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The original paragraph:
Omashu is named for the city that lies on the banks of the only river running through the area. The city itself was devasted by the moon fall, but a couple of things have kept it afloat. The fact that it is a wealthy city has given them the benefit of hiring outside help with rebuilding the damages that have been done. The wealth along with the mastery of earth release has made it to where the infrastructures of the city is almost 100% how it was before. The only thing significantly new is the walls and half dome built around and over the city. The city council had opted to spend a mass amount of money on protection from "natural" disasters like before. They now seek to be even greater than before and have been thriving off of helping surrounding settlements.
The new paragraph:
Omashu is named for the city that lies on the banks of the only river running through the area. The city itself was devasted by the moon fall, but a couple of things have kept it afloat. The fact that it is a wealthy city has given them the benefit of hiring outside help with rebuilding the damages that have been done. The wealth along with the mastery of earth release has made it to where the infrastructures of the city is almost 100% how it was before. The only thing significantly new is the walls and self-healing crystal half dome built around and over the city, the crystal leaving the city coated in a pinkish shade whenever the sun should be out. The city council had opted to spend a mass amount of money on protection from "natural" disasters like before. They now seek to be even greater than before and have been thriving off of helping surrounding settlements.
Type: Simple Change
The original paragraph:
Omashu is named for the city that lies on the banks of the only river running through the area. The city itself was devasted by the moon fall, but a couple of things have kept it afloat. The fact that it is a wealthy city has given them the benefit of hiring outside help with rebuilding the damages that have been done. The wealth along with the mastery of earth release has made it to where the infrastructures of the city is almost 100% how it was before. The only thing significantly new is the walls and half dome built around and over the city. The city council had opted to spend a mass amount of money on protection from "natural" disasters like before. They now seek to be even greater than before and have been thriving off of helping surrounding settlements.
The new paragraph:
Omashu is named for the city that lies on the banks of the only river running through the area. The city itself was devasted by the moon fall, but a couple of things have kept it afloat. The fact that it is a wealthy city has given them the benefit of hiring outside help with rebuilding the damages that have been done. The wealth along with the mastery of earth release has made it to where the infrastructures of the city is almost 100% how it was before. The only thing significantly new is the walls and self-healing crystal half dome built around and over the city, the crystal leaving the city coated in a pinkish shade whenever the sun should be out. The city council had opted to spend a mass amount of money on protection from "natural" disasters like before. They now seek to be even greater than before and have been thriving off of helping surrounding settlements.
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