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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

Please edit Any part of my CJ's for approval. Thanks ^_^


Boukyaku (The Oblivion)
Rank:S
Type:weapon
Chakra cost:0/40
Damage:40 + 40 with elemental chakra imbued
Description:It is a sword said to be forged long ago by the student of the very man who made the seven swordsman of the mist's swords, on the day that his teacher died he forged this sword in blinded rage and sorrow.It is said that this sword has many dormant abilities.The swords blade is about 4 and a half feet long and its hilt is roughly a foot long(including the guard and the pommel) the width of the blade is roughly 10 inches and a shallow groove runs along the middle of the flat of the blade on both sides.The sword was forged from a special alloy mined in the depths of a dormant volcano this alloy allows the user's fire chakra to be poured into the sword.The sword can also be repaired by pouring normal chakra into the sword which counts as a move,the sword also has the special ability unique to when fire chakra is poured into the sword to absorb B rank and below wind techniques.

~All nature chakra's can be used with the sword however the sword prefers fire chakra
~The sword can only be infused with one nature chakra at a time
~The sword is not indestructible but is slightly stronger than your average sword due to its size and denseity
~It takes one turn for the sword to finish repairing
~While fire chakra is channeled into the sword the sword gains extra abilities giving the user:
~+10 to all kenjustu and fire justu
~Only Three wind justu can be absorbed per match,Absorbing counts as a move
~Sword can only be infused with a nature chakra for five turns afterwards the sword requires a two turn cooldown before it can be infused again
~No water justu above B rank can be used while holding this sword.
~Can only be wielded by white flash and people he deems worthy

~Declined~ No absorption of attacks, it was done dozens of times. Make it +5 to fire and Kenjutsu. Take out the +40 to elemental chakra imbued in the damages.

Kontan Bure-ka- (Soul Breaker)
Rank:S
Type:Offensive
Range:Short/Mid-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:The user Builds up a large amount of chakra in The Oblivion and its Variants and slashes they're sword either horizontally vertically or diagonally releasing the build up of chakra at the same time causing a cresent shaped shock wave to be released from the sword in the same direction that the sword was swung.
The shockwave is purely built up of chakra and is equal to a A rank non elemental justu it has a cutting edge similar to the swords itself and could easily decapitate an enemy. The user can also Imbue the shockwave with a nature affinity by channeling elemental affinity chakra into the sword instead of normal chakra creating a S rank attack equal to its nature.This cannot however be done with earth chakra.

~When used with wind it creates a deadly slicing shockwave that is extremely thin and sharp and can even cut an opponent clean in two and break through rocks
~When done with fire it is similar to the normal chakra version except that it schorches its targets as it slices through
~When done with lightning it creates a static shockwave that upon impact with its target will shock and paralyse and leave a deep gash in its target
~When done with water it will have similar effects to the standard shockwave except that it loses its shape upon impact with an object but will send the object flying leaving a shallow but long gash in the opponent and sending them flying back

~If this move is used with the twin oblivions instead of swinging the sword to emit the chakra wave the user can simply spin either clockwise or anti clockwise releasing a horizontal attack similar to the standard version of Soulbreaker except that it emits from the blades in all directions outwards from the user.





Can only be used/taught by white flash and people he allows
Can only be used once every two turns
Counts as a move
Can tear down trees and cut through solid rock on the way to the opponent
Can only cut through a maximum of three objects incuding a opponent or justu's(provided it is of a low rank) before it disperses
When used with a element the attack follows the elemental chart for the element used
~Declined~ The Oblivion wasn't approved.
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Boukyaku (The Oblivion)
Rank:S
Type:weapon
Chakra cost:0/40
Damage:40
Description:It is a sword said to be forged long ago by the student of the very man who made the seven swordsman of the mist's swords, on the day that his teacher died he forged this sword in blinded rage and sorrow.It is said that this sword has many dormant abilities.The swords blade is about 4 and a half feet long and its hilt is roughly a foot long(including the guard and the pommel) the width of the blade is roughly 10 inches and a shallow groove runs along the middle of the flat of the blade on both sides.The sword was forged from a special alloy mined in the depths of a dormant volcano this alloy allows the user's fire chakra to be poured into the sword.The sword can also be repaired by pouring normal chakra into the sword which counts as a move,the sword also has

~All nature chakra's can be used with the sword however the sword prefers fire chakra
~The sword can only be infused with one nature chakra at a time
~The sword is not indestructible but is slightly stronger than your average sword due to its size and denseity
~It takes one turn for the sword to finish repairing
~While fire chakra is channeled into the sword the sword gains extra abilities giving the user:
~+5 to all kenjustu and fire justu
~Sword can only be infused with a nature chakra for five turns afterwards the sword requires a two turn cooldown before it can be infused again
~No water justu above B rank can be used while holding this sword.
~Can only be wielded by white flash and people he deems worthy

~Approved~

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Kontan Bure-ka- (Soul Breaker)
Rank:S
Type:Offensive
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:The user Builds up a large amount of chakra in The Oblivion and its Variants and slashes they're sword either horizontally vertically or diagonally releasing the build up of chakra at the same time causing a cresent shaped shock wave to be released from the sword in the same direction that the sword was swung.
The shockwave is purely built up of chakra and is equal to a A rank non elemental justu it has a cutting edge similar to the swords itself and could easily decapitate an enemy. The user can also Imbue the shockwave with a nature affinity by channeling elemental affinity chakra into the sword instead of normal chakra creating a S rank attack equal to its nature.This cannot however be done with earth chakra.

~When used with wind it creates a deadly slicing shockwave that is extremely thin and sharp and can even cut an opponent clean in two and break through rocks
~When done with fire it is similar to the normal chakra version except that it schorches its targets as it slices through
~When done with lightning it creates a static shockwave that upon impact with its target will shock and paralyse and leave a deep gash in its target
~When done with water it will have similar effects to the standard shockwave except that it loses its shape upon impact with an object but will send the object flying leaving a shallow but long gash in the opponent and sending them flying back

~If this move is used with the twin oblivions instead of swinging the sword to emit the chakra wave the user can simply spin either clockwise or anti clockwise releasing a horizontal attack similar to the standard version of Soulbreaker except that it emits from the blades in all directions outwards from the user.
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Can only be used/taught by white flash and people he allows
Can only be used once every two turns
Counts as a move
Can tear down trees and cut through solid rock on the way to the opponent
Can only cut through a maximum of three objects incuding a opponent or justu's(provided it is of a low rank) before it disperses
When used with a element the attack follows the elemental chart for the element used

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

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(Kasai Ha Suto-Mu)Fire Leaf Storm
Rank:A
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Range:Short-Mid
Type:Attack
Description: The user builds up their katon chakra in their mouth and blows out a storm of embers that are sent spiraling towards the opponent at high speeds.Each ember is shaped like a leaf and thus that is where the justu gets its name.The leaf shaped flames are incredibly sharps they have serrated like edges and can easily cut through trees and rocks leaving cinders where it was sliced,the embers cover a large area both vertically and horizontally and thus can be difficult to avoid.
~Can only be used 3x
~Can only be used by -Scaze- and those who he allows
~No forbidden rank water justus that turn

~Approved~
 
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Thanks for re-opening Zen. <3

(Hakke Ijō Surudoi) 8 Trigrams Greater Sharp
Rank: S
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This is the final and most dangerous jutsu, because it requires great chakra control, and only the most finest warriors of hyuugas are able to perform this. As the user emits one strong, razor sharp, dense chakra streams from each hand, if the user wishes, it can split into multiple chakra streams to attack separate targets individually, reaching onto where the user wishes.
Notes:
-due to requiring much concentration, only sannin may use it.
-Must have mastered Jyuuken.
-Won't be able to use another Jyuuken in the same turn.
- -10 damage because of the chakra control
- Needs to be taught by Dr. House

~Pending~ I seem to be missing the point of this technique. You emit a razor sharp chakra stream that reach you opponent and cut him? If yes, then it's been done many times before so it'd be declined.

(Hakke Ijō Surudoi) Chakra Distruption
Rank: A
Type: Defensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Once a hyuuga member has activated byakugan, he'll see his opponents chakra flowing within him and sees his chakra is channeling within the ground, and once his opponent has released his chakra into the ground, hyuuga member may strike his palm onto the ground, excerting chakra from his hands into the ground disturbing enemie's chakra flow within the ground/or disturbing the chakra in an already created technique.
Note:
~Can be used 4x
~Must be taught by Dr. House
~Must master and have a great control over jyuuken
~Only may sannin use this.

~Declined~ Alucard already had the "patent" over the ability to disturb one's chakra with his own chakra. Since this isn't a natural ability of the Hyuuga, your jutsu is too similar to his technique.

