Finals Match For 1st Place 16: TheSiege vs halfmoonuzumaki
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Gaara Da Kazekage
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My fault for not explaining in the first place why I thought you Halfmoon, butttt NarutAwesome you coulda came at me a different way bruh I don't appreciate that. I think Halfmoon one because most of what he was writing I liked and enjoyed it and to add he had an instrumental on all of the verses which also makes it more enjoyable. TheSiege did ok he wasn't bad at all, I just happened to like what Halfmoon did more. That's my opinion. (Also it took a while for me to respond because I was busy)
halfmoonuzumaki
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If you dont have time to go in depth, could you post who you thought won each round when you get the chance?
thanks for your insight bro even tho you didn't vote for me it's still good to know how i can improve from this I really appreciate the feedback and I'm sure Half does too
And also the reason why I dont use instrumentals is because when I rap, I switch my beat up a lot so it's really hard to find a solid instrumental that I can use so my rap won't sound off does that make sense?
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Gingka Uzumaki
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I don't honestly have time for this right now so let me do this quick:
Siege you tried your hardest and your best came in the first round, which could've been a game breaker easy the way you styled, but Halfmoon literally ****ing annihilated you to begin with, you tried harder but I don't believe you ever came to that level, and Halfmoon could've freefalled from there and still beat you, I mean you kept on attacking and they are good rhymes but you had absolutely NO chance from coming back with those rhymes, and by the second round, there just wasn't much to judge. You wanna know why my judging was so short? Because this battle was so short.
Good job to both.
Siege you tried your hardest and your best came in the first round, which could've been a game breaker easy the way you styled, but Halfmoon literally ****ing annihilated you to begin with, you tried harder but I don't believe you ever came to that level, and Halfmoon could've freefalled from there and still beat you, I mean you kept on attacking and they are good rhymes but you had absolutely NO chance from coming back with those rhymes, and by the second round, there just wasn't much to judge. You wanna know why my judging was so short? Because this battle was so short.
Good job to both.
Gingka Uzumaki
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It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
And now youre sinkin, like H9 i sunk your battleship
With weak lines like that, its like you GIVIN me the cham-p-ionship
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
And now youre sinkin, like H9 i sunk your battleship
With weak lines like that, its like you GIVIN me the cham-p-ionship
Gaara Da Kazekage
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I understand Siege how it's hard to rap on one beat and I appreciate you understanding me voting for Halfmoon. I'm pretty sure everyone here feels you both did a great job. Much love bro and keep it up
Scary Yamato
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Round 1: Seige
I'm going first and I'm kinda scared...
I don't know what to say and I'm so unprepared...
B*TCH PLEASE!
I was born to seize
these opportunities
I make the most of those moments I guarantee
and I can see with utmost clarity
that skill like mines a rarity!
to say anything else would be heresy
I'm addin fuel to my fire like kerosene
imma take half
and light him up like a match
and after the flash
only a half of his hair is seen
and this match doesn't even seem fair to me
cuz i pass out rhymes like I'm a charity
you should have some! because apparently,
you're in a sad time of scarcity
it's actually embarrassing
so now do you care to see?
compared to me
everything you make is just a parody
and imma wipe you out like a cherokee
broken, smokin, perishing
hear the sound of the angels caroling
grow dim as half starts barreling
down towards hell so scarily
and I'm lost in this hilarity!
LMAO, The flow is great and they rhyming is spectacular. Flows smooth like silk
"You can go first, I'm not ready"
"your rhymes are so deadly I'm gettin kinda sweaty.."
"and this pressure is so heavy I'm sinking under the weight"
"i can't take initiative so I guess Imma wait.."
I really liked this part because you are trying to influence the crowd at this point and sway them your way by making it seem like actually said that stuff.
well you just made the mistake
by posting late
you gave me the first move and now I'll take first place!
so whatcha gonna do halfmoonuzumaki?
try to predict my moves as if you can use haki?
be careful when you use esoteric terms. I had no clue what Haki was when I read this rap. Based on the context I knew it was something involving precognitive ability but I had no clue where it came from, so it fell short with me. I searched for it and found it on onepiece wiki so now I know, but that’s a lot of work to get a joke.
for instance,
don't say that you are great or that you're better than me
when you have to explain every rap the judges are forced to read
and then when they vote against you, you b*tch a little fit
saying "look at this line riker accidentally bit!"
god im surprised the judges actually deal with this sh*t
if you're just gonna cry after every little crit-
tique
cuz it's just f*ck in-
weak
the way your inst-
inct
is to cry like a faucet sink!
I like the way you stylized these lines but that faucet sink line didn’t give it the hard hitting ending that the setup deserved
"and omg gingka stole a few lines!"
"how is he supposed to judge mine??"
easily.
no vote for you and one for the siege
you don't need to worry cuz imma win this with ease
in fact for the judges, this decisions a breeze!
so it's your turn now, but there's no way you'll come back
cuz just like shade, no one reads your raps
Nice ending.
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Round 1: Halfmoon
It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
LOL, nice science word play. I see what you did there.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Nice rebuttal. It was a good move to build yourself up by saying you won all your matches and he won by default.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
This grouping had good setup but it didn’t finish the way it could have. Punch line was weak.
Takin pointless shots at a n*gga you aint battlin
Simply goes to show that ive got this p*ssy n*gga rattlin
You've got "shade" on your mind, you should be thinkin of me
The way you talkin Riker, I think you might take the D
In more ways then one, in the sack and as a rapper.
'Cause your flow's nonexistent,like you've no need for a wrapper.
Again you started strong by trying to use his rhymes against him, but I didn’t understand the last line.
You can say you sparked the match, cuzz without a doubt im on fire
This-like-a-fanfic-writer-tryna-match-wits-with-the-Pervy-Poet-Jiraiya
You think i wasnt ready, son you fell for my trap
First i wanted to guage the passion you were puttin in your rap
And ive seen it first hand, you lack the one thing that Ive got.
That'd be pure dark raw emotion,while your rap's are just afterthought.
Mine have heart and have soul,
Yours are weak and worth nothing.
Pullin fake quotes out the air,
Tryna act like they worth somethin
NvG made this on the base so Siege could get a public thumpin'
Because similar to Minato with FTG, its Halfmoon Siege wont be touchin.
Nice solid ending.
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Round 2: Seige
Let's start with the "basics" shall we?
And for every wrong half said lets add another tally
You said
"my rhymes are nothing more than basic"
meaning they're low on the Ph Scale
In your words I couldn't face it
But herein lies your fail
If my rhymes are lower than a base then that means their acidic
So I'm shootin poison in your face whenever I spit it
And I don't HAVE to admit it cuz I got HALF to admit it
He took his own ass and kicked it then gave himself a ticket!
Good job at turning his own words against him.
The dovahkiin tried to bring it
But his sword, he couldn't swing it
If he had half a mind he'd see that
I already Shot him through the knee cap!
Halfmoon used to be a rapper like me
Till I ripped out his throat and hung him from a tree
Cuz you're a wannabe siege you see?
You say you're dragonborn which means ur born from me!
Tryin to take my skill and actin like I'm killed
Stop poppin those pills cuz I am here still
Again, another instance of flipping his raps, and nice use of the “Till I took an arrow to the knee meme”
I swear you lie more than those b*tches on one tree hill!
And it's rich, coming from a b*tch
That I'm riding Naru’s win while ur riding on his d*ck
Asking for advice every chance that you can get
You're the dog at his kitchen table, begging for a lick!
Your egos been swelling
Since NG started telling
You
what to do
from your rhymes to ur spelling
And then after the match
Youd roll onto your back
And let him give you a pat
On the underside of your belly
Good boy!!
Nice subtle continuance of when you callled him a b*tch, and that was a good rebuttle since he questioned your credibility.
You can do what your told!
But it still wont be enough if you wanna go for the gold
I've been rolling in that Au,
Ever since the sieges debut,
Undefeated motherf*cker
You think I cannot take you?
Im rising to the top
And I'm never gonna stop
I'll be bashin your skull in
While singing Blitzkrieg Bop
Not your best ending. Normally your raps seem more thought out. This one seemed rushed to me.
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Round 2: Halfmoon
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
I learned a new word today.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
I can get what you are trying to say but that last part, “without him you’dve sink in”, didn’t make sense to me.
Thats right im Dovahkin,
but dont mistake me for your kin.
The only reason i am is here is to abolish this rap sin
Born from the need to slay you,
Put here to take you out,
To rap its like my coming's the end to a deserts draught
Im a full blown miracle, but I Aint talkin water to wine,
Im talkin dis-f*ckin-memberment, the removal of your spine.
The severin of your head, have you lookin Ghadaffi
You tried but failed you f*ckin sham, you're not ever gonna top me.
Im like a f*ckin missile, once i go off youll NEVER f*ckin stop me.
Ill leave my name on your mind, brand you Half-moon-U-Zu-Ma-Ki's.
Your flow felt a little forced in the middle of your rap (not shown) but it picked back up in this segment and you ended it well. Good job
At this point I’m pretty much split. Both of your first rounds were stronger than your second.
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Round 3: Seige
Forgive me for what I'm about to say
But his names dr. Proof, he's not f*cking Dr. Dre
So I really don't give a damn who he is on the base!
To me he's just one more hater standing in my way
LOL, I like how you called him on his shout out from Dr. Proof.
But I'm cruising in the fast lane and I ain't touching the brake
And if I run-a-f*cka-ova it won't be a mistake
I'm pushin down on full throttle
And you know i swear to God I'll
throttle this b*tch until he wobbles
And like an empty bottle he topples
and shatters on the floor
There's a piece of half, here's a piece of half, here's half o piece more
I let out half o laugh
And stomp my foot on top his ass
And he goes up into smoke like a cloud of powdered glass
You never had a chance
And there you go again, trying to explain your raps
Nice rewind to an earlier diss.
Cuz I can burn through any game this child starts playing
First its Skyrim, and now it's battleship
Reality: get into it
cuz half seems like he's*losing it
He seems to think that we're in World War 2
Because he got his ass kicked then and he's losing now too
His coaching leader is gone so he doesn't know what to do
Except get shot by my words, and verbally run through
It was clever to address his puns and flip it against him. Well done.
Youve got three fans! God d*mn, you're famous!
How much did you pay for them to stick their d*cks in ur anus? <-- LMAO
Now I know what you're gonna say,
"where's your fanbase?"
Does anyone want you to win first place?
Why yes they do!
You can see their names in the space
Where it says "Match 16 Judges"
And that's just a little taste!
Everyone in the rap group
Wants me to smack you
For thinking ur the sh*t cuz you got proof to rep you
And made alts to help you
You could say that hells blue
It doesn't mean it's all true
Your "girl" is probably a recluse
A dude who wants to get loose
Or just a random guy that's just tryna get a rep boost
This was a good set. You came at harder than your previous round.
And you'll also prolly talk about how I took so long
And say that thts the only reason why my rap is so strong
The truth is, I'm doin it to spite you
Took my time and wrote a haiku
Half was a missile
And he tried hard to get off
But that b*tch f*cked up
One more prediction before my last round stops
Half will start bitchin when the judgements drop
And when the judges start tellin him why he lost
He'll sit down and cry out purple tear drops.
The Haiku didn’t do it for me. If you are going to do something like that you need to knock it out of the park.
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Round 3: Halfmoon
Alts? I dont need them. Its f*ckin clear that youre outclassed.
Thats three votes for me, meaning you are stuck in last.
I think siege is forgettin that the base counts as two judges
Its and pretty safe to say that they all think that Siege is rubbish.
And when it comes to sensei, you sould call him Master Roshi,
Cuzz im Goku and youre Krillin, Im like Mario you Yoshi.
Because when you step to me you know I always take the trophy
But when it comes to killin? Man thats sh*ts when im cozy.
I liked the rhyming scheme here, however, your last line came up short. I understand the point you are trying get at (you are comfortable with killing), but words like cozy make people think, warm, comfortable and soft. And that how it felt to me… soft.
Second round you droppin filled with names that aint 'ven mine
Tried to talk weak sh*t, then added in lame rhyme.
I waited all this time, for such cockamamy sh*t?
Its like tryna spit big game, then tryna use a baby d*ck
You were poppin in and out this thread since last night call you wack-a-mole
Preparin such weak sh*t, then tryna audition for the leading roll-
_And expectin to get the part like you were someone big like Swayze
Then comin in to face me to-be savig'ly-torn apart like "Crazy!"
Be carefull when mentioning his second round because you are on round 3 now and if you’re going all the way back to round 2 it tells me you couldn’t find anything to attack in round 3.
I aint even gonn get into the sh*t NG said to me bout you,
Because im not that f*ckin lame,
I can come up with my OWN sh*t you "Noob",
Dont even need "Half" of my brain.
