Re: Custom Element's Jutsu
(Amatsu Fūton: Sakyū no Kyūei) Empyrean Wind Release: The Song of the Sand Dunes
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short- Mid (short-range around the designated area)
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms a single handseal and sends a great blanket of Empyrean Wind through the pores of the earth or through the earth itself and spreads it through the terrain. By using the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind and its ability to differentiate between particles, the blanket separates the many minerals in the earth from each other, pulling all nutritious substances and minerals 30 meters downwards into the earth itself and leaving only a barren dune of sand and silicon in its wake. The blanket of Empyrean Wind severs all connection with the earth itself, preventing it from being used as a basis for Earth Techniques. Furthermore, the completely dead terrain makes the creation of life in the ground almost impossible, preventing the use of Wood Release, or any life-giving element, through the ground.
-The user can, with one (1) handseal, push the soil and earth upwards again. This counts as one of the three moves allowed per turn.
-As a result of the Chakra strain, the user will be unable to use other Empyrean Wind Techniques during the same turn. Furthermore, the user will only be able to use two (2) techniques during the following turn.
-Can only be used twice (2) per battle.
~Approved~ If you are not satisfied with my edits, please feel free to VM me and I will change my verdict.
(If half a kilometer is unsatisfactory, could you please switch it with 'several hundred meters downwards'? Thanks beforehand)
(Amatsu Fūton: Yabō Haō Zangyaku no Kokyū) Empyrean Wind Release: The Breath of Paarthurnax
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms two handseals and creates a circular shape of uniquely rotating Empyrean Wind one hundred meters in the air. By using the air itself alongside the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind, the shape quickly begins to attract and gather odorous molecules in its core. Through its rotation, the shape uses the air itself to gather all odorant molecules alongside moisture and most vapors. This in itself makes it impossible for any odors to be spread around the field, as they are immediately pulled directly upwards into the atmosphere. Humidity, too, will be absorbed by the shape, which only adds to the dry environment created by this technique. Finally, the shape draws insects and big concentrations of harmful germs/particles/spores to it, killing and destroying them in the process with the ripping nature of Empyrean Wind.
-This technique's ability to draw in insects only accounts for insects that are not being used for any techniques.
-The user can, with one (1) handseal, disperse the entire shape, causing the gathered humidity to fall onto the ground as a source of water.
-The user cannot use higher than A-ranked Empyrean Wind techniques while this is active. Furthermore, the user cannot use any Empyrean Wind Techniques during the turn this technique is activated.
-The shape lasts for four (4) turns.
-Can only be used once (1) per battle.
~Approved~ Made some minor changes.
New Submissions:
(Amatsu Fūton: Joujiru Mujuuryoku) Empyrean Wind Release: Multiplying Zero Gravity
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Defensive
Range: Short-Long (Mid range around the designated area)
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms a single handseal and creates two blankets of Empyrean Wind; one in the sky and one in the ground. Each blanket consists of uniquely rotating Empyrean wind that has the single purpose of drawing matter either upwards or downwards. By using the connection to the two blankets as a either a damper or an amplifier, the user is able to create gravitational-like effects. By amplifying the bottom blanket, the user can severely restrict the movements of those within the field, ranging from decreasing their speed to pinning even the strongest of summons to the ground. The stronger downwards pull also has an effect on most techniques, making them harder to aim upwards and decreasing the range of projectile-based Ninjutsu by one (1) range. By amplifying the top blanket, the user can, within reason, pull projectile-based Ninjutsu of B-rank upwards, ensuring the safety of those within the field. The upwards pull can also create a zero gravity environment.
-Pulling a technique upwards counts as one of the three moves allowed per turn.
-The user cannot use S-ranked or above Empyrean Wind during the following turn.
-The technique lasts for three (3) turns.
-Can only be used twice (2) per battle.
~Approved~ Made some edits, same as above regarding my verdict.
(If five turns are over the top, could you please switch them with 'four (4)'? Thanks beforehand)
(Amatsu Fūton: Jinkō Akari) Empyrean Wind Release: Artificial Lights
Rank: A
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user creates a shape of Empyrean Wind and uses its ability to carry Oxygen particles to drastically increase the level of Oxygen in the designated area. At any time, the user generates a small spark by creating two small structures of chakra in the designated area and rubbing them against each other. The small spark will ignite the oxygen in the area, causing it to violently combust and leave nothing behind but ashes. The shape of Empyrean wind will keep the needed matter in and the unneeded matter out. The decreased level of Oxygen will cause those within the designated area to feel very light-headed and nauseous, provided they survive. This technique can also be used to create an area devoid of Oxygen.
-Must wait one turn before reuse.
-The user cannot use any Forbidden-ranked Empyrean Wind techniques during the same turn.
~Declined~
(Amatsu Fūton: Mōshin no Miko) Empyrean Wind Release: The Blind Faith of Theresa
