Storyboard Mission Submission

[Pervyy]

Players involved: Ignia
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
- Fight off a creature of the void (S rank)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27/09/23
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/the-necropolis-a.778855/post-22129361
Additional information: Generate 10 energy for the crystal.

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to an A-rank. While the criteria of the storyboard element was sufficiently met, I didn't find that you were exactly in "extreme peril" or at considerable risk of serious injury or threat to life, evident by the fact that you took no damage at any point beyond being "bound tightly." While this "void creature" did put you in a bind, you effectively conquered it with only a temporary and brief lapse in the threat having the upper hand.
No Artefact was Awarded. (46)
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[Skorm]

Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:

• Enter Necropolis and combat void creatures (Custom, A-rank)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27/09
Relevant mission links: x
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (74)
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[Skorm]

Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:

• Advance through Irkalla and slay more Void creatures (Custom, A-rank)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27/09
Relevant mission links: x
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to a B-rank. While the criteria of the element was certainly approached well enough, not only was this practically the same mission to your previous submission, an A rank is meant to come with some degree of challenge or level of difficulty where you're not casually blitzing through it with little to no conflict to yourself. Where S-ranks present the element of risk to your own safety as a baseline, A-ranks should present an essence of challenge for you in-character, which isn't really evident here by the fact that you describe the conflict as being "butchered" on multiple occasions, showing the ease of the task. I know this isn't an easy thing to accomplish with stronger biographies, but just a standard to maintain and keep in mind for future submissions.
No Artefact was Awarded. (88)
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[Pervyy]

Players involved: Ignia
Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
-Help Erenshkigal's forces Fight off a creature of the void (S rank)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27/09/23
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/post-22129370
Additional information: Generate 5 energy for the crystal.

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (99)
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[Pervyy]

Players involved: Ignia
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
- Continue to fight the forces of the void
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 27/09/23
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/post-22129389
Additional information: Generate 10 energy for the crystal.

Mission Passed.
Congratulations! You've received an Artefact! (15)
(Mukō: Hōfuku Jūyōdenai) – Void: Spiritual Riposte
Type: Void Infused Artifact
Rank: A
Range: Short – Mid
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: Whenever the user is successfully placed in a Genjutsu this Void Infused Artifact grants the user a 75% chance to gain a single Void Infusion. Can be activated once every two turns.
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[The Mockingjay]

Players Involved: The Mockingjay
Mission Rank: C
Story Elements Chosen:
Help a Friend (3)
Begin to experiment with new abilities (2)
Relevant Links:
This one and the following 2 posts (including one from Never)

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (81)
Something I want to clear up since you and Never seem to be doing quite a few missions together. When it comes to grading missions, your performance is what is taken into account for the final grade, and not that of everyone collectively. With that being said, in this particular mission, you very barely met the criteria to have this passed when factoring in only your two posts; the second of which was a mere 3 paragraphs which would barely if at all suffice as a D-rank mission in my opinion, on top of the fact that the "experiment with new abilities" basically amounted to that same amount. While you aren't expected to bring novel-level submissions to the table, I want you to be aware that if you aren't careful and rely too heavily on the involvement of the person you've chosen to partner with for the mission, it can very easily result in a failed mission. Please understand that this isn't aimed as discouraging partnered RP, it's been fun reading yours and Never's story thus far, but be sure you are keeping in mind your own performance relative to your storyboard elements.​

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[Zaphkiel]

Players Involved: Zaphkiel
Storyboard Element(s) Chosen:

• Use Ninjutsu to track down a suspect in a missing persons case (3)
• Fight an enemy of comparable strength (3)

Relevant Links: [Start] [Encounter] [End]
Dates of Beginning & Conclusion: 09/23/23 - 09/27/23
Additional Information: Part of the Tool Ascended questline (Enter Irkalla through the Threshold (093). Discover that the crystal reacts to the powerful presence of the Void within the Underworld, seemingly absorbing energy from being in its presence)