Call me Green Day in my prime, Right round the time
When they dropped their hit Novacane
Because im winnin over masses,
Got em hooked call me Ly-ri-co-caine
You had a nice ABAB rhyme scheme going then it got switched up and suddenly ended. I felt like this set needed a couple more bars to end propperly. It felt like it just stopped.
Now do you get it? You f*ckin little genin sh*t?
Stop tryna pull a konahamaru, and hop off of my d*ck.
Stop tryna front like a Hollow, when you KNOW im f*ckin Ichigo
And the words that im spitting, f*ckin sharp, call im Zanpakuto
Ive said it once before ill say it again call me Battosai
But ill do more than slice your neck, Ill f*ckin revel in your final cry.
And compare me to Goku,'cause ill eat you no doubt, call you curly fry.
Im the King of this Rap- Game, Call me rap's Yugi-Moto
Ill rip through you;... 8-gates, this finish aint need no Photo
Cuzz im faster than Super Sonic, My Rhymes, are Supersonic
Nah i didnt stutter up, Im talkin Pokemon, you moronic?
Nah you straight up confused, thats what Supersonic tends to do to ya
It gets inside ya head, and f*ckin chokes ya (im talkin uvula)
I mentioned this with seige and now I’m sayiong it to you. Be carefull with esoteric rhymes, because not every knows these character or terms and your raps will suffer because of it.
Ive laid waste to this Siege,
I F*ckin straight stomped him and his tracks
I mean it i literally, stopped Siege in his f*ckin tracks.
I f*ckin showed hes weak as f*ck, and cant spit without NaruG
I know this cuzz he wouldnt coach this match specifically
Because like me, he was curious to who was the better f*ckin Protege
And i think it's f*ckin clear, that Half's the true f*ckin Prodigy.
This was a good ending. My only problem with it is that in your last 4 bars 3 of the 4 have an ending symable of “ee” and one has an ending sylable of “aye”. If your bars were shorter it wouldn’t be a problem but since they are broken into parts, that ending sylable is what ties them together.
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Conclusion:
Overall I felt that both rappers fed off of each other and their raps reflected that. Both of their first rounds were the best, followed by their 3rd, with the 2nd round being my least favorite from both. Recently I’ve chosen to stop judging by round and judge the match as a whole.
You both did very well, however there can only be one winner.
Overall, I felt TheSeige performed better. I felt his flows were more natural and and his disses hit harder.
I'm going first and I'm kinda scared...
I don't know what to say and I'm so unprepared...
B*TCH PLEASE!
I was born to seize
these opportunities
I make the most of those moments I guarantee
and I can see with utmost clarity
that skill like mines a rarity!
to say anything else would be heresy
I'm addin fuel to my fire like kerosene
imma take half
and light him up like a match
and after the flash
only a half of his hair is seen
and this match doesn't even seem fair to me
cuz i pass out rhymes like I'm a charity
you should have some! because apparently,
you're in a sad time of scarcity
it's actually embarrassing
so now do you care to see?
compared to me
everything you make is just a parody
and imma wipe you out like a cherokee
broken, smokin, perishing
hear the sound of the angels caroling
grow dim as half starts barreling
down towards hell so scarily
and I'm lost in this hilarity!
LMAO, The flow is great and they rhyming is spectacular. Flows smooth like silk
"You can go first, I'm not ready"
"your rhymes are so deadly I'm gettin kinda sweaty.."
"and this pressure is so heavy I'm sinking under the weight"
"i can't take initiative so I guess Imma wait.."
I really liked this part because you are trying to influence the crowd at this point and sway them your way by making it seem like actually said that stuff.
well you just made the mistake
by posting late
you gave me the first move and now I'll take first place!
so whatcha gonna do halfmoonuzumaki?
try to predict my moves as if you can use haki?
be careful when you use esoteric terms. I had no clue what Haki was when I read this rap. Based on the context I knew it was something involving precognitive ability but I had no clue where it came from, so it fell short with me. I searched for it and found it on onepiece wiki so now I know, but that’s a lot of work to get a joke.
for instance,
don't say that you are great or that you're better than me
when you have to explain every rap the judges are forced to read
and then when they vote against you, you b*tch a little fit
saying "look at this line riker accidentally bit!"
god im surprised the judges actually deal with this sh*t
if you're just gonna cry after every little crit-
tique
cuz it's just f*ck in-
weak
the way your inst-
inct
is to cry like a faucet sink!
I like the way you stylized these lines but that faucet sink line didn’t give it the hard hitting ending that the setup deserved
"and omg gingka stole a few lines!"
"how is he supposed to judge mine??"
easily.
no vote for you and one for the siege
you don't need to worry cuz imma win this with ease
in fact for the judges, this decisions a breeze!
so it's your turn now, but there's no way you'll come back
cuz just like shade, no one reads your raps
Nice ending.
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Round 1: Halfmoon
It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
LOL, nice science word play. I see what you did there.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Nice rebuttal. It was a good move to build yourself up by saying you won all your matches and he won by default.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
This grouping had good setup but it didn’t finish the way it could have. Punch line was weak.
Takin pointless shots at a n*gga you aint battlin
Simply goes to show that ive got this p*ssy n*gga rattlin
You've got "shade" on your mind, you should be thinkin of me
The way you talkin Riker, I think you might take the D
In more ways then one, in the sack and as a rapper.
'Cause your flow's nonexistent,like you've no need for a wrapper.
Again you started strong by trying to use his rhymes against him, but I didn’t understand the last line.
You can say you sparked the match, cuzz without a doubt im on fire
This-like-a-fanfic-writer-tryna-match-wits-with-the-Pervy-Poet-Jiraiya
You think i wasnt ready, son you fell for my trap
First i wanted to guage the passion you were puttin in your rap
And ive seen it first hand, you lack the one thing that Ive got.
That'd be pure dark raw emotion,while your rap's are just afterthought.
Mine have heart and have soul,
Yours are weak and worth nothing.
Pullin fake quotes out the air,
Tryna act like they worth somethin
NvG made this on the base so Siege could get a public thumpin'
Because similar to Minato with FTG, its Halfmoon Siege wont be touchin.
Nice solid ending.
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Round 2: Seige
Let's start with the "basics" shall we?
And for every wrong half said lets add another tally
You said
"my rhymes are nothing more than basic"
meaning they're low on the Ph Scale
In your words I couldn't face it
But herein lies your fail
If my rhymes are lower than a base then that means their acidic
So I'm shootin poison in your face whenever I spit it
And I don't HAVE to admit it cuz I got HALF to admit it
He took his own ass and kicked it then gave himself a ticket!
Good job at turning his own words against him.
The dovahkiin tried to bring it
But his sword, he couldn't swing it
If he had half a mind he'd see that
I already Shot him through the knee cap!
Halfmoon used to be a rapper like me
Till I ripped out his throat and hung him from a tree
Cuz you're a wannabe siege you see?
You say you're dragonborn which means ur born from me!
Tryin to take my skill and actin like I'm killed
Stop poppin those pills cuz I am here still
Again, another instance of flipping his raps, and nice use of the “Till I took an arrow to the knee meme”
I swear you lie more than those b*tches on one tree hill!
And it's rich, coming from a b*tch
That I'm riding Naru’s win while ur riding on his d*ck
Asking for advice every chance that you can get
You're the dog at his kitchen table, begging for a lick!
Your egos been swelling
Since NG started telling
You
what to do
from your rhymes to ur spelling
And then after the match
Youd roll onto your back
And let him give you a pat
On the underside of your belly
Good boy!!
Nice subtle continuance of when you callled him a b*tch, and that was a good rebuttle since he questioned your credibility.
You can do what your told!
But it still wont be enough if you wanna go for the gold
I've been rolling in that Au,
Ever since the sieges debut,
Undefeated motherf*cker
You think I cannot take you?
Im rising to the top
And I'm never gonna stop
I'll be bashin your skull in
While singing Blitzkrieg Bop
Not your best ending. Normally your raps seem more thought out. This one seemed rushed to me.
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Round 2: Halfmoon
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
I learned a new word today.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
I can get what you are trying to say but that last part, “without him you’dve sink in”, didn’t make sense to me.
Thats right im Dovahkin,
but dont mistake me for your kin.
The only reason i am is here is to abolish this rap sin
Born from the need to slay you,
Put here to take you out,
To rap its like my coming's the end to a deserts draught
Im a full blown miracle, but I Aint talkin water to wine,
Im talkin dis-f*ckin-memberment, the removal of your spine.
The severin of your head, have you lookin Ghadaffi
You tried but failed you f*ckin sham, you're not ever gonna top me.
Im like a f*ckin missile, once i go off youll NEVER f*ckin stop me.
Ill leave my name on your mind, brand you Half-moon-U-Zu-Ma-Ki's.
Your flow felt a little forced in the middle of your rap (not shown) but it picked back up in this segment and you ended it well. Good job
At this point I’m pretty much split. Both of your first rounds were stronger than your second.
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Round 3: Seige
Forgive me for what I'm about to say
But his names dr. Proof, he's not f*cking Dr. Dre
So I really don't give a damn who he is on the base!
To me he's just one more hater standing in my way
LOL, I like how you called him on his shout out from Dr. Proof.
But I'm cruising in the fast lane and I ain't touching the brake
And if I run-a-f*cka-ova it won't be a mistake
I'm pushin down on full throttle
And you know i swear to God I'll
throttle this b*tch until he wobbles
And like an empty bottle he topples
and shatters on the floor
There's a piece of half, here's a piece of half, here's half o piece more
I let out half o laugh
And stomp my foot on top his ass
And he goes up into smoke like a cloud of powdered glass
You never had a chance
And there you go again, trying to explain your raps
Nice rewind to an earlier diss.
Cuz I can burn through any game this child starts playing
First its Skyrim, and now it's battleship
Reality: get into it
cuz half seems like he's*losing it
He seems to think that we're in World War 2
Because he got his ass kicked then and he's losing now too
His coaching leader is gone so he doesn't know what to do
Except get shot by my words, and verbally run through
It was clever to address his puns and flip it against him. Well done.
Youve got three fans! God d*mn, you're famous!
How much did you pay for them to stick their d*cks in ur anus? <-- LMAO
Now I know what you're gonna say,
"where's your fanbase?"
Does anyone want you to win first place?
Why yes they do!
You can see their names in the space
Where it says "Match 16 Judges"
And that's just a little taste!
Everyone in the rap group
Wants me to smack you
For thinking ur the sh*t cuz you got proof to rep you
And made alts to help you
You could say that hells blue
It doesn't mean it's all true
Your "girl" is probably a recluse
A dude who wants to get loose
Or just a random guy that's just tryna get a rep boost
This was a good set. You came at harder than your previous round.
And you'll also prolly talk about how I took so long
And say that thts the only reason why my rap is so strong
The truth is, I'm doin it to spite you
Took my time and wrote a haiku
Half was a missile
And he tried hard to get off
But that b*tch f*cked up
One more prediction before my last round stops
Half will start bitchin when the judgements drop
And when the judges start tellin him why he lost
He'll sit down and cry out purple tear drops.
The Haiku didn’t do it for me. If you are going to do something like that you need to knock it out of the park.
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Round 3: Halfmoon
Alts? I dont need them. Its f*ckin clear that youre outclassed.
Thats three votes for me, meaning you are stuck in last.
I think siege is forgettin that the base counts as two judges
Its and pretty safe to say that they all think that Siege is rubbish.
And when it comes to sensei, you sould call him Master Roshi,
Cuzz im Goku and youre Krillin, Im like Mario you Yoshi.
Because when you step to me you know I always take the trophy
But when it comes to killin? Man thats sh*ts when im cozy.
I liked the rhyming scheme here, however, your last line came up short. I understand the point you are trying get at (you are comfortable with killing), but words like cozy make people think, warm, comfortable and soft. And that how it felt to me… soft.
Second round you droppin filled with names that aint 'ven mine
Tried to talk weak sh*t, then added in lame rhyme.
I waited all this time, for such cockamamy sh*t?
Its like tryna spit big game, then tryna use a baby d*ck
You were poppin in and out this thread since last night call you wack-a-mole
Preparin such weak sh*t, then tryna audition for the leading roll-
_And expectin to get the part like you were someone big like Swayze
Then comin in to face me to-be savig'ly-torn apart like "Crazy!"
Be carefull when mentioning his second round because you are on round 3 now and if you’re going all the way back to round 2 it tells me you couldn’t find anything to attack in round 3.
I aint even gonn get into the sh*t NG said to me bout you,
Because im not that f*ckin lame,
I can come up with my OWN sh*t you "Noob",
Dont even need "Half" of my brain.
Call me Green Day in my prime, Right round the time
When they dropped their hit Novacane
Because im winnin over masses,
Got em hooked call me Ly-ri-co-caine
You had a nice ABAB rhyme scheme going then it got switched up and suddenly ended. I felt like this set needed a couple more bars to end propperly. It felt like it just stopped.
Now do you get it? You f*ckin little genin sh*t?