(Hakke Surudoi) 8 Trigrams Sneaky Sharp
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Hyuuga member will concentrate on his chakra control, and once he has done that, he'll slam his hands onto the ground, then fine, razor sharp constant stream of chakra will be emited from the bottom of his feet and from his hands, (That's 4 chakra streams, cause each hand is able to make up to 4) enabling the user to sneak up on his opponent with the jutsu form the ground, then once he reached his target, the chakra stream will emerge from the ground, possibly impailing the target or ensnare him. It may split into multiple chakra streams to attack separate targets individually.
-Can be used 4x
-Since it needs great chakra control, only sannin and masters of jyuuken will be able to perform it, who has battle experience with gentle fist.
-The user has to be standing on the ground, in order to keep on channeling the chakra stream.
-Can be taught by Dr. House

~Declined~ Again, slamming your hand/feet on the ground and having a spike of chakra/element emerge from under the opponent was done many times.
 
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Custom weapon: Companion
Rank: A
Type: Attack/Defence/Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A
Descriptions:A huge halberd with the ability to utilize many elements it is also unbreakable, the sword can also have elemental chakra placed into it, it can also shoot up to A Rank fireballs/flames to long range
-each fireball counts as one of the users turns
-only Blade Hyuga and anyone with permission can use it
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~Declined~ The ability to absorb elements or shoot elemental blast was done many time and is considered a rip off.

Dragon Thunder (Ryuraisen)
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: short-long
Chakra cost:30
Damage:60
Descriptions: The user is able to summon a thunderstorm and manipulate the lightning creating a number of lethal electric bolts that nearly kills anyone it touches althought they dont kill the person struck will be left paralyzed. The attack cannot be fully controlled, and hits randomly around the user.
-Must have Companion sword
-User is limited to B rank lightning after this
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~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

Hatred Ball(Gojou Tama)
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: short-long
Chakra cost:40
Damage: 80
Descriptions: Companions most powerful attack. The user must chanel all of his fire and lightning chakra and wait 2 turns before firing. The hatred built inside the halberd combined with the power of fire, lightning, and hatred embedded in Banryu creates a huge and powerful ball of swirling anger lightning and fire.
-Must master fire and lightning for this
-User is unable to use any fire and lightning elements for 3 turns
-Chanelling the chakra into Companion takes one of the users turns
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~Declined~ Companion wasn't approved.
 
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(Katon: Katon Suji) - Fire release: Fire Line
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range:Short-long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user spreads out his arms and brings them in together to meet in the middle as if he/she was going to clap, as soon as his palms connect he releases a sharp line of fire which go towards the opponent at fast pace.
Note: can only be used by RockLeeGreenBeast and those he shares this jutsu with.
Declined provide appropriate restrictions its an a rank technique so it needs restrictions such as a useage restriction
(Katon: Katon Suji) - Fire release: Fire Line
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range:Short-long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user spreads out his arms and brings them in together to meet in the middle as if he/she was going to clap, as soon as his palms connect he releases a sharp line of fire which go towards the opponent at fast pace.
Note: can only be used by RockLeeGreenBeast and those he shares this jutsu with.
Note: Can only be used 4 times.

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

Custom Weapon.

Kaji Katana : Fire Blade

Rank:S
Type: Weapon - Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra: (+20 for fire jutsus rank A and above deflected, +15 for any Earth jutsu cut)
Damage: N/A
Description: The Fire blade looks like an ordinary blade, with leather straps surrounding the area where the user holds it from, the leather is not ordinary leather as it is - for an unknown reason it is not able to burn. It has a sharp tip which is useful against opponents at close range. The blade also has the ability to deflect small fire jutsus ranked A and lower without difficulty. Furthermore due to its sharp tip the sword is able to cut through Earth jutsus ranked B and lower.
Note: Fire deflection counts as one of the users move.
Note: Fire deflection jutsu can be used 3 times.
Note: The blade can only be wielded by RockLeeGreenBeast.
Note: By Hard materials I mean Earth jutsus ranked B and lower.
Note: The cutting of Earth jutsus ranked B and lower counts as a move.
Note: Cutting Earth can only be done 3 times.
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~Approved~ I made it so you can deflect A-rank fire attacks and only small ones. Re-read the description, you'll see.

(Doton: Kuroi Kurohyou) - Earth release: Black Panthers
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range:Short-long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user quickly concentrates his doton chakra in his hands and quickly touches the ground to release 2 panthers made out of Earth to run at the opponent at full force and take down the opponent savagely without trouble upon impact. The user can take his hands of the ground and the jutsu will still be active however to control the panthers the user must bring his hands back to the ground. If the users hands are not touching the ground, the panthers will simply attack the opponent whenever they see him/her.
Note: can only be used by RockLeeGreenBeast and those he shares this jutsu with.
Note: Can only be used 4 times.
Note: Lions must be destroyed with an approperate jutsu.
Note: Lions disperse after3 turns if they are not destroyed.
Note: User can order the lions and tell them what to do as long as his hands are still touching the ground.

~Declined~ Restrictions are off, make it more restricted. Also, you keep referring to lions in your restrictions.
 
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( Genjutsu: Kanzen Saimin ) Illusionary Technique: Complete Hypnosis
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost:40(+20per turn active)
Damage points: N/A
Description: After summoning the Giant Clam, the user holds his palms on to the clam's shell and focus his Yin chakra into it allowing it to exude a powerful mist from its siphons with a stronger chakra concentration than its mirage technique. The genjutsu generated through this stronger mist is capable of wiping both the Clam and the user and any clones of the user from the target's five senses completely, instead of replacing them with mirages, effectively making it seem as if all of them no longer exist. It controls the five senses to the point that it can make the target misinterpret another person's form, shape, mass, feel and smell to be that of the enemy. If the enemies are able to touch the user or Giant Clam they will be able to dispel the genjutsu, this technique however is strong enough to fool average sensor ninjas but not exceptionally skilled ones such as Muu or Karin.
Note:
~Can only be used once per battle
~Only lasts 3 turns
~Only A-rank and below jutsu may be used while this jutsu is active
~Can only be used with a Second Mizukage bio
~Can only be taught/allowed by Professor Sarutobi or Sharingdork

~Approved~ I added a restriction.

(Furui ki Hozuki jouin: Poseidon )Ancient Weapon of the Hozuki Clan Lords: Poseidon
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 15 to reform or reshape
Damage points:+5 to kenjutsu damage, +10 to water jutsu
Description: This weapon was created by the founding members of the Hozuki clan in the days before the 5 great village system and lost during war until the 2nd Mizukage found where it had been sealed away by the 1st hokage at the bottom of the ocean. The weapon itself has no one true form as it was forged to work with Hozuki lords it can be turned into water at will or shaped into any size or shape, when solidified the weapons metal takes on the form of steel with a blue tint and its cloth or wood will be dark blue. The unique powers imbued in Poseidon also allows Hozuki users of Sannin rank and above to use C rank water techniques without hand seals as long as Poseidon is in the users possesstion. If hit by lightning or fire of high enough power (B rank and above)Poseidon will becomes mist for a short time ( 2 turns) before reforming, making it impossible to destroy for good. Poseidon can also be merged into its master's body at will for safekeeping and surprise attacks.
- Can be turned into any basic weapon the user can think of and use (counts as one of the 3 turns)
- If the user has been knocked out Poseidon will retreat inside of their jelly like body and revive them with its chakra( once per battle)
-Can only be used by members of the Hozuki Clan. If someone else tries to hold Poseidon it simply becomes water and returns to its master. ( or if its master has been obliterated it turns into a fine mist and reforms in the ocean it was found originally.)
- Can only be wielded by Professor Sarutobi and those he gives permission

~Declined~ OP. You took several existing weapons and mixed them (whether it was conscious or not isn't important). The fact that it can turn into anything you want is a no go. With that simple description you could turn it into a spear that reach as far as you wish. Reviving the user is also OP.

(Suiton: Dokomo Metsuki no Jutsu) - Water Release: Everywhere Eyes Technique
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost:30(+10every turn active)
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user concentrates chakra into his head and using the Hozuki's unique anatomy creates 4 eyes made of water that emerge from his skull,1 eye on each temple and one on the back of his head and finally one on the top of his head looking straight up, these are all connected giving the user 360 degree vision.
-Only lasts for 3 turns.
-Can only be used twice per match.
-Can only be used by members of the Hozuki Clan.

~Approved~ Made it last 3 turns and twice per match.
 
