[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[Zaxelzero]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Sky Sand Barrage- (Tenku-Suna Renda)
Type: Attack
Rank:S
Range:Med-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage:100
Description: The user transmits a large amount of chakra into the ground, forming a mass amount of dense sand. Then they form the sand into multiple giant orbs and send them into the sky. Once they have reached their peak the orbs begin to rain down upon the target. As the orbs land, they burst. Causing large amounts of sand to spread around the target that slashes at the opponents skin leaving large lacerations across their body. This can be used after Sky Sand Protective Wall, for a fast paced surprise Aeriel attack.

Note:Can only be used/taught by Zaxelzero1

~Declined~ How many orbs, where are the restrictions, and please follow the official template for S-rank techniques.

Sensor Sand Mist [ Sensa-Suna Misuto]
Type:Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short-Med
Chakra Cost: 40 (10 to maintain each turn after) (20 to reform)
Damage:N/A
Description: The user closes his eyes and transmits his chakra into the sand around him. He then raises the sand into the air, forming a dense cloud. Using his chakra within the cloud the user can sense anything within it, be it object or person. The Cloud is so thick that it blocks any vision. If the Mist is attacked by any jutsu other then Wind or Water it can be reformed for 20 Chakra points (Excluding S-ranks of course)

Note: Requires the user to first use Sensor Sand Technique
Note: Sand is weighed down when attacked with water, sand is dispersed too widely with wind so it must be remade all together
Note:Can only be trained by Zaxelzero1
Note:Can only be used by Zaxelzero1

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

Razor Flame Barrage- [Reza-Kaen Danmaku]
Type:Offensive [Katon-Fuuton Combination]
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage:50
Description: By molding his Fuuton and Katon chakra's the User creates 2 long and thin strips of flame. Using the Destructive force of the Fire and Sharpness of the Wind, the strips are fast moving razor blades. The Razors fire from each of the users hands and move in an arc to their target.

Note: These attacks can be spread apart as far as 30 feet or be molded together into one fast moving blade.
Note: When combined the razor moves much faster and can reach it's target in a matter of seconds
Note: The farther the separation of the attacks the longer the attack takes to reach it's target.
Note: Counts as two moves.
Note:Can only be taught by Zaxelzero1

Up for any editing you wish to offer xd

~Approved~ Made it count as two moves since you're molding two chakras for this one.

 

[Piccolosan]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Katon: Majin Faia) - Fire Style: Demon Fire
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary
Range: Self-affected
Chakra cost: 40 (+10 each turn.)
Damage points: N/A (+20 fire.)
Description: The user will via nature manipulation transform all his chakras into one of the basic five elements, Fire Release. By doing so, he will only have fire chakra running through his entire chakra system and his entire body, this will forcefully heat his body up to an extreme level where the user most likely becomes resistent to most fire attacks, as they simply do not burn him, making him resitent up to A-rank fire attacks. The heat from the user will aswell numb the user's nerves in his entire body, which will result that he won't even flinch if he got stabbed but simply continue on his movements. Also due the fact that the fire chakra the heart will pump faster, the brain work faster, which will result in him increasing his own speed (3rd gates speed), reaction time, and strength. However, not enough with that, the user will gain extra powers in the fire element, increasing it with one rank. However not only good things comes with power, this jutsu also is having it's downs. As the user will only be capable of using fire release only when this technique is activated, as he simply transformed all his chakras into fire. The user cannot stay in this mode in eternity, this state is limited to four turns, whereafter the user will be completly drained from chakra, leaving him only 1% of his chakra back. Because of so much strain to the body after 3 turns the user will go back to normal speed, thus the user still have one turn left with only fire jutsu to finish the battle. Once activated, a M appears on the user's forehead.
~Lasts four turns.
~User can only use fire when activated
~After four turns, the User automatically loses the fight if not won by that time.
~Must master fire and water elements to use this
~Can only be USED by Piccolosan

I added a restriction to the speed of this jutsu, I honestly don't know what else to restrict without actually changing this jutsu.

~Declined~ You don't get it, I never said to restrict it more, I said to take away abilities. This whole jutsu is a rip off of many already existing jutsu and you combined them together. If it isn't drastically different in your resubmission, I will decline it for good. Just a hint; don't mention the gates, don't make yourself resistant to fire (up to A-rank at least), the whole idea of turning all your chakra to fire was already done too.

(Katon: Majin Faia) - Fire Style: Demon Fire
Rank: S-Rank
Type: Supplementary
Range: Self-affected
Chakra cost: 40 (+10 each turn.)
Damage points: N/A (+20 fire.)
Description: The user will via nature manipulation transform all his chakras into one of the basic five elements, Fire Release. By doing so, he will only have fire chakra running through his entire chakra system and his entire body, this will forcefully heat his body up to an extreme level where the user most likely becomes resistent to most fire attacks, as they simply do not burn him, making him resitent up to C-rank fire attacks. The heat from the user will aswell numb the user's nerves in his entire body, which will result that he won't even flinch if he got stabbed but simply continue on his movements. Also due the fact that the fire chakra the heart will pump faster, the brain work faster, which will result in him increasing his own speed (Multiplies the speed by 3), reaction time, and strength. The user will gain extra powers in the fire element, increasing it with one rank (Only up to S rank, meaning will not increase rank to Forbidden). However not only good things comes with power, this jutsu also is having it's downs. As the user will only be capable of using fire release only when this technique is activated, as so much chakra is used for fire. The user cannot stay in this mode in eternity, this state is limited to four turns, whereafter the user will be completly drained of fire chakra. Because of so much strain to the body after 3 turns the user will go back to normal speed, thus the user still have one turn left with only fire jutsu to finish the battle. Once activated, a M appears on the user's forehead.
~Lasts four turns.
~User can only use fire when activated
~After four turns, the user can not use fire jutsu for remainder of battle
~After this jutsu is done, user will lose one rank in speed for two turns
~Must master fire and water elements to use this
~Can only be USED by Piccolosan

I lowered it in rank, took away any mention to gates, added some restrictions, took away that all chakra turns to fire.

~Declined do not resubmit~ As I said the first time, it was too similar to an existing technique and you didn't change the core of it. Go check Kagutsuchi's customs, you'll see what I meant.

(Suna: soriddo suna) Sand style: Solid Sand
Rank: A
Type: Defensive, Supplementary
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user sends out great deal of chakra unto the sand, with this extra chakra the sand will solidify and dense up. If the sand is on the ground then no earth jutsu can be made that is lower rank. This can also be used as a supplementary to other sand jutsu. User can use this jutsu on a defensive sand jutsu and increase its rank by one(Only up to S rank, this doesn't make Forbidden rank jutsu). For example if user makes shield and then this jutsu the shield will increase by one rank. Also user can isolate area of sand to solidify.
~Can only be used three times per battle
~Must be used with Sand bios only
~Must master earth and sand
~Must be taught by Piccolosan to use

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

(Katon: katto tama) Fire style: Cutting Sphere
Rank: S
Type: Offense, Defense
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user will gather in katon chakra through out his body, then very quickly the user will spin on one foot. As the user spins in place he will push his chakra out and create a sphere of fire. The sphere is not a solid sphere of fire rather it is lined in fire, this allows the user to see out. The fire almost creates a cutting effect because its fine, thin, lines of condensed fire chakra.
~Can only be used three times
~If water is used (S or A rank) this will cause steam that will damage the user
~Requires no handseals but does require the user to spin
~Can only be taught by Piccolosan

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

 

[~Depp~]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Yonseijinyajuu)- Four Saint Beasts
Type: Puppets
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (If summoned)
Damage Points: n/a
Description: The Four Saint Beasts are puppets made by, The Mad Hatter. The Mad Hatter once said after making them "If used by the right puppet master, they coud take down a forest in a single night." Each of the four puppets have their own abilities, weapons, and appearence to match them, they all are able to detach most of their body parts from one another, with no visable joints to the opponent.

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~~ First and Slowest but most durable of the puppets is, Genbu the Stone Beast, he is made from hardened wood wrapped in iron, covering every part of his body, standing 7ft, with a large shell covering his whole back like a tortois, that is able to pop open from his tail and stand like its connected to his neck; his arms positioned in a knuckle walk position like an ape; clawed toes like a dinosaur; the segmented tail of a snake and the spiked; tusked primitive face of an ogre with large white eyes with small black pupils, with a bold black kanji on his forehead standing for power 力.

