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Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Updating some old techniques. I can't quote them, as they're from the old thread, but I'll provide an exact link and a copy-pasted version.
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(Fūton ♦ Kaminaritataku) – Wind Release ♦ Thunderstrike
Rank: A-Rank
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to defend against Sound by bending the Wind itself. By infusing chakra into the air, the user can create transparent shapes of wind that will reject Soundwaves by acting as shock-absorbers and redirecting the pressure. The user, applying the same concept on a larger scale, can also use this technique to compress attacks composed of some form of pressure, such as Sound and Wind. This can increase the power and density of the technique in question to such an extent that its rank is increased by one (1). Unfortunately, this also makes the technique in question much easier to avoid, given that it has decreased in size.
-Can only be used three (3) times per battle.
-Can only be used once every second (2) turn.
-Can only be used to strengthen techniques of A-rank and below.
-Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

X-Declined-X Remove the part where you increase a techniques rank or empower it in any way.

(I know it's a lot of edits, but the purpose remains. I've just fixed most of the horrible spelling and grammar =/)



Re-attempting to edit an approved technique. The technique was approved in the old thread, so I can't quote it, but I'll leave the link and bold the edits.


(Fūinjutsu: Tōtemu Bakuyaku) – Sealing Technique: Explosive Totem
Rank: A-Rank
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user focuses chakra through his body, marking an object he's in physical contact with as a 'totem', causing the Kanji for 'explosion' to appear on the object. When the user activates it, the totem will use the chakra stored inside it to destabilize itself violently, causing an huge explosion of chakra.
-Can only be used two times per battle.
-Activating the totem does not count as a move if it's done immediately after the seal is applied. Otherwise, it counts as a move.
-Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
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✘ Leaving for Xylon ✘


X-Approved-X
Reattempting to update some old technique. I can't quote it, as it's from the old thread, but I'll provide a link.
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(Fūton ♦ Kaminaritataku) – Wind Release ♦ Thunderstrike
Rank: A-Rank
Type: Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: N/A
Description: This technique allows the user to defend against Sound by bending the Wind itself. By infusing chakra into the air, the user can create transparent shapes of wind that will reject Soundwaves by acting as shock-absorbers and redirecting the pressure. The user, applying the same concept on a larger scale, can also use this technique to compress attacks composed of some form of pressure, such as Sound and Wind.
-Can only be used three (3) times per battle.
-Can only be used once every second (2) turn.
-Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
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✘ Approved ✘
keep in mind that it can't be used to redirect wind or sound techniques, just absorb them or nullify them. so i changed the type to a "Defense" instead of Supplementary, if i ever see this technique used to redirect a wind or sound technique i'll decline it.


(There's nothing to bold, as I've simply removed the parts I was asked to remove.)

Updating an old technique. Same as before;

Advanced Inuzuka Senses | Kōdona Inuzuka Kanchi
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 30 (+5 every round)
Damage points: N/A
Description: This technique is an advanced form of the heightened Inuzuka senses and can only be performed by members of the Inuzuka Clan whom have achieved full mastery of their Clan's techniques. This technique requires physical contact with the users Ninken, and it’s based around the principle that Inuzuka Clan members are able to mix and share their chakra with their Ninken, and the other way around. The user focuses greatly on the bond he and his Ninken shares and absorbs almost all its chakra, leaving it completely drained and unable to battle any further. The great presence of canine chakra in the users' body, will greatly increase the users sense of smell and hearing to a level that is far more advanced than even the most experienced and talented Inuzuka Clan members. This means that the user is, for example, able to hear the opponent’s heartbeat. Because of the massive animal presence in the users' chakra network, the user inherits a small part of his Ninkens “6th sense” (the sense that allows dogs to foresee storms, for example) which allows him to block out unnecessary sounds like explosions. The user is able to adjust his hearing and smell by controlling the chakra flow to his ears and nose.
-Can only be used by a member of the Inuzuka clan.
-Can only be used once.
-Lasts for the rest of the battle.
-The users ninken cannot move or battle for the rest of the battle after this technique has been used. Because of this, the user cannot use his ninken (or any ninken) for the rest of the battle.
-No Inuzuka techniques can be used while this technique is active, nor after it's been deactived.
-Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
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✘ Declined ✘
No, keep the original version.


Once again, an update:

(Senpō ♦ Kamikaze) - Sage Art ♦ Divine Wind
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A (10 every turn)
Description: The user performs two handseals while spreading great amounts of Wind chakra into the air around him and mixing it with Natural Energy. When the user feel like it, he sends the Wind towards his target as a great gust of air. The gust covers a great area and moves at incredible, though natural, speed. While the gust itself is harmless, prolonged exposure to the Natural Energy in the Wind causes petrification to those who cannot control Natural Energy. The gust moves in a circular pattern around the field to remain active. During the first (1) turn of exposure, the opponent should begin to cough and feel heavier and clumsy as dust-molecules inhaled turns to stone alongside all body hair, the tips of fingers, toes, ears and nose. During the second (2) turn of exposure, the opponent should begin to feel pain and nausea as the blood thickens and skin turns to stone. On the third (3) turn of exposure, the opponent should feel excruciating pain as muscles, nerves and eyes succumb to the petrification-process.
-Useable once (1) per match.
-Can only be used in Sage Mode.
-Reduces the effect of Sage Mode by two (2) turns.
-No Senjutsu techniques while this technique is active.
-Lasts for a maximum of three (3) turns.
-Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.
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✘ Declined ✘
Keep the original.
 
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[Genjutsu: Yuui Hia] - Illusionary Arts: Can't hear
Type: Offensive
Rank: B-rank
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: The user channels his chakra to his opponent's mind, this said the user with the use of his chakra within his opponent's mind puts the opponent within a genjutsu. This genjutsu effects on the opponent's hearing, causing the opponent to hear nothing at all for a specific amount of time.
Note: Lasts for 3 turns

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±± Declined ±±
Similar to existing techniques.

[Genjutsu: Adobansudo Sacchi] - Illusionary Arts: Advanced sense
Type: Offensive
Rank: A-rank
Range: Self
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: Such as some of NB genjutsu techniques, the user puts himself inside a genjutsu. This genjutsu gives the user the ability to increase a sense of his own. This ability that is given to the sense makes it able to do thing, normal senses that any normal humans possess can't do. However as a disadvantage the user is forced to weaken another sense of his own.
Abilities:
  • When increasing the user's sight, the user becomes able to see anything that is up to 50 meter, clearly as of it is short ranged to him.
  • When increasing the user's hearing the user becomes able to hear any slight thing that happens within short to long range even if it is the move of a kunai.
  • When increasing the user's smelling the user becomes able to smell any slight thing that happens within short to long range.
Drawbacks:
  • When weakening the user's sight, the user becomes blind.
  • When weakening the user's hearing, the user becomes unable to hear anything at all.
  • When weakening the user's smelling the user becomes unable to smell anything at all.
  • When weakening the user's tasting the user becomes unable to taste anything at all.
Restrictions:
Note:To increase a sense the user have to lower another sense and to increase two senses the user is forced to lower two.
Note:The max amount of the senses that could be increased are only two.
Note:Lasts only 3 turns.

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±± Declined ±±
Not only was this tried before as you would need to finish NB Genjutsu training up to restricted for it. DNR

‡ [Kumo Vongola Ringu] - The Cloud Vongola Ring ‡
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The Cloud Vongola Ring is a very unique weapon. It was created by the Vongola Primo who is the leader of the Luciano Family. Like any other ring, The Cloud Vongola Ring possesses a metallic color. It also possesses a very unique symbol in it's surface, a cloud symbol that is carved in it. However it is not made of iron or steel, it is created by a very unique mineral that possess no name however this mineral allows the Ring to store a great amount of chakra with in. This said, with the use of this chakra that is within the ring the user gains the ability to sense anything/one within short to long range as long as the user wears it. Another use of the chakra is that the user could use it to gets out of the genjutsu however it has drawbacks to the sensing ability because of using the chakra within the ring.

ʊ If the user took of the ring from his finger he can no longer use the sensing ability of the ring in the fight he is using it on even if he rewears it.
ʊ Can only be used by Kamishiro and whoever has the permission to do so.
ʊ Using the ability to release the user from genjutsu 3 times causes the ring to lose it's ability to sense in the battle.
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DNR. No sensing weapons.
 
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[Sourukyaribā] ~ SoulCalibur
Type : Weapon
Rank : Forbidden
Range : Short
Chakra : 50
Damage : 90
Description :
Soul Calibur is a fairly long sword, but still only a short range weapon. It is Easily Handled with one hand and the user is capable to multitask with the other hand whilst wielding this blade in the other.
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Chakra can be easily concentrated into it as the sword allows the user to. Making it able to cut through objects such as thing metal e.g Kunai, Shuriken and other weapons that also have Chakra concentrated through it, unless the opposing weapon is at the same rank and has chakra concentrated through it, this weapon cannot cut through it.


