Re: Custom Element's Jutsu
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[Magnisuton: Magunesiumu Chiri] - Magnesium Dust Release: Magnesium Dust
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 40
Description: The user releases their chakra into the earth, using their chakra to bring forth an abundance of magnesium in the form of a powder like dust, which settles over the battlefield creating a layer of magnesium. The magnesium dust layer remains rather compact, preventing it from moving or being simply being brushed away by anyone other than the user. The dust cuts off contact with the earth preventing anyone other than the user from performing Earth Jutsu. The user is also capable of making the dust rise up from the ground, so that instead of forming a protective dense layer of magnesium over the earth, the user instead creates a cloud of lingering magnesium. The layer/cloud of magnesium serves as a source of magnesium, and allows for quicker and more proficient use of magnesium techniques. While it also has a pressure sensing effect, so that the user is aware of anything that comes within direct contact of the magnesium. Alternatively the user can release the magnesium dust from their mouth. The amount of magnesium that is called forth by the user is subject to the users intentions.
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Declined The technique does too much. Pressure sensing is an earth custom so it can't be added there. Also, this resembles a carbon (if memory serves me right) technique. If this is to serve as the basic technique of the element, then you need to make it so that it simply calls forth magnesium from the ground that your use to attack or defend and that stays on the battle field to be used for other techniques. For a B-Rank its too packed up with things. I don't have a problem with the dual use (from the ground or mouth) but you effectively have here 4 techniques roled up in one.
[Magunisuton: Magunesiumu Kaibyaku] - Magnesium Dust Release: Magnesium Creation
Type: Offensive | Defensive | Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30 (-10 per turn to maintain)
Damage: 60
Description: The user creates objects of magnesium. The user is capable of creating pillars, shields, walls, waves and tools of magnesium to aid as either an defense, attack or supplement. The user is capable of making constructs rise from the ground, manipulating already existing sources of magnesium, or expelling objects of magnesium from their mouth/body and directing them towards their opponent. Objects created with this technique can be made to float regardless of mass, and can be moved/launched into long range. To control the technique the user needs to do hand gestures to direct and control the magnesium constructs.
Note:
- Can only be used 6x
- Only one object per use
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[Magunisuton: Ranbou Tenka] - Magnesium Dust Release: Violent Ignition
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: A technique where the user is capable of further manipulating magnesium techniques used within the next three turns so as to cause them to ignite at the cost of extra chakra. When the user uses a magnesium technique, by sacrificing more chakra, upon creation the user manipulates the magnesium dust causing the powder to rub against the other particles frantically as it forms into its desired shape. This creates friction, which in turn creates heat or possibly even static electricity. Thanks to the ease at which magnesium can be ignited it quickly sets alight, allowing for the creation dazzlingly bright, blazing constructs of magnesium. Alternatively this technique can be used on an already existing magnesium technique, but in turn will only affect that technique and no other.
Note:
- Can only be used three times per battle
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Declined There is a confusion in your description. Up to the last sentence this seems to be usable on existing magnesium dust techniques by adding more chakra and making it go boom but then you say "Alternatively this technique can be used on an already existing magnesium technique, but in turn will only affect that technique and no other." where the description already hints to it. From what i see, this is a technique where you ignite magnesium, be it from a technique or present in the field, making it go boom. The more the magnesium, the more the damage. Simple. Basically a case of simplifying the technique.
[Magunisuton: Magunesiumu Kaibyaku] - Magnesium Dust Release: Greater Magnesium Creation
Type: Offensive | Defensive | Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40 (-15 per turn to maintain)
Damage: 80
Description: The user creates stronger and larger objects of magnesium. The user is capable of creating pillars, shields, walls, waves and tools of magnesium to aid as either an defense, attack or supplement. The user is capable of making constructs rise from the ground, manipulating already existing sources of magnesium, or expelling objects of magnesium from their mouth/body and directing them towards their opponent. Objects created with this technique can be made to float regardless of mass, and can be moved/launched into long range. To control the technique the user needs to do hand gestures to direct and control the magnesium constructs.
