[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

[Ushiro]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Nui Hari Zettai Baindo) - Sewing Needle Absolute Bind
Type: Defence/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user concentrates chakra into needles connected to ninja wire, increasing their durability to the point of being nearly indestructable. Chakra concentrated solely at the needles' points allow them to pierce defenses of the same rank and below without damaging them because of their fineness. This technique is very useful for setting traps and binding enemies, even giant summons. They may also be manipulated whenever the Rat handseal is held.
-Can only be taught by Ushiro

Declined
Not acceptable as this is not an elemental jutsu. Needs an usage limit, but overall, I'm not liking the sound of this jutsu.

(Raiton: Tentai Arashi Daiyaru) - Lightning Release: Celestial Storm Dial
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long (formed within short range)
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user holds out his hand and creates a 10 meter wide disk of dense lightning chakra that releases numerous thunderbolts directed at the target(s). They generate enough heat and power to destroy whatever comes into contact with them, even severely altering the landscape if the user so wishes. Thunderbolts spread from one side of the disk which stays stationary in mid-air, also acting as a platform when lightning is released away from the user.
-Usable twice per battle
-Lasts for 2 turns
-No S-rank or higher lightning jutsu for 2 turns
-Can only be taught by Ushiro

Declined
Okay, okay, hold up. Ten meters wide, do you have any idea how large that is? Also, "numerous thunderbolts" isn't enough information for me, you need to be more specific on how does thunderbolts work. And acting as platform for the user? With that power level, I don't think its tangible enough for the user itself to stand on it without getting hurt himself.

Resubmitting:

(Doton: Nui Hari Baindo) - Earth Release: Sewing Needle Bind
Type: Defence/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user concentrates doton chakra into needles connected to ninja wire and manipulates them to pierce and bind enemies to other objects, set traps, etc. The doton chakra constantly flowing through them allows them to easily travel through earthen materials and defenses up to B-rank, and increases their durability to the point of requiring superhuman strength akin to Tsunade's to break them. At the user's will, the needles and wire can become hard, losing their flexibility to create walls, cages, and other structures depending on their arrangement.
-Usable 3 times per battle
-Can only be taught by Ushiro

Declined, sounds a lot like one of the canon 7SM jutsus. Also, "requiring superhuman strength" is a no, these are A ranked needles. And using them to create walls, cages, or whatever is a no.

New:

(Fuuton Kuchiyose: Gurifin) - Wind Release Summoning: Griffin
Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user summons a creature with the head, wings, and talons of an eagle; and the body of a lion composed entirely of wind in a dense, solid form. Instead of being a simple elemental Ninjutsu technique, its a summoning technique, which can act independently from the users will, similar to any summoning animal. The griffin is capable of flight and is large enough to carry 4 people on its back. It attacks. enemies with its sharp and powerful talons equal to a B-rank attack. By merely flapping its wings the griffin can produce and control wind currents up to B-rank in strength to attack enemies or move obstacles. This counts as one of the user's three moves per turn.
-Usable 3 times per battle
-Can only be taught by Ushiro

Declined, DNR. Griffins are an approved summoning contract already.

(Doton Kuchiyose: Sabaku no Eien no Hogo-sha) - Earth Release Summoning: Eternal Keeper of the Desert
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S (B when reduced to one ring)
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user summons a cylindrical worm-like creature made entirely of rock and composed of 5 rings. The sandworm is enormous at 25 meters long with a 7 meter diameter. Instead of being a simple elemental Ninjutsu technique, its a summoning technique, which can act independently from the users will, similar to any summoning animal. Each ring of the sandworm has its own consciousness meaning all five rings must be destroyed to completely destroy it, though with every ring lost it's attacks lose strength as well. The sandworm travels by burrowing through the earth and knows the position of enemies by sensing the magnetic forces similarly to the Hiding Like a Mole Technique. A large array of spikes lining it's insides are used for grinding rock and sand. By moving its spikes to the outside of its body, it can pose a deadly threat to even giant summons when striking them. New spikes can be created instantly which allows it to shoot them at enemies as a stream of rock from his mouth or from his body depending on where the spikes are oriented. This counts as one of the user's three moves per turn.
-Usable once per battle
-Spikes are A-rank in strength (C when reduced to one ring) whether on or shot from the sandworm
-Can only be taught by Ushiro

Declined, so on top of making an earth natured Snake summoning, you make it 25 meters long with a 7 meter diameter. Wut? And 5 rings that take an A rank jutsu to destroy EACH. LOL, just no.

 

[BusinessManTeno]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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(Sakashima Yaiba:Enko hagane) Reverse Blade Style: Arc Of Steel
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This technique is useful specially against guard weapons (Kunais, Shields, Swords) and even some guard taijutsu/kenjutsu. The user will take and grip the sword in their dominant hand and channel earth chakra into the sword hardening the sword very similar to the earth spear technique. He will then swing it horizontal towards the opponents ribcage sending him flying to the side. This would bruise the opponent harshly. This can be used against a weapon as if they were to clash a regular sword with this technique, this technique would break through the sword due to sheer strength and continue its initial path (to come in contact with the opponents ribcage to do damage)

Note: Can use max of 3 times
Note: Requires a break of at least 2 turns.
Note: This technique can break up to B rank Kenjutsu techniques that are not chakra enhanced

Approved, added a note and removed one as it wasn't clear. Also, this can only work on B ranked Kenjutsu that aren't chakra enhanced and C ranked chakra enhanced Kenjutsu. No damage multiplier will increase this.

(Sakashima Yaiba: Nakigoe Zou) Reverse Blade Style: Weeping Statue
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This technique is a similar to the earth technique (Earth Style: Added Weight Rock Technique.), but this technique is used for both attacking and defensive purposes. The user will coat the sword in earth chakra similar to added weight technique. The user can use this against an incoming water jutsu by swinging the sword right as the water jutsu. Right as the sword touches the water, the earth chakra would transfer to the water jutsu and instantly solidify it. Due to the swinging matter of this technique soon as the water hardens it it will also crumble due to the blunt impact of the swing. The user can also use this technique to swing at the opponent (any body part) dealing blunt damage, but not only that, hardening the body part that was hit, not allowing the opponent to use said body part (due to it being harden and immobile similar to a statue) for 1 full turn

Note: Can only be used on water techniques A rank and below
Note: Can use only Thrice pr battle
Note: Cant use any reverse blade style techniques in the next turn

Declined, no, this isn't going to be used against a water attack. Your CFS is based on using earth chakra to increase the force behind your attacks, not channel it into remote objects to cause petrification.

(Genjutsu :Ranpu kibou) Illusionary Arts: Light Trickery
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/a
Description: This is a special type of genjutsu as it requires a holster with a sword in it. The User will slowly pull out their sword from their holster in their opponents line of sight, thus inducing the opponent in the genjutsu. As the sword is being drawn out, the opponent will see a very bright blinding light coming from the sword as its coming out the sword holster, temporarily blinding the opponent for, As the opponent is blind, the user will feel a sharp stab through their chest from the back. As the opponent gets stabbed from the back the blinding light will go down, and the opponent will then not see the user in front of them but in the back. Making it seem like the user is the one that stabbed them from the back. In reality the opponent simply falls to the ground from shock once stabbed in the genjutsu. Thus giving the user a chance to attack.

Note: Can Use Twice
Note: Cant Use A Rank Gen or above the next turn after use
Note: Must carry a holster with a sword in it

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 Declined  Needs a trigger in the form of Handdseals or some gesture like the confrontation handseal as you take the sword from the holster. Besides, its at best a B-Rank genjutsu. Also you wrote that the user is stabbed from the back...might wanna reword that unless you want to damage yourself with your own genjutsu...>_>

(I Edited pretty much the whole thing to make it feasible as the initial submission looked a mess)

(Genjutsu :Ranpu kibou) Illusionary Arts: Blinding Trickery
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: This is a special type of genjutsu as it requires a holster with a sword inside. The User will slowly pull out their sword from their holster in their opponents line of sight While at the same time doing the confirmation handseal, thus inducing their opponent(s) in the genjutsu. As the sword is being drawn out, the opponent will see a very bright blinding light coming from the sword as its coming out the sword holster, temporarily blinding the opponent. Once blinded, the opponent will feel a sharp pain from their back to the chest area due to being stabbed from the back inside the illusion from the sword the opponent seen earlier. As the opponent is stabbed, the blinding light will dim down, as the opponent will no longer see the user in front of them in the initial spot of the blinding light but the one holding the sword that stabbed them from the back. In reality the opponent simply falls to the ground from shock once stabbed in the genjutsu causing mental pain. Thus giving the user a chance to attack.

Note: Can Use Twice
Note: Must carry a holster with a sword in it

Declined, umm. It's close to approval but the colored part. I understand where you are going with this, but the wording gets confusing and somewhat difficult to understand. Clarify and simplify that for me and it should be good.

 

[Shady Doctor]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Making fire and wind variants...

(Katon: Dràugion Stàfe) - Fire style: Dragonfly Staff
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user begins by gathering up a considerable amount of chakra in his palms followed by clapping them together near his chest.. Once that is done, the user takes his hands apart but as they move away from each other the user forms a staff made of condensed fire. The staff is approximately the same height as the user and about a foot in diameter.
Close range abilities:
The staff's main use is to be used in close combat, where it is able to be used as a normal staff, though it has the cutting abilities of Chidori(S-rank), able to cut through most objects like butter
Mid range use:
The staff can also be used at a range, in which it gained.its name "dragonfly staff". The user can simply throw the staff like a spear but as It's in mid flight the user does a single hand seal thus transforming the staff as it moves. The staff quickly sprouts from its sides a pair of wings that resemble that of a dragonflys. This allows the staff to not only pick up speed and killing potential but also also allows the user to control it in mid flight to hit opponents. While being controlled, the staff has to always be moving forward and can't turn around nor make sharp turns..
At any point while flying, the user can do one more hand seal which results in the fire exploding into a 7m wide vortex of flames that would burn things to a crisp.

~ Only teachable by Shady
~ Only usable once per match
~ Staff lasts 3 turns unless thrown, then it ends that same turn..

(Fuuton: Dràugion Stàfe) - Wind style: Dragonfly Staff
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user begins by gathering up a considerable amount of chakra in his palms followed by clapping them together near his chest.. Once that is done, the user takes his hands apart but as they move away from each other the user forms a staff made of condensed wind. The staff is approximately the same height as the user and about a foot in diameter.
Close range abilities:
The staff's main use is to be used in close combat, where it is able to be used as a normal staff, though it has the cutting abilities of Chidori(S-rank)
Mid range use:
The staff can also be used at a range, in which it gained.its name "dragonfly staff". The user can simply throw the staff like a spear but as It's in mid flight the user does a single hand seal thus transforming the staff as it moves. The staff quickly sprouts from its sides a pair of wings that resemble that of a dragonflys. This allows the staff to not only pick up speed and killing potential but also also allows the user to control it in mid flight to hit opponents. While be controlled, the staff has to always be moving forward and can't turn around nor make sharp turns..
At any point while flying, the user can do one more hand seal which results in the wind exploding into a 7m wide vortex of wind that would suck things from 5m out into it while also cutting anything that comes into contact with it up

~ Only teachable by Shady
~ Only usable once per match
~ Staff lasts 3 turns unless thrown, then.it ends that same turn..