Soulcalibur can, cut through certain elements attacks. It is strong at cutting through B rank or below
Earth
Ice
Wood
Techniques and can block S rank Techniques

Soulcalibur is not able to cut through or block the rest of the elements not listed on that list.
Soulcalibur can strengthen most elemental attacks by the user by + 20 damage though Soulcalibur must be in contact with this technique until it hits the opponent, if it is out of contact with the technique before it hits the opponent it doesn't add on the extra damage.

Restrictions

SoulCalibur is especially weak against Fire so cannot block or cut through any of these techniques and will force itself away from any kind of fire and if attacked by fire and hit by it, it become unusable for 4 posts
(-80 Damage)

Only LonelyAssassin Can wield this sword

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✘ Declined ✘
No chakra infusable swords allowed anymore, and no forbidden ranked weapons as well, don't resubmit.


Summoning Animal : Fisher
Scroll Owner : LonelyAssassin
Other Users who have signed the contract : N/A
Summoning Boss if existing : N/A
Other Summoning Animals Tied to contract : N/A
Description: Fisher are usually dark brown in color. Males oftentimes have a lighter grizzled coloration on the face, head and over the shoulders. The longer guard hairs in the fur are 1 1/2 to 2 inches on the body and 1/2 inch longer on the tail. The fur on males is much coarser than on the females and both are darkest on tail and legs. Two small, white patches of fur are found in the front armpit areas.

Fisher have 38 teeth. Five toes register in fisher tracks and the inside toes are smaller and placed behind the other four. The fisher cannot retract it's claws and they are usually dulled somewhat by constant contact with the ground and rocks.

~Approved~



Summoning Technique: Buck the Weasel Boss (Kōatsu itachibosu)
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary / Attack
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage points: N/A (+30 when with dagger)
Description:
Buck was a small furry weasel that had a long body, tail and a set of short limbs. His long body was flexible and versatile for any survival situation.
He is no bigger than 75cm
Blood is swiped across the tattoo of the weasel contract signers on the users body to summon Buck.
He comes with smoke bombs and a small dagger (in pic) he can use up to A Rank Earth jutsu's with handseals and is a little skilled in Taijutsu (C-Rank)

-Can only be summoned once per battle
-Can only be on the battlefield for 5 turns
-Weasel Summoning can only be taught by LonelyAssassin
Buck :
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✘ Declined ✘
What do you mean by his body is flexiable and versatile for any survival situation? that needs to be removed, and for the love of god make your description like other people, use periods and commas don't leave a line after every little sentence it's confusing and makes it look unorganized, reduce times to be on the battle field to 4 instead of 5, i'll leave Taijutsu, but define that he's only able to use normal strong fist Taijutsu up to C-rank, and no NB Taijutsu techniques, and no EIG techniques.
 
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Kuro Nodo Komadori: Senpai Seijin (Black-Throated Robin: Elder Sage)
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long Range
Chakra: 40 Chakra
Damage: N/A
Description:
The user wipes his/her blood on the hand that he/she has the summoning tattoo on. He/she will then perform the Boar-Dog-Bird-Monkey-Ram and summon The Elder Sage The ruler of all Black-Throated Robin's. The Elder Sage is a true 100% Black-Throated Robin and is a giant standing at 45 meters tall. He is also very old. He has a Red face, throat and upper breast with a brown, red, and blue crown and nape, and a Black Zigzagged mark on the neck. The upper parts are grey, and the underparts black to dark grey over the abdomen and under the tail coverts. The bill and legs are black, and the eyes are dark red. The plumage is reminiscent of a cuckoo-shrike but the black neck marking is diagnostic.
The Elder Sage is a L. obscura Species in the Genus Luscinia.

Abilities:
~Elder Sage can use Katon up to S Rank
~Able to talk
~Because of his wing strength he can deflect any weapons thrown at him as well as any C rank attacks by flapping his powerful wings by creating a strong gust of wind.
~The summoner can ride on his back while flying
~When dispersing instead of the average white smoke, Elder Sage, when dispersed, erupts in a fire storm

Restrictions:
~Must have signed the Black-Throated Robin contract
~Can only be summoned 1 time per battle
~Only the current onwer of the Black-Throated Robin contract can summon the Elder Sage but have to learn the technique from the previous owner (Unless the current owenr is the creator)
~No other Black-Throated Robin can be summoned at the same time as Elder Sage
~The Elder Sage can stay on the battle field for 6 turns
~Because of his age, as each turn passes while Elder Sage is summoned his power weakens (1st turn S rank, 2nd turn A rank, 3rd B rank, 4th C rank, 5th D rank, 6th D rank+dispersed as soon as the user's last jutsu is preformed
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✘ Declined ✘
Make the summon last 4 turns on the field max, mention if he's able to use Fire techniques up to S-rank including the ones that require handseals or not, remove that whole fire storm eruption when dispersing, it will be misused and won't allow that, you could just add erupting in black smoke for effects lol, make the flapping wings to deflect attacks count as a move and limit the number of times it can be used, remove that last restriction, it's meaningless and doesn't make any sense, what does the "Short-Long range" refer to exactly?


Summoning approval ~ ~

Katana Reikon (Blade of Souls)
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid Range
Chakra: 40 Chakra
Damage: N/A
Description:
Said to be forged by the Reaper himself, this scyord had been lost in time and to everyone. It was hidden in ancient ruins of old. During his travel through the Lighting Country, Kwalker394 stumbled onto some old ruins and found this sword sealed away. after trying to release the sword nothing worked then suddenly the ruins rumbled with heavy and deep words saying, "He who is worthy may only wield this scyord, for it only chooses one master." Hearing these words Kwalker394 stared at the crystal in the middle of the rings of the handle. Watching it glow dark red he tries to grab it. Slowly he griped the scyord and repeated to himself that "I am worthy." and pulled the scyord. After a good pull the seal wrapped around the scyord gave and the sword was free. In disbelief Kwalker394 closely examined the scyord and a whisper in his ear told him to channel chakra into the sword. As he did the blade of the sword pivoted and took a shape into a scythe. Taking the scyord with him on his travels Kwalker394 discovered another ability in the scyord as well. Later on finding out that the scyord was crafted from a very special dark metal called Reikon~Metaru (Soul Metal) which is indestructible metal that is soaked with chakra when forged and crafted which gave it special a ability.

Ability's:
Blade of Souls being able to have one master only responds to Kwalker394. The blade can extend or retract by using the users raw chakra making it a deadly sword to be in battle with. When the blade retracts the metal is compressed turning the scyord into a sword, and when the blade extends the scythe tip of the blade pivots out from the tip of the sword turning into a type of scythe. The weight and balance is different as well depending on the extending or retracting state. The sword can also be attracted to the user meaning that if the user looses the sword or the sword is knocked out of the users hand he can simply command the sword to return as long as the sword is in short distance away. Using the red crystal at the handle as a medium the user can cast a Genjutsu known as "The Graveyard" (A Rank). This Genjutsu makes the opponent believe that they are standing in a graveyard under a full moon. While the target is under this Genjutsu dead corpse's begin to rise out of the tombs and coffins and slowly limp towards the target. Surrounding him from all angles they trap the target and a shadow figure with a dark hood appears and chops off his limbs with the scyord. Releasing this genjutsu on to the opponent requires a cut, opponent looking at the sword, or some way come in contact with the opponent. Also Kwalker394 can swing the scyord and release the chakra in it at the target making a chakra slash. Once the target is hit with this chakra wave slash it will also put him in the genjutsu. If the opponent touches this scyord by the means of picking it up and using it for any reason the genjutsu is released automatically by the stored up chakra already in the sword from its master while also sucking a tiny bit of the opponents chakra.
~Only Kwalker394 can use this sword
~Must be a Master of Genjutsu in order to use this sword
~The Genjutsu "The Graveyard" can only be used 3 times per battle
~Self activating of the Genjutsu by opponents touch can only happen 1 time
~Either activation of the Genjutsu counts as a move towards the users 3 move limit/jutsu
~Can come back to the users hands if in short range and the user is able to use his hand
~Retracting/extending the blade can be used freely (But only 1 retract or extend per turn)
~Slashing the chakra from the scyord goes up to long range but gives makes the Genjutsu weak so it will be a B rank from mid range and C Rank from long range

Scyord looks:
Scyord= Sword+Scythe
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✘ Declined ✘
There are too many things wrong with it, if i mentioned them all it'll take forever, mainly the retracting and extending thing, the balance and weight, chakra wave, i'm fine with the genjutsu as long as it counts as one of the moves per turn, that whole having "some kind of contact with the enemy" is vague, a cut or them looking at the crystal is fine, activating the genjutsu by a chakra wave? lolwut? that whole chakra wave triggering the genjutsu is a no


Will be dropping if approved

Katon: To-chi Awai (Fire Style: Welders Light)
Type: Defensive
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long Range
Chakra: 20 Chakra
Damage: N/A
Description:
The user will send out his Katon chakra and create a ball of fire. The user will then heat it up intensively by using his mastery of Katon to where the flames turn white. While the flames turn white the light given off by this jutsu is as bright as a welders torch blinding anyone that looks at it. The flame is up and above the users head so it will not effect the user but anyone in front or all around that can see this jutsu will be short termed blinded if looked upon. If forced to look, or if the target stares directly in the light, the target my go blind for the rest of the battle due to the intense light.
~Can only be taught by Kwalker394
~Must have mastered Katon to use
~Can only be used 3 times per battle
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✘ Declined ✘
Go blind for the rest of the battle @_@? it's similar to lightning techniques that release a blinding light and too many of them are made already, don't resubmit.