Stop tryna pull a konahamaru, and hop off of my d*ck.
Stop tryna front like a Hollow, when you KNOW im f*ckin Ichigo
And the words that im spitting, f*ckin sharp, call im Zanpakuto
Ive said it once before ill say it again call me Battosai
But ill do more than slice your neck, Ill f*ckin revel in your final cry.
And compare me to Goku,'cause ill eat you no doubt, call you curly fry.
Im the King of this Rap- Game, Call me rap's Yugi-Moto
Ill rip through you;... 8-gates, this finish aint need no Photo
Cuzz im faster than Super Sonic, My Rhymes, are Supersonic
Nah i didnt stutter up, Im talkin Pokemon, you moronic?
Nah you straight up confused, thats what Supersonic tends to do to ya
It gets inside ya head, and f*ckin chokes ya (im talkin uvula)
I mentioned this with seige and now I’m sayiong it to you. Be carefull with esoteric rhymes, because not every knows these character or terms and your raps will suffer because of it.
Ive laid waste to this Siege,
I F*ckin straight stomped him and his tracks
I mean it i literally, stopped Siege in his f*ckin tracks.
I f*ckin showed hes weak as f*ck, and cant spit without NaruG
I know this cuzz he wouldnt coach this match specifically
Because like me, he was curious to who was the better f*ckin Protege
And i think it's f*ckin clear, that Half's the true f*ckin Prodigy.
This was a good ending. My only problem with it is that in your last 4 bars 3 of the 4 have an ending symable of “ee” and one has an ending sylable of “aye”. If your bars were shorter it wouldn’t be a problem but since they are broken into parts, that ending sylable is what ties them together.
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Conclusion:
Overall I felt that both rappers fed off of each other and their raps reflected that. Both of their first rounds were the best, followed by their 3rd, with the 2nd round being my least favorite from both. Recently I’ve chosen to stop judging by round and judge the match as a whole.
You both did very well, however there can only be one winner.
Overall, I felt TheSeige performed better. I felt his flows were more natural and and his disses hit harder.
Hey guys, first I wanna say I’m REALLY SORRY for taking so damn long with this… You guys know me though and you know I’m normally punctual and I wouldn’t just flake out on Judging for no reason, I’ve been way busy with work stuff and couldn’t even do it on the weekend so I got up extra early 2 days straight to put in time doing this, so here it is and again, I’m really sorry for my delay.
ROUND 1:
The Siege:
I'm going first and I'm kinda scared...
I don't know what to say and I'm so unprepared...
B*TCH PLEASE!
I was born to seize
these opportunities
I make the most of those moments I guarantee
and I can see with utmost clarity
that skill like mines a rarity!
to say anything else would be heresy
I'm addin fuel to my fire like kerosene
Ok so this is a nice beginning in terms of flow. It’s a little generic, meaning it’s just a flow like in a cipher or something with braggadocio, but the flow is tight and really smooth so overall it’s not bad.
imma take half
and light him up like a match
and after the flash
only a half of his hair is seen
So this was unique, from “kerosene” to “seen” there were 4 internal-type rhymes, which is actually pretty hard to pull off. So even though it wasn’t much of a diss, lol, it was a well executed flow.
and this match doesn't even seem fair to me
cuz i pass out rhymes like I'm a charity
you should have some! because apparently,
you're in a sad time of scarcity
it's actually embarrassing
so now do you care to see?
compared to me
everything you make is just a parody
And finally here’s a diss, but it wasn’t much of one… but again, it’s a tight flow. Also, I do like the idea of what you’re saying and how u set up the diss “I got so many rhymes, they’re like charity… here have some cuz ur lacking hard” and the last two lines saying “compared to me the sh*t u make’s a parody” lol that was a decent shot
and imma wipe you out like a cherokee
broken, smokin, perishing
LoL this was dope, wiping you out like a Cherokee, LoL that’s pretty hard if you really get to thinkin about the laying of Indians and sh*t.
hear the sound of the angels caroling
Nice type of imagery—it’s more hearing related, but you can see angels there and imagine them singing for someone’s death
grow dim as half starts barreling
down towards hell so scarily
and I'm lost in this hilarity!
I really like how you kept one rhyme—for the most part—from the beginning of the verse til right here. Although “Please” doesn’t exactly rhyme with “Hilarity,” it IS a kinda slant-type rhyme and it DOES work, especially with the assonance, in which the same sound does appear in all the ‘rhymes’ so well done for that.
"You can go first, I'm not ready"
"your rhymes are so deadly I'm gettin kinda sweaty.."
"and this pressure is so heavy I'm sinking under the weight"
"i can't take initiative so I guess Imma wait.."
well you just made the mistake
by posting late
you gave me the first move and now I'll take first place!
I’m not too big a fan on that fake convo, but it was still a way of dissing him by making fun of him and making it look like he’s thinking some weak things. But I do like the “first move” “first place” line.
so whatcha gonna do halfmoonuzumaki?
try to predict my moves as if you can use haki?
LoL this was a good line. One more word in “you can use haki” to make it 5 syllables and it would’ve been perfect but it was great and a nice use of “predictions/haki”
doesn't matter what you say because you still cannot block me
you can resist all you want cuz there's no way that you can top me
in fact
how you made it to the finals is actually pretty shocking
but dont worry the siege is here to expose any bullsh*t you start talking
for instance,
don't say that you are great or that you're better than me
when you have to explain every rap the judges are forced to read
Ok so here’s some sh*t on your opponent. Nice start, I hope you keep going cuz this is something people seeing this battle can relate to and go back and check out
and then when they vote against you, you b*tch a little fit
LoL ok good
saying "look at this line riker accidentally bit!"
god im surprised the judges actually deal with this sh*t
if you're just gonna cry after every little crit-
tique
cuz it's just f*ck in-
weak
the way your inst-
inct
is to cry like a faucet sink!
This was a nice diss about him bitching and whining, and the set up/delivery was dope the way you broke it up at the end of each line
"and omg gingka stole a few lines!"
"how is he supposed to judge mine??"
easily.
no vote for you and one for the siege
LoL this was funny. I did see that he was saying this and LoL it did get a little out of proportion but still this was a good set up since he was saying stuff like “how’s he gonna judge?” and u say “easily… one vote for me, none for you” it really was set up well.
you don't need to worry cuz imma win this with ease
in fact for the judges, this decisions a breeze!
so it's your turn now, but there's no way you'll come back
cuz just like shade, no one reads your raps
LOL ouch, I feel bad for Shade now (but unfortunately, it was true at least at first… although he’s done much better since the first couple judgments)
Well, overall, even though I said lots of complimentary things… This verse isn’t as strong as it first appears. The BEST thing about it is the flow; it’s hard, quick, tight, smooth, and pretty darn slick. The problem is that this is a battle, personal shots and disses and ripping your opponent a new one are essential and this had virtually no disses until the end, although the disses at the end were pretty good. But really this was good/fun to read, but you’re gonna need much more in the way of dissing/battling.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
LoL that first line is from a Palmer’s Square song for the 2011 MC Showcase (LoL half you thought I wouldn’t know? I told you man… I know) but it was used poignantly cuz the battle of Blitzkrieg was a horrific WWII battle with lots of deaths on both sides.
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
This was dope. The use of pH and basic to describe ur opponents flow was a pretty good analogy and a good diss.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
LoL now this was a dope turnaround from Siege’s “lyrical dragon,” taking a slain dragon’s soul if I’m not mistaken. Dope metaphor
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
LoL so “I’ll take ur soul/essence, but it won’t do me much good” lol nice continuance of the metaphor. It wasn’t part of the original metaphor, it added to it which was nice.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
This is a good diss to say ‘you shouldn’t have won’ and saying ‘you lost but moved on is a contradiction’ that was a good word to use for it, good way to describe it.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
More of the diss, although for some reason I like the line “riding his win, left keys in ignition” part, it was good. You’re “riding” the win, he left the “Keys in the ignition” so he could “ride” it was a good description, partly imagery partly good idea/bit of wordplay.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
LoL at Sandy Hookin and yes, Swiss cheese has lots holes. More decent diss-based imagery/analogy (the sandy hook part)
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
LoL now this was good wordplay, “you’re a gymnast but can’t flip” lol even though it seems really simple, it was good wordplay.
Takin pointless shots at a n*gga you aint battlin
Simply goes to show that ive got this p*ssy n*gga rattlin
You've got "shade" on your mind, you should be thinkin of me
The way you talkin Riker, I think you might take the D
LoL ok, thinking of lots of dudes so u want the D… ok.
In more ways then one, in the sack and as a rapper.
'Cause your flow's nonexistent,like you've no need for a wrapper.
You can say you sparked the match, cuzz without a doubt im on fire
Ok again, a good flip since Siege said he was sparkin a match
This-like-a-fanfic-writer-tryna-match-wits-with-the-Pervy-Poet-Jiraiya
Good flow, I like the ‘rhyme’ of fire/jiraiya, lol though it needs to be said with a little accent
You think i wasnt ready, son you fell for my trap
First i wanted to guage the passion you were puttin in your rap
And ive seen it first hand, you lack the one thing that Ive got.
That'd be pure dark raw emotion,while your rap's are just afterthought.
Another flip; opponent’s fake convo about Half not being ready, he flips it into it being a trap so he can observe the opponent before making a move. Then, during observation, he saw a very strong flaw, one that he himself does not have. Good wording, good idea
Mine have heart and have soul,
Yours are weak and worth nothing.
Pullin fake quotes out the air,
Tryna act like they worth something
Continuance of diss, again referring to the fake convo “pullin fake quotes” LoL
NvG made this on the base so Siege could get a public thumpin'
Because similar to Minato with FTG, its Halfmoon Siege wont be touchin
I like this ending, especially the public thumpin.
So this verse had a lots of disses, which were executed with lots of wordplay and imagery and some analogies and metaphors for good measure. The Flow wasn’t as hard as Siege’s, but in my opinion, he seems that Siege sacrificed a lot of the dissing so he could put a really hard flow into place. Here, Half’s flow wasn’t as strong, but it was better in terms of what you do for a battle.
Winner: HALFMOON
ROUND 2:
The Siege:
When I said in round one,
That your bull would be corrected
LoL just a question, where did you say in round 1 that his “bull would be corrected…?” I re-read it and don’t see it…
You must've been thinkin
"challenge accepted!"
Let's start with the "basics" shall we?
And for every wrong half said lets add another tally
You said
"my rhymes are nothing more than basic"
meaning they're low on the Ph Scale
In your words I couldn't face it
But herein lies your fail
If my rhymes are lower than a base then that means their acidic
Well… not exactly… this is a REALLY good try, a good shot, but it’s wrong… he said your rhymes are “nothing more than basic” according to the pH scale… meaning that on the pH scale, it says your rhymes are basic… they ARE basic, they aren’t lower than basic… pH below 7 is acidic, pH above 7 is basic… he said ur rhymes are not more than basic, so they are basic… if he had said “according to pH scale, your rhymes are LESS than basic” yeah THEN you’d be spot on… but this isn’t correct. BUT like I said, it’s a good shot, it just was done incorrectly, plus I’m being very technical, lol. But it’s something that I noticed right away, so I had to point it out…
HOWEVER, once again, the flow is really tight and spot on. And everything was good, except that it was wrong information… LoL
So I'm shootin poison in your face whenever I spit it
And I don't HAVE to admit it cuz I got HALF to admit it
He took his own ass and kicked it then gave himself a ticket!
Lol yeah so this whole part to me is a little bit of a fail cuz it’s all based on having said the wrong thing. And maybe I AM being too technical, but when it’s something I noticed so easily, I have to point it out.
The dovahkiin tried to bring it
Ok, this is looking better if u can flip the Dragonborn stuff (which I think Dovahkiin is dragon-language for the word dragonborn right? I’m not sure if that’s correct though but that’s what I’m going with cuz I know it’s something like that)
But his sword, he couldn't swing it
If he had half a mind he'd see that
I already Shot him through the knee cap!
lol
Halfmoon used to be a rapper like me
Till I ripped out his throat and hung him from a tree
Cuz you're a wannabe siege you see?
You say you're dragonborn which means ur born from me!
This was the best flip you’ve done so far. In accordance to your decree of being a dragon, half’s flip of being Dragonborn and u flipping that meaning, using wordplay, into being ‘born from a dragon’ in other words, born from you. Nice.
Tryin to take my skill and actin like I'm killed
Stop poppin those pills cuz I am here still
LoL does Half pop pills? I thought it was only me who did that…?
I swear you lie more than those b*tches on one tree hill!
And it's rich, coming from a b*tch
That I'm riding Narus win while ur riding on his d*ck
Asking for advice every chance that you can get
You're the dog at his kitchen table, begging for a lick!