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[ Muijitsu ] | Innocent

Rank: S
Type: Weapon - Supplementary
Range: Self
Chakra: 40 [ +5 chakra to the genjutsu ]
Damage: 80 [ +10 to lightning techniques ]
Description: Innocent is a sword which was made a long time ago, this sword has a dragon sign in it and when Innocent reveal or get's a new owner the dragon will glow like water is flowing through it. Innocent is a really sharp sword, for the user to be able to use it he first has to know how to use the sword since with one stab it could kill someone, this sword is also kinda long and is also really light. Innocent has really great powers, not any member could control them. Innocent is able to trap people on genjutsu which let the opponent see like they on the same fight and they still battling and the genjutsu is an s-rank type but not only that the user is able to control the opponent mind once his trapped and by doing that he has to move the sword around making a dance the sword is able to control the fight on the opponent mind and when the opponent get hit the opponent will phisically think is a real hit and so they get damage from that. The sword is also able to give the user a +10 to lightning techniques. To trap the enemy on the genjutsu the user has to spin their sword.

  • Only Pain.. could use this sword and control it's power
  • Once the genjutsu is on the user can't use any elemental attack until the opponent release himself/herself from the genjutsu
  • The Genjutsu can be use twice and it last five rounds
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Declined, improve the description of the genjutsu effect and also make it count towards one of the users moves
[ Muijitsu ] | Innocent

Rank: S
Type: Weapon - Supplementary
Range: Self
Chakra: 40 [ +5 chakra to the genjutsu ]
Damage: 80 [ +10 to lightning techniques ]
Description: Innocent is a sword which was made a long time ago, this sword has a dragon sign in it and when Innocent reveal or get's a new owner the dragon will glow like water is flowing through it. Innocent is a really sharp sword, for the user to be able to use it he first has to know how to use the sword since with one stab it could kill someone, this sword is also kinda long and is also really light. Innocent has really great powers, not any member could control them. Innocent is able to trap people on his special genjutsu which let the opponent see that they are on the same fight and they still battling normally but they really not, the genjutsu is a s-rank type but not only that the user is able to control the opponent mind once his trapped and by doing that he has to spin the sword around making the sword dragon shine the user is able to control the fight on the opponent mind for example, if the user want's he could do a forbidden technique on the opponent mind and if the opponent get hit, he will physically think is a real hit and so the opponent brain will crush due to the great deal of damage that the opponent could get from the genjutsu. The sword is also able to give the user a +10 to lightning techniques. To trap the enemy on the genjutsu the user has to spin their sword.

  • Only Pain.. could use this sword and control it's power
  • Once the genjutsu is on the user can't use any elemental attack until the opponent release himself/herself from the genjutsu
  • The Genjutsu can be use once and it last two rounds
  • The Genjutsu count's towards a move
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~Declined~ When re-submitting/editing jutsus, you need to put the added/altered part in bold. If you only took out part of your jutsu, you need to mention what was taken away.

( Kuchiyose: Frenimes ) Summoning: Frenimes

Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra: 25
Damage: N/A
Description: The user will either wipe blood on his/her tattoo or either do the long way which is do the necessary hand seals and slam their hands on the ground but both work fine, once the user has done one of these two a small Raven will be summon, known as 'Frenimies' this Raven has a large amount of seals under his wings which works for fuuinjutsu. Once Frenimes has put a seal on the opponent the user can use the seal for fuuinjutsu even thought the user didn't put it on the enemy, which give's Frenimes a unique attack. This raven is extremely small, even smaller than the smalles toad.

  • It last five turns
  • When the Raven puts a seal on the opponent it counts as a move
  • Must sign the Raven contract
  • Can only be taught by Pain.. or -Ace-
~Declined~ Unacceptable. You didn't mention which seal, you didn't mention how it would be transferred, and lastly, smaller than the smallest of toads? No.

[ Katon: Ryuuki Enkou ] Fire Style: Rising Flames

Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 40 [ +10 when the user uses the pinky ]
Damage: 80
Description: The user will focus a large amount of fire chakra on his/her index finger while at the same time he will make the finger face the opponent, once the user is done a laser made out of fire will appear on the user Index finger, this laser is controllable at any will but at the same time the user could also, send another laser made out of fire which will be shoot with the user left hand and instead of using the index finger the user will use his pinky, but this version is a lot stronger but it cannot be controllable, this version explode when the user wishes, when the user adds a little bit more chakra onto the pinky the fire laser will explode which would burn everything on it's path at high will, the user could make the laser explode just by making a heavy step. Both of the lasers are sharp and if they come in contact with a body they will burn the opponent organs.

  • The user could use both of them as one move but when used at the same time it counts as two moves
  • When the pinky laser explodes it takes up to four yard of explosion
  • Only usable once per battle
~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
 
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Summoning Animal: Bandicoot ( , to be specific)
Scroll Owner: Sharingdork
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: Crash
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: N/A (TBA)

~Approved~

(Kurasshubandikū) Crash Bandicoot
Type: Summon
Range: Short
Rank: S
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Crash is a bipedal Bandicoot who wears shoes, pants, and wrist braces. Crash is a very fit creature, and the leader of the Bandicoots. Being a young and physically active Bandicoot, Crash can move very quickly, and jump higher than average ninja. Crash can use all non-elemental ninjutsu the summoner can, weaving the handseals himself, and can take the braces off his wrists in order to throw free-form taijutsu in more rapid succession. Once per battle, Crash can spin around, his arms flailing around himself to hit any target within arms reach.
Note: ~Can only be taught by Sharingdork
~Can only be summoned once per battle
~Jutsu Crash uses counts towards the users 3 moves per turn
~Crash's spin counts as a move
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~Declined~ This is the Narutoverse, try and adapt your custom to it. No animals would wear cloths, shoes and wrist braces -___-. Limit his use of ninjutsus to S-rank.

(Sennen Pazzuru) Millennium Puzzle
Type: Weapon
Range: Self (All ranges for communication)
Rank: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A (-5 to communicate) (-15 for light)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The Millennium Puzzle was an item given to Yugi for a specific purpose. After completing the Puzzle, the soul of Atem, Yugi's Souma No Ku twin, was released into Yugi's body. Now Yugi wears the Puzzle all the time, slowly unlocking it's abilities, the first of which was separating into two Puzzles whenever the twins split into two people. They then found that by focusing chakra into the Puzzle, they could communicate telepathically with whoever was wearing the other Puzzle no matter how far away they were. The Puzzle also allowes them to know where the other is in relation to themselves, and allows them to sense what kind of chakra the other was moulding while separated. The Puzzle also allows Souma No Ku users to switch the dormant bodies so if the main body is severely injured, they can rest. They later discovered that the Puzzles abilities work with clones, as well as with Souma No Ku users, with the exception of the changing dormant bodies. Once per battle, the Puzzle can emmit a bright light that blocks the targets vision.
Note: ~Can only be used by Sharingdork and those whom he allows
~Works for Souma No Ku twins and clones
~Sensing where the other user is or what chakra type they're using counts as a move
~The light counts as a move
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~Declined do not resubmit~
Resubmitting (Anything Added is in Bold Below; Anything Taken Away is Underlined Above):
(Kurasshubandikū) Crash Bandicoot
Type: Summon
Range: Short
Rank: S
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Crash is a bipedal, somewhat humanoid Bandicoot about the size of a human. Crash is a very fit creature, and the leader of the Bandicoots. Being a young and physically active Bandicoot, Crash can move quicker and jump higher than average ninja. Crash can use all non-elemental ninjutsu the summoner can up to S-rank, weaving the handseals himself. Once per battle, Crash can spin around, his arms flailing around himself to hit any target within arms reach.
Note: ~Can only be taught by Sharingdork
~Can only be summoned once per battle
~Last for 4 turns
~Jutsu Crash uses counts towards the users 3 moves per turn
~Crash's spin counts as a move
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~Approved~ Made it last 4 turns.

New:
(Kokobandikūto) Coco Bandicoot
Type: Summon
Range: Short
Rank: S
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Coco is a bipedal, somewhat humanoid Bandicoot about the size of a human, with long hair off her head in a ponytail. Coco is the sister of the leader of the Bandicoots, Crash. Coco is a very intelligent Bandicoot, which allows her to use all genjutsu the summoner can up to S-rank, weaving the handseals herself. Like her brother, Coco can, once per battle, spin around, letting her arms and ponytail flail around her to hit any target within arm’s reach.
Note: ~Can only be taught by Sharingdork
~Can only be summoned once per battle
~Last for 4 turns
~Jutsu Coco uses counts towards the users 3 moves per turn
~Coco's spin counts as a move
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~Approved~ Added a restriction.