~ Shell sheild on his back, that will pop open from his tail then stand as if its attached to his neck.
~ Two berrals in his throut, the first releases blasts of Fire, while the other release shells of senbon that once fired from his throut will release the senbon just like a buck shot.
~ Body is able to release thick triangle sword blades from around his shells edge, the blades can be used my the puppeteer, can be weilded just like swords.​

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~~ Second is the most muscluer looking puppet and hairiest, Byakko the White Toger, Byakko is made of solid metal with hidden conpartments hidden under his fur like cover, standing just under Genbu, he takes the appearance of a large humanoid tiger with a mane-like sea green hair that flows down his back with light bluish fur with grey stripes on his arms, in both of his shoulders are hidden poles with 5 blades attached to the pole that spin able to cut boulders in half, also another set in his knees, with his two bottom canine teeth large enough to reach up his cheeks, in Byakko's throut is a hose that release blasts of water from it, he has a preloaded shuriken in his mouth, he is able to shoot them from his mouth, around the hose in his throut. He has yellow eyes with red pupils and a kanji symbol for beast on his forehead 獣. He wears a toga and what appear to be leg warmers in animal skins of the leopard, and has a red sash as a belt.

~ 5 bladed poles installed in his shoulders and knees.
~ Water hose in his throut.
~ Shuriken shooter in his throut.
~ Large War hammer on his back.​

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~~ The Third and most human looking besides the greenish blue skin is Seiryu the Blue Dragon, Tall and slim, Seiryu is the only normal sized one of them all, while possessing pale green skin and black facial hair hiding holes in his head which will release wires from them able to perice through rocks and trees with ease. His blue martial arts robe is tied at the waist by a large white strap and features the image of a blue dragon wrapping around his shoulder. To match his robe, Seiryu wears a dark, blue cap covering just the top part of a symbol on his forehead for ice 氷, and on his feet he wears a simple pair of black shoes, from Seiryu's left arm has a chakra sheild installed in it, while in his right arm he has a powerful vaccum hose installed in his palm that is able to blow and suck.

~ Wires in his head, that can be freely controlled by the puppeteer.
~ Left arm chakra sheild of A-rank.
~ Right hand has a powerful vaccum hose that can blow and suck.
~ Dragon sword on the left side of his waist.​

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~~ Last and smallist of the Four Saint Beasts, Suzaku Ho-oh, Suzaku is made of a milable steel, has lightning chakra that the user injects into Suzaku at the begining of the puppets useage, giving suzaku an electical charge during battle. Has long orange hair parted down the middle, with two red strands that are actually his antennae, which are able to launch at the opponent with a cord attached to them, having full control over the antena the puppeteer will use them to attack the opponent at free will, between the antennae is a kanji symbol for speed 速. Suzaku also has polls that will extened from his palms to the ground, will senbon loaded in each of his fingers that are able to be thrown by Suzaku waving his arm in the direction.

~ Launchable antennae, attached by cords.
~ Polls in his palms. (just a poll that comes out of his palm able to be used as a sword.)
~ Senbon loaded in his fingers.
~ Dual blades on his back.​

~ Only Two of the Four Saint Beasts can be used in one turn.
~ Each of the puppets Elemental installments can be used, but count as a jutsu for the puppeteer, with a B-rank useage.


~All Declined~ I've already warned people about this -___-. The limit is 3 jutsu per week, I will let anyone submit jutsu that have multiple summons or multiple jutsus included in them. If you want to submit all those beats, you'll get them approved individually and then submit the jutsu to summon them all at once. This is your only warning, next time I'm banning you from this thread for a week.

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~~ Second is the most muscluer looking puppet and hairiest, Byakko the White Toger, Byakko is made of solid metal with hidden conpartments hidden under his fur like cover, standing just under Genbu, he takes the appearance of a large humanoid tiger with a mane-like sea green hair that flows down his back with light bluish fur with grey stripes on his arms, in both of his shoulders are hidden poles with 5 blades attached to the pole that spin able to cut boulders in half, also another set in his knees, with his two bottom canine teeth large enough to reach up his cheeks, in Byakko's throut is a hose that release blasts of water from it, he has a preloaded shuriken in his mouth, he is able to shoot them from his mouth, around the hose in his throut. He has yellow eyes with red pupils and a kanji symbol for beast on his forehead 獣. He wears a toga and what appear to be leg warmers in animal skins of the leopard, and has a red sash as a belt.

~ 5 bladed poles installed in his shoulders and knees.
~ Water hose in his throut.
~ Shuriken shooter in his throut.
~ Large War hammer on his back.​

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~~ The Third and most human looking besides the greenish blue skin is Seiryu the Blue Dragon, Tall and slim, Seiryu is the only normal sized one of them all, while possessing pale green skin and black facial hair hiding holes in his head which will release wires from them able to perice through rocks and trees with ease. His blue martial arts robe is tied at the waist by a large white strap and features the image of a blue dragon wrapping around his shoulder. To match his robe, Seiryu wears a dark, blue cap covering just the top part of a symbol on his forehead for ice 氷, and on his feet he wears a simple pair of black shoes, from Seiryu's left arm has a chakra sheild installed in it, while in his right arm he has a powerful vaccum hose installed in his palm that is able to blow and suck.

~ Wires in his head, that can be freely controlled by the puppeteer.
~ Left arm chakra sheild of A-rank.
~ Right hand has a powerful vaccum hose that can blow and suck.
~ Dragon sword on the left side of his waist.​

~Both Declined~ Restrictions?

(Heikiko)- Box of Weapons
Type: Weapon
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (each summoning)
Damage Points: n/a
Description: Hakoheiki is a box with the dementions of 1 yd length; 1ft 5in width; and a depth of 1ft (Looks much like a small coffin covered in summoning seals.), with straps on it to be worn by the user like a backpack, the box part of it is covered with summoning seals for weapons. The box its self is the storage for the weapons, which once one of the seals is touched the box will release some of the weapons or a single weapon even part of a weapons from the box at the opponent. All of the seals covering Heikiko's box will except only the person who sealed the seals on the boxes chakra frqency. The user having placed every seal himself is the only person capable of using Heikiko without any backfireing of the sort on the user.

Complete list of weapons in Heikiko: kunai, shuriken, daggers, short swords, senbon, throwing axes, chains, dragon tales, machetes, chakram, arrows, large shuriken, windmill shuriken, nails, spears, sheilds, battle axes, two claymore swords.

For this Heikiko custom weapon im trying realy hard to get this one approved, if u could maybe tell me what needs to be changed, to get it approved id be very gratefull.

~Approved~

 

[Mugiwara no Luffy]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Summoning Animal: Spiders
Scroll Owner: Bolt
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A

You get spiders auto if you make a Kidomaro bio (think that's the name)

 

[Proteus]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Edit or add part for approval.

(Suna Kasui) - Sand Spikes
Rank: A
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: By slamming hands on earth, gaara creates numerous sand spikes upto 2m high anywhere in battlefield.
Note: ~Can only be used 4 times per battle.

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

(Suna Tsubasa) - Wings of Sand
Type: Defense/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Gaara creates 2 wings of sand that are implanted to his back, each wing is of 2m in length and can protect him from almost any physical attack and wind jutsu upto A-rank. Due to the large size of wings, he can fly very fast and upto that height, that for other birds it is almost impossible to reach.

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

(Suna Henshin) - Sand Transformation
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The gaara can freely transform his body into sand. This form allows him to avoid taking direct damage from many physical attacks but can not attack while in this form.
Note: ~If gaara is transformed in desert or something like that, it would be alomost impossible for the opponent to find him, as gaara will be mixed will sand.

~Declined do not resubmit~ No such technique shall be approved.

 

[Swizzik]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Raiton: Fuma Shuriken raikou hitomane)-Lightning style: Wind Demon shuriken lightning imitation
Type:Attack
Rank:S
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:User raises is hand straight forward into the air and gathers lightning chakra in that hand. The user then molds it in the shape of a Fuma Shuriken, which is the thrown at the target. It can be controlled by the user by continually streaming of lightning chakra(similar to Lightning Release: Lightning Beast Running Technique). Once it hits its target it will explode causing a massive amount of lightning chakra to be released in the area. If being controlled by the user through streaming of chakra the explosion can be triggered at anytime.