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (49)​

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[Gutsy]

Players Involved: Gutsy
Mission Rank: A
Story Elements Chosen:
Enter Necropolis and combat a void creature (Custom, A-rank)
Relevant Links:https://animebase.me/threads/the-necropolis-a.778855/#post-22129408
Additional Info: Generating 10 Energy for The crystal

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (77)
As a result of the Lost Gods arc, the landmark in which this mission was conducted has granted a 30% kumi bonus! ​

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[Skorm]

Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:

• Face a Void Goliath of the fields of suffering (Custom, S-rank)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 28/09
Relevant mission links: x
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (43)
As a result of the Lost Gods arc, the landmark in which this mission was conducted has granted a 30% kumi bonus! ​

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[Pervyy]

Players involved: Ignia
Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
-Assist the forces of Erenshkigal
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 28/09/23
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/post-22129422
Additional information: Generate 5 energy for the crystal.

Mission Passed.
In the future, please consider the full scope of your element when you are writing your mission. While you did mention the need to find another way to assist the forces of Irkalla, you just somewhat began wreaking havoc on the enemy force without really tying that into how it "assists" the ally forces. Did some of them survive when they would have otherwise not? Were they allowed to retreat thanks to your timely rescue? While this is a small detail, were this a higher ranked mission, I would be inclined to factor it in with a little more weight and would risk a downgrade, so please keep that in mind.
No Artefact was Awarded. (83)
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[Skorm]

Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:

• Advance through the fields and officially join Ereshkigal's forces in support (Custom, A-rank)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 28/09
Relevant mission links: x
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to B-rank. While the storyboard element itself was adequately covered with relevant depth, the scope of this mission and its element did not warrant an A-rank mission as it did not reflect the challenge expected from A-ranked missions.
No Artefact was Awarded. (73)
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[Gutsy]

Players involved: Gutsy
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen: Enter the frontlines and help protect the armies by fending off the void (Custom, A-rank)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 28/09
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/#post-22129447
Additional information: Gathering 10 energy for the crystal

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to B-rank. Throughout this mission a good sum of your activity was done observationally. Even the "danger" you did encounter was steadily and effortlessly handled, at no point exemplifying a real challenge of any kind to yourself that is expected of an A-ranked mission.
No Artefact was Awarded. (68)
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[Pervyy]

Players involved: Ignia
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
Fight an opponent of comparable strength
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 28/09/23
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/post-22129449
Additional information: Generate 8 energy for the crystal.

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (47)
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[Gutsy]

Players Involved: Gutsy
Mission Rank: S
Story Elements Chosen:
- Fight a Void entity much stronger than yourself
Relevant Links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/#post-22129458
Additional Info: Generating 10 Energy for The crystal

Mission Passed.
Congratulations! You've received an Artefact! (16)
(Mukō: Fuyu no Shukufuku) – Void: Winter’s Blessing
Type: Void Infused Artifact
Rank: A
Range: Self
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: A Void Infused Artifact Accumulator that is activated passively; upon activation the user instantly gains a single Void Infusion. It can be activated twice per battle, once every four turns.
As a result of the Lost Gods arc, the landmark in which this mission was conducted has granted a 30% kumi bonus! ​

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[Gutsy]

Players Involved: Gutsy
Mission Rank: A
Story Elements Chosen:
Defend the bridge and the forces of good (A-rank)
Relevant Links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/#post-22129461
Additional Info: Generating 8 Energy for The crystal

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (87)
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[Zaphkiel]

Players Involved: Zaphkiel
Storyboard Element(s) Chosen:

• Encounter and defeat your first Void creature in Irkalla (S-rank)

Relevant Links: https://animebase.me/threads/the-necropolis-a.778855/post-22129464
Dates of Beginning & Conclusion: 09/29/23
Additional Information: Gathering 10 Void Energy for the Depleted Apotheotic Shard.

