[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - II

[Sterling Malory Archer]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Weapon: Ryūkyū Kotōmaru (竜糾虎淘丸, Dragon-Seeking Tiger Culler)
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short-Mid
Damage: N/A
Chakra: N/A
Description:
The sword is normal at first. But when fed chakra, Kotōmaru becomes a deadly weapon of destruction. When the user feeds the sword chakra, a mass of dense energy erupts around the user obscuring the vision of others. When the energy clears the weilder is found with a new attire.

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A dragon head's head envelops the user's shoulder and grey strips of cloth cover the forearm. Kotōmaru's blade is now entirely composed of blue energy, and a cape of the same color as the cloth drapes the user's back. Two slivers of blue energy float next to the user's right shoulder, and a disc next to the user's right. The user also has a cape on their waist to foot.

A charged Kotōmaru immensly increases the user's strength and also speed and defense increase. This is achieved through the chakra enhanced attire and the actual weapon. The chakra condenses (Not sure if that's the right word) the user's weight so that in short, they are extremely lightweight during movement, but certain aspect (Such as strength) are unaffected. The blade of energy, is the main source of strength. The energy is absolute raw power. The energy works similar to a high powered water machine used to cut steel. The strength has less to do with the user, and more to do with the actual weapon. The chakra infused with the attire is hardened and molded by an ancient technique that creates the kind of feel of a lightweight steel. The user will still feel the impact of an attack, but physical injury will be much lessened.

Strengths:
-Blade is indestructible (It is just pure energy)
-Blade can be extended till mid range in a swing (Max)
-The user's speed is boosted tenfold. Through the attire which is chakra infused causing the user to be able to move swiftly through the battle field without resistance and yet full control. (-1 To Kotōmaru Complete)
-User has absolute defense against D-rank techniques
-During Speed boosting, the user can move straight in to certain techniques without recoil or damage. (C-Rank and below)
-The time of Kotōmaru Complete (4-turns) begins in the next turn

Elemental Strengths:
Suiton (Defense): Can vapourize water technique (Up to C-rank)
Fuuton (Defense): Weakens all Wind techniques (2-ranks) {Through massive energy of the sword and the attire causing Pressure changes around the user weakening Wind Techniques}

Weaknesses:
-Blade can only extend twice
-User can only use the Speed Boost twice
-Absolute Defense can only be used twice.
-Kotōmaru Complete only lasts 4 turns MAX (Some techniques reduce length of Kotōmaru Complete)
-Kotōmaru disintergrates to the Shrine it is from to recharge it's energy (Will be gone for the rest of the battle)
-The user's right arm will be damaged from the use of Kotōmaru Complete
-Activation of Kotōmaru Complete takes up 2 moves instead of 1

Note: Can only be weilded By ~CoOkie Monster~

Note to Scorps: The last Weakness "-Activation of Kotōmaru Complete takes up 2 moves instead of 1" if it's possible, could it be scratched out. If it balances the weapons abilities then it can stay

Oh and I couldn't exactly quote from the last declined one cause it's closed. But I looked at your comment and I bolded what I think should correct the criteria.

~Declined~ Doesn't this seem a bit OP to you?
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Name:Ryūkyū Zesshō Kentai (竜糾虎淘丸, Dragon-Seeking Finishing Thrust Combination)
Rank: S
Type: Attack (Combo)
Range: Short-Mid
Damage: 80
Chakra: 40
Description: During Kotōmaru Complete state the user charges chakra and Koto's energy. The user the uses an extreme speed boost to dive past the opponent slashing him. The user then straight after comes back and slashes the target through the back and stops in front of the user. The user then manipulate Kotōmaru's energy as the user swipes in an Uppercut motion stunning the target as the sword engulfs the user in a form a Energy Dragon. The user then comes down hard on the Opponent extending the sword to mid-range.
-Can only be used once
-Kotōmaru Complete ends immediatly
-Counts as 2 moves instead of one
`Can Only be used by Kotōmaru weilders
~Declined~ Above Weapon was Declined

 

[Taiketsu Yagami]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

I was told by someone that these restrictions for my weapon seem more set for a heavy forbidden type attack so Im resubmitting:

"Bakusaiga"
Rank:S
Type:Weapon
Range:Short
Chakra:N/A
Damage:N/A
Description: "Bakusaiga" the weapon of legend that gave the holder the supposed power of a tailed demon. Whoever held this weapon would get a very dense chakra so ominous that they were put into legends and folk tales. Taiketsu Yagami found this sword and the truth behind it came with a tablet only readable by those combatible with the chakra. The sword's abilities actually come from a monster known as "Kaze Yama" A artificial chakra monster who's chakra resembled wind and had chakra levels so dense and high, it was considered a 0 tailed beast. The Sage of Six Path's decendent was able to kill off the monster and seal his chakra into the sword while engraving a seal that allowed the chakra to mix with the person who held it if compatable. When the user releases the seal, they become infused with the chakra making them a monster in a sense by giving them demonic chakra with very high chakra levels. The user's most distinguishing features are his godly like blue eyes and chakra streaming from his body in the form of a demonic wind.

~Abilities:
-This sword syncs with the user making the user's chakra become very dense and demonic while taking on a green-blue hue in the form of wind, increasing the power of non-elemental ninjutsu[+5] aswell as making all chakra based techniques to be equal to an elemental technique of the same rank[+10].
-The amount of chakra being channeled causes the user's chakra levels to rise substantually. (They can be considered a tailed beast without a tail like Kisame)
-When a foreign object touches the user's chakra, they get burned in a similar manner to Naruto in his incomplete form since the chakra is so demonic.
-The sword itself is virtually indestructable due to alloy it is made from and can stand very high temperatures.

~Restrictions:
-While using this sword, the user can only use techniques that require creating the jutsu or element itslef since this chakra can't be channled into foreign objects(except the sword itself).
-The sword's granted abilities last 5 turns after activation
-After the effects go away (after 5 turns) the user needs 2 turns to recuporate only being able to use B-rank and below techniques
-The arm carrying the sword becomes paralyzed (no more hand sealed jutsus)
-Can only be wielded by Taiketsu Yagami and those deemed worthy




Declined.