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Range: Short/Mid (Can be directed/thrown to Long range)
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user releases a stream of chakra through the air and molds it into the shape of any object or beast. By using the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind to gather air, and by coating his/her limbs in chakra, this technique allows the user to create semi-physical objects of Empyrean Wind and maintain them for a few precious moments. The objects made through this technique possess the ability to draw Natural Energy and Chakra from everything touching them, being able to suck techniques dry of Natural Energy and wreak havoc on ongoing Gentle Fist techniques.
-Must wait one turn before reuse.
-The objects can only affect Gentle Fist techniques and techniques based on Natural Energy.
~Declined~ Remove everything about sucking natural energy, and also make up your mind with the ranges. Its either mid, or long.
(I'm quoting this because it's the submission wherein the techniques were approved)
Editing/Resubmitting:
(Amatsu Fūton: Sakyū no Kyūei) - Empyrean Wind Release: The Song of the Sand Dunes
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid (Can be placed Mid-range all around an area at Mid-range)
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms a single handseal and sends a great blanket of Empyrean Wind through the pores of the earth or through the earth itself and spreads it through the terrain. By using the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind and its ability to differentiate between particles, the blanket separates the many minerals in the earth from each other, pulling all nutritious substances and minerals 100 meters downwards into the earth itself and leaving only a barren dune of sand and silicon in its wake. The blanket of Empyrean Wind severs all connection with the earth itself, preventing it from being used as a basis for Earth Techniques. Furthermore, the completely dead terrain makes the creation of life in the ground almost impossible, preventing the use of Wood Release, or any life-giving element, through the ground.
-The user can, with one (1) handseal, push the soil and earth upwards again. This count as one of the three moves allowed per turn.
-As a result of the Chakra strain, the user will be unable to use other Empyrean Wind Techniques during the same turn.
-Can only be used twice (2) per battle.
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~Declined~
Sorry, I agree with Mathias's edits on this one.
(Fūinjutsu/Amatsu Fūton: Yabō Haō Zangyaku no Kokyū) - Sealing Technique/Empyrean Wind Release: The Breath of Paarthurnax
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms two handseals and creates a circular shape of uniquely rotating Empyrean Wind and chakra-based strings of Kanji one hundred meters in the air. Through its rotation, the shape can use the air itself to gather all odorant molecules alongside moisture and most vapors. This makes it impossible for any odors to be spread around the field, as they are immediately drawn directly upwards into the atmosphere. Humidity and rain, too, can be absorbed by the shape, which can create an extremely dry environment. Finally, the shape can draw insects and big concentrations of harmful germs/particles/spores to it. This technique, however, can only attract the objects mentioned in one of the three options at a time. Each time the user switches between the three options, the thick strings of Kanji form a unique sealing array that seals all the incoming objects and material into itself.
-Switching between the three options counts as a move.
-The user can form a single handseal to unseal everything the three arrays have stored. This counts as a move.
-The user cannot use higher than S-ranked Empyrean Wind techniques while this is active. Furthermore, the user cannot use any other Empyrean Wind Techniques during the turn this technique is activated.
-The shape lasts for four (4) turns.
-Can only be used once (1) per battle.
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~Declined~
Just one thing, when releasing all of the odors, vapors, gases, etc. is the result just all of them seeping out into the area? Or is there some sort of powerful S-rank impact to accompany the release of the gases?
Resubmitting:
(Fūinjutsu/Amatsu Fūton: Mōshin no Miko) - Sealing Technique/Empyrean Wind Release: The Blind Faith of Theresa
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user releases a stream of chakra through the air and molds it into the shape of any object or beast. By using the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind to gather air, and by coating his/her limbs in chakra, this technique allows the user to create semi-physical objects of Empyrean Wind. Such objects would only last for a few precious seconds due to the instability shifting nature of Empyrean Wind, but through chakra manipulation the user is able to materialize long strings of chakra-based Kanji on the object, increasing its life-span. The more chakra and focus spent on this technique, the more visible and vicious the result of this technique will be.
-Must wait one turn before reuse.
-Can only last for three turn.
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~Declined~
First off, there needs to be a limit on the size of the beast or object that you can create. And a reasonable limit for an A-rank jutsu at that. Furthermore, the last sentence underlined doesn't really... make sense here. You mention no where else about being able to focus varying amounts of chakra or focus for a sustained period of time in this. So... either you need elaborate on what you mean there or take that out.
New submission:
(Fūinjutsu/Amatsu Fūton: Kurohitsugi) – Sealing Technique/Empyrean Wind Release: Black Coffin
Rank: S
