[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

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Summoning Animal: Giant harriers
Scroll Owner: Photon
Other Users who have signed contract: None
Summoning Boss if existing: Needs to be added if the contract is approved
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None yet
Description and Background:
Harriers are birds of prey, family Accipitridae, order Falconiformes. Harriers have long wings and legs, a small head with a short beak, an owl-like frill of thickset feathers around the face, and soft plumage. They eat frogs, birds, snakes, and small mammals, and are found mainly in marshy areas throughout the world they characteristicly hunt by flying low over open ground. Due to the natural food chain they are great at fighting against reptiles, small mammals, amphibians and birds.
link to information about harriers:

~ Scorps ~


±± Declined ±± A harrier is a Hawk...Hawks are taken.

[Aidentiti maru | Identity disc]
Type: Weapon
Rank: S rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 0-40 (depending on the level of raiton infused)
Damage: 5-80 (depending on level of infusion)
Description:
The identity disc can be used in one of two ways, it can be used as a ranged weapon by throwing it and rebounding it off of objects or it can be used as close combat weapon designed to slice the opponent.
Range: from beggining of the video
close combat: 4:10-4:20

the identity disc can be infused with different levels of raiton depending on the mastery of the element, because of this it can be used to negate earth style jutsu by the infused disc making contact with the jutsu (can be done by throwing the disc at the jutsu or the opponent slamming the disc into the jutsu) when infused the disc then takes on the level of damage of the corresponding rank of raiton infused in the disc. when the disc is infused with raiton chakra this gives its characteristic glow and gives it several properties, increased penetration as a weapon due to vibrations, and when being used in close combat the disc augments the speed at which you attack with it by stimulating your nervous system.
Abilities:
-the Identity Disc is indestructible
-when infused it takes on the characteristic of a raiton jutsu e.g. weak to wind and strong against earth
-if any contact at all is made with the disc while its infused the person gets shocked and goes into spasm aswell as being cut if it was a slicing attack (photon does not get shocked as he wields it with a rubber glove)
-Even at long range the disc is pinpoint accurate and due to the raiton chakra travels through the air extraordinarily fast reaching the target in under a second.
Restrictions:
-infusing the disc counts as one of the 3 jutsu per turn
-can only be rebounded off of 2 objects consecutively any more and it will not have the necessary kinetic energy to keep in flight
-infused chakra only lasts 3 turns (unless canceled out by a wind jutsu of appropriate rank for the level of infusion)
-can only be used by photon

~ Really ? You can't be bothered to explain its use so you put a fricking YouTube video in the middle of the description ? ~
Summoning Animal: Giant Scropions
Scroll Owner: Photon
Other Users who have signed contract: None
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A (will create one if accepted)
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A (will create one if accepted)
Description and Background:
Scorpions are predatory arthropod animals of the order Scorpiones within the class Arachnida. They have eight legs and are easily recognized by the pair of grasping claws and the narrow, segmented tail, often carried in a characteristic forward curve over the back, ending with a venomous stinger. Scorpions range in sizeThe scorpion has a fearsome reputation as venomous, and about 25 species are known to have venom capable of killing a human being.All known scorpion species possess venom and use it primarily to kill or paralyze their prey so that it can be eaten; in general, it is fast-acting, allowing for effective prey capture. It is also used as a defense against predators. The venom is a mixture of compounds (neurotoxins, enzyme inhibitors, etc.)

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~ Declined, no scorpions ~

[Aidentiti maru | Identity disc]
Type: Weapon
Rank: S rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 0-40 (depending on the level of raiton infused)
Damage: 5-80 (depending on level of infusion)
Description:
The identity disc can be used in one of two ways, it can be used as a ranged weapon by throwing it and rebounding it off of objects when used this way its effects are much like a shuriken digging into the opponent but because of the size it cause more damage, or it can be used as close combat weapon designed to slice the opponent this is done by the user holding the disc and using swinging motions to slice the opponent causing long and deep lacerations or jabbing motions to stab and cause deeps cuts.
the identity disc can be infused with different levels of raiton depending on the mastery of the element, because of this it can be used to negate earth style jutsu by the infused disc making contact with the jutsu (can be done by throwing the disc at the jutsu or the opponent slamming the disc into the jutsu) when infused the disc then takes on the level of damage of the corresponding rank of raiton infused in the disc. when the disc is infused with raiton chakra this gives its characteristic glow and gives it several properties, increased penetration as a weapon due to vibrations, and when being used in close combat the disc augments the speed at which you attack with it by stimulating your nervous system.
Abilities:
-the Identity Disc is indestructible
-when infused it takes on the characteristic of a raiton jutsu e.g. weak to wind and strong against earth
-if any contact at all is made with the disc while its infused the person gets shocked and goes into spasm aswell as being cut if it was a slicing attack (photon does not get shocked as he wields it with a rubber glove)
-Even at long range the disc is pinpoint accurate and due to the raiton chakra travels through the air extraordinarily fast reaching the target in under a second.
Restrictions:
-infusing the disc counts as one of the 3 jutsu per turn
-can only be rebounded off of 2 objects consecutively any more and it will not have the necessary kinetic energy to keep in flight
-infused chakra only lasts 3 turns (unless canceled out by a wind jutsu of appropriate rank for the level of infusion)
-can only be used by photon​

~ Declined for the font alignment ~
 
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(Raiton: Koudo Setsuju Hirate) Lightning Release: Advanced Intercepting Palm
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: 40
Description: This is an advanced form of The intercepting fist. The user will run electricity through their hands and When the user is being punched or kicked the user with fast reactions due to Jeet kune do gives the user enhanced reaction time up to 3x of the average ninja as well as fast movements that "Jeet Kune Do" provides, will quickly react by taking palm and swiping the punch or kick away. The user can either hit the opponents Fist/hand/foot directly or hit their wrist, mid forearm, ankle or mid leg section to swipe away the attack. but will send a shock through the opponents limb, paralyzing it, making them unable move it for one turn. The user can then strike the opponent. This technique wastes no movement and is done in the blink of an eye. The user can react to speeds that are 3x faster than him and can move swipe attacks away in the blink of an eye, so the speeds he can react to are speeds 3x faster than him due to the bonus effect Jeet Kune Do has.
Note: Can be used 3x per match
Note: This can still only swipe away Taijutsu up to B rank.
Note: Must know Jeet Kune Do.

~ A blink of an eye is too generic. Besides, possessing increased reflexes does not mean you can react to things three times faster than you; your reflexes might be boosted, but your base speed is the same, you would not be able to move fast enough. ~



(Raiton: Koudo Setsuju Hirate) Lightning Release: Advanced Intercepting Palm
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: 40
Description: This is an advanced form of The intercepting fist. The user will run electricity through their hands and When the user is being punched or kicked the user with fast reactions as well as fast movements that "Jeet Kune Do" provides, will quickly react by taking palm and swiping the punch or kick away. The user can either hit the opponents Fist/hand/foot directly or hit their wrist, mid forearm, ankle or mid leg section to swipe away the attack. but will send a shock through the opponents limb, paralyzing it, making them unable move it for one turn. The user can then strike the opponent. This technique wastes no movement and charging of the chakra will take two seconds. The movement of the user himself is limited to his own skill of what he has learned wether he is a specialist in Taijutsu or a Taijutsu master and Jeet Kune Do's abilities which is being able to move limbs in a fast pace, the speed they can intercept would have to be a little slower than the users speed. It cannot intercept swift users, EIG users, Sage Mode users or any other speed enhancing modes/techniques that would grant the opponent those levels of speed or speed that's above the user. Due to the boost that Jeet Kune Do training provides, the user tries to be faster as well as to move like water to get around opponents attacks as they were taught to. So it is by this the user can only intercept Non Enhanced Taijutsu. The movement speed of the user is only slightly above that of a normal Strong Fist user. However, coupled with the increased reaction time it makes the user capable of defending against most moves of Strong Fist with ease.
Note: Can be used 3x per match
Note: This can still only swipe away Taijutsu up to B rank.
Note: Must know Jeet Kune Do.

~ Approved ~

So that the speed of my style is clear, heres the restriction that scorps added to Jeet Kune Do a while back.