Resubmitting:

"Bakusaiga"
Rank:S
Type:Weapon
Range:Short
Chakra:N/A
Damage:N/A
Description: "Bakusaiga" the weapon of legend that gave the holder the supposed power of a tailed demon. Whoever held this weapon would get a very dense chakra so ominous that they were put into legends and folk tales. Taiketsu Yagami found this sword and the truth behind it came with a tablet only readable by those combatible with the chakra. The sword's abilities actually come from a monster known as "Yama" A artificial chakra monster with chakra levels so dense and high, it was considered a 0 tailed beast. The Sage of Six Path's decendent was able to kill off the monster and seal his chakra into the sword while engraving a seal that allowed the chakra to mix with the person who held it if compatable. When the user releases the seal, they become infused with the chakra making them a monster in a sense and the user's most distinguishing features are his godly like blue eyes and chakra streaming from his body in the form of a demonic wind..

~Abilities:
-This sword syncs with the user making the user's chakra become very dense and demonic while taking on a green hue, increasing the power of non-elemental ninjutsu[+5] aswell as making all chakra based techniques to be equal to an elemental technique of the same rank.
-The amount of chakra being channeled causes the user's chakra levels to rise substantually. (They can be considered a tailed beast without a tail like Kisame)
-Once activated. the user will snap out of any genjutst A-rank and below and be immune to B-rank and below while active.
-The sword itself is virtually indestructable due to alloy it is made from and can stand very high temperatures.

~Restrictions:
-While using this sword, the user can only use techniques that require creating the jutsu or element itslef since this chakra can't be channled into foreign objects.
-The sword's granted abilities last 5 turns after activation
-The user suffers with physical shut down in the arm that released the seal and a large drawback on the the user's chakra system. (No more hand seals and only able to perform A-rank and below techniques for the rest of battle.)
-The user is limited to only two moves a turn while this is active
-Can only be wielded by Taiketsu Yagami (Anyone else, the chakra would severly injure as it can't mix with theirs.)

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±± Declined ±± Do Not Resubmit. No Bijuu-wannabe variations can be accepted.

 

[Serpent]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Suiton: Koi Kihou) Water Release: Dense Pressure
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: After the user catches their opponent in "Water Style: Water Prison" the user will make a single handseal with their free hand. this causes the pressure of the water to build as if going deep into water, this causes the trapped opponent ear drums to burst. the pressure will continue to build until the opponent is completely crushed by the Jutsu, however because the user's hand is withing the water, their hand will be crushed as well.
Note:
-Can only be used after "Water Style: Water Prison"
-This Jutsu can only be taught by Serpent

~Declined~ This should rather be a Forbidden Jutsu because it crushes the user's arm. Also, restrict it to once per battle (you'll likely not need more). Otherwise, it's fine.

This is the last submission of this cycle, I didn't want to edit my old post as RokuNR has already checked it..

(Suiton: Koi Kihou) Water Release: Dense Pressure
Type: Attack
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage points: 100
Description: After the user catches their opponent in "Water Style: Water Prison" the user will make a single handseal with their free hand. this causes the pressure of the water to build as if going deep into water, this causes the trapped opponent ear drums to burst. the pressure will continue to build until the opponent is completely crushed by the Jutsu, however because the user's hand is withing the water, their hand will be crushed as well.
Note:
-Can only be used after "Water Style: Water Prison"
-Can only be used once per battle
-This Jutsu can only be taught by Serpent
~Approved~

 

[Yagura]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Ikazuchi Uesama Seiteki Tsukainotori) - Thunder Emperor Static Remnant
Type: Supplementary/Defense
Rank: S
Range: Close-Short (self)
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:The Thunder Emperor while retreating or moving to another location leaves a lightning clone that can electrocute the opponent when he/she touches it. The lightning clone cannot move and can be noticed by any ninja above Jounin rank through its bright light of lightning glowing inside it.
Note: Must use Thunder Emperor Mode
~Declined~ No restrictions and generic. Also, why would only Jounin-level opponents and higher be able to see it? You didn't note any special properties about it. Gennin and Chunin aren't blind.

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(Ikazuchi Uesama Saishuu Goku) - Thunder Emperor Last Words
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Close-Short (self)
Chakra: 50
Damage: 100
Description: The Thunder Emperor releases points his left index finger to the sky while his right hand is pointed to the opponent. While in that state a large lightning bolt will hit the enemy and after that thunderclaps can be heard. The thunder brings a loud noise to the enemy and makes the opponent's ears bleed. The opponent will be fallen into a genjutsu seeing himself being electrocuted by his loved ones. The user must stay in his position in order to continue the jutsu. He can be stopped if he is disturbed. The jutsu, if perfectly executed with no disturbances, will last for 2 turns. If he is disturbed, the thunder emperor mode deactivates and cannot be used again.
~Declined~ Overpowered, no restrictions, and a genjutsu after hitting the opponent with lightning and having the opponent's ears bleed? I don't think so.

 

[Vision]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Shindou Katana: Sword of Vibration
Rank:S
Type: Weapon/ Supplementary
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Range:Short-Long
Descrition: The "Sword of Vibration" is a blade that is made by using very thin and fine strings of metal put together into a strong blade. It looks as if it's a regular blade as the strings are combined in a microscopic level and the opponent won't be able to see. It is just as hard as a regular katana however with a flick of a finger on the blade. Creates a constant vibration at a frequency that a human can not hear. Thus making it able to cut through anything with ease. The blade itself has an affinity to wind, therefore once the user infuse it with fuuton chakra it has the ability to create sound in a frequency level that no human can hear. Thus putting the opponent in a genjutsu where they won't be able to detect right away. Once the Genjutsu has been applied the opponent won't be able to hear any movements when the user is moving or performing any jutsu.

