Re: Custom Element's Jutsu
Re-Submitting
Note : Mig gave me his permission to resubmit this via MSN
Shinju: Shiro No Bin (Pearl Release: The White Jar)
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: A legendaryJar size of Gaara´s gourd, white with green markings made of solid pearl material which has been buried hundreds of years beneath the ocean and contains tens of unique shells with strong pearl chakra and they are able to keep producing little pearls where they live and bread inside the Jar, the Jar itself has been wielded by the Elders of Shells who have strong pearl chakra. Shells from the Jar are able to produce huge amount of pearls to keep unlimited amount of little pearls so the user of the Gourd is able to manipulate pearls as his/her wish, the Elder of Shells always carried this Jar to the battle fields and merged his pearl chakra to the Gourd so that he will be able to manipulate the pearls inside for many usage (attack, defense and supplementary), but the effect is the Jar drain the user chakra every time the user use it that’s why only a strong chakra possession and balance control ability able to use this Jar, meaning only Kage Rank. He passed down some of these Jars to those who have been loyal to the Shells kingdom and trained by the Elder himself how to use this Jar. The Elder made several of these Jars so that each user can have one Jar.
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Notes:
- To use this Jar, person has to learn how to use it from ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
- This Jar can be destroyed by a strong lightning jutsu
- This Jar is considered as Weapon so the user cannot use his/her CW in the same battle he uses this Jar
- Every time the user use pearl jutsu using this Jar, it will drain -10 chakra and after 7 turn use the user will be exhausted and lower their speed
- After 3 turn use the Jar, the user can't use the Jar for 1 turn to give the pearl time to reload the pearls chakra production, that's applied to the following turns.
- Can only be use for 10 turns max no more than that or the Jar will be destroyed afterwards.
~Declined~ Okay, first of all you still left the word 'Gourd' a few times in the description. Second of all at the part I highlighted; That is a very useless description you are trying to pass off as a restriction. You know why? To use the element you already need to be Kage rank so I would suggest you remove that unnecessary text in the submission. The requirement to use this Jar is also another obvious requirement when teaching the element to one of the two students. As for the last few highlights I have a question. Are you confusing turns with how many times per battle the jar can be used? And if not the you really need to re-write that because as it stands it is a mess to read and understand clearly.
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Shinju: Ame No Shinju (Pearl Release: Rain of Pearls)
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damge Points: 40
Description: The user releases from his Jar (or from one of the shell summons) a giant pearl, then the user sends the giant pearl into the sky, scattered it into pearl powder upon the sky and transform the powder into tiny winy thousands of pearls then pour them down from the sky aiming the opponent to buried him/her alive.
Notes:
Must be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
~Declined~ Okay I want you to reword the transforming into powder thing because that's not what your approved CE submission is about. You can manipulate solid pearl not powdered form. As for the thousands of pearls I need a more defined amount. Lastly, clarify the actual size of the "giant pearl". How big is this "giant pearl?
Shinju: Kyojin Maruishi (Pearl Release: Giant Boulder)
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then merges them into giant boulder made of pearls half size of Gamabunta with sharp spikes all around the boulder and the user sends this boulder to the opponent with fast speed and the boulder will roll over the opponent brutally.
Notes:
Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~ & Oasis Nara
Can only be used 4 times per battle
~Declined~ You do realize how long it would actually take to release such a ridiculous amount of little pearls to form a boulder made of pearl half the size of Gama, right? You need to drastically lower the size of the boulder, and you have yet to define the speed, you simply changed it from "high" to "fast".
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Shinju: Shiro daburufangu (Pearl Release: Double Fang)
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Gourd (or Shell Summon), then form a white sharp fang in the user right and left hands, this fang are very sharp and able to pierces through solid, Steel or metal object.
Notes:
Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
Can only be used 5 turns and vanished
Can only be use 2 times per battle
~Declined~ Reduce the turns before they vanished if you want this allowed to be used twice per battle. And you really need to define the shape and size of these fangs. How many blades? How long are the sharp edges? etc, etc
Shinju: P1 Bunshin "Petron" (Pearl Release: P1 Clone "Petron")
Rank:B
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:20
Damage Points:N/A
Description: P1 clone is a copy of the user but in shape of a white pale person. The clone itself can only use pearl release according of the user gain and knowledge of the pearl release, it can also utilize any pearl release even without having the white gourd or the shell summoning up until S-Rank pearl release.
Notes:
Can only be taught by Oasis Nara
Can only be used 5 turns and vanished
Can only be use 2 times per battle from the Jar / Shell Summoning
~Declined~ Still didn't fix what I asked for.
Shinju: P2 Bunshin "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Clone "Prime")
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl into the air then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl when it about to land while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird double size of Gamakichi, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl bunshin manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with high speed while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.
Note: can only be use 3 times
Note: Must have Shell summoning contract
Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
Note: Count as two turn as the user have to summon his giant shell
Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
~Declined~ I don't see how pearl is light enough to fly, let alone at high speeds as you mentioned. Lastly, the pearl clone hasn't been approved so how is this the second form of it?
(Pāru no tsuin ken) - Twin sword of Pearl
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: N/A
Damage: 60
Description: As the user granted to manipulate pearl so he is able to extract two rare special twin blade made of pearl from deep down the sea which only certain people have the ability to do that. this twin sword one came out from a white pearl and the other came from the black pearl, this sword will infuse with the user pearl manipulation ability then able to release pearl jutsu (white and black Pearl release) up to S-Rank Pearl jutsu without any shell summoning but each use of this twin sword they shall drain the user chakra and lower their speed ability, this twin sword doesn’t have to be summoned but the user always wield it in their back.