Both Declined
Whoa, whoa. Hold your horses, son. First of all...I can understand how the Raiton one works as it has been shown in the anime in variants of Chidori and such and I suppose I can accept the other two though instead of just simply copy/pasting, give some thought to their intangibility. Honestly, you don't want to toss away CJ spaces without fleshing out these two jutsu variants. Add a bit more. Every element works differently,

Resubmitting. Completely revamped both variants

(Fuuton: Chō Stáfe ) - Wind style: Butterfly Staff
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user begins by gathering up a considerable amount of chakra in his palms followed by clapping them together near his chest.. Once that is done, the user takes his hands apart but as they move away from each other the user uses shape manipulation around wind currents and forms a staff made of condensed wind. The staff is approximately the same height as the user and about a foot in diameter and is very similar to the wind blade technique, in both visual tangibility and cutting potential
Close range abilities:
The staff's main use is to be used in close combat, where it is able to be used as a normal staff, though it has the cutting abilities of an S-rank wind blade[/B]
Mid range use:
The staff can also be used at a range, in which it gained.its name "butterfly staff". The user can simply throw the staff like a spear but as It's in mid flight the user does a single hand seal thus transforming the staff as it moves. The staff quickly sprouts from its sides a pair of wings that resemble that of a butterfly's. This allows the staff to not only pick up speed and killing potential but also also allows the user to control it in mid flight to hit opponents. While be controlled, the staff has to always be moving forward and can't turn around nor make sharp turns..
At any point while flying, the user can do one more hand seal which results in the wind exploding into a 7m wide vortex of wind that would suck things from 5m out into it while also cutting anything that comes into contact with it up

~ Only teachable by Shady
~ Only usable once per match
~ Staff lasts 3 turns unless thrown, then.it ends that same turn..

Approved

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(Katon: Ka Stáfe ) - Fire style: Mosquito Staff
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user begins by gathering up a considerable amount of chakra in his palms followed by clapping them together near his chest.. Once that is done, the user takes his hands apart but as they move away from each other the user uses shape manipulation while releasing fire from his palms and forms a staff made of condensed fire. The staff is approximately the same height as the user and about a foot in diameter and is very much similar to that of the flaming dragon heads that took on a more solidified state of fire.
Close range abilities:
The staff's main use is to be used in close combat, where it is able to be used as a normal staff, though it has the cutting abilities of an S-rank blade able to cut through most objects like butter
Mid range use:
The staff can also be used at a range, in which it gained.its name "Mosquito staff". The user can simply throw the staff like a spear but as It's in mid flight the user does a single hand seal thus transforming the staff as it moves. The staff quickly sprouts from its sides a pair of wings that resemble that of a Mosquito's. This allows the staff to not only pick up speed and killing potential but also also allows the user to control it in mid flight to hit opponents. While being controlled, the staff has to always be moving forward and can't turn around nor make sharp turns..
At any point while flying, the user can do one more hand seal which results in the fire exploding into a 7m wide vortex of flames that would burn things to a crisp.

~ Only teachable by Shady
~ Only usable once per match
~ Staff lasts 3 turns unless thrown, then it ends that same turn..

Approved

 

[Kung Fro]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kotai Sutemu) Solid Stem
Type: Weapon
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: +60 with a Taijutsu kick
Description: Solid Stem is a human enhancement that is worn over the leg. It takes the shape of an intricately carved metal manifold that covers the foot and wraps up to the knee, complete with a joint for bending. Along the frame are holes of various sizes which allow for breathable movements and allow the frame to act as an extension of the body. The frame has various metal thorns on the inside structure, attached into the user, and allow for extension when chakra is channeled into them. The main use of the solid stem is to provide the user with enhanced movements by bursting chakra through the holes. This accelerates the movements of functions such as kicking or stomping. The Frame has a seam down the side which only the user can open to remove the frame, anyone else tries to wear it and the thorns inside shred their legs.
-Burst can only be used up to 5x per battle.

Declined
Bro, I don't have enough information to progress. I can't seem to create a proper picture for this weapon of yours'. First of all, various metal thorns attached into the user? I don't know about you, but that sounds seriously painful. Raiden from Metal Gear Rising is crying right now. And how exactly does it extend when the chakra is released into it? What exactly does the bursting do,is it like quick shots of chakra through the holes? How many at a time? How far does it go? Should also count as a jutsu as well.

(Kotai Sutemu) Solid Stem
Type: Weapon
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: +60 with a Taijutsu kick
Description: Solid Stem is a human enhancement that is worn over the leg. It takes the shape of an intricately carved metal manifold that covers the foot and wraps up to the knee, complete with a joint for bending. Along the frame are holes of various sizes which allow for breathable movements and allow the frame to act as an extension of the body. The frame has various metal thorns on the inside structure, which lay dormant on the surface of the users skin and allow for extension, the thorns will burst into the user when chakra is channeled into them (This causes pain to the user; pain is useful). The main use of the solid stem is to provide the user with enhanced movements by bursting chakra through the holes. This accelerates the movements of functions such as kicking or stomping. Chakra can be burst from all the holes at once, however this would merely result in a standstill of movement as the burst would be working against it's own purpose by going out opposite ends, so the user will only burst raw chakra from the hole(s) that would augment his movement(for a kick to the chin, the bottom of the feet and back of the ankle and so forth). The Frame has a seam down the side which only the user can open to remove the frame, anyone else tries to wear it and the thorns inside shred their legs.
-Burst can only be used up to 5x per battle.
-Chakra burst counts as a move and the burst does not extend more than an inch out of the respective holes

☼ Declined ☼
Give a rank genjutsu that the pain from the spikes can dispel. The augmentation needs to be better defined. How much faster does the kick go? If you're using this with a technique, and not just a free form kick, its not going to get +60 damage, though I can see it getting something like +10. Add that in there somewhere.

(Genjutsu: Ōkami Shōkōgun) Illusionary Arts: Werewolf Syndrome
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage points: N/a
Descriptions: The user of this technique will weave two handseals and clap his hands together, placing his opponent under a genjutsu. In this illusion, the opponent will begin to suffer from the effects of Hypertrichosis, commonly known as Werewolf Syndrome. This will make the opponent start to experience rapid hair growth on the entirety of their body. This can make the opponent struggle to breathe or move due to the binding of the mass of hair they believe they are covered in.
-Used thrice per battle

☼ Approved ☼
Remember though, struggling to move isn't the same as not being able to move.

(Tsūsuteppu) Two-Step
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage points: N/a
Descriptions: Using basic shape manipulation, the user creates a platform of chakra in front of him. This initial platform is flat while parallel to the ground and allows the user to jump upwards off of it. A second identical platform is created but this one allows for a change in direction to supplement the initial jump. This platform can be angled while it's surface is still flat so the user can aim his second jump. There is no boost to the jumps, just provides a surface to jump off.
-Maximum dimensions of the platform are 1mx1m
-Can be used 3x per battle

☼ Declined DNR ☼

 

[Erzo]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Doton: Hebi Kyouran) - Earth release: Snakes Frenzy
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: After using Swamp of the underworld the user does one hand seal and concentrates his chakra on the swamp to make several (Maximum of 7) snakes to emerge from the swamp and head towards the target at fast pace, these snakes are roughly around 1 meter long and have the strength of an average snake, meaning they can bind the opponent and easily stop him from moving but they can also be destroyed easily with the appropriate technique.
Note: Can only be used 3 times.
Note: can only be used after Swamp of the underworld.
Note: User can make the snakes emerge from anywhere in the swamp.
Note: No S-rank Earth technique next turn.

±± Approved ±± Edited. This is more a B-Rank

Updating to:

(Doton: Hebi Kyouran) - Earth release: Snakes Frenzy
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40 (-10 per turn if sustained)
Damage: 80
Description: After the use of Swamp of the underworld or other mud related Earth techniques, the user does one hand seal and concentrates his chakra on the swamp to make several (maximum of 4) snakes to emerge from the swamp and head towards the target at fast pace. These snakes are roughly 3 meters long, with a width of 1 meter, and have the strength to subdue a ninja by using their body, meaning they can bind the opponent and easily stop him/her from moving. Like the swamp they emerge from, the snakes tend to be extremely viscous, making it easy to bind opponents as all those who are stuck find themselves being swallowed into the snake at an alarmingly fast pace, where they're left helpless and stuck stuck, desperately gasping for air. The sticky attribute to the snakes doesn't affect their speed as they swim through the swamp, hiding below it in order to avoid some should they need to. Furthermore, a further developed ability allows the snakes to harden their swampy nature once they're out of the swamp, so that they can deal blunt damage, as compared to rely on their trapping skills. However, should this be used, it's an irreversible process and leads to the loss of that snakes ability to swim back into the swamp to avoid certain attacks, leaving it to wander above ground, as well as the ability to capture and drown people within it, making blunt damage the only possible way to cause any damage at all.
~ Can only be taught by Erzo
~ Can only be used 2 times.
~ No S-rank Earth technique next turn
~ Last 3 turns, unless otherwise destroyed

Approved

(Ototon: Hera's Nusuma Reta Gifuto) - Sound release: Hera's Stolen Gift
Rank: A
Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: A type of Hindering Sound Waves, this jutsu is based on the categories of the opponents brain and the way they affect the otherwise normal bodily functions. This jutsu can be used on both alies and opponents as the effects of the sound-waves created vary depending on the frequency. When attempting to use it on allies, the user would release the sound so that it's not loud enough for those who are in mid/long range to hear it, or so that those in short-mid range can hear it but not those in long, adjusting each time depending on where his/her allies may be. When releasing sound waves of roughly between 14 to 30 hz, all those who hear it have higher levels of alertness and concentration, the concept of fight or flight kicks in, causing the person to react quickly to whatever's coming, either through fighting or running away. This gives whoever hears it a +10 damage to all their Ninjutsu, and a greater reaction time. When releasing sound waves between 0.1 - 7.9 Hz, all those who's ears it falls on go into a trance like state, as if they have access to their unconscious mind. Their awareness of their body and limbs are lost, they sway lifelessly, the whole situation almost appearing to be a genjutsu in which they were heavily sedated. Their thoughts and actions they want to perform are still processed but their body does not respond to their wishes. The third and final sound wave created ranges from 8 to 13.9 Hz, and is somewhat a cross between the first and second, allowing the user to feel relaxed whilst remaining extremely focused, the body swaying yet each movement would have a purpose and a reason, similar to that of the Drunken Fist jutsu used by Lee. The user produces these different sound waves by focusing on his/her chakra and exhaling, creating the required sound wave whilst doing so. In order to prevent him/herself from getting affected by the same sound waves, the user would simultaneously send chakra into his/her own ears, using the chakra to block out the sound created.
~ Can only be used twice
~ Can only be taught by Erzo
~ Each use lasts 3 turns, unless otherwise disrupted
~ No other sound jutsu within the same turn, nor above S-rank in the next.

