Naruto fanfic: A future without you, chapter 16

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Hey guys! So sorry for the long wait. My wifi and laptop are no more... So sad! Thank God for my phone. Also about sasukes mood: he's kind of mad at the world right now. Enjoy!

Naruto fanfic: A future without you, chapter sixteen

HINATA'S POV [ONE OF THE HOKAGE BUILDINGS MANY SECRET ROOMS]

Everyone was becoming impatient. That is, everyone excluding Sasuke and Hinata.

Anbu had gathered the Konoha 12 into a single, hidden room via reverse summoning. Their team captains, including Kakashi-sensei, weren't included. All they had been told was that they would get to see Naruto again, so for the first few minutes, no one complained.

Now everyone, even cousin Neji, had furrowed brows.

Hinata leaned over to him, curious.

"What is it, lady Hinata?" He asked without looking at her.

"Neji, I was wondering why you were here? Aren't you on guard duty for the rest of the month?" She asked.

"I am. However... I want to confirm something." He replied.

"Confirm what?" Sasuke asked, joining in on the conversation.

"...That he is still himself, without his memories." Neji answered.

"You're doubting him?" Sasuke challenged.

"Aren't you?" Neji countered.

Sasuke mulled this over, then met Neji's eyes. "No."

"He was traveling with an unknown, paranoid, cautious and strict body of entities. For all we know, they could have brainwashed him." Sai said, defending Neji.

Sakura whirled to face him, furious. "Sai! How could you?"

He held his hands up in defense. "I'm only being logical."

"But Naruto's personality doesn't apply to normal logic." Shikamaru pointed out.

"We're not talking about his personality." Neji said matter-of-factly. "We're discussing his mind."

"But he's only under a jutsu!" Lee said, hopeful. "If we break it--"

"He'll die." Ino reminded him. "Remember what Lady Tsunade said? His brain activity would cease. He'd be a vegetable."

"Nobody's asking you. BE QUIET." Sasuke ordered, causing Ino to recoil as if she were curling up in a hole to die.

"Why are you snapping at her so much?" Kiba asked. "You've been at her throat all day. It's not as if it's her fault Naruto fell off that cliff. It was you and Sakura who--"

"Kiba, I was there too." Hinata placed her hand over her heart. "Are you going to blame me?"

Kiba flinched, like he'd been slapped. His face turned as red as a tomato and he looked away, ashamed.

"I don't care what any of you think." Sakura declared. "None of you know him like I do."

"You don't know him at all." Sasuke said.

Everyone looked at him as if he'd just become suicidal. But Sakura looked hurt rather than angry.

"Of course I do! Just because you're his best friend doesn't mean you know everything about him!"

"I know him more than you do." Sasuke was glaring up at them all from behind his hair. "You're just upset that he's not your little ego-boost anymore. Now all you have is dog-brow to gush all over you. Naruto doesn't even have you on his radar. You're superfluous."

Sakura slapped him.

"He was NEVER just an ego boost Sasuke!" She yelled. "Quit getting angry at us and blaming us for your problems!"

Sasuke appeared to let this sink in.

"You should stop posing. I see through you."

Sakura pointed at his eyes. "Don't be so full of yourself. Even with the sharingan there are things you can't see! Things Naruto never lost sight of. But that's fine! It's okay to be upset Sasuke! It's okay even if he had changed! We were all changed by this! We can still make things like they were before!"

"Things will never be like they were before." Hinata told her. "But... But when we in that house together, when I was trying to be kind and careful with him, he seemed to relax, and enjoy himself around me. I think it was being in his parents house. It calmed him down."

"No."

Hinata looked up. Sasuke was speaking to HER now.

"That was your doing." He said. "You had a calming effect on him."

Her eyes widened. Was he really speaking so respectfully to her? That anti-social Uchiha-kun?

The door opened, and they all froze as Naruto and Tsunade walked in. Well, lady Tsunade walked in. Naruto stomped in after her.

"What do you mean Uri can't come with me?!" He asked.

"I TOLD you! We're holding him for questioning!" She answered.

"He's with that Ibiki guy isn't he? 'Cause I could have a word with him!" Naruto punched his palm.

"Ibiki doesn't scare that easily, you fool." She rolled her eyes at him.

"Watch me!" He snapped, and turned to head back out the door just as it slammed shut.

"Let me out!" He banged on the door with his fist.

"It's pointless." Tsunade crossed her arms. "You're not leaving this room until you pick four people to go with you to Uzushio."

"You stinking old--" Naruto started screaming again when Hinata spoke up.

"Naruto-kun."

He instantly lost all rage and demands and met Hinata's eyes. She DID have a calming effect on him.

"Oh, it's you." He said, staring blankly at her. "What're you doing here?"

"I'm a ninja." She told him for the third time.

Naruto made a "pfft" sound, puffing his cheeks out and crossing his arms. "You seem more like a housewife."

Kiba was upset, as if Naruto had insulted her. But Hinata simply blushed, happy that he had said "housewife" and not "maid."

"So, what, I just pick from these people?" Naruto pointed, annoyed.

"Yes." Tsunade nodded.

Naruto pointed at Sasuke. "Then him. He's coming."

The way he said that made Hinata nervous. Like Naruto was challenging Sasuke.


"Whoo." Sasuke said sarcastically, earning a questioning look from Sakura.

"And her too!" Naruto pointed at Hinata, not an ounce of hostility in his voice now. "And... Him and her... I guess."

He had gestured to Kiba and Hinata.

"That was quick." Tsunade put her hands on her hips. "You sure about this?"

Naruto's eyes burned like fire--a familiar, nostalgic sight for everyone present.

"Yep!"

