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(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaku) -Summoning Technique-Shizaku
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Offense
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaku. Shizaku is a massive black spitting cobra roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaku is a Fire Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Fire jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a fire style snake Shizaku can shoot fireballs from his mouth and being a spitting cobra he is able to spit burning venom that burn through the enemies skin and paralyze on contact. He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.


(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shin) -Summoning Technique-Shin
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Offense
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shin. Shin is a massive black and green pitviper roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shin is a Lightning Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Lightning jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a lightning style snake Shin can move at very high speeds that only a 3t Sharingan and a Byakugan can track being a spitting pitviper he can spit out venom that can numb an area uppon contact . He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.


(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaka) -Summoning Technique-Shizaka
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Offense
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaka. Shizaks is a massive blue water python roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaka is a Water Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Water jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a water style snake Shizaka can swim underwater far deeper than any opponent can reach her and move at very high speeds underwater. She is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on her head also about 3-4 people can ride in her mouth for underwater adventures




X-All declined-X Place restrictions



(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaku) -Summoning Technique-Shizaku
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Offense
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaku. Shizaku is a massive black spitting cobra roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaku is a Fire Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Fire jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a fire style snake Shizaku can shoot fireballs from his mouth and being a spitting cobra he is able to spit burning venom that burn through the enemies skin and paralyze on contact. He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.
-Stays on field for 5 turns
-Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
-All jutse come out of his mouth
♠ Declined ♠
I have some issues with this jutsu. Firstly, it is quite the generic jutsu, and isn't unique, but alright, I can let that slip. Secondly, it can only stay on the field for four turns.
Lastly, you said that it can spit burning venom from its mouth? You need to be more specific here or make a completely another jutsu for this. How much venom can it spit, what are the restrictions to it, and the general range as well.

(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shin) -Summoning Technique-Shin
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Offense
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shin. Shin is a massive black and green pitviper roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shin is a Lightning Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Lightning jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a lightning style snake Shin can move at very high speeds that only a 3t Sharingan and a Byakugan can track being a spitting pitviper he can spit out venom that can numb an area uppon contact . He is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on his head.
-Stays on field for 5 turns
-Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
-All jutse come out of his mouth
♠ Declined ♠
Same reason as above with the venom, and no, it can not move so fast that only a 3T or Byakugan can track it. Change that.
Four turns, please.


(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Shizaka) -Summoning Technique-Shizaka
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Offense
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user takes some blood and wipes it on their snake tattoo, then they make the snake hand sign and slam their hand into the ground to summon Shizaka. Shizaks is a massive blue water python roughly the size of the snake Orochimaru used in the forest of death. Shizaka is a Water Style specialist snake and can use up to A rank Water jutsu that don't require hand signs. Being a water style snake Shizaka can swim underwater far deeper than any opponent can reach her and move at very high speeds underwater. She is large enough for a group of 5 people ride on her head also about 4-5 people can ride in her mouth for underwater adventures
-Stays on field for 5 turns
-Each jutsu used counts as one of the users 3 jutsu
-All jutse come out of her mouth
♠ Declined ♠
Exactly how far deep in the water can she swim, and I need a limit on how fast she can swim as well.
Again, lack of detail. Four turns as well.




Added restrictions(Didnt think A rank summons needed restrictions)
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(Genjutsu: Kyomu no bodi) Illusion Arts: Body of Nothingness
Type: Suppementary/Offensive
Rank:A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user will place the opponent in an illusion that causes the victim to experience their body fading away and turning into mist. In reality, this causes their body to go completely numb and causes them temporary paralysis.
~Can only be taught by Rikerslade.~
~Victim remains completely and utterly paralyzed for one turn.~
~When the jutsu wears off, movement does not come back right away, it comes back gradually.~
♠ Declined ♠
That is not how Genjutsus work. You only affect their chakra system, and you don't cause them to go completely numb or become paralyzed at all in real life.
Add a jutsu limit as well.


(Katon: Fushichō no hane) Fire Release: Phoenix's Wing
Type: Offense
Rank: A
Range: Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will create a line of fire on the back of their arm that stretches from the wrist to the elbow, creating what looks like a wing of fire. He will then swing his arm as if he is delivering a hook. While swinging, the fire will be launched out i the form of a wall-like blast that can cause severe burns.
~Can only be taught by Rikerslade.~
~Can only be used three times per battle~
♠ Declined, do not re-submit ♠
Too similar to another existing technique.
 
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(Repulsion Blade) Sekiryoku
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 20 (Only a little chakra is needed to initiate the weapons ability)
Damage: 80
Description: Sekiryoku is a regular sized katana built with a special blend of chakra metals and thus when the wielder of Sekiryoku channels wind chakra through the blade, creating a thick layer of wind chakra around the blade that repels all that come within a couple of inches of the blade (Aprox 3-4 inches). This coating of chakra can be manipulated to do several things, one of these is to circulate, practically turning the blade into a chainsaw, the other ability is to move all of the coating to the tip of the blade, extending it by half a length.

Sekiryoku can cut through up to S-Rank Lightning, A-Rank Fire and C-Rank Earth.

-Can only be wielded by Kato.
-When active the user cannot use S-Rank Wind jutsu
♠ Declined ♠
First off, what exactly do you mean by the blade repelling all that come within a couple of inches to it? Specifically what kinds of things can it repel?
Secondly, what do you mean by turning the blade into a chainsaw? Do you use the Wind chakra to sort of shape it or does it actually become a chainsaw?
Also, if you want to be able extend it as well, I need a generic length of the katana, not just "medium-sized."
Add more restrictions to it, and no, it can not cut through all that stuff. It's a medium sized katana up against wide ranged jutsus. Simply isn't reasonable at all.
 
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(Fuuton: Youkai Masurao) - Wind Style: Phantom Warrior
Type: Attack / Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid (nearby the user)
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After a short sequence of 3 hand seals the user creates a human body from wind which has similar characteristics (shape) as a real person. However being made from only wind it can't be hit by average physical attacks. It's attack pattern is similar to a real human being when he is using free form taijutsu moves, but the actual attack is a concentrated wind blast generated upon contact. These attacks doesn't have any cutting ability, but instead blunt force which makes it more similar to a human being, but with increased strength. Any attack has the potential to send the opponent flying.
- can only be used 5 times per battle
- can only last 1 turn
- can only be taught by Frozenstein

X-Approved-X Changed the range, you dont form it long range behind the opponent.
(Fuuton: Youkai Masurao) - Wind Style: Phantom Warrior
Type: Attack / Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After a short sequence of 2 hand seals the user creates a human body from wind which has similar characteristics (shape) as a real person. However being made from only wind it can't be hit by average physical attacks. It's attack pattern is similar to a real human being when he is using free form taijutsu moves, but the actual attack is a concentrated wind blast generated upon contact. These attacks doesn't have any cutting ability, but instead blunt force which makes it more similar to a human being, but with increased strength. Any attack has the potential to send the opponent flying. As the phantom is only wind, it can be moved in mid air freely.
- can only be used 5 times per battle
- can only be created 3 meters away from the opponent on his sides/above/under or in front of him
- can only last 1 turn
- can only be taught by Frozenstein

(Raiton: Raikou Issou) - Lightning Release: Lightning Escape
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short (Short-Long when moving)
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A (60 if direct contact occurs)
Description: The user performs a single hand seal and turn his body into lightning. Once turned into lightning he can move with high speed in every direction and even change directions freely. He can travel high into the air, on the ground, or in a water source. If the user turns into lightning he can’t see or hear anything around him, but can sense up to mid range. In lightning form he can’t even attack or use jutsus, however if the enemy gets in contact with him, he becomes paralised. User can't travel through earth, but if the opponent uses an earth jutsu againt the user, it can be destroyed.
- can only be used 3 times per battle
- can only be taught by Frozenstein

Jutsu looks like this.
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±± All Declined ±±
for being in detention.
resubmitting

(Fuuton: Youkai Masurao) - Wind Style: Phantom Warrior
Type: Attack / Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After a short sequence of 2 hand seals the user creates a human body from wind which has similar characteristics (shape) as a real person. However being made from only wind it can't be hit by average physical attacks. It's attack pattern is similar to a real human being when he is using free form taijutsu moves, but the actual attack is a concentrated wind blast generated upon contact. These attacks doesn't have any cutting ability, but instead blunt force which makes it more similar to a human being, but with increased strength. Any attack has the potential to send the opponent flying. As the phantom is only wind, it can be moved in mid air freely.
- can only be used 5 times per battle
- can only be created 3 meters away from the opponent on his sides/above/under or in front of him
- can only last 1 turn
- can only be taught by Frozenstein

Changed some parts to make it more useful and added a new restriction.
♠ Declined ♠
A human body from wind? Give me an idea of what it looks like as this seems like another clone jutsu. This needs to be detectable by the opponent.
Also, how far can it move away from its original creator? And what do you mean it can move in mid air freely? Does it fly?