Note: A rank Katon jutsu directed at the blade will cause the blade to stop vibrating and cancels the Genjutsu.
Note: Can deflect up to B rank Fuuton jutsu. Only 3 times per battle
Note: Always have to flick the blade with a finger or other means (like hitting a pebble) to start the vibration and counts as 1 move of the 3 moves allowed.
Note: Needs only one hand seal to perform fuuton jutsu when wielding it.
Note: Genjutsu lasts 2 turns.
Note: Genjutsu can only be used twice per battle and if it's canceled the first time can't use it again for the remaining of the battle.
Note: Can only be wielded by NineVision and those he allows.
~Declined~ Seriously? Do not Resubmit


(Fuuton: Ekusupuro-Jon Uindo): Wind Release: Wind Explosion
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 20
Damage: N/A
Description: During movement of the user. The user will release a burst of exploding wind towards the bottom of their feet to move at the speed of sound. It will appear to the opponent as the user had teleported, however this is not the case. Anyone with a KG will be able to track the users movements up to a certain point before losing them at the last second.

Note: User has to be moving to use this jutsu.
Note: Can be used three times per battle.
Note: Can't use to move in the air or fly around
Note: Can use it to change direction but counts as 2 moves from the 3 allowed per turn.
Note: Can only use this to move within the line of sight. (Meaning can't go around walls without changing directions)
Note: If ran into something the user will take -50 damage as a result of the great speed
Note: Can only be taught by NineVision
~Declined~ Please better explain the last part. A few Naruto characters can already react to supersonic attacks. Also, anyone with a KG doesn't make any sense as it'd be like assuming Ice Release users have better reactions than the average ninja. There's no basis. I believe you meant to say Doujutsu users.

 

[Tvqxeqlapcfr]

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-Resubmission of

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(Roshida Mode) - Roshida Mode
Type: Mode
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user marks their eyes and face with blood so that it appears as tears of blood. Within one turn, the blood turns black and the user has entered a mode known as Roshida Mode. The user's weight decreases slightly, they appear to wear a cloak of brightly or darkly colored feathers, they grow wings that are capable of flight, and their hands grow long talons. (See image below)
~Lasts for up to 3 turns.
~Usable once per battle.
~Users must sign the hummingbird contract.
~The user can summon Hummingbird summon without sacrificing blood and with only 1 hand seal.
~During use, the user's speed and jumping height increases due to their decreased weight. The user can also use Roshida Jutsu while in this mode.
~After use, the user's speed and jumping ability is decreased slightly due to the adjustment in their return to normal weight. The user will feel drained after use.

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~Pending~ Need another mod to check this.
±±Declined±± Do not resubmit.
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(Roshida Jutsu: Tenshi no Uta) - Roshida Jutsu: Song of the Angels
Type: Genjutsu; Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user sings a beautiful song that causes the opponent to fall asleep and hallucinate that they are still completing the task they were previously occupying themselves with. Their body goes numb, losing their sense of feel.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Can only be used by a hummingbird or a human in Roshida Mode.
~Declined~ Restrictions?

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(Roshida Jutsu: Tori no Kuchi) - Roshida Jutsu: Mouth of Birds
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user bites their tongue, leaking blood onto the summoning tattoo placed on it. The user then opens their mouth, and thousands of sharp-beaked hummingbirds of the sword-billed variety who attack the target from all angles.
~The user must be a hummingbird or a human in Roshida Mode.
~Declined~ Restrictions?

 

[Alternative]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

I've still got one more submission for the week.

(Kugutsu: X no Mai) - Puppetry Technique: Dance of the X
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description:
• This is a technique which requires the use of three puppets. Exerting their strength, the user will make two of the puppets fly into the air. Then with a quick motion, they will fly down at the target, charging at them with sharp weapons in a X formation. Then the user will control the third puppet to use a weapon to pierce the target's body when disoriented.
Notes:
• Can only be used three times in battle.
• All the puppets must have a weapon of some sort for the technique to work.
~Approved~

 

[WastedMonkey]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Kanshō and Bakuya
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range Short
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Kanshō and Bakuya was forged using chakra making it harder and denser than normal swords. When infused with chakra it will have a different appearance. When the opponent tries to touch or wield the sword it will release red electrical current that will shock the opponent making them drop the sword. The main ability of the swords is their strong bond with each other, which not only allows them to attract each other, but it is also said they will return to their owner even if events cause them to be lost. If one is thrown while the other is held, the thrown sword will return to the wielder much like a boomerang.

Note: If not wielded in the beginning of the match the sword must be summoned by the user unless stated.
Note: Summoning the swords count as a jutsu.
Note: Cannot be used with any other Custom Weapon.
Note: Can only be wielded by WastedMonkey

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Upgrading my weapon

Kanshō and Bakuya
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range Short
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Kanshō and Bakuya was forged using chakra making it harder and denser than normal swords. When infused with chakra it will have a different appearance. When the opponent tries to touch or wield the sword it will release red electrical current that will shock the opponent making them drop the sword. The main ability of the swords is their strong bond with each other, which not only allows them to attract each other, but it is also said they will return to their owner even if events cause them to be lost. If one is thrown while the other is held, the thrown sword will return to the wielder much like a boomerang. The sword can also be connect on the hilt to use it as a double edge halbred. when connected you can attach a wire on both ends to use it as a bow as well.

Note: Attaching the wire counts as a move in the 3 moves per turn rule.
Note: If not wielded in the beginning of the match the sword must be summoned by the user unless stated.
Note: Summoning the swords count as a jutsu.
Note: Cannot be used with any other Custom Weapon.
Note: Can only be wielded by WastedMonkey

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~Declined~ Don't get crazy with the attachments. Where do you intend to get arrows from?

