Re: The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 1
I didn’t expect the beginning to be about a flashback-I honestly thought you would continue the battle between Sasu/Naru/masked man xd I was unfortunately somewhat confused like some others. However, yours notes cleared the questions I might have had to asked and it was very thorough 
You definitely jumped in timelines and shockingly enough I was able to understand it to some extent but I just wasn’t exactly getting why I suppose lol I liked the fact that you centered this flashback around the Exams in which Jiraiya excelled into eventually becoming the "current" Hokage. I thought it was cool that you developed Jiraiya’s character much further and he seems to be a major protagonist now.
I have to give you great props for the clarifying note as it really helped and was understandable as well as the shift between timelines. I know that couldn’t be easy and you even had to re-read your own 15 chapters before beginning this one which is rough (I don't think I'd bother if I was in your shoes just because I actually dislike reading to some degree-ironic right as I'm a fanfic writer xd) Congratulations for being able to pull it all off! :worshippy:
There was a member who expressed his thoughts about your writing style and I felt somewhat insulted-I mean I've read fanfics with grammar/spelling seemingly written by a child and have never exposed any rudeness to the writer as it is unnecessary -_- I have to apologize in that person's place.
I can’t wait till chapter 3 where the the main fight continues and I’m looking forward to seeing how you will incorporate the current Hokage’s involvement
Yeah, well for the sequel, I've jumped 20 years into the future, and the current time will be centered there, so yes, Jiraiya is the Hokage now.
The style of this sequel will mainly be like this first chapter to some degree, but it will eventually go more and more back in time, and stay there, so to speak
Like I said, I incorporated the main events I had in mind for a Jiraiya Chronicles into the sequel, so it will be going some back and forth for now. All the "flashbacks" in this chapter is story I was going to put in a possible first chapter of Jiraiya Chronicles, and that's why I'm not continuing the fight from chapter 15 before chapter 3.
In chapter two, I will also have some flashbacks, but those are mainly based on the shelved Konohamaru Chronicles, as well as filling out the 16 years gap between the manga and the event in the original
So from chapter 3 and onwards, I will more or less tie the events that leads to Jiraiya becoming Hokage. So in one way, you could say that the scenes that take place in the "current" time, is actually close to the end of this FF
Although I have some even bigger surprise when it comes to this timeline
My big inspiration to having such a setup is really after re-watching The Godfather films, and especially
The Godfather 2.
The way they jump from present and to the past, and sort of have like two protagonists in two different times during the whole film is insanely good. That's basically where I got the idea to have a similar concept for the sequel.
Did you read the analysis post I posted as well or just the notes I had at the beginning and at the end of the chapter?
Some people seemed a bit confused, while others grasped it perfectly and understood it all.
I guess the reason for that is that I never specifically stated that Jiraiya had a flashback in the first scene, as I wanted it to be more than just a flashback. And also because it wasn't really Jiraiya having the flashback you know. If it had been in picture or motion, like the manga or anime, you would have understood it right away I suppose
Yeah, being as Jiraiya sort of is the main character of this sequel's... theme so to speak, I had to give him more of a background
Yeah actually, I've become the same type tooxd I loved to read all sorts of FF before, but due to my interests in only writing FF these days, it's limited to yours and Escorp's FF.
Haha, well I guess you got offended because you and Escorp pretty much have the same style as me
I think he likes novel style more, but each to their own I guess
It's going to be pretty much like this - Chapter 3 - 9 is going to focus on the events and the "aftermath" of the original, then It will jump towards the "current" time and continue from there
Oh and finally... It still seems like no one has commented on the "WTF omg?!" factor in this chapter yetxd However, I will build upon this "revealed" plot part in chapters to come. So if people don't still haven't got a grasp of what I mean by chapter 3, I guess they will just have to wait until chapter 10xd
Last call is for Escorp to figured it out later when he reads it I suppose, but like I stated in one of my previous posts, the key on realizing the big "spoiler" that was revealed in this chapter, lays in one's knowledge of the fictional characters in my FF and being able to remember who's related to who
The hint I gave Dratasy above was that it had to do with Sasuke, and I sincerely thought you would be the one to go crazy over itxd Guess I will have to let time do it's biding for now