Hm… LoL… purely lyrically and in context, this is a hard hit. He says you get ur rhymes from someone, but point out that he does the same, only u elaborated more and talked more ish. This was pretty good
Your egos been swelling
Since NG started telling
You
what to do
from your rhymes to ur spelling
And then after the match
Youd roll onto your back
And let him give you a pat
On the underside of your belly
Good boy!!
You can do what your told!
LoL this was pretty good elaboration on ur previous statement. Now he’s being compared to a dog, getting belly rubbed for doing as he’s told, LoL.
But it still wont be enough if you wanna go for the gold
I've been rolling in that Au,
Ever since the sieges debut,
Nice use of Au
Undefeated motherf*cker
You think I cannot take you?
Im rising to the top
And I'm never gonna stop
I'll be bashin your skull in
While singing Blitzkrieg Bop
LoL, all in all, this was not a bad ending. This verse was much better than verse 1 in terms of battling. The flow was still there, it was still on fire, and this time around there were more and better disses and a good flip (and, although u had a good idea, one failed flip that took up a lot of space). So good job on this verse, it’s a big improvement.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
LoL ok yeah, you addressed it like I did. And LoL @ the wiki part, “u went to check but didn’t and so you f’d up” is the basic (lol, get it?) message here.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
So another bounce back on this, but this wasn’t exactly a diss… or really even a good flip… but it DID sorta negate Siege’s last statement about it… so I guess there’s really no points either way, they kinda cancel each other out, LoL.
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
Ok now this part WAS a diss
And now youre sinkin, like H9 i sunk your battleship
With weak lines like that, its like you GIVIN me the cham-p-ionship
This was good, but dude I SWEAR I saw this the first time I read Siege’s lyrics… did Siege edit that part out or something? Cuz I could swear it was there, but maybe I’m just trippin? Either way, this is still good cuz if it’s not Siege’s actual words, it’s like showing an example of something weak he’d say
Two whole verses, you only addressed two things!
One was you not understanding, the other was both our teach--ings!
This was somewhat poignant. To say two WHOLE verses and they talk about 2 things… that’s saying that ur opponent has no depth, no substance… and that’s always a hard diss to someone
You're getting laid straight out,
Call siege the wet laundry.
Cuzz i'll twist him till he shouts,
LoL for some reason this one actually took me a second look to get it, LoL. Kinda one of those more corny lines, but corny in a way that made me laugh so it’s ok, lol.
And drain him dry of all his energy.
Im on that Blitzkrieg Bop swag, gonna bring it like Kristallnacht
Gonna treat you like A True-Jew-In-'42-And-Send-Your-Corpse-To-The-Body-Pot
Oh, ouch. LoL nice turnaround on his “Blitzkrieg Bop” even though u said blitzkrieg first, u both used it in different ways and now u flipped it around again to being swag and bring it like Kristallnacht, man for those who don’t know and don’t wanna Wiki it, Kristallnacht was straight persecution/attacks on Jews that happened for like 2 or 3 straight days and I don’t even think it was done by the german army… I think it was Brownshirts and it was for sure done by German Civilians and there was no police or gov’t stopping them, they just let it happen. The second line was hard as f*ck, I love those type of lines. BUT I hope the first line wasn’t a lead-in to the second, cuz the Kristallnacht incident was like 4 or 5 years before ’42, LoL but I don’t think it is cuz they are different things, the incident then talking about Nazi camps later so it works.
F*ckin roast you to ashes, call me a Lyrical Nazi,
Cause Im the true Rap-Master Race, this clear,how can you not-see?
Damn… this a nice addition to Nazi ideas, I’m the ‘master rap race’ lol damn, that was cool.
Thats right im Dovahkin,
but dont mistake me for your kin.
The only reason i am is here is to abolish this rap sin
Born from the need to slay you,
Put here to take you out,
Wasn’t really a flip, but did mention dovahkiin but this was all pretty generic
To rap its like my coming's the end to a deserts draught
Im a full blown miracle, but I Aint talkin water to wine,
I like this, miracle but no water to wine aka Jesus miracle
Im talkin dis-f*ckin-memberment, the removal of your spine.
LoL not sure that’s a miracle though…
The severin of your head, have you lookin Ghadaffi
You tried but failed you f*ckin sham, you're not ever gonna top me.
Im like a f*ckin missile, once i go off youll NEVER f*ckin stop me.
Ill leave my name on your mind, brand you Half-moon-U-Zu-Ma-Ki's.
Slightly better than average ending.
So overall, this verse was pretty damn good. It had good flips as well as original disses. Then you went pretty hard with the Nazi-based sh*t. you didn’t just mention nazi’s, u went full blown Kristallnacht, LoL and the master rap race line was dope. So round 2 was pretty hard for me to decide who to give a vote to, it was not easy or obvious at all, so I did something I don’t normally do and went virtually line by line and gave points for certain things—like a good diss, a good flip, a slick line, good rhymes, all that type of sh*t. and, in the end, I came up with my vote.
Round 2 Winner: HALFMOONUZUMAKI.
MATCH WINNER: HALFMOONUZUMAKI
So Half wins the match since there’s only 3 rounds and he got 2. And I’m glad I didn’t have to do the 3rd verse cuz that sh*t’s hard as hell also to give a vote to someone, LoL. I did read it and that sh*t is dope from both parties. A quick word though, in round 3 Siege you said “I got the basic thing the first time, you wannabe chemist” but in your verse, when u responded with the acidic thing, it really was incorrect the way u set it up. BUT it was good to use that platform to say that you spit acidic, but the setup/delivery was simply not done correctly. Other than that, verse 3 was hard as f*ck: saying u can burn through any childs game, from Skyrim to Battleship, that was dope, your WWII lines (it was a 2 line set up), there were good flips, especially the one referring to the judges, dope.
And Half, round 3, your verse was hella chill/laid back whereas Siege was hella hard and in your face, showing calm/composure and also highlighting a difference in rapping styles. Usually these types of matches where those type of opponents are pitted together are way easy to judge, but this time you both did your thing so well that it didn’t matter, it was way hard to judge all the rounds. I gave Half 2 votes, but believe me, it was not easy AT ALL. Even in the first round, despite how my words may have sounded, it was hard to judge.
You BOTH did AWESOME in this match, and it was totally kick-ass from the beginning til the end. Again, I’m sorry I’m not putting round 3, but Half, getting 2 votes, already gets the overall vote, and I truly don’t have much time until maybe 2 more days from now to even go through it like this and post it so I’m just not gonna do it.
ROUND 1:
The Siege:
I'm going first and I'm kinda scared...
I don't know what to say and I'm so unprepared...
B*TCH PLEASE!
I was born to seize
these opportunities
I make the most of those moments I guarantee
and I can see with utmost clarity
that skill like mines a rarity!
to say anything else would be heresy
I'm addin fuel to my fire like kerosene
Ok so this is a nice beginning in terms of flow. It’s a little generic, meaning it’s just a flow like in a cipher or something with braggadocio, but the flow is tight and really smooth so overall it’s not bad.
imma take half
and light him up like a match
and after the flash
only a half of his hair is seen
So this was unique, from “kerosene” to “seen” there were 4 internal-type rhymes, which is actually pretty hard to pull off. So even though it wasn’t much of a diss, lol, it was a well executed flow.
and this match doesn't even seem fair to me
cuz i pass out rhymes like I'm a charity
you should have some! because apparently,
you're in a sad time of scarcity
it's actually embarrassing
so now do you care to see?
compared to me
everything you make is just a parody
And finally here’s a diss, but it wasn’t much of one… but again, it’s a tight flow. Also, I do like the idea of what you’re saying and how u set up the diss “I got so many rhymes, they’re like charity… here have some cuz ur lacking hard” and the last two lines saying “compared to me the sh*t u make’s a parody” lol that was a decent shot
and imma wipe you out like a cherokee
broken, smokin, perishing
LoL this was dope, wiping you out like a Cherokee, LoL that’s pretty hard if you really get to thinkin about the laying of Indians and sh*t.
hear the sound of the angels caroling
Nice type of imagery—it’s more hearing related, but you can see angels there and imagine them singing for someone’s death
grow dim as half starts barreling
down towards hell so scarily
and I'm lost in this hilarity!
I really like how you kept one rhyme—for the most part—from the beginning of the verse til right here. Although “Please” doesn’t exactly rhyme with “Hilarity,” it IS a kinda slant-type rhyme and it DOES work, especially with the assonance, in which the same sound does appear in all the ‘rhymes’ so well done for that.
"You can go first, I'm not ready"
"your rhymes are so deadly I'm gettin kinda sweaty.."
"and this pressure is so heavy I'm sinking under the weight"
"i can't take initiative so I guess Imma wait.."
well you just made the mistake
by posting late
you gave me the first move and now I'll take first place!
I’m not too big a fan on that fake convo, but it was still a way of dissing him by making fun of him and making it look like he’s thinking some weak things. But I do like the “first move” “first place” line.
so whatcha gonna do halfmoonuzumaki?
try to predict my moves as if you can use haki?
LoL this was a good line. One more word in “you can use haki” to make it 5 syllables and it would’ve been perfect but it was great and a nice use of “predictions/haki”
doesn't matter what you say because you still cannot block me
you can resist all you want cuz there's no way that you can top me
in fact
how you made it to the finals is actually pretty shocking
but dont worry the siege is here to expose any bullsh*t you start talking
for instance,
don't say that you are great or that you're better than me
when you have to explain every rap the judges are forced to read
Ok so here’s some sh*t on your opponent. Nice start, I hope you keep going cuz this is something people seeing this battle can relate to and go back and check out
and then when they vote against you, you b*tch a little fit
LoL ok good
saying "look at this line riker accidentally bit!"
god im surprised the judges actually deal with this sh*t
if you're just gonna cry after every little crit-
tique
cuz it's just f*ck in-
weak
the way your inst-
inct
is to cry like a faucet sink!
This was a nice diss about him bitching and whining, and the set up/delivery was dope the way you broke it up at the end of each line
"and omg gingka stole a few lines!"
"how is he supposed to judge mine??"
easily.
no vote for you and one for the siege
LoL this was funny. I did see that he was saying this and LoL it did get a little out of proportion but still this was a good set up since he was saying stuff like “how’s he gonna judge?” and u say “easily… one vote for me, none for you” it really was set up well.
you don't need to worry cuz imma win this with ease
in fact for the judges, this decisions a breeze!
so it's your turn now, but there's no way you'll come back
cuz just like shade, no one reads your raps
LOL ouch, I feel bad for Shade now (but unfortunately, it was true at least at first… although he’s done much better since the first couple judgments)
Well, overall, even though I said lots of complimentary things… This verse isn’t as strong as it first appears. The BEST thing about it is the flow; it’s hard, quick, tight, smooth, and pretty darn slick. The problem is that this is a battle, personal shots and disses and ripping your opponent a new one are essential and this had virtually no disses until the end, although the disses at the end were pretty good. But really this was good/fun to read, but you’re gonna need much more in the way of dissing/battling.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
LoL that first line is from a Palmer’s Square song for the 2011 MC Showcase (LoL half you thought I wouldn’t know? I told you man… I know) but it was used poignantly cuz the battle of Blitzkrieg was a horrific WWII battle with lots of deaths on both sides.
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
This was dope. The use of pH and basic to describe ur opponents flow was a pretty good analogy and a good diss.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
LoL now this was a dope turnaround from Siege’s “lyrical dragon,” taking a slain dragon’s soul if I’m not mistaken. Dope metaphor
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
LoL so “I’ll take ur soul/essence, but it won’t do me much good” lol nice continuance of the metaphor. It wasn’t part of the original metaphor, it added to it which was nice.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
This is a good diss to say ‘you shouldn’t have won’ and saying ‘you lost but moved on is a contradiction’ that was a good word to use for it, good way to describe it.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
More of the diss, although for some reason I like the line “riding his win, left keys in ignition” part, it was good. You’re “riding” the win, he left the “Keys in the ignition” so he could “ride” it was a good description, partly imagery partly good idea/bit of wordplay.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
LoL at Sandy Hookin and yes, Swiss cheese has lots holes. More decent diss-based imagery/analogy (the sandy hook part)
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
LoL now this was good wordplay, “you’re a gymnast but can’t flip” lol even though it seems really simple, it was good wordplay.
Takin pointless shots at a n*gga you aint battlin
Simply goes to show that ive got this p*ssy n*gga rattlin
You've got "shade" on your mind, you should be thinkin of me
The way you talkin Riker, I think you might take the D
LoL ok, thinking of lots of dudes so u want the D… ok.
In more ways then one, in the sack and as a rapper.
'Cause your flow's nonexistent,like you've no need for a wrapper.
You can say you sparked the match, cuzz without a doubt im on fire
Ok again, a good flip since Siege said he was sparkin a match
This-like-a-fanfic-writer-tryna-match-wits-with-the-Pervy-Poet-Jiraiya
Good flow, I like the ‘rhyme’ of fire/jiraiya, lol though it needs to be said with a little accent
You think i wasnt ready, son you fell for my trap
First i wanted to guage the passion you were puttin in your rap
And ive seen it first hand, you lack the one thing that Ive got.