(Raiton: Raikou Issou) - Lightning Release: Lightning Escape
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A-rank
Range: Short (Short-Long when moving)
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A (60 if direct contact occurs)
Description: The user performs a single hand seal and turn his body into lightning. Once turned into lightning he can move with high speed in every direction and even change directions freely. He can travel high into the air, on the ground, or in a water source. If the user turns into lightning he can’t see or hear anything around him, but can sense up to mid range. In lightning form he can’t even attack or use jutsus, however if the enemy gets in contact with him, he becomes paralised. User can't travel through earth, but if the opponent uses an earth jutsu againt the user, it can be destroyed.
- can only be used 3 times per battle
- can only be taught by Frozenstein
♠ Declined ♠
Lack of details. You can move in high speed in every direction? Approximately how fast, is it detectable by the naked eye? Also, put a limit on high you can travel in the air, and no, you can not travel in the water, that's ridiculous.
Exactly what can he sense in such a state? Chakra only?
Contact? As in touching contact or a certain range?
Lastly, very vague. What level of earth jutsus are in-effective against this?

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(Raiton: Raikou Kubochi) - Lightning Release: Lightning Pit
Type: Attack
Rank: S-rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user performs 2 hand seals and making rain falling from the sky. As the first rain drops reach the opponent, the user can change his chakra into lightning and use the rain drops as conductors to create a giant lightning pit. This pit extends to 3 meters in every direction around the target if there’s rain or any other water source in that vicinity. The lightning attacks and damages everything inside the pit and make them roast. This technique can be used with any already existing rain or water drops around the target and can be performed with 1 hand seal at that time. The created rain looks like regular rain for the naked eye, making extremely hard to predict the lightning attack.
- can be used with pre-existing rain or water source around the target
- can only be used 3 times per battle
- can only be taught by Frozenstein
♠ Declined ♠
This can be too OP and it's very confusing. You're basically saying you're infusing rain drops with lightning chakra and then aiming them at specific places around the enemy to create a pit? And then the pit is somehow interconnected with the lightning?
I can barely understand this, you gotta be more detailed and specific. I'm having trouble imagining it.
 
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(Kage Matorikkusu) Shadow matrix
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: A shadow technique invented by Flash07, where the user concentrates his shadow chakra to his shadow which gives it steel like strength. Then the user extends his shadows, (he can divide it into 3 in the start) where it digs through the earth and travels towards the opponent. The shadows travels 5 inches underground but it makes no noise or any disturbances so the opponent is unaware of it. When the shadow comes out of the other end, it divides into 5 spikes each and then jags the opponent and holds him in place.

Note: When underground, the shadows are unaffected by light.
Note: Can only be used by Naras.
Note: Can only be taught by Flash07.

X-Declined-X Then how would you make shadows underground if there is no light? O_O
(Kage Matorikkusu) Shadow matrix
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: A shadow technique invented by Flash07, where the user concentrates his shadow chakra to his shadow and materializes it which gives it steel like strength. Then the user extends his shadows, (he can divide it into 3 in the start) where it digs through the earth and travels towards the opponent. The shadows travels 5 inches underground but it makes no noise or any disturbances so the opponent is unaware of it. When the shadow comes out of the other end, it divides into 5 spikes each and then jags the opponent and holds him in place. This technique works exactly in the same way as used by Shikamaru in his match against Temari i.e. using his shadows underground.

Note: When underground, the shadows are unaffected by light.
Note: Can only be used by Naras.
Note: Can only be taught by Flash07.
♠ Declined ♠
Not reasonable for me at all. You dig your shadows into the earth without your opponent knowing? That's literally impossible considering the power of this move and how long it reaches.
It would definitely create sound and disturbances in the ground when it happens and you never stated how large or wide it would be as well.
Also, add a usage limit.

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(Kage Uragiri) | Shadow Betrayal
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60 (+10 if used with exploding tags)
Description: A secret technique known by only the most elite ninjas of the Nara clan. This technique was created to fool the opponent. The user after performing the rat handseal, extends his shadow all around him in a circle with him being in the centre. This shadow is initially very light and doesn't require much chakra and can easily blend with the ground. Once done, the user can move around freely and once the opponent enters the field of shadows, the user again with a rat handseal makes the shadows dark and visible which traps the opponent in his shadows and then creates several spikes and whips of shadows from all around him. The whips bind him in place and are attached to grey coloured explosive tags which cannot be distinguished from the normal lighter shadows, while the spikes stabs them.

Note: Can only be used twice.
Note: If the opponent uses light emitting jutsus, the frontal side of the shadow gets damaged which gets repaired automatically but after one turn.
Note: The jutsu lasts for 3 turns max.
Note: The user cannot use any other elemental Jutsu while this jutsu is active.
Note: The light shadow can be seen by doujutsu users.
Note: Can only be taught by Flash07.

♠ Declined ♠
This is a very long and complicated jutsu, it appears, so let's sit down with a cup of coffee and break it up piece by piece.
First off, you say "this shadow is initially very light and doesn't require much chakra and can easily blend with the ground". What does this mean? Did you just create an arena around you with the shadows? Does it disappear into the ground and can the opponent see it?
Secondly, "once done, the user can move around freely and once the opponent enters the field of shadows, the user again with a rat handseal makes the shadows dark and visible which traps the opponent in his shadows and then creates several spikes and whips of shadows from all around him." You can move around freely? How so? Within the shadows, or just upon the arena you created? And once you trap the opponent in the shadows, how exactly where and how many shadows attack him?
Lastly, "The whips bind him in place and are attached to grey coloured explosive tags which cannot be distinguished from the normal lighter shadows, while the spikes stabs them." If you created spikes earlier to attack him, how would you make whips instead? And no, you can not create grey colored explosive tags from shadows, that is unreasonable. Explosive tags require the Snake handseal to detonate and are a valid ninja tool, not a part of Shadows.


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(Futon: Wani no ha) Wind Style: Alligator Teeth
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60 (if applicable)
Description: The user emits wind chakra from his body which starts gathering on his skin and coats itself on his whole body. By shape manipulation, this chakra can be used to create wind spikes which come out of the user's body which can be used for fighting oppinents close range. These spikes are so sharp and when they come out, they look like the teeth of alligator. The chakra coated on the user's body defend the user from all S-Rank and below lightening attacks. Also, this helps the user to stay dry even underwater. But this doesn't help the user to avoid hits by either of the elements. A strong water attack may always knock the user off his feet due to the impact. Same goes with the lightening if it does have a pushing impact.
Note: Can only be used twice.
Note: Last for only two turns max.
Note: Cannot perform any other jutsu while this is active, due to the heavy concentration needed.
Note: Can only be taught by Flash07.
♠ Declined ♠
Firstly, how large and tall are the spikes and where do they come from? How many can you have on your body and how far do they reach? Are they visible?
And no, it doesn't help you stay dry underwater, that's kind of unreasonable.
Reduce the usage to one time as well.
 
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(Kuchiyose: Kishida) - Summoning: Kishida
Type: Summon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user wipes blood on his summoning tattoo to summon Kishida, a white locust 8 meters in height wearing armor made of numerous rectangular metal plates covering his body. Regarding himself as a knight, he spends the majority of his time wearing this armor which has developed his strength substantially. He has no trouble moving around with it regularly but cannot fly while wearing it. The armor contains chakra, allowing it to withstand damage from an S-rank attack before being destroyed. Kishida is able to disassemble his armor and levitate it through the air to form protective barriers up to mid range from himself. He can also mold the metal plates together after levitating them to create a large lance used to attack with the strength of an A-rank jutsu. With his fire affinity, he may imbue the metal with fire chakra which can increase the power of the lance to S-rank and allow the armor to endure An S and an A-rank attack. Anything that touches the metal is burned by the flames on it and flammable materials are turned to ash almost immediately. While wearing the armor, the flames are on the outer part of it, preventing Kishida from harming himself.
-Can only be summoned once per battle
-Can stay for 5 turns
-Levitating the armor, imbuing the armor with fire chakra, and creating a lance each count as a move of the user.
-Must have signed the Locust contract

X-Declined-X Its a nice summon but you need to seriously restrict its defensive capabilities.

