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Lord of Kaos

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Players involved: Mirai
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:

Fight an enemy much stronger than yourself (S)
Solve a familial dispute among one’s sibling/parent (B)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 1/6/2021 – 1/10/2021
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Additional information: N/A

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Mission Rank: S-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

Retaking the Dead Rivers. (Custom (5)​

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 12/ 01/ 2021.
Relevant mission links: Here.
Additional information: N/A.

Mission Passed
 
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Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
  • Stop a brewing or exploding revolt
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 01/12/2021 & 01/13/2021
Relevant mission links: 1 2 3
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed: I liked that this wasn't just about rounding up the ones causing trouble, but trying to ease the discontent within the greater populace as well.
 
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Mission Rank: S-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

Nefarian, the Ancient One. (5)​

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 12/ 01/ 2021.
Relevant mission links: Here.
Additional information: N/A.

Mission Passed
 
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Mission Rank: S-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

A Gift for a Friend. (5)​

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 13/ 01/ 2021.
Relevant mission links: Here.
Additional information: N/A.

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Players involved: Mirai
Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:

1. Steal money from a merchant (2, Custom)
2. Attempt an assassination one's target (3, Custom)
3. Eliminate a wanted criminal (3, Custom)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 1/14/2021 – 1/14/2021
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Additional information: N/A


Mission Passed: Lowered to C-Rank. The way this was written was such that all your elements converged on each other, which prevented each one from being fleshed out fully. One of your targets being a wanted criminal didn't actually become apparent until the last few sentences in the mission.
 
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Players involved: Skorm, Hazure
Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
  • Negotiate for or speak on behalf of your clan
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 01/13/2021 & 01/15/2021
Relevant mission links: 1 2 3 4 5
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed
 
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Players involved: Zatanna
Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
  • Prepare a landmark for a base (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 16/01/2021
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/tomb-of-marduk-231.768225/post-22059006
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed: Keep in mind that since this is a sacred landmark, you can't claim it for any clan or organisation you're a part of, meaning you won't be able to spawn in it in future arcs etc.
 
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Players involved: Teno
Mission Rank: S Rank
Story elements chosen:

Custom: Help somebody overcome their past and tame their a powers without getting killed.. (5)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 01-14/01-16
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/the-shadow-tower-236.768230/#post-22058897
Additional information: N/A.

Mission Passed: Lowered to B-Rank. This was far too easy for an S-Rank, and I had half a mind to make this A-Rank, but the way your bio navigated around hurdles such as chakra sealing restraints and an enraged ST user with such ease made me think otherwise. Not to mention that a pivotal element of the mission, which was helping someone to overcome their trauma, was done by simply sealing their memories. The main problem is an overstuffed element; you should've either split it into at least two distinct elements or used your plot devices in such a way that things couldn't just be broken through or sealed away to be dealt with. For example, the chakra-sealing restraints could've been present throughout the entire mission, meaning you had to actually engage with your NPC's trauma and help them resolve the issues it causes for them, and when fighting them, you actually had no chakra to aid in your fight against them.
 
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Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
  • Establish control over a hostile area
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 01/17/2021 & 01/17/2021
Relevant mission links: 1
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed: I feel like I should point this out for clarification, DBP doesn't make you unable to feel pain.
 
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Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
  • - Perform the Edo Tensei and revive someone (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 26/01/2021
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/khulna-150.756163/post-22060285
Additional information: N/A

Mission Failed: There's a few things here; the first is that there isn't really a narrative present here, let alone much detail. This is just using a technique without much trial or tribulation. The element you probably should've gone with is the one where you experiment with advanced ninjutsu, or something. But there's a deeper issue than that, which is that your usage of Edo Tensei is invalid. You still need an actual sacrifice that serves as the vessel for the spirit you're resurrecting, and an NPC doesn't count as one.
 
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Players involved: Skorm | Teno
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
  • Fight against a Jinchuuriki [custom]
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 01/21/2021 & 01/27/2021
Relevant mission links: [Initiative start post] [Battle]
Additional information: N/A

Mission Passed: Lowered to B-Rank
 
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Players involved: Karuii
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
  • Deal with traumatic past event (3)
  • Steal important document (3)
  • Sacrifice someone for the mission (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 1/27/2021-1/27/2021
Relevant mission links: Additional information: I hope I pass that shit because it took hours to type.

Mission Passed: The rank for this mission totals out to B-Rank, but it was easily a pass. For what I assume to be your first go at an NW mission, it's solid.
 
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