Kuro Nodo Komadori: Senpai Seijin (Black-Throated Robin: Elder Sage)
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40 Chakra
Damage: N/A
Description:
The user wipes his/her blood on the hand that he/she has the summoning tattoo on. He/she will then perform the Boar-Dog-Bird-Monkey-Ram and summon The Elder Sage The ruler of all Black-Throated Robin's. The Elder Sage is a true 100% Black-Throated Robin and is a giant standing at 45 meters tall. He is also very old. He has a Red face, throat and upper breast with a brown, red, and blue crown and nape, and a Black Zigzagged mark on the neck. The upper parts are grey, and the underparts black to dark grey over the abdomen and under the tail coverts. The bill and legs are black, and the eyes are dark red. The plumage is reminiscent of a cuckoo-shrike but the black neck marking is diagnostic.
The Elder Sage is a L. obscura Species in the Genus Luscinia.

Abilities:
~Elder Sage can use Katon up to S Rank and can use both hand seals and non-hand seal Katon jutsu's
~Able to talk
~Because of his wing strength he can deflect any weapons thrown at him as well as any C rank attacks by flapping his powerful wings by creating a strong gust of wind 3 times per battle and count as a move.
~The summoner can ride on his back while flying
~When dispersing instead of the average white smoke, Elder Sage, when dispersed, erupts in a black smoke.

Restrictions:
~Must have signed the Black-Throated Robin contract
~Can only be summoned 1 time per battle
~Only the current onwer of the Black-Throated Robin contract can summon the Elder Sage but have to learn the technique from the previous owner (Unless the current owenr is the creator)
~No other Black-Throated Robin can be summoned at the same time as Elder Sage
~The Elder Sage can stay on the battle field for 4 turns
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✘ Approved ✘
edited a bit, reduced usage times of the wings attack to 3 times per battle, and remove the "due to the katon element he possess" makes no sense, and wont' allow you using the dispersing ability as an attack, or even hint as one.


Summoning approval ~ ~

Katana Reikon (Blade of Souls)
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid Range
Chakra: 40 Chakra
Damage: N/A
Description:
Said to be forged by the Reaper himself, this scyord had been lost in time and to everyone. It was hidden in ancient ruins of old. During his travel through the Lighting Country, Kwalker394 stumbled onto some old ruins and found this sword sealed away. after trying to release the sword nothing worked then suddenly the ruins rumbled with heavy and deep words saying, "He who is worthy may only wield this scyord, for it only chooses one master." Hearing these words Kwalker394 stared at the crystal in the middle of the rings of the handle. Watching it glow dark red he tries to grab it. Slowly he griped the scyord and repeated to himself that "I am worthy." and pulled the scyord. After a good pull the seal wrapped around the scyord gave and the sword was free. In disbelief Kwalker394 closely examined the scyord and a whisper in his ear told him to channel chakra into the sword. As he did the blade of the sword pivoted and took a shape into a scythe. Taking the scyord with him on his travels Kwalker394 discovered another ability in the scyord as well. Later on finding out that the scyord was crafted from a very special dark metal called Reikon~Metaru (Soul Metal) which is indestructible metal that is soaked with chakra when forged and crafted which gave it special a ability.

Ability's:
Blade of Souls being able to have one master only responds to Kwalker394. The blade can extend or retract by using the users raw chakra making it a deadly sword to be in battle with. When the blade retracts the metal is compressed turning the scyord into a sword by retracting the scythe part of the blade back into the swords blade, and when the blade extends the scythe tip of the blade pivots out from the tip of the sword turning into a type of scythe. The sword can also be attracted to the user meaning that if the user looses the sword or the sword is knocked out of the users hand he can simply command the sword to return as long as the sword is in short distance away. Using the red crystal at the handle as a medium the user can cast a Genjutsu known as "The Graveyard" (A Rank). This Genjutsu makes the opponent believe that they are standing in a graveyard under a full moon. While the target is under this Genjutsu dead corpse's begin to rise out of the tombs and coffins and slowly limp towards the target. Surrounding him from all angles they trap the target and a shadow figure with a dark hood appears and chops off his limbs with the scyord. Releasing this genjutsu on to the opponent requires a cut, opponent looking at the sword, or by the opponent touching the sword. Also Kwalker394 can swing the scyord and release the chakra in it at the target making a chakra slash. If the opponent touches this scyord by the means of picking it up and using it for any reason the genjutsu is released automatically by the stored up chakra already in the sword from its master while also sucking a tiny bit of the opponents chakra.
~Only Kwalker394 can use this sword
~Must be a Master of Genjutsu in order to use this sword
~The Genjutsu "The Graveyard" can only be used 3 times per battle and counts as the users 3 move limit.
~Self activating of the Genjutsu by opponents touch can only happen 1 time
~Either activation of the Genjutsu counts as a move towards the users 3 move limit/jutsu
~Can come back to the users hands if in short range and the user is able to use his hand
~Retracting/extending the blade can be used freely (But only 1 retract or extend per turn)
~Slashing the chakra from the scyord goes up to long range but gives makes the Genjutsu weak so it will be a B rank from mid range and C Rank from long range

NOTE: I removed "Once the target is hit with this chakra wave slash it will also put him in the genjutsu.", "some way come in contact with the opponent.", "The weight and balance is different as well depending on the extending or retracting state.",

Scyord looks:
Scyord= Sword+Scythe
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Don't resubmit.


Will be dropping if approved
 
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Summoning Animal:Madagascar cat/rat /fossa Scroll Owner: TheGreyFox
Other Users who have signed contract:None
Summoning Boss if existing: None
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract none

A relative of the mongoose, the fossa is unique to the forests of Madagascar, an African ... lemurs and most other creatures it can get its claws on, from wild pigs to mice.
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Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

I will be dropping the weapon in the quote. Here is where it was approved------>



(Mizu Beara) Water Bearers
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: These Water Bearers was created by Solf to have a unique water weapon in battle. He made two hilts that are called Bearers. The Bearers are made of a material so the user can channel their chakra and manipulate water sources or even the moister in the air for varies objects such as weapons, shields on top of them. These two hilts are the perfect weapon for a weapon user and water user. The user channels their chakra and absorbs some water or moister in the air and using shape manipulation shapes the water into any weapon or shield the user like to fit for the situation. The highest rank of the object that is made of water is A rank. The user can have already have water in the bearers but they must state this at the beginning of the battle.
-Only used when the air has enough moister to make the weapon of chose of the user or a some type of water source is in the area of short range of the user to use to use to make the weapon of chose of the user.
-The weapons made from the water still go by the elemental advantages and disadvantages
-The weapons when made also feel like the real weapon when used
||Declined|| Restrict it a bit (I would suggest some form of limit to how often the shape of the water weapons can be changed)

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Sealing Arts: Shine Bright (Fuuinjutsu: Akaruku Kagayaku)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user after having Fuuin for a year, makes a tattoo on both of their arms that reacts with their chakra. The only way the tattoos react to the user chakra is when it is irregular. The tattoos glow a white light down the whole tattoo when the user chakra is irregular. The light is bright enough to see when not even looking at the arms. The user can see the light from the corner of their eyes.
-Must be posted in the bio or beginning of the battle
-Must have fuuin for a year because they need the experience to developed such sealing tattoos on themselves.

How they look when they glow but it will be brighter.
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||Declined|| What's the point of this technique?
I will be dropping the weapon in the quote. Here is where it was approved------>

-Snake Tail (Hebi No O)
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Hebi No O(Short version:Hebi) was after Dei Dei made is stretchable scarf. He made this sword whip out of the same material just more stronger. Hebi is a 6-part segmented blade; each segment is wider than the one preceding it from the hilt with 2 pick-like protrusions on the front and back of each segment, with the ones on the front much longer than the ones at the back. The segments are connected by a stretchable thread that is a very strong material, making Hebi more useful as a whip than an actual sword, though it can serve as a regular sword just as easily, thanks to Dei Dei swordsmanship. Hebi's guard and handle remain the same as a normal katana. While Hebi can be stretched to incredible lengths in its whip form, Dei Dei has a limit of three consecutive attacks before having to bring the segments of Hebi back together for recovery -which makes him fairly vulnerable during this time interval. To make up for this, Dei Dei has to have a plan ahead of time. It is also wrapped in bandages when not in use and the bandages is attached on the hilt which acts on the user will.

-Mid range is the limit it can reach
-It can be used three times back to back when it is stretched out. After the third use it has to retract to recover for one turn.
-Only used by Dei Dei

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(This sword just acts the same as in Bleach but without it going to long range.)

Dropping this weapon[/url] for the one above if it gets approved.

I took out the bold part the mod had bolded. It really didn't mean anything but oh well it is out now.