That'd be pure dark raw emotion,while your rap's are just afterthought.
Another flip; opponent’s fake convo about Half not being ready, he flips it into it being a trap so he can observe the opponent before making a move. Then, during observation, he saw a very strong flaw, one that he himself does not have. Good wording, good idea
Mine have heart and have soul,
Yours are weak and worth nothing.
Pullin fake quotes out the air,
Tryna act like they worth something
Continuance of diss, again referring to the fake convo “pullin fake quotes” LoL
NvG made this on the base so Siege could get a public thumpin'
Because similar to Minato with FTG, its Halfmoon Siege wont be touchin
I like this ending, especially the public thumpin.
So this verse had a lots of disses, which were executed with lots of wordplay and imagery and some analogies and metaphors for good measure. The Flow wasn’t as hard as Siege’s, but in my opinion, he seems that Siege sacrificed a lot of the dissing so he could put a really hard flow into place. Here, Half’s flow wasn’t as strong, but it was better in terms of what you do for a battle.
Winner: HALFMOON
ROUND 2:
The Siege:
When I said in round one,
That your bull would be corrected
LoL just a question, where did you say in round 1 that his “bull would be corrected…?” I re-read it and don’t see it…
You must've been thinkin
"challenge accepted!"
Let's start with the "basics" shall we?
And for every wrong half said lets add another tally
You said
"my rhymes are nothing more than basic"
meaning they're low on the Ph Scale
In your words I couldn't face it
But herein lies your fail
If my rhymes are lower than a base then that means their acidic
Well… not exactly… this is a REALLY good try, a good shot, but it’s wrong… he said your rhymes are “nothing more than basic” according to the pH scale… meaning that on the pH scale, it says your rhymes are basic… they ARE basic, they aren’t lower than basic… pH below 7 is acidic, pH above 7 is basic… he said ur rhymes are not more than basic, so they are basic… if he had said “according to pH scale, your rhymes are LESS than basic” yeah THEN you’d be spot on… but this isn’t correct. BUT like I said, it’s a good shot, it just was done incorrectly, plus I’m being very technical, lol. But it’s something that I noticed right away, so I had to point it out…
HOWEVER, once again, the flow is really tight and spot on. And everything was good, except that it was wrong information… LoL
So I'm shootin poison in your face whenever I spit it
And I don't HAVE to admit it cuz I got HALF to admit it
He took his own ass and kicked it then gave himself a ticket!
Lol yeah so this whole part to me is a little bit of a fail cuz it’s all based on having said the wrong thing. And maybe I AM being too technical, but when it’s something I noticed so easily, I have to point it out.
The dovahkiin tried to bring it
Ok, this is looking better if u can flip the Dragonborn stuff (which I think Dovahkiin is dragon-language for the word dragonborn right? I’m not sure if that’s correct though but that’s what I’m going with cuz I know it’s something like that)
But his sword, he couldn't swing it
If he had half a mind he'd see that
I already Shot him through the knee cap!
lol
Halfmoon used to be a rapper like me
Till I ripped out his throat and hung him from a tree
Cuz you're a wannabe siege you see?
You say you're dragonborn which means ur born from me!
This was the best flip you’ve done so far. In accordance to your decree of being a dragon, half’s flip of being Dragonborn and u flipping that meaning, using wordplay, into being ‘born from a dragon’ in other words, born from you. Nice.
Tryin to take my skill and actin like I'm killed
Stop poppin those pills cuz I am here still
LoL does Half pop pills? I thought it was only me who did that…?
I swear you lie more than those b*tches on one tree hill!
And it's rich, coming from a b*tch
That I'm riding Narus win while ur riding on his d*ck
Asking for advice every chance that you can get
You're the dog at his kitchen table, begging for a lick!
Hm… LoL… purely lyrically and in context, this is a hard hit. He says you get ur rhymes from someone, but point out that he does the same, only u elaborated more and talked more ish. This was pretty good
Your egos been swelling
Since NG started telling
You
what to do
from your rhymes to ur spelling
And then after the match
Youd roll onto your back
And let him give you a pat
On the underside of your belly
Good boy!!
You can do what your told!
LoL this was pretty good elaboration on ur previous statement. Now he’s being compared to a dog, getting belly rubbed for doing as he’s told, LoL.
But it still wont be enough if you wanna go for the gold
I've been rolling in that Au,
Ever since the sieges debut,
Nice use of Au
Undefeated motherf*cker
You think I cannot take you?
Im rising to the top
And I'm never gonna stop
I'll be bashin your skull in
While singing Blitzkrieg Bop
LoL, all in all, this was not a bad ending. This verse was much better than verse 1 in terms of battling. The flow was still there, it was still on fire, and this time around there were more and better disses and a good flip (and, although u had a good idea, one failed flip that took up a lot of space). So good job on this verse, it’s a big improvement.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
LoL ok yeah, you addressed it like I did. And LoL @ the wiki part, “u went to check but didn’t and so you f’d up” is the basic (lol, get it?) message here.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
So another bounce back on this, but this wasn’t exactly a diss… or really even a good flip… but it DID sorta negate Siege’s last statement about it… so I guess there’s really no points either way, they kinda cancel each other out, LoL.
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
Ok now this part WAS a diss
And now youre sinkin, like H9 i sunk your battleship
With weak lines like that, its like you GIVIN me the cham-p-ionship
This was good, but dude I SWEAR I saw this the first time I read Siege’s lyrics… did Siege edit that part out or something? Cuz I could swear it was there, but maybe I’m just trippin? Either way, this is still good cuz if it’s not Siege’s actual words, it’s like showing an example of something weak he’d say
Two whole verses, you only addressed two things!
One was you not understanding, the other was both our teach--ings!
This was somewhat poignant. To say two WHOLE verses and they talk about 2 things… that’s saying that ur opponent has no depth, no substance… and that’s always a hard diss to someone
You're getting laid straight out,
Call siege the wet laundry.
Cuzz i'll twist him till he shouts,
LoL for some reason this one actually took me a second look to get it, LoL. Kinda one of those more corny lines, but corny in a way that made me laugh so it’s ok, lol.
And drain him dry of all his energy.
Im on that Blitzkrieg Bop swag, gonna bring it like Kristallnacht
Gonna treat you like A True-Jew-In-'42-And-Send-Your-Corpse-To-The-Body-Pot
Oh, ouch. LoL nice turnaround on his “Blitzkrieg Bop” even though u said blitzkrieg first, u both used it in different ways and now u flipped it around again to being swag and bring it like Kristallnacht, man for those who don’t know and don’t wanna Wiki it, Kristallnacht was straight persecution/attacks on Jews that happened for like 2 or 3 straight days and I don’t even think it was done by the german army… I think it was Brownshirts and it was for sure done by German Civilians and there was no police or gov’t stopping them, they just let it happen. The second line was hard as f*ck, I love those type of lines. BUT I hope the first line wasn’t a lead-in to the second, cuz the Kristallnacht incident was like 4 or 5 years before ’42, LoL but I don’t think it is cuz they are different things, the incident then talking about Nazi camps later so it works.
F*ckin roast you to ashes, call me a Lyrical Nazi,
Cause Im the true Rap-Master Race, this clear,how can you not-see?
Damn… this a nice addition to Nazi ideas, I’m the ‘master rap race’ lol damn, that was cool.
Thats right im Dovahkin,
but dont mistake me for your kin.
The only reason i am is here is to abolish this rap sin
Born from the need to slay you,
Put here to take you out,
Wasn’t really a flip, but did mention dovahkiin but this was all pretty generic
To rap its like my coming's the end to a deserts draught
Im a full blown miracle, but I Aint talkin water to wine,
I like this, miracle but no water to wine aka Jesus miracle
Im talkin dis-f*ckin-memberment, the removal of your spine.
LoL not sure that’s a miracle though…
The severin of your head, have you lookin Ghadaffi
You tried but failed you f*ckin sham, you're not ever gonna top me.
Im like a f*ckin missile, once i go off youll NEVER f*ckin stop me.
Ill leave my name on your mind, brand you Half-moon-U-Zu-Ma-Ki's.
Slightly better than average ending.
So overall, this verse was pretty damn good. It had good flips as well as original disses. Then you went pretty hard with the Nazi-based sh*t. you didn’t just mention nazi’s, u went full blown Kristallnacht, LoL and the master rap race line was dope. So round 2 was pretty hard for me to decide who to give a vote to, it was not easy or obvious at all, so I did something I don’t normally do and went virtually line by line and gave points for certain things—like a good diss, a good flip, a slick line, good rhymes, all that type of sh*t. and, in the end, I came up with my vote.
Round 2 Winner: HALFMOONUZUMAKI.
MATCH WINNER: HALFMOONUZUMAKI
So Half wins the match since there’s only 3 rounds and he got 2. And I’m glad I didn’t have to do the 3rd verse cuz that sh*t’s hard as hell also to give a vote to someone, LoL. I did read it and that sh*t is dope from both parties. A quick word though, in round 3 Siege you said “I got the basic thing the first time, you wannabe chemist” but in your verse, when u responded with the acidic thing, it really was incorrect the way u set it up. BUT it was good to use that platform to say that you spit acidic, but the setup/delivery was simply not done correctly. Other than that, verse 3 was hard as f*ck: saying u can burn through any childs game, from Skyrim to Battleship, that was dope, your WWII lines (it was a 2 line set up), there were good flips, especially the one referring to the judges, dope.
And Half, round 3, your verse was hella chill/laid back whereas Siege was hella hard and in your face, showing calm/composure and also highlighting a difference in rapping styles. Usually these types of matches where those type of opponents are pitted together are way easy to judge, but this time you both did your thing so well that it didn’t matter, it was way hard to judge all the rounds. I gave Half 2 votes, but believe me, it was not easy AT ALL. Even in the first round, despite how my words may have sounded, it was hard to judge.
You BOTH did AWESOME in this match, and it was totally kick-ass from the beginning til the end. Again, I’m sorry I’m not putting round 3, but Half, getting 2 votes, already gets the overall vote, and I truly don’t have much time until maybe 2 more days from now to even go through it like this and post it so I’m just not gonna do it.
Hey guys, first I wanna say I’m REALLY SORRY for taking so damn long with this… You guys know me though and you know I’m normally punctual and I wouldn’t just flake out on Judging for no reason, I’ve been way busy with work stuff and couldn’t even do it on the weekend so I got up extra early 2 days straight to put in time doing this, so here it is and again, I’m really sorry for my delay.
ROUND 1:
The Siege:
I'm going first and I'm kinda scared...
I don't know what to say and I'm so unprepared...
B*TCH PLEASE!
I was born to seize
these opportunities
I make the most of those moments I guarantee
and I can see with utmost clarity
that skill like mines a rarity!
to say anything else would be heresy
I'm addin fuel to my fire like kerosene
Ok so this is a nice beginning in terms of flow. It’s a little generic, meaning it’s just a flow like in a cipher or something with braggadocio, but the flow is tight and really smooth so overall it’s not bad.
imma take half
and light him up like a match
and after the flash
only a half of his hair is seen
So this was unique, from “kerosene” to “seen” there were 4 internal-type rhymes, which is actually pretty hard to pull off. So even though it wasn’t much of a diss, lol, it was a well executed flow.
and this match doesn't even seem fair to me
cuz i pass out rhymes like I'm a charity
you should have some! because apparently,
you're in a sad time of scarcity
it's actually embarrassing
so now do you care to see?
compared to me
everything you make is just a parody
And finally here’s a diss, but it wasn’t much of one… but again, it’s a tight flow. Also, I do like the idea of what you’re saying and how u set up the diss “I got so many rhymes, they’re like charity… here have some cuz ur lacking hard” and the last two lines saying “compared to me the sh*t u make’s a parody” lol that was a decent shot
and imma wipe you out like a cherokee
broken, smokin, perishing
LoL this was dope, wiping you out like a Cherokee, LoL that’s pretty hard if you really get to thinkin about the laying of Indians and sh*t.
hear the sound of the angels caroling
Nice type of imagery—it’s more hearing related, but you can see angels there and imagine them singing for someone’s death
grow dim as half starts barreling
down towards hell so scarily
and I'm lost in this hilarity!
I really like how you kept one rhyme—for the most part—from the beginning of the verse til right here. Although “Please” doesn’t exactly rhyme with “Hilarity,” it IS a kinda slant-type rhyme and it DOES work, especially with the assonance, in which the same sound does appear in all the ‘rhymes’ so well done for that.
"You can go first, I'm not ready"
"your rhymes are so deadly I'm gettin kinda sweaty.."
"and this pressure is so heavy I'm sinking under the weight"
"i can't take initiative so I guess Imma wait.."
well you just made the mistake
by posting late
you gave me the first move and now I'll take first place!