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user forms a single handseal and expels a great amount of chakra from his body, causing great arrays of chakra-based Kanji to appear around a specific point. Upon creation, the arrays arrange themselves into forming the frame of a big, rectangular box. Even while arranging themselves, the Kanji emit controlled bursts of Empyrean Wind, using each other as focus points to cover the frame in a thick layer of the deadly element. Due to the presence of many sealing arrays, the entire box will be black as night and impossible to see through. Upon completion, every corner and side of the box will use the incredible suction power of Empyrean wind to pull matter trapped inside the box in all directions simultaneously, causing all but the sturdiest material to be ripped apart. Furthermore; the sheer amount of Empyrean Wind present within the box will show on those inside it in the form of multiple rips and tears. Kurohitsugi’s real strength, however, lies in its versatility. The frame of sealing arrays is designed to reject matter from entering and leaving the box. Energy-based attacks may still enter and leave, but physical attacks up to the rank of the technique are unable to pierce the box.
-It’s possible to confine the Empyrean Wind to the outer surface of the box, thereby pulling matter towards the box and safeguarding matter inside it.
-Can only be used once per battle.
-No other Empyrean Wind techniques during the following turn.
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~Declined~
Nice idea. However, the box's size needs to be defined/restricted. Also the effect of reversing the technique (you mention it in your first side note) need to be stated. How far away can the matter that the box pulls in be? What happens when the objects are pulled in? Are they simply drawn in with some minor damage from falling is there some sort of impact?
(Amatsu Fūton: Tenrai Oozara) Empyrean Wind Release: Celestial Discoids
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After forming a single handseal, the user releases several concentrated medium-sized flat discs of empyrean wind from their mouth that can be directed toward any place the user wishes to attack the opponent from all sides. The discs will slice through any object in their path and almost seem as if the object was cut through but were actually ripped apart on a molecular as it paves through the object.
~Can only be used five times per battle.
~Declined~ How many exactly? And lets be real here, they can't slice through any object.
(Amatsu Fūton: Doragon Unari) Empyrean Wind Release: Dragon's Roar
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After forming a single handseal, the user releases a massive blast of empyrean wind, slightly larger than Pressure Damage, that is shaped in the form of a dragon's head. The massive blast of empyrean wind will rage toward the target and cannot be satisfied until its hunger is quenched. This technique is so powerful that it has been said that it was used to pave an enormous tunnel straight through a large mountain in order to making traveling from one side to the other easier.
~Can only be used five times per battle.
~Approved~ I don't want to see any funny business with the background story of paving a tunnel through a large mountain.
(Amatsu Fūton: Muon Maru) Empyrean Wind Release: Soundless Circle
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 50
Damage: 90
Description: After clapping his hands together, the user creates a small, visible sphere of Empyrean wind. The sphere will be about the size of a football at its creation. Immediately after being created, a slightly bigger sphere of Empyrean wind is created around the original one, encasing it like a second layer of skin with no space between the two layers. More and more layers are subsequently added to the technique in quick succession afterwards. Small ripples in the immediate vicinity of every layer heralds their coming to the world. The ripples also appear right before the original sphere is born, warning vigilant enemies of its coming. All the layers are individual structures in their own right. Therefore; each sphere has its own center. All the midpoints, one for each layer, are placed around each other, forming their own circle with a small hollow space in the very center. The small hollow space will, as the technique swallows more and more mass, slowly be filled with extremely compressed matter, forming a kind of core. The extreme amount of compresison means, that while the core might not be very big, it's extremely heavy and unstable because of its forceful creation. When enough layers have been added and enough mass has been gathered, the user performs a single handseal, which causes all the layers to be compressed into countless microscopic spheres with each their center, encasing the core of mass, thereby forcefully ripping it apart. The second the core is ripped into countless pieces, the rings disperse, as to not gather all the microscopic shards at their center, but still letting them retain their velocity and lethality The extreme speed with which the core is destroyed sends countless of extremely heavy, microscopic projectiles flying in all directions, covering the entire area in a deadly rain of death. The user can control which sides of the core the microscopic rings gather at when he compresses them around the core of mass, to avoid killing himself with his own technique.
~Can only be used once.
~No Empyrean Wind technique for 4 turns after this technique has been used.
~The sheer concentration and chakra this technique requires severely tires the user and damages him for 20 points.
~No A-ranked or above wind techniques can be used the turn after this has been used.
~Declined~ How many layers can you exactly stack together? How long does this technique take to be fully finished? Microscopic projectiles? I don't think so. Lastly, 20 damage to the user? I'm expecting to see some real physical drawbacks from this technique on re-submission.
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Resubmitting/Editting:
(Amatsu Fūton