 

[Ushiro]

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(Fuuton: Kanki Kuchi) - Wind Release: Air Vent
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The user stomps his foot and sends earth chakra throughout the ground to create many small tunnels underground from him to his opponent, reinforced with hardened earth and forming very quickly. He then blows wind into the tunnel that will emerge at the other end in a pressurized state and pierce through the opponent like spears with the sharpness of the wind element.
-Usable 3 times per battle

(Sogeki no Geijutsu: Kūchū Kōgeki) - Sniper Art: Aerial Assault
Rank: B
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40 (+5 if used with explosives)
Description: The user shoots up to 9 arrows infused with wind chakra from his bow at a target. Wings of wind appear on the arrows that allows them to control their flight path and even stay airborne. The wind chakra enhances their piercing ability and speed. Exploding tags may be hidden on the arrows to cause more damage.
~Both Declined~ Do not Resubmit

 

[House]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Hakke Guraindā horo) 8 Trigrams Grinder Tatter
Rank: S
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Member of the hyuuga bloodline will constantly exert chakra from his palms, creating chakra lines. These chakra lines are extremely sharp, but only be able to reach onto mid-range from the user. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, as because of the hyuuga's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a wall, curved in/out wall or a half dome or a (full dome, the user has to be inside) circle (by waving their hands in circles) or creating a full dome in the air (infront of himself), or the user may encircle himself thus having himself be in a giant sphere, if the user wishes infront of themselves. The user may control the size of the technique, and they may create it at anywhere within mid-range in no time. User may control the size of the beam which is exerting from their palms, thus controlling the size, or the distance where the user wishes to create it. This is an extremely fast technique, thus the creation of the technique happens in no time.
Note:
~Can be used by Dr. House
~Only be used 3x and no higher then S-ranked Jyuuken in the same round.
~Only Master of Jyuuken and A-ranked Taijutsu may use this.
~User must at least have Kage level

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. To similar to Hinata's technique.


re-submit:

(Jūho 64 tsuki ) – Gentle 64 Pokes
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Offense
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The hyuuga master had battled a lot of fighters, but had a tough time with battling guys who used armors which isn't solid like Earth. He had learned to have a constant swirling chakra exertion around both of his fingers, in order to evade any kind a damage that the enemies armor might have. This technique will work best on a non-solid chakra armor like if the enemy has covered himself in fire/wind/lightning/water, and Nagashi for example. For an example, as the enemy has brought up a fire armor onto themselves, as the hyuuga approaches him, the hyuuga master will keep a wide swirling chakra exerted from the top of his fingers, which will protect his fingers(meaning the chakra which is exerted from the tip of the finger will disturb/nullify the intended point/area where the hyuuga member will strike) and most of his body from any kind of burning, electricity or whatever may expose it. Like I said, this technique works best if it isn't used against solid chakra armors like steel or earth, or any solid based chakra armor. As the hyuuga has gone through this defense, the hyuuga master then eject his chakra 64 times, causing disruption, as tendon/join/muscle cell injuries within the enemie's chakra system/body. The wide swirling chakra around the user's finger, thus the swirling chakra will be protecting from most of the exposure of the opponent's chakra armor, thus will keep away any danger from the enemy's chakra armor like burning/cutting, or any kind a effects. Tip of the fingers contain the most powerful chakra, and it is the most weakest at the end of its swirls. The swirling of the chakra from the exertion of chakra from the fingers are thick and strong enough to protect the user, in order to be able to poke through jutsus like Nagashi, without taking any harm that could influence the user's future performance. If the user is poking through a not solid forbidden chakra armor, he will take -30 damage, thus making this technique unusable for the rest of the battle.
Note:
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Doujutsu may see the swirling chakra around the fingers
~Can be used 4x
~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.

Note for the checker:
I added this for a restriction:
~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.
I added this for description:
~I've added that "chakra" armor like you said it
~and this to explain that this jutsu isn't just defending the fingers. "The wide swirling chakra around the user's finger, thus the swirling chakra will be protecting from most of the exposure of the opponent's chakra armor, thus will keep away any danger from the enemy's chakra armor like burning/cutting, or any kind a effects. Tip of the fingers contain the most powerful chakra, and it is the most weakest at the end of its swirls. The swirling of the chakra from the exertion of chakra from the fingers are thick and strong enough to protect the user, in order to be able to poke through jutsus like Nagashi, without taking any harm that could influence the user's future performance."

±± Declined ±± Creating a swirl of chakra around your fingers won't in any way protect your whole body. It may enable you to poke through an enemy technique one rank lower but you can't in any way protect your whole body. Also, how many strikes can you do with this technique? The way its worded now you'll only be able to do one. You complicated something that is very simple "The user creates a dense swirl of chakra around his main two fingers (index and middle) and uses it like a localized drill that he can use to breach through low rank armor and elemental-armor like techniques such as Earth Spear." You keep adding things on it that keeps making it impossible to be accepted.

(Jūho 64 tsuki ) – Gentle 64 Pokes
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Offense
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The hyuuga master had battled a lot of fighters, but had a tough time with battling guys who used chakra armors. He had learned to have a constant exertion from their palms onto their limbs which may be exposed to harm. These chakra which defends the body from damage is constantly exerted from the palms, around the limbs which may be exposed to harm. In order to this, the user has to move his arms in a very fast movement, in order to accomplish the swirling chakra line around their limbs which may be exposed to harm. This technique will work best on a non-solid chakra armor like if the enemy has covered himself in fire/wind/lightning/water, and Nagashi for example. For an example, as the enemy has brought up a fire armor onto themselves, as the hyuuga approaches him, the hyuuga master will stream a fine chakra line from their palms which will enhance their destruction, and protect his limbs and most of his body from any kind of burning, electricity or whatever may expose it. As the hyuuga has gone through this defense, the hyuuga master then eject his chakra 64 times (its a technique consists of 64 strikes), causing disruption, as tendon/join/muscle cell injuries within the enemie's chakra system/body. If technique charged for F-ranked, he may only use this 1x time, meaning can't be used anymore, takes -30 damage, won't be able to use b-ranked or higher Jyuuken for the same, next turn.
Note:
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Doujutsu may see the exertion of chakra line form palm onto the limbs
~Can be used 4x
~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.
~Only Kage may use this.
~User has to say whether is it charged for F-ranked, if not, then it is auto S-ranked.

Note for checker:
I've added this:These are 64 strikes, as the name states it.
I've added this for clarification on the swirling chakra: These chakra which defends the body from damage is constantly exerted from the palms, around the limbs which may be exposed to harm. In order to this, the user has to move his arms in a very fast movement, in order to accomplish the swirling chakra line around their limbs which may be exposed to harm.
Added this: The hyuuga master will stream a fine chakra line from their palms which will enhance their destruction, and protect his limbs and most of his body
Removed: the "tip of their fingers" idea and I've removed the extra sentences which stated the same thing as I had written in the beginning.
added this: He had learned to have a constant exertion from their palms onto their limbs which may be exposed to harm.
added this:As the hyuuga has gone through this defense, the hyuuga master then eject his chakra 64 times (its a technique consists of 64 strikes), causing disruption, as tendon/join/muscle cell injuries within the enemie's chakra system/body.
added: If technique charged for F-ranked, he may only use this 1x time, meaning can't be used anymore, takes -30 damage, won't be able to use b-ranked or higher Jyuuken for the same, next turn.