Note: Must have Shell pearl manipulation ability
Note: Shall drain -10 chakra each use
Note: The user can use them until their chakra run out meaning only KG rank can use it and only 8 time use
Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
~Declined~ How are these swords generating enough pearl to create the techniques? What's "-5 speed" mean? 5 levels from our speed chart? Do not refer to the speed chart in future submissions. And also, if this is your custom weapon you need to include it in the "Type" section.Re Subbmitting
Shinju: P2 Bunshin "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Clone "Prime")
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird double size of Gamakichi, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl bunshin manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with high speed while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.
Note: can only be use 3 times
Note: Must have Shell summoning contract / White Jar
Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
Note: Count as two turn as the user have to summon his giant shell or one turn if he using the white Jar
Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
~Declined~ I still don't see how pearl is light enough to fly, let alone at high speeds as you mentioned. And you do know that a clone is a near perfect copy of the users appearance, correct? What you are describing in this technique is a pearl bird not a clone.
"I'm erased the flying pearl part"
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Shinju: Shiro No Bin (Pearl Release: The White Jar)
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: A legendary Jar size of Gaara´s Jar, white with green markings made of solid pearl material which has been buried hundreds of years beneath the ocean and contains tens of unique shells with strong pearl chakra and they are able to keep producing little pearls where they live and bread inside the Jar, the Jar itself has been wielded by the Elders of Shells who have strong pearl chakra. Shells from the Jar are able to produce huge amount of pearls to keep unlimited amount of little pearls so the user of the Jar is able to manipulate pearls as his/her wish, the Elder of Shells always carried this Jar to the battle fields and merged his pearl chakra to the Jar so that he will be able to manipulate the pearls inside for many usage (attack, defense and supplementary), but the effect is the Jar drain the user chakra every time the user use it that’s why He passed down some of these Jars to those who have been loyal to the Shells kingdom and trained by the Elder himself how to use this Jar. The Elder made several of these Jars so that each user can have one Jar.
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Notes:
-This Jar can be destroyed by a strong lightning jutsu
-This Jar is considered as Weapon so the user cannot use his/her CW in the same battle he uses this Jar
-Every time the user use pearl jutsu using this Jar, it will drain -10 chakra per turn
- Can only be use for 10 turns max no more than that or the Jar will be destroyed afterwards.
~Approved~
Shinju: Ame No Shinju (Pearl Release: Rain of Pearls)
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 20
Damge Points: 40
Description: The user releases from his Jar (or from one of the shell summons) a giant pearl 50 feet long diameter, then the user sends the giant pearl into the sky, scattered it and transform the giant pearl into tiny winy one thousand of pearls then pour them down from the sky aiming the opponent to be buried alive.
Notes:
Can only be use 4 times
Can be use onto multiple opponents that are very close to each other
~Approved~ Never ever include that the opponent dies in the description of the technique. I edited the highlighted to help its approval. If you are not satisfied feel free to drop me a VM/PM and I will change my verdict.
Shinju: Kyojin Maruishi (Pearl Release: Giant Boulder)
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Jar (or Shell Summon), then merges them into giant boulder made of pearls size 25 Feet long with sharp spikes all around the boulder and the user sends this boulder to the opponent with 150km/hour speed and the boulder will roll over the opponent brutally.
Notes:
Can only be used 4 times per battle
~Declined~ 25 feet long in what? diameter? and please compare to narutoverse speeds. I don't think you realize actually how fast 150km/hour is.
Shinju: Shiro daburufangu (Pearl Release: Double Fang)
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user releases massive amount of little pearls from inside the Jar (or Shell Summon), then form a white sharp fang in the user right and left hands just looks like Guren Crystal fang the different is this a pale white color fang and the fang itself 30cm size, the sharp edges 15 cm long in human normal hands with a single blade in each hands, this fang are very sharp and able to pierces through solid, Steel or metal object.
Notes:
Can only be used 3 turns and vanished
Can only be use 2 times per battle
~Approved~
Shinju: P1 Bunshin "Petron" (Pearl Release: P1 Clone "Petron")
Rank:B
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:20
Damage Points:N/A
Description: P1 clone is a copy of the user but in shape of a white pale person. The clone itself can only use pearl release according of the user gain and knowledge of the pearl release, it can also utilize any pearl release even without having the white gourd or the shell summoning up until S-Rank pearl release.
Notes:
As P1 using his body to release the pearl jutsu so it can only be used 3 turns and vanished
Can only be use 2 times per battle from the Jar / Shell Summoning
~Declined~ You need to restrict the amount of times it can use jade techniques because reducing the turns before it vanishes won't solve anything. What if the prime clone uses six big scaled jade techniques during that time? He doesn't have enough body mass to accomplish such things.
Shinju: P2 Katachidzukuru "Prime" (Pearl Release: P2 Shape "Prime")
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user will summon his giant shell which it will throw out a giant pearl with size 25 feet long into the ground then the user perform 5 serial hand seal then push and placed his right hand into the giant pearl while his left hand hold his right wrist and yell “PRIME” to manipulate the giant pearl and shape it into a giant bird about 25 feet tall, Prime is the 2nd form of pearl level manipulation called the “P2”, prime able to fly into the sky high with his white wing in high speed 200 km/hour while the user ride it, Prime shape pale white and have the ability to shoot out rapidly pearl ball size of a basket ball from the sky into the opponent and the pearl ball will crush everything within the impact, prime also able to defend from similar rank jutsu using it wing.
Note: can only be use 3 times
Note: Must have Shells summoning contract
Note: Can only last 2 turn in field then auto disappear
Note: No other pearl tech while the user ride Prime
Note: Count as two turn as the user has to summon his giant shell
Note: Can only be use by Oasis Nara
~Declined~ 25 feet long in what? Diameter? This is one is very close to approval I just need you to compare the speeds in which it can travel to narutoverse because 200 km/hour is simply ridiculous.
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