[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

[Ryūjin]

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(Fūinjutsu: Juin Jutsu Kyūsuisen) - Sealing Technique: Cursed Seal's Blessing
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This is a simple Sealing technique based on the principal of Chakra Sealing in advance to be released later, a Seal which is located on the user's back and is already stored with a small portion of the user's Cursed Seal Of Heaven Chakra, which the user can activate and deactivate at will, however the user cannot use this Seal while the Cursed Seal Of Heaven is active, following the Cursed Seal Of Heaven's proprieties when the Chakra in this Seal is released, the evil chakra boosts the next technique that the user uses with a +10 damage points if the user has only the Cursed Seal Of Heaven level 1 and with a +20 damage boost to the next technique the user uses after the usage of this technique if the user has the Cursed Seal Of Heaven level 2, however due to being a small portion of the Cursed Seal's chakra the amount can only be used to boost the power of only 1 ninjutsu technique per usage after the user has been injected with the Chakra that the seal contains.
Note: Must have at least the Cursed Seal Of Heaven level 1.
Note: A Maximum of 2 Seals can be written on the user's body.
Note: Must be placed in the user's biography.
Note: Cannot be used while the Cursed Seal is Activated.
Note: Only boosts the next ninjutsu technique that the user uses after the release of this chakra.
Note: Created by ~Crow~

±± Declined ±± Do Not Resubmit

(Ninpō: Kemuri Nenshō Sō) - Ninja Art: Burning Smoke Stream
Type: Supplementary/Offense
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This is an advanced Smoke Technique however enhanced by the Fire chakra nature, by infusing the user's wrist launcher(s) with Fire chakra, the user releases a wide Stream of Smoke out of his Wrist launcher(s) towards his target, using the Fire chakra's abilities, the user greatly increases the temperature of the smoke when it's released out of the wrist launchers, being equal to some fire technique's temperature or Steam's temperature, burning the opponent on contact with their skin in a similar manner to hot steam or fire.
Note: Can only be used by Smoke users with a Wrist launcher
Note: No Smoke Techniques higher than A-rank the following turn.
Note: Can only be used twice.

±± Declined ±± So you want smoke to be like steam, boil and fire elements? Not going to happen.


(Ninpō: Kemuri Assai Rō) - Ninja Art: Smoke Crushing Prison
Type: Offense/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After forming two handseals Ram → Tiger The user concentrates his chakra into the already existing steam into the battlefield which works even better if the Smoke is surrounding the opponent, the user compresses a great deal of Smoke altogether forming 4 Pillars of Heavily concentrated Smoke into an "X" pattern around the opponent 2 meters away from him, then the Pillars of Smoke come slamming against the opponent pushing into him from 4 different directions against each other affecting the opponent's body with a large physical power that constricts his body not allowing him to move a single muscle, and possibly crushing the opponent's bones, each of the Smoke pillars have the width and hieght of one of the spikes of the "Destructive Rising Rock Pillars" technique, making it hard for the opponent to escape them, however as a downside they require a large amount of Smoke to be present on the field.
Note: Requires a Large amount of pre-existing Smoke.
Note: Can only be used by Smoke Users.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.


±± Declined ±± Don't mix both...steam isn't smoke. Besides, i won't allow you to have a crushing smoke technique unless much better described and worked you.

 

[Sharingdork]

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(Kugutsu Genjutsu: Clickety-Katakata Otowotateru) Puppet Illusion Technique: Clickety-Clack
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user focuses their genjutsu chakra into the joints of their puppets, and as the puppets move, the sound they give off is augmented by the chakra. When the target hears the sound, the sound will seem to not simply register on their cochlear nerve, but reverberate around their head, making a single movement echo inside the targets head for the duration of a turn. When a puppet moves more than once, every "click" and "clack" of the joints moving against one another echo's throughout the target's mind, fighting for one another to be the dominate noise, as it were, making them unable to focus one more than one thing at a time, and effectivly taking away a great portion of the target's hearing capabilities.
Note: ~Can only be taught by Sharingdork
~Can only be used with puppets
~Affecting more than one puppet counts as more than one move
~The sound of the puppet's joints becomes louder as a result of the chakra augmentation, making it easy to track them at the start of this jutsu (though that quickly wears off as more and more sounds echo around in the target's head)
~This jutsu affects puppets for two (2) turns, but the sounds only echo in the target's head for one (1) turn
~Can only be used three (3) times per battle

±± Declined ±± Genjutsu chakra? Really? :sy:


(Minotaurosu) Minotaur
Type: Supplementary (Puppet)
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra: 30 (if summoning)
Damage: N/A
Description: Minotaur is a six-and-a-half-foot puppet resembling a humanoid bull. The Minotaur has a hollow chest, which allows the capture of people, similar to Black Ant, only with more room because of it's size. The Minotaur can be used from the outside, or inside similar to Hiruko. The massive bull has two detatchable horns on it's head held on with the same grade cable as is in Sasori's stomach, which can be shot off individually into mid-range from the puppet, and then realed back in with the cable. Minotaur is made of a durable material, allowing it to punch, kick, or headbutt through earth techniques C-rank and below. Its arms and legs can be detatched like Crow's, with serrated blades on the end to attack with. Because of Minotaur's unique composition, it can use "Puppet Theater - Black Secret Technique Iron Maiden" alone.
Note: ~Can only be brought into battle without summoning by Sharingdork

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±± Declined ±± Restrictions? Range of the horns? This is much more like an S-Rank puppet. It only serves to punch and kick and nothing else?

 

[Mugen Ryukyu]

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Custom Weapon | Gilgamesh
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80( + 10 when chakra is infused)
Description: The Gilgamesh is a set of gauntlets, greaves, mask, and back armor, and is obtained by Gray during his adventures.when put on it increases the users speed and strength. It is made of metal which has chakra receptors built in, and its techniques can be powered up by engaging the receptors with feeding it a bit of elemental chakra. Depending on the chakra you 'fed' the weapons attributes will change. Example: If fire chakra is given to the armor its hits will be infused with a fiery blow. The gauntlets have small drills on each arm capable of extending during some attacks, while the greaves have small saws allowing Gray to cut through enemies with kicks.
If earth chakra is given then hits give a more powerful blow
If Lightning chakra is given then each hit has an electrifying shock
If Wind chakra is given then each hit cuts deeply into the opponent
If ice chakra is given then each hit has the capability to freeze the opponent
*Can only be used by Mugen Ryukyu
*Can only be put on at start of battle

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±± Declined ±± Why would this enhance your speed and strength? Stating it does simply by you using it doesn't make it happened. Also, if its a weapon, its obvious you need to put it on the end of the battle. Actually, you bring it with yourself at all times... Freeze the opponent? Completely? Not going to happen. You need to think about this practically. Figure out what you want exactly from this.

Hyouton furi-zu | Ice Style: Freeze
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: Much like the aggravated rock technique, the user begins to gather his ice chakra throughout his whole body then performs one handseal and anything that comes in contact with the user freezes.

±± Declined ±± You should check the Earth Jutsu List, that technique was updated.


Kuchiyose: Kame | Raphael
Type: Summoning
Rank: S
Range: short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: Raphael is one of the only turtles that stand on two feet, he is as tall as a 5 foot story building, He wears a red bandana around eyes with two holes to see out of. He dual wields two twin sais as a primary weapon.Like most of the turtles his shell can only be pierced by S-rank attacks, unlike most turtles he has a natural affinity to fire and can use all the fire jutsu the summoner knows up to S-Rank. He is generally the most likely to experience extremes of emotion, and is usually known for being aggressive, sullen and rebellious.
*Can only be summoned once per battle
*If he uses a fire jutsu it counts as a move.
*Stays on the field a maximum of 4 turns.

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±± Approved ±± Edited. Don't forget to put correct chakra infos on your techniques. Also, summons can only use up to S-Rank techniques. And don't forget, a summon above C-rank always has a limited time on the field.