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to A-rank. While you sufficiently accounted for your storyboard element and while you did encounter a struggle throughout, I'm afraid the depth and length of the mission is unfortunately severely lacking for the standard expected of an S-rank. If you would like some recommendations, then you could have fleshed out more of your thought processes, or explored further weakness experimentation against the threat to show a greater process of achievement once you finally defeated it.
No Artefact was Awarded. (79)
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[Skorm]

Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:

• Infiltrate an enemy's organization

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 29/09
Relevant mission links: x
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed.
Congratulations! You've received an Artefact! (28)
(Mukō: Noroi no Abuzu) – Void: Curse of Abzu
Type: Void Infused Artifact
Rank: A
Range: Short – Long
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: Activated passively and consumes two stacks of Void Infusion; allows the user to steal all of their opponent’s stacks of Void Infusion within range. While this Void Infused Artifact is limited to long range, it can only be used within the same landmark.
As a result of the Lost Gods arc, the landmark in which this mission was conducted has granted a 30% kumi bonus! ​

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[Skorm]

Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:

• In the darkest hour, overcome

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 30/09
Relevant mission links: x
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to A-rank. Something I want to encourage in your missions is to really work on the conclusiveness of your elements and the mission as a whole. While I understand that in a lot of instances you are wanting to leave it open-ended enough for you to chain your missions from one to the next, but if you aren't careful, you can easily leave your element lacking in sufficient depth and accomplishment due to placing favorability in giving yourself something to do in your follow up mission. This was the case here, where you did the bare minimum to "overcome" the situation you and your creation were placed in. Everyone was healed and revived by the end of it with no real consequence or attention given to the fact that damage was ever taken in the first place, and of course no real struggle was done in the process to get to the conclusion of recovery, not even so much as a recount from Lilith's perspective of events that lead up to her revival after the fact. In one paragraph, extreme tragedy, the immediate next paragraph, all is well and the mission is over. So for the future, I would highly recommend spending some time bringing more depth and emphasis to the severity of the situation you are writing about; both as it is happening, and the severity of how important it was for you and your characters to overcome it in the end; especially for an S-rank mission. Please keep this in mind going forward.
Congratulations! You've Received an Artefact! (35)
(Mukō: Gensō Yami) – Void: Illusory Darkness
Type: Void Infused Artifact
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: Activated passively and consumes a single Void Infusion; the user’s next four Genjutsu are infused with an additional 10 chakra and 20 damage. If the Genjutsu does not inherently inflict mental damage then it does not gain the damage enhancement.
As a result of the Lost Gods arc, the landmark in which this mission was conducted has granted a 30% kumi bonus! ​

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[Pervyy]

Players involved: Ignia
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
- Survive an ambush (S)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 20/09/23
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/fields-of-suffering-b.778856/post-22129506
Additional information: Generate 10 energy for the crystal.

Mission Passed.
Mission was downgraded to A-rank. While the element itself was accounted for and the overall length of the mission itself was at least minimally acceptable, though for an S-rank it is certainly pushing the limits, the issue I want to address is specifically the "one paragraph to the next" conflict resolution. There feels to be very little time given to the concept of being in peril, amounting to a dynamic in which you sustain a clear and decisive life-threatening strike, but then you immediately conclude the best course of action to overcome it and execute it in the immediate follow up paragraph. Overall the story told here is solid, but in order for this to fully qualify as an S-rank, I'd like to see more depth and exploration provided in the writing done surrounding the damage sustained and threat faced, before it is resolved. Because with how it looks in this mission, the threat didn't seem very serious despite how serious it "sounded" in the writing that did cover it.
No Artefact was Awarded. (77)
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[Kabuto-]

Players Involved: Kabuto-
Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen: Escape the presences of some wild beasts
Date of beginning & conclusion: 10/01/2023
Relevant Mission links: X
Additional Information:

Mission Passed.
No Artefact was Awarded. (82)​

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