�� Approved �� Yeah it did actually. It meant you could grow your sword segments almost without limit. lol


(Mizu Beara) Water Bearers
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: These Water Bearers was created by Solf to have a unique water weapon in battle. He made two hilts that are called Bearers. The Bearers are made of a material so the user can channel their chakra and manipulate water sources or even the moister in the air for varies objects such as weapons, shields on top of them. These two hilts are the perfect weapon for a weapon user and water user. The user channels their chakra and absorbs some water or moister in the air. The highest the rank of the object that is made of water is A rank or lower.
-Only used when the air has enough moister to make the weapon of chose of the user or a some type of water source is in the area of short range of the user to use to use to make the weapon of chose of the user and must have the user chakra in it or no chakra at all.
-The weapons made from the water still go by the elemental advantages and disadvantages
-The weapons also feel like the real weapon when used
-The user has to use a jutsu slot everytime the user uses the weapon no matter if it is to attacking or defending, the change of the shape depends on the attack or defense like for an example. The user going against a fireball and the user has the bearers shaped into katanas but the user needs to defend. The user would change the katanas into a rectangler shield to defend against the attack.

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Sealing Arts: Shine Bright (Fuuinjutsu: Akaruku Kagayaku)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user after having Fuuin for a year, makes a tattoo on both of their arms that reacts with their chakra. The only way the tattoos react to the user chakra is when it is irregular. The tattoos glow a white light down the whole tattoo when the user chakra is irregular. The light is bright enough to see when not even looking at the arms. The user can see the light from the corner of their eyes.
-Must be posted in the bio or beginning of the battle
-Must have fuuin for a year because they need the experience to developed such sealing tattoos on themselves.
-The purpose of this jutsu is when someone places the user in a genjutsu of any type, the user can be notice by the light they are in a genjutsu

How they look when they glow but it will be brighter then it is in the pic

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Don't resubmit. This already exists.

Water Style: Help From the Deep (Suiton: Dīpu Kara Herupu)
Rank: S
Type: Attack/Defense/supplementary
Chakra Cost: 40 (30 per post to keep active)
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user releases their water chakra around them. The user forms eight tentacles and a head of a Octopus, Jellyfish, or Squid. The user is standing right behind the two front tentacles while the rest a spread around them. The head of the animal they choose is behind them. When the jutsu is active, the user can't focused on no more jutsus expect this one. The user can have a summon or a partner to help them out but no clones of the user. When this is active, the user clones if they have any are dispersed so the user has all their chakra. The user can use this jutsu as defense and attacks, even as a way to avoid jutsus(not sure about this one) and each does count as moves.

-The user can't move from the area inside of the tentacles and head so the user can move around in that space but not out of it
-The user can repair this jutsu if it is damaged(counts as a move also)
-Last for five turns
-No other jutsus can be used by the user while this is active
-No water jutsus for three turns after the last turn this is used
-The user can't use A rank or higher jutsu after this jutsu is over because of the chakra it drains each turn

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starts on 13:59 till 14:15 on any of the videos but the first video is the fastest a nd the last one.

If this gets approved, I will make jutsus that will go with it so I can use it for attacks, defense, avoid(not sure about this on) and repair its self.

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Mokuton: Kyouku no Gaia | Wood Release: Strength of Gaia
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 15
Damage: N/A
Description: The "Strength of Gaia" is a simple Mokuton jutsu. By using the trees natural ability to draw in minerals from the earth the user enhances this ability with chakra. Using exsisting wood on the field, the user can by channeling chakra into the wood draw in what ever minerals or substances there are in the ground giving the wood the properties of the substance. This is used to strengthen the wood and make it more durable while at the same time it gains the effects and abilities of the minerals and substances it absorbed.
Note: Must have a Wood bio to use.
Note: No Doton in the same turn this was used.
Note: Thrice per battle, and the effects remain on the wood for the rest of the battle unless destroyed.
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I like the idea but some limitations are required. We can't forget wood is wood. Things like a lava floor or a highly poisonous floor wouldn't be usable for this. also, you must list some effects that this would enable the user to bestow upon their wood.



Resubmitting the CW:

Naginata: Niernen | Sword-Spear: Orchid
Type: Weapon
Rank: S-rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 5- 40
Damage: 10-80
Description: The ancient sword-spear Niernen (which mean Orchid) is a weapon forged long before the shinobi were brought to the world by the Sage of the Six Paths. It is said to be created by Gods themselves. Niernen is a long staff made of the finest and most resistant wood that can be found. On the tip of the staff, an arched blade of chakra enhanced steel is attached which is unbreakable due to the hot fires it has been forged in. The tip grows in a dark green hue.. The color of the blade is a dark green hue, but it can turn to other colors upon the users wish. The whole weapon has been blessed by countless prayers making it impossible to destroy or damage in any way imaginable by mankind. The handle of the staff has two buttons on it with a hidden mechanism inside. Inside the staff a long, chakra enhanced wire is hidden, thus by pressing the button, the blade of the spear will shoot out and attach into any tangible surface with no need for the user to aim (does not count for persons). By pressing the button again the user can pull himself up almost any kind of obstacle. The second button when pressed, releases a small razor blade on the handle of the staff which the user can use to cut himself and release himself from genjutsu or to deal more damage to the opponent. Niernen has many abilities which the wielder of the staff can only benefit from. The staff, in order to functionate in it's full potential needs to feed on the user's chakra, much like Samehada. Niernen at all times takes small amounts of chakra from it's wielder. In return the weapon will begin to shine in a mixture of pink and white light (much like the color of orchids) as the user is set into a genjutsu by the opponent. This way, Niernen alerts the user that he is inside a genjutsu thus allowing him to react accordingly to the threat. Being named Orchid, this weapon is highly involved into the natural elements those being Water, Earth and Wood Release. Each of those three particular chakras can be channeled through the spear, and when done so kanji (one for each element) will glow on the handle of the spear. When this is activated, the chosen element will be boosted in power increasing the ranks of all techniques for the chosen element for a short period of time. Non-Mokuton users can use this weapon too, whereas they can only enhance their Earth and water technique.
Note: Can only be wielded by -Cobalt-.
Note: All abilities count towards the users three moves (excluding the hidden mechanisms which are activated with the press of the buttons).
Note: Only one element can be boosted at a time.
Note: When the chosen element is boosted, all techniques are increased by one rank for a period of 3 turns. During that time the user can use other elemental techniques, but only B-rank and below.
Note: Once an element has been boosted, the user cannot boost the same element again in that battle. Another element can be boosted after a cooldown period of 5 turns.

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Seriously too much, a mix of rip offs of other abilities, don't resubmit. ever!
Resubmitting the wood technique:

Mokuton: Kyouku no Gaia | Wood Release: Strength of Gaia
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C-rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 15
Damage: N/A
Description: The "Strength of Gaia" is a simple Mokuton jutsu. By using the trees natural ability to draw in minerals from the earth the user enhances this ability with chakra. Using exsisting wood on the field, the user can by channeling chakra into the wood draw in what ever minerals or substances there are in the ground giving the wood the properties of the substance. This is used to strengthen the wood and make it more durable while at the same time it gains the effects and abilities of the minerals and substances it absorbed. This is applicable only when a mineral substance is present in the field, artificially created by chakra. This amongs others involves CE elements (mainly metal and earth based elements which do not involve Fire or any other element harmful to wood in the combination and water based elements). Depending on the properties of the element absorbed, these abilities will be replicated on the wood.
Note: Must have a Wood bio to use.
Note: No Doton in the same turn this was used.
Note: Thrice per battle, and the effects remain on the wood for the rest of the battle unless destroyed.

X-Declined-X Wrong in many ways.... but well there can be better explanations to make this technique work.
Lets say you use wood release in collaboration with Chakra absorption technique to absorb chakra from another Earth Based (Physical/tangible) element. The adaptive qualities of the wood cells abosorb the physical traits of the elements when it absorbs the chakra. That would be more reasonable then absorbing minerals which simply kills the wood by osmosis. Again it would require reasonable restrictions. A turn limit, a usage limit and higher rank.


Resubmitting the Spear with Dante's permission:

Yari: Niernen | Spear: Orchid
Type: Weapon
Rank: S-rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The ancient sword-spear Niernen (which mean Orchid) is a weapon forged long before the shinobi were brought to the world by the Sage of the Six Paths. It is said to be created by Gods themselves. Niernen is a long staff made of the finest and most resistant wood that can be found. On the tip of the staff, an arched blade of chakra enhanced steel is attached which is unbreakable due to the hot fires it has been forged in. The tip grows in a dark green hue.. The color of the blade is a dark green hue, but it can turn to other colors upon the users wish. The whole weapon has been blessed by countless prayers making it impossible to destroy or damage in any way imaginable by mankind. The handle of the staff has two buttons on it with a hidden mechanism inside. Inside the staff a long, chakra enhanced wire is hidden, thus by pressing the button, the blade of the spear will shoot out and attach into any tangible surface with no need for the user to aim (does not count for persons). By pressing the button again the user can pull himself up almost any kind of obstacle. The second button when pressed, releases a small razor blade on the handle of the staff which the user can use to cut himself and release himself from genjutsu or to deal more damage to the opponent. The user can affect the the staffs brightness by chanelling chakra into it either turning the light off completely, or making it shine bright enough to enlighten the whole short range from the user. Twice per battle the user can release a S-ranked shockwave of green (Short-Long) chakra into any direction which is near to unavoidable since it covers an expansive range.The thing that makes Orchid a extremely versatile weapon is that it can be, by infusing chakra into it changed into any kind of weapon the user desires, though it does not exceed the original size of the weapon. It can also take on the form of a cloak.
Note: Can only be wielded by -Cobalt-.
Note: All abilities count towards the users three moves (excluding the hidden mechanisms which are activated with the press of the buttons and are considered freeform).
Note: Shockwave usable twice per battle.
Note: Can only change once every two turns.
Note: The weapon is indestructible.