 

[Selendrile]

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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Deyūku Tanku)- Summoning Technique: Duke the Tank
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Med
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After drawing blood from any part of the body onto their palms, the user will clasp both hands together, summoning Duke in sky above them, or at any place short-med range from the user. Duke is one of the largest Herons at Hometree, being similar in size in relation to Gamabunta. Duke's physical strength is the greatest among the Herons, where he specializes in taijutsu. His agility, speed and flexibility for his size is also superb. Due to his natural physical makeup, Duke's legs are incredibly long. His kicks are able to reach up to mid-range, and carry enough force behind them to shatter bones upon impact. These kicks have the rank of an A-rank attack. However, due to his large size, he is unable to fly. Being a bird, all of the Herons have naturally increased vision.
*Note: Must have signed the Great Blue Heron contract
*Note: Duke remains summoned for three turns; once per battle
*Note: A single or double kick performed by Duke counts as a single move of the user
~Declined~ Define how strong a double kick would be and how durable Duke is.

(Heron Geijutsu: Mizuiro Tsunami)- Heron Arts: Light Blue Tidal Wave
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Med/Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will perform three hand seals, and then spread their arms out straight in front of them. From both of their wide sleeves, a flock of ten small Herons will erupt, and fly outwards from the user, directly upwards into the sky. These Herons carry an explosive tag in each of their claws. As the Herons fly over the opponent, they will drop the explosive tags from their claws. The tags are detonated by the user performing a single hand seal. After dropping the explosive tags, the Herons swoop in behind the opponent, attacking them with their shark beaks and claws.
*Note: Must have signed the Great Blue Heron contract
*Note: Usable twice per battle
*Note: No Ninjutsu above B-rank the next turn
~Declined~ Do not Resubmit

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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Deyūku Tanku)- Summoning Technique: Duke the Tank
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Med
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: After drawing blood from any part of the body onto their palms, the user will clasp both hands together, summoning Duke in sky above them, or at any place short-med range from the user. Duke is one of the largest Herons at Hometree, being similar in size in relation to Gamabunta. Duke's physical strength is the greatest among the Herons, where he specializes in taijutsu. His agility, speed and flexibility for his size is also superb, being compared to the Toads of Myobokuzan. Due to his large size, he is able to absorb up to C-rank taijutsu attacks without damage. Due to his natural physical makeup, Duke's legs are incredibly long. His kicks are able to reach up to mid-range, and carry enough force behind them to shatter bones upon impact. A single kick performed by Duke is A-ranked, while a double kick is B+B-rank. However, due to his large size, he is unable to fly. Being a bird, all of the Herons have naturally increased vision.
*Note: Must have signed the Great Blue Heron contract
*Note: Duke remains summoned for four turns; once per battle
*Note: A single or double kick performed by Duke counts as a single move of the user

±± Declined ±± Gamabunta is 100 meters tall.... Your summon is the same size...So how does that work out for a Taijutsu Specialist Summon? You say his punches go up to Mid-range...DUH! He encompasses a mid range distance around him just by being there... Work it out in a more logical way.


(Heron Kuchiyose: Chimei-Tekina Burū no Kyōen)- Heron Summoning: Feast of the Deadly Blues
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user will perform three hand seals after drawing a bit of his blood, and then spread their arms out straight in front of them. From both of their wide sleeves, two pair of normal sized Blue Herons will erupt. Each pair of Herons carry one end of a bladed wire in their beaks, so they form a long 6ft. saw. The two pair of Herons with the bladed wires attached in their beaks can be independently controlled. The bladed wire is sharp enough to cause deep, serious cuts if they make contact with the enemy.
*Note: Must have signed the Great Blue Heron Summoning Contract
*Note: The Herons last two turns before dispersing
*Note: Usable twice per battle

±± Approved ±± Edited name and some minor things.


(Bakuton: Gekido Batafurai Akuma no Rabinasudakuama)- Explosion Release: The Ravenous Dark Armor of the Enraged Butterfly Demon
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50(+10 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: While Explosion Release: Evolved Twelve Winged Robe of the Butterfly God is activated, the user will release a thread of clay onto themselves, further manipulating their clay armor. After the clay layer fully encases the body it will retract, forming a white armor, which sprouts a pair of large wings on the back. About one-third the way down the outer sections of the wings, are large skulls, capable of ripping and tearing at an opponent. The large wings also enable flight, flying at such high speeds that it requires 2 Tomoe Sharingan or higher to track it. On the left arm, a clay sword is created, that rests on top of the wrist. The blade extends three feet from the hand, and is capable of slicing off entire limbs with a direct swing. The strength of the armor is so great that it is able to fully block any S-rank attacks launched by the opponent. Even the momentum from attacks is halted, leaving no transfer of energy to the actual user's body. Due to its natural weakness to lightning, a direct S-rank lightning attack will destroy the cloak.
*Note: Must have a Deidara biography
*Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
*Note: No Clay techniques for the rest of the battle after the armor is destroyed
*Note: User is limited to Clay/Earth/Lightning and physical techniques while in the armor
*Note: Can only be used while "Explosion Release: Evolved Twelve Winged Robe of the Butterfly God" is activated
*Note: Lasts for 2 turns; Usable once per battle
*Note: Can block up to 2 S-rank techniques total, before it begins to crack and fall away; (Any mix of Tai/Ken/Nin/Basic 5)
*Note: Due to the massive amount of strain expelled on the user's body, they are unable to run or walk for two turns after deactivation

(Explosion Release: Evolved Twelve Winged Robe of the Butterfly God is a previous jutsu you approved. If you need me to post it, please just put pending on this technique and ill send you the link so I dont have to resubmit next week)

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±± Declined ±± OP....seriously OP! This makes you imune to anything up to S-Rank...ANYTHING. Rethink this.

 

[BusinessManTeno]

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Summoning Animal:
Townsend Mole
Scroll Owner: -
Prometheus-
Other Users who have signed contract:
None
Summoning Boss if existing:
Rebellion The Mole
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:
None Atm
Description and Background:
Rebellion is the biggest type of mole there is. The User does bites their palm. Do 2 handseals and palm the ground. A huge tremor will occur. kiinda like an earthquake. He is then summoned into the ground. He has claws as he can dig his way underground. faster then most and he can do it undetected. His Claws are incredibly sharp. He is about half the size as chief toad. So if i was to ride on him i could. He specializes in earth (Of course). He dont need handsigns for no earth up to A rank. And only 1 for S rank (He has thumbs). He have an excellent sense of smell. so he can sniff out things with ease. He can also talk. Just incase

±± Declined ±± This contract was already approved and is held by Deidara...

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~~~~~~~Updating Boss Summon~~~~~~~~~

Summoning Technique: (souseiki harinezumi) Phaze
Rank- S
Range-Long
Chakra Cost-40
Chakra Damage-80
Description- The user cuts his palm till blood drips. Once that, he then does 5 hand seals and slams his/her hands on the ground.. Phaze (My summon) Will Appears in mid air above the user circling him/her. Phaze Speaclizes in S rank Water. Phaze Can use the water in his body as a water source. (Ones that do not require a huge water source). The Water jutsus that need handseals only need the summoner to do the tiger handseal. And that count as the handseals. (S rank have to do Boar>Tiger (2hand seals)). And can Travel at the speed of 80mph.Phaze Beak is Incredibly Strong,And Long.This summon is the same size as Sauske Hawk. so easy rideable. This summon can also talkk, so just incase a situation happen.

-Only can stay for 4 turns
-User Cant Use any water jutsus while summon is active
-Can use Once
-All techniques used by Phaze count toward the user's 3 moves
-The summon can only use up to S-rank earth techniques
-Can only be Taught by Ten-Zero

(Once again Rag said he didnt see nothing wrong with me updating my boss summon to a dif element.)

