think it works because you kinda work the search into defeating the abomination as it tries to affect you with its abilities. Very nicely thought out.
 
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~From now on, due to the way we're now beginning to log Kumi through the add-on, each post can now only contain one mission. This has also been put in the OP of this thread. All other rules remain and still apply as usual.

Have fun!
 
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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen: Look through the Freehold's lost records for clues about Cassander's powers (2)
Fight off a group of deadly bandits in the Ruins of Chungsu (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 9/11/18
Relevant mission links: [x][x]
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Mission Passed.
 
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Mission Rank: S
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- Destroy a Large community

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10/11/18

Relevant mission links: Fall of Sparta
Additional information: You ever seen 300? Now it's time to see my version... xd

~Mission Failed. See, I think this is a great story, but your lone storyboard element is about destroying a large community. You're not actually doing much destroying. You set a clever trap and draw out the enemy, then you show them the horrible scene (some of it in their POW) and talk to them, and THEN you crush them. I'm okay with considering the 300 men a 'community' in and by themselves, but I just don't think you spend enough time actually destroying them or the village. Plus, you're never in any danger or seem to exert yourself much, which isn't a deal-breaker alone, but along with all the other stuff this just isn't an S-rank to me.
 
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Story elements chosen:

• Custom Element – Kill the Assassin
• Custom Element – Win the fight without my Ninjutsu
• Custom Element – Survive a near-death situation


Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10/11 - 2018

Relevant mission link: https://animebase.me/threads/tanishi-131.756144/#post-21857043

Additional information: This mission will mark the point where Nate has the realization, that they cannot escape without dealing with Teno the assassin, and decides to take things into his own hands.

Declined. Resubmit. You need to rank each individual element (1-5, D-S) so the mission rank can be properly calculated.
 
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• Custom Element – Kill the Assassin
• Custom Element – Win the fight without my Ninjutsu
• Custom Element – Survive a near-death situation


Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10/11 - 2018

Relevant mission link: https://animebase.me/threads/tanishi-131.756144/#post-21857043

Additional information: This mission will mark the point where Nate has the realization, that they cannot escape without dealing with Teno the assassin, and decides to take things into his own hands.

Declined. Resubmit. You need to rank each individual element (1-5, D-S) so the mission rank can be properly calculated.
Players involved: Gutsy Jiraiya
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:

• Custom Element – Kill the Assassin (5)
• Custom Element – Win the fight without my Ninjutsu (5)
• Custom Element – Survive a near-death situation (5)


Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10/11 - 2018

Relevant mission link: https://animebase.me/threads/tanishi-131.756144/#post-21857043

Additional information: This mission will mark the point where Nate has the realization, that they cannot escape without dealing with Teno the assassin, and decides to take things into his own hands.

Check, check and check. Mission Passed.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story Elements Chosen:

-Rescue children that were captured by bandits while Trick or Treating (4)
-Win a fight without your ninjutsu (5)

Note this is a Conqueror's End mission.

Date of beginning & Date of Conclusion: 11/10

Relevant Mission Link: https://animebase.me/threads/shaohai-025.755842/#post-21857244

Additional Info: N/A

Mission Passed.
 
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- Help a local trader by transporting his wares (2)

Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 11 / 10 / 18 - 11 / 10 / 18
Relevant Mission Link: Helping A Trader

Additional Information: N/A

Mission Failed. This was close but I don't feel like this was enough activity and effort for a C-rank. Even with transporting the wares your character isn't doing much in the narrative directly beyond a few sentences. He uses the Summoning Technique and allows the summon to do all the transportation for him. It's really close for me but I lean more on the end of it being a fail due to your character not playing a more integral part in the effort and action. If you do more missions like this I personally suggest making your character the focal point of the activity and the one doing the heavy lifting this method could have worked if there was some kind of struggle though. For example, maybe the rigging and ropes you used to secure the objects could fail scattering and dropping some of the wares so you'd have to collect and resecure them before they fall and break giving you something to do beyond just chilling on the summon as it walks down the road.
 
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- Destroy a large community (5)
- Experiment with very advanced ninjutsu (kinjutsu) (5)
- Begin the end of days (custom) (5?)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 12/11/18
Relevant mission links: The End of Days
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Time to get the ball rolling with this bad guy thing, and what better way to do it than with a massacre and creating a horde of zombies to plague the land with by experimenting with kinjutsu? What dark turn has Natsu taken? Adapting cannon kinjutsu techniques to create a horde of zombies to create a new threat within the ninja world, inspired by game of thrones. Maybe i'll summon a dragon and truly be the night king.

Mission Passed. I'll take killing all those people as destroying a large community but as a warning S rank missions are supposed to be dangerous for you. For this, I factored in the taxing nature of the Kinjutsu technique since if you maintain it for an extended period it could knock your bio out via chakra drain but that was barely enough for a pass. Next time make sure that there is some kind of danger or intense struggle. For example, other S rank missions include things like "Survive a near-death experience." Attacking the NPCs during the night drained a lot of the danger out of the "Destroy a large community" element.
 
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Go Trick or Treating with a group of children (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 15/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed
 
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- Infiltrate an enemy's base (3)
- Use the information from infiltration to destroy the base (3) - custom

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 15/11/18
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: Due to the toll it takes on Natsu to constantly create his zombie hoard, he decide to pursue his conquest in a different manor, using tactics of infiltration through a clever ruse to deal with his enemies.


Mission Passed as a regular mission.
 
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Story elements chosen: Rescue children that were captured by bandits while Trick or Treating (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 17/11/18
Relevant mission links: [x]
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Mission Passed, for a moment I thought you were going the non-violent route.
 
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Story elements chosen: Defeat a horde of zombies without using your ninjutsu (5)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 11/17/18
Relevant mission links: { v }
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Pending - Leaving for Drackos or ZK.

Mission Passed.
 
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  • Make a Conqueror's End costume for children (1)
  • Help a village decorate for Conqueror's End (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 30/10/2018 - 06/11/2018
Relevant Mission Links: 1 2 3
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Pending - Leaving for Drackos or ZK.

Mission Passed.
 
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