Storyboard Mission Submission

Zatanna

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Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:

- Surrender to madness
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
4/07/2020-4/07/2020
Relevant mission links:
Addisional Notes:
N/A

Mission Passed. Barely. I could see what you were going for here, you put enough effort into it but, honestly, be less vague.

This could have easily been "explore a dangerous" or "explore an abandoned site" both fitting the narrative.

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Story elements chosen:
- Continue planning the infrastructure of the new village. (4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
26/06/2020 - 04/07/2020
Relevant mission links:
One - - - Two
Additional information:
The two posts were split up with an emotional conversation Lena had with Sado (Howard).

Pending. Leaving for @Drackos or someone else. I am directly involved.


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Mission Rank: S-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

Survive a near-death situation. (5)​

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 02/ 07/ 2020 - 05/ 07/ 2020.
Relevant mission links: Here & Here.
Additional information: First post is the set up, and start of the mission, second post is the actual near-death situation, and survival.

Mission Passed. With a lot of caveats. Alright, we need to talk about a few things. You have way too much set up involved with this mission, meaning your entire opening post could have been done outside of the mission as it doesn't directly play into your element. This means, one-third of your mission is set up, and it's a long mission so one-third is roughly three-thousand words. That's one mission in and of itself, so I had to read through a mission's worth of filler. I don't mind long missions for the most part I can enjoy them, especially if they on topic, but this wasn't and wasn't for a while. Now, you can do one of two things to fix this, you can either 1. Exclude the setup, and leave it as outside roleplay building up to and into the mission or 2. You can include additional elements to flesh out your story and give you more freedom to expand. Either option is valid and will work.

Next this:

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I read this once, usually, I read them twice. If I were to try and do that to double-check my decision, well that'd be an hour of my day and right now my ADHD is kicking my ass up and down this thread. That's not too bad if it was all of the mission checking I wanted to do today, it was not. I do, however, directly see the effort and time you put into writing up your second half, which was what mattered in this check. The fight is good, the character development is good, the fact that I could watch like the first episode of Tokyo Ghoul on my second monitor in the time it took me to read this was good, because well it let me see the fight animated, ya'know? Anyway, jokes aside, please, try and limit this just a bit, I suggest breaking it up, this was 4 missions worth of content my guy, you could have been paid for 4 missions. You're short-selling yourself, and you're giving me a lot to read in one sitting.

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Players involved: Kashin
Mission Rank: B-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

- Investigate the history of the Mother Cult

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 05/ 07/ 2020.
Relevant mission links: 1 - 2 - 3
Additional information: Yamamoto explores the history of the mother cult using what the 4 tails knows to learn about them.

Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen:
-Return to the world (Custom)
-Have a small scuffle with someone stronger than you (Custom)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: June 10th - June 20th
Relevant mission links:
-Post #27 - Post #36
-Small scuffle
Additional information: Small mission where shady brings me back to this world (was erased with wuji dao RP wise [Clan ccj]. This is just me coming back from inactivity basically) Excuse me if I did something wrong, first NW mission <_>

Mission Passed.

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Players involved: Howard
Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:
  • Discuss and plan a cultural holiday, festival or event ( 2 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
06/23/2020
07/03/2020
Relevant mission links: [START] [x] [END]
Additional information: It was a bit short, but it's also only a C-rank.

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Players involved: Howard
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
  • Infiltrate an enemy's organization ( 4 )
  • Scout potential threats ( 3 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/05/2020
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: My mission writing skills feel rusty.

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Players involved: Howard
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
  • Defend against or attack another group ( 4 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/05/2020
07/06/202
Relevant mission links: [START] [END]
Additional information:

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Mission Rank: C
Story elements chosen:
Discuss and plan a cultural holiday, festival or event ( 2 )

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 6/23/2020 to 7/4/2020

Relevant mission links:
`1. https://animebase.me/threads/graveyard-of-sin-115.756128/post-22026278
2. https://animebase.me/threads/graveyard-of-sin-115.756128/post-22027188
3. https://animebase.me/threads/graveyard-of-sin-115.756128/post-22029200
Additional information:

Pending. Leaving for @Drackos or someone else. I am directly involved.