~Restrictions~
-No lightning jutsu can be used for the next three turns
-while streaming chakra no jutsu requiring handseals may be used
-Only Swizzik and those he gives permission to may use this jutsu-

~Declined do not resubmit~ No variation of the rasenshuriken will be accepted (same goes for rasengan).

 

[Professor Sarutobi]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Raiton:Keika)- Lightning Release: Firefly Light
Rank:A
Type:Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user focuses lightning chakra in both their palms then holds their hands out and releases the chakra as 20 condensed balls of lightning that spread out around the field and as soon as they come in contact with a person besides the user they burst, paralyzing the target for 1 turn.
-Balls float around for 2 turns before losing shape and harmlessly dispersing.
-Can't be used for 2 turns afterwards.
-Can only be used 3 times per battle.
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

||Approved||

(Kami-e)-Paper Drawing
Rank:B
Type: Defence
Range:Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user makes his body go limp and using a practiced form of dodging is able to avoid many attacks while looking like their body is floating like a piece of paper.
-Can't avoid A rank or above taijutsu.
-Can't be used for 2 turns afterwards.
-Can only be used 3 times per battle.
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

||Declined|| Please specify "many attacks." Does this apply to Ninjutsu as well or only Taijutsu?

(Fuuton: Rankyaku)- Wind Release: Storm Leg
Rank:A
Type: Attack
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user focuses wind chakra into one leg and releases a kick at very high speeds and strength, sending out a sharp compressed air blade that can slice objects and greatly damage a human body.
-Can only be used by taijutsu specalists and masters.
-Can only use 3 times per battle.
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

||Approved||

(Kami-e)-Paper Drawing
Rank:B
Type: Defence
Range:Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user makes his body go limp and using a practiced form of dodging is able to avoid many taijutsu attacks while looking like their body is floating like a piece of paper.
-Can't avoid A rank or above taijutsu.
-Can't be used for 2 turns afterwards.
-Can only be used 3 times per battle.
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

~Declined~ This is just too cheap to be accepted. Taijutsu requires fineness and a great deal of visualization in order to see the movement of your opponent in a fight. I won't allow a jutsu that simply evades attack without any description.

(Suiton:Koudai Bodi no Jutsu) - Water Release: Huge Body Technique
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A (+10 to taijutsu damage)
Description: Using the Hydrification Technique, the user merges with a large body of water and spreads their chakra out to take control of all of it then forms it to replicate a huge version of the user, equal to the size of Choza using his Multi-size Technique.
-Can't use water techniques above A rank while this jutsu is active
-Can only be used 3 times per battle
-Only lasts for 1 turns.
-Can only be used by members of the Hozuki Clan.

(feel free to change any of the restrictions to approve)

~Approved~ Made it 1 turn.

 

[evilshade]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

seirei gouryuu no-jutsu (spirit merge no-jutsu)
suplementary forbidden jutsu
self and partner(s)/ summoned beast
25 chakra from each person (both need to do the jutsu at the same time).
This jutsu basically just comnines the two users spirits makeing them act and think as one they can also make it temporary, permenat, or long lasting. When they do this they can use each others jutsu's.

Note* only prople taught by Evilshade can do this jutsu. Note* the people need to be very close either related or best friends.
Note* only 3 people at a time can be connected by this justsu.

~Declined~ User proper template and submit jutsus that are within your rank. Check the first page of this thread.

 

[~Rihan~]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kenjustu:tsuchi ): Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū Style- Doryūsen
Type:Attack
Rank:A
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user sticks there sword into the ground then pulls it out with alot of force sending earthen debris at said opponent with knockout force.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per match.


~Approved~ Added a restriction.

(Kenjustu:dageki ): Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū Style- Kuzuryūsen
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: A dashing attack that uses (fast peed) to simultaneously strike all nine vital spots on the foe's body. It is undodgeable and nearly unblockable, and is taught as a prerequisite for the succession technique.
- Can only be used once per battle
- The Nine Vital spot are the Head,arms,legs,stomach,Chest,neck.
- User need to add chakra to there feet to dash at fast speeds towards the enemy
-can be blocked if you see it coming
-

~Declined~ Undodgeable and unblockable? Never use those word in a jutsu, it's an automatic decline.

(Kenjustu:tsuin ): Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū Battōjutsu Style- Sōryūsen
Type: Attack
Rank: D
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: Sōryūsen is the first of Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū's two-step Battōjutsu moves. After the first strike with the quickened sword, the user wields the empty sheath along the same path as a blunt weapon. After the sword strike lands, the sheath strike delivers a pulverizing blow capable of crushing bone and shattering wood, but if the sword strike misses, the sheath strike acts as powerful insurance, preventing an opponent's attack and delivering a crushing blow when it's least expected.

~Declined~ Template is wrong. Check the appropriate damages for a D-rank.

sorry izuna but need to revoke the approved technique as caliburn has made all the rourni kenshin techniques

 

[LolaxXx]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Hair release: Hair Control- Hea seichuu
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range:short
Chakra Cost: 30
Description: By using their chakra, the user forms their hair into the what looks like a pair of arms with hands. Can be used just as any would use their hands for which includes, picking up things, throwing, grabbing, pushing.

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

Hair Release: Electric Hair- erekutorikku hea
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:60
Description: The user channels a massive amount of their lighting chakra into each and every strand of their hair, which electrocutes any who touches it, other than the user, causing severe burn and internal bleeding.
*If the user is wet then they too will be electrocuted.
*If hair is wet, it amplifies the attack.
*If hair is removed, the effects of the lighting chakra still remain inside the strands, although would only just serve to shock.

~Declined~ Take out the internal bleeding and use the proper template for B-rank. The damages are wrong.

Hair Release: Hair link- Hea heisetsu
Type: Supplementry
Rank: C
Range:short-mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Desription: As the users hair strand is detached from the body, the user is able to connect a string of chakra to it. In this case, the user can then continue to use those strands of hair as if it were still connected. The user can also channel other chakra types into the strands using the chakra string.

~Declined~ Only puppeteers may use chakra strings efficiently.

 

[Ushiro]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Sogeki no Geijutsu: Jūden no Dangan)- Sniper Art: Bullet Circuit
Type: Attack
Rank: A-S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 with clones)
Damage: 60 (+20 with clones)
Description: Several arrows surging with lightning energy are shot from the user's bow at high speed to accurately strike multiple targets. They each follow their own designated path and are seen as bright streaks of light, making them very difficult for non-doujutsu users to trace. Metal wires may be attached to and made more durable by the arrows' lightning so they could paralyze targets ensnared by them. When performed in collaboration with shadow clones, many additional arrows can be shot for a stronger attack.
-Usable 3 times per battle
-No S-rank or higher lightning techniques next turn
-Must have a bow

~Declined~ They should be easy to track if they're bright, take out the part about Doujutsu users having it easy and hard for non-Doujutsus. How many arrows can you shoot with this technique. Be precise in your resubmission.

 

[DopeyDwarf]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Myoujou Fuhen Waikyoku) – Summoning Technique: Lucifer's Everlasting Torment
Type: Supplmentary/Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage cost: N/A
Description: The user unfolds a scroll in front of him and quickly bites his thumb and wipes blood over a seal on the scroll - this allows the user to summon shiny metal chains (made of Platinum) to shoot/burst out from the ground below an opponent and wrap around him, at high speed, constricting/restricting his movement (e.g. handseals). These chains can not hurt the opponent (i.e. it doesnt have spikes that protrude from it) but are merely used to immobilize him - the chains are light-weight yet relatively strong and is resistant to lightning jutsus.
Note: Can only be summoned twice per battle.
Created by DopeyDwarf

~Pending~ This is touchy...it falls under the CE section IMO. Get Caliburn or Nexus's opinion on this, VM me with their responses and I'll re-check this one.

(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Myoujou Fuhen Waikyoku) – Summoning Technique: Lucifer's Everlasting Torment
Type: Supplmentary/Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage cost: N/A
Description: The user unfolds a scroll in front of him and quickly bites his thumb and wipes blood over a seal on the scroll - this allows the user to summon shiny metal chains to shoot/burst out from the ground below an opponent and wrap around him, at high speed, constricting/restricting his movement (e.g. handseals). These chains can not hurt the opponent (i.e. it doesnt have spikes that protrude from it) but are merely used to immobilize him - the chains are light-weight yet relatively strong and is resistant to lightning jutsus.
Note: Can only be summoned twice per battle.
Created by DopeyDwarf

As discussed with Izuna, this jutsu was changed to just regular metal chains which he says is approvable.