(Kuranchibandikūto) Crunch Bandicoot
Type: Summon
Range: Short
Rank: S
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Crunch is a bipedal, somewhat humanoid Bandicoot about the size of a human. Crunch is the cousin of the leader of the Bandicoots, Crash. Crunch is a very well-built Bandicoot, with muscles bulging from every part of his body, aiding in his hand-to-hand combat abilities. Crunch is a very adept at taijutsu, able to use all taijutsu the summoner can up to S-rank. He also wears a metal brace on his right arm from his fingertips up to his shoulder. The metal brace allows him to block, deflect, and grab bladed weapons by the blade without damage to himself (unless they are charged with chakra).
Note: ~Can only be taught by Sharingdork
~Can only be summoned once per battle
~Last for 4 turns
~Cannot use any jutsus related to the eight inner gates
~Jutsu Crunch uses counts towards the users 3 moves per turn
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~Approved~ Added two restrictions.
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

Haki - [Ambition]
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S-rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40 (+10 per turn)
Damage: N/A (+20 if used to attack)
Description: Haki is a power that lies dormant in all the world's creatures... "Presence", "fighting spirit" and "intimidation". Haki is separated into three categories, or "colors": Kenbunshoku Haki, which grants users a sixth sense of the world around them and limited precognitive abilities Busoshoku Haki, which allows the user to use their spirit as armor to defend against attacks or to make their own attacks more potent; and Haoshoku Haki, a rare type of Haki only one in a million can use which grants the user the ability to overpower the will of others. The user however may not activate any of the three together at any given time due to the concentration required for using one.

Kenbunshou Haki - Color of Observation
a form of Haki that allows the user to sense the presence of others, even if they are concealed from view or too far to see naturally. With enough skill, one can use this haki to predict an opponent's moves shortly before they make them, thereby making the attack that much easier to evade. This prediction appears to the user as an image or brief "premonition" of what the opponent will do in the user's mind's eye, and the damage the user will take if the attack actually "hits". It appears that the more killing intent the enemy has, the easier they are to predict. This form of Haki is the weakest of the three and can't predict random movements. Chakra sensory abilities and others are greatly enhanced when in use. Lastly, it requires the user to have immense concentration meaning only 2 techniques for every turn this is active. Once concentration is broken, the technique ends and can't be activated again.

Busoshoku Haki - Color of Armaments
The second form of Haki, Busoshoku Haki allows the user to create a force similar to an invisible armor around themselves with the use of chakra. This allows the user to defend against attacks that would otherwise cause them harm. Only significant physical force can overcome this defense meaning a technique of A- rank or higher can break through the defense, and once this happens the technique falters and ends and the technique continues on to attack the user. Naturally this invisible armor can be used as a weapon with to strike others. It can be used to augment the user's own taijutsu or weapon attacks, projected ahead of the user as pure brute force, or imbued in weapons to increase their effectiveness. Any attack enhanced by Busoshoku Haki hits immensely harder than it would normally without it.

Haoshoku Haki - Color of the Conquering King
The last and most powerful form of Haki, This type of Haki grants the user the ability to dominate the wills of others. The most common usage is knocking those with weak wills unconscious meaning anybody of one rank lower will be subjected to nervousness only allowing the usage of two moves a turn, two ranks lower will cause them to fall unconsious.

[last three turns]
[usable once]
[only two technique per turn for every turn active.]

~All declined~ If you want the full reason behind my decision, go ask Mugi and Cali ^^. Also, I've warned people before submitting customs that branch out into multiple "sub-customs" will be counted as individual submissions (like submitting a set of taijutsu moves in a new form of taijutsu or multiple customs in one big summoning technique). Hence, this counts as your 3 submissions for this week. I won't ban you for your other submissions, but be aware of it next time.

Genjutsu| Shanburuzu - [ Illusion Technique| Shambles]
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user releases a visible field of chakra from his epicenter surrounding him 360 degrees. When something is caught within this field they are instantly caught in the user genjutsu and the user can freely manipulate the opponent's mind to make them believe their body has been cut in numerous pieces, this works well when the user has a sword as the opponent can eventually be forced to think nothing of it and sent into a state of panic at the disfigured body.

Sumiton| Sumishinsuitama - [Ink Release| Flooding Ink Bullet]
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: Kirabi puts his finger in his mouth and coats it with ink. Though this amount may seem small, the amount is actually massive. Kirabi points his finger `at his target and it releases after travling a small distance the bellt expands drastically into the 8-tails head, and spews out a large amount of ink. since everything is still moving forward the attack comes at the opponent that much faster.

~Both Declined~
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

Summoning Animal: Flamingos
Scroll Owner: Typhon
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: None
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None

~Approved~

(Don Juan, The King Flamingo) | Don Juan, El Rey Flamenco
Type: Summon
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: Don Juan is the King of the Flamingos and the most suave of them all. He speaks with a thick Spanish accent and moves with a dancer's grace. He stands nearly fifteen feet tall, though his height is deceptive as it mostly comes from his long legs and neck. While not the strongest flyer, he is capable of carrying up to three people on his back. His elemental affinity is wind which he can use up to A-rank by releasing the techniques from his wings. He has a special ability which he calls "Le Baile de Los Rey" or "The Dance of the King". Using his long legs and graceful movements he is able to avoid reasonable techniques by dancing out of their way. An unreasonable technique would be something that consumes the whole battlefield or a large portion of it. A reasonable technique would be something like a directional blast. During the dance he extends his wings and fires A ranked feathers at the opponent.
-Le Baile de Los Rey can be used twice per battle and counts towards the user's move set.
-Wind techniques count as a move in the user's turn.
-Can be summoned once per battle.
-Remains on the field up to five turns once summoned.

~Approved~ I like the creativity with this one ^^

(Momoirohigi: Daiyamondo Jozu) | Pink Secret Technique: Diamond Jozu
Type: Puppet
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: Diamond Jozu is a very large humanoid puppet with an empty chest cavity that can hold a puppeteer similar to Sasori's Hiruko. The defensive ability of this puppet comes from it's shingle like armor. One side of the shingles is the typical wooden plating used for most puppets, however the other side is plated with a very shiny metal which has the appearance of diamond when light shines off of it. At any time the puppeteer can flip these shingles exposing their defensive side. These shingles are capable of defending against A-rank and below attacks. The front chest of the puppet also folds up exposing a moderate sized open window for the puppeteer to see from (can be seen in pic as the greenish chest plate area). This windowed area doesn't contain the metallic shingles and is a point of weakness for the puppet and is vulnerable to all attacks. The typical entrance/exit for this puppet is its back which can be used to quickly abandon it if needed.
-Metal Plating crumbles away after taking two A-ranked attacks or the equivalent from B,C or D ranked attacks (120 damage total). S/Forbidden overpower the defense regardless of damage.
-Wooden Side:
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~Declined~ You can't put a maximum amount of damage that your puppet can withstand simply because techniques greatly vary in size and power. For some techniques, it would be unrealistic if your puppet didn't get instantly destroyed as both collide. Fix that.


(The name "Pink Secret Technique" is simply my set of puppetry techs like Sasori's "red secret techniques", Chiyo's "White Secret Techniques" or Kankuro's "Black Secret Techniques")
 
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Futon: kaze no supuringu- Wind release: Wind Spring
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 30 + 10 every turn
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user creates a slashing wind around the lower part of his hand (below the elbow). The hand can then be used to block and attack. The slashing wind makes a low-speed spiraling movement around the hand of the user (about 1,5 spins per second). The spiraling wind can be thrown to the opponent at great speed, and is strong enough to slash through granite boulders. Anything that touches the slashing wind, bounces as if it hit a spring (after the slashing effect).
Restrictions:
-Can only be taught by Necron.
Trivia:
-This jutsu is one of the signature moves of Kazekami Ryuu.

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

This is my fan weapon. McKnockout and I are working on the style you approved on his post on page 341 so they're somewhat similar.

Fūjin Kettou Ψ Fūjin's Lineage
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
This weapon was recently discovered by "Coyote" as he was traveling through the deepest reaches of the world. He came upon a ancient temple that was surrounded by a relentless wind storm that never calmed. After 2 days of surviving and traveling through this storm he finally stood inside the ancient temple that was standing on the tallest part of a mountain. As he excavated this temple he soon found that it was to pay homage to the "Wind God Fūjin". Though in this temple he found many priceless artifacts the one that was told on the ancient scriptures on the walls was of a powerful weapon capable of calling down wind storms. Many days after he entered this temple he found this Giant Fan named "Fūjin's Lineage" and the power was in his hands. When he placed his hand on this Ancient weapon the Almighty Fūjin appeared before him. Fūjin tested his prowess with the power of wind to see if he was worthy of wielding such power. Once the testing was complete Fūjin blessed him with the powers of the fan, due to the powers of the fan are only usable by a shinobi that has been blessed by the God. Being blessed gave him the will to use this power with mastery and swing it this large fan with ease. The fan is almost the size of "Coyote" and when opened it has a 5 foot span. The fan is completely back with a design that decorates the entire fan. The edges of the fan are spiked with some spikes larger than others. This fan has abilities to increase certain wind techniques as well as deflect lightning. Abilities + Restrictions listed below.