User of this style gains 3x the ability to read through enemy taijutsu and movement, capable of reacting with enourmous speed when compared to an average Strong Fist user. This, however, doesn't refer to running speed which suffers no differance and in essence the movement speed of the users body is only slightly above that of a normal Strong Fist user. However, coupled with the increased reaction time it makes the user capable of defending against most moves of Strong Fist with ease.

Because I accidentally edited my post after you did when I was trying to resubmit my intercepting palm and screwed up by deleting half of my post, I need you to re-approved this.


(Doton: Sono Monogatari Karejiko) Earth Release: The Legend Himself
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: N/A +10 To Taijutsu
Description: The user will make 3 handseals and will make a body of earth rise from the ground similar to the Earth Clone technique. However, the earth appears to not look like the user, but another man. This figure carries the resemblance of Bruce Lee, he can perform Jeet Kune Do Style Taijutsu along with Basic Taijutsu. What makes this so special is that him being made of earth release, he can use Jeet Kune Do in a more stronger advanced style, using the earth release chakra for making strong yet quick strikes that can easily break bones due to the force of impact and his rock like structure. He can reform instantly when struck so long as he is standing on an earth source unless the earth chakra is negated which would cancel the technique.
Note: Can create 1
Note: Can only be used once per battle.
Note: Counts as a Shadow clone technique.
Note: He stays on the field for 4 turns.
Note: He must stay within mid range of the User.
Note: Despite being made of earth/earth chakra, he cannot perform earth release.
Note: Must be a Jeet Kune Do Master to use this
Note: Can Reform 2 times unless his earth chakra is negated or he is destroyed with a lightning attack of one rank lower or higher.

~ Approved ~

So that you know I didn't edit anything, here's the post in my cj thread. Sorry about this btw >_<




Signed snake contract.


(Kuchiyose: Shuiro) Summoning: Scarlet
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: +10 To fire jutsu (-10 For the bite)
Description: The user will make two handseals (Tiger - Boar) and summon "Scarlet" onto their shoulder. Scarlet is a small very kind and friendly snake that's about the size of a human hand, she has a fire affinity, but due to her size she doesn't have much chakra and can only perform C rank fire jutsus that don't require seals. She can speak, and her voice however is soft and quiet, the opposite of what you would expect from a snake. She's usually used for relaying information. She has an actual more useful ability however, which is that due to her fire affinity, she can bite the user, and send her fire chakra through her fangs as if it were venom, and constantly inject the user with fire chakra, increasing their fire jutsu by +10 for a short amount of time. Her bite causes slight pain for that turn only, before it settles, it's only painful enough to break B rank genjutsu in the turn bitten.

Note: The increase to fire jutsu lasts for 4 turns.
Note: Scarlet stays on the field for 5 turns.
Note: The fire ability can only be used once per battle.
Note: Scarlet can be summoned only once per battle.
Note: Her bite can break the user from B rank Genjutsu.

~ Declined. Enough with the elemental boosts. ~
 
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re-submit:

dropping my accepted CW's jutsu:

(Mai· Sōru jihi o motte iru!) Have Mercy Upon My Soul!
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Himself
Chakra Cost: 30 (See Description)
Damage Points: +15 Ninjutsu
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. The sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, boosting his power. Once this system has been broken, the sword becomes unbalanced in the same turn when this chakra has been harnessed, the sword becomes useless in the same turn. Because of the unbalance of the sword, user will receive -10 health damage in the same turn. As it tries to suck it back the taken chakra at once what has once left the sword, in the next turn, user suffers -30 chakra loss. As the sword has sucked back an enormous amount of chakra in that turn (meaning 30 chakra), activating itself once again, a furious wind will surround it, leaving the area in a really windy environment for when it sucked back the 30 chakra. This means that no raiton attacks of S-rank can be made from the user in that turn when there is a windy environment. As the sword becomes out of control when it sucks back the chakra, having an S-ranked fuuton chakra surround it, only Kage or higher may be able to handle it.
Note:
~Can be used 1x
~The sword won't be useable in the same turn as this technique.
~Only Kage or higher may use this.
~Sumitsukigasa must be wielded.
~Can be taught by Dr. House

to this:

(Shi no rīchi) Death's Reach
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offense
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. The sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, boosting his power. After 2 turns, you can release that chakra into one of your jutsu making it one rank stronger (counts as one of the 3 jutsu per turn). If not, you can have the chakra build up for 5 turns instead of using the chakra, building up chakra which surrounds Sumitsukigasa equal to the power of forbidden rank. Once this chakra has coated Sumitsukigasa

~ Uhm...incomplete description ~
(Shi no rīchi) Death's Reach
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offense
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90
Description: Once the user is wielding Sumitsukigasa for the minimum of 2 turns, he may use the chakra of the sword for his own advantage. The sword sucks 10 chakra every turn, but it leaves excess chakra behind. When the user wishes after the 2 turns, he may harness this chakra and the chakra absorbed within that turn onto his own advantages, boosting his power. You can release that chakra into one of your jutsu making it one rank stronger (counts as one of the 3 jutsu per turn). It cannot raise an S-ranked into a Forbidden rank. The user can have the chakra build up for 4 turns, putting all the chakra which the sword had left as an excess and pluss the user's chakra, which will surround Sumitsukigasa equal to the power of forbidden rank. Once this chakra has coated Sumitsukigasa, it will resemble of its great ancestor and the sword will double its reach into 12 feet. The speed of the slashes with the sword will also greatly increase, meaning the slashes of this sword can only be followed with 3 tomoe or higher while this technique is active.
Notes:
~Can be used 1x
~Lasts 1 turn
~Chakra released from the sword is shaped into a blade that can cut through nearly anything.
~User may only use this technique in the same turn.
~No A-rank or above ninjutsu in the next turn.
~Due to the strain of this jutsu and -50 damage, the user wont be able to use taijutsu in the next two turns.
~User needs to master Taijutsu in order to hold this.
~Dr. House may teach this.
~Only kage or above may use this.

~ Quote the sword for any CJs ~

(Doton: Wāru Chikyū)Earth Release: Earth Whirlpool
Rank: S
Type: Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This is a massive scaled earth jutsu, where one can use to even trap summons like Manda. As the ground starts turning inwards on itself, it will create a giant earth whirlpool which will turn inwards at fast speeds and keeps on spiraling. As it spirals, it will manipulate the wind around and creates a giant wind vortex ontop of the spiraling ground. The wind vortex is established because of the high speeds of the spiraling ground. The middle part of the whirlpool may lower to a max of 20m.
Notes:
~Can be used 2x because of its scale
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~No higher then A-ranked doton can be used in the next turn.
~Due to its massive scale, only 2 techniques are allowed in the same turn.

~ Declined, similar techniques exist ~

(Han Kami han hito no ken) Fist of a Demigod
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Defense/Offense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90
Description: The user will slam his hands on the ground, having an extremely condensed/compressed/steel like quality erupt from the ground that will resemble of a giant arm, resembling Gedo Mazo's right arm. That means it is the same size as Gedo Mazo's right arm. The arm has a fair amount of brute strength, being able to tear off flesh respectively and sharp nails that allows him to go through most of the techniques. This arm was passed down from the Sage of the 6th Path to newer generations in order to provide protection from the Gedo Mazo. The user may take defensive purposes as having this arm erupt right underneath him and close its hand, having the hand to protect him and make a counterattack of having this arm punch the opponent with the user inside the closed hand. It may take offensive measures as having the arm crush the opponent. If the hand closes, it is airtight inside. To make it clear, the user may freely control the hand's path and the hand/fingers on the arm. If the hand isn't destroyed yet, it may stay for 2 turns on the battlefield, then the hand goes back into the hole where it erupted from.
Note:
~Can be used 1x
~Only two jutsus in the same turn.
~No A-rank or above doton in the next turn.
~Due to the strain of this jutsu and -50 damage, the user wont be able to use taijutsu in the next two turns.
~Dr. House may teach this.
~Only kage or above may use this.

~ Declined, OPed ~

Note to checker: If the "it may stay for 2 turns on the battlefield" makes it OPed, you're free to take it out. If Any minor changes need to be edited in order to approve these cjs, I got no problems with it.
 