Note:
- Can only be used 4x
- Can create up to 2 objects per use.
- No Fire and Earth techniques above S-Rank same and next turn.
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[Magnisuton: Kagai Magunesiumu Jaki] - Magnesium Dust Release: The Infernal Magnesium Imps
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user can create up to three Imps of Magnesium which can be spawned from either the ground, or spewed from the users mouth. These Imps are slightly smaller than a human, averaging at about four and a half feet. The Imps are rather generic in looks, having demonic like tails, small devilish wings; capable of only maintaining pseudo-flight due to their small size, claw like hands with opposable thumbs, horns, and a rather malicious and mischievous appearance. These Imps usually wield a weapon, either a bow or trident. They're rather proficient at close range combat; possessing uncanny speed and strength as well as being adept at wielding their weapon of choice. The Imps are only capable of using B rank and below Magnesium techniques, which must be created from the ground/an existing source. However the true offensive capabilities of the Imps stem from the fact that they're capable of manipulating the magnesium that they're comprised of, being capable of enhancing their features (larger limbs, stronger and longer claws etc), or releasing bullets/clouds/blades and the like of Magnesium. Of course should the released Magnesium exit the Imps sphere of influence, which has a diameter of 1 meter, the Imps control of said Magnesium would be completely relinquished, lest there be a physical or aggregational connection. The limit to this manipulation however is that the mass of the Imp is incapable of changing, therefore for one body part to grow, another must become smaller. This restriction however can be slightly circumvented should the Imps manage to come in contact with a Magnesium source. The Imps are capable of assimilating magnesium into their bodies, allowing them to grow larger and stronger. The Imps are also capable of assimilating the features of the absorbed Magnesium technique, which can be manipulated much like their own. Therefore should a projectile like technique be absorbed, the Imps hold the capability of redirecting these projectiles to a place of choice. Despite being exceptionally fast, the assimilation is not instant, therefore when attempting to absorb techniques with a velocity, the Imp's would have to be of a near equal or larger size to effectively do so lest they wish to adverse effects. Due to the capabilities of the Imp's, an Imp would have to be completely and utterly destroyed as should they only suffer injuries such as a severed limb, they'd simply put themselves back together with horrific ease.
Note:
- Can only be used 2x
- These Imps are created within Short Range of the user.
- No Magnesium techniques above B rank for the rest of the turn; and the next turn.
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Declined Why is this Long range?
[Magunisuton: Ranbou Tenka] - Magnesium Dust Release: Violent Ignition
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
(10 per technique)
Damage:
N/A (+10)
Description:
A activation technique of sorts. In this technique, the user is capable of further manipulating magnesium techniques used within the next three turns so as to cause them to ignite at the cost of extra chakra. When the user uses a magnesium technique, by sacrificing more chakra, upon creation the user manipulates the magnesium dust causing the powder to rub against the other particles frantically as it forms into its desired shape. This creates friction, which in turn creates heat or possibly even static electricity. Thanks to the ease at which magnesium can be ignited it quickly sets alight, allowing for the creation dazzlingly bright, blazing constructs of magnesium.
This technique results in Magnesium techniques igniting upon creation, and therefore does not effect pre-existing techniques However this technique can be used on an already existing magnesium technique, but in turn will only affect that technique and no other.
Naturally the user is capable of exempting techniques from ignition.
Note:
- Can only be used three times per battle
- Due to the inherent brightness of Magnesium, this technique can result in the opponent being blinded/their vision being inhibited, the user being accustomed to Magnesium would have built up some level of immunity and tolerance to this property.
- This technique only results in Magnesium techniques igniting, for an explosion to occur the right conditions must be met. Eg the presence of water.
- The alight Magnesium techniques eventually burn out after three turns.
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Declined You didn't understand what I wrote. Contact me. This is illogical and i'll explain to you why.