Pending, leaving for another checker

Declined, this is OPed and partially a sound mode depending on how it is used. First bold: What does making one have heightened reactions have in correlation to making your ninjutsu become strengthened? That is just an attempt to increase the power of someone's attacks, likely an ally in a NW fight. Adrenaline raising doesn't increase chakra input and power. Second bold would indeed be a sound genjutsu and certainly not how it is described here. Here, it would be a Hindering Sound Technique but the mentions to the unconscious mind are clear indicators of it being a Sound Genjutsu instead. Also, I liked the last name more.

(Doton: Kuroi Kurohyou) - Earth release: Black Panthers
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range:Short-long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user quickly concentrates his doton chakra in his hands and quickly touches the ground to release 2 panthers made out of Earth to run at the opponent at full force and take down the opponent savagely without trouble upon impact. The user can take his hands of the ground and the jutsu will still be active however to control the panthers the user must bring his hands back to the ground. If the users hands are not touching the ground, the panthers will simply attack the opponent whenever they see him/her.
Note: can only be used by RockLeeGreenBeast and those he shares this jutsu with.
Note: Can only be used 2 times.
Note: Panthers must be destroyed with an approperate jutsu.
Note: Panthers disperse after 3 turns if they are not destroyed.
Note: No S-rank Earth jutsus next turn.
Note: User can order the Panthers and tell them what to do as long as his hands are still touching the ground.

Approved here:

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(Doton: Kuroi Kurohyou) - Earth release: Black Panthers
Rank: S
Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
Range:Short-long
Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 per turn)
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user quickly concentrates his doton chakra into the ground below whilst performing a single Tiger hand seal, causing two panthers made out of Earth to suddenly emerge from the ground below. To control the panthers the user must have some form of contact with the the ground. This connection to the ground can be used to manipulate the panthers, controlling their every move to an inch, making for a more effective use of the jutsu as the users chakra is closely connected through the same Earth. However, the user can also use this jutsu if not connected to the ground, but should that be the case, then the panthers would act like nothing but the savage animals they are and attack the opponent regardless of their position, using their connection with the Earth to feel where the opponent is standing. The panthers' speed is equivalent to that twice of the average ninja, but this speed increases depending on the speed of the enemy, with the panthers being able to increase their speed continuously up to the 4th gate, if the opponent is moving at that same speed. This isn't their natural speed but the final speed they can adjust to, according to the situation they're created in and the opponent they face. As their speed increases, so does the height which they can jump to. Although not particularly important at times, they are normally able to jump roughly 3 meters in the air, with that increasing as the opponents speed increases as they're able to gain more momentum and speed before their jump.

~ Can only be used 2 times.
~ Can only be taught by Erzo
~ No S-rank Earth jutsus next turn.
~ Panthers disperse after 3 turns if they are not destroyed.

Declined
Yeah, all you're doing for this jutsu is adding a speed boost to it, and an immense one at that. Don't see anything unique enough about this to make it approve in any way.

 

[ZandaT]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Fuuton: Taifū no me) Wind Style: Eye of the Storm
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Mid.range
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Taifū no me is a simple technique that revolves around the user channeling wind chakra into their eyes as they focus on a single point within the air of the area around them. By focusing on a single point, the user uses their wind chakra to cause a swift build up of air currents that forms a mini 8 inch horizontal tornado that starts out as thick as a needle at its front, and expands in width as you move further up to its back like the top of a normal tornado. What makes this technique dangerous is the properties and destruction this horizontal projectile caries. Due to it being created by the concentration of two eyes, the forming of the projectile is rather quick, taking less than a few seconds to form before it shoots forwards at a swift pace that is quite similar to the pace of an extending chidori spear. Upon contact the horizontal mini tornado drills into its victims delivering numerous rapid slashes within the diameter of entry before the concentrated air currents releases their bond separating in various directions causing even more damage as the tornado explodes outwards as a maelstrom of sharp air currents. Multiple mini tornadoes can be released back to back, all of them amounting to A rank, and like most wind techniques they are intangible and translucent making them very hard to catch with normal eyes. Shinobi without one of the three eye KG will find this a very hard technique to face as the signs of this jutsu being used are very easy to miss, and even if a eye KG user manages to catch the jutsu being made they still would have a hard time countering due to its speed. When this technique travels it sounds like a small gust of wind that can only be heard within 2m of a person, and a few veins can be seen in the users eyes momentarily upon creation of the technique.
NOTES
►Can be used 4x per battle
►Can only be taught by Zanda

Declined
Focusing Wind Chakra, first of all, that doesn't work at all. You're saying you're basically shooting out Wind Chakra from your eyes onto the point of the sky where you form the tornado? That doesn't seem logical at all to me.
At the bolded: Way too OP. You making this literally uncounterable to the opponent and hard to detect in the first place, especially when you don't have a limit on the amount of tornadoes one can create. Also, when it hits the opponent, what do you mean by "maelstrom of sharp air currents?" How large and powerful are these? What are the results if someone is hit by this jutsu?

(Fuuton: Taifū no me) Wind Style: Eye of the Storm
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short/Mid.range
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Taifū no me is a simple technique that revolves around the user manipulating a small area of the air of around them by focusing on a single point. The user uses their wind chakra to cause a swift build up of air currents that forms a mini 8 inch horizontal tornado that starts out as thick as a needle at its front, and expands in width as you move further up to its back like the top of a normal tornado. What makes this technique dangerous is the properties and destruction this horizontal projectile caries. Due to it being created by the concentration of two eyes, the forming of the projectile is rather quick, taking less than a few seconds to form before it shoots forwards at a swift pace that is quite similar to the pace of an extending chidori spear. Upon contact the horizontal mini tornado drills, reaching a length of 4 inches and a width of 2 inches, into its victims delivering numerous rapid slashes within the diameter of penetration before the concentrated air currents releases their bond separating in various directions causing even more damage as the tornado explodes outwards as a cluster of sharp air currents. The jutsu will drill into its targets, ripping up the skin, underlying tissue, muscle, etc., before amplifying the damage done upon the jutsu exploding. Multiple mini tornadoes can be released back to back, adding up to a total of 6 tornadoes, all of them amounting to A rank, and like most wind techniques they are intangible and translucent making them very hard to catch with normal eyes. Shinobi without one of the three eye KG will find this a very hard technique to face as the signs of this jutsu being used are very easy to miss, and even if a eye KG user manages to catch the jutsu being made they still would have a hard time countering due to its speed. When this technique travels it sounds like a small gust of wind that can only be heard within 2m of a person, and a few veins can be seen in the users eyes momentarily upon creation of the technique.
NOTES
►Can be used 4x per battle
►Must be created within short range with a mid.range reach
►Can only be taught by Zanda

Declined
Really not seeing any way for this to work out. It's only a few inches to begin with, and hard to detect during battle, making it extremely tough to counter. Not to mention that you can release more than once.

Summoning Animal: Orangutan
Scroll Owner: Zanda
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
Description and Background
The orangutans are the two exclusively Asian species of extant great apes. They have large heads with a prominent mouth area, a large, bulky body, a thick neck, very long, strong arms, short, bowed legs, and no tail. Their body mostly covered with long, reddish-brown hair and grey-black skin. Their hair is typically reddish-brown, instead of the brown or black hair typical of chimpanzees and gorillas, but some orangutans have been seen with more sparse lighter-coloured coats. The male and female orangutans differ in size and appearance making them easily distinguishable. Dominant adult males have distinctive cheek pads and produce long calls, via their throat pouches, allow them to make loud calls that attract females and intimidate rivals.

Orangutans are the most arboreal of the great apes and spend most of their time in trees. The orangutan's hands are similar to human hands; they have four long fingers and an opposable thumb. However, the joint and tendon arrangement in the orangutans' hands produces two adaptations that are significant for swift arboreal locomotion. Orangutans have very long arms, the males having the longest span, and they can reach up to about 2 m (6.6 ft). Their feet have four long toes and an opposable big toe allowing them to grasp things with both their hands and their feet. Since their hip joints have the same flexibility as their shoulder and arm joints, orangutans have less restriction in the movements of their legs than humans have.

Orangutans are among the most intelligent primates, and they are known to use a variety of sophisticated tools to solve their day to day obstacles. There may even be distinctive cultures within populations of orangutans. This has also lead the apes into being extensively studied for their learning abilities.

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[Nathan]

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Kyu Doragon Jutsu: Sukai Foabooru | Nine Arts Dragon: Sky Walk
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B-rank
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: A quick burst of speed, caused by the user focusing wind chakra on his feet. The user then causes the wind to suddenly burst, allowing the user to gain a sudden surge of speed. This technique can be used to propel the user high into the air, evade an attack, or simply to propel the user towards the opponent. The speed attained by the user when this technique is used can only be tracked by one tomoe sharingan. The technique can be used extremely quickly, and can even be used to evade wide scale technique like Majestic Annihilation.
Notes:
- Can only be used four times per-match
- Must be a practitioner of Kyu Doragon Jutsu | Nine Arts Dragon

Declined, Sorry, but after talking it over with other RP Mods, this will come into direct clashing with the EIG tech Guy used, only difference is this uses wind.