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Just updating it. To make it more clear

(kuroi fenikkusu) Black Phoenix
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:40 (50 If activate the lightning current)
Damage Points:80

Description/Ability: This Sword Was made from a keyblade master. He was the maker of Key blades. This was along the lines of his ADVANCE key blades made out of black steel that was said Unbreakable. Though it does not look it , It is. This Sword has a will of its on. Though not alive it can emit needles from the handles if the chakra in its wielder is different then what it normally is used to. Meaning if anybody picks it up they hand is screwed or the user chakra flow gets disrupted (Genjutsu) his/her hand will get damaged. The wielder of this blade practiced many years with It. Mastering its weight. The sword is said to weigh over 400pounds. But due to the training the owner knows how to channel its own chakra into the sword making it as light as any regular sword but too anybody else it will be hard to pick up (not impossible), And a Very heavy hit. This Sword is Known for its incredible lightning current that drives through the sword. Once the lightning current activates the Sword gets Yellow poke-dots all on it , signifying the electrical currents all through the blade. Once the user cut somebody with this blade it can disperse small shocks of lightning into the person system through the cut on the person body.. This Blade can also cut through A Rank Earth. Due to its Heavy Property and Electrical currents through the blade

-Cant Use No Basic Ninjutsu while this blade is in play
-Cant use Lightning jutsus above B rank While sword is activated with the lightning current
-If the user Activates the sword. Everytime the sword is being swung it causes for 1 of the users turn
-The sword can only be activated with the electrical currents for 3 turns
-Only usable by whom i say


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Kemuri houmen : Kemuri doragon Smoke Release : Smoke Dragon
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: By unleashing a continuous stream of smoke from his wrist launcher or mouth, the user can use his chakra to shape the smoke into the form of a dragon linked to his wrist launcher or mouth. This gives him the advantage of short range attacks, and because the dragon is completely composed of smoke, physical attacks are useless against it. He can form several Smoke Dragons at once. Its primary battle ability is to envelop and suffocate the target

:Note:This is already a jutsu in narutoverse but its not in the ninjutsu list. thought id just make it a custom

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:Note:Weak To Water
:Note:Cant Use Wind while in the same move with this
~All Declined~ Updating to make something more overpowered without proper restrictions or reason? The change in element is fine. I don't see how Phaze uses the water inside of him as a source (that would end up killing him). Also remove the genjutsu bit with the second jutsu. Do not resubmit the last jutsu.

Summoning Technique: (souseiki harinezumi) Phaze
Rank- S
Range-Long
Chakra Cost-40
Chakra Damage-80
Description- The user cuts his palm till blood drips. Once that, he then does 5 hand seals and slams his/her hands on the ground.. Phaze (My summon) Will Appears in mid air above the user circling him/her. Phaze Speaclizes in S rank Fire.The jutsus that need handseals only need the summoner to do the tiger handseal. And that count as the handseals. (S rank have to do Boar>Tiger (2hand seals)). And can Travel at the speed of 80mph.Phaze Beak is Incredibly Strong,And Long.This summon is the same size as Sauske Hawk. so easy rideable. This summon can also talkk, so just incase a situation happen.

-Only can stay for 3 turns
-User Cant Use any Fire jutsus while summon is active
-Can use Once
-All techniques used by Phaze count toward the user's 3 moves
-The summon can only use up to S-rank earth techniques
-Can only be Taught by Ten-Zero

±± Declined ±± why is the range long? Also, take the complicated hand seals explanation. You don't need nor is it logical that you could make hand seals for your summons techniques.

In ninjutsu there are 2 steps to perform a technique: Focusing your chakra and Molding your chakra.

Focusing your chakra is basically "willing" your chakra into being molded by focusing the correct amount needed. Molding your chakra is shaping it and manipulating its nature so that you can produce the end result. Molding can be done with hand seals or without them, depending on your skill, rank, mastery of the element, etc etc etc.

So, why and how can you make hand seals to mold your summons chakra? Specially, not being in contact with him?

Also, if he is the same size as sasuke's hawk, explain the incredibly long and strong beak.

Also, one note...when editing your techniques to upgrade them its preferable to take special attention to the restorations. Your username is not Teno-zero anymore and you are trying to update this summon to use fire techniques while you have a restrictions stating he can only use earth techniques.


(kuroi fenikkusu) Black Phoenix
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:40 (50 If activate the lightning current)
Damage Points:80

Description/Ability: This Sword Was made from a keyblade master. He was the maker of Key blades. This was along the lines of his ADVANCE key blades made out of black steel that was said Unbreakable. Though it does not look it , It is. This Sword has a will of its on. Though not alive it can emit needles from the handles if the chakra in its wielder is different then what it normally is used to. Meaning if anybody picks it up they hand is screwed his/her hand will get damaged. The wielder of this blade practiced many years with It. Mastering its weight. The sword is said to weigh over 400pounds. But due to the training the owner knows how to channel its own chakra into the sword making it as light as any regular sword but too anybody else it will be hard to pick up (not impossible), And a Very heavy hit. This Sword is Known for its incredible lightning current that drives through the sword. Once the lightning current activates the Sword gets Yellow poke-dots all on it , signifying the electrical currents all through the blade. Once the user cut somebody with this blade it can disperse small shocks of lightning into the person system through the cut on the person body.. This Blade can also cut through A Rank Earth. Due to its Heavy Property and Electrical currents through the blade

-Cant Use No Basic Ninjutsu while this blade is in play
-Cant use Lightning jutsus above B rank While sword is activated with the lightning current
-If the user Activates the sword. Everytime the sword is being swung it causes for 1 of the users turn
-The sword can only be activated with the electrical currents for 3 turns but it can also be turned off whenever but it still counts as 1 move
-Only usable by whom i say

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Overpowered in ridiculous ways that i don't even know you fully understand. 400 pound blade?

 

[Coyote]

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Ranton: Arashi Baindo - Storm Release: Storm Bind
Rank: C
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: 30
Description:
The user will prefrom one handseal and while their hands are being released from the handseal position, the Storm cloud begins to expand from their fingertips to form a circle. By concentrating the water and lightning chakra in their fingertips they're able to cause the cloud to from. The circle cloud is about 1 foot in diameter. You can see right through the circle since the cloud is the circle shape. From the circle cloud the concentrated bright beams comes from the cloud and begin to from a net pattern in the circle. The user then can force the new Storm net at the target and as the net is thrown it grows in size. If it was thrown at a target at short range it gets as big as 7ft so it's able to be bigger than a human and if it's thrown at a taregt at mid-range then it grows to 14ft to cover a wider area. The whole process of forming the net to throwing it is very fast due to the low level of jutsu it is and any Storm user can do this with ease. The beams that provide the actually bind does not cut a taregt but it burns them.

Restrictions
Only usable twice per battle
Only usable by a Storm Release bio
Only usable/trainable by Coyote
~Approved~

 

[Tsukune]

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Raiton: Dendou Shuredda - Electric Shredder
Rank: S
Type: Attack/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: After swirling their hands in front of them, gathering static electricity and amplifying it with chakra they release a large blast wave of swirling lightning into the diagonally upward slashing through anything in its path.
Restrictions:
- Only useable twice per battle
- No S-rank or higher Raiton next turn
~Declined~ How is this defensive? Besides that, the description is far too basic and generic.

 

[Kato.]

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(Doton: Kujira No Jutsu) Earth Style: Whale Tail Jutsu
Rank: B
Type: Offence/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user channels chakra into the ground and creates a giant whale tail from the earth, this tail flicks up from the ground and then flops back down. Like a whale does with its tail in the water

-Can only be taught by Kato Rokuemon

±± Declined ±± Define giant.

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(Doton: Kujira No Jutsu) Earth Style: Whale Tail Jutsu
Rank: B
Type: Offence/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user channels chakra into the ground and creates a giant whale tail from the earth, this tail flicks up from the ground and then flops back down. Like a whale does with its tail in the water. The size of the tail is the average size of a humpback whale's tail which is around 17/18 ft or 5.4m

-Can only be taught by Kato Rokuemon
~Declined~ It's fine, but explain where the tail arises from. Does it suddenly come up under the opponent or a bit in front of them so that the "flop" will smash the opponent?

