Re: Custom Jutsu Submission
(Ranton: Pootaru no Porcella)- Storm Release: The Portal of the Porcella
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long (Can be made anywhere in the atmosphere)
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A (+20 to techniques or weapons)
Description:
The user will release their own storm chakra outward into the atmosphere around the battlefield. By user the water vapor in the air, the user will create a cloud and then channel their lightning chakra within the cloud, mixing the elements together creating a full blown storm cloud, hence the actual storm release jutsu. The cloud that is created is around five meters in size (radius, max size as well), the cloud has a dark color with light blue electricity ragging along the body of the storm cloud. The electricity within the cloud is extremely lethal and is unfocused, hence its random appearance and movement along the storm cloud.
The cloud appears like a portal, and can appear anywhere around the battlefield simply because storm clouds are able to appear anywhere around the terrain; by allowing the storm cloud to feed off of the water vapor in the air to create the storm cloud (since storm release has water part of the elemental KG, we have seen this happen in the canon list), we have seen similar transactions happen where clouds appear out of the air (e.g. Storm Release: Thunder Cloud Inner Wave). The main usage of this storm portal is quite simple in battle usage. Anything that passes through the storm cloud will come out the other end with an unfocused electrical current running along the body, making even the most simplest of metal weapons much more lethal, giving them a much more shock property in attacking usage. This can also be used on rocks (both chakra infused but must be lower in rank of the jutsu and non-chakra infused) since unfocused lightning can run along the body of certain rock jutsus. It can also be used with small amount of water, not much however (either of lower rank of the jutsu itself or all natural rain), it also depends on logical size, since at most the portal can grow up to 5 meter large in radius anything of water that might overtake it in size, will render the portal's ability usage even if the rank is less. The rain will have a numbing property due to the unfocused lightning which can shock and slow down anyone unlucky to have encountered the rain. This can be a double-edge sword however, mainly because of how the lightning within the storm cloud is unfocused even the opponent can have weapons or techniques pass through the portal and enhance their own techniques as well. Making this technique best used with proper awareness. This technique will not fill well with elements such as wind, fire, or lightning (since it will not effect lightning jutsus at all) or KG/CE of the same sorts.
Note: Can only be used three times in battle
Note: Can only be taught by Noni
Note: Can last for two turns before dispersed on its own
Note: Requires one turn cool down before re-use
Declined, first bold isn't even needed, we all know what Storm release is, no need to explain it to us. Second colored is unnecessarily worded lengthy; all you are doing is creating a portal on the field, no need to write all the rest. You mention the "main use" of this, then what other uses does this have? And cut the description down, you include a lot of trivial information that doesn't even matter in regards to the CJ.
(Raiton: Kaminaru Tenpu)- Lightning Release: Thunder Attachment
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30 (+10 for every more technique infused with)
Damage: N/A (+10 to the techniques)
Description: A passive ability with earth techniques that either- protrude from the ground, come out the body of the user (e.g. mouth or limbs), or by a portal from the sky (e.g. Dropping Lid) the user will activated an ability where, in similar manner to the Earth/Lightning Release: Electric Rock Pillar, the user will create a current of lightning around the earth structure as the technique is being performed. This is done by simply injecting their chakra into the earth technique. This ability can stay active for a short duration with every earth technique performed. The lightning being mainly unfocused as well will make the earth structures more so act as a conductor and not destroy the earth constructs due to this, so it harbors around the body, not harming the earth constructs. The ability itself simply allows the earth techniques to gain a certain electrical compound for offensive capabilities mainly to shock and paralyze anything unlucky enough to come into contact with the earth structure ravaged by the lightning. The earth structures themselves as they protrude from the ground will have a bright yellow aura around its body as it erects with electrical currents randomly running along the body which in most cases can be heard. This technique makes certain techniques become much more lethal, a simple spike will be able to both pierce and numb the opponents overall movement (where they were pierced). The extended amount of lightning used on the earth structure also depends on the rank of the structure used, a simple C-Rank earth structure would have to obviously be infused with much less lightning then an S-Rank lightning. However the lightning does not produce a killing intent, since it is unfocused similar to Nagashi, the most it can do is paralyze and numb the opponent. So though there might be more lightning on the earth structure due to its size, it still holds the same attacking potency of only being able to, at most, numb/paralyze the opponent. It mainly comes down to the type of earth technique used, hence why this technique remains single ranked, the lightning power itself does not change, just the amount used for the earth techniques. This technique can only be used with solid like earth structures and not liquid like material (e.g. mud) since they are not good conductors of lightning. This technique can be used on anything earth like, both KG and CE alike, as long as it remains logical and can conduct lightning (e.g. Steel).