Kyu Doragon Jutsu: Burakku Orijin Arashi | Nine Arts Dragon: Black Origin Tempest
Type: Offense
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user concentrates his wind chakra and focuses the chakra into the bottom of his feet, near the heels. The user can then cause the wind chakra to surge outwards suddenly, to propel the user towards the opponent. However, unlike other jutsu of the style, the wind surges multiple times. With each propulsion by the wind, the user accelerates. These accelerations, and the constant propulsions cause the opponent to see afterimages of the user appearing behind him. These can be mistaken for shadow clones, and makes it difficult to find the user's actual positioning. The user when he reaches the opponent, will then deliver a powerful uppercut at the opponent. As the uppercut happens, the user causes a sudden burst of wind chakra emanating from the bottom of the user's elbow. This causes the uppercut to do much more damage than normal to the opponent.
Notes:
- Can only be used three times per-match
- Have to wait a turn before use again
- Must be a practitioner of Kyu Doragon Jutsu | Nine Arts Dragon

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Declined, the afterimage thing is iffy...if you release the wind from your feet and propel yourself forward, at most it will cause the enemy to have a hard time tracking your movements accurately, but creating an afterimage isn't likely. If you channeled chakra elsewhere then just your feet, I would understand but like this, no.
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(Raiton: Tatakiwaru) - Lightning Release: The Shattering
Type: Offensive
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: A simple, yet deadly, technique that is highly versatile in it's usage. The user gathers a moderate amount of Lightning in any area on their body into a tight ball and creating two opposing forces within the orb, an inner force spinning counter-clockwise and the outer force spinning clockwise. These opposing forces rapidly fight to negate each other, causing powerful fluctuations within the orb as dominance shifts from one force to the other. When launched the orb surges forth in either a condensed spear-like stream or in it's spherical form, inflicting piercing and explosive damage respectively. What, so your'e saying you can release it in one or the other? And what do you mean by stream? Does it leave a trail of electricity or something? And what do you mean by piercing and explosive damage? You're trying to state here that this move has two different ways of working/attacking, but I'm somewhat confused about how they might differ. The versatility of this technique stems from the user's ability to guide it through the air or ground to a specific target while remaining motionless and the ability to force it to lose stability at any time, creating a fierce discharge of electricity that spreads rapidly through the area or be guided by the user once more. Or to be guided by the user once more? But if it loses stability, how can it be guided by the user once more? Also, need to be more specific about the "discharge of electricity". What does it do? How far does it reach? Upon making contact with either an opponent or object the technique disperses through their body, flowing freely as it attempts to wreck havoc before ripping itself from either the surface or body of the target to inflict damage once more. So it just goes through the body of the person and continues on? Wut? How does it inflict damage? If the user decides to use the condensed spear-like stream, the user cannot use another technique after using the condensed spear-like stream, since the condensed spear-like stream form will be stopped. So it would be best to use this form as the last technique. Yeah, I'm not understanding this "condensed spear-like stream" at all. Need you emphasize more, I'm having a tough time putting this jutsu into picture.
Notes:
- Can only be used three times per-match.
- No lighting techniques above A-rank for one turn after the use of this.
- Can only be taught by Nathan.

Declined
Wut? Even after reading it several times, I'm a bit puzzled, so I need you to clarify what I said above.

 

[Bruce Banner]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kagemane : Bosatsu no hyaku kurai te) : Shadow Style : 100 shadow hand of Bodhisattva
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: After 4 years of training to develop his hidden clan ability, the shadow jutsu of Nara clan. With hard training effort and pray every day for 5 years, the user materializes his shadow into a giant hand made of shadow and did 1000 punches a day using his giant hand made of the user shadow, and it took 18 hours to finish 1000 punches on his first day. After two years, when he completed the 1000 punches, the sun had not yet set. And after 5 years hard training, the user completed 1000 punches in less than one hour and more time to pray. Because of this hard training every days and takes 5 years to completed it, his shadow become a solid and materializes thus able to deliver punches as fast speed 2x of the user normal speed, also able to shape manipulation by takes the form of a gigantic dark statue of Bodhisattva (a Bodhisattva that is associated with compassion as Veneration by East Asia Buddhism) made of his shadow. By utilizing his shadow, he is capable of making his attacks seem as if they had come from another dimension due to his incredible speed, emerge from beneath the user as the user become one with his shadow. When activated, the user emits a gigantic shadow multi-armed of Bodhisattva with reach heights of 30 meters and the shadow multi armed able to reach to long range and this can be done by using his chakra continously injected into his shadow. In order to attack using the dark statue of Bodhisattva, the user must first prays by clasping his hands together in a fluid motion. After that, the arms on the Bodhisattva strike down upon their targets in conjunction with the user own hand motions.

Note:
- No other shadow jutsu can be done when this jutsu activated with the exception of shadow jutsu which associated with this jutsu.
- The shadow hand bodhisattva speed 2x times faster from the normal speed of the user and only like the ability of 2 tomoe sharingan able to keep up with it's speed.
- Drain -30 Chakra every turn
- Last for 4 turns and auto vanished.
- Can only be activated twice every battle and recharging for one turn each use
- After 2 times usage, the user can no longer use shadow jutsu and S-Rank Ninjutsu for the rest of the battle.

Declined What, no. This isn't going to be able to move at twice your speed nor will it require at least 2 Tomoe tracking-esque levels nor is it going to be able to reach up to 30 meters or long range for that matter. Are you crazy?

(Kage bosatsu : ichi no te) - shadow Bodhisattva : first hand
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: By activating and using “100 shadow hand of Bodhisattva” The user using his dominant hand to performs a chopping motion and the Bodhisattva mimics it, striking his opponent with a chop motion where before, it’s large shadow hand trap and bind the opponent shadow then crush the opponent body.

(Kage bosatsu : ni no te) - shadow Bodhisattva : second hand
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Long
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: By activating and using “100 shadow hand of Bodhisattva” The user performs a clapping motion using his both hands and then the Bodhisattva copies it, attacking the opponent with a clap. Closing and smashing the opponent inside it’s palm and also bind the opponent shadow prior smash.

Both Declined Get the first one approved first.

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](Kagemane : Bosatsu no hyaku kurai te) : Shadow Style : 100 shadow hand of Bodhisattva
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: After 5 years of training to develop his hidden clan ability, the shadow jutsu of Nara clan. With hard training, effort and praying every day for 5 years, the user materializes his shadow into a giant hand made of shadow and did 1000 punches a day using his giant hand made of the user shadow, and it took 18 hours to finish 1000 punches on his first day. After two years, when he completed the 1000 punches, the sun had not yet set. And after 5 years hard training, the user completed 1000 punches in less than one hour and more time to pray. Because of this hard training every days and takes 5 years to completed it, his shadow become a solid and materializes thus able to deliver punches with fast speed as the user normal speed, also able to shape manipulation by takes the form of a gigantic dark statue of Bodhisattva (a Bodhisattva that is associated with compassion as Veneration by East Asia Buddhism) made of his shadow. By utilizing his shadow, he is capable of making his attacks seem as if they had come from another dimension, emerge from beneath the user as the user become one with his shadow. Kind of confused about this. What do you mean by the attacks coming from another dimension? And when using this, does the user become part of the shadow, or does it simply rise from behind him? When activated, the user emits a gigantic shadow multi-armed of Bodhisattva with reach heights of 10 meters and the shadow multi armed able to reach up to mid range and this can be done by using his chakra continously injected into his shadow. In order to attack using the dark statue of Bodhisattva, the user must first prays by clasping his hands together in a fluid motion. After that, the arms on the Bodhisattva strike down upon their targets in conjunction with the user own hand motions.

Note:
- No other shadow jutsu can be done when this jutsu activated with the exception of shadow jutsu which associated with this jutsu.
- The shadow hand bodhisattva speed are the same as normal speed of the user.
- Drain -20 Chakra every turn
- Last for 4 turns and auto vanished.
- Can only be activated twice every battle and recharging for one turn each use
- After 2 times usage, the user can no longer use shadow jutsu and S-Rank Ninjutsu for the rest of the battle.

(Kage bosatsu : ichi no te) - shadow Bodhisattva : first hand
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: By activating and using “100 shadow hand of Bodhisattva” The user using his dominant hand to performs a chopping motion and the Bodhisattva mimics it, striking his opponent with a chop motion where before, it’s large shadow hand trap and bind the opponent shadow then crush the opponent body.

(Kage bosatsu : ni no te) - shadow Bodhisattva : second hand
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: By activating and using “100 shadow hand of Bodhisattva” The user performs a clapping motion using his both hands and then the Bodhisattva copies it, attacking the opponent with a clap. Closing and smashing the opponent inside it’s palm and also bind the opponent shadow prior smash.

Declined
Yeah, I need a bit more clarification on this mode. Can the user also use elemental Ninjutsu? Very confused about this.

 

[Typhon]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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(Sethaka) - Set's Tomb

Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: While the desert sands surrounding Sunagakure provide Gaara with a limitless supply of sand, not every battlefield provides him this luxury. Seeking to prepare himself for a sand-less terrain, Gaara created a new gourd which would act as his own portable desert. To do this he created a gourd not unlike the one in which he normally carried. It was similar in size, color and shape, but differed in one important way. Three seals were painted on to the gourd, one on each of the sides save for the side facing Gaara's back. These seals read "Sahara", "Namib" and "Atacama". When activated they glow red and release sand into the gourd providing Gaara with an endless supply. Only one of these seals can be activated at a time, but the sand summoned forth from each seal carries unique characteristics:

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Atacama - The sand from Atacama is rumored to be the driest sand in the world. The sand is infused with earth chakra which acts as a double edged sword. It prevents the sand from becoming wet, but at the same time it increases its vulnerability to lightning. This gives it a double strength against water techniques, but a double weakness against lightning.

Sahara - The sands from the Sahara are larger in grain size than typical deserts. This gives sand techniques used when wielding this sand a much stronger punch as well as giving defensive techniques more durability. Sand techniques used with this source gain a +10 damage boost, but due to the size of the sand grains its also heavier and slower making techniques move half as fast (when used with Shield of Sand, the speed the sand can keep up with is halved, though it can defend against A-rank taijutsu techniques).

Namib - This sand was taken from what is said to be the oldest desert in the world. As such, time has worn this sand down to very fine particles making it light and easy to manipulate. This allows the sand to move faster at twice its normal speed making it even more difficult to avoid, though the fine grain of the sand makes it more capable of soaking up water and becoming weighed down (when used with Shield of Sand, the speed the sand can keep up with is doubled).

In order to alternate between seals, Gaara must first deactivate any currently active seal. When this is done, the sand that had been released by the previous seal is drawn back into Gaara's gourd and sealed away, preventing him from mixing the sands of the different sources.

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(Thyrsus, Meijisutaffu) - Thyrsus, the Magi's Staff
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: This staff of legend was tracked down by Vivi Ornitier after having read about its mythology in an old and forgotten tome. It was found within a shrine held in a cavern where an abnormal level of natural chakra saturated the surroundings. The water within the walls of the cave became imbued with this chakra and leaked from the roof of the cavern as drops down towards the shrine itself. Here, a wooden staff caught the water at the top where the head was shaped like two palms cupped together. Over many years this chakra laden water crystallized to form a fist sized light green and transparent sphere within the two cupped hands, creating a jewel dubbed "materia". The energy of this materia permeates throughout the staff making what would have been normal wood nigh indestructible. Also, similar to frog kata, it permeates an invisible layer of natural energy around the staff making it unwise to simply dodge in combat. This energy can be released from the staff as a semi-circular pulse of natural chakra that reaches up to mid range. Once the pulse is released the layer of energy around the staff disappears for three turns, during which the staff's abilities can no longer be used. The second ability of the materia is that if the user focuses their chakra into it, they can release their techniques through the crystal and forgo the need for hand seals. This can only be done once per turn and when the materia is depleted it cannot be used for the remainder of the battle.
-Does not grant the user any ability to sense, mold or absorb natural chakra.
-The materia holds 250 chakra which is used by both the pulse ability and any technique released through it.
-Pulse ability is S-rank and costs 40 of the materia's chakra.
-Once the materia is drained the staff loses its abilities.

