Re: Custom Element's Jutsu
(Shinju: Shitsukoi no sharin) - Pearl Release: Wheel of Importunate
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user perform 3 serial hand seal and shoot out 2 medium size (3 meters in diameters)ball of pearls toward the enemy with fast speed of its rank. instead of crush or hit the opponent with it, the ball of pearl will spinning in the middle part of the opponent body with 10 cm gap between the spinning ball against the opponent body, leaving him out of breath due to high velocity spinning will compress his air/oxygen, turbulence experiences, unable to move/perform hand seals then collapse in the end.
note: No A ranked or above Pearl techniques for one turn.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle
Note: The User must wait 2 turns to use this technique again
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Declined Uh? Confusing description which wasn't bettered in any way. Also, why is this S-Rank? Compress air and oxygen? Uh?
( Shinju: Howaito kessai ) - Pearl Release: White Settlements
type: Attack/defense
rank: Forbidden
range:short-long
chakra cost: 50
damage points: 100
description: The user unattached his White Jar and put it in the ground besides him with reverse position where the Pearl would pour out from the White Jar into the ground. The user did this in term of all the pearls inside of his White Jar will pour down into the ground. A moment afterward the user will perform 2 serial hand seals to sink down a massive amount of little pearl size of a tennis ball and they travel underground. The pearls will cover the entire battle field to long range from the underground beneath, right between the user and the opponent. The opponent will not aware of this, because the movement of the pearls conducted in the underground. When the user feels the desire amount of the pearls have been completely sets up, he will shouted.. HA !!! when suddenly the pearls will be start erupting from underneath the opponent ground, cover up all over his body part from bottom to top, from the opponent toe to his head. By molding his pearl chakra which affinity with earth chakra, the user will add sticky effect upon the pearls which could seal the opponent movement, making the opponent unable to perform any hand seal. Reduce their air or oxygen, making the opponent out of breath. Every pearls which if been destroyed by the opponent on their attempt to escape, will be replaced by other pearls with 2 second gap between the replacement pearls because of the White Jar will keep producing the little Pearls until it’s run out (Active for 2 turn) . At this rate, it is almost certain the opponent won’t be able to avoid it and died.
note: Can only be used once per battle.
note: The White Jar keep producing pearls until the pearls run out/the user interrupted
note: No other Pearl Jutsu in the same turn when this jutsu activated.
note: The user will still be able to use other elemental ninjustsu (excluding Pearl Jutsu) when he active this pearl jutsu, but his position must stay close with the White Jar (short range), as the White Jar must absorb the user chakra to keep this active.
Note: The user must state where he put the White Jar position at his first moves, then gap it with the other moves when he can erupting the pearls, so it will count as 2 moves.
Note : The user extremely exhausted, can’t move correctly like slow in movement, slow in running and only be able to defend with A-Rank jutsu for 2 turns.
Note : Unable to use the White Jar for 5 turns as it have run out of Pearls and must reload for 5 turn.
Note : can only be use by the Creator and Co-Creator and can only be taught to 2 students only.
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Declined Again this is ridiculously hard to understand and needlessly complicated. Forbidden ranks also do 90 damage...not 100. Fix this and try to make it readable. Its a mess.
New Pearl Jutsu
( Shinju: P1 Fōmu, Hakushoku funmatsu ) - Pearl Release: P1 Form, The White Powder
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user will perform 3 serial hand seal and then he thrust his hand up to the sky where certain amount of little pearls size of basket balls will merge out from his jar into the sky high, covering the opponents sky with pearls. Then the user will perform another hand seal to blow up the entire pearls and turn them into form of pearl powder. The user will be able to use this form into any several pearl powder jutsu purposes, such as White sensor, White blinded smoke, white mist illusion etc. But it will count as 2 moves.
Note :
- Will last for 2 turns then auto vanished if not combine with other pearl powder jutsu.
- Can only be use 5 times per battle
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Declined Covering the opponents sky with pearls? Uh? If so...why is this short ranged?
Resubmitting(Shinju: Shitsukoi no sharin) - Pearl Release: Wheel of Importunate
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user perform a single hand seal to shoot out 2 medium size ball of pearl toward the enemy with fast speed of it’s rank, instead of crush the opponent with it, the ball of pearl spinning in the middle part of the opponent body with 5 cm gap, with encircle motion horizontally spinning the opponents body with high speed of velocity, leaving them out of air, turbulence experiences, unable to move/perform a hand seal then collapse in the end out of air.
note: No A ranked or above Pearl techniques for one turn.
Note: Can only be used 2X per battle
Note: The User must wait 2 turns to use this technique again
Note : Can only be use/taught by the Creator and Co-Creator
~Declined~
Fix the description. I have no clue what is going one here. How is a spinning ball supposed to suffocate the enemy? How large is "Medium Sized"?
( Shinju: Howaito kessai ) - Pearl Release: White Settlements
type: Attack/defense
rank: Forbidden
range:short-long
chakra cost: 50
damage points: 100
description: The user unattached his White Jar and put it in the ground near him with reverse position where the Pearl would pour out from the White Jar into the ground, the user did this on purpose so that all the pearls inside the With Jar will fell down into the ground, a moment afterward the user perform 2 hand seals to scatter out all the massive amount little pearl size of a tennis ball to sink and travel underground, The pearls will cover the entire battle field to long range from the underground beneath. The opponent will not aware of this condition because the movement of the pearls conducted in the underground. When all sets up, the user will yelled HA !!!, suddenly the pearls erupting from the opponents surrounding ground, cover up all over his body part, from bottom to top, seal his movement, unable to perform any hand seal, reduce their air out of breath. Every pearls which if been destroyed by the opponent on their attempt to escape, will be replaced by other pearls in rapid way, as the White Jar keep producing the little Pearls until it’s run out. At this rate, it is almost certain the opponent won’t be able to avoid it and died.
note: Can only be used 1x per battle.
note: The White Jar keep producing pearls until the opponent died / the user interrupted
note: No other Pearl Jutsu in the same turn when this jutsu activated.
note: The user able to use other elemental when he active this jutsu but must stay close with the White Jar (short range), as the White Jar must absorb the user chakra to keep this active
Note: The user must state where he put the White Jar part at the first move then gap it with the other moves then he can erupting the pearls, so it will count as 2 moves.