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Mission Rank: C-Rank.
Story elements chosen:

- Destroy information based on the Divine Mother. (C)

Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 06/ 07/ 2020.
Relevant mission links: https://animebase.me/threads/the-shadow-tower-236.768230/post-22029612
Additional information: Destroyed the tower where I found the information about the great mother. Can't have people getting the idea of bringing her back now.... right.... right.....

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Howard

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Players involved: Howard
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
  • Fight an enemy much stronger than yourself ( 5 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/07/2020
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: The character I fought against could use A and S-ranks whereas the clone could only use B-ranks.

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Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: S
Story elements chosen:
  • Fight an enemy much stronger than yourself ( 5 )
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/07/2020
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: Limited to B-ranks while opponent had an arsenal stretching above that.

Mission Passed. Good use of the detrimental effects of the Red Fever.

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Story elements chosen:
  • Survive an assault from a Large Number of People, Without severely harming any of them (5)
  • Survive a near death situation (5)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/07/2020
Relevant mission links: One
Additional information: The Village is supposed to be allied to Lena, but they're a very paranoid people so attacked her when she just wandered in.

Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen: Investigate the mysterious illness
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 5/7/2020 - 9/7/2020
Relevant mission links: [1], [2], [3], [4], [5], [6], [7]
Additional information: None

Mission Passed. I honestly appreciated the different perspectives given by @Arthorius's biography in this mission. I get his biography is a member of the Children of Tiamat, but being able to justify actions and while still being able to roleplay with possible enemies feels like a wonderful change of pace. I also really approve of the teamwork, and interconnectivity of this mission. Good work to both of you for it.

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Mission Rank: S A
Story Elements Chosen: Win a fight without your Ninjutsu
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 7/7/2020 - 7/7/2020
Relevant Mission Links: [1], [2]
Additional Information: N/A

Mission Passed. Lowered to an A-rank.

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Players Involved: Teno | Squidy, Lytes, 21 Savage (They aided in the freeing of slaves from villians ,missions)
Mission Rank: S ( A )
Story Elements Chosen:

-Start Of Custom Mission (S Rank): Free Slaves From Villians
- Fight An Individual of Comparable Strength - B rank
-Defend against or attack another group ( 4 )
Date of Beginning & Date of Conclusion: 06/23/2020 - 7/9/2020
Relevant Mission Links:
https://animebase.me/threads/poppy-sanctum-080.755898/#post-22026100
https://animebase.me/threads/poppy-sanctum-080.755898/#post-22027329
https://animebase.me/threads/poppy-sanctum-080.755898/#post-22028792
https://anime
https://animebase.me/threads/poppy-sanctum-080.755898/page-2#post-22029757
https://animebase.me/threads/poppy-sanctum-080.755898/page-2#post-22030198
https://animebase.me/threads/poppy-sanctum-080.755898/page-2#post-22030365

Additional Information: Took over the landmark as well

Mission Passed. As an A-rank solo mission, because your allies did their own things and weren't involved directly.

You also did the average wrong 5 + 3 + 4 = 12 / 3 = 4. All in all, it was good roleplay.

"I just need directions on where Tsumigakure is at.. Can you help me?"

"then how could he possibly confront the village dabbling in dark arts he believe"

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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen: Defeat a small group of undead (3), Choose between what is right and what is easy (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10/7/2020
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: None

Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: B
Story elements chosen: Put aside your personal grievances (2) [Custom Element], Explore the history of something (3)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: 10/7/2020
Relevant mission links: [x]
Additional information: None

Mission Passed.

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Skorm

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Players involved: Skorm
Mission Rank: A
Story elements chosen:
  • Learn about your origins (Custom - 4)
  • Resurrect your clan (Custom - 4)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion:
07/10/2020
Relevant mission links: 1 | 2 | 3
Additional information: Reclaiming the Hellsing Organisation from its fallen state as only member and leader. Also reclaiming the Moon Isle as bastion for said reclaimed clan.

Mission Passed.

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Mission Rank: D
Story elements chosen:
- Survive an illusion attack (custom - 1)
Date of beginning & date of conclusion: Start and End 30th June 2020
Relevant mission links: A & B
Additional information:
Yeah, still getting familiar with missions and this was fun.

Mission Declined. Resubmit with the proper information. Link to each post involved, and mention all the elements.

I can't tell what's going on here.


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