I'm the holder of the locust contract:

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(Doton: Terafōmingu) - Earth Release: Terraforming
Type: Defense/Supplementary
Rank: A-S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30 (40 for S-rank)
Damage: 60 (80 for S-rank)
Description: The user forms the Snake handseal and spreads vast amounts of doton chakra throughout the target area. By molding the earth and changing its elevation, the user may create tall hills and deep valleys in various shapes as long as the amount of earth raised is equal the the amount lowered. This process happens quickly and can drastically change the geography of the land to the user's benefit. The chakra always flowing throughout the earth makes it more resistant to attacks. The Snake handseal may be held in order to dynamically change the earth's features but for only one turn. The S-rank version of this technique allows the user to change the features of the earth over a massive area and is even capable of creating a giant mountain.
-A-rank usable 3 times per battle
-A-rank can effect a maximum radius of 10 meters
-S-rank usable once per battle
-After using the S-rank version no earth jutsu can be performed for the next two turns
-Cannot be used to move earth sideways

X-Declined-X You know thats freeform manipulation even though restricted to just hills and mountains but still.

(Suiton: Hidora Taihō) - Water Release: Hydra Cannon
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user forms the Ram handseal and creates two Hydra heads from a water source. They then fire spiraling streams of pressurized water from their mouths at the enemy powerful enough to rip off clothing and cause internal damage.

X-Approved-X Removed the restriction
Resubmitting:

(Kuchiyose: Kishida) - Summoning: Kishida
Type: Summon
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user wipes blood on his summoning tattoo to summon Kishida, a white locust 8 meters in height wearing armor made of numerous rectangular metal plates covering his body. Regarding himself as a knight, he spends the majority of his time wearing this armor which has developed his strength substantially. He has no trouble moving around with it regularly but cannot fly while wearing it. The armor contains chakra, allowing it to withstand damage from an A-rank attack before being destroyed. Kishida is able to disassemble his armor and levitate it through the air to form protective barriers up to mid range from himself. He can also mold the metal plates together after levitating them to create a large lance used to attack with the strength of an A-rank jutsu. With his fire affinity, he may imbue the metal with fire chakra which can increase the power of the lance to S-rank and allow the armor to endure an S-rank attack. Anything that touches the metal is burned by the flames on it and flammable materials are turned to ash almost immediately. While wearing the armor, the flames are on the outer part of it, preventing Kishida from harming himself. Once a battle, Kishida may summon another set of armor from a scroll he produces from his mouth.
-Can only be summoned once per battle
-Can stay for 5 turns
-Levitating the armor, imbuing the armor with fire chakra, and creating a lance, and summoning armor each count as a move of the user.
-Must have signed the Locust contract


♠ Declined ♠
So, what you're saying is that can only do one thing at one time, correct? Either use the armor as a defense, use it as an attack, or use it as a lance?
And you stated if he imbues it with Fire chakra, it can endure a S-Rank attack, but what if it is water? Does it get destroyed after it endures that attack?
Lastly, "anything that touches the metal is burned by the flames on it and flammable materials are turned to ash almost immediately." So, you're saying that when he walks on the ground, it burns the ground to ashes as well? Is this close range contact or a certain range?
And no, he can only stay on the field for four turns.

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(Suiton: Hidora Taihō) - Water Release: True Hydra Cannon
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user forms the Ram, Snake, and Boar handseals and calls forth a massive amount of water from the ground that quickly turns the battlefield into a small ocean. Seven giant hydra heads with long necks emerge from the water and attack enemies with their sharp teeth and heads. They can also fire spiraling streams of pressurized water from their mouths at the enemy, crushing them with the immense force of the water. This counts as an additional move of the user and is A-rank in strength.
-Usable twice per battle
-No S-rank or higher water jutsu for the next two turns
-The hydra heads can also be create from a large water source.
♠ Declined ♠
First, tell me where exactly on the ground can it appear. In front of you directly, from behind the opponent? Also, how deep can the water be and can the hydra heads only form after you've created the entire ocean?
Approximately how big are the hydra heads as well and how far can they reach? Because if it is too big, then no, that's quite OP as it would cover the entire battlefield.
And with such a strong jutsu, you can only use it once in battle.
 
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(manako sono arashi) Eye of the storm
Type: Weapon
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: ( 10 to any wind jutsu used along with sword)
Description: The eye of the storm is a sword that was long lost is the desert sands, and buried deep within the earth. The sword was found by elmage during one of his adventures, A terrible sand storm blew away the sands covering the sword, bringing it to the surface revealing the sword, since when elmage found the sword it slowly revealed its power till he became proficient with it. Theres a phrase inscribed on the sword, that can only be read by the user of the sword
When used, the sword absorbs wind chakra from the user, it increases the range of any wind jutsu used with the sword, e.g a short ranged jutsu used with the sword becomes mid range, also it increases the damage of a wind jutsu used with the sword by 10.
Note: long range remains long range

- Effects lasts /can only be used for five turns
- must be stated at the begining of battle/stated in bio to use
- Can only be used by elmage
- Sword cannot be used with a forbidden Rank technique

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X-Declined-X No more element boosting swords
Resubmiting​

(manako sono arashi) Eye of the storm
Type: Weapon
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short (blast of wind is mid range)
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The eye of the storm is a sword that was long lost is the desert sands, and buried deep within the earth. The sword was found by elmage during one of his adventures, A terrible sand storm blew away the sands covering the sword, bringing it to the surface revealing the sword, since when elmage found the sword it slowly revealed its power till he became proficient with it. Theres a phrase inscribed on the sword, that can only be read by the user of the sword.
When the user channels his wind chakra into his sword, it forms spike-like shaped wind around the sword, the range of the intangible wind is increased and it can cut through almost anything(covering of wind around the sword is equivalent to S rank)
The user can also swing his sword, releasing a blast of wind in sync with the swing that can deflect/blast anything in its path equivalent to an S-Rank jutsu



- blast of wind can be used twice and counts as part of the three move limit
- must be stated at the beginning of battle/stated in bio to use and last the entire battle

- Can only be used by elmage
- Sword cannot be used with a forbidden Rank technique

How sword looks like(more or less) when wind is channeled through it
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♠ Declined ♠
I have an issue with "it forms spike-like shaped wind around the sword, the range of the intangible wind is increased". The range of the sword can be increased? To how long exactly?
Also, the blast of wind. Too generic. I need to know exactly how big it is, how wide it covers. Does it cover a certain path before you or a whole wide area?


(fuuton: rei matsuri) wind release: ghost feast
Type: Attack/defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: long range
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: the user performs the ram seal and release a powerful blast of wind that carries the surrounding small rocks and shapes into a massive ghostly face with its mouth open, this is capable of leveling anything in its part, and the rocks carried by the wind makes it very dangerous.

Can only be used once
The user cannot use wind for three turns
No S-rank wind in the same and next turn
can only bt taught by elmage
♠ Declined ♠
Way too similar to existing techniques, especially the basic D-Rank one.
 
