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(Dante no Wairudofureimu Hanketsu) Dante's Vile Flame Judgment
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Point: 90 [-20 to the user]
Description: The user takes a battle stance while simultaneously releasing a burst of fire chakra all around themselves and from that focusing it in the shape of a brassard around their shoulders. As the fire chakra is being channeled, the fire chakra reaches his fists with a swirling motion from his shoulders near an instant, covering their whole arms. This creates a shroud of fire chakra around their shoulders/arms from fire. As the shroud of fire chakra covered their arms they take a shape of two raging lionheads on the end of the user's fists. Soon as the lionheads take form, the user thrusts both of their fists into the opponent's diaphragm, burning a 拠 (judgment) kanji onto their abdomen. At the point of impact, the lions emerge from the user's fists and wrap their claws around the opponent, resembling the kanji. The user controlling the movements of the lions by landing eight punches with fast speeds on different areas on the opponent's body with great strength and endurance to make the kanji appear. The user then hammers the opponent's shoulders with his fists into the ground, making a crater shaped like the kanji for 'judgment'. As the opponent has been pummeled into the ground he bursts into a maelstrom, engulfing him in flames.
Notes:
-No C-ranked or above Taijutsu for the next turn that involves the movement of arms/shoulders.
-Can't use Katon above A-ranks for the following and in the same turn.
-The fire causes slight dizziness, burning sensation throughout the arms.
-Can be only used once given the chakra strain
-If the technique is been used for more then a turn, the user dies in the end of the following turn due to the great strains of the technique.
-Burning of the kanji is purely cosmetic
__________
-Declined- I don't see great drawbacks from the usage of the technique, Forbidden ranks are supposed to cripple you, that's why they are called forbidden, slight dizziness and burning sensation won't be enough here, unless you make it S-rank.
Notes for checker:
-Corrected the rank
-Took out any words that would make it seem intense, ultimately toning it down.
(Hōrī Danmaku) Diabolic Hammer
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user charges lightning chakra on their feet to boost their speed and impact then jumps above the opponent. The user turns around while charging lightning chakra on his open palms to perform a powerful palm strike on both sides of his head then with a hammer kick, drives them into the ground.
Note:
-Can be used 3x
-Can be used by House
-No S-ranked lightning taijutsu in the next turn
_________
-Declined- Mention that it cannot be used to evade/jump away from ninjutsu attacks, "the initial part of the technique".
(Shukufuku sa Reta Supirittotappu) Blessed Spirit Tap
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 40
Description: The user charges lightning chakra on their feet to have a boost in speed and impact then takes a low stance while leaping behind the opponent with a quick and swift motion. The user then breaks the opponent's stance by landing a strong heel kick behind the opponent's knee. As the opponent is kneeling on the ground the user charges lightning chakra into their fists then performs several strikes onto his back, burning his skin on every contact.
Note:
-Can be used 4x
-Can be taught by House
__________
-Declined- Same as above for the bold, and Lightning doesn't deliver that much burning damage, Fire does that, lightning delivers more cutting or shocking damage.
Resubmit:(Dante no Wairudofureimu Hanketsu) Dante's Vile Flame Judgment
Rank: F-Ranked
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Point: 90 [-20 to the user]
Description: The user takes a battle stance while simultaneously releasing a burst of fire chakra all around themselves and from that focusing it in the shape of a brassard around their shoulders. As the fire chakra is being channeled, the fire chakra reaches his fists with a swirling motion from his shoulders near an instant, covering their whole arms. This creates a shroud of fire chakra around their shoulders/arms from enormous amounts of fire. The intensity of the fire is so huge, the temperature around the user is unbearable, causes fast dehydration, and great pain to the user. As the shroud of fire chakra covered their arms they take a shape of two raging lionheads on the end of the user's fists. Soon as the lionheads take form, the user thrusts both of their fists into the opponent's diaphragm, burning a 拠 (judgment) kanji onto their abdomen. At the point of impact, the lions emerge from the user's fists and wrap their claws around the opponent, resembling the kanji. The user controlling the movements of the lions by landing eight punches with fast speeds on different areas on the opponent's body with great strength and endurance to make the kanji appear. The user then hammers the opponent's shoulders with his fists into the ground, making a crater shaped like the kanji for 'judgment'. As the opponent has been pummeled into the ground he bursts into a maelstrom, engulfing him in flames.