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Lava Style: Lava Streams (Youton: Yōgan-ryū)
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: the users gathers a large amount of dense chakra into a ball the floats in front of him (the lava can be gathered from any lava source) the user can then manipulate it so that any number of dense, sharp lava streams (the number can range from 1 to 15) can burst out of the orb (the less there are the stronger they are) these will then shoot out at fast pace toward a desired target these can then be used to burn, restrain, distract or cut the enemy
Note: Move very fast
Note: can change direction mid use

~ Declined, restrictions ? ~

Lava Style: Viscosity Change (Youton:Neba tabi henka)
Type: supplementary
Rank: D
Range: Any
Chakra: +10
Damage: N/A
Description: by adding extra fire or eath chakra when performing/preparing a lava style jutsu the viscosity of the lava produced can be changed. if viscosity is decreased by adding more fire chakra the lava will flow more quickly because it is less dense however the concussive power behind it will be lessened due to the loss of density. the opposite will happen if more earth chakra is kneaded in because the earth will be melted less and as a result thicker.

Note: when used while preparing a tech it doesn't count as one of your 3 jutsu as it is a choice you make when using the lava jutsu not a separate jutsu.
Note: if used to change the viscosity after the tech is performed it does count as one of your three jutsu per turn
Note: if viscosity is increased then due to the added amount of earth chakra the lava jutsu will gain a plus one rank advantage to jutsu's that rely on releasing the concussive power to be effective (like many defensive earth jutsu) at the trade off of moving more slowly
Note: if you add more fire chakra the lava will be much hotter and move much more quickly but will be weak (lose one rank) against jutsu that rely on cancelling out concussive power
Note: can only be used once per turn

~ EVERYTHING counts as one of the three moves per turn ~
 
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Note on my custom: I know this has been attempted in the distant past by me, and maybe one other member, but I am positive that it has never been approved, or completely banned. Now is my chance to try and get these custom weapon's right, they arent ordinary, but I will try to explain throughly and completely to my best ability. Thank you, and enjoy ^^.

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( Honō no renkinjutsu-shi tebukuro, The Flame Alchemist Gloves | 炎の錬金術師手袋 )
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Varied
Chakra Cost: -
Damage Points: -
Description: The flame alchemist gloves are remarkably powerful fire-based weapon's. This unique style is possible due to many factor's leading to creating such power. The gloves are made of "pyrotex/ignition cloth", a fabric that is not affected by any sort heat or fire. Embroidered with unique flame chakra Transmutation Seal's, these gloves create a spark when the user rubs his fingers together and allow him to manipulate the concentration of oxygen in the air surrounding his target, raising its density to a level at which it becomes a volatile and flammable oxidizer, and creating narrow pathways of oxygen through which he can direct the ensuing flame that blossoms from the spark. The 'snap' sound is caused by the instantaneous speed at which the highly concentrated gases and sparks react together and pop (not the users fingers actually 'snapping', to common belief.)

While the Flame Alchemist Gloves cannot be used on rainy days because the humidity makes it impossible for his gloves to produce sparks, it becomes clear that water itself does not make the gloves entirely "useless". Using the transmutation fire seals on the gloves, the user is able to separate hydrogen atoms from the oxygen atoms in water molecules, isolating them into a highly combustible fuel and powerfully volatile oxidizer, respectively. Though this method can only be used when a large quantity of water is present in a relatively closed-off space (and not in the rain where the air is open and separating hydrogen and oxygen for the purpose of combustion would pose far too much danger to anyone in the vicinity), with an outside source of ignition such as a cigarette lighter or a match, the user could produce extremely powerful, localized explosions.

The user is also able to delegate each hand to a different flame effect, possibly due to a difference in hand dexterity. The right hand appears to allow for large explosive attacks, while the left allows for smaller, but strong and very accurate pinpoint flame attacks.

♦ The glove's can only be worn once per-battle.
♦ The seal's are charged for seven usage turn's total, which can be used throughout any time in the battle.
♦ The gloves are highly susceptible to wind and lightning techniques, both chakra nature's are sharp and can rip the gloves to shred's.
♦ Each blast of fire is fairly small, only covering a small targeted area, a bigger fire blast is cost for two Transmutation seal charges.

~ Declined, do not resubmit ~
 
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Raiton boruto - Lightning Release Bolts
Type:Offensive
Rank:A
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:The user quickly starts to gather his chakra in his palm and quickly start to quickly release a dozen of bolts of lightning towards his opponent which causes numbing effect as well as damage to the opponent the but they are unique in the way how they approach the opponent , they approach him in arc like shape and completely engulf him as the approach him from all the different angles and thus forming a circular pattern while attacking.
Note : Can only be used three times per battle
Note :Can only be taught by Gitanshu
Note : Must need mastery over Lightning element
Note : Can not use any S rank or higher Lightning base jutsu in the same turn
Note : Eight bolts are released towards the opponent
Note : They travel at the same speed of (Raiton: Gian) - Lightning Style: False Darkness mainly at a speed that any normal lightning attack does
Note: A little bigger (1.75 times) in width then that of (Raiton: Gian) - Lightning Style: False Darkness

Note: It requires three hand seals to be performed
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±± Declined ±± Sooo...if this uses bigger, stronger versions of Gian, why is this an A-Rank? Also, try not to post so many useless restrictions.


Katon netto- Fire Release Fire Net
Type:Offensive
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description: The user quickly starts to gather his chakra in his palm and quickly starts to release fire from his handand send that fire toward's the opponent and also insert's some extra chakra into it and when the fire is going to reach the opponent the user using shape manipulation transform it into a net made up of fire of diameter of approximately 5m and use it to trap the opponent with in it and due to it being made up of fire it causes deep burn to the opponent and can even be used to trap multiple opponents at the same time
Note : Can only be used three times per battle
Note : Can only be taught by Gitanshu
Note : Must need mastery over Fire element
Note : Can not use any S rank or higher fire base jutsu in the same turn
Note: It requires three hand seals to be performed

±± Declined ±± Sorry for this but there already exists a very similar technique...and a wind cannon technique just like this. Don't resubmit



(tsuwamono-shi-rudo rinji benso) Warriors shield special defense
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A

Description- The user quickly channels one of his basic five elemental chakra into his sword and mix it with the special defensive power of the shield and thus create a wall of 10*10 meter in front of him which is equal to S rank defensive barricade.
Note: Can only be used 3 times
Note: Must posses mastery over the element which is being used
Note: Can not use the element which has been used to create the defensive wall in the same turn
Note: Can only be used with the help of Warrior Shield


±± Declined ±± So many similar elemental defensive shields exist already. Yours is no different, just uses your sword.
Raiton boruto - Lightning Release Bolts
Type:Offensive
Rank:A
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:The user quickly starts to gather his chakra in his palm and quickly start to quickly release a dozen of bolts of lightning towards his opponent which causes numbing effect as well as damage to the opponent the but they are unique in the way how they approach the opponent , they approach him in arc like shape and completely engulf him as the approach him from all the different angles and thus forming a circular pattern while attacking.
Note : Can only be used three times per battle
Note :Can only be taught by Gitanshu
Note : Must need mastery over Lightning element
Note : Can not use any S rank or higher Lightning base jutsu in the same turn
Note : Eight bolts are released towards the opponent
Note : They travel at the same speed of (Raiton: Gian) - Lightning Style: False Darkness mainly at a speed that any normal lightning attack does
Note: It is little smaller to (Raiton: Gian) - Lightning Style: False Darkness

~Declined~ What? They're smaller than Gian yet they're long-ranged? The technique releases a "dozen" bolts of lightning but only 8? The description is incoherent and the restrictions are pretty silly.