Declined
I like the Final Fantasy reference! Asides from that, need a bit of clarification. Firstly, what do you mean by "natural energy around the staff makes it unwise to simply dodge in combat?" Also, what does the pulse do? Is it just pure chakra at S-Rank? What happens when it hits the enemy? Needs an usage limit on both abilities as well.

(Hikasazanami-Ken: Hyoro Darumadoru Kyuushuu) - Chop Hanging Rippling Fist: Swaying Daruma Doll Revenge
Type: Defense
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: 40
Description: This technique is used to counter strikes towards the upper torso or head of the practitioner. Using careful chakra control they'll momentarily reinforce the point of impact to minimize damage while allowing their upper body to move with the strike by swaying their hips. They'll then use their hips to convert the momentum of their body and rebound towards the opponent at high speeds while striking out with both palms.
-Can defend A-rank and below taijutsu.
-Can be used three times per battle.

(Hikasazanami-Ken: Hirashikkyaku Tsuchikujo) - Chop Hanging Rippling Fist: Falling Palm Earthly Destruction
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user raises up one of their hands and then brings it down slamming it to the ground. As they do this they release a massive burst of chakra into the ground that ripples outwards in all directions ripping up the earth as it travels. The speed of the ripple is immense making it difficult to avoid.
-Can only be used by a Hyuuga.
-Can be used twice per battle.
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(Hikasazanami-Ken: Hyoro Darumadoru Kyuushuu) - Chop Hanging Rippling Fist: Swaying Daruma Doll Revenge
Type: Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This technique is used to counter strikes towards the upper torso or head of the practitioner. Using careful chakra control they'll momentarily reinforce the point of impact to minimize damage while allowing their upper body to move with the strike by swaying their hips. They'll then use their hips to convert the momentum of their body and rebound towards the opponent at high speeds while striking out with both palms releasing a ripple through the opponent's body that can encompass their entire torso.
-Can defend A-rank and below taijutsu.
-Can be used three times per battle.

Approved

(Hikasazanami-Ken: Hirashikkyaku Tsuchikujo) - Chop Hanging Rippling Fist: Falling Palm Rippling Destruction
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user raises up both of their hands and then brings them down slamming on the ground or water. As they do this they release a massive burst of chakra into the ground or water that ripples outwards in all directions ripping up the earth as it travels, or creating a tsunami on the water. The speed of the ripple is immense making it difficult to avoid.
-No Chop Hanging Rippling Fist in the same turn.
-Can be used twice per battle.

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Declined do you mean the size of the ripple is immense or speed? As the speed being immense doesn't make much sense. If size, you need to clarify how large it is. Also, the restrictions aren't enough.

 

[Vegeta]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Katon: Bāsākā shakunetsu) - Fire Release: Scorching Berserker
Rank: A
Type: Supplemental/Attack/Defense
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 30 (15 per turn to maintain)
Damage Points: 60 for ram/stream attack
Description: After Performing Fire Release: Scorching Rage the user will focus and maintain the fiery golden chakra surrounding him and can move about freely on the field of battle, even leaving the ground. The user can ram the enemy while surrounded in the chakra burning them and delivering blunt force damage (with what ranked jutsu?). The user may also clap his hands together with the palms open and outward concentrating and releasing the chakra in a stream of fire up to mid range, which will end the jutsu
~Notes~
-Must know my Scorching Rage
-Lasts 3 turns unless released
-Damage to taijutsu is increased +10 due the the flames surrounding the user
-User can only use katon elemental jutsu while this is active, but can perform physical taijutsu/kenjutsu attacks
-Must be taught by -Vegeta

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Emphasize on the bolded parts.

-Re-submission: removed leaving the ground, added damage to ram attack and better detail-

(Katon: Bāsākā shakunetsu) - Fire Release: Scorching Berserker
Rank: A
Type: Supplemental/Attack/Defense
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 30 (15 per turn to maintain)
Damage Points: 60 for stream attack
Description: After Performing Fire Release: Scorching Rage the user will focus and maintain the fiery golden chakra surrounding him and can move about freely on the field of battle, but cannot leave the ground or the chakra will dissipate. The user can ram the enemy while surrounded in the chakra burning them and delivering blunt force damage as well as 4th degree burns (B rank damage, same as Scorching Rage). The user may also clap his hands together with the palms open and outward, concentrating and releasing the chakra in a stream of fire up to mid range, which will also end the jutsu.
~Notes~
-Lasts 3 turns unless released
-Must know my Scorching Rage and it must be used on the same turn
-Damage to taijutsu is increased +10 due the the flames surrounding the user
-User can only use katon elemental jutsu while this is active, but can perform physical taijutsu/kenjutsu attacks
-Must be taught by -Vegeta

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(Adobansudo Hachimitsu No Jutsu) - Advanced Honey Bee Technique
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user generates bees from their sleeves (up to 8, each C-ranked when detonated) that upon performing the seal of confrontation and applying chakra upon the bees can explode creating varying effects. Based upon the Honey Bee Technique this technique plays on the same principle of Kamikaze Bees but instead of simply exploding and releasing honey upon the opponent once imbued with a chakra nature they can release said nature in the form it normally would appear. EG, if Katon chakra is used an explosive force followed by a dense fire ball takes place. If instead fuuton chakra is used when a bee explodes a dense blade of wind is created with cutting and slicing properties or if raiton chakra is used a small pulse of electricity is created that can cause paralysis and numbness for a turn.
~Notes~
-Can only be used by members of the Kamizuru Clan.
-Bee's appear the size of 2 normal bee's
-Must be taught by -Vegeta
Reference for Anime context sized bee's

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Declined, these bees will only be able to release one element, not half wind, half fire, etc. And I don't agree with 8 bees equating C rank each. That would mean tha you have C+C+C+C+C+C+C+C = A. C+C = B ranks already. This would mean:

C+C =B
C+C =B
C+C =B
C+C =B

Two B ranks = 1 A so

B+B = A
B+B = A

From your math, this would mean A +A = A, which is incorrect. At most, they would be D rank themselves, as 8 D ranks = A.

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(Katon: 9000 Ijō no shi no toshi!) - Fire Release: Over 9000 years of Death!
Type: Offensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra: 50
Damage: 90 (30 to user)
Description: Like 1000 Years of Death, the user makes the sign of the tiger and force-ably punches it into the enemy's behind (Damage of 1000 years of Death would apply). However, by adding the seals Dragon -> Snake -> Ram, the user channels large amounts of katon chakra before expelling the chakra thru their hands, then force-ably punches it into the enemy's behind.
~Notes~
-Because of damage to the hands, no Katon may be used for 1 turn, and no jutsu's using hand seals for 2 turns
-No other Katon jutsu may be used the turn this is used
-Can only be used 1 time per battle
-Must be taught by -Vegeta

Declined
Wutttt. Okay, first of all, this is far from F-Rank. Secondly, if you already have your hands in the enemy's behind, how do you form those additional handseals?

 

[NightKiing]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

kuchiyoshe:nakel(summoning:nakel)
Rank: s-rank
Type: summon
Range: short
chakra cost: 40
damage point: n/a
Description:- The user perform the summon ritual and then either touch the aye aye tatoo or slam the ground summoning nakei, nakel is same size as emma and it has black fur with white stripes,nakel can stand on all four or on the hind legs, nakel has the wind affinity and so can use wind techniques up to s rank without hand seals, nakel can also communicate in english, being a wind user nakel's body is not affected by c-rank lightning and below, nakel can infuse his fur with wind chakra and then shoot it at a target up to mid range.
Note: can only be summoned once
Note: lasts for four rounds on field
Note: The fur shot at target is equal to b-rank and can only be done twice, counts as a user's move
Note: must sign aye aye contract to summon
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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Gemi & Mini) Summoning Jutsu: Gemi & Mini
Type: Summoning
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/a
Description: The user will start by biting their blood and do a sequence of 2 handseals and clap their hand holding them together for 4 seconds. Once the 4 seconds has pass the user will put their hands apart causing a cloud of smoke to appear on both sides of the user with an Aye-Aye summon in each cloud of smoke. This is a special summoning to the clan as these are fraternal twins and are masters of co-op and the strongest Aye-Aye of all Aye-Aye physically when put together. . Gemi is the male Aye-Aye. His fur is all black with a Red circle on his chest with red eyes. Mini is the female Aye-Aye and the older of the two. Her fur is white with a blue circle on her chest and blue eyes. These two possess no special jutsus but are very strong and violent thus giving them the Taijutsu masters of all the Aye-Ayes. Each one stands roughly 6`4 feet and can talk Fluent English. The strength of each Aye-Aye are A rank Each and when attacking together, S Rank. They only use free form but one punch from the aye-aye is strong enough to cause 5 meter crater into the ground but together they can cause a crater the size of 10meter radius. This happens only if they are literally touching each other a little linking their chakra together. Due to their strong durability, body, flexibility, agility and speed each of them are immune to B rank jutsus. Can Evade jutsus a certain amount of times and together they can create an S rank force. These two do not separate meaning, If one gets called back, the other does as well. If one is defeated the other one will poof away.
Note: Must have signed the Aye-Aye Contract
Note: Can only use free-form taijutsu
Note: Each time they avoid a jutsu, or get out of it, it counts towards one of the user 3 turns
Note: Immune to B rank jutsus, can endure the attack of 1 A rank jutsu, causing small damage (Not enough to kill) and can tank one S rank jutsu together only if their body is touching
Note: Stays on the field for a max of 4 turn

Declined, looking at the colored, no. DNR
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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu:Meleron) Summoning: Meleron
Type:Summon
Rank:S
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points: N/a
Description: Meleron is one of the aye aye elders. He is about the same size as a normal aye aye (real life)With a line of yellow on his stomach and a blue patch on his back in the shape of a cross..Though he naturally stays on all 4 legs he also stands up similar to humans . Naturally Meleron can use his sharp claws to dig through earth easily and quickly.Meleron has only one ability once the user communicates with meleron,Meleron releases his chakra around himself and the user,once the chakra surrounds meleron and the user like a shroud they both go invisible leaving them to be only noticed by sensory ninjas or doujutsu user.Meleron Can also speak with the user normally or through mind. The user must bite their thumb and wipe the blood on the Aye-Aye tattoo, then do the ram handseal. Meleron will then appear right on the user's shoulder (anyone of the shoulder the user states)..
-Can Only be Summoned Once
-Last for 4 turns on the field
-once the invisibility is started it lasts three turns
-activating invisibility counts as the user's move,but sustaining doesn't
-the shroud can be used either on meleron only or both meleron and user
-if the user pulls a weapon from his pouch the weapon is also invisible till the user lets go of it or throws it

Declined, do not resubmit
Yeah, that's not gonna happen with a summon.