X-Declined-X Remove the reference of Gods or any absolutism, the part where it says the shockwave is unavoidable and well, why dont you make the shockwave as seperate technique for your CW?
 
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Summoning Animal: Opossum
Scroll Owner: Merita
Other Users who have signed contract: None
Summoning Boss if existing: Will be added later
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Will be added later
Description and Background: The opossums are marsupials that were one of the few ones who are able to survive the destruction of nature by humans in the Western Hemisphere. Opossums' most notable ability is of seeming dead (called 'play possum'), in which the animal mimics the appearance and smell of a dead body. Their tails are prehensile, giving them the ability to hang over trees or buildings.

Opossums have a strong immune system, and show partial or total immunity to most poisons. This can be useful for RP means (I must note that, if this ability be used in the RP on future, it's an ability of the animal, not of the summoner).

When threatened, they normally hiss at the enemy. Some species release a strong odor, similar to skunks.

They have elemental affinities for Earth and Fire.

Restrictions:
- Must be taught by Merita
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Remove the elemental affinities for Earth and Fire, the elemental affinity is determined when you actually make the summons into techniques.
Resubmitting

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Summoning Animal: Opossum
Scroll Owner: Merita
Other Users who have signed contract: None
Summoning Boss if existing: Will be added later
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: Will be added later
Description and Background: The opossums are marsupials that were one of the few ones who are able to survive the destruction of nature by humans in the Western Hemisphere. Opossums' most notable ability is of seeming dead (called 'play possum'), in which the animal mimics the appearance and smell of a dead body. Their tails are prehensile, giving them the ability to hang over trees or buildings.

Opossums have a strong immune system, and show partial or total immunity to most poisons. This can be useful for RP means (I must note that, if this ability be used in the RP on future, it's an ability of the animal, not of the summoner).

When threatened, they normally hiss at the enemy. Some species release a strong odor, similar to skunks.


Restrictions:
- Must be taught by Merita

X-Approved-X

-I took out the elemental affinities.-
 
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Summoning Animal : Majestial Dragon Birds
Scroll Owner : Cursed Prince
Other Users who have signed contract : None yet
Other Summoning Animal tied to contract : None yet
Description and Background : Majestial Dragon Birds are bright-colored birds with skinny serpent like bodies and short legs.Older Birds are roughly the same size as an elephant. They have orange beaks and a birdlike face and a pair of wings. Its whole body is covered in feathers that are bright-colored and arranged in random patterns. It's Wingspan vary's from 5-10 meters. They live in large grassy planes on an uncharted island in the ocean. They are Omnivorous and drink saltwater because they have a gland in their mouth that captures the salt. They speak in their own language that the user must know to understand them. They are loyal to the summoner and will die in battle trying to protect them. They can of course fly and can be summoned in the air, through scrolls and by summoning them on the ground with the use of a blood sacrifice.

Bāsākā no ōra
(Berserker Aura)

Type Weapon
Rank A
Range Short
Chakra 30 (-20 every arm that is activated){-5 for every turn stays activated}
Damage N/A (-10 to user for when its activated and for every arm thats activated) (-(-10 if opponent comes in contact with the user)(+5 to Katon techniques)(+5 Raiton)
Description Berserker Aura is metal that bears resemblance to gold and is non conductive to electricity unless it is the users own. It is plated on both the users arms and infused with 2 gems in each arm that posses the power of gods, Gods that roamed the earth before the time of the SO6P. The user puts his palms together and channels Fire chakra into his arms to forcibly remove the barrier containing each gems power. Almost instantly each gem immideatly releases its power, turning the users skin black and scorching hot, filling his mouth with fire and cause strange glowing markings on his body, causing severe damage to the user. This is due to the users body barely able to contain the power of the gems power, and as a result, will throw the user in an uncontrolable rage and leave the user with very little reason. From there the user can force up to 4 glowing red bulking arms from his body sprout from under where his original arms are. Each arm is about 3½ Meters in length and contains power (= Users in Gate mode) .Each arm has the durabillity of an B-ranked attack. The arms are also scorching hot and are as hard as metal.
- Can activate the Berserker Aura 2 times per battle
- Berserker Aura lasts for 3 turns
- User cannot use Suiton, Genjutsu, or any special KG's (Secret Clan abillities {ex: Nara Clan} and summons are allowed though)
- Activating this can break the user out of genjutsu because of the damage the user takes.
- The arms can use jutsu but cannot perform handseals
- Can be activated almost instataneously
- Each arm has the durability of an A-ranked attack
- Activating an arm counts as on of the three usable moves.

(Wasnt sure if this counted as chakra infusable or not)

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Submitting with me as the scroll owner. Gained ownership >> << from Faust & also learned the boss summon.

Summoning Animal: Elephants
Scroll Owner: -Jiraiya-
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: Mercurial
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
Description and Background:
Elephants are the largest living terrestrial animals. They have several distinctive features, including a long proboscis or trunk that they use for numerous purposes, particularly for grasping objects. Their incisors grow into large tusks, which serve as tools for moving objects and digging, as well as weapons for fighting.
Elephants are intelligent, and have been compared to primates and cetaceans in this regard. An elephant's skull is resilient enough to withstand the forces generated by the leverage of the tusks and head-to-head collisions.
Trunk
The trunk or proboscis, is a fusion of the nose and upper lip, although in early fetal life, the upper lip and trunk are separated. The trunk is elongated and specialized to become the elephant's most important and versatile appendage. Elephant trunks have multiple functions, including breathing, olfaction, touching, grasping and sound production. The animal's sense of smell may be four times as sensitive as that of a bloodhound. The trunk's ability to make powerful twisting and coiling movements allow it to collect food, wrestle with conspecifics and lift weights. It can be used for delicate tasks, such as wiping an eye and is capable of cracking a peanut shell without cracking the seed. With its trunk, an elephant can reach items at heights of up to 7 m (23 ft) above their body as well dig up water under mud or sand. Elephants can suck up water both to drink and to spray on their bodies or over others. When underwater, the elephant uses its trunk as a snorkel to breathe while its body remains under water.
Tusks
The tusks of an elephant are modified incisors in the upper jaw. The dentine is known as ivory. As a piece of living tissue, a tusk is relatively soft; it is as hard as the mineral calcite. Tusks serve multiple purposes. They are used for digging for water, salt, and roots; debarking or marking trees; and for moving trees and branches when clearing a path. They serve as weapons when fighting, both for offense and defense, and protecting the trunk.
Skin
An elephant's skin is generally very tough & dry.
Speed
Fast-moving elephants can reach a top speed of 18 km/h (11 mph).
Elephants are capable swimmers. They have been recorded swimming for up to six hours without touching the bottom, and have traveled as far as 48 km (30 mi) at a stretch and at speeds of up to 2.1 km/h (1 mph).
Communication
Elephants communicate by touch, sight, and sound and use infra-sound and seismics for long-distance communication.
Elephants are known to communicate with seismics, vibrations produced by impacts on the earth's surface or acoustical waves that travel through it. They appear to rely on their leg and shoulder bones to transmit the signals to the middle ear.
Elephants appear to use seismics for a number of purposes. An individual running or mock charging can create seismic signals that can be heard at great distances. When detecting the seismics of an alarm call signalling danger from predators, elephants enter a defensive posture and family groups will pack together. Seismic waveforms produced by locomotion appear to travel distances of up to 32 km (20 miles) while those from vocalizations travel 16 km (10 miles)
Intelligence and cognition
Elephants are among the most intelligent species; their psychology is comparable to primates. Elephants are popularly thought of as having an excellent memory.
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http://narutobase.net/forums/showthread.php?t=73952 <Resubmit here

Illusionary Arts: Inflating balloon (Genjutsu: Hidai fuusen)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: The user after performing the Ram -> Horse -> Rat hand seals will extend their chakra & put the opponent under an illusion in which the opponent will see and feel that his whole body swells up quickly like an inflating balloon, making his body almost like a spherical ball, obliterating any joint movements. As a result, in reality, the opponent will be rendered motionless.
Note:
  • Can only be used 3 times per battle.
  • Must be taught by me (-Jiraiya-).