I’m not too big a fan on that fake convo, but it was still a way of dissing him by making fun of him and making it look like he’s thinking some weak things. But I do like the “first move” “first place” line.
so whatcha gonna do halfmoonuzumaki?
try to predict my moves as if you can use haki?
LoL this was a good line. One more word in “you can use haki” to make it 5 syllables and it would’ve been perfect but it was great and a nice use of “predictions/haki”
doesn't matter what you say because you still cannot block me
you can resist all you want cuz there's no way that you can top me
in fact
how you made it to the finals is actually pretty shocking
but dont worry the siege is here to expose any bullsh*t you start talking
for instance,
don't say that you are great or that you're better than me
when you have to explain every rap the judges are forced to read
Ok so here’s some sh*t on your opponent. Nice start, I hope you keep going cuz this is something people seeing this battle can relate to
and go back and check out
and then when they vote against you, you b*tch a little fit
LoL ok good
saying "look at this line riker accidentally bit!"
god im surprised the judges actually deal with this sh*t
if you're just gonna cry after every little crit-
tique
cuz it's just f*ck in-
weak
the way your inst-
inct
is to cry like a faucet sink!
This was a nice diss about him bitching and whining, and the set up/delivery was dope the way you broke it up at the end of each line
"and omg gingka stole a few lines!"
"how is he supposed to judge mine??"
easily.
no vote for you and one for the siege
LoL this was funny. I did see that he was saying this and LoL it did get a little out of proportion but still this was a good set up since he was saying stuff like “how’s he gonna judge?” and u say “easily… one vote for me, none for you” it really was set up well.
you don't need to worry cuz imma win this with ease
in fact for the judges, this decisions a breeze!
so it's your turn now, but there's no way you'll come back
cuz just like shade, no one reads your raps
LOL ouch, I feel bad for Shade now (but unfortunately, it was true at least at first… although he’s done much better since the first couple judgments)
Well, overall, even though I said lots of complimentary things… This verse isn’t as strong as it first appears. The BEST thing about it is the flow; it’s hard, quick, tight, smooth, and pretty darn slick. The problem is that this is a battle, personal shots and disses and ripping your opponent a new one are essential and this had virtually no disses until the end, although the disses at the end were pretty good. But really this was good/fun to read, but you’re gonna need much more in the way of dissing/battling.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
LoL that first line is from a Palmer’s Square song for the 2011 MC Showcase (LoL half you thought I wouldn’t know? I told you man… I know) but it was used poignantly cuz the battle of Blitzkrieg was a horrific WWII battle with lots of deaths on both sides.
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
This was dope. The use of pH and basic to describe ur opponents flow was a pretty good analogy and a good diss.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
LoL now this was a dope turnaround from Siege’s “lyrical dragon,” taking a slain dragon’s soul if I’m not mistaken. Dope metaphor
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
LoL so “I’ll take ur soul/essence, but it won’t do me much good” lol nice continuance of the metaphor. It wasn’t part of the original metaphor, it added to it which was nice.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
This is a good diss to say ‘you shouldn’t have won’ and saying ‘you lost but moved on is a contradiction’ that was a good word to use for it, good way to describe it.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
More of the diss, although for some reason I like the line “riding his win, left keys in ignition” part, it was good. You’re “riding” the win,
he left the “Keys in the ignition” so he could “ride” it was a good description, partly imagery partly good idea/bit of wordplay.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
LoL at Sandy Hookin and yes, Swiss cheese has lots holes. More decent diss-based imagery/analogy (the sandy hook part)
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
LoL now this was good wordplay, “you’re a gymnast but can’t flip” lol even though it seems really simple, it was good wordplay.
Takin pointless shots at a n*gga you aint battlin
Simply goes to show that ive got this p*ssy n*gga rattlin
You've got "shade" on your mind, you should be thinkin of me
The way you talkin Riker, I think you might take the D
LoL ok, thinking of lots of dudes so u want the D… ok.
In more ways then one, in the sack and as a rapper.
'Cause your flow's nonexistent,like you've no need for a wrapper.
You can say you sparked the match, cuzz without a doubt im on fire
Ok again, a good flip since Siege said he was sparkin a match
This-like-a-fanfic-writer-tryna-match-wits-with-the-Pervy-Poet-Jiraiya
Good flow, I like the ‘rhyme’ of fire/jiraiya, lol though it needs to be said with a little accent
You think i wasnt ready, son you fell for my trap
First i wanted to guage the passion you were puttin in your rap
And ive seen it first hand, you lack the one thing that Ive got.
That'd be pure dark raw emotion,while your rap's are just afterthought.
Another flip; opponent’s fake convo about Half not being ready, he flips it into it being a trap so he can observe the opponent before
making a move. Then, during observation, he saw a very strong flaw, one that he himself does not have. Good wording, good idea
Mine have heart and have soul,
Yours are weak and worth nothing.
Pullin fake quotes out the air,
Tryna act like they worth something
Continuance of diss, again referring to the fake convo “pullin fake quotes” LoL
NvG made this on the base so Siege could get a public thumpin'
Because similar to Minato with FTG, its Halfmoon Siege wont be touchin
I like this ending, especially the public thumpin.
So this verse had a lots of disses, which were executed with lots of wordplay and imagery and some analogies and metaphors for good measure. The Flow wasn’t as hard as Siege’s, but in my opinion, he seems that Siege sacrificed a lot of the dissing so he could put a really hard flow into place. Here, Half’s flow wasn’t as strong, but it was better in terms of what you do for a battle.
Winner: HALFMOON
ROUND 2:
The Siege:
When I said in round one,
That your bull would be corrected
LoL just a question, where did you say in round 1 that his “bull would be corrected…?” I re-read it and don’t see it…
You must've been thinkin
"challenge accepted!"
Let's start with the "basics" shall we?
And for every wrong half said lets add another tally
You said
"my rhymes are nothing more than basic"
meaning they're low on the Ph Scale
In your words I couldn't face it
But herein lies your fail
If my rhymes are lower than a base then that means their acidic
Well… not exactly… this is a REALLY good try, a good shot, but it’s wrong… he said your rhymes are “nothing more than basic” according to the pH scale… meaning that on the pH scale, it says your rhymes are basic… they ARE basic, they aren’t lower than basic… pH below 7 is acidic, pH above 7 is basic… he said ur rhymes are not more than basic, so they are basic… if he had said “according to pH scale, your rhymes are LESS than basic” yeah THEN you’d be spot on… but this isn’t correct. BUT like I said, it’s a good shot, it just was done incorrectly, plus I’m being very technical, lol. But it’s something that I noticed right away, so I had to point it out… but also, i get that maybe u purposely ignored that just to say it's acidic, but Half really never said u were "Lower" than basic, which is the basis for this line.
HOWEVER, once again, the flow is really tight and spot on. And everything was good, except that it was wrong information… LoL
So I'm shootin poison in your face whenever I spit it
And I don't HAVE to admit it cuz I got HALF to admit it
He took his own ass and kicked it then gave himself a ticket!
The dovahkiin tried to bring it
Ok, this is looking better if u can flip the Dragonborn stuff (which I think Dovahkiin is dragon-language for the word dragonborn right? I’m not sure if that’s correct though but that’s what I’m going with cuz I know it’s something like that)
But his sword, he couldn't swing it
If he had half a mind he'd see that
I already Shot him through the knee cap!
lol
Halfmoon used to be a rapper like me
Till I ripped out his throat and hung him from a tree
Cuz you're a wannabe siege you see?
You say you're dragonborn which means ur born from me!
This was the best flip you’ve done so far. In accordance to your decree of being a dragon, half’s flip of being Dragonborn and u flipping that meaning, using wordplay, into being ‘born from a dragon’ in other words, born from you. Nice.
Tryin to take my skill and actin like I'm killed
Stop poppin those pills cuz I am here still
LoL does Half pop pills? I thought it was only me who did that…?
I swear you lie more than those b*tches on one tree hill!
And it's rich, coming from a b*tch
That I'm riding Narus win while ur riding on his d*ck
Asking for advice every chance that you can get
You're the dog at his kitchen table, begging for a lick!
Hm… LoL… purely lyrically and in context, this is a hard hit. He says you get ur rhymes from someone, but point out that he does the
same, only u elaborated more and talked more ish. This was pretty good
Your egos been swelling
Since NG started telling
You
what to do
from your rhymes to ur spelling
And then after the match
Youd roll onto your back
And let him give you a pat
On the underside of your belly
Good boy!!
You can do what your told!
LoL this was pretty good elaboration on ur previous statement. Now he’s being compared to a dog, getting belly rubbed for doing as he’s told, LoL.
But it still wont be enough if you wanna go for the gold
I've been rolling in that Au,
Ever since the sieges debut,
Nice use of Au
Undefeated motherf*cker
You think I cannot take you?
Im rising to the top
And I'm never gonna stop
I'll be bashin your skull in
While singing Blitzkrieg Bop
LoL, all in all, this was not a bad ending. This verse was much better than verse 1 in terms of battling. The flow was still there, it was still on fire, and this time around there were more and better disses and a good flip (and, although u had a good idea, one failed flip that took up a lot of space). So good job on this verse, it’s a big improvement.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
LoL ok yeah, you addressed it like I did. And LoL @ the wiki part, “u went to check but didn’t and so you f’d up” is the basic (lol, get it?) message here.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
So another bounce back on this, but this wasn’t exactly a diss… or really even a good flip… but it DID sorta negate Siege’s last statement about it… so I guess there’s really no points either way, they kinda cancel each other out, LoL.
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
Ok now this part WAS a diss
And now youre sinkin, like H9 i sunk your battleship
With weak lines like that, its like you GIVIN me the cham-p-ionship
This was good, but dude I SWEAR I saw this the first time I read Siege’s lyrics… did Siege edit that part out or something? Cuz I could swear it was there, but maybe I’m just trippin? Either way, this is still good cuz if it’s not Siege’s actual words, it’s like showing an example of something weak he’d say
Two whole verses, you only addressed two things!
One was you not understanding, the other was both our teach--ings!
This was somewhat poignant. To say two WHOLE verses and they talk about 2 things… that’s saying that ur opponent has no depth, no substance… and that’s always a hard diss to someone
You're getting laid straight out,
Call siege the wet laundry.
Cuzz i'll twist him till he shouts,
LoL for some reason this one actually took me a second look to get it, LoL. Kinda one of those more corny lines, but corny in a way that made me laugh so it’s ok, lol.
And drain him dry of all his energy.
Im on that Blitzkrieg Bop swag, gonna bring it like Kristallnacht
Gonna treat you like A True-Jew-In-'42-And-Send-Your-Corpse-To-The-Body-Pot
Oh, ouch. LoL nice turnaround on his “Blitzkrieg Bop” even though u said blitzkrieg first, u both used it in different ways and now u flipped it around again to being swag and bring it like Kristallnacht, man for those who don’t know and don’t wanna Wiki it, Kristallnacht was straight persecution/attacks on Jews that happened for like 2 or 3 straight days and I don’t even think it was done by the german army… I think it was Brownshirts and it was for sure done by German Civilians and there was no police or gov’t stopping them, they just let it happen. The second line was hard as f*ck, I love those type of lines. BUT I hope the first line wasn’t a lead-in to the second, cuz the Kristallnacht incident was like 4 or 5 years before ’42, LoL but I don’t think it is cuz they are different things, the incident then talking about Nazi camps later so it works.
F*ckin roast you to ashes, call me a Lyrical Nazi,
Cause Im the true Rap-Master Race, this clear,how can you not-see?
Damn… this a nice addition to Nazi ideas, I’m the ‘master rap race’ lol damn, that was cool.
Thats right im Dovahkin,
but dont mistake me for your kin.
The only reason i am is here is to abolish this rap sin
Born from the need to slay you,
Put here to take you out,
Wasn’t really a flip, but did mention dovahkiin but this was all pretty generic
To rap its like my coming's the end to a deserts draught
Im a full blown miracle, but I Aint talkin water to wine,
I like this, miracle but no water to wine aka Jesus miracle
Im talkin dis-f*ckin-memberment, the removal of your spine.
LoL not sure that’s a miracle though…
The severin of your head, have you lookin Ghadaffi
You tried but failed you f*ckin sham, you're not ever gonna top me.
Im like a f*ckin missile, once i go off youll NEVER f*ckin stop me.
Ill leave my name on your mind, brand you Half-moon-U-Zu-Ma-Ki's.
Slightly better than average ending.
So overall, this verse was pretty damn good. It had good flips as well as original disses. Then you went pretty hard with the Nazi-based sh*t. you didn’t just mention nazi’s, u went full blown Kristallnacht, LoL and the master rap race line was dope. So round 2 was pretty hard for me to decide who to give a vote to, it was not easy or obvious at all, so I did something I don’t normally do and went virtually line by line and gave points for certain things—like a good diss, a good flip, a slick line, good rhymes, all that type of sh*t. and, in the end, I came up with my vote.