 

[Yashiro]

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(Shīhōsu Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Oceana) - Seahorse Summoning: Oceana

Rank: S
Range: Short - Mid
Type: Offensive/Supplementary/Summon
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: Oceana is the master of genjutsu amongst the summonings of the seahorse contract and has a unique illusionary ability that only she possess and is able to use, Oceana is a rather small seahorse with a small loose and dangling tail, She is covered in yellow scales with compact belly scales. There are thin spines with three branches atop her head and thin, pink fins on her cheeks. Its thin snout is rather powerful and she is able to cast genjutsu across a large area, by projecting her 'clicking sound' through her snout, Oceana has a unique ability that allows her to control her chakra solely through the use of her 'clicking sound' meaning with one click she releases chakra and with another she is able to stop her chakra almost instantly, this ability improves her mastery of genjutsu by that much, allowing her to be even a better illusionist than the boss summon, Kingdra, however Oceana doesn't have any affinity towards any type of elements, she is only able to cast illusions and cancel it for a brief moment before casting yet another illusion in a matter of seconds, this makes up for her not able to perform elemental attacks, Oceana's breeding pouch is only capable of carrying several items and not any human beings at all due to her petite size. Oceana can use regular genjutsu as well as all the genjutsu within the seahorse arts, but no elements of any sort not even those that Seahorses are in most cases associated with.

Note: Must have signed the Seahorse contract and have its tattoo
Note: This unique genjutsu ability of Oceana that allows her to cast an opponent in and out of an illusion can only be used 3 times per battle and counts as a move of the users 3 per turn
Note: Oceana can use all genjutsu related techniques up to S-Rank without the use of hand seals and rather the use of her 'clicking sound'
Note: Oceana can stay on the field for 4 turns
Note: Can only be summoned once per battle

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 Declined  DNR

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(Shīhōsu Geijutsu: ) - Seahorse Arts: The suction of Tlanusi

Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Type: Offensive
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: Once the target is in contact with the same source of water as a seahorse, the seahorse would place its snout into the water and start powerfully sucking through its snout whilst releasing its chakra, causing a whirling vortex to form beneath the target, said vortex draws the target into the center of it forcefully drawing the target deeper and deeper into the water as well as throwing them entirely off balance and making them dizzy whilst the jutsu is in effect, once the target is drawn deeper into the water, the seahorse blasts heavier causing large amounts of pressure to be placed upon the target in attempt to drown him/her.

Notes - Requires the user and target to be in contact with a sufficient water source
- Can only be used 3 times per battle
- Can only be taught by Yashiro.

☼ Approved ☼
Changed blowing to sucking, since it doesn't make sense if its blowing and its named "suction".

(Champuru: Kaihi saru) - Champlo Kendo Style: Evasive Monkey

Rank: B
Range: Short
Type: Supplementary
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: With the use of this technique the user is able to use swift and unorthodox movements to evade certain techniques, this includes hand stands, head spins, whirlwinds, Hip movements etc, what makes this technique unique is that no matter in what difficult position a champlo kendo master might find himself in, with the correct movements and reasonable explanations most evasions would prove possible, especially since a Champlo Kendo master has been trained to maneuver his body in tight positions with unconventional bodily movements.
Note - Can be used 3 times per battle
- Must have mastered Champlo Kendo
- All evasions and counter attacks would depend on the size of Ninjutsu related attacks to be able to evade Ninjutsu related techniques.

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Declined, DNR. Only the creator of a CFS can submit customs for it, no one else.

 

[Sharingdork]

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(Saishi no Uta: Roku-Ten Kanma) Fourth Verse: Six-Point Barrier
Rank: A
Type: Defense | Supplementary
Range: Short (of user)
Chakra Cost: 30 (-10 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user, after either having their rings already released from the Shakujo for a separate technique, or by releasing them specifically for this technique, will have each ring align itself in a hexagonal formation in front of them. The rings will then release chakra from themselves towards the other rings, creating a thin barrier of condensed chakra with advanced enough shape manipulation that the barrier can withstand up to A-rank attacks. The barrier may be adjusted as the user wishes, gesturing with the staff portion of their Shakujo where the rings, and by extension the barrier, will move, and can even be used to lift the user into the air and hover so long as they wish. The barrier's diameter is wider than the user's height by only a few inches.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu

(Saigo no Uta: Rin'ne) Fifth Verse: Saṃsāra
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Building upon the Shuriken Shadow Clone Jutsu, the user will release the rings from their Shakujo (or manipulate them once already released) towards the opponent. Then the user will strike the ground with the Shakujo's staff and clap the fist holding their Shakujo with their free hand. After making the improvised handseal, the rings will multiply and create a large wall of thousands of rapidly rotating projectile rings flying towards the opponent. After the barrage of rings, all but six will disappear, and those six will fly back to the Shakujo, reconnecting and falling limp afterwards.
Note: ~Can only be taught by the master of Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu
~Can only be used twice per battle
~The user cannot use any Shakujo no Kyū-Setsu techniques for two turns after using this jutsu

Pending, leaving for another checker

Both Approved, well done!

 

[Naruto.]

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(Raiton: Jigoku No Hakobi-Te) - Lightning Release: Bringer Of Hell
Rank: S
Type: Offense
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user gathers lightning in both hands and performs the Ram → Boar handseals. He then slams his hands on the ground, and a lightning pillar emerges from the ground. He shape manipulates the pillar to form a torture chair made up of lightning. Now, the torture chair looks like a normal torture chair, and the spikes in the chair are made up of lightning, basically the chair is completely made up of lightning. He then outstretches his both hands and claps them, due to which a belt of lightning extends from the chair up to short rangeand binds the opponent to drag him onto the chair and instantly electrocutes him, inflicting very heavy damage to his body, damaging the nerves and muscles producing holes in his cell membranes.
Notes:
- Can be only used thrice per battle
- The user cannot use any Raiton move after this in the same turn
- The user needs to maintain focus over the technique for its entirety.
- Can be only taught by Nāruto

Approved
Wot?

 

[The Sach]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

~Resubmitting~ Indeed thanks for that detailed explanation, I made the changes.
I hope I did better this time.

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Summoning technique:Bazz-the swan (Kuchiyose no jutsu-Bazz the swan)​

Type: Summoning Animal
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user after smearing his small amount of blood over his palm (obviously the one they used while signing the contract), perform the Dog->Boar->Monkey->Bird hand seals to summon Bazz, the boss of all Swans. Bazz is somewhat larger than the hawk summoned by Sasuke here.

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He has wide wings, can carry scrolls, and user can ride on him so that Bazz can carry him from one place to another using water source, as Bazz has ability to swim. He is specialized in the water techniques, and can use up to S rank water techniques. He can also carry user along with him in the air.
Since he is physically strong he can carry objects like scrolls along with him and can use his strong wings to deflect kunais or shurikens thrown at him.
Notes:
-Can be summoned only by those who've signed the summoning contract and must be taught by me.
-Can be summoned only once in a battle.
-Can stay for 3 turns once summoned.
-Can perform up to S rank water jutsus and each jutsu counts as the user's jutsu.
-The user cannot perform any S rank water jutsus while Bazz is in play.
-Can talk and interact with the User.
-Can perform elemental combo with user.

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‡ Declined ‡ Yet again to do you a favour, the way you state this jutsu, your summon cannot land on ground, making it useless in most fights and please state how it can carry objects, as as a swan, its webbed feet prevent it gripping any objects properly.

~Resubmitting~
Again, worked on it a bit.

Summoning technique:Bazz-the swan (Kuchiyose no jutsu-Bazz the swan)​

Type: Summoning Animal
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user after smearing his small amount of blood over his palm (obviously the one they used while signing the contract), perform the Dog->Boar->Monkey->Bird hand seals to summon Bazz, the boss of all Swans. Bazz is somewhat larger than the hawk summoned by Sasuke here.

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He has wide wings, can carry scrolls using his mouth, and user can ride on him so that Bazz can carry him from one place to another using water source, as Bazz has ability to swim. He is specialized in the water techniques, and can use up to S rank water techniques. He can also carry user on him in the air, and land in water as well as on ground, depending upon user’s will.
Notes:
-Can be summoned only by those who've signed the summoning contract and must be taught by me.
-Can be summoned only once in a battle.
-Can stay for 3 turns once summoned.
-Can perform up to S rank water jutsus and each jutsu counts as the user's jutsu.
-The user cannot perform any S rank water jutsus while Bazz is in play.
-Can talk and interact with the User.
-Can perform elemental combo with user.

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Changes are made in bold.

Approved

 

[Gutsy]

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Approved Summoning Contract:

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(Khamûl Rei Jingu-juu) – Khamûl The Raging Beast
Type: Summoning
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The brother of Lord Saichi, he stands approximately 16 meters in height as well as his wing span being around 22 meters from edge to edge. Due to him being brother to Lord Saichi he is also a descendant from the Ephippiorhynchus Household. Different from his brother, his beak is still incredible large, yet it is dark as the moonless night, while his body is also black and white with a pattern of black lightning going across his entire body. He is the brother to the lord of the throne, and he is the councilor of Lord Saichi, and as such he is in high regard of the entire stork kingdom. His feathers around the edges of his wings and tail are metal platelet, where the metal has been honed to a fine edge, making them extremely light and sharp. This allows Khamûl to slice his enemies in two or more pieces if he sees fit in close combat, or as he flies by them with great speed. His chest is covered in a powerful chest plate of metal to protect his vital organs when in combat, making him very resilient. Even though he is this big, he is far from as strong as his brother, only being capable of carrying one person at a time. His claws are razor sharp and coated in fine metal giving him the power to slice through solid objects of up to C-rank solid techniques. Due to the protection he is wearing he is damage resistant to C-rank and below techniques, no more any less, as the armor could not become any stronger or it would make him unable to fly. Khamûls eyes are a completely yellow with a faded grey color over it, making it seem as if he is blind. He flies with impressive speed and maneuverability while he has become very skilled in the usage of the lightning element. He has mastered the lightning element to such feats that he can perform lightning based techniques of up to A-rank with little to no effort, yet unable to perform lightning based techniques above that. Khamûl has developed his own unique lightning based ability. His ability is a combination of the lightning element and his clattering speech. Khamûls technique revolves around him gathering a massive amount of lightning based chakra within his beak and then he will create a powerful clattering noise with his beak releasing the lightning. This causes a powerful forward wave of lightning to be shot forward creating a powerful screeching noise that would leave one deaf. This wave leaves anyone caught by it deaf, yet it is not the only effect, it will also when it strikes, fry the person giving him third degree burns across his body while temporarily paralyzing him. The technique developed by Khamûl is a powerful A-rank technique, which he has become famous for among the storks, it reaches into mid-range from him when used. Even if the screeching lightning technique does not hit the intended target the screeching noise may still make the opponent def.
Note:
- Khamûl stays on the field for 4 turns
- Any lightning technique or his own lightning ability counts towards the move count
- He is damage resistant to C-rank and below techniques
- Khamûls lightning technique may only be performed twice per battle
- May only be summoned once per battle
- No other summoning while this summoning is on the field

Declined
Okay, no, sound is not something that is so easily defended against and the ability to render you opponent deaf just like that simply isn't acceptable. Also, need to further define the "ap


Summoning Animal: Stonefish
Scroll Owner: Gutsy Jiraiya
Other Users who have signed the contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to the contract: N/A
Description and Background: The Stonefish are primarily marine creatures, though some species are known to live in rivers. The fish has a very dark, rocky color and shape while also having small needle-like dorsal fin spines which stick up when disturbed or threatened. The name Stonefish, derivs from the stonefish's ability to camouflage itself with a grey and mottled color similar to the color of a stone, sand, earth etc. If the Stonefish is stepped on or threatened the needle-like dorsal fin spines will stick up and protrude the target that are near them. Essentially the Stonefish possess two defense mechanisms, the camouflage ability and its needles on its body. They are not the fastest swimmers or strongest of animals, but they make up for it with their camouflage and strong defense. The Stonefish live deep in the sea, on the bottom of the ocean, near coral reefs, rivers or lakes. The general Stonefish that are seen are no more than the size two human feet. They possess a small amount of teeth which are only meant for them to devour small and animals incapable of defending themselves against its small and none fatal teeth.