X-Approved-X


Illusionary Arts: Frigate Bird call (Genjutsu: Frigate Tori meshi)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: After a Frigate bird is summoned, the summon will whistle out its birdcall. On hearing this sound, the opponent(s) will be put under a genjutsu as the chakra from the summon will affect the targets' senses making them to see a large flock of frigate birds descend from above them, all screaming out their birdcall & rattling towards them, which soon will surround them in a tornado-like fashion & fiercely pecking them all over his body, leaving them confused, agitated & dizzy. In reality, the opponent(s) will be standing there immobile, with a blank stare on their face.
Note:
  • Must have signed the Frigate bird contract to use this jutsu.
  • Can be used 2 times per battle
  • Capable of affecting multiple targets within the range.
  • No other genjutsu in the same turn or next.
  • Link to Frigate bird summon approval: >> <<
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(Ninja no hokori!) A Ninja's Pride!
Rank:S
Type: Defense/Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:(N/A)
Description: The user boosts their self confidence through words, while surging their chakra throughout their body, which they then manipulate towards the brain. This causes the chakra to manifests itself into a spiritual chakra ego in the subconscious of the user, that continues to boost the users confidence.(What Sakura use to have as a Genin) The chakra mind manifestation prevents the user from falling into Genjutsu while it is present, by keeping the users chakra flow to the brain constant, and unable to be manipulated. This technique works by filling the chakra points around your head to the max, making it unable for the opponent to insert his own. This jutsu requires a lot of chakra, and limits the user when activated.
NOTES:
-Can only be used 1 time
-Cannot prevent MS/EMS Genjutsu
-Can only use jutsu up to A rank while activated
-Lasts 2 turns
-Can only be taught by ZandaT

X-Declined-X Illusion release controling emotions and consciousness? Where is the logic?

(Sen nuki) Corkscrew
Rank:A
Type: Offensive
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user channels their chakra around their dominate hand, and then manipulates it, making their chakra take on a corkscrew appearance around their fist extending to their wrist. The tip would be the middle point in between you're middle and ring finger, but unlike a corkscrew, the tip is flat. Chakra would then wrap around the users fist stopping at the end of their wrist, and when the punch thrown makes contact with the opponent, the manipulated chakra then skews into the opponent sending them backwards awkwardly. The damage done by this technique can be fatal, due to the fact that foreign chakra is being drilled into an opponents body, which causes internal bleeding (Attack itself has a 6cm radius), and damages underlying organs. The formation of the chakra is quite silent, but after the initial hit the technique makes a noticeably unique "Fsssh" sound, as it enters the opponent.
NOTES:
-Can only be used 2 times
-Must wait 2 turn in between use
-Can only be taught by ZandaT

X-Declined-X Falls in other Fighting styles

Summoning Animal: Hermit Crab
Scroll Owner: ZandaT
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: Kaigara
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A
Description and Background:
Most species have long, spirally curved abdomens, which are soft, unlike the hard, calcified abdomens seen in related crustaceans. The vulnerable abdomen is protected from predators by an empty seashell carried by the hermit crab, into which its whole body can retract into. Most frequently hermit crabs use the shells of sea snails, and the shells of mollusk. A few species do not use a "mobile home" and inhabit immobile structures like corals, sponges, hollow pieces of wood, and even stone are used by some species. These crabs usually have one big claw and one small claw used to protect themselves or catch prey.

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(Katon: Nōshintō Bura Suto) Fire Release: Concussion Blast
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80

Description: The user channels an immense amount of their fire chakra into an explosion just as it occurs. The user uses their fire chakra to expand the power of the explosion, creating a secondary more powerful explosion which doubles the power of the concussion blast, sending a force outwards from the explosion that can deliver a powerful blow to all within short range of the blast (5 meters) in every direction with the explosion as its epicenter. The user does not cause the initial explosion with this technique, merely channels his chakra into an already existing explosion (kunai or other technique) to use this.
Note: Can only be used 3x per battle.
Note: No Fire Techniques above A Ranked can be used in the same turn.
Note: if used 3x per battle, the user cannot use Fire techniques above A Ranked for 3 turns.
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reduce the usage limit of the technique, and mention that it can only be used on the explosions you make not the explosions that your opponent makes, or your opponent's explosive kunais, only yours, and mention that the explosion when expanding it will become much slower than the initial occurrence of it, that's the only way i see this technique getting approved honestly.

(Katon: Nōshintō Bura Suto) Fire Release: Concussion Blast
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user channels an immense amount of their fire chakra into an explosion just as it occurs. The user uses their fire chakra to expand the power of the explosion, creating a secondary more powerful explosion which doubles the power of the concussion blast, sending a force outwards from the explosion that can deliver a powerful blow to all within short range of the blast (5 meters) in every direction with the explosion as its epicenter. The user does not cause the initial explosion with this technique, merely channels his chakra into an already existing explosion (kunai or other technique) to use this.
Note: Can only be used 2x per battle.
Note: Can only be used on explosions purposely made by the user.
Note: No Fire Techniques above A Ranked can be used in the same turn.
Note: if used 2x per battle, the user cannot use Fire techniques above A Ranked for 3 turns.

X-Declined-X If you get blast release its worth considering otherwise channeling fire chakra in a concussion is an over-estimation of abilities

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Katon: Purometeusu no Okurimono to Noroi | Fire Release: Prometheus - The Gift and the Curse
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user performs 3 handseals and casts their opponent in a A Ranked Genjutsu where they believe themselves to have their head, arms and legs bound in chains (stretched outwards away from each other) unable to move as a large 5 meter griffon vulture descends upon them from the clouds/sky with a means to eat at their body. Outside of the Genjutsu, the user has channeled their fire chakra into the clouds/sky 20 meters above their paralyzed opponent and causes a large 5 meter flaming vulture with a 10 meter wingspan to quickly falling down from the sky towards them. When hit, the flaming vulture severely burns the body of the opponent, causing the opponent in the illusion to feel that their skin is being rapidly picked and torn at by the griffon vulture as they scream in agony.
Note: Can only be used 2x per battle.
Note: User must wait 3 turns before using this technique again.
Note: No Genjutsu for 2 turns.
Note: No Fire techniques can be used the turn this technique is used.
Note: Counts as 2/3 moves in a turn

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Name is wrong. Its unreasonable as the Genjutsu needs to be B-Rank max since its not that strong. And where does the damage come from? from the fire? Long range? No. No Long Range Genjutsu. Period.

Doton: Atorasu no Futan | Earth Release: Atlas' Burden
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user performs 3 handseals and casts their opponent into a B Ranked Genjutsu where they believe that they the user has summoned a large boulder directly on top of their back and neck; using their hands as a means to balance it so it doesn't crush them. Outside of the Genjutsu, the user will have channeled their chakra into the ground around the opponent and broken up the earth into large pieces of earth. The earth will then cling to the opponent and cause the opponent to be extremely weighed down unable to move. The earth will continuously break apart and pile up on the opponent burying them with earth until they are covered in a large 10ft diameter sphere.
Note: Can only be used 2x per battle.
Note: User must wait 3 turns before using this technique again.
Note: No Genjutsu for 2 turns.
Note: No Earth techniques can be used the turn this technique is used.

X-Both Pending-X Leaving for Scorps

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Blue part doesn't make sense. Name is wrong. Earth effect has been done before in many ways, making your only difference having the genjutsu beforehand. I don't understand why the enemy wouldn't simply dodge the boulder... It doesn't make much sense that he's sitting there waiting and balancing it..
 
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(Ranton: Arashi purizun) | Storm Release: Strom Prison
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: : The user will shoot a single beam of lighting into the sky, that then will move in an arc shape down on the opponent. When the beam of lightning starts to drop down, it will split in 20 smaller lightning beams, that will surround the opponent in a dome like shape. Any contact with the "bars" of this cage will send the prisoner staggering back from a violent shock likely knocking them into the other walls and resulting in a blackout. The size of this cage can be altered by the will of the person that created it.
Note: the beam has to stay in contact with the user for the prison to hold
Note: Can be used twice per battle
Note: Can only be taught by -Severus Snape-
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Specify the exact size of the prison, size alterations i won't allow, specify how big the single beam is, take out the blackout and replace it with something else like paralysis for example, mention how far can the prison be made away from the opponent.


Storm training [ ]

(Hoippu Geijutsu: Akuma no ikari) | Whip Arts: Devils Rage
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: : The user will move the whip around his body while channelling his chakra trough the whip. As the whip hits the opponent, a small amount of chakra of the users chakra will disrupt the opponent’s chakra flow, putting him under a subtle genjutsu B-Rank jutsu where he will feel a burning pain coming from the muscle's that are near the hit point. This pain will increase over the next turns, if not broken out from the Genjutsu, until the opponent has the feeling that pain is too much, and can't use the hit limb any more, which takes 2 more turns.
Note: Requires Hoippu Geijutsu training
Note: Can only be taught by -Severus Snape-
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I was just going to approve it when i realized something, what do you mean by not being able to use the limb anymore? like for the rest of the battle? that's not how genjutsu works, you can say he can't use the limb while under the influence of the genjutsu but when the genjutsu is released he's capable of using it, what genjutsu produces is mental trauma, not physical, reduce the genjutsu to B-rank.