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[Raiton : Gurandoraitoningufenikkusu ] - Lightning Release : Grand Lightning Phoenix
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short- Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Just like Korra's Grand Water Phoenix Jutsu but with lightning the user will focus all their raiton chakra into the sky. When they have enough chakra in the sky they start to create a giant phoenix that is the half the size of Gamabunta made of lightning. When the phoenix is form it will explode into a large barrage of mini phoenixes that are the size of Abumanre bugs (and as such completely visible) and will come down onto the opponent with such great force that even if they were underground up to 5 meters underground the phoenixes would still break through and do minor damage like breaking a little into the skin but not do faultily damage. Although the small phoenixes don't actually move that fast, they pact great momentum.
Note: Cannot use any lightning jutsus for the next turn
Note: It takes 2 jutsu moves to form.
Note: Has to be taught by ~Korra~
Note: Every mini phoenix isnt S rank.
Note: If the user does not find a way to defend them self or avoid the attack the jutsu will hurt the user.
Changed the depth it can reach since its Raiton

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Reaper Scythe Arts: Reaper's Heart (Sishen Liandao Yishu: Shinigami no shinzō )
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After the user throws their scythe at the opponent while still being attached to their chain they will use their chakra to create clones of the scythes(like Shuriken Shadow Clone Jutsu) that are all still attached to the user chain making it harder for the opponent to dodge due to the scythes covering a wider range.
Note: Needs to be taught by ~Korra~
Note: Usable 3 times
Note: Can only create up to 5 Scythe clones

Link to my CFS approval

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Updating this

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(Suiton: Mizu fenikkusu) - Water Style: Water Phoenix
Rank: A
Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: A technique that utilizes water to create a phoenix shaped made up of water. The user can then send the phoenix at the enemy or use it to defend against attacks. The phoenix is as big as the hawk Sasuke summoned during the fight with Danzo.
Note: Can only block ninja tools and up to S rank fire within reason.(Depending on the size of the fire jutsu)
Note: Can only be taught by ~Johninto Uchiha~
Note: Can only be used 3 times a battle.
Note: Can either use a water source or release it from the user mouth.

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Don't forget to update any members that might know the original of these changes.
Want a fire version too if I could possibly o.o
[Katon : Gurandofaiyāfenikkusu ] - Fire Release : Grand Fire Phoenix
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short- Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Just like Korra's Grand Water Phoenix Jutsu but with fire the user will focus all their fire chakra into the sky. When they have enough chakra in the sky they start to create a giant phoenix that is the half the size of Gamabunta made of fire. When the phoenix is form it will explode into a large barrage of mini phoenixes that are the size of Abumanre bugs (and as such completely visible) and will come down onto the opponent with such great force that even if they were underground up to 3 meters underground the phoenixes would still break through and do minor damage like breaking a little into the skin but not do faultily damage. Although the small phoenixes don't actually move that fast, they pact great momentum.
Note: Cannot use any fire jutsus for the next turn
Note: It takes 2 jutsu moves to form.
Note: Has to be taught by ~Korra~
Note: Every mini phoenix isnt S rank.
Note: If the user does not find a way to defend them self or avoid the attack the jutsu will hurt the user.
♠ Declined ♠
Reminds me of Selendrile's fire birds and also Kage Phoenix's technique. Too similar.


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(Sishen Liandao Yishu: Shinigami wa u~iru) Reaper Scythe Arts: The Grim Reaper's Will
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Though it was develop form the elemental infusion, Korra was able to intensify the jutsu to create scythes made out of pure chakra non-elemental and elemental chakra. These chakra scythes are able to cut sharper then normal scythes. When using chakra the chakra scythes each have different effects.
Katon: The scythe is made up of a dark reddish chakra and when in contact with an opponent can produce a burning effect upon contact.
Suiton: The scythe is made up of a dark blue chakra, making the scythe more flexible and can increase the length up to 3 feet.
Raiton: The chakra made up of yellow chakra increasing the scythes penetration and to have a numbing effect upon impact.
Doton: The scythe made up of brown chakra can have its weight either increased (3 times as much) or decreased (3 times as much) to either increase impact or speed, depending on the situation (only one weight change per use, meaning either use this infusion for more weight or less with each use)
Futon: The blade is made up of green chakra increasing its cutting power.
Normal Chakra: The scythe is made up of light blue chakra and can be dense enough to stop ninja tools and ninjutsu (Up to B rank)
Note: Usable 3 time a match
Note: Must know Reaper Scythe Arts and must be taught by ~Korra~
Note: Can only have one infusion active. With earth infusion, each changing of weight counts as a use.
Note: Each infusion can stop/cut in half the element its stronger then(depends on the opposing jutsu size) and can be broken by their weakness chakra by an A rank or higher.

♠ Declined ♠
Alright, let's break this down, mate, as I am very hesitant about you using each of the scythes like that.
First off, the scythe itself. How large is it, and how does one generally grasp it? It should also last a certain amount of time, as you are utilizing each of the elements.
Katon: The scythe is made up of a dark reddish chakra and when in contact with an opponent can produce a burning effect upon contact. How does one expect to wield scythes of fire? They are intangible, and can easily be blown out by Wind jutsus.
Suiton: The scythe is made up of a dark blue chakra, making the scythe more flexible and can increase the length up to 3 feet. Alright, I can relate this to D-Rank Water canon jutsu, but the way it works is a bit iffy. You can increase the length up to three feet? Does this make this mid range? And also, how might the attack of this differ from regular scythes? It can't be just water.
Raiton: The chakra made up of yellow chakra increasing the scythes penetration and to have a numbing effect upon impact. The scythe's penetration? You need to be more specific here. And alright, I understand the numbing effect, however, you need to state a limit on that, and where exactly it numbs the opponent. Entire body? Certain limbs where the scythe makes contact?
Doton: The scythe made up of brown chakra can have its weight either increased (3 times as much) or decreased (3 times as much) to either increase impact or speed, depending on the situation (only one weight change per use, meaning either use this infusion for more weight or less with each use). This makes sense, but you need a limit on how many times you can increase or decrease its weight.
Futon: The blade is made up of green chakra increasing its cutting power. Hm...well, Wind would at least be the most emphasized upon, wouldn't it? There's much more you can do with Wind than just increase its cutting power, but alright.
Normal Chakra: The scythe is made up of light blue chakra and can be dense enough to stop ninja tools and ninjutsu (Up to B rank) I grasp the concept of this, but Ninjutsu is a generic concept and I don't know how it can generally stop all Ninjutsu up to B-Rank. How would you stop killing intent or haze clones? But alright...


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(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Arbok) -Summoning Technique-Arbok
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Arbok is a purple cobra that is slightly smaller than the snakes Orochimaru summons in the manga/anime. Arbok has the ability to use Genjutsu up to B rank. Arbok is most used to carry dead bodies for Korra and other people that can summon him. Arbok can carry upto 10 dead or unconscious bodies in his stomach. If he tries carry any more the 1st body that was swallow will be lost due to it being get kick out and move to Arbok stomach.(Sorry about the graphicness o.o).
Note: Must have snakes
Note: Must be taught by ~Korra~
Note: Can be summon twice a battle and can be on the field for 5 turns.

How he looks like:
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♠ Declined ♠
Alright, summons that can use Genjutsus are extremely sly. First off, ensure that this is the ONLY ability your summon can have. Secondly, can only be on the field for four turns.
Also, when your summon uses Genjutsus, you need to state the range and how many times it can use Genjutsu in a match.
 
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(Caliburn | カリバーン)
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra cost: N/A (-40 if used with special ability moves)
Damage points: N/A(-70 if special ability moves make direct hit)
Description: Caliburn is a large demon sword wielded by Arthur. The each of the sword's face's have a cross on them. The sword is very large and starts from the hilt and continues parallel until curving towards the middle then continuing until coming together at a point. Little is said of the creation of the sword, but it has been show to be able to easily slice through human flesh and demons. Although the sword will be heavy to the touch of any other wielder, the original wielder can handle the sword with ease. The sword seems to have a natural affinity to lightning and wind.
Ability:
Without actually talking or communicating with the wielder Caliburn seems to give the wielder better battle tactics. This does not effect the wielders strength or power, but affects the mind power. Allowing the wielder to be able to believe in himself and give him a mental lift.​
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No font or size or allignement formatting is allowed. Also, a weapon with this name already exists.
 
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Genjutsu: Irounaku Ukibukuro Hodo | Illusionary Arts: Complete Bladder Limit
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user injects the target with chakra. The user then makes the target believe that his/her bladder is full. Causing them to feel the urge to urinate desperately. The target will probably cross their legs and slouch a bit to try to ease the discomfort of the process.
~Can only be used Twice
~No Genjutsu in this turn or the next

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Genjutsu: Aisukuri-mu Zutsuu | Illusionary Arts: Ice-Cream Headache
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user channels their chakra in to the target and manipulate the senses in the target's oral cavity. The user then causes the target to feel a sudden coldness in their mouth, causing an abrupt change in temperature in the tissue at the roof of the target's mouth, causing the blood vessels to quickly swell in an effort to warm the area back up. Causing Brain Freeze and pain.
- Can only be used twice per battle
- No Genjutsu techniques in the same and the next turn.
- Last 2 turns


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X-Declined-X =_= Sorry if im rude but im not in the mood.
Genjutsu: Irounaku Ukibukuro Hodo | Illusionary Arts: Complete Bladder Limit
Type: Attack
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user injects the target with chakra. The user then makes the target believe that his/her bladder is full. Causing them to feel the urge to urinate desperately. The target will probably cross their legs and slouch a bit to try to ease the discomfort of the process.
~Can only be used Twice
~No Genjutsu in this turn or the next
♠ Approved ♠
I literally laughed out loud. By the way, this is more B or C-Rank.

