DISCLAIMER: THESE ARE SUBJECTIVE OPINIONS AND CRITIQUE. Im not thinking this through. Just writing what I feel about the pieces and might even change my mind while typing. Second no real criteria. I like what I like and feel what I feel. LOL. Overall I just want to read something awesome. Im sure others have different opinions so please don't be mad, or don't read these if you think you might get mad.
Entry 1
It never hurts to have a fan favorite as your character of choice. I love Levi and I think It was written well. The deaths were very AOT like as they were sudden and shocking even though you saw it coming (Mikasa's especially). I liked it, but I think its held back by the world and the series. This prompt gave everyone an opportunity to put characters in unlikely positions and I think we've kinda seen this playout in a way with these specific characters. Moreover, since its such a brutal world although the deaths of main characters were shocking to say the least, the emotional response just wasn't there for me through no fault of your own because you held true to the nature of the show. Its just that if you've watched the show you have mentally prepared yourself for sudden, brutal deaths and so its just hard to get a reaction when someone dies other than..."Damn." Other than that its good and I think you did really well by staying true to the characters and making this believable which is a testament to your skills.
Entry 2
Thought the style here was interesting. Don't know much about the series but I think I picked it up more or less. The ending was my favorite part because I think the reasoning behind his decision was beautifully written and something you could seriously relate to. It's definitely easy to remember this entry so that could help it get some votes. Plus metaphors? Love those things. LOL "hugged my mother", "Kissed my father" like damn. Used positive terms to highlight the dark act taking place. Then you circle everything back to the first couple of lines which never hurts so all in all great job. That was cool beans.
Entry 3
Absolutely loved this. Written really well and I love how you slowly reveal the character although you can probably guess what it is halfway through. I think they used the prompt really well and built around a world where you wouldn't normally see this kind of thing which only added to how awesomely tragic it was because the whole time you're like wtf, are you serious? The imagery was eye opening because again you don't see this sort of thing in that show so It just hits you so hard. But in the same token its believable because the show takes place in a best case scenario reality, but if you wanted REALITY this is what could really happen in such a universe so its still believable. Its not like you made Mr. Ratburn a serial killer and Arthur is trying to get revenge. So the entire time I'm just crying out here because you're describing in detail just wtf took place. This is further enhanced by telling it from the point of view of Pikachu because you normally don't get to see actual dialogue to specifically know what is going on through its mind so to hear its thoughts as this is all happening invokes an emotional response as well. Pikachu really can't do anything about its trainer getting injured and it just makes it hurt even more because although you want to save them you simply cant do it. A lot of feels and I think this has a real chance to win.
Entry 4
I liked how they went outside the box and chose a villain to be the star of the show. I feel like this was a good concept to try but I would have preferred they chose a villain/antagonist you could sympathize with more since you can't help but kinda like the fact that Doffy is in this position. Don't get me wrong I love Doffy as a character/villain and his backstory is tragic, but he is just such a prick man. Like dude is evil incarnate, so while many of the other prompts evoke an emotional response and get me invested I'm just like...that's what you get dude but I guess that is also good in its own way. I did enjoy getting to look into his psyche since it was told from his point of view. He is so twisted that it is a once in a lifetime chance to actually see what he is thinking so maybe that was what you were going for. Its just for me personally I cant feel sorry for him and we have kind of seen this playout already. (And I'm thinking as I'm typing so forgive me if I'm all over the place) but maybe you didn't want us to feel sorry for him at all. Maybe you wanted us to see what motivates such a man. SO this was one of my favorite parts right here.>>>‘I’ve always known that, So I had to ask myself, how do you hurt one who can neither love nor mourn, who misses nobody, what drives and motivates this feeling-less hollow shell of a man? The answer was simple when I thought about it. Power.’" He snapped his fingers as a nearby chunk of debris vanished and was replaced with a body. A white shrouded crumpled heap lay between us. Caesar the Clown.
Reason I love it was because it put it into perspective of what CC represented. Most if not all the other stories involve a physical companion whom they value more than anything but for Doffy it was the concept of power itself. CC was just the concept incarnate. It was his Power on the brink of death, his control. It was his power that would be lost should he take revenge and satisfy his pride, so he saved Caesar but in reality he was just saving the power and control he represented. Loved that take and the more I analyze your story and debate with myself the more I love it so Kudos.
Entry 5
….WHOO that thing is long. I liked the story and enjoyed some of the twists. I imagine having to explain the new concepts helped lengthen this piece as well as a fleshed out battle scene. That aside I liked the different takes on Kakashi since he is a relatively reserved person and you got to see some really drastic sides of him, ranging from committing suicide out of hopelessness to committing genocide after losing his mind because of that same hopelessness. Perhaps you should work on doing more with less, but I think it was pretty good and to be honest I've seen longer works. LOL
Entry 6: Okay like the third one this effed me up. My heart strings are torn. Really, Deku and Ocha like damn man. Really brings the prompt to your mind and the responsibilities of a hero. I could totally see Deku balling his eyes out while shouting "I'm here" like damn man chill. Your bestfriend possible romantic interest is lying their dying and you have to leave her knowing she is going to die if you don't save her to save people you don't know while this jerk taunts you. NO SIR I PASS! The whole time I was wondering if I could make that same decision. Man Idk I really loved this one and my mind is all over the place because I like those characters and they both are the least deserving of such a fate. It was simple yet so thought provoking. I could totally see this scene playing out in my head and I could definitely see this happening fr although I'm sure the creator wouldn't kill her off....probably. BUT THIS...THIS LINE RIGHT HERE
“I am sorry Ochoko,” Deku finally said. She smiled in response.
“It’s okay Deku because you are here,” she responded.
“I AM HERE,” Izuku echoed. He lowered Ochoko to the ground
Nah eff that I'm not crying, you're crying. Nah man get that out of my face frfr. You ruthless jerk why would you do me like that.
I honestly think this got the strongest response out of me. Like in entry 3 the whole thing was steadily having me in the feels, but like with this It kind of hits all at once right here and just...damn. His responsibilities as not only a friend but a hero was on full display and made this decision even harder than it already was. I also think this has a good chance to win the competition.
Huge edit cuz im goofy as hell.
Entry 7-.Now I like the plot twist of all for one becoming Deku and I loved the bitter ending of Bakugo sacrificing everything only to have All for One stay alive except *badump tis* that’s not the ending! Whoo u really fooled me cuz I didn’t see that spoiler. So first of all I’m an idiot and second of all thanks to the perv master for setting me straight. Now I love this ending. It’s realistic, keeps with the prompt and still maintains the emotions as ur taking for a ride. If u read my previous review I was talking about bakugo’s hot headedness and how I don’t think he would kill his mother;however, i think it works well here as a miniature plot twist. You see as he is debating it ur sitting there like “he wouldn’t kill his mother...would he”. So yeah while u debate it u have to recognize, or at least I feel like their is a 20-30% chance he would do it although rationally I can see he thinks really well under pressure. Then as u read ur like...aw crap he did it. Then ur like...it didn’t even work! *gasp*. Then finally u see he made imo the right choice although his friend is a monster basically and everyone has died. So I like the roller coaster and u actually fooled me fr. Lmbo good job good job. Glad u didn’t off his mom.
-These are my thoughts don't kill me guys