Hoippu Geijutsu approval [ ]
~Resubmitting

(Ranton: Arashi purizun) | Storm Release: Strom Prison
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: : The user will shoot a single beam of lighting into the sky, that then will move in an arc shape down on the opponent. When the beam of lightning starts to drop down, it will split in 30 smaller lightning beams of 1 cm, that will surround the opponent in a dome like shape. Any contact with the "bars" of this cage will send the prisoner staggering back from a violent shock and results in a paralysed limb immediately upon contact. The cage has a diameter of 3 meters and a height of 2 meters, and can be made up to 10 meters away from the user.
Note: the beam has to stay in contact with the user for the prison to hold
Note: Can be used twice per battle
Note: Can only be taught by -Severus Snape-

Storm training [ ]

(Hoippu Geijutsu: Akuma no ikari) | Whip Arts: Devils Rage
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: : The user will move the whip around his body while channelling his chakra trough the whip. As the whip hits the opponent, a small amount of chakra of the users chakra will disrupt the opponent’s chakra flow, putting him under a subtle genjutsu B-Rank jutsu where he will feel a burning pain coming from the muscle's that are near the hit point. This pain will increase over the next 2 turns, if not broken out from the Genjutsu, until the opponent has the feeling that pain is too much, and can't use the hit limb any more, until broken out of the genjutsu.
Note: Requires Hoippu Geijutsu training
Note: Can only be taught by -Severus Snape-

X-Both Approved-X
 
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( Genjutsu: Kabe ni mirāmirā ) - Illusionary Arts: Mirror Mirror on the wall
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user releases his chakra towards his opponent using ANY, VALID, medium, such as earth, water, or even through a wind gust trapping him in a Genjutsu where the opponent sees a mirror coming out of the ground infront him. The mirror has the exact same reflection of the opponent's image, but the -Mirror Reflection of the opponent- is being controlled by the user himself. This Genjutsu is aimed to shock and affect the opponent's brain by releasing a huge amount of the user's chakra towards the opponent making him disorientated to such a degree that he starts to imitate his mirror reflection instead of it being the other way around. The user then is able to control the opponent's movements using the reflection for (5) seconds, before the disorientation effect fades away and the opponent starts to realize that he's in a Genjutsu. The user cannot use the same element he used as a Chakra channeling medium in the same turn, ( example; The user used a wind gust as a medium to channel the Genjutu's chakra to the opponent, then he may NOT use any wind technique in the same turn ).

Note: Can only be used (2) times per battle, and each time has to be separated by at least (2) turns before using this technique again.
Note: If the user made handseals for a technique, the opponent will make the same handseals but CANNOT create the attack unless it was in his Jutsu arsenal from the beginning.
Note: After the (5) seconds, the opponent still needs to figure out that he's in a Gen before releasing himself from it.
Note: Can only be taught by Ł Lawliet.

||Declined|| No to the bold.
-Resubmitting-

( Genjutsu: Kabe ni mirāmirā ) - Illusionary Arts: Mirror Mirror on the wall
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user releases his chakra towards his opponent using ANY, VALID, medium, such as earth, water, or even through a wind gust trapping him in a Genjutsu where the opponent sees a mirror coming out of the ground infront him. The mirror has the exact same reflection of the opponent's image, but the -Mirror Reflection of the opponent- is being controlled by the user himself. This Genjutsu is aimed to shock and affect the opponent's brain by releasing a huge amount of the user's chakra towards the opponent making him disorientated to such a degree that he starts to imitate his mirror reflection instead of it being the other way around. The mirror reflection does NOT move a limb thus the opponent will stay paralyzed for a maximum of (1) turn, before the disorientation effect fades away and the opponent starts to realize that he's in a Genjutsu. The user cannot use the same element he used as a Chakra channeling medium in the same turn, ( example; The user used a wind gust as a medium to channel the Genjutu's chakra to the opponent, then he may NOT use any wind technique in the same turn ).

Note: Can only be used (3) times per battle, and each time has to be separated by at least (1) turn before using this technique again.
Note: Can only be taught by Ƀeedo.

~Declined~ First of all no long range genjutsu, and it's not approvable, because genjutsu doesn't allow you to control your opponent's movement, so this image imitating can't be done by normal genjutsu, using earth or water as a medium is considered an elemental genjutsu variation which is only allowed to NB genjutsu students, if you aren't one you have to put handseals, and one won't do, genjutsu doesn't do damage to the opponent's brain by adding chakra to it, the damage that genjutsu causes to the brain is mental trauma, which happens if the person who is inside the genjutsu is attacked and the attack connects, depends on how fatal the attack is which varies the mental trauma, but it doesn't cause damage to his brain just like that by adding large amounts of chakra, in my eyes i don't see this ever getting approved, but i'll give you one more chance to make it approvable, after that it will be a DNR.

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( Sakanade ) - Counter Stroke
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: Sakande is a sword that was crafted by an old man from Iwagakure village. In its sealed form, it resembles a normal katana. The hilt and sheath are red, and its guard is shaped like an hourglass. Using a specialy crafted bracelet for this sword only, it removes the seal and allows the sword to gain a special ability and change it's shape. The first few inches of the blade are covered by an extension of the crossguard. Sakanade's blade is straight and slim, with the tip ending in a slanted razor-like edge instead of being tapered to a point. There are five holes along the sword's length. The bracelet is made of a special type of magnet that once it's positioned inside the circular extension of the sword it creates a megnatic field in which it causes the sword to spin around either clock wise or counter clock wise depending on what the user wants as long as his hand stays in the circular extension of the sword. The ability of the sword is awakened when the user channels his pure chakra into the sword, and mumbles the word "Collapse", this causes the sword to start spinning counter clock wise and releasing the stored chakra towards the opponent(s) trapping him in an S-Rank, Long range Genjutsu where everything seems to be inverted for the opponent, making his right → left, and his up → down, and his back → front, and vice versa. The user can also spin the sword clock wise thus ending the Genjutsu.

Note: The sword can be used as a normal Katana.
Note: By default the User has (2) bracelets, one on each wrist.
Note: If the Bracelets broke, then the seal cannot be broken in that battle, and the sword will only be used as a normal Katana.
Note: The user needs to charge the sword with chakra before releasing the seal and using it's ability.
Note: Charging takes a whole turn and counts towards the user's (3) allowed moves.
Note: The user needs to mumble the word "Collapse" for the Sword to start spinning counter clock wise and release the Genjutsu chakra.
Note: The Genjutsu can affect mutiple people at a time.
Note: The Sword's ability can only be used (3) times per battle, with at least (2) turns break.
Note: After the (2) turns break, the user needs to recharge the sword again before reusing it.
Note: The Genjutsu lasts for (3) turns if the opponent didn't figure out that he's inside a Genjutsu.
Note: Can only be used by Ƀeedo.

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~Declined~ No chakra infusable swords allowed, shape changing has been done countless times in various CWs, S-rank long range genjutsu? don't resubmit.

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Summoning Animal: Glaucus atlanticus ( Blue Dragons/ Blue Ocean Slugs )
Scroll Owner: Ƀeedo
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Description: The Glaucus atlanticus, also known as Blue Dragons, are rare sea creatures that fall under the Glaucidae ( Sea. It is silvery grey on its dorsal side and dark and pale blue ventrally. It has dark blue stripes on its face. It has a tapering body which is flattened and has six appendages which branch out into rayed cerata. Its radula bears serrated teeth on his blades. Blue Dragons can stay out of the water for long periods. It can both swim and float in the air, or crawl on the ground if needed. They are also -By nature- immune to most Venons and poisons. ( ).

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(Suna Gosunkugi)- Sand spike
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 40
Description:
Gaara condenses sand already on the battlefield and uses shape manipulation to create a spikes made out of sand. The size of this technique is dependent on how much sand is used technique can pierce through up to B-rank earth with no problem. The user can create one spike to an entire forest of spikes.
Note: Can only be used by Gaara
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Specify the size of each individual spike and the forest of spikes, i'd rather each be made into a separate technique, keep in mind that you have to get the sand under your opponent for it to work.
(Suna Gosunkugi)- Sand spike
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 40
Description:
Gaara condenses sand already on the battlefield and uses shape manipulation to create a spikes made out of sand. The size of this technique is dependent on how much sand is used technique can pierce through up to B-rank earth with no problem. The user can create from one spike to up to 5 maximum. Each spike has up to .5-meter diameter
Note: Can only be used by Gaara

~Declined~ so you can form multiple spikes from an individual spike, and each of them covers a 5 meter's radius? i'm not getting what your trying to do, is it multiple spikes from a single spike, or a forest of spikes, 5 meter's radius for a single spike is too much regardless, it means that each of them covers a short range, so three of them can cover a long range, lol no.

( Futon: Kaze Ketsuretsu Genkotsu )- Wind Release: Wind Breakdown Fist
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short- Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user gathers a large amount of lifuton-based chakra around one of his fists and makes a punching motion at the target from which an oversized version of his fist, completely composed of condensed slicing wind chakra, is generated(which is about as large as the user himself) and rapidly fired towards the target. It has enough power to rip right through an opponent.
Note: Usable thrice

~Declined~ No, i won't accept variations from other people's techniques even with their permission, if they want a variation they should post it themselves, otherwise i'm not going to approve it, i won't let that whole trend of Pervy's customs of the Dragon slayer arts happen again, also next time when you say you have permission for something, you should quote the technique that you asked permission for.