Round 2 Winner: HALFMOONUZUMAKI.
MATCH WINNER: HALFMOONUZUMAKI
So Half wins the match since there’s only 3 rounds and he got 2. And I’m glad I didn’t have to do the 3rd verse cuz that sh*t’s hard as hell also to give a vote to someone, LoL. I did read it and that sh*t is dope from both parties. A quick word though, in round 3 Siege you said “I got the basic thing the first time, you wannabe chemist” but in your verse, when u responded with the acidic thing, it really was incorrect the way u set it up. BUT it was good to use that platform to say that you spit acidic, but the setup/delivery was simply not done correctly. Other than that, verse 3 was hard as f*ck: saying u can burn through any childs game, from Skyrim to Battleship, that was dope, your WWII lines (it was a 2 line set up), there were good flips, especially the one referring to the judges, dope.
And Half, round 3, your verse was hella chill/laid back whereas Siege was hella hard and in your face, showing calm/composure and also highlighting a difference in rapping styles. Usually these types of matches where those type of opponents are pitted together are way easy to judge, but this time you both did your thing so well that it didn’t matter, it was way hard to judge all the rounds. I gave Half 2 votes, but believe me, it was not easy AT ALL. Even in the first round, despite how my words may have sounded, it was hard to judge.
You BOTH did AWESOME in this match, and it was totally kick-ass from the beginning til the end. Again, I’m sorry I’m not putting round 3, but Half, getting 2 votes, already gets the overall vote, and I truly don’t have much time until maybe 2 more days from now to even go through it like this and post it so I’m just not gonna do it.
ROUND 1:
The Siege:
I'm going first and I'm kinda scared...
I don't know what to say and I'm so unprepared...
B*TCH PLEASE!
I was born to seize
these opportunities
I make the most of those moments I guarantee
and I can see with utmost clarity
that skill like mines a rarity!
to say anything else would be heresy
I'm addin fuel to my fire like kerosene
Ok so this is a nice beginning in terms of flow. It’s a little generic, meaning it’s just a flow like in a cipher or something with braggadocio, but the flow is tight and really smooth so overall it’s not bad.
imma take half
and light him up like a match
and after the flash
only a half of his hair is seen
So this was unique, from “kerosene” to “seen” there were 4 internal-type rhymes, which is actually pretty hard to pull off. So even though it wasn’t much of a diss, lol, it was a well executed flow.
and this match doesn't even seem fair to me
cuz i pass out rhymes like I'm a charity
you should have some! because apparently,
you're in a sad time of scarcity
it's actually embarrassing
so now do you care to see?
compared to me
everything you make is just a parody
And finally here’s a diss, but it wasn’t much of one… but again, it’s a tight flow. Also, I do like the idea of what you’re saying and how u set up the diss “I got so many rhymes, they’re like charity… here have some cuz ur lacking hard” and the last two lines saying “compared to me the sh*t u make’s a parody” lol that was a decent shot
and imma wipe you out like a cherokee
broken, smokin, perishing
LoL this was dope, wiping you out like a Cherokee, LoL that’s pretty hard if you really get to thinkin about the laying of Indians and sh*t.
hear the sound of the angels caroling
Nice type of imagery—it’s more hearing related, but you can see angels there and imagine them singing for someone’s death
grow dim as half starts barreling
down towards hell so scarily
and I'm lost in this hilarity!
I really like how you kept one rhyme—for the most part—from the beginning of the verse til right here. Although “Please” doesn’t exactly rhyme with “Hilarity,” it IS a kinda slant-type rhyme and it DOES work, especially with the assonance, in which the same sound does appear in all the ‘rhymes’ so well done for that.
"You can go first, I'm not ready"
"your rhymes are so deadly I'm gettin kinda sweaty.."
"and this pressure is so heavy I'm sinking under the weight"
"i can't take initiative so I guess Imma wait.."
well you just made the mistake
by posting late
you gave me the first move and now I'll take first place!
I’m not too big a fan on that fake convo, but it was still a way of dissing him by making fun of him and making it look like he’s thinking some weak things. But I do like the “first move” “first place” line.
so whatcha gonna do halfmoonuzumaki?
try to predict my moves as if you can use haki?
LoL this was a good line. One more word in “you can use haki” to make it 5 syllables and it would’ve been perfect but it was great and a nice use of “predictions/haki”
doesn't matter what you say because you still cannot block me
you can resist all you want cuz there's no way that you can top me
in fact
how you made it to the finals is actually pretty shocking
but dont worry the siege is here to expose any bullsh*t you start talking
for instance,
don't say that you are great or that you're better than me
when you have to explain every rap the judges are forced to read
Ok so here’s some sh*t on your opponent. Nice start, I hope you keep going cuz this is something people seeing this battle can relate to
and go back and check out
and then when they vote against you, you b*tch a little fit
LoL ok good
saying "look at this line riker accidentally bit!"
god im surprised the judges actually deal with this sh*t
if you're just gonna cry after every little crit-
tique
cuz it's just f*ck in-
weak
the way your inst-
inct
is to cry like a faucet sink!
This was a nice diss about him bitching and whining, and the set up/delivery was dope the way you broke it up at the end of each line
"and omg gingka stole a few lines!"
"how is he supposed to judge mine??"
easily.
no vote for you and one for the siege
LoL this was funny. I did see that he was saying this and LoL it did get a little out of proportion but still this was a good set up since he was saying stuff like “how’s he gonna judge?” and u say “easily… one vote for me, none for you” it really was set up well.
you don't need to worry cuz imma win this with ease
in fact for the judges, this decisions a breeze!
so it's your turn now, but there's no way you'll come back
cuz just like shade, no one reads your raps
LOL ouch, I feel bad for Shade now (but unfortunately, it was true at least at first… although he’s done much better since the first couple judgments)
Well, overall, even though I said lots of complimentary things… This verse isn’t as strong as it first appears. The BEST thing about it is the flow; it’s hard, quick, tight, smooth, and pretty darn slick. The problem is that this is a battle, personal shots and disses and ripping your opponent a new one are essential and this had virtually no disses until the end, although the disses at the end were pretty good. But really this was good/fun to read, but you’re gonna need much more in the way of dissing/battling.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
It's time to open up the gates and sound the blitzkrieg sirens,
And it's time to shut your mouth and cause this siege to suffer silence
LoL that first line is from a Palmer’s Square song for the 2011 MC Showcase (LoL half you thought I wouldn’t know? I told you man… I know) but it was used poignantly cuz the battle of Blitzkrieg was a horrific WWII battle with lots of deaths on both sides.
It's time to teach this f*ckin kid some Elementry f*ckin science
Cuzz I also guaged your flow, and here the results its time to face it,
According to the pH, your rhymes are nothing more than basic.
This was dope. The use of pH and basic to describe ur opponents flow was a pretty good analogy and a good diss.
Now looky here, Its "siege the lyrical dragon".
Came looking for a battle, but didnt think this would happen
Im the rapper of prophecy, you're a lizard with a horn.
This battle bout turn to Rap Dragon 'gainst Dragonborn,
Simply put, ive come here to steal your soul.
LoL now this was a dope turnaround from Siege’s “lyrical dragon,” taking a slain dragon’s soul if I’m not mistaken. Dope metaphor
To turn your flesh into ash, and leave your bones ina hole.
To take your essence, and use it to further my greatness.
But to say itll do me much, now that would be gracious.
LoL so “I’ll take ur soul/essence, but it won’t do me much good” lol nice continuance of the metaphor. It wasn’t part of the original metaphor, it added to it which was nice.
You be baking your rhymes, straight outta Naru's f*ckin kitchen
You faced him and he beat you, you moving on was contradiction.
This is a good diss to say ‘you shouldn’t have won’ and saying ‘you lost but moved on is a contradiction’ that was a good word to use for it, good way to describe it.
You're riding his win, he left you keys in the ignition,
You didnt win by skill, you only won by situation.
More of the diss, although for some reason I like the line “riding his win, left keys in ignition” part, it was good. You’re “riding” the win,
he left the “Keys in the ignition” so he could “ride” it was a good description, partly imagery partly good idea/bit of wordplay.
Me? I went all out, won with 0 hesitation.
Trapped my opponents, in a state of mental isolation.
Im gonna light Siege up, you could say im Sandy Hookin'
'Cause imma fill this kid with holes, finna leave him Swiss Lookin'
LoL at Sandy Hookin and yes, Swiss cheese has lots holes. More decent diss-based imagery/analogy (the sandy hook part)
"Hey guys its CJ!" Remember your debut?
You called youself a gymnist
You more cheesy than fondue.
Now that one line there,it leaves me a bit confused
You called yourself a gymnist but cant flip..what a ruse.
LoL now this was good wordplay, “you’re a gymnast but can’t flip” lol even though it seems really simple, it was good wordplay.
Takin pointless shots at a n*gga you aint battlin
Simply goes to show that ive got this p*ssy n*gga rattlin
You've got "shade" on your mind, you should be thinkin of me
The way you talkin Riker, I think you might take the D
LoL ok, thinking of lots of dudes so u want the D… ok.
In more ways then one, in the sack and as a rapper.
'Cause your flow's nonexistent,like you've no need for a wrapper.
You can say you sparked the match, cuzz without a doubt im on fire
Ok again, a good flip since Siege said he was sparkin a match
This-like-a-fanfic-writer-tryna-match-wits-with-the-Pervy-Poet-Jiraiya
Good flow, I like the ‘rhyme’ of fire/jiraiya, lol though it needs to be said with a little accent
You think i wasnt ready, son you fell for my trap
First i wanted to guage the passion you were puttin in your rap
And ive seen it first hand, you lack the one thing that Ive got.
That'd be pure dark raw emotion,while your rap's are just afterthought.
Another flip; opponent’s fake convo about Half not being ready, he flips it into it being a trap so he can observe the opponent before
making a move. Then, during observation, he saw a very strong flaw, one that he himself does not have. Good wording, good idea
Mine have heart and have soul,
Yours are weak and worth nothing.
Pullin fake quotes out the air,
Tryna act like they worth something
Continuance of diss, again referring to the fake convo “pullin fake quotes” LoL
NvG made this on the base so Siege could get a public thumpin'
Because similar to Minato with FTG, its Halfmoon Siege wont be touchin
I like this ending, especially the public thumpin.
So this verse had a lots of disses, which were executed with lots of wordplay and imagery and some analogies and metaphors for good measure. The Flow wasn’t as hard as Siege’s, but in my opinion, he seems that Siege sacrificed a lot of the dissing so he could put a really hard flow into place. Here, Half’s flow wasn’t as strong, but it was better in terms of what you do for a battle.
Winner: HALFMOON
ROUND 2:
The Siege:
When I said in round one,
That your bull would be corrected
LoL just a question, where did you say in round 1 that his “bull would be corrected…?” I re-read it and don’t see it…
You must've been thinkin
"challenge accepted!"
Let's start with the "basics" shall we?
And for every wrong half said lets add another tally
You said
"my rhymes are nothing more than basic"
meaning they're low on the Ph Scale
In your words I couldn't face it
But herein lies your fail
If my rhymes are lower than a base then that means their acidic
Well… not exactly… this is a REALLY good try, a good shot, but it’s wrong… he said your rhymes are “nothing more than basic” according to the pH scale… meaning that on the pH scale, it says your rhymes are basic… they ARE basic, they aren’t lower than basic… pH below 7 is acidic, pH above 7 is basic… he said ur rhymes are not more than basic, so they are basic… if he had said “according to pH scale, your rhymes are LESS than basic” yeah THEN you’d be spot on… but this isn’t correct. BUT like I said, it’s a good shot, it just was done incorrectly, plus I’m being very technical, lol. But it’s something that I noticed right away, so I had to point it out… but also, i get that maybe u purposely ignored that just to say it's acidic, but Half really never said u were "Lower" than basic, which is the basis for this line.
HOWEVER, once again, the flow is really tight and spot on. And everything was good, except that it was wrong information… LoL
So I'm shootin poison in your face whenever I spit it
And I don't HAVE to admit it cuz I got HALF to admit it
He took his own ass and kicked it then gave himself a ticket!
The dovahkiin tried to bring it
Ok, this is looking better if u can flip the Dragonborn stuff (which I think Dovahkiin is dragon-language for the word dragonborn right? I’m not sure if that’s correct though but that’s what I’m going with cuz I know it’s something like that)
But his sword, he couldn't swing it
If he had half a mind he'd see that
I already Shot him through the knee cap!
lol
Halfmoon used to be a rapper like me
Till I ripped out his throat and hung him from a tree
Cuz you're a wannabe siege you see?
You say you're dragonborn which means ur born from me!
This was the best flip you’ve done so far. In accordance to your decree of being a dragon, half’s flip of being Dragonborn and u flipping that meaning, using wordplay, into being ‘born from a dragon’ in other words, born from you. Nice.