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Became a complete complicated useless mess. Sorry but this one has no salvation.


(Hakke Kyōki no mojiretsu) – Step Strings of Madness
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Offense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user will raise both of his hand onto either side he wishes, thus making a zig-zag motion as he is sweeping he's hands in the air (lets say diagonally from up to down) He'll release a really wide burst of chakra with chakra lines in the middle, thus throwing back the enemy. Because the chakra lines are within the jutsu, it will cut him severaly, and the burst of chakra will disturb his system.
Note:
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Can be used 4x
~Due to the chakra usage, you can't use S-ranked or above Gentle Fist For the same turn.
~Only Sannin may use this.

±± Declined ±± To similar to many techniques. This type of technique has been done before both in elemental teachniques and not.

 

[Korra.]

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I have a steel bio

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(Koton: Hagane yari) Steel Release: Steel Spears
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Mid
Chakra:25
Damage:40
Description: The user will gather there Koton chakra and create a 5 steels spears and throw them diretly at the opponent.
Note:Must have Steel Release
Note: Must Be Taught by ~Johninto~
~Approved~

(Koton: Bakkusuchīrufenikkusu) Steel Release: Black Steel Phoenix
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will do 1 hand sign and gather their Koton chakra and create a Phoenix the size of Sasuke's Hawk made out of Black Steel. The user will than send the dragon straight at the opponent. The Phoenix can also block ninja tools.
Note: Must have Steel Release
Note: Has to be taught by ~Johninto~
Note: Usable 4 times a battle
~Declined~ Care to specify the "black steel" scheme?

 

[Lucifer]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Raiton: Tsuzuri Raiden) - Lightning Style: Bound Lightning
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user focuses his lightning chakra infront of him and forms a small sequinces of handseals summoning a rod made of lightning, the rod is 2 meters tall and it is thrown towards the target(s) before it disintegrates into four smaller rods which are used to pin the target to the surroundings and render them immobile, upon reaching short range it will generate non-focused electrically charged chakra from the four rods surrounding the opponent, so paralizing them, and causing a great amount of damage to their bodies.

Example;

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Note: Can only be taught by Lucifer.
Note: This jutsu can only be used twice per battle.
Note: The user can't use any lightning jutsu for two turns after this jutsu is used.
Note: The user can only perform A-Rank and below jutsu of this element, for the rest of the battle.

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(Raiton: Aka Odori) Lightning Style: Bloody Dance
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will focus his raiton chakra into his/her fingers tips coverting it to lightning and shoot out a range of ten needles of lightning out of each finger one needle directed torwards the target, and as it reaches short range it will explode into many smaller needles and strike the opponent(s) on different places from different angles, striking vital organs.

Note: Can only be taught by Lucifer.
Note: Canonly be used four times per battle.
Note: The user can't use any lightning jutsu for the next two turns.
Note: This jutsu can only be used if the user has mastered lightning.
~Both Declined~ Do not Resubmit

 

[Gingka Uzumaki]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Weegeeのテンペスト) - Weegee's Tempest.
Alternate Name: (狂った男の目を通して見た悲しい男の死) - A death of a sad man seen through the eyes of a mad man
Type: Supplementive/Offensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: N/A
Chakra: N/A
Damage: 80
Description: Two blades that are attached to the arm. The interesting part of these blades are that they have two different forms. The first form is the blades are held by rubber sticks on the blade hilts. The second form is the blades' hilts will wrap around the user's arm, and there will be no need of the sticks. The user can also extend the actual blade further to attack people with chains made of Tungsten metal, and can be loosen up, or be rigid chains.
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The shape of the hilt of Second Form:

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~Declined~ Chains? At least give the sword an ability that differentiates it from every other weapon like this.

 

[McKnockout]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Fuuton Seppaku: Kakou no Washi) - Wind Pressure style: Decent of the Eagle
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user concentrates his Fuuton chakra throughout the air and by using their mastery of charka control and Fuuton Release, the user manipulates the air pressure (number of air molecules) of a chosen area. Manipulating the air pressure alters the force per unit area exerted on the target by the weight of air above them - and to perform this technique, the user creates a large low pressure column around their target. After the low pressure area is created, the pressure gradient (difference in air pressure) in the atmosphere around the target proceeds to fill the void created by this technique. That is, the air in the atmosphere flows (from high to low pressure) at a very rapid pace downwards onto the target in an attempt to balance out the variation (i.e. due to equilibrium). The result is that a powerful, yet artificial, downburst of wind/air that crashes down and expands outward on the target with a force that could level buildings and trees. This technique can be considered the Fuuton analogous of "Kirin" since it utilizes natural wind, as opposed to Fuuton chakra (the chakra is used to set up the jutsu but once in affect nature takes over).
*Note: Must have a Wind Affinity.
*Note: Can only be used twice.
*Note: No S rank wind techniques the same turn.
*Note: Must wait at least 2 turns to be used again.
*Can only be taught by McKnockout

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±± Declined ±± The idea is ok in general but don't put useless restrictions in techniques. Also, i don't see this as an S-Rank. More of an A-Rank. If you want to keep it as S-Rank reduce its use to one time and no other S-Rank wind or above for the same and next turn.


