Re: Custom Jutsu Submission
(Raiton: Heiwa-shi to kawaii o hana) Lightening Release: Peaceful Death and Pretty Flowers
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: By channelling his lightening chakra into the ground, the user creates countless sun flowers made of lightening (15 inches high) to erupt from the ground. The flowers when they erupt, are in their unbloomed state, with their petals closed, which looks like small spikes that will pierce like a spike from below, and also numb and paralyze the area of contact before blooming. The user when he wishes, can form a single handseal to make the bloomed flowers to face the opponent and rotate at high speeds before firing the petals of the flowers at them. The petals (5 inches long) are extremely sharp and can easily pierce through solid objects (following elemental interactions). These petals will paralyse the opponent at the area of contact for one whole turn.
Note:
- Can only be used twice, with one turn in between use.
- Once the flowers have erupted, the user needs to fire the petals within 3 turns, or else it disappears.
-If the user fires the petals in the same turn that the flowers erupted, it will count as the same move. If not, it is considered as another move.
- No techniques above S rank in the same or next turn.
- Can only be taught by Obítō.
(Katon: Nichibotsu no tame ni fuku o ki kokutan) Fire Release: Ebony Dressed for Sunset
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: As an application of advanced fire manipulation, the user begins by channelling his fire chakra into the ground. The causes a countless rose flowers made of fire (6 inches high) to erupt from the ground. The crimson red flowers look like real roses, and as such, can't be identified as something made of chakra, unless someone observes it carefully. The flowers when they erupt, will burn anyone at the area of contact before blooming. The user when he wishes, can form a single handseal to make the flowers face the opponent before firing a stream of fire from its centre, that has the ability to evaporate small bodies of water if all the flowers fire together. The fire will burn the opponent, before consuming him entirely.
Note:
- Can only be used twice, with a break of two turns in between use.
- Once the flowers have erupted, the user needs to use the stream of fire within 3 turns, or else it disappears.
-If the user uses the stream of fire in the same turn that the flowers erupted, it will count as the same move. If not, it is considered as another move.
- No techniques above S rank in the same or next turn.
- Can only be taught by Obítō.
✦ Approved, edited bits of both ✦
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(Katon: Jigoku no suna) | Fire: Hell Sand
Rank:B
Type: Offensive
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:20
Damage Points:N/A (+40 to the sand jutsu)
Description:The user forms a single handseal and channels his fire chakra into any available sand on the battlefield and heats it up, so much that anyone who touches it will burn their skin, causing blisers to develop. The user can use this sand to perform various jutsus later on which will cause added damage to the opponent.
Note:
Heating lasts for 3 turns.
Can be used 3 times.
Can be taught by Obito
✦ Declined, this is beyond the scope of fire jutsu and makes little sense as well; Sand when superheated turns into glass. And you will not be able to utilize it as it is still sand. Unless you have Sand Release, you're not manipulating Sand. ✦
Resubmitting(Katon: Nichibotsu no tame ni fuku o ki kokutan) Fire Release: Ebony Dressed for Sunset
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: As an application of advanced fire manipulation, the user begins by channelling his fire chakra into the ground. The causes a countless rose flowers made of fire (6 inches high) to erupt from the ground. The crimson red flowers glow so brightly that it starts hitting the eye, forcing everyone to close their eyes. The flowers when they erupt, are in their unbloomed state, that will pierce anyone and anything like a spike, and also burn them at the area of contact. The user when he wishes, can form a single handseal to make the flowers bloom and face the opponent before firing a stream of fire from its centre, that has the ability to evaporate a huge ocean if all the flowers fire together. The fire will burn the opponent into crisp, before consuming him entirely.
Note:
- Can only be used twice.
- Once the flowers have erupted, the user needs to bloom it within 3 turns, or else it disappears.
- No techniques above S rank in the same or next turn.
- Credits to Azráel's Custom Jutsu Shop
- Can only be taught by The Lightning Lord.
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☼ Declined ☼
Take away the blinding part of it, and re-word the "pierce anyone and anything" part. Evaporating an ocean is a large over exaggeration, change that. If you want it so you can activate it another turn it needs to count as a move when you activate it. If its not like that you're basically giving yourself 4 moves on the turn you choose to activate.