 

[House]

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Re-submit:

(Hakke Hageshiku Ikaku Suru Yōna Ten no Supin) – 8 Trigrams Wildly Menacing Heavenly Spin.
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 100
Description: This jutsu considered the most difficult jutsu of all time, only the best of the hyuugas may perform this, the masters of Gentle Fist. As once a hyuuga monk had discovered the ultimate rotation of the heavenly spin, it was considered a near death experience. As once the hyuuga exerts chakra from all of his 361 poiints on his body, with this technique, he is pulling the max amounts of chakra from all of his chakra points, in order to deflect the most feared jutsus of all time. As the rotation begins, a giant crater will be formed from the massive amounts of chakra being exerted from the hyuuga's body. This jutsu is so strong, it is considered the final of the heavenly rotations of the hyuugas, thus its impact reaching onto mid-range.
Note:
~Only Sannin may perform this.
~No other techniques of Jyuuken may be performed before this technique, in the same turn, or in the next turn.
~The technique causes strains on the body, making him unable to perform tai moves for the same and the next turn, or perform moves which requires jumping around or quick moves.
~Causes -50 damage.
~No technique of higher then S-ranked may be performed in the same turn, or in the next turn.
~Can be used 1x
~Dr. House may teach this.

±± Declined ±± This is basically only a bigger version of both the D, C and S-Rank versions of the heavenly rotation techniques.

(Hakke Hageshiku Ikaku Suru Yōna Ten no Supin) – 8 Trigrams Wildly Menacing Heavenly Spin.
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 100
Description: This jutsu considered the most difficult jutsu of all time, only the best of the hyuugas may perform this, the masters of Gentle Fist. As once a hyuuga monk had discovered the ultimate rotation of the heavenly spin, it was considered a near death experience. Similar to Twin Lion Fist where the user emits a shroud of chakra into his arms, in this situation, the user exerts a shroud of chakra all around his body. Once he is covered within an A-ranked shroud of chakra, he'll exert his own chakra to grab this shroud chakra surrounding him, so it will be able to keep up with his spinning, thus completing the ultimate rotation. The user exerts an additional chakra into this shroud chakra in order to condense it, making it more focused and more darker. As he had grasp his own chakra, he starts to spin furiously, exerting another set of chakra from all of his 361 points on his body. With this technique, the user is pulling the max amounts of chakra from all of his chakra points, in order to deflect the most feared jutsus of all time. As the rotation begins, a giant crater will be formed from the massive amounts of chakra being exerted from the hyuuga's body. This jutsu is so strong, it is considered the final of the heavenly rotations of the hyuugas, thus its impact reaching onto mid-range.
Note:
~Only Kage or higher may perform this, due to the great chakra control.
~No other techniques of Jyuuken may be performed before this technique, in the same turn, or in the next turn.
~The technique causes strains on the body, making him unable to perform tai moves for the same and the next turn, or perform moves which requires jumping around or quick moves.
~Causes -30 damage to user.
~No technique of higher then S-ranked may be performed in the same turn, or in the next turn.
~Can be used 1x
~Dr. House may teach this.
~The user must surround himself with the shroud of chakra, so the negative effects of the rotation will be significantly decreased on the user, but still leaving the user in a condition. Once he is covered with the shroud of chakra, he may begin the rotation.
~No other techniques may be performed in the same turn as this.

Note for checker:
~I've added more info as to how would I achieve this F-ranked rotation. I haven't deleted anything.
~I've added more restrictions.

~Declined~ This whole technique is really unclear. I was reading through it and not only was I unable to picture it, I couldn't differentiate what was the description of the technique and what was the description of this similar jutsu you refer too. Furthermore, I agree with Roku, this technique is very similar to the heavenly rotation techniques. Lastly, you create such a build up as this being the hardest technique in the world, and yet the restrictions are close to non-existent for a technique of this magnitude. I usually require strong S-rank technique to have this (bold underligned part). Seriously, come up with something different and work on the restrictions.

Re-submitting:

-Submitting a CJ for my CW. I wasn't sure, I put a link here of my cw. It is the second one from the bottom.

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(Mai· Sōru jihi o motte iru!) Have Mercy Upon My Soul!
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra Cost: (See Description)
Damage Points: +15 for that wished technique. (See Notes)
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. As we know, the sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, adding the power into one of his techniques. Once this system has been broken, the sword becomes unbalanced in the same turn when this chakra has been harnessed. Because of the unbalance of the sword, user will receive -10 health damage in the same turn, as it tries to suck it back at once what has once left in the next turn. User suffers -30 chakra loss in the next turn. As the sword has sucked back an enormous amount of chakra ( meaning the 30 chakra), activating itself again, a furious wind will surround it, leaving the area in a really windy environment for the next 2 turns within short range. This means that no raiton attacks of S-rank can be made which could harm the user potentially in the next turn, nor the user may perform any raiton techniques. No C-ranked attacks could potentially hurt the user within short range, because of the furious winds. It takes a turn to have the sword to become balanced once again. In the 2nd turn from the activation of this technique, this technique may be used once again, and the sword too.
Note:
~Can be used 3x
~Only Sannin or higher may use this.
~This release will count as 15+ damage to any ninjutsu except for doton,sution,raiton attacks.
~The +15 damage will only count towards one of the jutsu, the user wishes.
~Sumitsukigasa must be wielded when the chakra is been applied to the wished technique.
~If there is a case of keeping a jutsu active, this 15+ will keep on remaining ti'll the base jutsu on which this was applied has been cancelled, for the max of 3 turns.
~Can be taught by Dr. House

~Declined~ OP. You're basically boosting your attack while stopping all C-rank and bellow and all S-rank and bellow Raiton for 2 turns with 1 mediocre drawback, -30 damages. Unless you're being crippled for the rest of the match this drawback means nothing. The restrictions are completely off, especially the bold one. Make it a 1 time per match only. Also the part about it being " short range only" is just a loophole since this wind is all around you and will therefore block attacks that reach withing short range of you. Change that.

(Doton: Saisho no sākuru) Earth Release: First Circle
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Once the user has spread his doton chakra around the field under the opponent, earth will rise up all around him, creating an encirclement wall around the opponent. As the wall is rising around the opponent, in the same time, the ground is lowering underneath the user, as the earth's source coming from underneath the opponent, creating a crater as the ground had lowered underneath the opponent. As the ground is lowering underneath the enemy and the walls are rising around the enemy, this causes a C-ranked tremor, throwing off the enemy, and reaching the groundwater. As Soon as this process has been over, multiple spikes will erupt from the walls in a fast manner from all around, impaling the enemy with these flying spikes. The user has to mention as how high will this wall be, and how deep will this crater be from ground level. The user has to state as how far would these walls be from the opponent in radius, whether it be mid or short range.
Notes:
~Can be used 3x
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Only who mastered doton may use this.
~Can use S-ranked doton or higher in the same turn.
~The groundwater effect will only be, if there is river/ocean/lake or any kind of natural water was around before the battle.

~Declined~ Make the dimensions fix, I don't want this technique to be without boundaries. Make those dimensions reasonable. Check the restriction in bold, I think you meant "can't". Lastly make it 2 times per match.

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(Mai· Sōru jihi o motte iru!) Have Mercy Upon My Soul!
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra Cost: 30 (See Description)
Damage Points: +15 Ninjutsu
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. The sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, boosting his power. Once this system has been broken, the sword becomes unbalanced in the same turn when this chakra has been harnessed, the sword becomes useless in the same turn. Because of the unbalance of the sword, user will receive -10 health damage in the same turn. As it tries to suck it back the taken chakra at once what has once left the sword, in the next turn, user suffers -30 chakra loss. As the sword has sucked back an enormous amount of chakra in that turn (meaning 30 chakra), activating itself once again, a furious wind will surround it, leaving the area in a really windy environment for when it sucked back the 30 chakra. This means that no raiton attacks of S-rank can be made from the user in that turn when there is a windy environment. As the sword becomes out of control when it sucks back the chakra, having an S-ranked fuuton chakra surround it, only Kage or higher may be able to handle it.
Note:
~Can be used 1x
~The sword won't be useable in the same turn as this technique.
~Only Kage or higher may use this.
~Sumitsukigasa must be wielded.
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Won't be able to sign handseals in the same and the next turn.