Ψ Abilities Ψ
  • Able to channel wind nature chakra through out the fan and spikes to make it able to slash through C-Rank and below Earth Techniques
  • "Wind Style: Great Break Through" gains 2 ranks in strength when Fan is with the user
  • Summoning marks that are written on the Fan allow the user to summon a variety of ninja tools when swinging the fan in turn increasing the speed of them as the fan gives the weapons more of a push then just throwing them like normal
  • Able to deflect 2 Lightning Technique B-Rank and below Lightning Techniques

Ψ Restrictions Ψ
  • Slashing ability into Earth Techniques only usable at short range | Twice per battle
  • Summoning of Ninja tools act the same as when used by person but it does not infuse them with wind chakra and it's only summoned on the users command not just when the fan is swung
  • Deflection can be done by hitting Lightning Techniques with Fan or with a special gust of wind up to mid-range | Two deflections per battle
  • All abilities except for Ninja Tool summoning counts as 1 of 3 moves per turn
  • Increases vulnerability to fire when Fan is with the user by +10
  • Only usable by Coyote

Ψ Picture of "Fūjin's Lineage" Ψ
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Summoning of weapons is similar to TenTen using her basic moves in Naruto Shippuden: UNS2 - 04:33
Declined, all forms of summoning are techniques so all the abilities of this would count towards being a move including the wind enhancement to the weapon and being able to cut through C rank and below earth techniques
Resubmitting.

I changed the summoning requirements so the summoning of weapons would be a different tech that goes along with the weapon it sefl but in regards to your statement I did say that everything else but the summoning of weapons counted as a move so it's already there about the cutting of earth.

Fūjin Kettou Ψ Fūjin's Lineage
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short - Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
This weapon was recently discovered by "Coyote" as he was traveling through the deepest reaches of the world. He came upon a ancient temple that was surrounded by a relentless wind storm that never calmed. After 2 days of surviving and traveling through this storm he finally stood inside the ancient temple that was standing on the tallest part of a mountain. As he excavated this temple he soon found that it was to pay homage to the "Wind God Fūjin". Though in this temple he found many priceless artifacts the one that was told on the ancient scriptures on the walls was of a powerful weapon capable of calling down wind storms. Many days after he entered this temple he found this Giant Fan named "Fūjin's Lineage" and the power was in his hands. When he placed his hand on this Ancient weapon the Almighty Fūjin appeared before him. Fūjin tested his prowess with the power of wind to see if he was worthy of wielding such power. Once the testing was complete Fūjin blessed him with the powers of the fan, due to the powers of the fan are only usable by a shinobi that has been blessed by the God. Being blessed gave him the will to use this power with mastery and swing it this large fan with ease. The fan is almost the size of "Coyote" and when opened it has a 5 foot span. The fan is completely back with a design that decorates the entire fan. The edges of the fan are spiked with some spikes larger than others. This fan has abilities to increase certain wind techniques as well as deflect lightning. Abilities + Restrictions listed below.

Ψ Abilities Ψ
  • Able to channel wind nature chakra through out the fan and spikes to make it able to slash through C-Rank and below Earth Techniques
  • "Wind Style: Great Break Through" gains 2 ranks in strength when Fan is with the user
  • Summoning marks that are written on the Fan allow the user to summon a variety of ninja tools when swinging the fan (different techniques)
  • Able to deflect 2 Lightning Technique B-Rank and below Lightning Techniques

Ψ Restrictions Ψ
  • Slashing ability into Earth Techniques only usable at short range | Twice per battle
  • Deflection can be done by hitting Lightning Techniques with Fan or with a special gust of wind up to mid-range | Two deflections per battle
  • All abilities counts as 1 of 3 moves per turn
  • Increases vulnerability to fire when Fan is with the user by +10
  • Only usable by Coyote

~Approved~

New Submission

Ranton: Joushou Kihou Ψ Storm Release: Rising High
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Mid - Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description:
The user will proceed to slam their fists together and when they bump both hands begin to glow and halo a bright ring. Then simultaneously with the left hand the user will face it towards the ground in any fashion (i.e. directly towards the ground, at and angle) and fire a beam of light that lifts them off the ground and with the right hand the user will aim and unleashes several beams of lights at the target as they're in the air.

Ψ Restrictions Ψ
  • Usable twice per battle
  • Unable to use Storm technique in next move
  • Only usable by "Storm Release" user
  • Only usable/trainable by Coyote

~Declined~ I'll need you to be clearer on the amount of beam you can shoot. Be aware that the higher the numbers of beams, the weaker they should be.
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

New submission:

(Kendo/Genjutsu: Genso Bachi Kusari) Kendo/Illusion Art: Illusionary Chains of Divine Punishement
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: From years of experience, a sagacious swordsman was able to combine the art of the sword with illusionary arts, giving birth to one of the most versatile but romantic way to combat. The user will hold his sword with his predominant hand and hold it in an X-axis direction in front of him. With the opposite hand, he will make a one handed handseal, then continue by placing his index finger on the flat surface area of the blade, pointing toward the opponent. The moment the user places his index finger on the blade, the enemy will be sumerged in a genjutsu in which chains will emerge from under the opponent, binding his arms and legs as he is pulled downward; the opponent will also believe that some chains emerge from the user's sides, making him believe as if the chains were an offensive mechanism. The user will notice that the opponent has been caught in genjutsu when he notices the opponent struggling with the illusionary chains. In the next step, the user will charge his sword with chakra (not at the same level as samurai's Samurai Sabre Technique) and quickly step forward, slashing the opponent two times across the chest, marking the opponent's chest with a "X", then to finish off, with the momentum that the user's body is moving from the last strike, will stab the opponent on the sternum (or if the user wishes, use the hilt of the sword to push the opponent back).
-In order for the genjutsu to be cast, the user requires visual contact (not eye contact with the enemy) and to pinpoint his location with his index finger.
-The genjutsu can be cast from mid-range, but it requires the user to run to short range in order to perform the kenjutsu technique.
-It can only be used twice per battle.
-After using this technique, the user is unable to perform genjutsu for the rest of the battle.
-The user is unable to use kenjutsu related techniques for two turn.
-Because of chakra charge, the user is only able to do 2 moves the next turn in order to recover.
-Can only be taught by Gin-San

~Declined~ This is very similar to Scorps taijutsu/genjutsu style. The only way I could approve this is if the genjutsu was submitted independently to the kenjutsu and that your kenjutsu (submitted separately) would include the genjutsu in the technique, making it count as 2 moves.
(Genjutsu: Genso Bachi Kusari) Illusion Art: Illusionary Chains of Divine Punishement
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: With a single hand, the user will make a one handed handseal, then continue by pointing his index finger toward the opponent. The moment the user positions his finger in the same axis as the opponent, the enemy will be sumerged in a genjutsu in which chains will emerge from under the opponent, binding his arms and legs as he is pulled downward; the opponent will also believe that some chains emerge from the user's sides, making him believe as if the chains were an offensive mechanism. The user will notice that the opponent has been caught in genjutsu when he notices the opponent struggling with the illusionary chains.
-In order for the genjutsu to be cast, the user requires visual contact (not eye contact with the enemy) and to pinpoint his location with his index finger.
-It can only be used twice per battle.
-If the user uses this technique twice, he will be unable to use genjutsu for the rest of the battle.
-Can only be taught by Gin-San

Bolding this would fill the entire area, to explain better, what I did was remove everything that involves kenjutsu. It maintains using a single handseal with a single hand, but if you oppose this you can make it two handed handseal.

~Approved~

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Lake Toya-Hoshikudaki
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 5 each turn is in play
Damage Points: N/A (+10 ken, +10 tai)
Description: Lake Toya is a katana with a wooden scabbard. The legend goes that the first hokage, after growing a fascination for kenjutsu, created a katana with his wood release, but the weapon was lost in time after his death. The wood used is of the highest caliber, being able to resist huge amount of strain, and highly reistant against sharp edged objects, these not being able to lay a single scratch in the wood.
The user is able to use the katana as a bokuto, landing strong blunt attacks at the opponent, or unsheat it in order to use a sharp edge. The user is also able to use both the scabbard and the sword in order to make blash-slash combinations.
The sword has some strange power up though. After being with the current user for a long time, the katana and the user will grow an unorthodox bond with each other, as many kenjutsu masters believe that swords have their own souls. The user, by channeling chakra into the sword (regardless of being sheated or not), he/she gains +10 boost in kenjutsu and taijutsu, but the user most maintain adding chakra into the sword in order to work. The reason of this strange boost, is becuase when the chakra channelizes into the sword, the sword makes the chakra richer and transmits it into the user's muscles and other areas in the body, making the user stronger and faster, and also sharpening his/her reflexes.
-This sword can only be used by Gin-San
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~Pending~ I'll need you to restrict the ability to boost your speed and strength. Do whatever you judge right, but it must be restricted.