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist:

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(Hetto-neko no Jutsu: Kari Gunpou) - Civet Style: Hunting Tactics
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After performing a single Snake handseal, the user will project a certain sound (most likely their voice or a growl) to a different area on the field. This is used as primarily a diversion tactic often seen employed by Civets to distract their prey. This jutsu can be used to mislead the target(s) into believing that there are more ninja on the field then in reality or, may even be used to sound like a sneak attack from behind the opponent(s). It may even be used to cause the target(s) to believe that a projectile is coming from another location, allowing the user to mask the projectile’s true trajectory. This jutsu is not sound-related, since it doesn’t involve any manipulation of sound - it is just the chakra enhancement/infusion of sound waves.
Note: Humans can only use this 4 times per battle.
Note: Must have mastered ninjutsu.
Note: Must have mastered Basic 5 elemental ninjutsu.
Note: Must have signed the Civet Contract.

~Pending~ I personally believe it's a Sound based jutsu, so I'll leave it for Mugi to check. Ask him to check it if you want the process to be faster.
~Declined~ It's a sound jutsu, when you infuse sound with your chakra to enhance it, how is it not manipulation?..

(Kikaichu Tsukamu) – Destruction Bug Convergence
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: After dispersing his Kikaichū, the user will manipulate some of their Kikaichū bugs to suddenly burst out from underground and shoot out at the desired location that that is powerful enough to maim an opponent. The mass of Kikaichū bugs all have very sharp wings, akin to that of kunais which will continually slice the target as they fly past him.
Note: Can only use 3 times per battle.
Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
Created by DopeyDwarf

~Approved~

 

[BusinessManTeno]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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Summoning Animal: Phaze The Lesser bird of paradise
Scroll Owner:Teno757
Other Users who have signed contract: Nobody
Summoning Boss if existing: The lesser bird of paradise
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:None ATM

~Declined~ What is "Phaze The Lesser bird of paradise". Ain't any kind of animal I know. When submitting a new summon, you only mention the species, not the name of the animal.
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Summoning Technique: (souseiki harinezumi) Phaze
Rank:S
Type: Attack
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 70
Damage points: 70
Description:The user Does 4 hand seals. and then bites his THUMB and slam his hands on the ground. once that happens. Phaze will appear in the air. soaring over me. it is as big as sauske hawk. so easy ridable. Phaze has a Mark on its back. that reacts to my chakra. allowing me to reverse summon on that mark on her back. only can do it once. all i have to do is the tiger hand seal. Phaze speaclizes in S rank water.. She is very fast. flys at the speed of 50Mph. she focuses her chakra through her wings on her tail when she is angry. once that happens she then spins around in circles real fast causing a tornado to form. once the tornado starts forming she sheds her feathers into the tornado.. once the tornado touches down the feathers inside the tornado starts to explode. causing a tornado explosion

-Note:Can only stay for 4 turns
-Note:Take 2 turns to Spin around to cause the tornado
-Note:Cant use any B rank or higher jutsu once the summon is in play
-Note:If the bird is hit while forming the tornado . the jutsu is cancelled
-Note:Only can use once
-Note:Onced used it is automatically reversed summon

~Declined~ Summon wasn't approved.
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(kasai-denkou :hirate senmetsu) Fire-Thunder Style: Palm Annihilation
Rank:S
Type:Attack
Range:Long
Chakra Cost:70
Chakra Damage:90
Description: The user does 4 hand signs once he does that. He spread both of his hands apart/ at a 180 degree angle from each other. as that occurs he channels his lightning chakra into his left hand to mold the lightning into a big HAND PALM. in the middle of body. while the left hand is molding the hand from lightning the right hand starts channeling his fire chakra into the Palm Hand. (Fire is inside the Lightning Palm). Once it is complete. it will look like

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. (Imagine the lightning is the outline. and its filled with fire.)

Once Its complete. i let it go. jump back. and do 2 hand seals. once i do that it goes towards the enemy. once it gets in range with the enemy. it explodes... looks likke

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-Note:Takes 1 turn to complete
-Note:Cant use Fire/Thunder for 2 turns after use
-Note:The explosion is as big and wide as Jariya King Toad. (i forgot its name)
-Note:Can use it only once
-Note:Taught by Teno757 only

(Edit or take out anything if u pls)

~Declined~ A whole custom clan was made on this abilities, please make some research next time.

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Summoning Animal: The Lesser bird of paradise
Scroll Owner:Teno757
Other Users who have signed contract: Nobody
Summoning Boss if existing: Phaze
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:None ATM

(Just incase you dont believe thats a bird speciies)

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~Approved~
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Summoning Technique: (souseiki harinezumi) Phaze
Rank:S
Type: Attack
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 70
Damage points: 70
Description:The user Does 4 hand seals. and then bites his THUMB and slam his hands on the ground. once that happens. Phaze will appear in the air. soaring over me. it is as big as sauske hawk. so easy ridable. Phaze has a Mark on its back. that reacts to my chakra. allowing me to reverse summon on that mark on her back. only can do it once. all i have to do is the tiger hand seal. Phaze speaclizes in S rank water.. She is very fast. flys at the speed of 50Mph. she focuses her chakra through her wings on her tail when she is angry. once that happens she then spins around in circles real fast causing a tornado to form. once the tornado starts forming she sheds her feathers into the tornado.. once the tornado touches down the feathers inside the tornado starts to explode. causing a tornado explosion

-Note:Can only stay for 4 turns
-Note:Take 2 turns to Spin around to cause the tornado
-Note:Cant use any B rank or higher jutsu once the summon is in play
-Note:If the bird is hit while forming the tornado . the jutsu is cancelled
-Note:Only can use once
-Note:Onced used it is automatically reversed summon

~Declined~ Mention that this summon specialize in Water or Wind and up to S-rank only. No tornado if it's mastered Water. No feather bombs, and no reverse summoning. Not only is the reverse summoning a cannon technique used by Naruto and the Toad, it was made a custom long ago, hence you'd be ripping it off.

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(Yougan youshiki -kuro-n) Lava Style:Lava Clone
Rank: A
Type: Supplamentary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Chakra Damaga: None
Description: The user does 2 hand seals. then mold their chakra to the exact shape of themselves. once that happen the lava clones appear from the ground. covered in lava. since they are covered in lava physical hits and Fire jutsu under A rank wont work. They can use up to B rank lava. B rank Earth and B rank Fire
-Note: Can only use 3 clones
-Note: Water automatically destroys them
-Note:Only stay on the field for 2 turns since lava hardens

(Edit anything u see fit . or take out anything)

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

 

[Scorps]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Sorry, my bad. Those were lame submissions. So i'm resubmitting: First one i lowered the effect for what i really wanted to induce: extreme pain. Second one i copied parts from the lower rank technique and explained what i can block concretely.

Genkotsu Namakemono: Sono Bukotsu Zou No Sochi | Lazy Fist: The Clumsy Stomp of The Elephant
Type: Attack
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
One of the most dangerous moves in Lazy Fist but also one of the simplest. The user focus a big amount of chakra on his palms, fingers, fists, feet, elbows or knees and hits the opponent up to 6 times. This disturbs the enemy's chakra flow and produces a deep, strong S-Rank illusion. This painful illusion makes the enemy feel an intense pain, as if the hit area was completly crushed. The enemy may even faint from the agonizing pain if he doesn't release the genjutsu. If the enemy looks or tries to feel the affected area he'll see/feel as if it was indeed completely crushed, making it hard to decipher/see through the illusion.