New Submission

(Doton/Fuuton: Otoshibuta) – Earth Release/Wing Release: Dropping Lid
Type:Offensive
Rank:Forbidden
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:50
Damage:90[-20 to the user]
Description: This is an advanced version of dropping lid and is twice the size of a normal dropping lid and is much more heavier and thus deal a very high damage to the opponent and it is also surrounded by strong condensed wind chakra through it's surface area and the wind chakra is so sharp that if a opponent touches it will cause great pain to his hands and will cut the top skin layer and the opponent will not be able to weave any hand signs with that hand for one turn and because of the great pain caused he will not able to stay in contact with it for more than 1 or 2 second.
Note:Can only be used once.
Note:Can not use S rank or higher earth or wind base attack in the next turn it is used.
Note:No S rank in the same turn
Note:Can only be taught by Gitanshu
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(Sono Niiro Ontou Te) The Red Right Hand
Type: Weapon
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: This weapon is mainly for defensive and offensive purposes in Short Range combat. It's a multi-plated arm guard that runs up the side of the wielder's arm leaving no visible skin it is form fitting to the arm thus able to block thrown objects such as Kunai and Shuriken quite easily but if they are connected to an Explosive tag of some sort the user must still deal with that as the Guard won't block the explosion or flash. The Guard surrounds the arm and is made of two special types of metal both are quite malleable and versatile the metal has a special property; the metal is able to absorb the wielder's chakra storing it then infusing their punches with the chakra much to the same extent Sakura and Tsunade do but the user doesn't need to focus on the chakra level like Sakura and Tsunade, the Arm Guard does it for the wielder maintaining chakra flow from the user to the Guard. The punches are enough to crack bones and bruise and batter the body. The stored chakra can also be focused into one massive punch deemed "La Muerte" in which the chakra gathers at the finger tips as the user closes his fist the chakra will infuse with the user's hand, knuckles and wrist. He then punches and the guard releases the chakra as he punches causing an explosive outburst of power. The punch is not so much driven by muscle power but by the chakra that is infused into the punch. The user must make contact with the opponent for the punch to effect the opponent if done so the punch is enough to shatter bones and bruise and bash internal organs. La Muerte is easily able to break multiple ribs in one shot and bruise and bash internal organs such as the lungs, heart, and stomach depending on where the punch lands if used properly this can make breathing much harder and put excess pressure on the internal organs making quick movements painful and in some cases almost impossible. La Muerte is comparable to an A rank attack as that is how much chakra is focused into the punch. The Arm Guard can also be used defensively to block Basic Taijutsu attacks up to B rank but can only be done 3 times per battle. La Muerte kind of resembles Jugo's CM punches in a way as well as Tsunade and Sakura's chakra infused punches. The blades on the guard are sharp enough to easily cut flesh and defend against sword strikes as well as kunai and other bladed weapons.
Notes:
-While active the user cannot use anything above an S rank jutsu, due to the slight drain of chakra from the user.
-La Muerte counts as a jutsu and can only be used 3 times never in the same turn
-Punches while wielding this weapon can easily break bones
-Blocking of Taijutsu attacks counts as a jutsu as only a jutsu can block a jutsu
-Can be activated only once during the battle and deactivated once during the battle
-The turn the guard is deactivated the user can only use A rank attacks due to the chakra absorbing property leaving him slightly offset.
-Can only be activated for a span of 6 turns​

I fixed some spelling and grammar mistakes (which I bolded to make sure that you don't think I changed any of the inner workings of the guard itself). I edited the appearance of "La Muerte" but it still has the same effects and nothing has changed about it's workings. (I just wanted it to look different than my cj for this weapon (El Directo) I also removed the "Can only be used by myself and the no hand seals" restrictions and replaced them with more versatile and fitting restrictions. Also I ranked it down to A rank as the damage points on the weapon is for "La Muerte" and not the weapon itself.


Video reference for what I want La Muerte to look like.


±± Declined ±± Yeah and lowered the rank to teach it to others without senseiship. Don't do that again. The technique and its abilities as well as resctritions are all pertaining to a S-Rank. I won't allow you to lower it as it makes no sense whatsoever.
(Sono Niiro Ontou Te) The Red Right Hand
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This weapon is mainly for defensive and offensive purposes in Short Range combat. It's a multi-plated arm guard that runs up the side of the wielder's arm leaving no visible skin it is form fitting to the arm thus able to block thrown objects such as Kunai and Shuriken quite easily but if they are connected to an Explosive tag of some sort the user must still deal with that as the Guard won't block the explosion or flash. The Guard surrounds the arm and is made of two special types of metal both are quite malleable and versitile the metal has a special propety; the metal is able absorb the wielder's chakra storing it then infusing their punches with the chakra much to the same extent Sakura and Tsunade do but the user doesn't need to focus on the chakra level like Sakura and Tsunade, the Arm Guard does it for the wielder maintaining chakra flow from the user to the Guard. The punches are enough to crack bones and bruise and batter the body. The stored chakra can also be focused into one massive punch deemed "La Muerte" in which the chakra gathers at the top of the arm guard in a mass of blueish chakra that powers down through the arm guard and into the wielder's punch/hand the chakra in no way forms a blast but absorbs into the Arm Guard and then into the user's hand. The punch is not so much driven by muscle power but by the chakra that is infused into the punch. The user must make contact with the opponent for the punch to effect the opponent if done so the punch is enough to shatter bones and bruise and bash internal organs. La Muerte is easily able to break multiple ribs in one shot and bruise and bash internal organs such as the lungs, heart, and stomach depending on where the punch lands if used properly this can make breathing much harder and put excess pressure on the internal organs making quick movements painful and in some cases almost impossible. La Muerte is comparable to an A rank attack as that is how much chakra is focused into the punch. The Arm Guard can also be used defensively to block Basic Taijutsu attacks up to B rank but can only be done 3 times per battle. La Muerte kind of resembles Jugo's CM punches in a way as well as Tsunade and Sakura's chakra infused punches. The blades on the guard are sharp enough to easily cut flesh and defend against sword strikes as well as kunai and other bladed weapons.
Notes:
-While activated the user cannot perform jutsu that require handseals
-La Muerte counts as a jutsu and can only be used 3 times never in the same turn
-Punches while wielding this weapon can easily break bones
-Blocking of Taijutsu attacks counts as a jutsu as only a jutsu can block a jutsu
-Can only be wielded by Howard
-Can be activated only once during the battle and deactivated once during the battle when deactivated the user can perform Hand Seals again
-Can only be activated for a span of 6 turns​

Update/resubmit of above

(Sono Niiro Ontou Te) The Red Right Hand
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This weapon is mainly for defensive and offensive purposes in Short Range combat. It's a multi-plated arm guard that runs up the side of the wielder's arm leaving no visible skin it is form fitting to the arm thus able to block thrown objects such as Kunai and Shuriken quite easily but if they are connected to an Explosive tag of some sort the user must still deal with that as the Guard won't block the explosion or flash. The Guard surrounds the arm and is made of two special types of metal both are quite malleable and versatile the metal has a special property; the metal is able to absorb the wielder's chakra storing it then infusing their punches with the chakra much to the same extent Sakura and Tsunade do but the user doesn't need to focus on the chakra level like Sakura and Tsunade, the Arm Guard does it for the wielder maintaining chakra flow from the user to the Guard. The punches are enough to crack bones and bruise and batter the body. The stored chakra can also be focused into one massive punch deemed "La Muerte" in which the chakra gathers at the finger tips as the user closes his fist the chakra will infuse with the user's hand, knuckles and wrist. He then punches and the guard releases the chakra as he punches causing an explosive outburst of power. The punch is not so much driven by muscle power but by the chakra that is infused into the punch. The user must make contact with the opponent for the punch to effect the opponent if done so the punch is enough to shatter bones and bruise and bash internal organs. La Muerte is easily able to break multiple ribs in one shot and bruise and bash internal organs such as the lungs, heart, and stomach depending on where the punch lands if used properly this can make breathing much harder and put excess pressure on the internal organs making quick movements painful and in some cases almost impossible. La Muerte is comparable to an A rank attack as that is how much chakra is focused into the punch. The Arm Guard can also be used defensively to block Basic Taijutsu attacks up to B rank but can only be done 3 times per battle. La Muerte kind of resembles Jugo's CM punches in a way as well as Tsunade and Sakura's chakra infused punches. The blades on the guard are sharp enough to easily cut flesh and defend against sword strikes as well as kunai and other bladed weapons.
Notes:
-While active the user cannot use anything above an S rank jutsu, due to the slight drain of chakra from the user.
-La Muerte counts as a jutsu and can only be used 3 times never in the same turn
-Punches while wielding this weapon can easily break bones
-Blocking of Taijutsu attacks counts as a jutsu as only a jutsu can block a jutsu
-Can be activated only once during the battle and deactivated once during the battle
-The turn the guard is deactivated the user can only use A rank attacks due to the chakra absorbing property leaving him slightly offset.
-Can only be activated for a span of 6 turns​

Knocked it back up to S rank since that was the only problem with the submission. Also I thought as long as a weapon didn't say "Can only be used by so and so" you could let others use it regardless of rank as the rule counts toward CJ and not CW but meh.
~Declined~ Restricting yourself from using Forbidden-ranked jutsu doesn't do much at all. This already lasts six turns and has little to no true restrictions.
 