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(Samurai Guntou Yoroi) Samurai Sabre Armor
Rank: S
Type: Defensive
Range: Self
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: After years of training and meditation, an old samurai master was able to furtherly develop the samurai sabre technique, being able to not only channelize chakra into the weapons, but also into the user's body. He came into the conclusion that both the sword and the user are a single being, thus the chakra from the Samurai Sabre Technique could be able to be channelized over the entire body. By concentrating a large amount of chakra in the blade and spreading it, the user is able to coat himself with the finest chakra armor, creating an armor two inches in width, though because of it's intangible form it does not affect the user's movements. The sword loses the propieties that it initally gains by Samurai Sabre Technique and its transfered onto the user, but the user cannot furtherly control the chakra to make it offensive in anyway.
-In order to use this technique, the user most have Samurai Sabre Techinique activated beforehand.
-It can only be used two times per battle
-The user is able to defend himself against S-rank ninjutsu and below
-The user cannot defend against kenjutsu/taijutsu attacks with this armor, the attacks most solely be chakra based with not physical body in order to be defend (Cannot defend against earth and water).
-This technique can defend against F-rank ninjutsu depending on the type of attack. For example, unfocused attacks will not attack the armor in a single point, but all over the body. The user is able to defend against the attack, but his armor will be deactivated automatically. The user will receive half of the damage possible and will lose balance for one turn.
-In order to use this, the user requires a sword or any object in which he can channelize chakra through.
-Because of the difficulty of this technique, the user requires to be Sannin and above in order to use this jutsu.
-After this technique is used, the user cannot use higher than S-rank for two turns.
-This can only be used by samurais
-Can only be taught by Gin-San

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist. No matter how you word it, it doesn't change the fact that the raw principle behind this technique already exist.
 
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Resubmit

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Name: (Kuchiyose no Jutsu: Alder - Saigo Bouhatie Ousama) Alder - The last mole king
Type: Offense/Defense
Rank: S
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Description: To summon him, one must perform the summoning ritual. Alder is one of the few great moles left. He has hidden from the humans for over 100 years. He has since gained great wisdom in all aspects from watching ninjas fight. He is adept in knowing how to both attack and defend against attacks. During that time, he has even learnt how to speak English, although not perfect, it is enough to hold a conversation. Because he is a mole, he has gained the ability to use earth techniques in battle. Also, because of the type of mole he is, he naturally produces a toxin in his saliva. Once he bites something, the saliva will start to take affect, slowly paralyzing his opponent where he was bitten though this can only be used once per battle counting as a turn. He can also bury underground to avoid attacks, though this counts as one of the three moves a turn. Helping him avoid the opponent and provide a counter attack with his sharp claws and teeth. This was used to help him defeat his prey. He is the size of gamabunta.
Note: Once he is summoned, he can only stay on the field 4 turns, and can only be summoned once a battle.
Note: He can use up to A rank earth jutsu, though it counts as 1 of your 3 moves.
Note: Can only be taught by Dragonfly X
Note: Must have signed the Mole contract

Also, to the paralysing saliva, it is based on the european mole, that has a thing in it's saliva used to paralyze earthworms, link here - Though if you don't want it in there, feel free to take it out.


~Declined~ When re-submitting/editing jutsus, you need to put the added/altered part in bold. If you only took out part of your jutsu, you need to mention what was taken away.
 
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(fan doki) fan wrath
Type: Mode
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A [+10 to wind techs]
Description: fan wrath is a fighting style which uses as the name suggest a fan it combines the fan as a weapon and as a catalyst for fuuton jutsu while in this mode you can only use fuuton jutsu and fan doki jutsu [which will be fan related moves and fuuton] the upside to this is most fuuton atacks will no long require handseals and you gain a ten point boost to wind techs fan wrath is primarly mid range fighting style that generally has the user useing the fan as a blunt weapon to push the opponent into mid range if they are short so they can deal devestating fuuton jutsu this fighting style requires the user to adept in weapon use as well as fuuton jutsu
-can only be traind be battleandthebad and heavens blade
-last 4 turns
-can be entered once in a match
-can be left at any time
-cant use fuuton jutsu the next turn after you leave this mode and on the second turn after deactivation futon jutsu do 10 less damage
-cant use any other elements besides fuuton while in this mode

Approved


(Kuchiyose: kumo) summoning: clouds
Type: Summoning
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: the user summons clouds from the leoliguar home village these clouds change the environment allowing the leoliguar summons to use a special techneque that normally they can only use in there village each tech is different depending on the personallity of the leoliguar
-clouds stay on the field until destroyed
-can only be used once per match
-must have signed leoliguar contract

[before you decline this jutsu please keep this in mind when naruto went to the toads village he asked why he couldnt just keep some of the oil on him so he could go into SM anytime and grampa toad said that outside there environment it would evaporate so the basis of my jutsu is solid in my opion also when i say enviroment i dont mean the field will change more like a the air will change slightly not enough for people to notice except maybe the inuzuka clan cause they have super smell]

Declined, do not resubmit
NOTE: I was given permission to resubmit these on battleandthebads behalf

(predator mo-do) predator mode
Type: Mode
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: this mode can only be entered while (Kuchiyose: kumo) summoning: clouds is in play the user absorbs the atomshere from the leoliguars home and enters this mode this atlers the users the senses giving them hightened vision, smell, hearing, and a speed boost this also allows the user to use all leoliguar kata moves
-last 4 turns
-can only be entered once
-must have signed leoliguar contract and been given permission by heavens blade
-once you leave this mode you are exhausted and can only use 2 jutsu per turn for the next two turns

Declined, do not resubmit
(fan doki: kyo shotto) fan wrath: big shot
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: while in fan wrath mode the user will swing there fan creating a large ball of wind this ball is slow moving but extremely durable once the ball reaches mid range the ball turns into hundreds of small balls of wind (bout the size of a marble) these balls are launched in a 180 degree radius and are very fast moving
-can only be used in fan wrath mode
-can only be used twice per battle
-can only be taught by heavens blade

(fan doki: tsubame gaten) fan wrath: swallows assent
Type:Attack
Rank: A
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: one of the few long range fan wrath moves the user jumps into the air swings there fan shooting a large but invisable amount of fuuton chakra to the the ground short range from them then the fuuton chakra travels underneath the ground and rises from underneath the opponent in the form of a large visable swallow (while the fuuton is invisable it still does make a visable hole in the ground)
-the fuuton can be seen by doujutsu
-can only be used in fan wrath mode
-can only be used 3 times be match
-can only be taught by heavens blade

~Both Pending~ You really need to put the "Fan Warth Mode" in spoilers when submitting related customs. Otherwise I can't be sure of what can and can't be done. Resubmit.

(leoliguar kata: otakebi za predator) leoliguar style: roar of the predator
Type: Supplementry
Rank: S
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: the leoliguar lets out a loud roar and places the opponent into a deep genjutsu in the genjutsu the opponent believes they have shrunk down to the size of a mouse and is then eaten by the leoliguar
-the leoliguar can't preform anymore leoliguar kata for the remander of the time its on the field (effect doesnt carry over if they are resummoned later)
-can only be used once per match (meaning even if you bring out a different one they cant use it as well)

~Declined~ Sound jutsus are restricted to sound users. I'm almost positive you didn't receive such training. If I'm wrong contact me and I'll re-check this one.
 
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(Sesshomaru) Sesshomaru
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80 (from hissing)
Description: User summons Sesshomaru, King Shinobu’s head adviser. Sesshomaru is one of the few beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. He stands 30ft tall with a horn extending another 10ft from his head. Sesshomaru also has an 8ft spike that rises from each shoulder, and a heavily armored exoskeleton that protects him from normal weapons and A-rank and below techniques of any nature (only 2). Sesshomaru has the nature affinities of lightning and wind them, up to S-rank. He also is among the strongest beetles of Mt. Gen able to lift 850 times his body weight. Sesshomaru has a special ability to release a loud hissing sound in a specific direction, that is deafening and debilitating to anyone/anything in its path (up to mid-range). Upon hearing this, the opponent(s) muscles become weak and fall to the ground unable to move for a short time (1 turn).
- Can only be summoned once per battle
- Only last 4 turns
- Hissing can only be used 2 times per battle
- Paralysis only last 1 turn
-The user can be caught in the hissing (if applicable)
- Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
- Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract of 1 months
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~Declined~ OP. 1 element only. 850 times his weight would make him several times stronger then someone opening all eight gates, take that out completely. No sound jutsu from a summon. Your restrictions are a mess, you say you can summon him once but he can be used 2 times per battle?
850 times his weight would make him several times stronger then someone opening all eight gates, take that out completely. No sound jutsu from a summon.
These two things are things that these bugs can do in real life...and according to you our summoning can do things that they can do in real life, also these summonings are 30+ft tall so they would be stronger then a 8 gates release anyway, wouldn't it?