Note: Requires Lazy Fist training
Note2: Can only be taught by Scorps
Note3: Impact stance can be used without limit but, if connected, illusion only works twice
Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery

~Approved~

Genkotsu Namakemono: Sono Tonsou No Ranningu Panda | Lazy Fist: The Escape of the Running Panda
Type: Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description:
Perhaps the strongest of all of the Lazy Fist stances, this technique is a more advanced form of The Dance of The Drunken Haze, using the same Chu Gar (Southern Praying Manthis) stance with the same basic abilities but used to a much higher caliber. By using this stance the user is able to use his hands in wide, fluid movements to deflect incoming projectiles or taijutsu attacks directed at him. He must keep his hands coated in a layer of chakra that protects them while he deflects the projectiles or attacks. Upon contact with the enemy, the user induces a powerful S-Rank Genjutsu. This Genjutsu affects all of the enemy's senses, making him see the user disappear into a burst of bamboo leafs and even hear him run away. The enemy will even see and hear small signs of movement in the ground around him, further fueling the illusion that the user has ran with a full burst of speed away from him. This technique serves as the ultimate defense/escape for Lazy Fist Masters.

Note: Requires Lazy Fist training
Note2: The illusion effect only connects twice but the stance can be used without limit
Note3: Can only be taught by Scorps
Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery
Note5: Can deflect any S-Rank or lower Taijutsu attack (except gates)
Note6: Can be used to deflect or block Kenjutsu moves of the A-Rank or lower.
Note7: Can be used to defend against C-Rank or lower elemental projectiles within reason
Note8: Can be used to defend against basic weapons even if infused with chakra or poisoned (chakra coated hands protect the user)

~Pending~ Perhaps I'm not seeing it, but where are the restrictions on this one? Does it have a time limit?

Resubmitting as agreed, my bad for not specifying that ^^

Genkotsu Namakemono: Sono Tonsou No Ranningu Panda | Lazy Fist: The Escape of the Running Panda
Type: Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description:
Perhaps the strongest of all of the Lazy Fist stances, this technique is a more advanced form of The Dance of The Drunken Haze, using the same Chu Gar (Southern Praying Manthis) stance with the same basic abilities but used to a much higher caliber. By using this stance the user is able to use his hands in wide, fluid movements to deflect incoming projectiles or taijutsu attacks directed at him. He must keep his hands coated in a layer of chakra that protects them while he deflects the projectiles or attacks. Upon contact with the enemy, the user induces a powerful S-Rank Genjutsu. This Genjutsu affects all of the enemy's senses, making him see the user disappear into a burst of bamboo leafs and even hear him run away. The enemy will even see and hear small signs of movement in the ground around him, further fueling the illusion that the user has ran with a full burst of speed away from him. This technique serves as the ultimate defense/escape for Lazy Fist Masters.

Note: Requires Lazy Fist training
Note2: The illusion effect only connects twice but the stance can be used without limit
Note3: Can only be taught by Scorps
Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery
Note5: Can deflect any S-Rank or lower Taijutsu attack (except gates)
Note6: Can be used to deflect or block Kenjutsu moves of the A-Rank or lower.
Note7: Can be used to defend against C-Rank or lower elemental projectiles within reason
Note8: Can be used to defend against basic weapons even if infused with chakra or poisoned (chakra coated hands protect the user)
Note9: The illusion only works in the turn its used (meaning that it ends the moment the following turn of the user begins), until its released or until the user makes a direct attack on the enemy, at which time he'll become visible again.

~Approved~

Doton/Raiton: Sono Su-pa Akutibu Torikkusuta-Kinezumi | Earth/Lightning Release: The Super Active Trickster Squirrels
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 50
Damage: 100 (-10 to the user)
Description:
The user makes 2 hand seals (snake+monkey) and 9 normal sized squirrels made of rock and dense earth chakra rise from the ground within range. The squirrels are then infused with an enormous amount of lightning chakra, glowing in a bright blueish color. The lightning enables them to move (above ground or underneath) at enormous speeds that only 3T Sharingan and Byakugan can follow. The squirrels surround the enemy in a nonagon pattern facing him. They then link to each other and unleash the combined Earth and Lightning chakras into the nonagon. Within the nonagon, a mayhem of raging vortexes of electromagnetic and geoenergies starts to petrify, rip and shock everything caught in it, releasing heat, (the user can engulf the whole battleground but, if so, takes his own life also) and leaving only a crater behind. The squirrels can also surround the user short range from him and face outwards, using the combination of Earth and Lightning chakras to produce a perfect spherical shield that can protect the user against any Lightning, Earth, Fire or Water attack. If a squirrel is hit, a non-focused lightning burst is released around him, stunning whomever is near. However, as long as there is at least 3 squirrels, the technique can be used. Due to the massive amount of chakra and concentration needed, the user will experience great pain and exhaustion upon use of this technique.

Note: User can't mold Lightning or Earth for 2 turns after this technique.
Note2: In the turn its used, user can only cast one more jutsu
Note3: Usable only once
Note4: The severe exhaustion left by the amount of chakra spent to use this jutsu leaves the user unable to use ninjutsu (elemental or not) above S-Rank for 2 turns
Note5: Can only be taught by Scorps

~Declined~ Some tuning is needed.

-To avoid confusing, specify the range of attack of each squirrel if it's destroyed.
-Protecting against anything but Wind is OP. Make it so it can defend against S-rank and F-rank depending on the element (keep in mind that some jutsu such as Kirin and Amaterasu are S-rank).
-Make it so that each squirrel that is destroy weakens the final technique. While you can still perform it with 3 squirrel, it's bound to be weaker considering you lost 66% of the chakra you initially used to create them.

Rest seemed fined.

Genkotsu Namakemono: | Lazy Fist: The Dance of Decaying Flesh and Heavy Pride
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
A stance that can be used in both defensive/counter attack and in attack moves. Using either the basic stance of Lazy Fist: The Dance of the Lazy One or the defensive stance of Lazy Fist: The Dance of the Drunken Haze, the user will hit the opponent with a maximum of 10 quick punches, jabs or kicks (or block up to 10 Taijutsu hits from the opponent) with enormous speed. If used as an attack, each place the user hits will make the enemy feel as if its decaying and rotting away into a putrid liquid, giving off a horrible smell. Each affected area will begin to spread slowly and engulf the surrounding tissue, making the enemy suffer excruciating pain. If used as a defense, at contact, each of the enemy's attacking limbs (arm, leg, fist, head, knee, elbow, etc) will become impossible to move as the area touched will become heavy and numb. The weight will increase as more hits are done in the same area, but a single hit in one arm or leg will be enough to make it as heavy as needed to become impossible to move. Off course, as all Lazy Fist moves, these effects are nothing more than illusions produced by the S-Rank Genjutsu that results from the blows.

Note: Requires Lazy Fist Training
Note2: Can only be taught by Scorps
Note3: Illusions will only work twice for each
Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery

~Declined~ The offensive side of your CJ is brilliant, but I find the defensive one to be a bit exaggerated and somewhat OP. However, my main concern is with the bold part. 4 times a match for a S-rank is too much. Make it twice a match and it's up to you to decide whether it'll be used offensively or defensively.

:izuna:

As always you make perfect sense ^^

Doton/Raiton: Sono Su-pa Akutibu Torikkusuta-Kinezumi | Earth/Lightning Release: The Super Active Trickster Squirrels
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 50
Damage: 100 (-10 to the user)
Description:
The user makes 2 hand seals (snake+monkey) and 9 normal sized squirrels made of rock and dense earth chakra rise from the ground within range. The squirrels are then infused with an enormous amount of lightning chakra, glowing in a bright blueish color. The lightning enables them to move (above ground or underneath) at enormous speeds that only 3T Sharingan and Byakugan can follow. The squirrels surround the enemy in a nonagon pattern facing him. They then link to each other and unleash the combined Earth and Lightning chakras into the nonagon. Within the nonagon, a mayhem of raging vortexes of electromagnetic and geoenergies starts to petrify, rip and shock everything caught in it, releasing heat, (the user can engulf the whole battleground but, if so, takes his own life also) and leaving only a crater behind. The squirrels can also surround the user short range from him and face outwards, using the combination of Earth and Lightning chakras to produce a perfect spherical shield that can protect the user against up to F-Rank Earth, Lightning and Water and S-Rank Fire and Wind. If a squirrel is hit, a non-focused lightning burst is released around him, stunning everything short range around it. However, as long as there is at least 3 squirrels, the technique can be used (3 Squirrels=A-Rank, 4-8 Squirrels=S-Rank). Due to the massive amount of chakra and concentration needed, the user will experience great pain and exhaustion upon use of this technique.