Note for checker:
~Only 1x per match
~I took out the loophole that you have mentioned, also the being windy for 2 turns.
~I took out the restriction what you have brought up which is "If there is a case of keeping a jutsu active, this 15+ will keep on remaining ti'll the base jutsu on which this was applied has been cancelled, for the max of 3 turns."
~Took out the C-ranked attacks, and the loophole, meaning this "No C-ranked attacks could potentially hurt the user within short range, because of the furious winds."
~Changed/added restrictions

~Approved~

(Doton: Saisho no sākuru) Earth Release: First Circle
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Once the user has spread his doton chakra around the field under the opponent, earth will rise up all around him, creating an encirclement wall around the opponent. Because of the ground level being high, the walls will have an effect of being wet as it rises from the ground. As the wall is rising around the opponent, in the same time, the ground is lowering underneath the user, as the earth's source coming from underneath the opponent, creating a crater as the ground had lowered underneath the opponent. As the ground is lowering underneath the enemy and the walls are rising around the enemy, this causes a C-ranked tremor, throwing off the enemy, and reaching the groundwater. As Soon as this process has been over, multiple spikes will erupt from the walls in a fast manner from all around, impaling the enemy with these flying spikes. These walls may reach up to 20 meters to the user's wishes, it will close on the top. The ground may lower ti'll groundwater, which may be 4-5 meters at high speeds. The walls can be 5-10 meters far in radius, enemy being in the middle.
Notes:
~Can be used 2x
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Only who mastered doton may use this.
~Can't use S-ranked doton or higher in the same turn.
~The groundwater effect will only be, if there is river/ocean/lake or any kind of natural water was around before the battle.

Note to checker:
~added a description of the walls
~Made it 2x as requested
~Added dimensions
~fixed which you had mentioned

~Approved~

 

[Yūsuke1]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Suna : Sabure Boppatsu) - Sand Style : Sand Outburst
Rank : S
Type : Offensive
Range : Short - Mid
Chakra cost : 40
Damage points : 80
Description : This technique will require the user to have sent his sand underground beforehand and when they manage to do this, they will sway their arm from either the left or right to the other side, slightly upwards in a swift manner. The sand will follow the user's arm movement and go to the direction the arm went and upwards. If the user swayed his arm to the right, the sand will come bursting out of the ground towards the right, sending anything standing on the surface with it as well as causing damage. Vice-versa for going to the left. This technique covers the area directly in front of the user in a large line.

Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
Note : Can only be used two times per battle
Note : Only covers a straight line in front of the user
Note : Can only be used by a biography capable of using sand
Note : The area it covers is only two meters wide and mid-range long
Note : No Sand techniques higher than A-rank to be used in the same turn

~Approved~ Made it twice per match

(Fuuton : Jitensubeta) - Wind Release : Spin the Sword!
Rank : A
Type : Offensive
Range : Short - Long
Chakra cost : 30
Damage points : 60
Description : The user will first have to obtain a sword or any stick-like object like a branch or blade or pole. They will then infuse it with their wind chakra and flip it into the air, causing it to start spinning in the air naturally by itself. By concentrating the wind chakra around it, the user will make it float and with chakra manipulation, the user will make it spin even faster. The wind chakra will now mold itself into a gust of wind around the spinning blade, allowing the spinning blade to form a hurricane of wind out of it. The user after that is capable of manipulating the direction of the hurricane and how it moves around.

Note : Requires any stick-like object
Note : Can only be used five times per battle
Note : Requires mastery in the Wind Element
Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
Note : After usage of technique, the object will revert to its original state and fall onto the ground or into the user's hand if caught

~Declined~ I'm not against creativity, I'm all for it, but forming a hurricane from a spinning sword just doesn't make sense. You could have simply created it from nothing since the spin of the sword wasn't enough to begin with.

(Raiton : Raikouhandou) - Lightning Release : Lightning Kick
Rank : S
Type : Offensive
Range : Short - Long
Chakra cost : 40
Damage points : 80
Description : The user coats either his left or right leg with lightning chakra and performs the, 'Tiger' handseal. As the handseal is done, a yellow glow is formed around the lightning chakra-infused leg and electricity will start to crackle out of it every now and then. The user drops on one hand and makes a leg sweep, which turns into a gigantic, stable whip of lightning that follows the movement of the user's leg. Unlike a regular whip, this lightning whip is firm and solid-like. The lightning whip can also be used in different types of manners instead of being a leg sweep, the user could make a high kick which sends the lightning whip upwards in a slashing manner or a roundhouse kick which makes the lightning whip slash at waist length, etc.

Note : Can only be used two times per battle
Note : Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
Note : Only usable with the legs and not hands or anything else
Note : No lightning techniques higher than B-rank to be used as long as this is active
Note : No lightning techniques higher than S-rank usable the turn after deactivation
Note : Lasts only for three of the user's turn before the effects of this technique wears off

~Declined~ Make it short-mid and make it last for 2 turns.

Fuuton: Chakra Kaze - Wind release Chakra Breeze
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: By quickly releasing and distributing chakra into the air, the chakra flows with it and as this chakra filled air encounters anything that has chakra, the user feels its presence.
Restrictions:
-Only useable twice per battle.
-Lasts 3 turns
-If a powerful enough current of air (A-rank and up) it will push the current chakra filled wind/air away. ( Users fuuton jutsu do not apply )

Btw, Typhon has a similar CJ called, 'Wind Release : Chakra Sensing Breeze'. Might wanna ask him about it or check his cj thread

 

[Gutsy]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Katon: Jaianto Kaki Supaiku (Fire Style: Giant Fire Spikes)
Type: ~Offensive~
Rank: ~A~
Range: ~Mid-Long Range~
Chakra: ~30~
Damage: ~60~
Description: The user performs the Snake-Serpent-Tiger handseals, where after he slams his hands into the ground, releasing a massive amount of chakra into the ground where flames will errupt, with the shape of spikes. These spikes will burn anything on impact and can cut through a human body, nothing more.

Note:-Can only be used twice per battle
-This Jutsu can only be taught by JiraiyaEroSennin

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

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Summoning Animal: ~Praying Mantis~
Scroll Owner: ~JiraiyaEroSennin~
Other Users who have signed contract: ~N/A~
Summoning Boss if existing: ~N/A~
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: ~N/A~
Description and Background:

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Praying Mantis (Mantodea) is an order of insects that contains about 2,200 species of Mantises. They live in temperate and tropical habitats. The name "Praying Mantises" is it's name, because of it's prayer-like stance, and is a predatory animal. The Mantis is a genius in desguise and can blend in with nature such as sticks, leaf and other insects, sometimes they even get compared with grasshoppers and crickets.

The Mantis has many different shades and colors such as green, brown and sometimes white colors as desguise. They are easily distinguished by a black-ringed spot beneath the fore coxae. The Mantis itself have two grasping, spiked forelegs (raptorial legs) in which prey items are caught and held securely. Located at the base of the femur are a set of discoidal spines, usually four in number but ranging from zero to as many as five depending on the species. These spines are preceded by a number of tooth-like tubercles, which, along with a similar series of tubercles along the tibia and the apical claw near its tip, give the foreleg of the mantis its grasp on its prey. The legs/arms ends in a two-toed claw which is used as a walking appendage. The usual Mantis body itself is usually longer than it's claws, except for some the claws and legs are very long compared to it's bodies and because of these feets are incredible strong and fast for their abilities.

The Mantis is incredible skilled in desguise and defense against other creatures, but is also a very dangerous predator which can even defeat another animal far greater than itself because of it's superior skills in desguise and it's incredible speed and strength.