Note: Can only be used three times per battle
Note: The ability can last up to two turns
Note: Requires one turn cool down before re-use
Note: Must have lightning mastered
Note: Must have earth mastered
Note: Can only be taught by Noni
Pending, leaving for Scorps
Declined DNR
(Ranton: Bodi no Kaosu)- Storm release: Body of Chaos
Type: Offense/Supplementary/Defense
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra: 20 (+10 for every turn active)
Damage: N/A (+10 to taijutsu and kenjutsu attacks)
Description: The user will channel their storm chakra towards every end of their body creating almost a light blue aura, emitting from head to toe. What this technique's main purpose is supplementing the user when it comes to close quarter combat. The aura itself is extremely potent and powerful storm lightning. There will even be flashes of electricity appearing around the body (mainly for cosmetic reasons), which in some cases can produce a sound. The aura being a bright blue light, also allows the user to have a sort of makeshift body flash light when it comes to being in the dark. This technique does not cope extremely well when it comes to actually corresponding with other jutsus, hence why it would not make for a well thought out shield against techniques or combining them, however it can produce a good "armor" against body techniques and regular weaponry attacks (The storm chakra would act to rip through metal constructs). Since if anyone unlucky enough was to make physical contact with the aura they will be shocked, issuing a sharp numbing pain. Though when it comes to the amount of damage actually dealt by the technique mainly depends on just how long the opponent was exposed to the aura, a simple touch can momentarily numb the area but a long lasting grip can potentially paralyze that whole limb that was exposed. The technique being pretty precise, would only cause damage to the designated limb which came into contact and only that limb. This technique can also be modified for the user's needs, for example instead of engulfing the whole body the user can simply cover single limbs or joints at a time making for a much more stealth infested tactic, damage however would remain the same either or. This can be expanded upon with the usage of kenjutsu attacks, where the user is able to engulf the metal constructs (whether from a kunai or a blade) with the blue aura of storm chakra increasing its cutting efficiency and shock output, the construct would have to stay in contact with the user, the moment the user does let go of the weapon then the storm chakra will disperse from the weapon. This technique saps chakra from the user for every turn left active but in turn maintains a well balanced attacking potency. This technique by no means increases speed or strength of the user, it simply adds on damage to certain body art attacks producing an electrical damage, or for simple defensive uses.
Note: Can only be taught by Noni
Note: Can only be used three times
Note: Requires Taijutsu up to B-Rank
Note: Requires Kenjutsu up to B-Rank
Declined, do not resubmit
Seen enough variants of armor-like techniques.
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. I simply took off everything, when it comes to armor usage and made it purely tai and ken usage.
(Ranton: Bodi no Kaosu)- Storm release: Body of Chaos
Type: Offense/Supplementary/Defense
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra: 20 (+10 for every turn active)
Damage: N/A (+10 to taijutsu and kenjutsu attacks)
Description: The user will channel their storm chakra towards every end of their body creating almost a light blue aura, emitting from head to toe. What this technique's main purpose is supplementing the user when it comes to close quarter combat. The aura itself is extremely potent and powerful storm lightning. There will even be flashes of electricity appearing around the body (mainly for cosmetic reasons), which in some cases can produce a sound. The aura being a bright blue light, also allows the user to have a sort of makeshift body flash light when it comes to being in the dark. This technique does not cope extremely well when it comes to actually corresponding with other jutsus, hence why it would not make for a well thought out shield against techniques or combining them. Though when it comes to the amount of damage actually dealt by the technique mainly depends on just how long the opponent was exposed to the aura, a simple touch can momentarily numb the area but a long lasting grip can potentially paralyze that whole limb that was exposed. The technique being pretty precise, would only cause damage to the designated limb which came into contact and only that limb. This technique can also be modified for the user's needs, for example instead of engulfing the whole body the user can simply cover single limbs or joints at a time making for a much more stealth infested tactic, damage however would remain the same either or. This can be expanded upon with the usage of kenjutsu attacks, where the user is able to engulf the metal constructs (whether from a kunai or a blade) with the blue aura of storm chakra increasing its cutting efficiency and shock output, the construct would have to stay in contact with the user, the moment the user does let go of the weapon then the storm chakra will disperse from the weapon. This technique saps chakra from the user for every turn left active but in turn maintains a well balanced attacking potency. This technique by no means increases speed or strength of the user, it simply adds on damage to certain body art attacks producing an electrical damage, or for simple defensive uses.
Note: Can only be taught by Noni
Note: Can only be used three times
Note: Requires Taijutsu up to B-Rank
Note: Requires Kenjutsu up to B-Rank
Declined, this essentially only has one restriction as the last 2 are cosmetic as well as the first one nor does it have any time limit.