(Fuuton Seppaku: Taiki Konwaku) - Wind Pressure style: Atmospheric Disturbance
Rank: S-Forbidden
Type: Attack/Supplementary/Defense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40-50
Damage: N/A-100
Description: A technique based on the concept of supplying too much air into a flame (essentially blowing out the flame) - despite being the elemental weakness of fire, wind/air is only good for fire in certain proportion. The user concentrates his Fuuton chakra throughout the air and by using their mastery of charka control and Fuuton Release, the user manipulates the air pressure (number of air molecules) of a chosen area. This technique allows the user to either decrease or increase air pressure; and was developed to combat Fire techniques. This is achieved by rapidly decreasing the air pressure in the location of the flame effectively causing them to be robbed of oxygen thereby completely diminishing the jutsu (only up to A-rank Fire jutsus). Conversely, increasing the air pressure at the location of flames rapidly increases the availability of oxygen which can cause it to violently and prematurely explode (only up to S-rank Fire jutsus).
*Note: Must have a Wind Affinity.
*Note: Decreasing air pressure is S-rank.
*Note: Increasing air pressure is Forbidden.
*Note: S-rank version can only be used twice.
*Note: Forbidden version can only be used once.
*Note: No S-rank techniques in the same turn.
*Note: When Forbidden version is used, the user's speed is reduced in half for 2 turns after activation.
*Note: When Forbidden version is used, the user can not use any Wind techniques in the next turn.
*Can only be taught by McKnockout

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Atmosferic pressure manipulation is a CE. The other jutsu is approvable but this isn't.


(Genjutsu: Hyoumenka Seken) - Illusionary Arts: Shattering World
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user performs a quick sequence of two handseals (Horse -> Inverted Bird) and traps the target in an illusion where they think that the sky has shattered into millions of pieces of glass which rain down upon them, piercing/skewing their body. This technique is primarily used to serve as a diversion allowing the user to escape or attack.
*Note: Can only be used thrice.
*Note: No genjutsu in the same turn.
*Can only be taught by McKnockout
~Leaving for Another Moderator~

±± Declined ±± Resubmit with proper chakra info.

 

[Anduril]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

[Doton: Muchi] - Earth Style: Whip
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 25
Damage: 40
Description:
For this Jutsu the shinobi makes a single Ram seal while concentrating on his Doton chakra. Then he causes a whip made of earth to erupt from the ground around the opponent extremely rapidly, meaning extremely fast. This whip is then used to strangle the opponent or restrict his hand or leg movement or in any other way the user sees it fit. In short this is used to create a momentary distraction which would be enough to land a deadly blow.
-A single whip always erupts from the ground not more.
-Requires earth style Jutsu mastered.
~Declined~ Similar Technique Exists

 

[The Doctor]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

I apologize that this was quoted in this way, however my re-submission is from the other thread, which I'm unable to quote. I hope this won't effect the checking process.

Resubmitting:

Kyotōryū taijutsu (Kyotōryū Martial Arts): Kyotōryū is a style of Martial Arts in which the practitioner trains for many years in order to harden their body to be like that of a sword. Sometimes referred to as "Swordless Kenjutsu" the practitioner relies on extremely fast, and strong strikes, which can literally, cut the opponent. The practitioner, through his training, learned how to use basic energy, Chakra and wind resistance (Not wind chakra), to do the maximum amount of damage to the opponent. The practitioner tries to gain a large amount of momentum extremely quickly, even in extremely closed situations. The practitioner also uses chakra, in order to gain more momentum, and add force to his strikes. It could be considered in the middle of the spectrum between the gentle fist, and the strong fist. The gentle fist utilizes 100% technique, while the strong fist utilizes 100% raw strength. This combines principles from both, using chakra to attack the opponent, while also putting extreme amounts of force, effectively utilizing 50% technique, and 50% raw power. One could call it the "Medium fist" as well.

Kyotōryū taijutsu: Fuugetsu
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short: Short
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user begins running at his opponent at extremely high speeds, with his arms behind him extended, collecting wind. He gains more and more momentum, and, upon reaching the opponent, he extends his palm, dragging the wind with his palm, and slams his palm into the opponent. The extreme momentum plus the wind gathered with his hand does massive amounts of damage to the opponent. The wind pushes the opponent across the battlefield, while releasing into the air behind him, blowing anything behind him back. (Note: This does not apply to humans. However, grass, swords and other ninja tools will be blown back.)

What it should look like: Note: Blue is wind.

Kyotōryū taijutsu: Chrysanthemum
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: C
Range: Short: Short
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: 30
Description: Draws/catches the opponent's weapon between the user's back and arms, and forces it forwards, snapping/breaking it. Primarily a sword-breaking technique, though is capable of breaking limbs and other tools as well within reason.

Note to mods: Should look something like this

||Both Declined|| I like the idea, but you need to associate a chakra cost with both techniques, as chakra is necessary to help the user gain some momentum, as you stated.

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B]Kyotōryū taijutsu: Fuugetsu[/B]
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (If your speed is enhanced with chakra)
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user begins running at his opponent at extremely high speeds, (If closing a small distance, to gain the required speed, the user must use chakra in order to gain the speed and momentum.) with his arms behind him extended, collecting wind. He gains more and more momentum, and, upon reaching the opponent, he extends his palm, dragging the wind with his palm, and slams his palm into the opponent. The extreme momentum plus the wind gathered with his hand does massive amounts of damage to the opponent. The wind pushes the opponent across the battlefield, while releasing into the air behind him, blowing anything behind him back. (Note: This does not apply to humans. However, grass, swords and other ninja tools will be blown back.)
~Can only be used 5 times per battle.

What is should look like (Blue is wind):

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~Approved~ I limited it to five times per battle for good measure. Well done.

Kyotōryū taijutsu: Chrysanthemum
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20 (If covering your arms with chakra in order to break an exceptionally strong tool)
Damage Points: 30
Description: Draws/catches the opponent's weapon between the user's back and arms, and forces it forwards, snapping/breaking it. (The user may cover his arms in a coat of chakra if a sword or tool is exceptionally strong.) Primarily a sword-breaking technique, though is capable of breaking limbs and other tools as well within reason.

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~Declined~ You shouldn't be easily breaking exceptionally strong tools with a C-rank technique. Also, define "exceptionally strong tool" anyway.