Declined
I'm not accepting descriptions of summons that are flat out copy-paste from Wiki or the whatnot. Add a bit more on its abilities when summoned, its main attributes, the sizes it could be summoned up to and how it plays a role in the Ninja World when it is summoned.

 

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(Kensei Dageki) Diversion Strike
Type: Defense/Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: A technique of extreme precision that is both a potent defense and potent attack, Diversion Strike is used to strike in the brief moment an enemy unleashes their attack. It works by aiming at the side of the enemy's weapon so that the user's weapon ever so slightly diverts the path of their blade to narrowly miss its mark. At the same time, this same slash is aimed at the side of the target's torso. Aim the slash too much towards the incoming attack, and its nothing more than a simple deflection. Aim it too much towards the target and their attack will hit the user. There is a narrow moment when both opponents begin their attack that the user must focus on. To coax an attack out of their opponent the user can add a feign to the beginning of this technique by using their off-hand to hold the backside of the blade at the beginning of their slash. This will create a slight delay that can open up the opportunity for Diversion Strike to strike. When the blades are about to touch, the user will add chakra to their blade. This will further divert the incoming attack while making the user's slash extremely deadly. What would have been a normal slash, is now capable of slicing through flesh, bone, steel and other defenses as if they were non-existent.
-Can be used twice per battle.
-Can divert A rank or below attacks.
-Can cut through A rank or below defenses.
-Requires a mastery of Kenjutsu to use
Declined, this is merely a refashioning of Iado. DNR

 

[-Best-]

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Lightning Release : Hidden Tiger Crashing Dragon | Raiton : Hitoshirezu Tora Tsuiraku Doragon
Type: Offensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Mid-Long Range
Chakra: 50
Damage: 90(-10 to the user)
Description:

The Hidden Tiger Crashing Dragon is a hidden and Forbidden technique that can be performed by Lightning experts. To perform the technique the user will first gather massive amount of lightning chakra in both of their arms. Once sufficient amount of chakra is gathered on the hands the user will close the Palms together similar to the snake hand seal but the hand facing the opponent. On doing so, super vibration raiton chakra gets tuned up in the hand of the user releasing a bright pale bluish white coloured lightning(there is nothing special about the colour of the lightning).On releasing the lightning the stress created in the hands of the user is very high such that his hand is left with Dry skin, slight burns and cracks. The Lightning initially takes the form of a Dragon and approaches towards the opponent.The size of the Lightning Dragon Produced is 10 foot in radius. When the user opens the palms up( palm will now be like how Gai keeps his palm while performing the Hirudora), The lightning Dragon will be suddenly split up into three new lightning waves in the form of a Lightning Tiger, and two Lightning mini Dragons. The Lightning Tiger continues towards the opponent straight, while the two mini Dragons that are formed, devours from the straight path and goes towards the Sky. After that they attack the opponent, raging from the top of the opponent.The tiger, and the two mini dragons-Each are of S rank level.The blast radius covered by the Lightning dragon attack is 10 meter radius.

Restriction:
*Can be used only once per battle and should not have used any lightning technique in the previous turn.
*Due to the Damage caused by the lightning to the Hands of the user. the user will be restricted to a maximum of 3 hand seals for the next three turns.
*Hand based taijutsu moves cannot be performed for next three turns.
*No lightning techniques for the next three turns.
*No technique above S rank for the next 2 turns.
*Can only be taught by -Best-
*Lightning user who have lightning as their primary speciality can use lightning techniques after 1 turn.

Declined
Asides from the fact that this is a F-Rank power jutsu, there is nothing in this that defines it as even unique. All you're suggesting is a very strong Lightning Jutsu with concepts that have been done way too many times. Lightning dragons/tigers that do massive damage is not an unique enough jutsu, particularly when it's a F-Ranked, for me to approve it.

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(Senpuku Kuro Ito No Jutsu) – Hiding in Threads Technique
Rank: B
Type: Defensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Long Range
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Whilst in contact with dark threads, Kakuzu will channel his chakra throughout his body to completely and silently merge with the dark threads. Once merged, he can travel through the dark threads and re-emerge from any location on the source of dark threads, making sure to do so silently. The dark threads he merges into and emerges from must be interconnected. This technique can also be used if Kakuzu is physically connected to the source of dark threads via a bodily connection (the dark threads come from his body), making this extremely versatile in use. The speed at which Kakuzu travels through the threads is same as that of his normal running speed and so can be reacted to.

Note: Can only be used four times per battle
Note: Can only be used by Kakuzu
Note: Can only be Taught by -Best-
Note: Dojutsu and Sensory Ninjas can see through this technique

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Approved, nice job. Though, this only works with Dark Threads you are in contact with and large enough to conceal your body.

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Earth Style : Hands of Midas | Doton : Midas No Hando
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short -Long range
Chakra: 40(-15 each turn)
Damage: 80
Description:

The User concentrates his Doton chakra and slams his hand on the Ground. On doing so, like how the earth in the Mobile earth core technique moves, the user can make the earth surrounding the opponent of 10 feet in radius to raise 5 meter up very fastly. While the earth raises, two mighty hands each 8 meter in height and 2 meter in width also raises simultaneously to the left and right of the raised earth core. These hand will then smash the opponent either by crushing the opponent with a slam over their head onto the mobile core or by clapping motion with the opponent in between the Palms of the hands. The User can also use this technique to create a Core to raise them up and two hands to protect them from incoming technique with a small slit between the fingers of the hands to see the opponent.

The main speciality of these hands is that the user can take full control of the hands, like making one hand to smash while the other hand grabs and lifts the opponent. The user has full control over these hands. However these hands are stationary and can only reach Short range(because of the size of the hand) from the place where they are created. Each hand is of A rank is strength however the damage produced by both the hands together equals to a single S rank damage. Each hands separately deal A rank damage.

Restrictions:
*Hands stays at the battlefield for two turns.
*Must have a one turn cooldown before using it again.
*Can only be used twice per battle.
*Can only be taught by -Best-.

Declined, do not resubmit
DNR, been done way too many times.

 

[Summer]

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Osore Ho-Ru Kagami(Horror Hall Of Mirror's)
Type: Offensive
Rank: A Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: this jutsu begins with a single handseal and while the enemy is moving towards you the user takes control of their visual and hearing placing them in a genjutsu. the genjutsu begins with the enemy walking through a hall of mirrors which has reflections of children in them being decapitated and dismembered. the screams are heard throughout the dimmly lit hall. the screams and cutting sounds vibrating throughout the enemies eardrums echoing and driving the man insane, upon coming to the final mirror in the hall the enemy looks and see's themself in the mirror, when all of a sudden a sword is run through them in the mirror image thus binding there psych and movements in the mirror for a few seconds. when the enemy see's this image of a sword being run threw they also see blood dripping down from it and tear's rolling down the enemies eyes. throughout all of this visual and hearing effects of this genjutsu the user is sneaking around behind the enemy in close range and proceeding to run a sword or kunai through the enemy. this jutsu can also be used with silent homicide to increase the effectiveness of getting behind the enemy quickly without causing disruption to the genjutsu and adding a quick easy kill.
restrictions:
:can only be used once per turn and three times per battle.
: no A rank or above in the same turn.
: can only be taught by Rojuro


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Declined, please work on the description, it's killing me.
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Tengumaru/ Long Nosed Goblin
Type: Weapon
Rank: S rank
Range: Short-mid
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
Tengumaru is a large black Kanabo, which is more then twice the height of the weilder. it is covered in bladed protusions which make it resemble a cactus, while the handle itself it the length of the user's arm. it is incredibly strong and sturdy able to withstand and block C rank elemental attacks by batting them out of the air (only Fire, lightning and earth). the bladed protusions have a very unique ability that they can receed into tengumaru when fire chakra is channeled to it and while that happens the user can channel fire chakra to the inside of tengumaru burning a chilli powder coating inside the weapon which in turn creates a chilli smoke screen which burns a enemies lungs and eye's. the custom smoke can only be utlized by a smoke user for other attacking jutsu's . knowing that smoke user's use masks they are not affected by the lethal smoke of this chilli smoke.
the hilt of tengumaru has a special chakra cloth wrapped around it thus allowing the effect of channeling fire chakra to the inside of tengumaru to release chilli smoke from the protusion holes. tengumaru has a summoning formula on underneath the cloth chakra wrapping for immediate retrieval during battle and or when not using tengumaru it can be summoned to the battle.
although the size of tengumaru is immense the actual weight is not affecting the wielder's speed or strength of fatigue during batle as the user must train with tengumaru for 10 years before the weight of tengumaru seem's non existent. during a battle however the user of tengumaru while not holding it can recieve a one rank speed boost if not using tengumaru as the shear weight has been discarded breifly, however this can only be done once per battle and after the one use the user's muscles slowly reform back to it's usual speed and strength.

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restrictions
: chilli smoke screen can only be used 4 times during battle.
: can only use summon effect 3 times per battle.
: can only be wielded by a smoke user.
: smoke will cause blindness for one turn if not countered properly.
: can only be taught by rojuro.

☼ Declined - Alright, first of all this thing is just way too big. There's no way you could reasonably wield it without the use of some sort of strength enhancing ability or a Sakura/Tsunade bio. The size needs to be reduced, so I'm fine with using the image to show what it looks like, but you need to make it clear in the description its not nearly that big. What's the 80 dmg for? For just hitting someone? If so, that's a no no. It should just be N/A. The batting away elements bit, I'm okay with the concept, but I don't see why it would only work with those elements. If anything I would think lightning would be the sole element it wouldn't work with because it would electrify the weapon. It also needs some sort of usage restriction, a certain number or times and what not. For the smoke screen, how far does the smoke screen reach from the weapon? What rank is the smoke screen? How many turns does the chili powder burn for before its all used up? The smoke isn't lethal, as lethal implies it will kill someone. Special chakra cloth wrapping seems random and unimportant, not necessary. Remove the speed boost bit since we're downsizing it. You don't have fuuin so the sealing bit is a no go, remove it. You'll have to just carry it around with you.