Note: User can't mold Lightning or Earth in the next turn.
Note2: In the turn its used, user can only cast one more jutsu
Note3: Usable only once
Note4: The severe exhaustion left by the amount of chakra spent to use this jutsu leaves the user unable to use ninjutsu (elemental or not) above S-Rank for 2 turns
Note5: Can only be taught by Scorps

~Approved~ Well done.

Ok, for the next one i was just trying to spare an extra CJ, but i'll separate both and make another one for the weight effect and work it out more, so i simply took that part out (so i didn't bold anything):

Genkotsu Namakemono: Sono Odori no Suisei Niku | Lazy Fist: The Dance of Decaying Flesh
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
A stance that can be used in both defensive/counter attack and in attack moves. Using either the basic stance of Lazy Fist: The Dance of the Lazy One or the defensive stance of Lazy Fist: The Dance of the Drunken Haze, the user will hit the opponent with a maximum of 10 quick punches, jabs or kicks (or block up to 10 Taijutsu hits from the opponent) with enormous speed. Each place the user hits will make the enemy feel as if its decaying and rotting away into a putrid liquid, giving off a horrible smell. Each affected area will begin to spread slowly and engulf the surrounding tissue, making the enemy suffer excruciating pain. Off course, as all Lazy Fist moves, these effects are nothing more than illusions produced by the S-Rank Genjutsu that results from the blows.

Note: Requires Lazy Fist Training
Note2: Can only be taught by Scorps
Note3: Illusions will only work twice
Note4: Requires Genjutsu Mastery

~Approved~

 

[Selendrile]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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Summoning Animal: Coati
Scroll Owner: HereticPassage
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: Chaillu
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Tuni, Sadiya, Tau'Mana

~Approved~

Dropping above if approved.

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Summoning Animal: Great Blue Heron
Scroll Owner: Selendrile
Other Users who have signed contract:
Summoning Boss if existing: Cerulean
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A

Must have this tattooed on both palms.

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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Majesuti no Serurian)- Cerulean the Majesty
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: After drawing blood from any part of the body onto their palms, the user will clasp both hands together, summoning Cerulean in sky above them, or at any place short range from the user. Cerulean is the Queen of the Herons, and is considered the most beautiful Heron in all of the lands. She is slightly bigger than Sasuke’s hawk that he summoned in his fight against Lord Danzo, and is capable of being ridden high into the air. Due to the strength and length of her beak, Cerulean is capable of swallowing any attack of B-rank and lower twice per battle. In her throat, she incorporates her own basic chakra into the attack, strengthening it. After waiting one turn after its consumption, she can regurgitate the same technique, increasing its rank by one. While flying, Cerulean can also harden the outer feathers on both of her wings, and launch them towards the opponent. These feathers are as hard as steel, can only be used in long range, and have the rank of an B-rank attack. However, after using this, she must wait for her feathers to regenerate, and cannot fly for one turn after its use. Being a bird, all of the Herons have naturally increased vision.
*Note: Must have signed the Great Blue Heron contract
*Note: When regurgitating a technique, Cerulean must follow the range stated on the move
*Note: Cannot swallow any earth techniques
*Note: Any technique performed by Cerulean counts as a move of the user
*Note: Cerulean remains summoned for four turns; and is able to be summoned once per battle
Approved

(Utau Shuriken)- Singing Dart
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The Singing Darts are a ninja weapon originally designed by Io, the eccentric ninja tool maker of Konohagakure. As Selendrile was passing through Io’s territory, a squad of Kumogakure ninja confronted him, carrying stolen weapons from Io’s armory. After defeating the ninja, and then returning the tools to Io, Io offered to create an original ninja weapon for Selendrile to show his appreciation. After examining Selendrile’s fighting style, Io developed an all new ninja weapon. The Singing Darts are always equipped, and activated at the users command. Supple, soft leather wristbands are attached to each of the user’s wrists, beginning at the wrist bone, and ending a quarter of the way to the elbow. Connected to the wristbands is a retractable cable spun around a spool inside of them, the similar in characteristics to Hidan’s cable on his Scythe. A shuriken is attached to the ends the cables. With a specific flick of the wrist, the cable extends out from the wristbands, with the shuriken attached at the ends. Immediately upon release, the shuriken begin to spin rapidly, forming a rotating, cutting, circular blade. The cables are able to reach up to mid range, and the shuriken attached to the cable travel as fast as regular thrown shuriken. They also inflict as much damage as regular thrown shuriken. Even if deflected, the shuriken are able to be retracted back onto the user’s wrist via retracting the cables with a flick of the wrist. Once the cable is released, the user is still able to perform hand signs, as the shuriken do not occupy the hands. If the user releases the shuriken in a single direction, a technique can be used simultaneously, and does not count as a move of the user. However, if the user wishes to control the path of the shuriken, it counts as a move. The cable and shuriken can also be infused with elements through additional techniques.
*Note: Can only be wielded by Selendrile
*Note: The Singing Dart appear on both arms
*Note: Launching the shuriken does not count as a move; only manipulating the direction does
*Note: When launched, the user must wait one turn to use the Singing Darts again

(I believe this technique will take a few submissions to get right, so please critique all you find unacceptable with it)

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[Yüme1]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Summoning Animal: Mud-Fish
Scroll Owner: Rin Okumura.
Other Users who have signed contract: None.
Summoning Boss if existing: Will be created in the Future.
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None.
Basic Information: Mud-Fish can use their fin on the head to detect subtle changes in air and water currents, and can detect nearby bodies of water. In this way, it can also detect danger. Like most Water-type summonings, Mud-Fish can perform water Jutsu. When in the water, Mud-Fish breathe using the gills on its cheeks. On land, it can powerfully lift large boulders by planting its four feet and heaving. If it is faced with a tight situation in battle, A Mud-Fish will become strong enough to crush rocks bigger than itself.

Mud-Fish and members of its evolution family dwell in swamps or other wetlands, deep inside isolated islands. Soon after birth on beautiful beaches, it swims to swamps deep within islands.

Evolution:

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Baby Form:

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Middle Age'd Form:

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~All Declined~ I will not accept any jutsu that use font, size change, aligned/centered text or spoilers for anything else then pictures. Re-submit in a more readable way.
Thank you.

 

[Serpent]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Unagi Senpuku-Fuu) Eel Hiding Method
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user will replace themselves with Eels as an small Eel swims with grate speed deep into long range under the water. The Eel will then release the user out if it's mouth as the other Eels acting as the user on the surface distracts the opponent. Doujutsu can see through this as they will see the user's chakra change and the real user going deep the water
Note:
-Can only be use twice per battle
-Requires a water source
-Must sign Eel contract

~Declined~ Wait a minute O__O Is this a genjutsu, a ninjutsu or a summoning? Are you making a similar technique to Jiraiya's toad transportation technique? You really need to elaborate on that one. Also, how do you do the switch with the eel? Are you using Kawarimi no jutsu on top of all that xd?

(Unagi Senpuku-Fuu) Eel Hiding Method
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user will replace themselves with Eels as an small Eel swims with grate speed deep into long range under the water. The Eel will then release the user out if it's mouth as the other Eels acting as the user on the surface distracts the opponent. This method is similar to the way Jiraiya travels in small toads. Doujutsu and Sensory abilities can see through this method.
Note:
-Can only be use twice per battle
-Requires a water source
-Must sign Eel contract

~Approved~

It is a Ninjutsu, a lot has not been stated in Naruto about how some Jutsu work. i guess it's a type of replacement since he replaces himself with Eels.. it could also be a summoning for the Eels to come into play but I don't think it should be considered a summoning because, for example: "hidden shadow snake hands" is considered a Ninjutsu, the snakes don't need to be summoned even though the snakes aren't their to begin with...