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Summoning technique: The Herd(mure)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S Rank
Range: Contact point with object
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A but can charge into D rank defenses.
Description: The users summons a herd of Addax up to five Addax, the Addax are at the size of a horse, the user will use them as horses climbing on there back and riding on them to go from location to location. The five Addax are: Marty the grumpy one, Jake Marty’s happy go lucky twin, they both have green eyes brown colored fur, and golden colored horns, the only difference is that Marty has a lightning shaped scar on his left side while Jake has it on his Right side. Austin the athletic one of the pack, he has black eyes, grey skin, and ivory(kinda like dirty yellow) colored horns. Henry the womanizer of the pack he has blue eyes, gold colored fur, and Silver colored horns. Last but not least there is Dido the shy one of the group yet the most powerful and fastest of the pack and the most favored by mangekyo byakugan, he has silver eyes, grayish colored fur, and green eyes.

-Can charge through D rank defenses.
-Lasts 4 turns except when in ninja world as much as required.
-Can summon either one or five at a time.
-must have signed Addax contract.


Boat ship(kobune fune)
Type: Supplementary
Rank E rank
Range: Riding
Chakra:N/A
Damage: N/A
Description This is a boat that is as big as the titanic it contains weapons in it it can be used for traveling the sea the boat special trait is the ability of it to change size from the size of the titaninc to the size of a small ship.

-usable only in ninja world and new age role play
-usable by me and my crew and those i allow

Lightning Release: Lightning Ant(Raiton: ari)
Type: Attack
Rank: B rank
Range: Sort-mid
Chakra: That of B rank
Damage: That of B rank
Description: The user uses his lightning chakra to create a several lighting made ants(max of 10), the ants are as the size of a normal ant but can be seen due to the glowing of lightning chakra, and they can reach to the speed of one rank beneath that of the user. The ants sole and only purpose is to electrocute the opponent and paralyze them for 10 seconds.

-Can only be used 4 times per battle.
-Must state how many mice are created
- The mice can be created either in the air or the ground or anywhere on the field but they must be created at short range although they can last until short range,

~ In all of these techniques you've shown a stunning lack of comprehension of CJ submission. I do not care about the names of some addax nor their womanizing habits, and I fail to see why an S-rank technique can merely go through D-rank barriers. Your whole understanding of range is wrong, as is writing "that of Brank" etc. etc. For god's sake you cannot have a ship of all things, and the ants technique exists already in other forms. Also, just because you're in the ninja world does not mean your summons can be any different from normal. =/ Fix the first description, do not submit the ship =.= again, or the ants. ~
I gave the addax names to make them appealing and the main use of these was for traveling in the ninja world and the D rank tech is just for laughs.
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Summoning technique: The Herd(mure)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A Rank
Range: Contact point with object
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The users summons a herd of Addax up to five Addax, the Addax are at the size of a horse, the user will use them as horses climbing on there back and riding on them to go from location to location. The five Addax are: Marty the grumpy one(Lightning affinity), Jake Marty’s happy go lucky twin(wind affinity), they both have green eyes brown colored fur, and golden colored horns, the only difference is that Marty has a lightning shaped scar on his left side while Jake has it on his Right side. Austin the athletic one of the pack(Fire Affinity), he has black eyes, grey skin, and ivory(kinda like dirty yellow) colored horns. Henry the womanizer of the pack(Water Affinity) he has blue eyes, gold colored fur, and Silver colored horns. Last but not least there is Dido the shy one of the group(Earth Affinity) yet the most powerful and fastest of the pack and the most favored by mangekyo byakugan, he has silver eyes, grayish colored fur, and green eyes.

-Can charge through B rank defenses of the same element and A rank of the opposite affinity
-Lasts 4 turns
-Can summon either one or five at a time.
-must have signed Addax contract.


±± Declined ±± 5 summons with one summoning technique?


Buster Star
Type: Weapon
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The sword was created by a great blacksmith in the purpose of gifting it to his student mangekyo byakugan, the sword has an arc shaped edge with a hollowing in it, it's blade is carved from special material giving it a grey color, it has a golden colored holding are. The sword was made so that it can only be wielded by mangekyo byakugan, and that it has special shape changing techniques(only shape it can change to is drill shape).
-can only be wielded by mangekyo byakugan.
-must be stated in bio to use.
Dropping
looks like this
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±± Declined ±± Why is this a CW?

Gold Mana:Maximum Drill
Type: Offensive
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user sends chakra to his sword and turns the tip of the sword into a drill shape and attacks his opponent with it the attack method is hitting the opponent with the point of the sword and sending chakra to it causing the tip to rotate and cause damage to the opponent, when it hits the opponent it also sends the opponent flying into mid range distance from the user.
-must have buster star weapon.
-Changing the sword shape take two slots.
-Usable twice per battle.


±± Declined ±± similar technique exists.
 
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Summoning Animal: Sparrows
Scroll Owner: –Severus Snape-
Other Users who have signed contract:
Summoning Boss if existing: None yet
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None yet
Description and Background:

The sparrows are a family of small passerine birds, Passeridae. They are also known as true sparrows, or Old World sparrows, names also used for a genus of the family, Passer. They are distinct from the American sparrows, which although similar in appearance are placed in the family Emberizidae, and from a few other birds sharing their name, such as the Java Sparrow. Many species nest on buildings, and the House and Eurasian Tree Sparrows in particular inhabit cities in large numbers, so sparrows may be the most familiar of all wild birds. They are primarily seed-eaters, though they also consume small insects. Some species scavenge for food around cities and, like gulls or Rock Doves, will happily eat virtually anything in small quantities.

Generally, sparrows are small, plump, brown-grey birds with short tails and stubby, powerful beaks. The differences between sparrow species can be subtle. Members of this family range in size from the Chestnut Sparrow (Passer eminibey), at 11.4 centimetres (4.5 in) and 13.4 grams (0.47 oz), to the Parrot-billed Sparrow (Passer gongonensis), at 18 centimetres (7.1 in) and 42 grams (1.5 oz). Sparrows are physically similar to other seed-eating birds, such as finches, but have a vestigial dorsal outer primary feather and an extra bone in the tongue. This bone, the preglossale, helps stiffen the tongue when holding seeds. Other adaptations towards eating seeds are specialised bills and elongated and specialised alimentary canals.

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(Ninjutsu-Moujuu higyou) Ninja Arts-Beast Strike
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30 Chakra
Damage: 60 Damage
Description: The user after making 6 hand seals thrusts his right hand forward while molding chakra with his left and releases a wave of chakra formed like the head of a cat with its jaws open wide.The jaws open wide enough to be able to capture an opponent.
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±± Declined ±± similar techniques exist
 
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Lava Style: Lava Dragon (Youton: Yogan Ryu)
Type: offensive
Rank: A-rank
Range: short-long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: the user pours his fire and earth chakra into the ground and turns a large portion of the earth into thick, scorching hot lava (if there is already a lava source this part of the jutsu isn't neccesary). the user than shapes this lava into the shape of a massive dragon that rises out of the lava and speeds toward the enemy. this dragoncan also shoot large C-rank bullets of lava out of its mouth
Note: jutsu is slightly bigger than water dragon bullet technique
Note: obviously the bullets count as one of the 3 jutsu per turn


±± Declined ±± already exists
 
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(Daton: choukokubutsu ) - Earth Style: Statue Reincarnation
Type: Offensive
Rank:S
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description: The user performs serval hands, that take a total of 1 turn to complete. And when the user has completed the handseals without stopping or being interupted, the user slams their both of their hands on the ground. Making a giant Samuria, as tall as Manada appear but when the sumuria appears it cant move until the user add's 50% of their chakra to it. When the chakra is added to the Samuria, he comes alive. And then the user becomes unmoveable since it takes a great amount of concentration to control the samuria and make it do what the user wants. The Samuria comes with one katana to side, and he is able of using C- rank Earth justu
- No Earth Justu for the rest of the match
- If samuria Statue is broken takes user 1 turn to regain movement
- User can only user C-rank justu, after Samuria statue is used

±± Declined ±± Daton? New element there? Also, description doesn't make sense and is a mess.