Sakyū no Kyūei) - Empyrean Wind Release

The Song of the Sand Dunes
Rank: A-
Rank
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms a single handseal and sends a great blanket of Empyrean Wind through the pores of the earth or through the earth itself and spreads it through the terrain. By using the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind and its ability to differentiate between particles, the blanket separates the many minerals in the earth from each other, pulling all nutritious substances and minerals 100 meters downwards into the earth itself and leaving only a barren dune of sand and silicon in its wake. The blanket of Empyrean Wind severs all connection with the earth itself, preventing it from being used as a basis for Earth Techniques. Furthermore, the completely dead terrain makes the creation of life in the ground almost impossible, preventing the use of Wood Release, or any life-giving element, through the ground.
-The user can, with one (1) handseal, push the soil and earth upwards again. This count as one of the three moves allowed per turn.
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Earth-techniques of S-ranked strength and above can be used in the dead terrain, but their damage is reduced by 20 points.
-No Forbidden-ranked Empyrean Wind techniques during the following turn.
-Can only be used twice (2) per battle.
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Approved
(Fūinjutsu/Amatsu Fūton
Hiryōsukēru Kyūkōka) - Sealing Technique/Empyrean Wind Release
Flying Dragonscale Swoop
Rank: S-
Rank
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user forms two handseals and creates a
massive dragon of uniquely rotating Empyrean Wind and chakra-based strings of Kanji one hundred meters in the air.
The dragon will circle the battlefield and look realistic, but its shape is purely for cosmetic purposes. Through its rotation, the
dragon can use the air itself to gather all odorant molecules alongside moisture and most vapors
, which makes it impossible for odors
and gasses to be spread around the field, as the
dragon immediately draw
s them into
itself. Humidity and rain, too, can be absorbed by the
dragon, which can create an extremely dry environment. Finally, the shape can draw insects and big concentrations of harmful germs/particles/spores
into it
self. This technique, however, can only attract the
things mentioned in one of the three options at a time. Each time the user switches between the three options, the thick strings of Kanji form sealing
formulas that seals all the incoming material in
side the dragon.
-Switching between the three options counts as a move.
-Absorbing a technique/combination counts as a move.
-The dragon can maximally absorb techniques of S-ranked strength.
-The user can form a single handseal to unseal everything the three
formulas have stored. This counts as a move
and simply releases everything inside the dragon into the area.
-The user cannot use higher than S-ranked Empyrean Wind techniques while this is active. Furthermore, the user cannot use any other Empyrean Wind Techniques during the turn this technique is activated.
-The shape lasts for four (4) turns.
-Can only be used once (1) per battle.
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Approved
(Amatsu Fūton