~Declined~ Insects are banned from the custom summons.

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(Kchuysei: Joutei Zami) Summoning: Lord Zami
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: short
Chakra Cost: 60
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user pulls out a small scroll and places his hand on the scroll. This summons Joutei Zami, the Lord of the Mantises. Joutei Zami is a huge white mantis, almost at the same size as the great toads. He has incredible speed and on it's back, there is a symbol of "fire". This giant Mantis is capable of utilizing Fire Release combined with it's master, up to the same level as the shinobi. The mantis itself is quite strong and fast compared to it's size and it's claws can easily cut through several trees. The shinobi himself will be sitting on the back of the mantis.

Note:
-Can only be summoned once
-This summon can only be summoned by someone who has signed the Mantis Contract
-This summon is in play for 4 turns
-Fire jutsu requires half the handseals when the shinobi is combined with the mantis

~Declined~ Contract wasn't approved.

 

[Alternative]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

It's been a week since my last submission.

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(Genjutsu: Shiryoku no Chōsei) - Illusionary Technique: Sight Adjustment
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: -
Description:
• The user will begin by gazing into the target's eyes and perform three hand seals (Dog → Bird → Ram). This will cause the target to be fallen into a genjutsu where the user can adjust their sight to their will. For instance, the jutsu can extend one's sight to think that short range in front of them would be mid range or vice versa, similar to how binoculars work.
Notes:
• Requires direct eye contact.

~Declined~ Seeing the world through binoculars doesn't make it seem like short-range is mid-range, it simply reduce your range of vision in short range since you get to see it much closer. The point is, the ninja trapped in this illusion wouldn't confuse range, but his sight would make it harder for him to maneuver around. Change the description.

(Kugutsu Baindingu no Jutsu) - Puppet Binding Technique
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: -
Description:
• The user will make a puppet seperate from it's joints to become loose, so that it would seem more flexible. While still in control of all the parts, the user will wrap the chakra threads around the target using the puppet as a medium to further bind them, restricting their movement within the arms and legs.


±± Declined ±± this is more like a B-Rank and it does need a bit more explanation

(Kugutsu Baindingu no Jutsu) - Puppet Binding Technique
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: -
Description:
• The user controlling a puppet will charge towards the target. When they are close, the user will wrap the puppet around the target's arms and legs, while segregating it's parts so that it has a much easier time doing so. This technique wraps the chakra strings around the target, while using the puppet as a medium to strengthen the hold.
Notes:
• Can only be used three times a match.
• Can only be in control of no more than two puppets to use.

~Approved~ I made it close range only, so you and your puppet need to really be next to your opponent for this to work out.

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(Mugen za Hando) - Mugen the Hand
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40 (+15 per turn)
Damage Points: -
Description:
• Mugen the Hand roughly translates into "Infinity Hands" and the weapon shows that style. It's a unique weapon as it can only be used by skillful puppeteers. Mugen the Hand is basically two small scrolls instilled onto the user's back and are activated after clapping their hands together. The two scrolls open up which reveal four surprisingly humane puppet arms, much larger than the user's arms, about 1.5 times larger. These puppet arms draw chakra naturally when summoned like chakra strings controlling them. The arms are capable of using a B-Rank "Chakra Shield" technique, as well as a standard "Endless Rain of Senbon" technique. The arms while attached to the user's back can extend up to 5 meters in order to hold the victim down. The most unique ability of the arms is that they're capable of helping in performing hand seals for the user. Due to the chakra which the arms consume for them to work, they can help perform hand seals for any technique up to A-Rank, giving a much faster hand seal output.
Notes:
• This can only be used by puppeteers.
• Sasori bios are incapable of using this weapon, due to himself being a puppet.
• This counts as a puppet, and thus counts towards the three puppet limit.
• The arm's extensions can only be used three times a battle and counts as a move.
• Must be posted in the user's biography to use.
• Can only be used by Alternative and those he allows.

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Looks a bit like this, but without the glowing.

~Declined~ "Giant hands" have been done dozens of times already, in almost every element. Accepting this would be ripping off all those who created a technique similar to yours. Also, I will never accept a technique that mimic Madara's Susanoo (hand seals part).

 

[Klaus]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Katon: Gure-To Enkou Tama/ Fire Style Great Flame Sphere
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short-long
Chakra: 25
Damage: 40
Description: The user will the following hand seals (snake> tiger> rat> rooster> tiger) after that he will gather a large amount of chakra in his hand and release it into a sphere form that may vary in size. The size of the sphere depends on the amount of time giving for to create it. The size of the sphere also affects range the bigger the sphere is the lesser range it has.

-Note-
- This technique can only be used 3 Times in battle.
- must wait 2 turns before using this again.
- Can't use any other fire attacks that same turn.
~Declined~ Do not Resubmit

Raiton Raikou Bare- / Lightning style: Lightning Volley
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Mid
Chakra: 25
Damage: 40
Description: The user will make the (snake> ox> bore> tiger> rooster> horse> snake) hand seals and start to gather chakra in there palms after a while the will turn that chakra into lightning energy and release it in small fragments of electrical energy. Those fragments are small lightning sphere shaped that are thrown at the and opponent. If they hit they paralyze and damage the opponent..

-Note-
- Can only be used 3 times per battle
- Can't Use any Lightning jutsu's that same turn
~Declined~ How many fragments are released and how long does the paralysis last?

Buki Tenrai Kaze Gai / Weapon Divine Wind Scythe
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Mid
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: The Divine wind scythe is a scythe forged in land of the samurai it made its way to Kumogakure by Kailond who Gifted it to Sage of Darkness for becoming an ANBU. The Wind Scythe is as light as the feather thats where it gets its name from. This weapon was especialy formed for short-mid range combat and one lethal blow from it can cause death. It is easy to manuver. It can be thrown and like a boomerange it would come back due to its unique shape.

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~Declined~ Do not Resubmit

 

[Kryptiic]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Suiton: Kanketsusen | Water Style: Geyser

Type: Offensive
Rank: A Rank
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user flows their suiton chakra into the ground. As they do so Then channel in under their opponent. The chakra seeps deep into the earths surface and through this becomes overwhelmingly hot. The user then performs a set of two handseals and instantly after gathering moisture from being underground the chakra erupts from beneath the target as incredibly hot water. It rises with such force it reaches high into the air, lifting the enemy off the ground and into the air with it. The water is capable of giving sever burns. If the user is caught within the water they also suffer the damages.
Note: Can only be taught by Kryptiic..
Note: Can only be used twice a match
Note: Requires Mastery over Water
Note: No Water Source Required
~Declined~ Do not Resubmit (Similar Technique Exists)

Suiton: Taifuu Kyouten | Water Style: Typhoon Canon
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will hold out both of their hands while gathering a large amount of Suiton chakra. Then will then create a huge typhoon of water that forms an incredibly strong and large water torrent. The technique is incredibly fast and is able to be controlled by the user. The user is able to remove their hands when freely controlling the huge torrent. The user is also capable of changing the temperature of the water making it so hot that ice is melted by it with ease. It can also be made very cold. It has so much power it washes away everything in it's path.
Note: Must be Taught by Kryptiic..
Note: Only usable twice per match
Note: Requires Master over Water
Note: No water techniques above a rank for two turns.
Note: No water source required

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~Leaving for Izuna or Scorps~


±± Declined ±± First things first, to alter its temperature you'd need addition of wind or fire chakras to lower or rise the temperature respectively. However, you can't manipulate them both at once as that is yin/yang. Also, this is basically a stronger bigger version of a cannon B-Rank water technique. Even if your wording suggests otherwise. For this to be approved you need to change a whole lot.