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Genjutsu: Aisukuri-mu Zutsuu | Illusionary Arts: Ice-Cream Headache
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user channels their chakra in to the target and manipulate the senses in the target's oral cavity. The user then causes the target to feel a sudden coldness in their mouth, causing an abrupt change in temperature in the tissue at the roof of the target's mouth, causing the blood vessels to quickly swell in an effort to warm the area back up. Causing Brain Freeze and pain.
- Can only be used twice per battle
- No Genjutsu techniques in the same and the next turn.
- Last 2 turns
♠ Declined ♠
That isn't the way Genjutsu works. You can inflict their body with chakra to only make them believe something has happened, but it doesn't actually affect their body in a physical manner.

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(Fuuton: Tei Poketto) - Wind Style: Air Pockets
Type: Offensive | Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user first utilizes his chakra, channeling it towards the opponent(s), thereby inserting his chakra into the opponent's body, much like genjutsu. However, the user divides the chakra into several portions, which he then directs each to a joint in a limb, such as the elbows and knees. He then causes the wind chakra to form itself into a bubble of air around the joint, creating an air pocket around the joint. The air bubbles would fade after a while, not being able to sustain itself inside a foreign body. However, during the period in which the air bubbles are active around the joints of the opponent, should the opponent move in the slightest those joints, such as moving the legs or swinging of the arms, the air bubbles around the joints of the opponent would begin to "pop", creating a loud popping sound that would radiate around the battlefield clearly, unless there is a commotion or another technique such as lightning, which crackles and makes noises which would mask the popping noise. The sound would allow the user to tell where the opponent is, from the direction of the sound. The popping of the bubble however, around the joint, releases a large burst of wind around the area of the bubble, causing excruciating pain to the joint and limb, the opponent essentially. Under most circumstances, if one bubble pops, the others are likely to pop, creating a chain effect due to the opponent responding to the pain, causing him even more pain. Furthermore, the burst of wind released from the air bubbles causes internal injuries to the body area around the joint the bubble encompassed earlier. This pain is unable to kill though. The bubbles can easily be popped, and dispersed of in the body, by a sufficient chakra surge.

- Can only be used two times per battle
- Cannot use any other techniques above S-rank in the same turn this technique is activated, and the next one
- The overall technique last for two turns, before the air bubbles pop, and disperse
- Can only b taught by Toshiro
♠ Declined ♠
I like the reference, but after discussing it over with some people, no this isn't logically possible. You can't really insert Wind chakra into someone in such a manner as it is physical chakra.
 
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(Kchuysei: Kyoudai Youi) Summoning: Dark Brother
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A (+20 toxic bite) (+5 per turn after bite)
Description: Hei, after being accepted as family with the Eels of "Unagiirie", Hei was gifted with a Brother known as "Dark". Dark travels with Hei everywhere he goes, always being by his side. Dark can be seen coming forth from under Hei's coat in a similar fashion to kabuto's Snake. when in battle Dark acts as an extra limb for Hei. His main form of attack is biting with razor sharp and jagged teeth that have toxic saliva that poison's the wounds numbing the infected area. The toxin will spread through the opponents body slowly paralyzing them until the opponent is no longer able to move. Dark has very thick but flexible skin allowing it to block up to B-Ranked Taijutsu.
Note:
-Can only be used by Serpent's Hei Bio.
-Toxic Bite counts as a move.
-Takes 6 turns to paralyze the opponent.
-Must sign Eel Contract.

X-Both Declined-X Link to eel contract?

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(Ranton: Shinjouran) Storm Release: Body of Storm
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: N/A (+15 Taijutsu)
Description: The user will push all of his Ranton based Chakra out of his body forming a bright aura around the user. This aura takes shape of Ancient Battle Armor that is semi-transparent. This drastically increases the users strangth and speed. This allows the user to achieve greater speed in similar fashion to "Raiton Armor", however this only allows the user to move at half speed compared to "Raiton Armor". Thanks to the speed gained by this technique, Taijutsu becomes more efficient. Not only allowing for faster delivery of Taijutsu, but an increase in strength as well. Ranton Armor seems like an excellent technique, but it has it's drawbacks. The amount of output needed for the Ranton makes it impassable for the user to use Ranton after this mode is deactivated. Upon deactivation of this mode the user will feel totally drain. As a side effect, the user will feel dizzy and move at half their regular speed because of the lack of chakra and the strain on the users body.
Notes:
-Last 5 turns.
-Can only be used once per battle.
-User moves at half speed for 2 turns after Jutsu.
-No S-ranks for one turn after this Jutsu.
-No Ranton Rest of Battle after this mode is deactivated.
-This Jutsu can only be taught by Serpent

X-Declined-X From my understanding, its downgrading your own technique. Because you cannot add that you could perform other natures, while already stimulating your body with two natures.

(Kchuysei: Kyoudai Youi) Summoning: Dark Brother
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (+10 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A (+20 toxic bite) (+5 per turn after bite)
Description: Hei, after being accepted as family with the Eels of "Unagiirie", Hei was gifted with a Brother known as "Dark". Dark travels with Hei everywhere he goes, always being by his side. Dark can be seen coming forth from under Hei's coat in a similar fashion to kabuto's Snake. when in battle Dark acts as an extra limb for Hei. His main form of attack is biting with razor sharp and jagged teeth that have toxic saliva that poison's the wounds numbing the infected area. The toxin will spread through the opponents body slowly paralyzing them until the opponent is no longer able to move. Dark has very thick but flexible skin allowing it to block up to B-Ranked Taijutsu.
Note:
-Can only be used by Serpent's Hei Bio.
-Toxic Bite counts as a move.
-Takes 6 turns to paralyze the opponent.
-Must sign Eel Contract.
♠ Declined ♠
Alright, I can kind of imagine this, but I need you to be slightly more specific. You state short range, so can your snake only bite people at close range combat? Also, can he separate himself from Hei or not?
Also, add the fact it can only stay on the field for four turns.


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(Ranton: Shinjouran) Storm Release: Body of Storm
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: N/A (+15 Taijutsu)
Description: The user will push all of his Ranton based Chakra out of his body forming a bright aura around the user. This aura takes shape of Ancient Battle Armor that is semi-transparent. This drastically increases the users strength and speed. This allows the user to achieve greater speed in similar fashion to "Raiton Armor", however this only allows the user to move at half speed compared to "Raiton Armor". Thanks to the speed gained by this technique, Taijutsu becomes more efficient. Not only allowing for faster delivery of Taijutsu, but an increase in strength as well. Ranton Armor seems like an excellent technique, but it has it's drawbacks. The amount of output needed for the Ranton makes it impassable for the user to use Ranton after this mode is deactivated. The user will only be able to harness Ranton, Raiton and Suiton Chakra types as well as Taijutsu. Upon deactivation of this mode the user will feel totally drained. As a side effect, the user will feel dizzy and move at half their regular speed because of the lack of chakra and the strain on the user's body.
Notes:
-Last 5 turns.
-Can only be used once per battle.
-Only Lightning, Water and Storm Elements and Taijutsu in this mode.
-User moves at half speed for 2 turns after Jutsu.
-No S-ranks for one turn after this Jutsu.
-No Ranton Rest of Battle after this mode is deactivated.
-This Jutsu can only be taught by Serpent

Link to Original Jutsu Approval:

♠ Leaving for Scorps as it is speed-related ♠

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No lightning armor mimics. Also, we know why lightning armor does what it does...why does ranton chakra boost your speed? Or better yet, why would it? I say this because its a DNR. No mimics of cannon techniques...specially when A) it doesn't make sense or is explained and fits into the "just because" category and B) is oped and unreasonable.

