THE STORY UNTOLD . Chapter 1

[Sophie Ezra]

Well Done great start i see you kept some of my sugestions keep up the good work let me know when you release more and if you need my help again please feel free to ask any time. plus rep

 

[Netsui]

Nice. I really like it and can't wait to read more.

 

[EYES OF ITACHI]

nice..keep it up

 

[EL MAGNIFICO]

thank u :T_T:

 

[Yugure]

Good start! I am curious for the rest

 

[basegirl]

just awesome !!!!!!! <3 <3 <3 <3

 

[EL MAGNIFICO]

thank u

 

[- TD -]

Nice You should continue =DD

 

[orel]

very good! pls send me a link if continuation is out. xd

^this nice work bro

 

[orel]

nice work bro pls send me a link when you write another one thanks

 

[Bisma]

Nice ^_^

 

[Uchiha Prophet]

we needs more!!

 

[EL MAGNIFICO]

thank u very much!!!!!

i m quite busy ..so i will post the next chapt on sunday

 

[Titania Erza]

Nice work (f&m).

 

[EL MAGNIFICO]

thank u !!!!!!!!

 

[uzumaki antonia]

wow awsome

 

[Aze]

Omg I liked it alot + the poem^^

+ rep.

 

[EL MAGNIFICO]

thank u !!

 

[Supermacaquecool]

Aha! I finally read it! It took me so long (lazy stage)... It's good, but ya know, here:
"Inside the cave, there were ninja tools, some bottles and medicines, a hanging cloth bed and some photos on the table" I thought "What table?" It was like you alredy told us there was a table... except you didn't.
MMMM... Anyway, I'm looking forward for the next part.

 

[Kill Me]

Its great!