New Submission:

(Kinjutsu Unagi Jubaku Kashou) Forbidden Eel Burning Curse
Type: Supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50 (10 per turn)
Damage points: N/A (+10 to Ninjutsu, +15 to Taijutsu)
Description: After signing the Eel contract for 4 months the signer can be branded with an cast-iron brand, in the shape of Souzousha (The Great Eel Creator) after the branding the user is now able to call forth the power of Souzousha during battle by focusing chakra to the burn. By doing so the User's burn Extends across their whole body leaving burn marks that leave's a twisted design. This burns the user and causes extreme pain to the user upon activation. Once activated the user feels the power of Souzousha as their mussels tense up and chakra output overloads leaving a Violet Ora around them. The user's speed and strength increase. Because of the constant strain on the user body after deactivation of this mode the user will Die.
Note:
-Can only be use once per battle
-last 5 turns
-User dies after deactivation of mode
-Must have permission from one RP mod to learn
-Muse be Branded by Serpent
-Must sign Eel contract for at least 4 months
-Must sigh Eel contract

~Declined do not resubmit~ Even though your restrictions are more then enough to get this one accepted, custom curse marks are simply forbidden.

 

[McKnockout]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Genjutsu: Konchuu Yuuku) – Illusion Technique: Entomophobia
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Entomophobia is the fear of insects or bugs and other similar arthropods. This genjutsu can be created as long as the opponent can see the user and vice versa. Unlike most genjutsu this one lays dormant in the opponent's body until activated later in the battle. The user places a mass of chakra into the opponent's body where it sits until they see, hear or even smell the presence of insects. Once the opponent experiences one of those things the genjutsu activates. When the opponent is caught in this genjutsu, he will immediately suffer the symptoms of this phobia. The opponent will enter in a panic state and will suffer from involuntary shaking, making it difficult for them to perform handseals and unable to stand on his feet. The damage of this genjutsu will be caused by the feeling of being pierced by countless needles which, as time passes, are pushed deeper and deeper into the target’s body causing excruciating pain. Due to this immense amount of pain, the target can not dispel this genjutsu by causing pain to themselves (e.g. stabbing themselves with a kunai, breaking a finger, etc.) unless they feel extreme physical pain.
*Note: Can only be used once per battle, but may be used to affect multiple targets.
*Note: Aburame and other insect users are immune.
*Note: To dispel this genjutsu, the target must feel an extreme physical pain (not just stabbing himself or break a finger)
*Note: No genjutsu for the next turn.
*Note: No S-rank jutsus in the same turn (when the dormant genjutsu is placed in the target)
*Can only be taught by McKnockout

~Declined~ In order to get this genjutsu triggered as you described, you'd need to seal the chakra inside of him and create a complex seal that opens on visual contact, touch or smell (like Itachi did with Sasuke when he saw Madara). This is beyond your mastery of Fuuinjutsus and only Medical Senseis could possible get this kind of technique accepted.

(Genjutsu: Konchuu Yuuku) – Illusion Technique: Entomophobia
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Entomophobia is the fear of insects or bugs and other similar arthropods. This genjutsu can be created as long as the opponent can see the user and vice versa. When the opponent is caught in this genjutsu, he will immediately suffer the symptoms of this phobia. The opponent will enter in a panic state and will suffer from involuntary shaking, making it difficult for them to perform handseals and unable to stand on his feet. The damage of this genjutsu will be caused by the feeling of being pierced by countless needles which, as time passes, are pushed deeper and deeper into the target’s body causing excruciating pain. Due to this immense amount of pain, the target can not dispel this genjutsu by causing pain to themselves (e.g. stabbing themselves with a kunai, breaking a finger, etc.) unless they feel extreme physical pain.
*Note: Can only be used once per battle, but may be used to affect multiple targets.
*Note: Aburame and other insect users are immune.
*Note: To dispel this genjutsu, the target must feel an extreme physical pain (not just stabbing himself or break a finger)
*Note: No genjutsu for the next turn.
*Note: No S-rank jutsus in the same turn
*Can only be taught by McKnockout

Just made it into a regular genjutsu.

~Declined~ You can't mess with free will. Saying "you're scared of that" is over the top in our RP. If that kind of technique were approved, why not simply tell them to take their kunai and slit their throat because "they're too scared to go on living" or some other idiotic reason. The point being, the ninja under the genjutsu must perceive the world differently around him, but he's still the master of his own thoughts.

(Genjutsu: Kage Mane?) – Illusion Technique: Shadow Imitation?
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: An illusion where the opponent finds themselves trapped and paralysed as he sees his shadow combine with the user’s shadow (or the user’s ally e.g. a clone) exactly like Shadow Imitation. In reality, the opponent is paralysed and unable to move. This jutsu requires a single handseal to perform.
*Note: Paralysing effects last for 1 turn.
*Note: Can only use 3 times per battle.
*Note: Must wait at least 1 turn to be used again.
*Can only be taught by McKnockout

~Declined~ 1 hand seal and can be activated up to long range? You'll need to lower that and add some details on how you trap your opponent. Also, explain how it actually works. Do you need to extend your shadow in the genjutsu to trap him like the real shadow technique or is it immediately active as you put your opponent under your illusion?

(Genjutsu: Kage Mane?) – Illusion Technique: Shadow Imitation?
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: An illusion where the opponent finds themselves trapped and paralyzed as he sees his shadow combine with the user’s shadow (or the user’s ally e.g. a clone) exactly like Shadow Imitation. In the genjutsu, the user manipulates the target's vision and senses so that it seems like the user's shadow expands and pursues the target that then combines with the target's shadow, which once merged will paralyze the target. The target may choose to run away from the user's approaching shadow, but this is just an illusion as in reality, the opponent is already paralyzed and unable to move as soon as the genjutsu is initiated. This genjutsu requires a single handseal to perform.
*Note: Paralysing effects last for 1 turn.
*Note: Can only use 2 times per battle.
*Note: Must wait at least 1 turn to be used again.
*Can only be taught by McKnockout

~Declined~ This one will cause a real mess in a fight. How can you confirm your opponent was looking at his shadow as yours was touching his (that sounds wrong ). You get my point. Find something else.

 

[Sasuke Sarutobi]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Update~
Summoning Animal: Civet
Scroll Holder: DopeyDwarf
Other Users who have signed contract: Sasuke Sarutobi
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Kabigon, Samson.

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General Description: A civet is a medium-sized carnivorous animal adapted to living in grasslands, woodlands, savannas, sub-deserts, forest edges, and mountains. Civets are cunning-looking animals quite intelligent among the carnivora, with studies indicating that their social intelligence is on par with some primate species. They are capable of producing a musk highly valued as a fragrance and stabilizing agent for perfume. Both male and female civets produce the strong-smelling secretion, which is produced by the civet's perineal glands. Their fur varies from yellowish to dark brown to gold-ish to beige-white, depending on the species.

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(Hetto-neko no Jutsu: Jakou Kasui) - Civet Style: Musk Stream
Rank: B-A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 25-30
Damage Points: 40-60 (+15 to fire jutsus)
Description: This jutsu is based off the Civets’ natural ability to secrete and emit a musk highly valued as a fragrance and stabilizing agent for perfume. By concentrating chakra in their perineal glands (in their mouth or hands), Civets can produce a modified version of their musk that is akin to oil. The user after gathering this liquid musk in their mouth can then spit the liquid at a target in a straight, continuous stream (like “Water Release: Water Horn”). This stream of flammable musk may vary in damage depending on the size and amount of chakra used.
Note: Only Civets can perform this jutsu.
Note: Only at least B-rank Civet Summons can use this jutsu.
Note: Can only use A-rank version 3 times per battle.
Note: If A-rank version is used, must wait at least 1 turn to use again.
Note: Must have mastered ninjutsu.
Note: Must have mastered Basic 5 elemental ninjutsu.
Note: Must have signed the Civet Contract.

~Approved~

(Suiton: Mizu Bara Sho-ke-su) – Water Release: Water Rose Showcase
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description:The user concentrates water chakra into their hands or mouth and expels a medium volume of water in the shape of several (up to four) roses which are shot directly at the opponent with significant speed. These roses are in fact highly condensed water orbs which spin/rotate as they're shot, resembling large shurikens that are capable of slicing through solid objects (due to the condensed nature of the water). Upon contact with the opponent (or any other solid object), after slicing them, the roses simply disperse and revert back to regular water forming a medium size pool/lake of water at that location.

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Note: Usable three times per battle.
Note: Can only be taught/used by Sasuke Sarutobi.

