THE STORY UNTOLD . Chapter 1
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EL MAGNIFICO
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Wow, really nice fanfic. I hope to see you make more, this could be FF of the Month material for sure.
It's still a bit rough around the edges, like how you rushed the beginning scene a bit, and the entire base could use a tiny bit more work ( It's still pretty amazing for a first chapter, and i LOVED the beginning poem, you should check out mine if you need some inspiration for them
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Keep it up, don't listen to anyone who tells you to stop, because this will go far if you give it enough effort.
It's still a bit rough around the edges, like how you rushed the beginning scene a bit, and the entire base could use a tiny bit more work ( It's still pretty amazing for a first chapter, and i LOVED the beginning poem, you should check out mine if you need some inspiration for them
)Keep it up, don't listen to anyone who tells you to stop, because this will go far if you give it enough effort.
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:bouncy: =D
