Storyboard Mission Submission

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Mission Rank: S
Story Elements Chosen:
  • Defeat a horde of zombies without using your ninjutsu
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 19th/11th/2018
Relevant Mission Links: https://animebase.me/threads/ruins-of-chungsu-001.755817/post-21861195
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Pending - Leaving for Drackos or ZK.

Mission Failed. Level of detail for a single element S rank mission was not sufficient.
 
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Mission Rank: B
Story Elements Involved: Defend a marketplace from a horde of zombies (3)
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 11 / 19 / 18 - 11 / 19 / 18
Relevant Mission Link: https://animebase.me/threads/aridakumo-062.755879/post-21861333

Additional Information: N/A

Mission Failed. I don't feel like there was enough substance and effort here for a B rank. Only a single paragraph of your two paragraph mission was defending the marketplace which should have been the main focal point of the entire post. Additionally, a lot of the effort was surface level and summarized heavily. The element was only touched upon for about four sentences which is way too little for a B rank mission let alone one with a single storyboard element. That wouldn't work even for a C-rank mission for me. Next time I suggest actually exploring your character's actions and reactions to the situation you're putting them in.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story Elements Chosen:
  • (Custom) Help someone survive a near death situation (5)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 19th/11th/2018
Relevant Mission Links: 1st 2nd 3rd
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Mission Failed. There was no dangerous aspect to this for you. You were merely healing another person. It's a B-rank at best. Drackos pointed out to me a while ago that a custom variation of a similar mission doesn't always equate to being of the same difficulty. For this example, "Helping someone survive a near death situation" isn't dangerous compared to your bio "Surviving a near death situation." The latter will put your bio in direct danger, whereas the former merely puts you in a place where you can help someone else through their own danger.
 
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Story elements chosen:
Participate in a Conqueror's End feast with a village (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 19/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: Finished before the arc ended, just posting them now.


Mission Passed.

 
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Defend a village's Conqueror's End feast from bandits (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 19/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: Completed before the arc ended, just posting now.


Mission Passed.
 
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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:

- Torture a suspect (3)
- Convince a criminal to confess (3)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 25/10/18
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information:
Pakura shows what happens to those that try and break into her "home".

Mission Failed. This was extremely close to being a pass but you focus way too much of your work on your setup and RP that isn't building toward your specific elements. When you finally do get to your element based RP you begin to slack heavily. The description and effort fade away and what was a blossoming mission sputters out into one sentence actions and reactions. You could have chosen different elements, for example, "Defend against or attack another group" and that would have made all of the setup count toward the mission instead of being setup RP and the extra element would have given you a bit more wiggle room when it came to your other actions. Or this could also have been broken into a post for non-mission related RP allowing you to set up your scenario any way you wanted and then your mission post itself giving you more time to build the mission itself up. The way you posted it and put effort into it, more than half of your mission is just filler or set up which is just too much.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen: -Confront the Corporeal Cassander and survive against him for at least 3 turns (5*)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: Oct 7th - Nov 24th
Relevant mission links:
- Hashikko 159 (Mission Start)
- Landor 158 (Travel)
- Serpent Steppes 157 (Travel)
- Oxen Gateway 155 (Travel)
- Barisal 151 (Travel)
- Khulna 150 (Travel)
- Cassander vs Hei (Fight Thread)
- Khulna 150 (Mission End)
Additional information: Conqueror's End Event value: 2250 Kumi and 2250 Ryo. Also, completed before event end, just waited for ZK's final confirmation post.

Pending - Leaving for ZK.

~I'm sure you're eager to have this concluded. Once again, my apologies. This is a pass, and I'm transferring an extra 1k linking to this post due to shorting you on the first one. Go figure. Mission 'Passed', but like for serious.
 
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Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:


Terrorize a large community (4)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 25/10/18
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information:

Can Pakura sit idly by after a group of men had invaded her own and terrorised her safe place? Well of course not. It was time to continue her little game with the locals ^_^

Mission Passed. Another close one, but this one has more direct effort on the element though be careful with single element missions.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story Elements chosen:

  • Defeat an enemy without using Ninjutsu
  • Custom Element: End the Tyrannical Pirate threat
Date of Beginning & date of conclusion: 11/11/2018 - 26/11/2018
Relevant mission links: Beginning / Part 1 / Part 2 / Part 3 / Part 4 / Part 5 / Part 6 / Conclusion
Additional Information: This marks the conclusion of Kaizen, and his use within the NW, Starting with the new arc and changing over to using Lightning Uchiha biography. This mission in summary is kaizen's climax and ending his adventures in style.


Mission Passed. Wow-... The effort put into this was amazing. If you want the story of Kaizen to be told to the world, remember that influential information can be posted in The Noticeboard thread. This means you can tell the world about your heroic deeds and record them for everyone to see. NEVER and myself have used this feature a buttload to tell our bio's stories.
 
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Mission Rank: C
Story Elements Chosen:
  • Babysit someone much younger than you
  • Scout potential threats
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 25/11/18 - 26/11/18
Relevant Mission Links: 1 2 3
Additional Information:

Pending - Leaving for Drackos or ZK.

Mission Passed.
 
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Story Elements Chosen:
  • Survive a near-death situation
  • Assassinate the enemy commander
  • Guard someone very important
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27/11/18 - 28/11/18
Relevant Mission Links: 1 2 3
Additional Information:
Alicia utilised a Rainbow Pikefoot Scale to create a burst of light that she received from her father in this post, hopefully that clears up that confusion. Lena gains her Wood Release Heart and Mangekyou Sharingan through this event and now makes sense to her suddenly getting it In character, woo!

Pending - Leaving for Drackos or ZK.

~Mission Passed. Very nice job, and a powerful story, too.
 