(Raiton: Heiwa-shi to kawaii o hana) Lightening Release: Peaceful Death and Pretty Flowers
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: By channelling his lightening chakra into the ground, the user creates countless sun flowers made of lightening (15 inches high) to erupt from the ground. The flowers when they erupt, are in their unbloomed state, that will pierce anyone and anything like a spike, and also numb and paralyse the area of contact before blooming. The user when he wishes, can form a single handseal to make the bloomed flowers to face the opponent and rotate at high speeds before firing the petals of the flowers at them. The petals (5 inches long) are extremely sharp and can easily pierce through solid objects (following elemental interactions). These petals will paralyse the opponent at the area of contact for one whole turn.
Note:
- Can only be used twice.
- Once the flowers have erupted, the user needs to bloom it within 3 turns, or else it disappears.
- No techniques above S rank in the same or next turn.
- Credits to Azráel's Custom Jutsu Shop
- Can only be taught by The Lightning Lord.
You must be registered for see links
☼ Declined ☼
Same thing as above for the activating and the wording for the piercing.
Also, I'd prefer if you didn't include the credit bit. Obviously people help others with CJs, and that's fine, but this makes it seem like you just had the CJ written for you and you posted it, which I'm sure happens somewhat often and can't be stopped, but don't make it so obvious.
(Raiton: Heiwa-shi to kawaii o hana) Lightening Release: Peaceful Death and Pretty Flowers
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: By channelling his lightening chakra into the ground, the user creates countless sun flowers made of lightening (15 inches high) to erupt from the ground. The flowers when they erupt, are in their unbloomed state, with their petals closed, which looks like small spikes that will pierce like a spike from below, and also numb and paralyze the area of contact before blooming. The user when he wishes, can form a single handseal to make the bloomed flowers to face the opponent and rotate at high speeds before firing the petals of the flowers at them. The petals (5 inches long) are extremely sharp and can easily pierce through solid objects (following elemental interactions). These petals will paralyse the opponent at the area of contact for one whole turn.
Note:
- Can only be used twice, with one turn in between use.
- Once the flowers have erupted, the user needs to fire the petals within 3 turns, or else it disappears.
-If the user fires the petals in the same turn that the flowers erupted, it will count as the same move. If not, it is considered as another move.
- No techniques above S rank in the same or next turn.
- Can only be taught by Obítō.
(Katon: Nichibotsu no tame ni fuku o ki kokutan) Fire Release: Ebony Dressed for Sunset
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: As an application of advanced fire manipulation, the user begins by channelling his fire chakra into the ground. The causes a countless rose flowers made of fire (6 inches high) to erupt from the ground. The crimson red flowers look like real roses, and as such, can't be identified as something made of chakra, unless someone observes it carefully. The flowers when they erupt, will burn anyone at the area of contact before blooming. The user when he wishes, can form a single handseal to make the flowers face the opponent before firing a stream of fire from its centre, that has the ability to evaporate small bodies of water if all the flowers fire together. The fire will burn the opponent, before consuming him entirely.
Note:
- Can only be used twice, with a break of two turns in between use.
- Once the flowers have erupted, the user needs to use the stream of fire within 3 turns, or else it disappears.
-If the user uses the stream of fire in the same turn that the flowers erupted, it will count as the same move. If not, it is considered as another move.
- No techniques above S rank in the same or next turn.
- Can only be taught by Obítō.
✦ Approved, edited bits of both ✦
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(Katon: Jigoku no suna) | Fire: Hell Sand
Rank:B
Type: Offensive
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:20
Damage Points:N/A (+40 to the sand jutsu)
Description:The user forms a single handseal and channels his fire chakra into any available sand on the battlefield and heats it up, so much that anyone who touches it will burn their skin, causing blisers to develop. The user can use this sand to perform various jutsus later on which will cause added damage to the opponent.
Note:
Heating lasts for 3 turns.
Can be used 3 times.
Can be taught by Obito
✦ Declined, this is beyond the scope of fire jutsu and makes little sense as well; Sand when superheated turns into glass. And you will not be able to utilize it as it is still sand. Unless you have Sand Release, you're not manipulating Sand. ✦
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