(Water: sune-ku ) - Water Style: Snake Assualt
Type: Offensive
Rank:S
Range:Short-Long
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description: The user, perform several handseals and then releases a large amount of their chakra into the water. Where the user shape manupliate it into 3 snakes made of water, the snakes act acording to the user's thoughts so they can change they're attack in a instant.
- Snake can be repaired as long as the user keeps adding chakra
- Snakes are the size of manada
- Takes one turn for the handseals to be complete

±± Declined ±± Manada? In my language thats a herd of cows. Also, This is already very similar to existing techniques


(Water: yougu ) - Water Style: Shurikans Whirlwind
Type: Defensive/ offensive
Rank:S
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description: the user performs the Ox-Tiger handseal, adn then release a large amount of chakr aintot eh water and manupliate it into around the user where the user will shape manupliate it into 10 shurikcans that circle around the user at fast speeds. And the user can manupliate one of the Shurikans to attack and enemy just by pointing towards them. And the user can replenish the shurikans just by adding chakra to the water.
- Only 20 water shurikans can be made
- If water is master, the user only has to perform the Ox hand seal


±± Declined ±± I refuse to check your submissions if you don't make an effort to write properly. Shurikcans? chair aintot eh ?? Replenish?
 
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(Ninjutsu:Kemuri Ooi) Ninja Art: Smoke Shroud
Type:
Rank: C
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost :15
Damage Points: N/a
Description: The user releases a large amount of charka filled smoke from his wrist launchers.The smoke will fill up the battlefield until it completely obscures the enemys sight.The user cannot see through the smoke but can sense the enemys presence due to it being chakra filled.The smokescreen lasts for 4 turns unless blown away.
-Can only be used by Drench
-Lasts 4 turns

±± Declined ±± Done countless times before for water, wood, sand, ice, etc etc.


(Ninjutsu:Kitsuen Satsu) Ninja Art: Smoking Kills
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost :30
Damage Points: 25(Per turn)
Description: The user expells a large amount of smoke from his wrist launchers.The smoke will quickly form a large dense smokey cloud near the enemy.The cloud fills mid range and anyone caught inside the cloud will take 25 damage every turn that they stay inside the cloud.The cloud lasts for 3 turns unless blown away.
-Can only be used by Drench
-Lasts Three Turns
-Anyone caught inside takes 25 damage(Per turn)

±± Declined ±± OP


(Suiton:Yuukai) Water Release:Transfusion
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost :30
Damage Points: 60
Description: After using the Hydrification Technique on his arm, the user stabs his arm through the the enemy in a water like state and then solidifies it making a large hole in the enemys body.The effects of this would be similar to as if somebody used chidori to stab through someone.The attack can also be used on other parts of the body such as single fingers.
-Can only be used by Drench or those taught
-Can be used 3 times
-Must be member of Hozuki clan
-Must use Hydrification Technique first.


±± Declined ±± Excuse me? Please rephrase and reword it. Its incomprehensible.
 
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Magen: Hando no Shinigami (Demonic Illusion: Hand of the Death God)
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40 (-10 per turn active)
Damage: 80
Description: This technique was derived from Yondaime Hokage's Dead Demon Seal. The user will create the Bore → Hare Seals and then clap his hands together to initiate the illusion. Once the illusion is initiated the victim will begin to experience an excruciating wave throughout their body. While this happens the victim will see and feel their hands and feet becoming black and the pain in those sections of their body will feel even more excruciating. The process the victim feels himself going through is similar to the affects of the Dead Demon Seal as it happened on Orochimaru's arms. The process of corrosion due to the necrosis. The corrosion of the victims hands and feet spreads up their arms and legs and onto their body. Once the corrosion of this technique has spread to the entire body from the neck down, the world around the victim will become a dark mist of bloody crimson and the Death God will appear before the victim and place his hand on the their head. The victim will feel as if the soul from his head is being pulled out and the corrosion of the rest of his body from the neck up will occur.
~This technique lasts 4 turns unless broken. During the first turn the corrosion of the hands and feet will occur, the second turn the victims arms and legs will be immobilized completely due to the corosion. The third turn takes care of the body and the neck and the fourth turn the Shinigami appears and finishes the process with victim causing the corrosion to spread onwards up the neck to their head.
~This technique can only be used twice per battle and one must skip two turns before attempting the second time.
~If used twice the user cannot use genjutsu for the rest of the match
~No other genjutsu can be used while this technique is in play

±± Declined ±± I like it but Corrosion and Necrosis are different things. You need to find a new "word" to describe it. Other than that, seems ok


~Resubmission~

Shangen: Ketsueki no Menokataki (Beautiful Illusion: Blood of the Enemy)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30 (+5 for each person above 2)
Damage: N/A
Description: This technique was specifically designed for several opponents in the case of being outnumbered or simply to make the battle easier. The caster will make the Horse → Bird seals to initiate the illusion. The illusion will first have the victims experience the sensation a huge gust of wind mixed with dust as if their opponent is using a wind technique. The resulting seensation will block their vision (no physical harm comes from the gust). Once the victims regain their sight, both victims will look upon their comrades and see the image of the shinobi they were fighting and see their comrades to be their enemies and they will see an image of their partner having been killed. In the case there is more then two opponents being manipulated by this jutsu, each shinobi will see several copies of their opponent, as if they've used the Shadow Clone Jutsu. While they fight their comrades as enemies, the actual caster of this jutsu will be out of their sight and vision. This jutsu is meant to cause mass confusion and chaos among ranks and hopefully getting the enemy to injure their own lines or even kill them. While this illusion is in play the caster can move about freely as a result.
~Since this jutsu has a range of people greater then one, intense focus is required meaning no other genjutsu can be used while this one is active
~Can be used 3 times in a match
~This jutsu can only be cast on a maximum of 4 people at any given time
~This technique can only be taught by Reborn

±± Declined ±± This is an S-Rank illusion and thus needs appropriate restrictions. Its too powerful for an A-Rank. Also, what will happen if you use it against only one opponent? what if the opponent has clones? how will it work. This should only work against multiple enemies...as in different shinobi


Genjutsu: Kyuumin Shobatsu(Illusionary Technique: Dormant Punishment)
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will channel their chakra into their opponent's chakra via the Rat seal. The user's chakra will then remain dormant until the victim uses a technique B-rank or above. The resulting amount of chakra needed will cause the user's chakra to activate like a switch to cause the affects of the illusion. As the victim begins to channel their chakra for the technique they use, they will see several spiked chains shoot up and restrain them, wrapping all around their body and dragging them to the ground. The chains will gradually become tighter and tighter and the victim will feel the spikes of the chains sinking deeper into their bodies and also the lack of air from being restricted. Eventually, after so much tension, the victims will fall unconscious.
~This technique remains dormant for 3 turns only
~The technique (if activated) will render one's opponent unconscious after 2 turns.
~Can be used 3 times per battle

±± Approved ±±


Magen: Shini Yuragi no Jutsu (Demonic Illusion: Mind Tremor Technique)
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: This is a technique meant to cause temporary confusion and also to have lingering affects on one's opponent after the illusion is released. The user will make the Dragon → Hare seals to initiate the illusion. Once cast, the victim will experience their vision to blur and appear to be as if it were being shaken and spun around in a very chaotic manor. The victim's chakra will be disrupted in their brain to a point where the damage causes a slight tremor in their brain, which will also result in a severe headache. The headache mixed in with the vision distortion will cause the victim to be very unbalanced while trapped in this illusion and also makes it difficult for them to focus while affected by this technique.
~Can only be used twice per battle
~The inability for the victim to focus completely due to the severe headache and vision equilibrium distortion means they can't focus on techniques above B-ranked while in the state of this technique.
~This technique lasts 2 turns, after the second turn, the victim will succumb to vomiting as the stress becomes too much of them, the inducing of vomit will be the breaking factor.
~After being released from the illusion, the victim sustains a level of impaired balance and distortion for the same amount of time as they were were affected by the technique.
~The user of this technique can't use genjutsu for the next 3 turns after this jutsu is cast.
~The user cannot use any other genjutsu while this technique is active nor can he use techniques above A-rank