Your restrictions are a mess, you say you can summon him once but he can be used 2 times per battle?
???? I'm not sure what you read, but I said the hissing could be done twice not summon him twice....it is bolded and underlined below


(Sesshomaru) Sesshomaru
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80 (from hissing)
Description: User summons Sesshomaru, King Shinobu’s head adviser. Sesshomaru is one of the few beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. He stands 30ft tall with a horn extending another 10ft from his head. Sesshomaru also has an 8ft spike that rises from each shoulder, and a heavily armored exoskeleton that protects him from normal weapons and A-rank and below techniques of any nature (only 2). Sesshomaru has the nature affinities of lightning and wind it up to S-rank. He also is the 2nd strongest beetle of Mt. Gen able to lift 850 times his body weight. Sesshomaru has a special ability to release a loud hissing sound in a specific direction, that is deafening and debilitating to anyone/anything in its path (up to mid-range). Upon hearing this, the opponent(s) muscles become weak and fall to the ground unable to move for a short time (1 turn).
- Can only be summoned once per battle
- Only last 4 turns
- Hissing can only be used 2 times per battle
- Paralysis only last 1 turn
-The user can be caught in the hissing (if applicable)
- Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
- Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 2 months
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~Declined~ I've discussed this with other staff members and if you can't use sound techniques (if you weren't train in them), then obviously your summon shouldn't be allowed to. Because of it's special nature, it would be like allowing people to have summons that can use KG that they don't possess.


(Sachiko) Sachiko
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user summons Sachiko to the field. Sachiko is one of the few beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. She stands 30ft tall, and unlike most female rhinoceros beetles that don’t have horns, she has two 10ft horns extending outward 7ft, and upward 3ft, from her head. Sachiko also has 3ft spikes that line her body, and a heavily armored exoskeleton that protects her from normal weapons. Even though her name means child of happiness, she is anything but, she, being the only female with horns, feels she has to be just as tough as the males and she is one of the strongest beetle of Mt. Gen able to lift 840 times her body weight, she also wields the horn (15ft) of her fallen father as a sword (pictured below/bottom pic top horn). She has the nature affinity of lightning using it up to S-rank. Sachiko has a special ability to shead her skin/exoskeleton at will and use it as a shield or a decoy.

- Can only be summoned once per battle
- Only last 4 turns
- Sheaded skin can only withstand 2 A-rank attacks
- Shedding only last 2 turn
- Shedding only works in a tall dense area (woods, forest…etc)
- Can only shed once per battle
- Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
- Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract of 1 months
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~Declined~ A 10ft horn that stands out 7th and 3 ft? How is that even possible ~__~. Get your math right. Same as above for the raw strength. Mention that every move she does counts toward yours. Make it B-rank for the Skin.
~Declined~ A 10ft horn that stands out 7th and 3 ft? How is that even possible ~__~. Get your math right. Same as above for the raw strength. Mention that every move she does counts toward yours. Make it B-rank for the Skin.
??? Umm I guess I need to go back to 1st grade and re-learn my math but I thought 7+3=10 maybe I need to go to your school and learn your way and "get my math right"....I said it was 10ft long, but its 7ft outward and 3ft upward (look at the pic) and that is still 10ft long (bolded and underlined below)

(Sachiko) Sachiko
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user summons Sachiko to the field. Sachiko is one of the few beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. She stands 30ft tall, and unlike most female rhinoceros beetles that don’t have horns, she has two 10ft horns extending outward 7ft, and upward 3ft, from her head. Sachiko also has 3ft spikes that line her body, and a heavily armored exoskeleton that protects her from normal weapons. Even though her name means child of happiness, she is anything but, she, being the only female with horns, feels she has to be just as tough as the males and she is the 3rd strongest beetle of Mt. Gen able to lift 840 times her body weight, she also wields the horn (15ft) of her fallen father as a sword (pictured below/bottom pic top horn). She has the nature affinity of lightning using it up to S-rank. Sachiko has a special ability to shead her skin/exoskeleton at will and use it as a shield or a decoy.

- Can only be summoned once per battle
- Only last 4 turns
- Sheaded skin can only withstand 2 B-rank attacks
- Shedding only last 2 turn
- Shedding only works in a tall dense area (woods, forest…etc)
- Can only shed once per battle and it counts towards the user's 3 moves
- Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
- Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 1 month
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~Approved~Yes, get your math right :p the length of the horn would be the square root of the sum of both squared cathetus. It's the pythagorean theorem:

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So the real value is 7.615, however that doesn't matter now. You wanted it to be 10ft, so be it ^_^



(Kabutomushibosu: Kingu Shinobu)The Rhinoceros Beetle Boss: King Shinobu
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A
Description: The user summons the King of Mt. Gen. Lord Shinobu is one of only five beetles of Mt. Gen that stands in a humanoid from. King Shinobu stands 40ft tall, with a horn extending another 10ft from his head. Shinobu hands are tipped with claws, and he has wings extending from his back for flight. Being king, Shinobu is the strongest of all the Mt. Gen beetle. He has the nature affinitie of wind using it up to S-rank. His special ability is to summon 2 of his followers (at once) to aid him in battle and reverse summon the user (within the battlefield only).
- Can only be summoned once per battle
- Only last 4 turns
- Can only summon 2 followers once per battle(counts as one of the user 3 moves per turn)
- Can only reverse summon once per battle
- Can’t summon any other summoning after Shinobu is dispelled
- Must sign the Rhinoceros Beetle contract
- Must have signed the Rhinoceros Beetle contract for 3 months
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~Declined~ The reverse-summoning is actually an independent custom so you can't include it in your technique (it was already created).
 
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Summoning animal:saker falcon
Basic info:saker falcon's have a very long range of vision and a short beak. They have powerful claws and they dive at its prey at a speed of 200 mph. They are ferocious hunters. It often attack preys which are bigger than it self.some of the animals which are considered as preys of saker falcon are weasels,chipmunks,rat,mice and any living thing which is smaller than saker falcon but not poisonus reptiles. They have white feathers with black and brown dots on them.
scroll owner:yanto
other users who have signed the contract:N/A
summoning boss if existing:Valcot
Other animals tied to the contract:Avril

summoning technique Valcot
(kuchiyose no jutsu valcot)

rank:up to A
type:attack
range:long range
chakra cost:60
damage cost:60
Descriptions:The user perform the hand seals ox *goat*ox
and bites the tumb and slam his hand on the ground.by then Valcot appear from the ground. It can carry two people on its back. Valcot has a normal speed of 175 mph but when uses its dive attack it has a speed of 211 mph . It can also spin while in dive attack which also gives it an increased speed of 225mph.(23 feet long,50 feet wingspan) It can perform wind jutsus upto A rank and can defend/dodge against water jutsus upto B rank by cutting through it with dive attack.

summoning technique Avril
(kuchiyose no jutsu Avril)

rank:up to B
type:attack range:long/mid range
chakra cost:50
damage cost:N/A
Descriptions:The user perform the hand seals cow *tiger*ox
and bites the tumb and slam his hand on the ground.by then Avril will appear from the ground. It can carry 1 person on its back.(16 feet long,..45 feet long wingspan) Avril has a normal speed of 165 mph but when uses its dive attack it has a speed of 199.7 mph . It can also spin while diving. It can perform wind jutsus upto B rank and can defend/dodge against water(C rank),lightning(B rank) jutsus
♦*both*can only be taught by yanto
♦*both*can only summoned once a battel
♦*both*can use the dive attack 5 times in a battel
♦*both*if it spins while the dive attack it can only use it twice a battel.after that it gets vulnerable and also gets dizzy which means you should reverse summon it.
Note:in case you may get confused about the speed


~All Declined~ I am the current owner of the Falcon contract.
 