"Okay then. Uri's already granted one of my requests. It's safe for you to walk through the village now."

Tsunade watched the door open, with an Anbu entering, carrying a ninja pack. "He wanted me to give that to you. He said it contains scrolls, a map, medicine, and supplies."

Naruto must have believed that, since he ushered it onto his back in a hurry.
But what did lady Tsunade mean by it was safe to walk through the village?
 

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Interesting chapter... I see someone attacking the group in the near future
 

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"You're just upset that he's not your little ego-boost anymore."

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I'm sorry, I had to XD The dialogue between everyone was really good though. I like this chapter! *_*
 
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it was more splendid than the previous chapters...gosh,i'm so hooked to this story and i want EARLY releases of new chapters.u've made sasuke EXACTLY how i want him to be.there were soo many things that i loved about him in this chapter like when he said to sakura,''u don't know anything about him.''kishi should definitely take a leaf from ur fanfic to improve the friendship of sasuke and naruto.:cool::T_T:
PLEASE release the next chp quickly.

p.s. sakura's not the type to slap sasuke.at least i can't imagine it but maybe that's just me.:yeah:
 

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interesting chapter 3 things i laughed at very much
1.Sakura slapped him.
2.ego boost Sasuke
3. naruto thinking hinata isnt a ninja but a housewife
anyway great chapter
 

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:win::win::win:Lol nice chapter... Sakura slapped sasuke lol...
And loved this chapter... Nice keep it up. I hope I dont have to wait long for next chapter.. Coz I am excited for it..... XD
 

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it was more splendid than the previous chapters...gosh,i'm so hooked to this story and i want EARLY releases of new chapters.u've made sasuke EXACTLY how i want him to be.there were soo many things that i loved about him in this chapter like when he said to sakura,''u don't know anything about him.''kishi should definitely take a leaf from ur fanfic to improve the friendship of sasuke and naruto.:cool::T_T:
PLEASE release the next chp quickly.

p.s. sakura's not the type to slap sasuke.at least i can't imagine it but maybe that's just me.:yeah:

I totally agree. But she does have the most attotude out of all the Konoha girls (excluding Tsunade) and he did insult her (though it was the truth). So I figured what the heck? And thank you.
 

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:win::win::win:Lol nice chapter... Sakura slapped sasuke lol...
And loved this chapter... Nice keep it up. I hope I dont have to wait long for next chapter.. Coz I am excited for it..... XD

Thanks! I'll try to be quicker with the next one. It's so hard without my wifi...:(
 

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interesting chapter 3 things i laughed at very much
1.Sakura slapped him.
2.ego boost Sasuke
3. naruto thinking hinata isnt a ninja but a housewife
anyway great chapter

Yeah that IS funny. I actually got the idea from someone at a different forum who posted an original kishi sketch of Hinata. She didn't look like much of a ninja in that pick she was just wearing a dress and looked like one of the regular citizens. The person who posted it said kishi hadn't planned to make her a ninja at first but he changed his mind. I'm glad he did though. :)
 

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"You're just upset that he's not your little ego-boost anymore."

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I'm sorry, I had to XD The dialogue between everyone was really good though. I like this chapter! *_*

Thanks I do like that line. I've had it in my head for a while an have been waiting to use it.
 

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Double posting-spam fest XDXD
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Totally loved this chapter, Sasuke being Sasuke and DAT housewife and ego-boost comment... :T_T:

Great job there, great job :win:

Though I'm sad for laptop-san and WIFI-kun :NO:
 

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"And her too!" Naruto pointed at Hinata, not an ounce of hostility in his voice now. "And... Him and her..

Just a question... Following this line it says he points to Kiba and Hinata. Was Hinata supposed to be Sakura? Otherwise Hinata was picked twice.




Ignoring my cruel editorial side.


1. Hahahahahah... Oh Naruto... One does not simply bring fear to Ibiki...:cool:

2. Classic Pokemon:

Sakura used pimp slap... It's not very effective (Sasuke being a Pimp Pokemon and all :rolleyes: ).

Sasuke used emotional slanders....It's super effective.

3. The fact Hinata has told him 3 times is hilarious.

Great chapter
 

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"And her too!" Naruto pointed at Hinata, not an ounce of hostility in his voice now. "And... Him and her..

Just a question... Following this line it says he points to Kiba and Hinata. Was Hinata supposed to be Sakura? Otherwise Hinata was picked twice.






Ignoring my cruel editorial side.


1. Hahahahahah... Oh Naruto... One does not simply bring fear to Ibiki...:cool:

2. Classic Pokemon:

Sakura used pimp slap... It's not very effective (Sasuke being a Pimp Pokemon and all :rolleyes: ).

Sasuke used emotional slanders....It's super effective.

3. The fact Hinata has told him 3 times is hilarious.

Great chapter

Sorry if I confused you. Did you see the sentence directly following that one? I guess I was unclear but the first time Naruto said "her" he meant Hinata. The second "her" was directed to Sakura and the he in the middle was directed at Kiba. Hinata wasnt picked twice. Sorry for the grammar mishap.
And thank you! Yes isnt Naruto silly? The only one we know to have scared Ibiki is Orochimaru, and that was only because Ibiki was a kid back then. Hahaha.
 

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As you should. :heh: I've had that happen too, and it's such a relief once you've used it. :)

It seriously is. I have another one in one of the documents apps on my ipad. Im not sure ill be able to use it in this fanfic though. It just popped into my head so i made sure to save it.
 

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its ok take your time..=D

Sure will. I'm so swamped for school right now. its making me very stressed and exhausted, and its hard to write good fanfics when youre so drowsy you start to see some dyslexic magic (words floating off the page). Thank God for coffee!
 
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