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(Kinjutsu Genjutsu: Uchiha's Fukai Shin'en) Forbidden Illusion Technique: Uchiha's Drowning Abyss
Type: Supplementary
Rank: Forrbidden
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage points: 90
Description: Using their Sharingan the User will place their opponent in a Genjutsu - this Genjutsu will make the opponent think that they are deep underwater with high pressure. This makes it so the opponent is unable to move and causes them to hold their breath. Because of the water, the opponent will not use Raiton as they will think that they will electrocute themselves. This not only paralyzes them, but also suffocates them if they do not release the Genjutsu. This Genjutsu is considered to be a highly dangerous technique because it forces the user to deactivate their Sharingan because of the amount of strain it puts on the user's eyes. The user will then feel dizzy after usage and must wait to activate their Sharingan again. When time comes to re-activate their Sharingan, the user must spend one of their 3 moves for re-activation. If used again, the user will not be able to re-activate their Sharingan and use Genjutsu for the rest of the battle.
Notes:
-Suffocation takes 2 turns
-Paralyzing lasts 2 turns
User Notes:
-Can only be used twice per battle
-Requires a 3 tomoe Sharingan
-Can only be used by a member of the Uchiha Clan
-Requires a 4 turn cool down
-Deactivates Sharingan for 2 turns
-Must Re-activate Sharingan counting as a move
-Upon second usage, user cannot re-activate Sharingan
-Upon second usage, user cannot use Genjutsu for the rest of Battle
-Can only be taught by Serpent

♠ Declined, do not re-submit ♠
No Sharingan Genjutsu.
 
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[Genjutsu: Iiya Kataki] Illusionary Arts: Forbidden Rivals
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User casts a very strong genjutsu on the opponent, the genjutsu initializes by first turning the sky blood red, changing the entire surroundings into a deadly battle ground just because of the sensation of red sky. It then revives an illusion of opponent's worse enemy, or one of the enemy of the user. The illusionary enemy is able to use all the jutsus that he/she had in his/her lifetime, which are also illusions. The jutsus are controlled by the user, and do not physically harm the body of the opponent. Instead, it causes pain to the brain, the wounds are not real, but the pain is strong enough to effect the opponent's mind. Opponent though can freely move, and dodge or counter the jutsus using his/her own. If he she does not defend from the incoming attacks of the illusionary enemy, he will suffer pain according to damage caused by illusionary attacks. It may lead to death due to brain hemorrhage because of the stress caused by pain on the brain of the opponent.
Note: Illusionary Jutsu count as one of the three jutsu in the move.
Note: Can only be used thrice per battle.
Note: Must wait two turns to use this genjutsu again.
Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

X-Declined-X Basically the Genjutsu manifests itself according to the enemies worst nightmare? Its not exactly manipulation of your opponents when the genjutsu is able to do something that is out of the users own knowledge. How would you know what the opponent fears? If you dont so doesn't the genjutsu. Although it is possible you need a very strong background ability to support this. Like Yamanaka are able to read minds, it would be an appropiate genjutsu for them.

[Genjutsu: Youso Irege] Illusionary Arts: Elemental Switch
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User casts a Genjutsu on the opponent, being very sophisticated illusionary jutsu it needs a good chakra usage, and amazing control. Once this illusion is casted, the user can make the opponent believe that the jutsu used by the user is of different element than in reality. So, if the user uses a water release jutsu, he or she can make the opponent believe that it is a fire release jutsu. The shape and style of the jutsu remains the same no matter what the user makes the opponent believe the element is. So, a water wave if switched to fire release, it will appear as a fire wave. The elements will switch according to the user's will.
Note: Elements can only be switched to the elements that the user knows.
Note: Can only be used thrice per battle.
Note: Must wait two turns to use this genjutsu again.
Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.
X-Declined-X Many diverse reasons. You could contact me on msn so i can explain
[Genjutsu: Iiya Kataki] Illusionary Arts: Forbidden Rivals
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User casts a very strong genjutsu on the opponent, the genjutsu initializes by first turning the sky blood red, changing the entire surroundings into a deadly battle ground just because of the sensation of red sky. It then is able to revive an illusion of one of the well known Ninjas of the world. The illusionary enemy is able to use all the jutsus that he/she had in his/her lifetime, which are also illusions. The jutsus are controlled by the user, and do not physically harm the body of the opponent. Instead, it causes pain to the brain, the wounds are not real, but the pain is strong enough to effect the opponent's mind. Opponent though can freely move, and dodge or counter the jutsus using his/her own. If he she does not defend from the incoming attacks of the illusionary enemy, he will suffer pain according to damage caused by illusionary attacks. It may lead to death due to brain hemorrhage because of the stress caused by pain on the brain of the opponent.
Note: Illusionary Jutsu count as one of the three jutsu in the move.
Note: Can only be used thrice per battle.
Note: Must wait two turns to use this genjutsu again.
Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

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Death? =_=# From a normal Genjutsu? That makes you see an enemy? It lacks definition and isn't reasonable as it is. Also, this is at best an A-Rank illusion. Oh...and no Long Range Genjutsu...

[Genjutsu: Youso Irege] Illusionary Arts: Elemental Switch
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User casts a Genjutsu on the opponent, being very sophisticated illusionary jutsu it needs a good chakra usage, and amazing control. Once this illusion is casted, the user can make the opponent believe that the upcoming jutsus used by the user is of different element than in reality. When initiating the illusion the user will decide on the element he wants the next jutsus to switch to, and then cast the illusion. So, if the user uses a water release jutsu, he or she can make the opponent believe that it is a fire release jutsu. The shape and style of the jutsu remains the same no matter what the user makes the opponent believe the element is. So, a water wave if switched to fire release, will appear as a fire wave. The elements will switch according to the user's will, stated when the genjutsu is initiated.
Note: The switched element must be stated in the turn before using the genjutsu and to replace the switch with another element, the genjutsu has to be used again.
Note: This jutsu only effects sight and sound senses of the opponent.

Note: Elements can only be switched to the elements that the user knows.
Note: Can only be used thrice per battle.
Note: Must wait two turns to use this genjutsu again.
Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

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±± Declined ±±
this is the same as my misleading words... Exactly the same. Don't resubmit.

New Submission;

[Genjutsu: Ware] Illusionary Arts: Is it him?
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Long
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: User casts illusion on the opponent. In that illusion the user makes a duplicate of himself where the real user vanishes from opponent's eye. The illusionary user now becomes the body of the user. Whatever jutsu is used by the real user, in illusion, is used by the imaginary copy of the user. All actions performed by the user, in illusion, are performed by the copy of the user. All real actions are mirrored by the copy version of the user and the real ones stay invisible to the opponent.
Note: Can only be taught by Blizzard.

♠ Leaving for Scorps or Xylon, as I am still a bit dubious regarding Genjutsus. ♠

X-Declined-X Very Generic, cant you do the same with servant or haze clone?
 
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Old CW :

(Gisei) Sacrifice
Type: Weapon
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: (Node 1: 30 | Node 2 : 45 | Node 3 : 60)
Damage: ( N1 : 60 | N2: 80 | N3: 100)
Description: This weapon is molded onto the user and requires the sacrifice of the whole of one of arms, Making the weapon apart of the user allowing for full comptatability. The weapon itself is a mechanical arm which is connected and sealed on the user's shoulder. The arm is powered through chakra with a multiude of wires acting as chaka nodes, fueling and feeding the arms joints which allow it to move freely. Normally, The weapon has no more strength than that of a normal, muscled arm and in turn has no extra boost to strength and only having slighty more durability than that of a real arm due to the metals needing to be flexible to simulate a real arm, resulting in the sue fo weaker metals. The power of the arm comes into play when the user channels a large boost of chakra through the chakra node wires, which power the arm, and is absorbed by the major joints through reciever rods and used to power the arm up adding a certain amount of power to arm for a few seconds, however long use of this is near impossible and would cause the fragile chakra node wires to break rendering the arm useless.

Node 1:
The user channels a bantam amount of chakra into Gisei which is then collected and absorbed by the first chakra reciever situated in the palm of the users hand. The chakra is then equally distibuted into the chakra nodes around his arm and boosts the strength of arm allowing for a few seconds allowing a powerful punch to be delievered. If the punch is succesfully recieved by an enemy, It deals 60 damage and uses up 30 chakra. After this is used tiny flaps open up on the arm and release a build up of heat that occurs in the hand, giving the user a slight feeling of pain and rendering the arm weaker for 1 turn.