±± Declined ±± As it stands its oped. Look at what i bolded. Basically, even if the opponent releases the technique he is still affected. Thats immediate decline. Also, don't you feel A-Rank for this one is more appropriate? I would prefer to use it more times than to have it more powerful. But that is personal "taste".
~Resubmission~

Shangen: Ketsueki no Menokataki (Beautiful Illusion: Blood of the Enemy)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 each person above 2)
Damage: N/A
Description: This technique was specifically designed for several opponents in the case of being outnumbered or simply to make the battle easier. The caster will make the Horse → Bird seals to initiate the illusion. The illusion will first have the victims experience the sensation a huge gust of wind mixed with dust as if their opponent is using a wind technique. The resulting seensation will block their vision (no physical harm comes from the gust). Once the victims regain their sight, both victims will look upon their comrades and see the image of the shinobi they were fighting and see their comrades to be their enemies and they will see an image of their partner having been killed. In the case there is more then two opponents being manipulated by this jutsu, each shinobi will see several copies of their opponent, as if they've used the Shadow Clone Jutsu. While they fight their comrades as enemies, the actual caster of this jutsu will be out of their sight and vision. This jutsu is meant to cause mass confusion and chaos among ranks and hopefully getting the enemy to injure their own lines or even kill them. While this illusion is in play the caster can move about freely as a result.
~Since this jutsu has a range of people greater then one, intense focus is required meaning no other genjutsu can be used while this one is active
~Can be used 2 times in a match
~This jutsu can only be cast on a maximum of 4 people at any given time and can only be used on different victims
~This technique can only be taught by Reborn

±± Approved ±±


Magen: Shini Yuragi no Jutsu (Demonic Illusion: Mind Tremor Technique)
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This is a technique meant to cause temporary confusion. The user will make the Dragon → Hare seals to initiate the illusion. Once cast, the victim will experience their vision to blur and appear to be as if it were being shaken and spun around in a very chaotic manor. The victim's chakra will be disrupted in their brain to a point where the damage causes a slight tremor in their brain, which will also result in a severe headache. The headache mixed in with the vision distortion will cause the victim to be very unbalanced while trapped in this illusion and also makes it difficult for them to focus while affected by this technique.
~Can be used 4 times per battle
~The inability for the victim to focus completely due to the severe headache and vision equilibrium distortion means they can't focus on techniques above S-rank while in the state of this technique and will have difficulty standing and moving
~This technique lasts 2 turns, after the second turn, the victim will succumb to vomiting as the stress becomes too much of them, the inducing of vomit will be the breaking factor.
~The user of this technique can't use genjutsu for the next 3 turns after this jutsu is cast.
~The user cannot use any other genjutsu while this technique is active nor can he use techniques above A-rank


±± Approved ±± Had to edit to make it more reasonable
 
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(Genjutsu) Nenshou Oni: Burning Devil
Type:Offensive/Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:N/A
Description: When Kimi flashes her golden oni tattoo at her opponent, they instantly fall into a genjutsu where they get the sensation that their body has burst into flames. The panic causes them to lose control of their body interupting anything they were doing. After 1 turn the stress and sensation will break the genjutsu if they have not already released themselves.The trigger for this genjutsu is visual, human nature causes the opponent to look when shown.
~Taught by Melizzle
~usuable by Kimi
~Usuable twice per battle
~Declined~ Remove the bolded; Its been said, time and time again that genjutsu does not allow you to control how someone will react physically unless its sharingan genjutsu. Also, remove the word "instant" and include hand seals to cast it.
(Genjutsu) Touketsu Oni: Frozen Devil
Type:Offensive/Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:N/A
Description: When Kana flashes her blue oni tattoo the opponent will instantly fall into an illusion where they are frozen in a block of ice with their apendages spread. They are completely frozen unable to move to make hand seals.The hot ice burns the body and numbs the body as well. The trigger for this genjutsu is visual, human nature causes the opponent to look when shown.
~Taught by Melizzle
~Usuable by Kana
~Usuable once per battle
~Declined~ Remove the word instant and include some hand seals.
(Genjutsu) Hinketsushou: Anemia
Type:Offensive/Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:30
Damage:N/A
Description: The user holds their hand out to the opponent triggering the technique. The opponent falls into a genjutsu where they see the user fly quickly towards them. As soon as the user's illusion reaches the opponent's body, or the opponent attacks the illusion, the illusion burst into blood. Then liquid forms 3 bloddy humanoid figures next to the opponent. Immediately when formed, they bite the opponent. The opponent becomes drowsy as if they've lost a lot of blood, decreasing their attack and reaction time by 50%. For example if the user is Kage rank, they will become Jounin rank and be able to use the appropriate speed tables, jutsu, etc. of the reduced rank.
~Taught by Melizzle
~Lasts 2 turns
~Able to take effect once per battle
~No genjutsu for 2 turns when attempted
~Declined~ Do not resubmit.
 
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(Fuuton:Kyuutou Teishi)-Wind release:Jump Prohibitor
Type:Supplementary
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:N/A
Description:The user will perform the Ram hand seal and exhale a large stream of wind a little above the opponent and the perform another hand seal wich will make the previously exhaled stream of wind take the form of a large,flat just around 20 cm above the opponents head.The disc will cover a 10m radius around the opponent.Once formed the disc of wind will start spinning rapidly unabling the opponent to jump and move upwards.If someone touches the disc of wind it causes deep cuts and wounds.
~Note:If not destroyed the disc will remain on the field for two turns.
~Note:No S rank wind techniques the same turn this is used.
~Can be used two times per battle.


±± Declined ±± If it causes deep cuts, why is there no damage in the technique?
(Fuuton:Kyuutou Teishi)-Wind release:Jump Prohibitor
Type:Supplementary
Rank:B
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra:20
Damage:40
Description:The user will perform the Ram hand seal and exhale a large stream of wind a little above the opponent and the perform another hand seal wich will make the previously exhaled stream of wind take the form of a large,flat just around 20 cm above the opponents head.The disc will cover a 10m radius around the opponent.Once formed the disc of wind will start spinning rapidly unabling the opponent to jump and move upwards.If someone touches the disc of wind it causes deep cuts and wounds.
~Note:If not destroyed the disc will remain on the field for two turns.
~Note:No S rank wind techniques the same turn this is used.
~Can be used two times per battle.
~Declined~ Takes the form of a large, flat what? Disk? I'd like you to reduce the radius, considering this technique is of B rank. Either reduce it or increase its rank.
I added the damage.
 
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(Kuchiyose:Batoidea:Krieg)- Summoning: Batoidea : Krieg
Type: Summon
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: n/a
Description: Krieg is a mediocre sized Ray who resembles a torpedo Ray in both looks and abilities, Krieg is roughly 18 meters long from tip to tail, with a pectoral wingspan of 24 meters, and his skin pattern resembles that of a cheetah, vibrant yellow with black spots. Krieg is fairly adept in the use of Raiton, and is able to use all Raiton jutsu up to and including A rank without the use of handseals, albeit slapping his pectoral fins together to replace handseals and using his Pectoral fins to execute the jutsu if need be. Krieg’s main ability, is that when using a Raiton jutsu, he automatically merges his natural ability to produce lightning currents with it, adding +20 damage to all Lightning jutsu used by Krieg. Krieg is also immune to all Raiton jutsu A rank and below, absorbing the lightning into his electric glands, and using the lightning to produce a large spherical omnidirectional blast of lightning that is released from all directions of his body, effectively creating a lightning bubble that spans out to mid range, stunning and blasting everything, the blast being equivalent to S rank. Krieg is however susceptible to S rank and above lightning jutsu, albeit he takes greatly reduced damage. Krieg is immune to his own current. Kreig's tail stinger is also indestructible. Additionally, he can speak both fluent English and Japanese, able to communicate with its summoner easily.

Restrictions
-Krieg can only be summoned once per battle
-Krieg can only stay on the field for 4 turns.
-Krieg can fly through the air for three turns through the use of chakra, on the fourth he must either be in water or he disappeared in a poof of smoke

±± Declined ±± Imune to A-Rank lighthing? Lol. Why do you have it adding +20 to lightning technqieus and then have it only use A-Rank lightning? Why all that if the end result is S-Rank the same? The omnidirectional blast needs restrictions and explanations.