Note : The user extremely exhausted, can’t move correctly and only be able to defend not attack, with A-Rank jutsu only for 2 turns.
Note : Unable to use the White Jar for 5 turns as it have run out of Pearls and must reload for 5 turn.
Note : can only be use by the Creator and Co-Creator and can only be taught to 2 students only
~Declined~
Again, fix the description. I understand what is going on, but its difficult to read. The jutsu states the move continues until its out of pears, hwoever you also state that the jar continues to produce pearls until th users dies. Since the pearls are round (size of tennis balls) how are they supposed to gather around the person and suffocate them there will always be gaps in between the balls no matter how many are binding the person. They can never suffocate simply from being bound by pearls. One of the restrictions says the user cannot move correctly. What does that entail? can they run, are the uncoordinated, are thier movements slowed? The restriction says they can defend themself from attack but why would they not be able to use a jutsu to attack if they can use one to defend? in the end you are still using a jutsu.
(Shinju: Shitsukoi no sharin) - Pearl Release: Wheel of Importunate
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user perform 3 serial hand seal and shoot out 2 medium size (3 meters in diameters)ball of pearls toward the enemy with fast speed of its rank. instead of crush or hit the opponent with it, the ball of pearl will spinning in the middle part of the opponent body with 10 cm gap between the spinning ball against the opponent body, leaving him out of breath due to high velocity spinning will compress his air/oxygen, turbulence experiences, unable to move/perform hand seals then collapse in the end.
note: No A ranked or above Pearl techniques for one turn.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle
Note: The User must wait 2 turns to use this technique again
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Declined Uh? Confusing description which wasn't bettered in any way. Also, why is this S-Rank? Compress air and oxygen? Uh?
( Shinju: Howaito kessai ) - Pearl Release: White Settlements
type: Attack/defense
rank: Forbidden
range:short-long
chakra cost: 50
damage points: 100
description: The user unattached his White Jar and put it in the ground besides him with reverse position where the Pearl would pour out from the White Jar into the ground. The user did this in term of all the pearls inside of his White Jar will pour down into the ground. A moment afterward the user will perform 2 serial hand seals to sink down a massive amount of little pearl size of a tennis ball and they travel underground. The pearls will cover the entire battle field to long range from the underground beneath, right between the user and the opponent. The opponent will not aware of this, because the movement of the pearls conducted in the underground. When the user feels the desire amount of the pearls have been completely sets up, he will shouted.. HA !!! when suddenly the pearls will be start erupting from underneath the opponent ground, cover up all over his body part from bottom to top, from the opponent toe to his head. By molding his pearl chakra which affinity with earth chakra, the user will add sticky effect upon the pearls which could seal the opponent movement, making the opponent unable to perform any hand seal. Reduce their air or oxygen, making the opponent out of breath. Every pearls which if been destroyed by the opponent on their attempt to escape, will be replaced by other pearls with 2 second gap between the replacement pearls because of the White Jar will keep producing the little Pearls until it’s run out (Active for 2 turn) . At this rate, it is almost certain the opponent won’t be able to avoid it and died.
note: Can only be used once per battle.
note: The White Jar keep producing pearls until the pearls run out/the user interrupted
note: No other Pearl Jutsu in the same turn when this jutsu activated.
note: The user will still be able to use other elemental ninjustsu (excluding Pearl Jutsu) when he active this pearl jutsu, but his position must stay close with the White Jar (short range), as the White Jar must absorb the user chakra to keep this active.
Note: The user must state where he put the White Jar position at his first moves, then gap it with the other moves when he can erupting the pearls, so it will count as 2 moves.
Note : The user extremely exhausted, can’t move correctly like slow in movement, slow in running and only be able to defend with A-Rank jutsu for 2 turns.
Note : Unable to use the White Jar for 5 turns as it have run out of Pearls and must reload for 5 turn.
Note : can only be use by the Creator and Co-Creator and can only be taught to 2 students only.
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Declined Again this is ridiculously hard to understand and needlessly complicated. Forbidden ranks also do 90 damage...not 100. Fix this and try to make it readable. Its a mess.
New Pearl Jutsu
( Shinju: P1 Fōmu, Hakushoku funmatsu ) - Pearl Release: P1 Form, The White Powder
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user will perform 3 serial hand seal and then he thrust his hand up to the sky where certain amount of little pearls size of basket balls will merge out from his jar into the sky high, covering the opponents sky with pearls. Then the user will perform another hand seal to blow up the entire pearls and turn them into form of pearl powder. The user will be able to use this form into any several pearl powder jutsu purposes, such as White sensor, White blinded smoke, white mist illusion etc. But it will count as 2 moves.
Note :
- Will last for 2 turns then auto vanished if not combine with other pearl powder jutsu.
- Can only be use 5 times per battle
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Declined Covering the opponents sky with pearls? Uh? If so...why is this short ranged?
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