Node 2:
The user channels a moderatly large amount of chakra into Gisei which is split, collected and absorbed by both the first, and second chaka recievers situated in the palm of the users hand and the Antecubital fossa (Crook of the elbow). The large amount of chakra is then split and fed into the chakra nodes and greatly boosts the strength of his arm for a few seconds and greatly increases his punch power. If the punch hits the opponent succesfully, it deals 80 damage and uses up 45 chakra. After the strength boost has finished, flaps of metal open up around the arm and release a build up of heat which causes great discomfort for the user and renders Gisei incapable of fast or complicated movements and void of lifting anything heavy, being only capable of just performing handseals for 2 turns.

Node 3:
This is the highest amount of power Gisei is able to produce without breaking. The user channels and incredinly large amount of chakra into Gisei which is split equally, collected and then absorbed by all three of the chakre recievers situated in the palm of the user's hand, the Antecubital fossa (crook of the elbow) and shoulder. The incredibly large amount of chakra is split and fed into all of the chakra nodes which and thread inside Gisei and boosts the user strength to the maximum possible power able to produce for a few seconds. If the punch is landed, It deals 100 damage to the opponent and uses up 60 chakra. The punch is amazingly powerful and able to easily shatter rock, break metal, kill enemies and lift the heaviest of objects but at an equally powerful price. After the power boost has finished, flaps of metal open on the arm and release a large build up of hot steam which causes extreme pain to the user equal to having to the pain of having an arm cut off. The pain is vastly unbearable and renders the arm completely unusable for 2 turns, and Gisei's various power boosts unable for the remainder of the match.

Restrictions
- Effects of all the Node's only last for a few seconds and no more.
- Can only use one Node at a time
- After using Node 1 or 2 user must wait 3 turns to use again.
- Requires surgery
- Cant use any other CW while having Gisei on biography
- Requires user to be Sannin or up
-Need my permission.

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♠ Leaving for Scorps or Xylon as I'm not sure about the whole deal with surgery and such. Though I really like the idea, seems alright with me, just need to clarify a few details. ♠

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Such a weapon would need the approval and the seal of viability from a medical sensei as well. Or at least, medical knowledge. The idea isn't half bad but you're making it quite on the verge of OPed. Talk to vincent to see if this would be, even if remotely, possible and resubmit if he deems it possible.
 
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Bijutsu| Raiton: Dendousensa - (Tailed Beast Skill | Lightning Release: Electrosensory)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 30(+15per turn to keep active)
Damage: N/A
Description: As a Lightning Master, Kirabi by extension of the 8-tails, is able to sense electric, magnetic, and electromagnetic phenomena. By applying chakra to the retina he is able to follow the electric and magnetic field lines using his eyes, something that even the most advanced user of the lightning element find difficult to do. They can take this ability one step further by analyzing the reflections of the electromagnetic waves the user releases giving them no blind spots. Due to the amount of chakra it takes to keep active however it's only a technique they use to pinpoint fast moving opponents such as the time when Minato fought A&B and B was ready to strike Minato just as soon as he appeared behind him.
(Usable Twice Per Battle; Last 3 Turns)
(Unusable for 5 turns after use)
♠ Declined ♠
Way too OP as of the moment. It's like another version of Byakugan.


Raiton| Dendouhishou - (Lightning Release| Lightning Flight)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: -
Chakra: 30 (+10 per turn)
Damage: N/A
Description: If the user is surrounded by a large amount of water vapor, (i.e Mist technique,) the user manipulates the water vapor into wings using the static electricity from interactions between particles. By using lightning chakra to induce electrolysis on a large body of water such as the ocean, they can obtain enough hydrogen and oxygen to use as fuel to propel them through the air for a short amount of time.
(Usable Once; Last 4 Turns)

♠ Leaving for Scorps or Xylon as it doesn't seem at all realistic to me. ♠
X-Declined-X Thats a great technique.. only for those who know how it works. Remake the description explaining everything Step by Step, including what happens when hydrogen and oxygen meets.

Kumonen - Spider Sense
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 20 (+5 per turn)
Damage: N/A
Description: Manifesting itself as a tingling feeling at the base of his skull, Spider-Sense presents a psychological awareness of Kidomaru's surroundings. It allows him to detect danger and even potential danger allowing him to focus-in on it and react to any hidden danger such as a hidden weapon or a disguised enemy. The greater the danger or how close the danger is increases the tingling sensation. It also allows the user to navigate when unable to see or disoriented. It also helps Kidomaru fire his webshooters without having to concentrate every time he does so, greatly helping his ability to subdue an unseen opponent. Spider-Sense is almost precognitive in nature and Kidomaru sometimes acts before realizing it. Thanks to his Spider-Sense, Kidomaru can typically dodge physical attacks, ninjutsu, and even explosions, this also allows him to recognize if he is in a genjutsu or not. More instinctual then an actually technique, Kidomaru usually acts before even realizing it allowing him to dodge a technique or a opponent on a whim, and in some cases he can also ignore the feeling, although it's very hard to do so.
(Last 5 turns; can activate once a battle)

♠ Declined ♠
That is way too OP, I'm not even going to read through everything. You can dodge physical attacks, Ninjutsu, and even explosions? Recognize Genjutsu?
Tone it down man.
 
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( Katon: Teikoku hinoken ) - Fire Release: Imperial Fire Swords
Type: Offensive/Supplementary/deffensive
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Short - mid
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user creates several fire swords and shoots them at their target. The user can also use these swords for protection from incoming attacks or use them as normal swords where the user holds one in his hand.
Notes:
*Can only be taught by Kurosaki-kun.
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✘ Declined ✘
Other than being too broad, it has been attempted before by Mathias, plus holding a sword made of fire in your hand? O_O

( Katon: Fenikkusudoraibu ) - Fire Release: Phoenix Drive
Type: Offensive
Rank: B-Rank
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 20
Damage: 40
Description: By making the Tiger handseal, the user channels his Katon chakra out of his body into the air then form it into a medium sized fire phoenix that charges towards their target from front engulfing them with fire as it passes through them, then the phoenix dives up in the air and descends back down in great speed hitting the opponent once again and the ground thus exploding and damaging anything nearby.
Notes:
*Can only be used x3.
*Can only be taught by Kurosaki-kun
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✘ Declined ✘
Similar Techniques exist, Faust's Rising Phoenix Technique to be exact

( Katon: Jiraigen ) - Fire Release: Minefield
Type: Offensive
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short - Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: By Stomping the ground the user releases a very dense fire chakra on the surface of the battlefield's ground which covers it. If an Earth technique is done in the next 3 turns it will disturb the dense fire chakra causing a huge deadly explosion to occur that will cover a wide area. The same effect can be achieved if the user did the Tiger handseal and released the dense chakra.
Notes:
*The dense chakra stays on the battlefield for 3 turns.
*The user may only use up to B-Rank fire techniques in those 3 turns.
*Can only be taught by Kurosaki-kun.
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✘ Declined ✘
Overpowered and unrealistic, and a rip off of Alucard's Earth Mine Technique only with Fire Release.
 
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Conversation with Scorps, who allowed me permission to resubmit this:

(Suiton: Bāsuto) – Water Release: Burst
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Depends on Earth/Wood jutsu used before hand.
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user would activate this jutsu which allows him to add his water chakra to all Earth/Wood jutsus used no more than a second after the usage of the Earth/Wood jutsu. Although it does no physical harm, this jutsu allows the user to shoot out an extremely quick burst of water straight after an Earth/Wood jutsu is used from wherever that Earth/Wood jutsu appears from. For example, if Spikes are used, this jutsu would allow a quick burst of water to shoot out to anywhere short range from the spikes themselves. This jutsu does not work on the mud related Earth jutsu. The water itself does no damage, however it has some pushing force which is able to knock an opponent back a meter or two, other than that it mainly distracts the opponent. The user can deactivate this jutsu at any time, and can stop the addition of water chakra so that he/she can control when the water bursts out.

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±± Approved ±±
Removed the restrictions. Its too weak to have them. Also, each use would be momentarily and not activation bound.
Updating.