Gained permission by Danzo Auditore De Firenze
 
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(Glamdring | Ada-Kanadzuchi) – Glamdring | Foe-Hammer
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: Glamdring is known as the Foe-Hammer, it is a two-handed sword forged in the depth of a mountain by the dwarves. It is the only blade of its kind, thought it was lost in the great shinobi world war. How Jiraiya came in possession of this sword is unknown. Its hilt and scabbard were decorated with small jewels and the hilt has a blue scarf around the hilt to please the hands of the wielder, also the hilt seems to have a little silver touch to it. The blade itself was described to have gold and white metal, thus could be told because of the metal being so reflective in the light. The blade was forged with the metal known as micro lattice which consists of an ultra-light form of metal foam which is incredible difficult to create. This metal made the blade known to everyone who wielded it and compared it to other blades to be “Light as a feather” in comparison, making it easier to wield in combat, even with one hand. Even though the blade is very light, the metal is still impressively strong and sharp. Glamdring is an ancient sword that holds great powers, and one of its most recognized abilities is its ability to recognize foreign chakra and will glow in a bright blue color when an attack is approaching the wielder of the blade. It is also known for its affinity towards water, being capable of using the wielders water chakra to surround the blade in thin layer of water which rotates around the blade incredible fast and due to the waters known ability to literally grind away earth over a long period of time, this sword has become capable of making this process much faster, into only a few seconds to grind away earth on impact. The water is also known for its ability to rust metal over a long period of time, combining this with the legendary Glamdring, it has become able to rust away metal on impact, though it is only strong enough to rust away regular weapons.
Note:
- The sword can grind and cut through B-rank or below earth jutsu with ease
- The sword has the ability to rust away metals with the water
- The swords ability to recognize an incoming attack, lighting up to warn the wielder is a passive ability which activates on its own
- The user cannot use any S-rank or above Suiton techniques in the same round that he uses any of the swords abilities
- The sword is strapped to the users back
- The sword is indestructible due to its very strong and durable metal
- The swords abilities count towards the users three moves
- Only Gutsy Jiraiya can wield this blade

Dropping CW: (Post 4#)

~Declined~ chakra infusable swords are not allowed, no to the lighting up when an attack is coming, that's not only unrealistic, but also means that the sword has sensing abilities, which i'm not going to approve anymore in any CW, rusting away metal doesn't happen in an instant, it needs to be in contact with the water for a LONG time, and there are metals that don't rust, so i'm not going to approve that ability, there are many things wrong with it, so i'll leave the editing and making it reasonable to you.
 
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Genjutsu: Shojishōgai | Illusionary Arts: Dysgraphia
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user performs a single handseal and places a dormant genjutsu upon the opponent. The genjutsu consists of tricking the opponents brain into suffering from Dysgraphia. Dysgraphia is a neurological deficiency that impairs the ability to write, same as basic motor skills. The inability to write is also referred to as Agraphia, which is a complete loss of ability to write and spell when writing. Also, persons with agraphia can't transform graphemes in written language. The impairment of motoric skills manifests in the inability of the victim to perform handseals properly, confusing them and not being able to place his hands correctly, which results in not being able to successfully mold chakra for the upcoming jutsu. The purpose of the genjutsu is to make the opponent unable to write seals for sealing techniques as well as other techniques that require seals and symbols to be written on scrolls in order to be performed, same as performing handseals. The genjutsu doesn't leave any traces, once performed, until the victim actually tries to perform any of the above mentioned methods, which is why it's considered dormant. With the inability to write proper seals, same as performing correct handseals, the opponent's attempt to perform such techniques would result in a fail which would then be the only clue that something is wrong with the opponents brain.
Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
Note: Only McRazor can teach this
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Remove the dormant genjutsu, it tends to really mess up what's going on in the battle, i'd rather if it's a normally induced genjutsu, i won't accept any dormant genjutsus anyways, remove that it doesn't leave any traces, lets say you use a wind technique, then your opponent tries to form a fire technique and isn't able to, that would mess up the timeframe, i'm okay with the not being able to perform handseals while the genjutsu is active, but no dormant ones, so you need to rework the description, and add another restriction.
Genjutsu: Shojishōgai | Illusionary Arts: Dysgraphia
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user performs a single handseal and places a genjutsu upon the opponent. The genjutsu consists of tricking the opponents brain into suffering from Dysgraphia. Dysgraphia is a neurological deficiency that impairs the ability to write, same as basic motor skills. The inability to write is also referred to as Agraphia, which is a complete loss of ability to write and spell when writing. Also, persons with agraphia can't transform graphemes in written language. The impairment of motoric skills manifests in the inability of the victim to perform handseals properly, confusing them and not being able to place his hands correctly, which results in not being able to successfully mold chakra for the upcoming jutsu. The purpose of the genjutsu is to make the opponent unable to write seals for sealing techniques as well as other techniques that require seals and symbols to be written on scrolls in order to be performed, same as performing handseals for techniques that require them. With the inability to write proper seals, same as performing correct handseals, the opponent's attempt to perform such techniques would result in a fail. The genjutsu lasts for 2 turns, unless the opponent frees himself by then. The opponent is still, however, capable of performing techniques that don't require handseals, and those that don't require writing seals in general.
Note: No other genjutsu while this is active
Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
Note: Only McRazor can teach this

~Approved~ edited the last portion, from "the genjutsu ends once the opponent fails to perform a technique using any of the above mentioned methods", and replaced it with lasting for 2 turns per use, i think this is better, also added a bit to the description, if your not satisfied with the changes i made tell me and i'll decline it.

Suiton: Mizu Setsuzoku | Water Style: Water Connection
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid (Long)
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user performs two (2) handseals and channels water chakra into his dominant hand. As the water forms, a thin layer of water appears on his hand and he directs it towards an already existing water technique or water source. From his hand, a thin rod of water (1-2 inch) expands quickly and connects with the technique or source. As it gets in contact with the technique or source the user regains control of it and becomes able to control its movement by moving his hand while maintaining the connection with the rod. The thin rod will act like a solid connection between the user and the water technique or water source, allowing the user to fuel more chakra into the technique in order to change its shape using shape manipulation. The connection itself doesn't deal any damage, but instead, adopts the damage of the connected technique. The user can also coat a sword while holding it in his hand, which will expand the reach of the rod up to long rage. The user can abort the connection with the connected technique or source, instantly.
Note: Usable only twice (2) per battle
Note: Only McRazor can teach this

~Declined~ Sorry, not going to allow this lol, don't resubmit.
 
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Fuuton: Wa Shigusa: ) Wind Release : Hoop Action
Type: Attack
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user begins by focusing his wind chakra into his waist. Once focused, the user begins to rotate his hips in a circular fashion, similar to when one is twirling a hula hoop around their waist. A white glow begins to appear the users waist, due to the high concentration of wind chakra. The user by using shape manipulation, shapes the chakra to form a spinning ring, around their waist. The user releases the chakra, causing the ring to fly across, slicing the enemy in two.

Note:
-Can only be used three times in one battle
-Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

~Declined~ mention the size of the ring and that it's visible to the naked eye, also mention how thin it is lol

Raiton: Sono Bu-to): Lightning Release: The Boot
Type: Attack
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user begins by focusing his lightning chakra above the opponent. Once gathered the user uses shape manipulation to shape the chakra into a large boot that forms above the opponent's head. Once the boot is formed the user manipulates the boot to drop on the opponent from above with such speed and force causing severe damage. The action is similar to a human stamping on a insect. The boot is 6 meters in height and width.
Note:
-Can only be used two times in one battle
-Can only be taught by -Cerberus-

~Declined~ How exactly is the lightning released? lightning can't materialize, there has to be a medium to release it, like clouds, the earth, or your body. fire is also the same, only element that is materialized is water, wind isn't materialized you simply use your chakra to compress and influence the surrounding air.

Kyuuten Senshu- Heavens Bow
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80 ( 40 if the user creates a net)
Description: Heavens Bow was crafted by -Cerberus- many years ago. The bow itself is a silver bow made from a unknown but indestructible metal. The bow is sharp on each end, making it useful to stab opponents if they reach short range. If the hands of another person touches Heavens Bow, a
The bow's string is made from a rare material that, draws lightning chakra from the users hands, creating lightning arrows. The arrows are created when the user pulls back the string, causing a arrow created from lightning to zip across the terrain, piercing its targets cleanly. The user has the option to use shape manipulation to change the shape of the arrow, into a average sized lightning net that can be used to trap and paralyze the opponent. The net is big enough to trap a full grown man.

Restrictions:
-Can only use lightning jutsu's if wielding the bow.
-The usage of this bow, takes the slot of one of three jutsu's slot per turn.
-Usable only 5 times per battle-
-Can only be wielded by -Cerberus-

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~Declined~ I think the description is messing a part there after the "a" lol, and chakra infusable arrows can't be made, that's patented by Mathias's Sniper Arts CFS, it doesn't mean you can't have a bow as a CW, it means that the bow can't fire chakra enhanced arrows.
 
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