 

[Mockingbird]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Soriddo Sukuriputo)-Solid Script
Type: Supplementary
Rank:B
Range:Short
Chakra cost:25
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user makes words in solid form out of their own elemental chakra that changes to take on the form of what the word was (i.e. writing “fire” would create fire, writing “Mud” would create Mud, etc.) For an expansion on the explanation, by creating the words out of chakra and infusing them with one type of elemental chakra, the word can actually take on the form of what it spelled out. So by writing out “hole” on the ground, and infusing one’s earth chakra into it, one could create a pitfall trap in order to confine an opponent. By writing out “wind” in the air, and infusing one’s wind element chakra into the word, a protective barrier of wind could be formed capable of defending against Ninja Tools, and other weaker attacks. By writing out “Fire” in the air or on the ground, and infusing one’s fire element chakra into the word, one could create a protective wall of fire to defend against taijutsu, and so on like this. The words can take form either as English words or as Kanji, either way it is the same result.
~This technique cannot be used to materialize offensive techniques, but only serves for supplementary or defensive use.
~This technique can only be used to materialize one type of defensive or supplementary medium per use.
~Can only be used in the basic 5 elements.

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±± Approved ±± Fairy Tail uh? Not bad. Keep in mind however, that this will produce only small amounts of each of the 5 basic elements. NO KG. And no Gigantic amounts.

(Soriddo Sukuriputo:Arasoi ando Atsureki)-Solid Script: Strife and Discord
Type: Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description:The user makes words in solid form out of their own elemental chakra that changes to take on the form of what the word was (i.e. writing “Protective Entity” would create a protective viscous water entity designed to protect against incoming attacks, writing “Plague” would create a swarm of raging locusts that advance on a target using Wind chakra, etc.) This technique is basically a variation of the Solid Script; based off of the ideas of Eris, the goddess of strife and discord, this technique allows for the user to materialize entities capable of fightning for him, such as forming the words "Protective Doll" and infusing water chakra into them, a protective mass of viscous water (Viscous like the Syrup Capture Field technique, but not sticky) shaped like an oversized doll to defend against blunt force attacks, without crumling like an earth barrier, can be formed; By forming the words "Vicious Anaconda" and infusing the words with earth chakra, a mud snake that will wrap itself around and constrict an enemy can be fomred; By forming the words "Plague" and infusing wind chakra into the words, a swarm of locusts comprised of wind chakra to advance on a target, etc. The entities can serve various purposes, making this technique highly versatile and useful in battle. The words can take form either as English words or as Kanji, either way it is the same result. The difference between this technique and it's earlier counterpart is that this technique allows for bigger and stronger constructs, and for them to be used for offensive use as well as defensive
~This technique is used only to materialize entities that will go on to serve a purpose for the user, such as serving for a specific defense or offense.
~This technique can only be used to materialize one entity per use
~Can only be used 5 times per battle
~Can only be used in the basic 5 elements; No KG.

±± Declined ±± For this to be accepted you need to list all the words and specific things you can't create. The way its worded makes it so you can create basically anything. Think go this in a practical manner. We can't leave you to generalize and leave it up to whatever words you want to write.

(Doton:Kyandoru Rokku)-Earth Release:Candle Lock
Type: Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user begins by focusing their chakra into an existing source of Earth, and using their doton chakra in order to manipulate the consistency so that it turns into a sticky mud, resembling the Swamp of the Underworld; This step can be skipped if there is already an existing source of mud on the field created through some other means. The user will then proceed to utilize shape manipulation in order to have the mud rise up around an enemy, encasing them in a thick candle shaped mud prison. The mud then encases their body completely, spreading over their limbs. Then manipulating the consistency of the Mud, it hardens around the captured opponent leaving them immobilized and unable to weave handseals, or run away. This makes it different in concept to Swamp of the Underworld.
~Can only be used three times times per battle

^I basically re-worded the whole description as you initially recommended I do.

±± Approved ±±

Resubmitting:

(Doton/Katon:Tokudai Kyandoru Sābisu Setto)-Earth/Fire Release:Giant Candle Service Set
Type: Attack
Rank:S
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:After having previously encased an opponent using Candle Lock, the user adds more chakra, changing the consistency of the earth around the target into more Mud like that used in Swamp of the Underworld-Thick and Sticky. Afterwards, using precise shape manipulation, the user shapes a massive birthday cake-shaped Mud arrangement with a pillar on top of the lower "floors" of the cake, then makes a spinning half-dome on top of that. The cake rises from underneath the trapped enemy, which will take on the appearance of a cake with a candle on top of it-the candle being the enemy trapped within the Candle Lock. Then using Katon chakra, one will focus their fire chakra through the mud in order to ignite the candles causing them seriously burn the opponent. As the Mud burns, not only will it do severe burning damage to anyone trapped within the candles, but the Mud begins to burn itself, slowly encasing an enemy as the candle burns. Afterwards, the mud will harden around the encased opponent, mummifying them.
~Can only be used two times per battle
~Can only be used after Candle Lock

±± Declined ±± First you linked to the approved technique, not the original submission of this technique. Second, i think i already told you, mud can't be caught on fire unless some other addition is made.

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(Kuchoiyse:Tasmanian Devil-Hiroto)-Summoning Technique:Tasmanian Devil-Hiroto
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Hiroto is a large Tasmanian Devil Black fur, and patches of brown fur scattered across his coat. Where as many of his kind are rowdy-battle ready types, Hiroto is rather timid, and unsure of his own ability being insecure. Unlike other Tasmanian Devils, he is incapable of using Elemental Ninjutsu having no talent for the ninja arts. Instead, he is known for his experience in the field of weapon play. He generally fights using a katana or Kusarigama, carefully switching them between his paws and mouth. Ordinarily, Hiroto wishes not to be summoned in the midst of battle, for he is somewhat reluctant to fight; However, when the time truly calls for it he can muster the strength to protect those he holds close.
~Can be summoned Twice per battle
~Can only stay on the field for a total of four turns each time.


±± Approved ±±

 

[Vision]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Kamereon)- Chameleon
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20 at all times, 40 when ability is activated
Damage: 80
Description: The Chameleon is a famed weapon said to be crafted in ancient times, probably during the time of the Sage of Six Paths. It was crafted with a special metal, that reacts to chakra easily. The best blacksmith of the ancient times managed to utilize this special material to construct a sword handle. This special handle is black in color, streaked with gold. The weapon in itself does not exist, but only the handle. As said earlier, the metal handle reacts easily to chakra. Its ability gained its unique name. Although this weapon constantly leeches chakra from the user, when the user runs extra chakra through the handle, it gains the blade, and essentially, it turns into a sword. If you run fire chakra through the sword, you will get a fire blade. If you run water chakra through the sword, you will get a water blade. And so on so forth. Once the blade is formed, it retains that elemental blade for 3 turns before dissipating once again, forcing you to run more chakra into the blade again to make it function. In the duration the blade is infused with an element, for example's sake, fire, the user can shoot once, in that particular form, a fire wave at the opponent around the height and width of the opponent. The fire wave is at B-rank. This can be done a total of 3 times per battle, 1 time every time the ability is activated. Due to its ability to transform into any element, it gained its name Chameleon with the ability to transform at will.

Restrictions
Note:Can only be used by -Vision- and those whom he allows
Note:Ability activating, infusing the handle with an element, can only be done 3 times per battle
Note:When the blade assumes an elemental form, it stays in that form for 3 turns When that 3 turns run out, the blade goes back to its handle-only form, and cannot be infused with an element for 2 turns
Note:Each element can only be infused once a battle
Note:The elemental wave is at B-rank, and can only be used 1 time every time the sword is infused
Note:The elemental wave can only be used 3 times per battle in total


±± Declined ±± Similar weapon exists.



Genjutsu: Haritsuke | Illusionary Technique: Crucifixion
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra:30
Damage: N/A
Description: While in close combat the user will focus their chakra into the area that they are strike with and send their chakra into the opponents brain to disrupt the their chakra flow within their system. For example punching and kicking. As soon as there is a physical contact the opponent will see themself on a cross and to be crucified. The opponent will see the events of an actual crucifixion process and not able to see the user itself. However the crucifixion does not occur and the opponent does not take any damage. Though the opponent would be bound and not be able to move freely as the are on a cross tied up.