 

[Punk Hazard]

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(Raiton:Hikari�ōbun)Lightning Release: Light Oven
Type:Offense
Rank:S
Range:Mid
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description:�The user makes a triangle using both his thumbs and index fingers. After channeling Raiton chakra through his fingers and manipulating it to take a triangular shape. He then launches it. When it comes in contact with an object, it increases greatly in size, forming a prism and trapping it. Once it forms into a prism, it incinerates everything within it.
~Able to trap up to three full-grown people or an object the size of a car~
~Only capable of being used twice per match~
~No B-rank of higher Lightning the following three turns after use~
~Only usable by Rikerslade~
~Declined~ Do not Resubmit

 

[Luther]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

Resubmitting from old custom jutsu thread here is the link

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I only submitted one jutsu and tthus have not surpassed the amount of submission .


(Ninjutsu no sutairu: Māku senjō) Ninjutsu Style :Marked Battle Field
Rank: A

Range: Short-Mid

Chakra Cost:30

Damage points:60

Description: The user bites his thumb and uses and sucks the blood from it , similar to if he was about to commence a summoning. He draws the blood and sticks it on the ground then then focuses on his chakra for some time channeling it up in massive quantities. After this the user then releases his chakra along with the blood and channels his chakra around the ground this can be extended up to 11 meters but can not go larger than that.When done this jutu will allow the opponent to sense and pick up on any sneak attacks or uNderground movements done by the opponent within the range which has chakra has bee distributed on.

Can be used 3 times a battle

The user must wait three turns to use again.

Can not use a rank and above for the next turn.

I worked on my grammar and use punctuation an full stop in my description of the jutus/technique better i change the range at which the can flow to 11 meters making it less over powered and leaving the opponent chances of countering it appropriately.
~Declined~ It makes a bit more sense, but again yours is similar to other sensing techniques. Also, how does this do any damage whatsoever?

(Ninjutsu no sutairu: Māku senjō) Ninjutsu Style :Marked Battle Field
Rank: A

Range: Short-Mid

Chakra Cost:30

Damage points:

Description: The user bites his thumb and uses and sucks the blood from it , similar to if he was about to commence a summoning. He draws the blood and sticks it on the ground then then focuses on his chakra for some time channeling it up in massive quantities. After this the user then releases his chakra along with the blood and channels his chakra around the ground this can be extended up to 11 meters but can not go larger than that.When done this jutu will allow the user to sense and pick up on any sneak attacks or uNderground movements done by the opponent within the range which has chakra has bee distributed on.

Can be used 3 times a battle

The user must wait three turns to use again.

Can not use a rank and above for the next turn.

The main problem the jutsu is having is similarity between other jutsu and i also changed and removed the damage points and made it more readable and added better punctuations.
~Approved~ Sure, why not...

(Kaze to kaminari no sutairu: Fushi no tsuyo-sa)Wind and lightning style:Undying Strenght
Rank: S

Range: Supplementary

Chakra Cost:40

Damage points:N/A (After the turns, the user heart and brain stop general function)

Description: The user upon the point of death after being impacted with powerful attacks focuses all his wind chakra in his hand and concentrates it up to the point where it is seen very easily he then adds his lightning chakra to it to increase it damages and strengthen the fuiton due to lightnign being weaker than it in the elemental field ,He then uses the raw chakra and hit and impact the jutsu on his self numbing his body temporarily and allowing him or giving him the abiltity to ignore the pains and carry on .

Can be used once times a battle

Must have mastered wind

Must have started training in lightning

The user can only use this jutsu for 3 rounds after which his heart and brain will stop functioning due to the amount of pain and damages gotten from both the attack and the opponents techniques.
~Declined~ How does inflicting massive amounts of damage unto yourself using practically all of your wind chakra help you to feel no pain? One wouldn't think you'd be in such a hurry to die.

 

[Mockingbird]

Re: ±±Custom Jutsu Submission±±

(Kage☆Boshi)-Shadow☆Star
Type: Attack/Defense/Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user begins by altering their stance, placing the left foot slightly forward, and holding their sword upright with the hilt in front of the right shoulder. The blade should also slope slightly to the rear (The Hasso Kendo stance for those who don't know). Upon taking this stance, the user performs a "Soul Resonance" with themselves, and with their weapon. By focusing chakra all throughout the body, the user establishes an equilibrium between themselves and their weapon where the chakra resonates within , much like what is done with the Samurai Sabre Technique. However, whereas usually the chakra would envelop the blade, this chakra forms a shell within the blade itself, where the chakra can rebound infinitely and effectively resonate with itself; As it forms a shell of resonating chakra within the blade allowing it to cut through near anything, unlike the Samurai Sabre Technique, this chakra cannot be released in the form of ranged chakra shock-waves. The constant stream of chakra throughout the body serves to forcefully augment the muscles of the body, bringing the user into a peak condition increasing their speed and strength by up to fifteen percent. The chakra released from the Tenketsu can also take the form of several whip like entities that can subsequently be used to repeatedly attack the enemy, with the intention of landing multiple crushing blows, that are also capable of slicing the opponent apart; These whips can also be used defensively in order to defend against close ranged attacks, and knock away incoming projectile weapons.
~The use of the whips counts as one of the three allotted moves allowed in a single turn.
~This technique can only be used to block incoming attacks of equal or lower rank.

±± Declined ±± The idea isn't bad but you added to many abilities. Also, this is similar to existing techniques, both Kenjutsu and Custom Weapons.

(Kage☆Boshi)-Shadow☆Star
Type:Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:30(+15 for every turn after activation)
Damage Points:N/A (+10 to Kenjutsu)
Description: The user begins by altering their stance, placing the left foot slightly forward, and holding their sword upright with the hilt in front of the right shoulder. The blade should also slope slightly to the rear (The Hasso Kendo stance for those who don't know). Upon taking this stance, the user performs a "Soul Resonance" with themselves, and with their weapon. By focusing chakra all throughout the body, the user establishes an equilibrium between themselves and their weapon where the chakra resonates within , much like what is done with the Samurai Sabre Technique. However, whereas usually the chakra would envelop the blade, this chakra forms a shell within the blade itself, where the chakra can rebound infinitely and effectively resonate with itself; As it forms a shell of resonating chakra within the blade, it allows it to cut through near anything. The constant stream of chakra throughout the body serves to forcefully augment the muscles of the body, bringing the user into a peak condition increasing their speed and strength up to 20%.
~Can only be used once
~Lasts for a total 5 turns maximum
~Must be wielding the sword or have it on his possession to keep active.

