Life in Konoha after the War

Uchiha Paulsama

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amazing. you should start your own manga xd juss take your time but this is truly amazing. it shows how your mind works. your truly special indeed U_U
 

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another great chapter :D, you'r doing an amazing job, keep it up
 

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really x10 good :)
 

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Cool and thanks
 

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good chapter again my friend!! :) and yay!! I'm so excited for ur wedding..:)
 

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I think its pretty good :D
Ur grammar needs a little care but overall its splendid!
Good work!
 

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The plot itself makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside like when Teuchi compares Naruto to his daddy. I was like "d'awww"

You're good at coming up with stories! Just work on your format. For example, I wouldn't use script style because it's very limiting. It makes it harder to convey emotion which is something you want your readers to feel when they read your story.

Also, don't break the 4th wall when you write unless you use an Author's Note. It keeps the reader inside the "world" you create with your story.

But this is great! I hope you continue to write and improve! ^^
 

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i will be working on the sixth chapter and may put it up before the Wedding
 

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the story line is very interesting but if you watch the series closely you will notice that naruto calls the man in the ramen shop old man
 

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the story line is very interesting but if you watch the series closely you will notice that naruto calls the man in the ramen shop old man

yeah i did watch naruto it just i decided to actually put his real name thnak you for your comment
 
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u there called head bands not head pretecters js and btw it was a great storie
 

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This was an awesome read!


and btw

u there called head bands not head pretecters js and btw it was a great storie

They are actually translated to Forehead Protectors look -
 

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Its great, i can't wait to read the next one....
 
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