Note: Able to use once per battle.
Note: Once the physical contact has been established the illusion is instantanous
Note: Must have mastered Genjutsu to use this technique
Note: Can only be taught by -Vision-

±± Declined ±± this is more like my own Lazy Fist than actually a Genjutsu


Genjutsu: Maboroshi Fukusuu | Illusionary Technique: Multiple Vision
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 25
Damage: N/A
Description: The user will disrupt the opponents flow of chakra within the brain so that it effects the part of their eye sight. Once the opponent is under this genjutsu, they will begin to see trails of the person they are looking at. The opponent will be able to see clearly however they will see trails of the person they are looking at. Also the sight senses go down therefore it appears as if they are seeing things in slow motion. For example, a person is moving left to right, the person under the genjutsu will see a person go from left to right however a trail of the same person will also be seen and seem as if the person itself is moving in slow motion.

Note: Must know up to A rank genjutsu in order to use this technique
Note: Able to use it 2 times in battle
Note: Lasts 3 turns
Note: Can only be taught by -Vision-


±± Declined ±± A mess. you are mixing two concepts into one: vision and time perception manipulation.

 

[Wesobi]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Doton: Haretsu no Cho'gath | Cho'gath's Rupture
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Chakra Damage: 40
Description: The user does the snake hand seal and at the same time focuses his doton chakra under the opponent. This causes the ground to silently burst the opponent into the air (not very high, maximum 2 meter). This will happen quite rapidly, and due to the silence of the technique is extremely hard to detect. The user will then go into the second phase by using his chakra to manipulate the ground beneath the opponent (were he will land), which will cause small spikes (they would fit in a normal sized palm) to shoot out of the ground (they will leave the ground as projectiles with great force), and hit the opponent from underneath. These spikes shoot out as silently as the earth rises.

Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: This is an very silent jutsu, despite being an earth jutsu, and is very sudden.

±± Approved ±± edited slightly


Fuuton: Kishi no Jōdan | Jest of the Knight
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Chakra Damage: 40
Description: The uses focuses his wind chakra to the left, behind and to the right of the opponent, and also infront of himself creating 4 small spheres of hissing wind at each location, about mid range from the target. He then sends the one infront of him at the opponent. While the opponent is busy defending from it, he can manipulate the other ones to strike the opponent from all sides.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi

±± Approved ±± Edited slightly


Katon: Ningyo no nenshō| Fire Release: Burning of the Mermaid
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Chakra Damage: 80
Description: A jutsu that lives up to its rank and is quite complex. The user starts out by creating a dense sphere of fire in his hand, a bit bigger than his own fist. It is basically a sphere of fire, that has a highly compressed amound of fire chakra inside. The user then hurls the orb out at an incoming water attack, or directly at the opponent. When thrown at a water based attack, the user does the Tiger hand seal when the fire is about the hit the water, and the orb releases all of its power. Due to the sheer force, and sudden outburst, the water is blown back at the opponent, but instead of normal water, is boiling due to the fire that has heated it. The sent back water loses one rank in power and is thrown back in the form of an unfocused burst of steam, half the size of the initial water technique, although gaining the ability to scald and burn whatever it touches. If sent at the opponent directly, the user can create a massive wall of fire that goes towards the opponent once releasing the chakra and fire in the orb.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Can only be used twice
Note: Can only send back up to A-rank water
Note: Can only use up to S-rank techniques in the same and next turn
Note: Must wait at least 3 turns before using this jutsu again


±± Approved ±± Edited a bit

 

[Jinbei]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Raiton: Toro no Matsuri || Lightning style: Festival of lanterns
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: By forming one hand seal, the user is able to fabricate balls of lightning that occupy the totality of the field. The spheres will shine so brightly that they will not only blind any and all opponent but, if the enemy is taken by surprise and accidentally looks directly into one, they will succumb to severe eye damage. If the user wishes to, by performing one additional hand seal, the selected lantern(s) will explode in an outburst of lightning with the force of A-rank lightning.
*The lanterns won't immediately cause eye vision damage if looked as soon as they are created but they will blind the opponent nonetheless*
*No S-rank or above lightning for the next turn*
*Given the light cannot be controlled, the user's allies will fall pray to this too and as such this jutsu is not only a two-edged sword but also completely and utterly useless during wars or team battles.*
*The explosions can occur without any visible warning and, as such, the user and allies will also get hurt if they are in the way of the explosion*

±± Declined ±± The core idea isn't bad but this needs quite the polish to actually work. Lets be honest, if you can't even look at them and they cause you damage if they explode nearby....how do you defend?


Kinenhi Reicho No Yoku || Monument to Humanity's Greed
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The legend says a fantastic shinobi of unparalleled power was able to fight on pair with a chakra-eating demon. Not only that but, with all of his might, he managed to seal away the monster in a cage he had in one of his many scrolls, sealing the demon forever and ever. As a result of the combination, the cage suddenly grew demoniacal hands that extend from the insides of it. By invoking the monster in battle, the user will be able to select one chakra that is in the battlefield and allow it to go on a rampage, trying to eat said character's chakra. The cage will only be able to absorb minimal amounts of chakra from the opponent when first summoned but, as time passes and he devours more of it, it will grow to become stronger, faster, resistant and eat more chakra at a time.
*The user must be in possession of the scroll and, on top of that, must be deemed worthy by the demon*
*The monster will only stay in the field for 3 turns*
*For every turn that the cage is able to absorb chakra, it will be granted a +1 to the number of turns its allowed to stay*
*In order to feast on chakra, the same requisites as Samehada must be met. That being said, it's really hard for the monster to eat chakra that easily, as it can't be moved around as easily as the shark skin sword is. Furthermore, unlike Samehada, it can't sense any other chakra than the one assigned and it can't be eaten either, making the technique limited to 1 on 1 fights. *
Here is a picture of the cage:

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±± Declined ±± Very interesting and unique. First things first: this is a summoning technique thus you need to explain that you do hand seals and summon the cage into a given location in the battle field preferably near you. Second, what exactly can this cage absorb? Jutsu? Or raw chakra from the opponent if it makes direct contact? Take the samehada references away and explain in this concrete case what can it do. Explain a bit more how this cage absorbs the chakra: does it suck it in as a vortex, does it move to intercept an enemy technique, does it stretch hands to grab the chakra? How exactly?

 

[Mathias]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

New Weekly cycle of submissions, starting today at 2nd of April and ending at the 8th of April.

I must remind you that you are only allowed to submit 3 techniques between markers ​

 

[XZA]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Suiton: yoroi no mizu)- Water release: Water Armour
Type: Supplementary, Defence
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 30 (-20 per turn)
Damage:
Description: This technique makes water-chakra flow through the body, acting as a Armour. The water Though quite effective, maintaining the armour requires a large amount of chakra and stamina. The water is hardened to a diamond like quality, being able to take the damage for most water, fire, and wind attacks up to B-rank take half the damage for A-rank water. The weight of water drops the user three level on the speed chart
Note: Last for four turns
Note: Can only be used/taught by Gaara NB member
Note: can only be used once

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit

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(Taibu suna no jutsu )- Greater Sand Technique
Type: Supplementary, Offense, Defense
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short-Long Range
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: Sand is manipulated to create large or medium sized waves that can bury an opponent, create hands that can grab and throw an opponent or create strong shields that can defend from explosions

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±± Declined ±± Similar technique exists.


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(Doton: tsuchi kurasuto no jutsu)- Earth release: earth crust restriction technqiue
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user will stomp his foot on the ground and channel his doton chakra into the ground and mold their chakra into earth and use shape manipulation to make a slightly thick (enough for ninjas to walk on top of it) "crust" of earth cover the surface of a nearby water source (one that is in the ground and surrounded by earth on all sides). It would acts as a barrier for the use of water from that pond, rendering any water source unusable. This can be used to prevent water type techniques.
Note: can only be used thrice a battle

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±± Approved ±± Edited. I like this one a lot. Good work.