Doragon Unari)
- Empyrean Wind Release

Dragon's Roar
Type:
Supplementary/Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage:
N/A (Depends on the gathered gas)
Description: After forming a single handseal, the user releases a massive
gust of
Empyrean
Wind, slightly larger than
'Wind Style: Pressure Damage
', that is shaped in the form of a dragon's head. The massive
gust of
Empyrean
Wind will rage
around the field and cannot be satisfied until its hunger is quenched. This technique is
designed to gather gaseous molecules whose consistency differs from that of air through the unique rotation of Empyrean Wind. By inhaling deeply the turn after this technique has been used, the user is able to gather and compress the gathered gases and air into a compressed ball that can be exhaled as a large cloud immediately afterwards. By storing the gas in the Oxygen-forsaken core of the Empyrean Wind, the user is able to preserve the gas' properties for when it's exhaled.
-Can only be used
three (3) times per battle.
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Declined I don't understand it. You need to rewrite it.
Resubmitting:
(Amatsu Fūton

Mōshin no Miko) - Empyrean Wind Release

The Blind Faith of Theresa
Rank: A
-Rank
Type:
Defensive-Offensive
Range: Short
-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user releases a stream of chakra through the air and molds it into the shape of any object or beast
of reasonable size. By using the incredible suction power of Empyrean Wind to gather air, this technique allows the user to create semi-physical
, semi-transparent objects of Empyrean Wind. Such objects would only last for a few precious seconds due to the instability shifting nature of Empyrean Wind, but through chakra manipulation the user is able to
condense the object
s created by the technique, increasing
their life-span
s.
-Must wait one turn before reuse.
-Objects last for the turn they are used and can only be created short range from the user.
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Approved
(Fūinjutsu/Amatsu Fūton

Kurohitsugi) – Sealing Technique/Empyrean Wind Release

Black Coffin
Rank: S
-Rank
Type: Defensive
-Offensive
Range: Short
-Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: The user forms a single handseal and expels a great amount of chakra from his body, causing great
masses of chakra-based Kanji to appear around a specific point. Upon creation, the
masses of Kanji arrange themselves into forming the frame of a big, rectangular box
that reaches mid-range around the area it's created on. Even while arranging themselves, the Kanji emit controlled bursts of Empyrean Wind, using each other as focus points to cover the frame in a thick layer of the deadly element. Due to the presence of
so many seal
s, the entire box will be black as night and impossible to see through. Upon completion, every corner and side of the box will use the incredible suction power of Empyrean wind to pull matter trapped inside the box in all directions simultaneously, causing all but the sturdiest material to be ripped apart. Furthermore; the sheer amount of Empyrean Wind present within the box will show on those inside it in the form of multiple rips and tears. Kurohitsugi’s real strength, however, lies in its versatility. The f
ormulas of seal
s are designed to reject matter from entering and leaving the box. Energy-based attacks may still enter and leave, but physical attacks up to the rank of the technique are unable to pierce the box.
-It’s possible to confine the Empyrean Wind to the outer surface of the box
and simply use the matter-rejecting formulas to safeguard matter inside it.
-Can only be used
twice (2) per battle. The offensive version can be used once (1), as can the defensive version.
-No other Empyrean Wind techniques during the following 3 turns.
-Cannot mold chakra above S-Rank for the same and next turn.
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Approved
(Amatsu Fūton

Jinkō Akari)
- Empyrean Wind Release

Artificial Lights
Rank: A
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user creates a shape of Empyrean Wind and uses its ability to carry Oxygen particles to drastically increase the level of Oxygen in the designated area. At any time, the user generates a small spark by creating two small structures of chakra in the designated area and rubbing them against each other. The small spark will ignite the oxygen in the area, causing it to violently combust. The shape of Empyrean
Wind will keep the needed matter
/gases in and the unneeded matter
/gases out. The
increased level of Oxygen will cause those within the designated area to feel very light-headed and nauseous,
warning them of the imminent danger.
-Must wait one turn before reuse.
-The user cannot use any Forbidden-ranked Empyrean Wind techniques during the same turn.
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Approved