Tryin to take my skill and actin like I'm killed
Stop poppin those pills cuz I am here still
LoL does Half pop pills? I thought it was only me who did that…?
I swear you lie more than those b*tches on one tree hill!
And it's rich, coming from a b*tch
That I'm riding Narus win while ur riding on his d*ck
Asking for advice every chance that you can get
You're the dog at his kitchen table, begging for a lick!
Hm… LoL… purely lyrically and in context, this is a hard hit. He says you get ur rhymes from someone, but point out that he does the
same, only u elaborated more and talked more ish. This was pretty good
Your egos been swelling
Since NG started telling
You
what to do
from your rhymes to ur spelling
And then after the match
Youd roll onto your back
And let him give you a pat
On the underside of your belly
Good boy!!
You can do what your told!
LoL this was pretty good elaboration on ur previous statement. Now he’s being compared to a dog, getting belly rubbed for doing as he’s told, LoL.
But it still wont be enough if you wanna go for the gold
I've been rolling in that Au,
Ever since the sieges debut,
Nice use of Au
Undefeated motherf*cker
You think I cannot take you?
Im rising to the top
And I'm never gonna stop
I'll be bashin your skull in
While singing Blitzkrieg Bop
LoL, all in all, this was not a bad ending. This verse was much better than verse 1 in terms of battling. The flow was still there, it was still on fire, and this time around there were more and better disses and a good flip (and, although u had a good idea, one failed flip that took up a lot of space). So good job on this verse, it’s a big improvement.
HalfmoonUzumaki:
DrProof certified, mad respect to you doc.
The smartest dude on the base said you lost, its time to check the clock-
Scratch that- Kid check the facts, it's like you're f*ckin retarded,
Its like you went to wikipedia and X'd out fore the page even started
My pH joke went right over your head,
I called you basic, not acidic, it's like im rappin a sped.
LoL ok yeah, you addressed it like I did. And LoL @ the wiki part, “u went to check but didn’t and so you f’d up” is the basic (lol, get it?) message here.
And its funny you mention my tutelege under NaruG,
And its funnier that he told me you was doing the same thing
You was getting some coaching,prolly more than I was.
I went only to him for advice, bounced sh*t off him for op-in-ions
So another bounce back on this, but this wasn’t exactly a diss… or really even a good flip… but it DID sorta negate Siege’s last statement about it… so I guess there’s really no points either way, they kinda cancel each other out, LoL.
I think this Siege bout to be pushed back and get to shrinkin
Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin.
Ok now this part WAS a diss
And now youre sinkin, like H9 i sunk your battleship
With weak lines like that, its like you GIVIN me the cham-p-ionship
This was good, but dude I SWEAR I saw this the first time I read Siege’s lyrics… did Siege edit that part out or something? Cuz I could swear it was there, but maybe I’m just trippin? Either way, this is still good cuz if it’s not Siege’s actual words, it’s like showing an example of something weak he’d say
Two whole verses, you only addressed two things!
One was you not understanding, the other was both our teach--ings!
This was somewhat poignant. To say two WHOLE verses and they talk about 2 things… that’s saying that ur opponent has no depth, no substance… and that’s always a hard diss to someone
You're getting laid straight out,
Call siege the wet laundry.
Cuzz i'll twist him till he shouts,
LoL for some reason this one actually took me a second look to get it, LoL. Kinda one of those more corny lines, but corny in a way that made me laugh so it’s ok, lol.
And drain him dry of all his energy.
Im on that Blitzkrieg Bop swag, gonna bring it like Kristallnacht
Gonna treat you like A True-Jew-In-'42-And-Send-Your-Corpse-To-The-Body-Pot
Oh, ouch. LoL nice turnaround on his “Blitzkrieg Bop” even though u said blitzkrieg first, u both used it in different ways and now u flipped it around again to being swag and bring it like Kristallnacht, man for those who don’t know and don’t wanna Wiki it, Kristallnacht was straight persecution/attacks on Jews that happened for like 2 or 3 straight days and I don’t even think it was done by the german army… I think it was Brownshirts and it was for sure done by German Civilians and there was no police or gov’t stopping them, they just let it happen. The second line was hard as f*ck, I love those type of lines. BUT I hope the first line wasn’t a lead-in to the second, cuz the Kristallnacht incident was like 4 or 5 years before ’42, LoL but I don’t think it is cuz they are different things, the incident then talking about Nazi camps later so it works.
F*ckin roast you to ashes, call me a Lyrical Nazi,
Cause Im the true Rap-Master Race, this clear,how can you not-see?
Damn… this a nice addition to Nazi ideas, I’m the ‘master rap race’ lol damn, that was cool.
Thats right im Dovahkin,
but dont mistake me for your kin.
The only reason i am is here is to abolish this rap sin
Born from the need to slay you,
Put here to take you out,
Wasn’t really a flip, but did mention dovahkiin but this was all pretty generic
To rap its like my coming's the end to a deserts draught
Im a full blown miracle, but I Aint talkin water to wine,
I like this, miracle but no water to wine aka Jesus miracle
Im talkin dis-f*ckin-memberment, the removal of your spine.
LoL not sure that’s a miracle though…
The severin of your head, have you lookin Ghadaffi
You tried but failed you f*ckin sham, you're not ever gonna top me.
Im like a f*ckin missile, once i go off youll NEVER f*ckin stop me.
Ill leave my name on your mind, brand you Half-moon-U-Zu-Ma-Ki's.
Slightly better than average ending.
So overall, this verse was pretty damn good. It had good flips as well as original disses. Then you went pretty hard with the Nazi-based sh*t. you didn’t just mention nazi’s, u went full blown Kristallnacht, LoL and the master rap race line was dope. So round 2 was pretty hard for me to decide who to give a vote to, it was not easy or obvious at all, so I did something I don’t normally do and went virtually line by line and gave points for certain things—like a good diss, a good flip, a slick line, good rhymes, all that type of sh*t. and, in the end, I came up with my vote.
Round 2 Winner: HALFMOONUZUMAKI.
MATCH WINNER: HALFMOONUZUMAKI
So Half wins the match since there’s only 3 rounds and he got 2. And I’m glad I didn’t have to do the 3rd verse cuz that sh*t’s hard as hell also to give a vote to someone, LoL. I did read it and that sh*t is dope from both parties. A quick word though, in round 3 Siege you said “I got the basic thing the first time, you wannabe chemist” but in your verse, when u responded with the acidic thing, it really was incorrect the way u set it up. BUT it was good to use that platform to say that you spit acidic, but the setup/delivery was simply not done correctly. Other than that, verse 3 was hard as f*ck: saying u can burn through any childs game, from Skyrim to Battleship, that was dope, your WWII lines (it was a 2 line set up), there were good flips, especially the one referring to the judges, dope.
And Half, round 3, your verse was hella chill/laid back whereas Siege was hella hard and in your face, showing calm/composure and also highlighting a difference in rapping styles. Usually these types of matches where those type of opponents are pitted together are way easy to judge, but this time you both did your thing so well that it didn’t matter, it was way hard to judge all the rounds. I gave Half 2 votes, but believe me, it was not easy AT ALL. Even in the first round, despite how my words may have sounded, it was hard to judge.
You BOTH did AWESOME in this match, and it was totally kick-ass from the beginning til the end. Again, I’m sorry I’m not putting round 3, but Half, getting 2 votes, already gets the overall vote, and I truly don’t have much time until maybe 2 more days from now to even go through it like this and post it so I’m just not gonna do it.
Whoa ok, so i just saw how my Reply turned out... It's missing all of the BOLDING i put on it, and i had to go in and re-space everything so that was a HUGE pain in the ass. BUT at least how it is right now, u guys can still read it and figure it out easily enough.
For those who don't WANT to go through it to see everything
My VOTE went to HALFMOON
For those who don't WANT to go through it to see everything
My VOTE went to HALFMOON
Scary Yamato
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LoL so according to the JUDGES it's 2-2 but because of the Poll, it's 4-2 Siege so this battle's over even though NvG hasn't voted yet. LoL if NvG votes for Half though, then Half would win the JUDGES vote 3-2, but Siege would STILL win because of the Poll being 2 judges, cuz it'd be 4-3. LoL. but if NvG votes for Siege, then Siege would win both ways, 3-2 from the judges and 5-2 with the poll.
but yeah man, i didn't really realize from before how big a game-changer that 2-judge-vote Poll could be, LoL. someone who wins the judges votes could still lose, lol. that's crazy also it's fitting that the onlookers get to vote... but i wish more than 8 people voted... last time it was 18 and i thought that was a small number but 8? damn... i wish now that it was at least 18 you know? LoL
but yeah man, i didn't really realize from before how big a game-changer that 2-judge-vote Poll could be, LoL. someone who wins the judges votes could still lose, lol. that's crazy also it's fitting that the onlookers get to vote... but i wish more than 8 people voted... last time it was 18 and i thought that was a small number but 8? damn... i wish now that it was at least 18 you know? LoL
NarutoVsGoku
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My vote goes to Siege.... Seeing as how I'm what? the last judge? I don't want ya to wait on ky decision any longer but I dis read the raps and annalyze them and to be honest with Siege and Half I wasn't too happy with this battle and my judgement will reflect that...
sometimes this week ill find a way to post everything I wrote and ya can see my opinions on ya raps but take it with a bunch of salt and wash it down with Kool aid or something cuz like I said I wasn't too happy...
But it looks like with the judges and polls Siege wins this with
5-2
Siege-3 judges (bright shadow, scary yamato, NvG) +poll 2 votes
Half-2 judges (gingka, NG)
oh and btw Half you had such a huge fanbase thought for sure those same fanboys would have voted for you in the polls and you would have won the polls... Of you had gotten the same people who cheered for you to vote for you you would have won the match even though Siege got 3 judges... You would have had 2 judges plus 2 from the polls giving you 4 agaisnt Siege..... That's something to think about when you sleep...
like you said the poll was slept on and its a shame I'm disappointed in that...
and yo those girls are fat?! What business do they have trying to ski?! Lol hope you enjoyed ya weekend though
sometimes this week ill find a way to post everything I wrote and ya can see my opinions on ya raps but take it with a bunch of salt and wash it down with Kool aid or something cuz like I said I wasn't too happy...
But it looks like with the judges and polls Siege wins this with
5-2
Siege-3 judges (bright shadow, scary yamato, NvG) +poll 2 votes
Half-2 judges (gingka, NG)
oh and btw Half you had such a huge fanbase thought for sure those same fanboys would have voted for you in the polls and you would have won the polls... Of you had gotten the same people who cheered for you to vote for you you would have won the match even though Siege got 3 judges... You would have had 2 judges plus 2 from the polls giving you 4 agaisnt Siege..... That's something to think about when you sleep...
like you said the poll was slept on and its a shame I'm disappointed in that...
and yo those girls are fat?! What business do they have trying to ski?! Lol hope you enjoyed ya weekend though
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halfmoonuzumaki
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xD The Kristallnacht thing does take a little bit of knowledge to understand, but the gist of it was that it basically started the holocaust.
F*ck loads of German Citizens were responding to a German Political man of some kind being killed, and the blame falling a Jewish man.
The anger lead the Citizens to go on an all out warpath, burning Temples, destroying Jewish homes, and just wreaking havoc in general.
xd and Sy, that Sinkin line you said you didnt get, Sinking, like, The Titanic xd
F*ck loads of German Citizens were responding to a German Political man of some kind being killed, and the blame falling a Jewish man.
The anger lead the Citizens to go on an all out warpath, burning Temples, destroying Jewish homes, and just wreaking havoc in general.
xd and Sy, that Sinkin line you said you didnt get, Sinking, like, The Titanic xd
halfmoonuzumaki
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NO JOKE THATS WORD FOR WORD WHAT I TRIED TO SAY TO MY GIRL TO GET OUT OF THAT SH*T. THAT THEY HAD NO BUSINESS ON SKIS xd But i getcha man, im not very happy with this battle myself to be honest, in my high frame of mind, i was dropping sticks of dynamite, and never proofread before posting sober. Sh*t like that can really cost you >.<
Scary Yamato
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I know what sinking is. I said I didnt get it because it didn't/doesnt make sense
"Cause I know he Taught you all you knew, without him you'dve sinkin."
when you break that conjunction down the line reads like this:
"Because I know he taught you all you knew, Without him you would have sinking."
hmmm... I think I see whats happening. It should be "you would BE sinkin". THAT makes sense. Spelling and proofreading my friend. I know I'm not the best advocate of either, but in situations like that it really counts because it ruined your rhyme.
halfmoonuzumaki
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I gotcha..but i think youre getting the line a little confused xd
What im saying is..i knew NaruG taught him everything he knows, and without NaruG, he wouldve sinken, as in lost, then i went on to say "And now youre sinkin, like H9 I sunk your battleship." xd I need to try to be a lot clearer next time around... I always assume people will understand just cause i do. REALLLLY gotta work on that lol.