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(Kuchiyose: Batoidea: Driller)- Summoning: Batoidea: Driller
Type: Summon
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: n/a
Description: Driller is a large sawfish, a type of ray that highly resembles a shark with a flattened pronged outstretching nose. Driller is roughly 75 meters long, with his saw like nose comprising ⅓ of his body length and being nigh on indestructible. Driller has a pectoral fin span of roughly 18 meters. Drillers main ability is to coat things through primary or secondary contact in one of the five basic elemental chakras resulting in the thing coated, having a coloured shroud that equates to A rank elemental chakra, that can be used for defense and offensive purposes, and takes on the properties of the element used. Driller can be summoned above the opponent, nose first, as he falls, he begins to rotate frantically while coating himself in one of the five basic chakras, this forms a drill with Drillers Saw like nose at the epicentre of the drill, the drill coated in the chosen element, and falling down on the opponent, devastating everything within the immediate vicinity. Additionally, he can speak both fluent English and Japanese, able to communicate with its summoner easily.

Restrictions
-If Driller coats anything other than himself, it counts as one of the 3 moves per turn.
-Driller can stay on the field for 2 turns.
-Driller is able to fly through the air by applying small amounts of chakra.
-Driller can only be summoned once per battle

~ Left for Scorps ~


±± Declined ±± A drill, long range, with any element that is almost the size of gamabunta? =_= NO!
~Resubmitting~

(Kuchiyose:Batoidea:Krieg)- Summoning: Batoidea : Krieg
Type: Summon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: n/a
Description: Krieg is a mediocre sized Ray who resembles a torpedo Ray in both looks and abilities, Krieg is roughly 18 meters long from tip to tail, with a pectoral wingspan of 24 meters, and his skin pattern resembles that of a cheetah, vibrant yellow with black spots. Krieg is fairly adept in the use of Raiton, and is able to use all Raiton jutsu up to and including S-rank without the use of handseals, albeit slapping his pectoral fins together to replace handseals and using his Pectoral fins to execute the jutsu if need be. Krieg is also immune to all Raiton jutsu B rank and below, absorbing the lightning into his electric glands, and using the lightning to produce a large spherical omnidirectional blast of lightning that is released from all directions of his body, effectively creating a lightning bubble that spans out to mid range, stunning and blasting everything, the blast being equivalent to A rank. Krieg is able to choose to make gaps within the blast. Kreig's tail stinger is very resistant. Additionally, he can speak and thus is able to communicate with its summoner easily.

Restrictions
-Krieg can only be summoned once per battle
-Krieg can only stay on the field for 4 turns.
-Krieg can fly through the air for three turns through the use of chakra, on the fourth he must either be in water or he disappeared in a poof of smoke
-Omnidirectional Blast can only be used 2 times per battle after absorbing a lightning attack.
-All of his moves count towards the users move count

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±± Approved ±± edited...many things.

(Kuchiyose: Batoidea: Driller)- Summoning: Batoidea: Driller
Type: Summon
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: n/a
Description: Driller is a large sawfish, a type of ray that highly resembles a shark with a flattened pronged outstretching nose. Driller is roughly 35 meters long, with his saw like nose comprising ⅓ of his body length and being nigh on indestructible. Driller has a pectoral fin span of roughly 12(6 meters per wing, 15 in total) meters. Drillers main ability is to coat things through primary or secondary contact in one of the five basic elemental chakras resulting in the thing coated, having a coloured shroud that equates to A rank elemental chakra, that can be used for defense and offensive purposes, and takes on the properties of the element used. Driller can be summoned above the opponent, nose first, as he falls, he begins to rotate frantically while coating himself in one of the five basic chakras, this forms a drill with Drillers Saw like nose at the epicentre of the drill, the drill coated in the chosen element, and falling down on the opponent, devastating everything within the immediate vicinity. Additionally, he can speak both fluent English and Japanese, able to communicate with its summoner easily.

Restrictions
-If Driller coats anything other than himself, it counts as one of the 3 moves per turn.
-Driller can stay on the field for 2 turns.
-Driller is able to fly through the air by applying small amounts of chakra.
-Driller can only be summoned once per battle

±± Declined ±± Don't resubmit. You didn't even listen to what i said.
 
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Ototon: Kuno no Oto (Sound Release: The Sound of Kunai)
Type:Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra: 15
Damage: +1 per kunai
Description: The user channels their chakra into kunai. Their chakra then acts as a solid wall of sound wave barrier between the force of gravity that immediately surrounds the kunai as they travel towards the desired location, allowing the kunai to travel at the speed of sound.
*Travels at 315 Speed.

~ Declined. As I said. Sound is unaffected by gravity, but that does not mean it can negate it. ~

Ototon: Attōtekina Obujekuto (Sound Release: Resounding Object)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: +10 Damage to object
Description: Taking in the same principle as "The Sound of Kunai", the user channels their chakra into an object and performs a hanseal. Their chakra then acts as a Solid Wall of sound wave barrier between the force of gravity that immediately surrounds the object as it travels towards the desired location, allowing the object to travel at the speed of sound.
*Travels at 395 Speed.

~ Same as above. ~

Ototon: Boryūmukontorōru - Kon'ya Wa Tōku· Hādo (Sound Release: Volume Control - Pump up the Volume)
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40 (Only if increase in sound)
Description: The user, after producing sound waves, will move one of their hands in such away that it appears as if they are decreasing or increasing the sound of a speaker (Clockwise to increase; Counterclockwise to decrease). Doing this allows the user to change the decibel of any sound waves produced so that it becomes either extremely loud and deafens the opponent or extremely soft to where the target could no longer hear it. Increasing the sound can cause the opponent's eardrums to blow, causing extreme pain and deafness.

~ Interesting. Needs some restrictions. ~


~Leaving for Emperor.
 
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My first CW :eek: I highly appreciate any guidance if it is to be declined ^^ Thank you!

(Nagai Rosuto) - Long Lost
Type : Weapon
Rank : A
Range : Short
Chakra cost : 30
Damage points : 60
Description : Nagai Rosuto in its current state is a pair of chakra-metal katanas that are capable of fusing together into a single katana. Long ago, Nagai Rosuto was split into half, hence two incomplete katanas and then re-molded into two complete katanas. The katanas were distributed to different people and as time passed, they soon found themselves with the same wielder, Gondar. Gondar has discovered that by placing them nearby and channeling the same user chakra into it, they were capable of fusing into a single katana. The fused Nagai Rosuto was twice as strong as before and had a larger chakra capacity. Thanks to its improved strength and larger chakra capacity, samurai techniques gain a single rank increase. In order to defuse Nagai Rosuto, the user has to channel his or her chakra into it and pull the chakra apart, making two portions of chakra within and the de-fusion is done.

(Must be taught by Gondar)
(Can only be wielded by Samurais)
(Fusing of Nagai Rosuto counts as a technique usage)
(User must state what form it is at the start of the battle if he or she wants to use it or it could be included within the user's biography)
~Declined~ I will not allow a single rank increase for all samurai techniques. In your re-submission please think of something out of the box or I will be forced to DNR it. As it stands, its just another sword that boosts something which we have thousands of.
(Katon : Sakashima) - Fire Release : Reverse
Type : Offensive / Supplementary
Rank : A
Range : Short - Long
Chakra cost : 30
Damage points : 60
Description : With this technique, the user can instead create a gigantic wall of flames behind the target of the user's liking. To perform this technique, the user will have to perform a single handseal and charge the fire chakra behind the enemy. As that is done, the user holds his hands out and pulls back, as if pulling a rope. The gigantic wall of flames than crashes towards the front like a tidal wave, burning and killing anyone who dares stands within its vicinity. Just like the name implies, it doesn't travel forward but backwards. It can also be used to just shield the user after being created.

(Must be taught by Gondar)
(Can only be used three times per battle)
(The user will suffer the same consequences if used just short-range and directed towards the user)
~Declined~ Fire style does not work that way. You need some way for the fire to actually travel towards your target not fire chakra itself. You are confusing fire chakra to earth and wind chakra that can be manipulated away from the user.
 
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