Notes:
-No C-ranked or above Taijutsu for the next turn that involves the movement of arms/shoulders.
-Can't use Katon above A-ranks for the following and in the same turn.
-The fire is very intense which causing slight dizziness, burning sensation throughout the arms.
-Can be only used once given the chakra strain
-If the technique is been used for more then a turn, the user dies in the end of the following turn due to the great strains of the technique.
-Burning of the kanji is purely cosmetic
__________
-Declined- OP, and your arms are going to be burned severely from this much heat to the point where you can't move it again, that means no handseals as well, not just Taijutsu movements, also it's Forbidden rank, not F-rank.
(Dante no Wairudofureimu Hanketsu) Dante's Vile Flame Judgment
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Point: 90 [-20 to the user]
Description: The user takes a battle stance while simultaneously releasing a burst of fire chakra all around themselves and from that focusing it in the shape of a brassard around their shoulders. As the fire chakra is being channeled, the fire chakra reaches his fists with a swirling motion from his shoulders near an instant, covering their whole arms. This creates a shroud of fire chakra around their shoulders/arms from fire. As the shroud of fire chakra covered their arms they take a shape of two raging lionheads on the end of the user's fists. Soon as the lionheads take form, the user thrusts both of their fists into the opponent's diaphragm, burning a 拠 (judgment) kanji onto their abdomen. At the point of impact, the lions emerge from the user's fists and wrap their claws around the opponent, resembling the kanji. The user controlling the movements of the lions by landing eight punches with fast speeds on different areas on the opponent's body with great strength and endurance to make the kanji appear. The user then hammers the opponent's shoulders with his fists into the ground, making a crater shaped like the kanji for 'judgment'. As the opponent has been pummeled into the ground he bursts into a maelstrom, engulfing him in flames.
Notes:
-No C-ranked or above Taijutsu for the next turn that involves the movement of arms/shoulders.
-Can't use Katon above A-ranks for the following and in the same turn.
-The fire causes slight dizziness, burning sensation throughout the arms.
-Can be only used once given the chakra strain
-If the technique is been used for more then a turn, the user dies in the end of the following turn due to the great strains of the technique.
-Burning of the kanji is purely cosmetic
__________
-Declined- I don't see great drawbacks from the usage of the technique, Forbidden ranks are supposed to cripple you, that's why they are called forbidden, slight dizziness and burning sensation won't be enough here, unless you make it S-rank.
Notes for checker:
-Corrected the rank
-Took out any words that would make it seem intense, ultimately toning it down.
(Hōrī Danmaku) Diabolic Hammer
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user charges lightning chakra on their feet to boost their speed and impact then jumps above the opponent. The user turns around while charging lightning chakra on his open palms to perform a powerful palm strike on both sides of his head then with a hammer kick, drives them into the ground.
Note:
-Can be used 3x
-Can be used by House
-No S-ranked lightning taijutsu in the next turn
_________
-Declined- Mention that it cannot be used to evade/jump away from ninjutsu attacks, "the initial part of the technique".
(Shukufuku sa Reta Supirittotappu) Blessed Spirit Tap
Rank: B
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 40
Description: The user charges lightning chakra on their feet to have a boost in speed and impact then takes a low stance while leaping behind the opponent with a quick and swift motion. The user then breaks the opponent's stance by landing a strong heel kick behind the opponent's knee. As the opponent is kneeling on the ground the user charges lightning chakra into their fists then performs several strikes onto his back, burning his skin on every contact.
Note:
-Can be used 4x
-Can be taught by House
__________
-Declined- Same as above for the bold, and Lightning doesn't deliver that much burning damage, Fire does that, lightning delivers more cutting or shocking damage.
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