As for the chili powder smoke itself, you need to clarify what it does a bit more. If someone gets caught in it and it gets in their eyes/lungs, what happens? Once they get out, what affects linger? How long do they linger? ☼

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kuchiyose jigoku yoroi [Summoning jutsu Hell's armor]
Type: supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra: 50 (50) per turn active.
Damage: 90 (-25) user
Description: the user of this technique gains the knowledge of hell's strongest deciple while using this form. the user must perform the handsigns for a summoning jutsu and at the end handsign they must cut off there left hand to sacrifice it too the demons of hell in exchange for summoning hell's strongest weapon. although your hand has been cut off it is replaced with the sword of the underworld to be embedded where yourvhand was. the user upon finishing the summoning and sacrifice will be don'd in a very unique armor and blade set which has now risen to the world of the living. (items of armor and blade shown in spoiler video) the shinobi wearing this armor will have the power of hell's guardians at there control to bring forth the judgement of hell to there enemy. the armor of bones and the blade of tarturaus will both glow radiating hells light a form of energy only used by hell's guardians the Kushanāda ( 3 golden glowing doton warriors 6 feet tall). the powers of this armor from hell are that they let the wearer walk through one solid construct ie only earth, while swinging the blade can control Golden colored doton chains from the underworld which rise up from the ground ensaring and or containing the battlefield in an array of chains. the chains themselves can drag an enemy down to hell pulling them into the ground, The armor itself has the ability to block up to D rank Elemental jutsu's. the downside of this armour is that it is using twice the chakra as normal being a very draining and taxing armour to use, kinda like the sages tools while it burns your body.

restrictions:
armour can only be summoned once per battle.
Armour can only stay active for four turns
Chain ability can only be used twice per battle.
the light of the armor itself controls the doton guardians with the guidance of the wearer.
while wearing the armor an additional handsign will utilize the chains.


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☼ Declined - DNR ☼

 

[Littlefinger.]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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Summoning Animal: Starfishes/Sea Stars
Scroll Owner: Naizen
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A

Starfishes originate from a secret coral reef called Las Marianas. It lies in the deepest part of the world's oceans; The Mariana Trench in the arc of the Mariana Islands.

Starfish or sea stars are echinoderms belonging to the class Asteroidea. There are more than 1800 different species of sea star. Most sea stars are predators. Although starfish are invertebrates, they do have a kind of skeleton. The bodies of starfish are composed of calcium carbonate plates, known as 'ossicles'. These form the endoskeleton, which takes on a variety of forms such as spines and granules. Most starfish have five arms, called rays that come out from a center circle (disk). If a starfish has more than five rays, it will often have rays in multiples of five; there could be 10, 15, 20, or even 30 rays on one starfish. The aboral or upper surface may be smooth, granular or spiny, and is covered with overlapping plates.
Starfish have tube feet operated by a hydraulic system and a mouth at the centre of the oral or lower surface. Starfish, like many sea creatures, are able to regenerate (grow back) parts of their bodies. Starfish are better at regeneration than most other creatures. Not only can a new ray grow when a ray is cut/torn off, but if the affected ray has even a small piece of the central disk still attached, a whole new starfish can grow from the one ray.

Las Marianas Star Toxins: Starfishes contain a very toxic poison known as Saponins. When stung/bitten, the saponins is lost into the wound, thus the target are plagued by a sharp stinging pain, persistent bleeding due to the haemolytic effect of saponins, nausea, tissue swelling, numbness and paralysis. Large dose of saponins, are lethal to humans. Saponins occur throughout the life-cycle of the starfish. Thus there are saponins similar to those in the adult tissues in the larvae and juvenile stars.
Seastars may possess at least an eye on every one of their arms - so a 5-armed starfish has 5 eyes, a 40-armed starfish has 40 and so on.

Sea stars vary in sizes and shapes and thus by harnessing their chakra a ninja who has signed this contract will be able to summon starfishes as little as the tip of their finger to those large enough to go head-to-head with the giant frogs of Myobozukan.
This poison from sea stars may be injected into a target's body via their spines(extendable and retractable), tube feet, mouth or other weapons which will be included in the respective summoning jutsu. Versatility of this toxin will be made manifest in subsequent submissions of techniques known as Star Arts.

The contract holder or signer of the starfish summoning contract is able to summon sea stars from Las Marianas. The summoner, using different amounts of chakra may summon starfishes of varying sizes, abilities and weapons. Larvae and Juveniles may be summoned if the summoner at their own will uses a minimized amount of chakra or if due to circumstances beyond their control the summoning is unsuccessful. Larvae and Juvenile Stars possess chakra and poisons(although in quantities smaller than a sea star) individually and may or may not utilize the Star arts.
Larvae takes 2 turns to develop into a species of starfish while Juvenile Stars take 1 turn. Sea stars require a water source to be successfully summoned, or may bring a water source with them when summoned. Since they originate from the deepest part of the oceans of the world [6,000 m (20,000 ft) below the surface], starfishes/sea stars, being very conversant with water are thus able to sense water passively.

~I would like to claim ownership of all species of starfish, the Asteroidea Class and the Asterozoa Subphylum at large.~

Declined
Needs a water source when summoned? Brings a water source when summoned? Very confused. One or the other.
And at the other bolded. You already have regeneration on your Starfish, and I'll accept the nature of the toxin, but being able to summon Starfish as small as your fingertips that has the same capability - hell no.

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Summoning Animal: Starfishes/Sea Stars
Scroll Owner: Littlefinger.
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A

Starfishes originate from a secret coral reef called Las Marianas. It lies in the deepest part of the world's oceans; The Mariana Trench in the arc of the Mariana Islands.

Starfish or sea stars are echinoderms belonging to the class Asteroidea. There are more than 1800 different species of sea star. Most sea stars are predators. Although starfish are invertebrates, they do have a kind of skeleton. The bodies of starfish are composed of calcium carbonate plates, known as 'ossicles'. These form the endoskeleton, which takes on a variety of forms such as spines and granules. Most starfish have five arms, called rays that come out from a center circle (disk). If a starfish has more than five rays, it will often have rays in multiples of five; there could be 10, 15, 20, or even 30 rays on one starfish. The aboral or upper surface may be smooth, granular or spiny, and is covered with overlapping plates.
Starfish have tube feet operated by a hydraulic system and a mouth at the centre of the oral or lower surface. Starfish, like many sea creatures, are able to regenerate (grow back) parts of their bodies. Starfish are better at regeneration than most other creatures. Not only can a new ray grow when a ray is cut/torn off, but if the affected ray has even a small piece of the central disk still attached, a whole new starfish can grow from the one ray.

Las Marianas Star Toxins: Starfishes contain a very toxic poison known as Saponins. When stung/bitten, the saponins is lost into the wound, thus the target are plagued by a sharp stinging pain, persistent bleeding due to the haemolytic effect of saponins, nausea, tissue swelling, numbness and paralysis. Large dose of saponins, are lethal to humans. Saponins occur throughout the life-cycle of the starfish. Thus there are saponins similar to those in the adult tissues in the larvae and juvenile stars.
Seastars may possess at least an eye on every one of their arms - so a 5-armed starfish has 5 eyes, a 40-armed starfish has 40 and so on.

Sea stars vary in sizes and shapes and thus by harnessing their chakra a ninja who has signed this contract will be able to summon starfishes as little as the tip of their finger (although these tiny ones possess chakra, they are unable to use Star Arts and do not share most of the Sea Star abilities like regeneration and secretion of Saponin toxins) to those large enough to go head-to-head with the giant frogs of Myobozukan.
This poison from sea stars may be injected into a target's body via their spines(extendable and retractable), tube feet, mouth or other weapons which will be included in the respective summoning jutsu. Versatility of this toxin will be made manifest in subsequent submissions of techniques known as Star Arts.

The contract holder or signer of the starfish summoning contract is able to summon sea stars from Las Marianas. The summoner, using different amounts of chakra may summon starfishes of varying sizes, abilities and weapons. Larvae and Juveniles may be summoned if the summoner at their own will uses a minimized amount of chakra or if due to circumstances beyond their control the summoning is unsuccessful. Larvae and Juvenile Stars possess chakra but do not possess saponin toxins until they are fully grown. In this growth stage, however, they may or may not utilize the Star arts.
Larvae takes 2 turns to develop into a species of starfish while Juvenile Stars take 1 turn. Sea stars do not require a water source to be summoned, however they can survive/live in water. Since they originate from the deepest part of the oceans of the world [6,000 m (20,000 ft) below the surface], starfishes/sea stars, being very conversant with water are thus able to sense water passively.

~I would like to claim ownership of all species of starfish, the Asteroidea Class and the Asterozoa Subphylum at large.~

Approved

Fuuton/Doton: Kūkan-tekina ōbu | Wind Release/Earth Release: Spatial Orb
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user forms 2 handseals and activates a fast spinning orb of wind around the target(s) that both traps them and slashes them all over ferociously. Then the user will slam their hand on the ground, forcing a dense forest of earthen spikes out of the ground to impale the target(s) within the orb. The size of the orb of wind varies according to the number of targets within it thus determining the range the earthen spikes will cover. This simply means that if the orb of wind covers an 8m diameter, then the earthen spikes will only cover that 8m diameter.
#Usable thrice per battle.
#No Wind&Earth techniques in the same turn, and no Wind&Earth techniques above S rank in the next.
#Can only be taught by Littlefinger.

Declined, do not resubmit
This is literally doable with canon techniques and bring nothing unique to the table.

Fuuton: Ransettoshotto | Wind Release: Lancet Shot
Type: Defensive | Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short (on creation), Mid (on propulsion)
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This is a technique that allows for quick defense and a follow up counter-attack or just a straightforward attack. With this technique, the user manipulates wind around them via chakra, forming it into an arch much like that of a lancet. This arch although normally created to match the size of the user, can be expanded to cover at most two humans standing side by side. Since it is shaped like the arch of a lancet, it has a pointed edge in front which makes it lethal when it collides with a target. It can be created to face any direction but is always opened at the tail end, allowing for quick escape if needed. The user, upon its creation may propel it towards a target, using its shape (which is like a bullet) as an advantage. Although, it moves at a very fast pace, it can only move in a linear path. However, if combined with an a ideal fire technique it proves to be a fearsome and indeed speedy combo.
#Usable 4 times per battle.
#No other Wind technique above S rank in the same turn.
#Teachable by Littlefinger.

Approved
What a weird idea. LOL.