~Declined~ Too similar to miniature Rasenshuriken. No Rasengan variation will be accepted, even if they're shaped like roses (when you clearly mentioned they're like rotating orbs of water that can slice

(Suiton: Haitateki Mizu Bara Teishi) – Water Release: Exclusive Water Rose Exhibition
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: This technique is a variant/similar to "Water Rose Showcase" but instead, after gathering water chakra into his hands or mouth, shapes the water into one larger rose which he proceeds to again, shoot directly at the opponent with significant speed. However, this technique differs slightly in that as it begins to approach the target, with the formation of an additional handseal, the petals of the spinning rose expand outwards forming streams of water which when combined with the rotating/spinning motion of the rose creates the sight of a large horizontally spinning vortex (similar to how "Water Drowning Technique" can create multiple streams of water).
Note: Usable two times per battle.
Note: Can only be taught/used by Sasuke Sarutobi.

~Declined~ Too similar to Rasenshuriken.

 

[Enzup]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

This week's cjs

(Yumiya) - Bow and Arrow
Type: Offense
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40 (+25 for each arrow)
Damage Points: 80 (but dead, if hit on a body part which may lead to death)
Description: The user creates a bow of pure chakra of length 2m. And then he can create an arrow of length 2m and radius 3cm from either pure chakra or from any basic 5 elements. And after releasing it, arrow moves at very fast speed.
Note: ~Can only be used 2 times per battle.
~Bow lasts untill destroyed.
~If bow is not destroyed then one arrow can be created each turn without using this jutsu again.
~The bow's speed is slightly less then the susanoo's arrow.
~Can't use any jutsu of S-rank in same turn.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.
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(Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80 (if someone tries to cross it)
Description: User creates 3 shadow clones. One clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earh, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block 1 forbidden jutsu completely.
Note: ~User must have learnt the "Shadow Clone Justu" to perform this technique.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

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~Declined~ You're basically using 4 jutsus in 1 move:
-Clones
-2 elemental techniques
-1 chakra technique

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If this mode gets approved, then i will be visiting all the nine current jinchuurikis one by one and will be eating their small amount of flesh by defeating them in a fight or however..

(Bijuu Mo-do) - Tailed-Beast Mode
Typre: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user concentrates on a bijuu's chakra which he has obtained by eating flesh of bijuus, then he spreads that chakra in his whole body to make his normal chakra dense and strong just like bijuu's chakra and transforms into a bijuu of his choice. The height of the bijuu in which the user has transformed is same as user's height and also the size of all the jutsus decreases accordingly, but it is exactly same as original bijuu. So now he gets the abilities of that bijuu and can use everything that particular bijuu can use.
Note: ~Can only transform in 1 bijuu (out of 9) per battle.
~User gets the abilities at Sannin Rank but only when in bijuu mode, and gets bijuu's forms (incomplete and complete) at Kage rank.
~User can only use those jutsus which that particular bijuu can use and also gets his weaknesses.
~When this mode is over than user gets too fatigue and exhausted that he can't use any jutsu above B-rank for the whole battle. Unlike the original jinchuuriki the user dont die because of his very small size and chakra used.
~Cannot use any other mode in same battle.
~Cannot use any jutsu of S-rank or higher in same turn.
~Mode lasts for 6 turns, first 3 in incomplete form and another 3 in complete form.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Cannot be Used by anyone except Enzup. (i.e. Cannot be taught)

Additional Note: ~If you want then you can take my battle test that if i am worthy of it or not, but i think defeating all nine jinchurikis would be the biggest test for me.
~If yes, then battle test cannot be retaken before 1 month.

I got this idea from ginkaku and kinkaku, although there is difference in transformation, like he wasn't in complete form but i am reducing the size of my bijju to human size and also his attacks..

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~Declined do not resubmit~ You have no idea how hard it was to simply get the gold and silver brothers approved, so there's no way this will ever be acceptable.

Resubmitting

(Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80 (if someone tries to cross it)
Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earh, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block 1 forbidden jutsu completely.
Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
~Can only be used twice per battle.
~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

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~Approved~ Like I said in the previous submission, you're using 3 chakras, so this technique counts as 3 moves. I added a note to clarify that part.

(Senpai Sutikku) - Elder Wand
Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 100
Description: The Elder Wand, also known as the Deathstick, the Wand of Destiny, is the fabled Deathly Hallow. Bestowed on Enzup, supposedly by Death himself after he requested, as his bounty, the strongest wand in the history of wizardkind.
The Elder Wand is ancient and made up of elder wood with coating of unknown subtance on it with a core of Thestral tail hair, thats make the wand unbreakable. It is fifteen inches long. If anyone even touches it without the user's permission, then he will receive a huge amount of pain in his body, forcing him to drop the wand. Whenever user says "Accio", wherever the wand is, it quickly gets to the user (if somewhere nearby) in a blink of an eye. Most Spells are done with the aid of wands (customs posting soon), and one of the major ability is that while the wand is in the possession of user, user dont have to perform any handseals for any jutsu, instead of that he has to swing his wand in a circular movement and give a little flick pointing towards his target. And when flick is done a bright white light apprears at the tip of the wand for a second.
Note: ~Due to the white light, opponent can easily find the user, if user is hiding.
~It is considered to have life of its own (like samehada) and it can sense chakra.
~If summoned then it lasts for 5 turns, and have to perform a series of 8 handseals before summoning it.
~Can only be used by Enzup.

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~Declined~ While I was for the idea of INTRODUCING HP to our RP, you've over done it. No hand seals? Accio whenever you want? Why the hell would it be forbidden?

All in all, adapt it to the Narutoverse, not the opposite. If it's not drastically different (in a good way) in your next resubmission, I'll be forced to decline it for good.

This week's CJs and Plz edit any part of any cj for approval.

(Doton/Raiton: Koden Of Za Fukei) - Earth/Lightning: Legend of the Guardians
Type: Offense
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 90
Description: The user creates 5 pillars around his target(s) at mid range from them of around 15 ft in height which starts generating lightning infused with pure chakra inside that area, which is very strong which continuously gives electric shock, stunns,paralyse and stops the body movements of the persons in that area such that a person can't even move his one finger. As the moment this tech begins the persons standing in that area falls on earth and can't do anything and the chakra is continuously sucked by this tech from that whole area.
Note: ~Opponent must destroy atleast 3 pillars to stop this tech, otherwise the pillars will form again in few seconds.
~Only persons outside the area can save the persons lying inside the area, if generation of lightning has begun and people are trapped in it.
~If the persons in that area are not been rescued in less than 1 minute then they die because of no chakra(which is sucked), and electric shock.
~The area in which lightning with pure chakra in generated is enough to take 10-15 people at a time(if they are standing very close to each other).
~User can't use any S-Rank and above jutsus in same and next 2 turns, only if pillars start generating electricity.
~No lightning and pure chakra based jutsu for next 2 turns.
~No earth tech in same turn.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

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Got this idea from movie "Legends of the Guardians - The Owls of Ha'Goole"

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Declined, do not resubmit
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(Raiton/Suiton/Chakra: Hiningenteki) - Lightning/Water/Chakra: Inhuman
Type: Offense/Defense/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: User creates 3 shadow clones. One clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra to create a human like creature with wings of same size as of human, carrying sword in his hands. He is very strong as he is a combo of three. His speed is comparable to rock lee without weights because of lightning. He can use water and lightning, and gives 25% more damage to these technique. He does not have any effect of lightning and water upto A-rank, as they will only boost-up the humanoid.
Note: ~No lightning and water jutsu in same turn.
~No S-Rank Jutsu in same turn.
~Cannot use any jutsu above A-rank in next turn.
~If Inhuman uses a techinue then that will be counted as one move out of 3.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Using clones count as one move.
~Lasts untill destroyed.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

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Declined, do not resubmit
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(Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus blocking any jutsu upto S-Rank (almost destroyed) but can take on one more of any rank jutsu.
Note: ~Must destroy atleast 3 towers to stop this tech.
~Can't use any jutsu of earth in next whole turn.
~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
~Can be used 2 times per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.
Declined, as it stands its unrealistic in terms that it can withstand any jutsu up to S rank, there are various techniques that have the ability to get passed this and not to mention the elemental weakness of lightning release

Resubmitting removed- can block one s-rank attack and take on one more of any rank jutsu. and added weakness (bolded)

(Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus it will be destroyed after taking one S-rank technique. (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank)
Note:~Can't use any jutsu of earth in next whole turn.
~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
~Can be used 2 times per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

~Approved~ Took out the part about needing to destroy 3 towers to stop the techniques.