(Suiton: Bāsuto) – Water Release: Burst
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Depends on Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu used before hand.
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user would activate this jutsu which allows him to add his water chakra to all Earth/Wood/Ice jutsus used no more than a second after the usage of the Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu. Although it does no physical harm, this jutsu allows the user to shoot out an extremely quick burst of water straight after an Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu is used from wherever that Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu appears from. For example, if Spikes are used, this jutsu would allow a quick burst of water to shoot out to anywhere short range from the spikes themselves. This jutsu does not work on the mud related Earth jutsu. The water itself does no damage, however it has some pushing force which is able to knock an opponent back a meter or two, other than that it mainly distracts the opponent. The user can deactivate this jutsu at any time, and can stop the addition of water chakra so that he/she can control when the water bursts out.
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✘ Declined ✘
Adding Water to Ice is a no go, keep the original one.

New

(Fūton: Ryū no iki) – Wind Release: Breath of the Dragon
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Range: Depends on Earth/Ice/Wood jutsu used before hand.
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user would activate this jutsu which allows him to add his Wind chakra to all Earth/Wood/Ice jutsus used no more than a second after the usage of the Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu. Although it does no physical harm, this jutsu allows the user to shoot out an extremely quick burst of sharpened wind straight after an Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu is used from wherever that Earth/Wood/Ice jutsu appears from. For example, if Spikes are used, this jutsu would allow a quick burst of wind to shoot out to anywhere short range from the spikes themselves. This jutsu does not work on the mud related Earth jutsu. The Wind itself can do enough damage, although nothing fatal, it can leave the opponent cut in multiple places whilst at the same time having enough strength to push them in a specific direction (depends on which side the wind is coming from).
Note: Can only be used 4 times.
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✘ Declined ✘
No variation of this technique will be approved.
 
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(Suiton: Karui Shussui) Water Style: Minor Flood
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Long
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user creates a thin layer of water which coats the battleground floor. Then, by channeling his/her chakra into this water the user is able to detect slight ripples and movement inside the water.
-The thin nature of this water layer means that it is unable to assist in the use of lightning style techniques.
-Must be taught by 'The Girl on Fire
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✘ Declined, Do not Resubmit ✘
No "Sensing" related abilities will be approved anymore, be it chakra or pressure based, there are too many of those already.

The Mogadorian Blade
Rank:S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The Mogadorian Blade is a short sword/ dagger with a twisted, pointed handle which has the unique ability of turning all the wielders fire jutsu's into blue flames. The blue flames are hotter than normal flames and therefore add to the damage done by fire jutsu. The Mogadorian blade in itself is not what makes it special, but the techniques that are used along with it, they are all called Legacies.
*Fire Style: Shield Legacy - While holding the Mogadorian Blade, the user sends a surge of fire chakra throughout their body, giving off the appearance of being engulfed in flames. This defense allows the user to block flames up to A Rank, Water up to B Rank, or S Ranked Wind. Only one of these can be blocked in the turn that it is used.
*Fire Style: Absorption Legacy - While holding the Mogadorian blade, the user holds the Mogadorian Blade and envelops the user in a red aura. The user takes the hit of the flames, and its power is then absorbed into the Mogadorian Blade. A blue hue is then seen coming from the blade upon which enhances the user's fire techniques all becoming blue flames. The blade can only absorb one C Ranked or below Fire technique per turn.

Note: Can only be used by The Girl on Fire and those she allows.
Note: Only one Legacy can be used per turn.
Note: Through the Use of Fire Style Absorption Legacy, the Mogadorian Blade gains either +5 (D Ranked jutsu) or +10(C Ranked Jutsu) to the user's next fire technique.
Note: User cannot enhance Forbidden Ranked Fire Techniques using the Absorption Legacy.
Note: The user's flames turn blue only after it has absorbed C ranked and below fire techniques. It takes one Absorption Legacy absorption for all of the user's fire techniques to turn blue.
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✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
rip off of Rin Okumora's CW in the core ability, changing the color of your fire is not allowed, making it hotter by doing so is nothing but saying that you are making a new "form" of fire, which could collide with being a CE, and Fire variations are strictly prohibited.

(Fuuton: Umou Chikara) Wind Release: Downforce
Type: Offensive/ Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user channels wind chakra into the air and concentrates it into a visible circle 15 meters in diameter and 20 feet above the opponent with the opponent in the center of the circle (The circle of chakra glows blue). Once settled in position the wind chakra generates a strong current that pushes down to the ground from above the opponent in effect sticking them to the ground and making it very difficult for the opponent to move.
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✘ Declined ✘ similar technique exists.
 
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(Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Lachlan) - Summoning Technique: Lachlan
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user bites their thumb and summons Lachlan, the Murmur. Lach is a normal sized Lyrebird who when summoned sits comfortably on the left shoulder of the user. His nickname of "The Murmur" comes from his specific A-rank genjutsu which he uses to disorient opponents and limit their capabilities. The genjutsu is initiated when Lach uses his natural abilities to re-produce any sound and throw his voice to create whispers and murmurs of varying loudness around the target. By changing the loudness and direction of the murmur rapidly it creates a strong sense of confusion in the opponent who falls under the genjutsu after three seconds where they begin to hear the voices get louder and louder becoming more disruptive. It gets to the point where the opponent becomes incapable of concentrating and can no long use techniques above A-rank. What makes this technique especially frustrating to an opponent is that Lach maintains the sounds for two turns once he begins, causing an opponent who breaks to become immediately targeted by it again.
-Lasts four turns once summoned.
-Genjutsu can be maintained for two turns and can only be used once.

Approved Lyrebird Contract:
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✘ Leaving for Scorps ✘


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Love the idea but you need to rank the ability itself. He also needs a range (short) for his summoning act in itself and a range for his ability. I would also suggest defining it a bit and it would be best to add an explanation on why your opponent will be limited in the use of techniques. For me, limiting the user to anything above A-Rank is a bit much...perhaps specifying some things in there would help. In essence, this needs definition.
 
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(Suiton: Mizu no yoroi) Water Style: Water Armour
Type:Defensive/Supplementary
Rank:C-Rank
Range:Short Range
Chakra:15 Chakra
Damage:30 Damage
Description: after preforming the rabbit handseal the user makes a layer of thickness 15 cm made of water around all his body except his face, the suiton chakra will make the outside layer more harder and bendable and it will be enough to repel taijutsu, kunais or shurikens and they're not able to go through it, the armour can be used as a sacrifice to survive an explosion, when this jutsu ends it turns into a small puddle.
mote: only usable for four times per battle
note: lasts for 2 turns
note: it makes the user slower in movements and heavier
note: the user can't use up to C-Rank fire while using this jutsu
note: the user can use up to B-Rank fire for the first turn after this jutsu ends
note: can only be taught by FeeLPaiN and those Who learn it
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✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
This makes no sense, considering water is no where near solid enough to guard against physical attacks like Taijutsu, you didn't even limit the level of Taijutsu it can guard against, not to mention you will drown when your head is surrounded by the water, you would be incapable of breathing and thus suffocating.

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(Robin fuddo) Robin Hood
Type: Weapon
Rank:S-Rank
Range:Short - Long Range
Chakra:10 Chakra (for each chakra infused-arrow)
Damage: 20 Damage
Description: Robin Hood is a bow made from the wood of the best trees from konohagakure's trees, the bow looks like any normal bow, it's a complete black with a golden chinese dragon drawn on it. it's arrows have peaked edges, and they're made from chakra-conductor material .when it has katon chakra in it, it will release a small flame from it's peak and when it's thrown that flame will engulf the whole arrow. when it has doton chakra it will become unbreakable. when it's thrown with futon chakra the peak will shape the air into a crescent in front of it, and it will be able to pierce through rocks and trees. when it have suiton chakra in it it will become bendable, and when it's thrown and hit a hard object it will turn into a liquid with high viscosity (the same as Starch Syrup Capture Field jutsu). when it's thrown while infused with raiton chakra it's speed will be as fast as a running shinobi, and it will release a lightning tail from end.
note: all the arrows worth D-ranked jutsu
note: arrows don't count as one of the 3 jutsus allowed per turn but only 2 arrows can be thrown per turn
note: an arrow can be infused with only 1 chakra nature
note: the user have only 30 arrow for each battle
note: can only be used by FeeLPaiN
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✘ Declined Do not Resubmit ✘
This collides with Mathias's Sniper Arts CFS, as chakra enhanced arrows are patented for sniper arts only.
 
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