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Mission Rank: C
Story Elements Chosen:

  • Fight and escape your captors (Custom,3)
  • Do a good deed (1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 28/11/18 - 28/11/18
Relevant Mission Links: https://animebase.me/threads/fuging-030.755847/post-21863910
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Mission Passed. For some reason, your link led to the wrong post but I found the right post. Honestly, this was an interesting story it got a bit weird in the middle lol but that doesn't detract from the mission as a whole. Just a suggestion for the fighting and for the setup, try not to summarize the danger and keep most of the rp centered around your storyboard elements. For example "The fight lasted ten minutes but she came out on top, breathing heavy but for the most part was uninjured" instead of summarizing elaborate on the fight and what happened during those ten minutes. This could be the deciding factor between a pass and a fail in a higher ranked mission. Other than that, good job.
 
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Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
Custom: Orchestrate a merger of two factions ( 4 )
Custom: Make all the necessary plans and arrangements for your faction ( 4 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
11/15/2018
11/26/2018
Relevant mission links: [ START ] [ x ] [ x ] [ END ]
Additional information: This mission was to merge the White Lotus into the Golden Sabbath/Tsumigakure, while also creating a formal treaty to combine the two into a singular faction. I toned down the elements to reflect the fact that there wasn't as much danger in this than an S-rank would require as a lot of it was diplomacy, discussion and talking over terms. This is explained in my summary. Basically, the goals were to convince the White Lotus to sign their lands over to the Golden Sabbath/Tsumigakure and to join the village which they did. It leads directly into the formation of Tsumigakure with the start of a summit to bring together all of the villagers and factions binding them together in the Graveyard of Sin eventually allowing them to rise-up from nothing.

~Mission Passed. Very touching, and I mean that.
 
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~Golden Sabbath: Somewhere I Belong
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Description: You've been tasked with escorting someone very important across the Ninja World. These individuals can NPCs you take from point A to point B meaning this mission can be finished completely solo or they can even be a council member or your Kage. The second option requires participating from the physical person mentioned. Your job is to travel with them and mitigate any danger they may find themselves in. This includes a mandatory battle between yourself and at least one group of NPCs but can be expanded upon to include things like defending a council member or your Kage from a rivaling clan or village.
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 11/27/2018 - 11/29/2018
Relevant mission links: Start - Fin
Additional information: Ferried Howards clone, and Shinta to the Graveyard of Sin

~Mission Failed. I'm not sure what happened here, but you only link me to two very brief posts. If this is a coding issue or something then message me, but this does not fulfill the requirements of a B-rank.
 
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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
  • Torture a suspect [3]
  • Convince a criminal to confess [3]
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 29/11 - 2018
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/nendo-haven-141.756155/#post-21864070
Additional information: A single post of torture and pain to begin the story of Pyke the Bloodharbor Ripper.

 
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Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:
Both custom:

- Create a subject to do your bidding (2)
- Instill fear into the islanders while testing your new subject. (2)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 29/11/18
Relevant mission links: Here
Additional information: Zeref is going to play with his own unique abilities to try and test the limits of his skills before he makes himself known to the world.

Mission Passed. This was a really weird one, I'm passing it because you perform your elements with enough detail and effort for a C-rank. However, the "subject" isn't anything more than a carbon creation so you'll have to keep that in mind in the future. That first element would have fit better with something like Yin-Yang Release or Yang Release by creating a sentient construct that could think, feel and act on its own in my opinion. For your opening, you're basically just sticking rods into a construct which doesn't make it more than what it is.
 
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Mission Rank: B

Story Elements Chosen:
  • Scout for potential threats [3]
  • Infiltrate an enemy’s base [3]
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 29/11/18
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/midnight-island-143.756157/#post-21864141


Summary: Pyke arrived at the moonlight island after having brutally tortured and murdered a man by the name of Beke, hunting for the notorious pirate Gangplank.

Mission Passed.
 
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Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
  • Save a large community from danger
  • Defend against or attack another group
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
11/25/2018
11/28/2018
Relevant mission links: [ START ] [ TRAVEL ] [ TRAVEL ] [ RP PREP ] [ OFFENSE ] [ END ]
Additional information: I had planned this to be a bigger encounter but the change of arcs prompted a switch of biographies from the Pervy Sage which cut out the fight that would have escalated from the initial encounter. However, my bio is still saving the village of Tsumigakure ( I'd say that's more than a large community because Pervy Sage had his Natsu bio planning to ravage the entire village including all the landmarks spreading the undead plague similar to the necromancers from the Conqueror's End event ) from a large attack force of 500 undead brought to life by the Corpse Soil technique and their creator who brought them into Sado's lands. This means that even without the fight happening between his bio and mine I met the requirements of the storyboard elements I chose, "Saving a large community from danger" via throwing my bio into a fight he wasn't sure he could win and "Defend against or attack another group" I had my bio fight off the five-hundred undead brought to the village. there was a good bit of prep and travel through due to how far away the Pervy Sage's bio was from mine as my bio was prepping for the worst as his assumption was retribution from Takauji and not a random attack from someone he didn't know. I understand that the prep and the travel could drain a bit of the danger as well as the fact that Pervy Sage switched bios.

~Mission Failed. So... I empathize with you and, as usual, your story is great, but it just doesn't cut it as an S-rank as is. I can see that you're expecting more to come from the time you spend on the set-up, but the actual saving and defending part of this story doesn't quite measure up.
 
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Mission Rank: A

Story Elements Chosen:
  • Internal Investigation (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 29/11/18
Relevant mission links:
https://animebase.me/threads/gurēpurēn-184.756199/post-21864186
Additional information:
Village mission involving Rexii, consulting him on how to write this up.

Pending - Leaving Village Missions for Drackos or ZK.
 
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