I fixed it so that it has less abilities fit within one technique, only augmenting ones own body, and making it so that the blade can cut through nearly anything.
~Leaving for Kaito or Scorps~

±± Approved ±± Edited the duration. Added restriction. Added damage to Kenjutsu.

(Suiton:Kabau Ko Entiti)-Water Release: Protective Gelatinous Entity
Type:Offense/Defense/Supplementary
Rank:S
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:40 (+an extra 10 each turn it remains active)
Damage Points:N/A (40 for Taijutsu)
Description:This jutsu involves the user spitting up a medium sized sum of water (Or manipulating an existing water source) In order to take the form of a large, viscous golem made purely out of water. The golem completely envelops the user, forming a complete protective shield around them. Because the water has a higher viscosity than ordinary water style techniques, it is capable of absorbing the blows of several blunt attacks without deforming (As long as the user feeds it an ample amount of chakra per turn). Not only is this golem good for defense, but it is good for offense as well. Because the entity has hands, feet, and a head, it is capable of moving around and fighting like an ordinary person (Capable of landing physical hits with its "fists" and "legs"). The ordinary un-augmented punches it delivers are equivalent to that of B Rank Taijutsu. Because it is made up of water it also gains increased flexibility, can extend its reach farther than that of a normal person (Since it has no bones it can bend beyond the human limits). However, although this jutsu seems like it has no weaknesses, it does have a few "flaws." Because the users body is completely enveloped in water, the user must hold their breath while the technique is in use (An average person can hold it for a minute without breathing exercises). The other weakness is that the user can only use Suiton, Ninjutsu, Taijutsu, and Genjutsu and cannot use any other Elemental Ninjutsu.
~Lasts for three turns per use (Since an average person can hold their breath for around one minute)
~Can only be used three times per battle.
~One must wait two turns after one usage in order to use the technique again (In order to catch the breath)
~Can only use Suiton, Ninjutsu, Genjutsu, and Taijutsu while this technique is in use, no other elements allowed.
~To most the technique may seem silly, but actually serves as an all purpose, unique suit of armor.
~Declined~ Do not Submit (Similar Techniques Exist)

 

[Illyasviel]

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Resubmiting jutsu for my custom weapon wich was approved last weak:

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(Kuro Henshintan)-Black Shapeshifter
Type:Weapon
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra:N/A(30 for every shape change)
Damage:N/A
Description:The Black Shapeshifter is a weapon made of rare metals that can be found only on high mountains.The weapon can change into two diferent forms.It's primary form is a form of a long black katana.The second form is a form of a long black scythe with a red edge that has a long thick wire conected to it that is held on the back of a shinobi.

~Note:The weapons form can be changed only twice per battle.

(Rensa Raikou Baindo)-Chain Lighning Bind
Type:Supplementary/Atack/Defence
Rank:B
Range:Short
Chakra:25
Damage:40
Description:The user using his Black Shapeshifter in it's scythe mode spreads the thick wire around the battlefield in a shape that looks a little like a spiderweb.When the opponent inside the last line of the chain the user slams his scythe to the ground and the wire wraps around the oponent emiting electricity,shocking the oponent.The force of the electric atack is equal to a C rank lighning atack.
~Note:Can only be used with the Black Shapeshifter in scythe mode.
~Note:Can only be used once per battle.
~Declined~ If this is a B-rank technique, why does it only do up to C-rank damage. I'd advise you to bump it up to B-rank.

(Kurenai Raikou Bakuha)-Crimson Lighning Blast
Type:Atack
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:The user using his Black Shapeshifter in sword mode sends his chakra to the sword.Crimson colour electricity will start spining around the blade of the sword. When the enemy is hit by any side of the blade of the sword,the electricity will enter the oponents body,badly damaging his inner organs.If the oponent defends against the sword while the crimson electricity is spining with a metal weapon the electricity will past through it and make the same damage to the oponent.The user can cause damage to himself if he touches the blade of the sword.
~Note:Can only be used with the Black Shapeshifter in it's primary form.
~Note:Can only be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user can perform only C rank and below lighning jutsu in the turn this jutsu has been used.
~The user must wait two turns after he used this jutsu to perform it again.
Change anything you want,if you want.
~Declined~ Please define the bolded. "If the opponent defends" is vague. In what manner of the opponent's defense will the sword still have an effect?

(Rensa Raikou Baindo)-Chain Lighning Bind
Type:Supplementary/Atack/Defence
Rank:B
Range:Short
Chakra:25
Damage:40
Description:The user using his Black Shapeshifter in it's scythe mode spreads the thick wire around the battlefield in a shape that looks a little like a spiderweb.When the opponent inside the last line of the chain the user slams his scythe to the ground and the wire wraps around the oponent emiting electricity,shocking the oponent.The force of the electric atack is equal to a B rank lightning atack.
~Note:Can only be used with the Black Shapeshifter in scythe mode.
~Note:Can only be used once per battle.


(Kurenai Raikou Bakuha)-Crimson Lighning Blast
Type:Atack
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Description:The user using his Black Shapeshifter in sword mode sends his chakra to the sword.Crimson colour electricity will start spining around the blade of the sword. When the enemy is hit by any side of the blade of the sword,the electricity will enter the oponents body,badly damaging his inner organs.The user can cause damage to himself if he touches the blade of the sword.
~Note:Can only be used with the Black Shapeshifter in it's primary form.
~Note:Can only be used twice per battle.
~Note:The user can perform only C rank and below lighning jutsu in the turn this jutsu has been used.
~The user must wait two turns after he used this jutsu to perform it again.

I removed the bolded parts because I don't know how to reword it.

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(Senbon Kami)-Hair Senbon
Type:Atack
Rank:D
Range:Short
Chakra:10
Damage:20
Description:The user sends chakra into his hair to harden it.Then he swings his head towards the oponent and depending on how much hair he hardened he fires a few shorter senbon towards the oponent.
~Note:Can be used only with bios with hair.
~Note:Can be used 3 times per battle.


±± All Declined ±± You can only submit 3 techniques per weekly cycle (in-between markers). You are hereby banned from this thread for a complete cycle. Your ban will be lifted on the 11th of March.