[Magnisuton: Magunesiumu Chiri] - Magnesium Dust Release: Magnesium Dust
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points:
N/A
Description: The user releases their chakra into the earth
/sea water, using their chakra to bring forth an abundance of magnesium in the form of a powder like dust, which settles over the battlefield creating a layer of magnesium. The magnesium dust layer remains rather compact, preventing it from moving or being simply being brushed away by anyone other than the user. The dust cuts off contact with the earth preventing anyone other than the user from performing Earth Jutsu. The layer of magnesium serves as a source of magnesium, and allows for quicker and more proficient use of magnesium techniques. Alternatively the user can release the magnesium dust from their mouth. The amount of magnesium that is called forth by the user is subject to the users intentions.
Should the dust settle over a large source of water, it would simply dissolve after four turns.
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Declined How can a B-Rank technique stop the use of all earth techniques? Follow W&S. Also, how can you form this on water? "The Magnesium dust produces a bright, white almost flare like sparks and flames when ignited, the ignition process furthers Magnesium's offensive capabilities and of course separates it from most other metals, the temperature of the flame being able to reach up to 3100'c however staying relatively close to the metal itself (300mm).
If ignited magnesium dust makes contact with water, an explosion will be created." If you create magnesium dust on water, the result is clear...
[Magnisuton: Kyohaku Naito] - Magnesium Dust Release: Starry Night
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user performs two handseals, causing an abundance of Magnesium dust to emerge from the ground and ascend into the air in the form of small clumps that range from dust sized to egg sized. The dust that forms the clumps of Magnesium rubs against each other at high speeds, resulting in the clumps igniting. Due to the abundance of the clumps, and the inherent brightness of ignited Magnesium, the Magnesium clumps possess blinding qualities. The clumps of magnesium have a rather peaceful emergence, rising from around the opponent rather than from beneath them, thus as long as the opponent doesn't move they shouldn't experiencing any physically adverse effects other than the blinding. The Magnesium ascends into the sky, before reforming into a large cloud like structure of Magnesium 10 meters above the opponent. Then upon the user performing another handseal, the cloud structure continues to release multiple pellets of Magnesium down towards the opponent and the surrounding area. Unlike the previous movements of the Magnesium, this expulsion remains to be rather forceful. The bullets whizzing downwards towards their target at high speeds. The speeding mini meteors leaving behind a flaming trail and creating blazing indents within the earth and ultimately seeking to annihilate the enemy.
Note:
- Can only be used 3x
- No Magnesium techniques for the rest of the turn.
- This technique is capable of covering an area of up to ten meters in diameter.
- The user has a level of immunity from being blinded, being capable of perceiving through the sparkling magnesium clumps to keep tabs on the opponent.
- The timing at which the cloud structure releases its content is subject to the users intentions, it could be upon its slightest formation, so that as Magnesium continues to ascend, the bullets begin to rain down. Or could be up to three turns later. After three turns the Magnesium cloud simply falls to the ground creating a layer of ignited magnesium.
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Declined Blinding qualities? Define them please... It also has many exploitable sentences... You are trying to produce techniques magnesium dust which are already ignited and are used in their ignited forms...but your element is magnesium dust. Once the dust ignites, the combustion is so fast you are left without element to manipulate. You can't shoot a beam of ignited magnesium dust...you can, however, ignite magnesium dust but by doing so you are basically destroying the magnesium dust and as such the technique itself. I don't have an issue with you creating, which was what i was thinking you were doing, a custom element technique that allows you to ignite an already created (moving or not, active or not) MD technique. However, you cannot create customs in which you release MD already ignited and manipulate already ignited MD.
[Magnisuton: Behemoth's Doki] - Magnesium Dust Release: Behemoth's Wrath
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user performs two handseals, causing an abundance of Magnesium dust to rise from the ground beneath and around the opponent(s). The Magnesium dust quickly forms into a raging tornado. Matter caught within the Tornado is ravaged and sliced by the miniscule particles of Magnesium that swirls within. Should the opponent not defend, they would be torn to pieces within a matter of moments. The size of the Tornado is capable of being up to a scale in which it would be capable of completely consuming large constructs such as Great Stone Golem.
Note:
- Can only be used 2x
- No Magnesium techniques above A rank for the rest of; and the next turn.
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