Few things you got wrong in the chapters you mentioned. i.e. (Obito wouldn't be mad at Sasuke for betraying him. He betrayed sasuke first to Kabuto, but Kabuto failed anyways. Obito sold sasuke out before Sasuke even left Akatsuki. Plus Sasuke has already joined the fight and Obito has probably noticed him by now, but hasn't said anything to him because he probably doesn't care.)
Terrible grammar too. It was painful to read.
Dialogue was pretty bad too.
I like your idea and where you were going with the story, it was just a trainwreck of bad spelling/grammar and misinformation.