Life in Konoha after the War
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sasukeultimateninja
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Dude please teach me how to create awesome stories like you.i'm desperatethank you for your comment
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i just put them in one but i put the six chapter seperate because i decided to not make it any longer
thanks for the Compliment we will see what happens you know my grammer was not perfect but if you want to i can try and see how i go not that i know where to start i just write what comes to mind and edit it if it does not sound right
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Thank you i am happy you liked it, and i thank everyone else for there nice Comments as wellthis is great i love it!
Maina Deah
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Its really long since I've read from ch. 1-5 :ghehe: but its a nice story =D
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I thought you thought up an interesting plot for your story. I loved how you incorporated Sasuke let alone a changed Sasuke. He is my favorite character thus any story involving him excites me ^.^ I liked how your fanfic depicted Kishimoto's characters to be more good-hearted therefore I suppose the cycle of hatred had begun to break post Fourth Shinobi War. Its a little weird viewing the Raikage act calm and kind but that is how all the Kages should portray themselves especially after the Tsuchikage's quote in the manga.
I read member's posts and they more or less brought up your grammar/spelling but what I would propose for future purposes is to check your work several times if needed before posting to ensure a more successful finished product. Aside that keep up the good work and I look forward to reading chapter six.
I have a question if your don't mind-is English your mother's tongue?
I read member's posts and they more or less brought up your grammar/spelling but what I would propose for future purposes is to check your work several times if needed before posting to ensure a more successful finished product. Aside that keep up the good work and I look forward to reading chapter six.
I have a question if your don't mind-is English your mother's tongue?
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thank you for your comment & Advice i am happy you enjoyed my fan fic and yes english is my mother touge language
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Kuroi Honoo
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Your welcome-yes just take it slow, observe as your write and you'll more accustomed to writing better as you progress
I forgot to add about the couplings. I thought NarutoxHinata was inevitable to Kishi's standards thus that was fine. I didn't have a problem with any couples except for InoxChoji/ShikmaruxTemari as I love Ino and Shikamaru is a character I like. I personally would have preferred InoxSai/ShikamaruxShiho xd I loved however, what you did with SasukexSakura/NejixTenten-I thought that was perfect!
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Very interesting!!!
i give you 10 out of 10 for imagination, alot of grammer errors but the whole idea to the story is really good. The only thing i can say is that we really dont know if half of these characters in your story are gonna survive in the war. Other than that, i love it!! Keep it up and continue writting chapters
i give you 10 out of 10 for imagination, alot of grammer errors but the whole idea to the story is really good. The only thing i can say is that we really dont know if half of these characters in your story are gonna survive in the war. Other than that, i love it!! Keep it up and continue writting chapters
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Very interesting!!!
i give you 10 out of 10 for imagination, alot of grammer errors but the whole idea to the story is really good. The only thing i can say is that we really dont know if half of these characters in your story are gonna survive in the war. Other than that, i love it!! Keep it up and continue writting chapters
thank you
yeah i know who knows what will happen but this is just a fan fic i guess its my version of what i hope happens lol
Nice story.....but I don't like the idea of everyone calling him Hokage 'sama' i.e. his close friends
N Naruto calling Kakashi directly by his name.....I mean even Minato called jiraya...'Sensei' after he became the kage
N Naruto calling Kakashi directly by his name.....I mean even Minato called jiraya...'Sensei' after he became the kage
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i am glad you like the story & well its just the way i did it, it is alittle wired for his friends to have to call him that is true but its just how i decided to have it.
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