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(Raiton: ketteiteki senkou) Lightning Style: Final Flash
Rank: S
Type: Attack/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User draws his hands back and gathers up all of his raiton chakra. Then, he thrusts his palms forward and discharges a massive amounts of raiton chakra into his palms creating two lighting bolts in each palm. The user releases the bolts into lightning beams that swirl together, the beam also gives off raiton, 2 meters around the beam thus the opponent can not simply dodge the attack. This whole jutsu takes 3 seconds to perform.
-usable three times in a fight
-Can only be taught by Piccolosan
Declined, needs more restrictions
(Raiton: ketteiteki senkou) Lightning Style: Final Flash
Rank: S
Type: Attack/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User draws his hands back and gathers up all of his raiton chakra. Then, he thrusts his palms forward and discharges a massive amounts of raiton chakra into his palms creating two lighting bolts in each palm. The user releases the bolts into lightning beams that swirl together, the beam also gives off raiton, 2 meters around the beam thus the opponent can not simply dodge the attack. This whole jutsu takes 3 seconds to perform.
-usable three times in a fight
-Can not use S-rank lightning jutsu in same turn and next
-Can only be taught by Piccolosan

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist. You can keep the name and all, but the description need to be changed.
 
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(Doton: Doton chuuseki )- Earth Release: Hell shots
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Range: Short-Long
Description: The user send in chakra into the ground below him and then using shape manipulation,he will create four pillars the size of 5 meters and 1 meter wide and then once he creates it he can freely launch into a enemy.
Note:Can be used 2 times per battle
Note:Can only create four pillars or more
Note:No earth release for a turn.

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

[Doton:Tsuin hei kasui ] Earth release:Twin wall spikes
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will perform two handseals and create two walls which is spiked on the side and it will be create in front of and behind the opponent,which will be 7 meters tall and 5 meters wide which then be sent to slam onto the enemy causing him to crushed and stabbed.
Note:Can be used twice per battle.
Note:No earth above A rank for the next turn.

~Declined~ Not only do many similar techniques already exist, but there's a cannon one almost identical.

(Raiton: Kugi)- Lightning Release: The Fingernails
Rank: B
Type: Attack
Chakra: 25
Damage: 40
Range: Short-Long
Description: The user focusses lightning chakra into his fingernails.Then once the lightning chakra is in place the use can then release the lightning chakra into the enemy once he has physical contact with the enemy causing the enemy to get shocked.Also the lightning chakra causes more damage when the user scratches or scraps the opponent.
Note:Can be used 2 times per battle
Note:Once shocked the enemy can't move for a turn.
Note:No lightning for a turn.

~Declined~ How can the range be Long if you need to make contact with the opponent? Also, this is extremely similar to a chidori nagashi variation (which are prohibited because there's simply too many). It's not because it's being emanated from your nails that it's not identical to chidori. It could come from your wrist joint it wouldn't matter, as long as the abilities and effects are the same.
 
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(Mushi Jizõ) Bug Buddha
Type:Weapon
Range:Short
Rank:S
Chakra Cost:40
Chakra Damage:80
Description:
The Mushi Jizõ was forged by Kurotsuchi Mayuri during his absence, it's a specially made sword with the blade shaped in a trident-form with a buddha face at the bottom, the Mushi Jizõ has several openings in the blade, there are tiny holes on each of the three tips and small gaps in both eyes of the buddha's face. This sword is primarily used to store Kikaichu bugs inside of it, allowing the wielder to release the bugs at will for a special attack. Once the wielder stabs his opponent he releases several A-Rank bugs from the tips which enter the opponents body as they begin sucking them dry of chakra from the inside, damaging their organs. Also, if the opponent narrowly evades a slash from the Mushi Jizõ, the wielder can release several B-Rank bugs from the eyes of the blade which then cling onto the opponent's skin, sucking out their chakra. If bugs are stored in the sword they will attack anyone other then the owner who wields the Mushi Jizõ.
*Note: The Mushi Jizõ can only be wielded by Tybone/anyone with permission.
*Note: The ability is only useable by Aburame clan members.
*Note: The wielder is only able to release bugs from the sword two times per battle.
*Note: When either ability of the sword is used, it counts as a move of the user.

~Approved~
 
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Illusion Technique: Za Shourai Tokai sho Rosuto kihakus [The futuristic City of Many Lost Souls]
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short/Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The User claps his hands once, releasing his chakra in mass, Which spreads throughout the terrain quickly, it disrupts the senses of the opponent, making him/her visualize a city, the city is built in a faded manner, meaning, buildings and all features just begin fading in to seem as reality, this is a very quick process, thus in little time, the opponent finds him/herself in the center of a City. This genjutsu affects three of the five senses in the opponent's body, tricking his/her mind, toying with their mental state.
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Sense of Hearing:The genjutsu alters the opponents hearing ability, with this, the opponent experiences hearing as people having conversations etc.
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Sense of Sight:The opponent sees all that is happening around him,and that only, he would not be able to see characteristics of the terrain he was on [before the genjutsu], and so, he can only rely on memory to not walk straight of a cliff [in reality] while he thinks he is walking on a road [in genjutsu] etc.
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Sense of Touch/Feeling:The genjutsu alters the opponent's sense of touch also, this being, for example, if he touches a building, his hand would react to being on a solid, he wouldn't just phase [slip] through. If the opponent somehow happens to be injured in the genjutsu [for example, he trip and fell on a rock] He would feel the actual pain as if this is reality.
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With those senses altered, the Opponent is trapped in a virtual world which seems realistic. Common sense of the opponent can give hints to how this is a genjutsu, leading them to be able to escape. The user is also projected in this genjutsu, though he cannot perform ninjutsu, as well as the opponent [while in the genjutsu]. Though they can take action in hand to hand combat/taijutsu, if the user is hurt enough, the genjutsu ends. The genjutsu works by responding to the opponent's mind, meaning, If the opponent asks strangers questions, they will most likely answer depending on the questions, though questions such as "Is this a Genjutsu?" etc. will be ignored. If trapped in the genjutsu, the opponent cannot just stab himself to test if it is a genjutsu or not, his/her mind needs solid proof that it is a genjutsu so that his respond may break him free. If the opponent is killed in the genjutsu [such as being murdered by a robber], the mental state is disrupted, enough to release him from the technique, though, the opponent will be in great shock, and will not be immediately recovered from mental breakdown which can affect his spead and thinking ability.

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Can last up to 3 turns [both user and opponent in genjutsu].
Covers the entire terrain [3 ranges].
Usable once per battle.
No Genjutsu for the next 8 turns.
||Declined|| I'm not very sure of whole mental breakdown after-effect.
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Illusion Technique: Za Shourai Tokai sho Rosuto kihakus [The futuristic City of Many Lost Souls]
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short/Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The User claps his hands once, releasing his chakra in mass, Which spreads throughout the terrain quickly, it disrupts the senses of the opponent, making him/her visualize a city, the city is built in a faded manner, meaning, buildings and all features just begin fading in to seem as reality, this is a very quick process, thus in little time, the opponent finds him/herself in the center of a City. This genjutsu affects the five senses in the opponent's body, tricking his/her mind, toying with their mental state.
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Sense of Hearing:The genjutsu alters the opponents hearing ability, with this, the opponent experiences hearing as people having conversations etc.
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Sense of Sight:The opponent sees all that is happening around him,and that only, he would not be able to see characteristics of the terrain he was on [before the genjutsu], and so, he can only rely on memory to not walk straight of a cliff [in reality] while he thinks he is walking on a road [in genjutsu] etc.
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Sense of Touch/Feeling:The genjutsu alters the opponent's sense of touch also, this being, for example, if he touches a building, his hand would react to being on a solid, he wouldn't just phase [slip] through. If the opponent somehow happens to be injured in the genjutsu [for example, he trip and fell on a rock] He would feel the actual pain as if this is reality.

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Sense of Smell:The genjutsu affects the sense of smell, as in a city, there will be different scents, eg. passing a bakery, the user will be able to smell this scent.

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Sense of TasteThis is another sense affected by the genjutsu, for example. If the opponent is tempted enough and actually gets something to eat, his sense of taste will cooperate to make him experience tasting/ eating.
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With those senses altered, the Opponent is trapped in a virtual world which seems realistic. Common sense of the opponent can give hints to how this is a genjutsu, leading them to be able to escape. The user is also projected in this genjutsu as well as the opponent, they can both perform ninjutsu. If the user is hurt enough, the genjutsu ends. The genjutsu works by responding to the opponent's mind, meaning, If the opponent asks strangers questions, they will most likely answer depending on the questions. If trapped in the genjutsu, the opponent cannot just stab himself to test if it is a genjutsu or not, his/her mind needs solid proof that it is a genjutsu so that his response may break him free. If the opponent is killed in the genjutsu [such as being murdered by a robber], the mental state is disrupted, enough to release him from the technique, though, the opponent will be in great shock, this will trigger dizziness for an entire turn [of the opponent]

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NOTES:
Can last up to 3 turns [both user and opponent in genjutsu].
Covers the entire terrain [3 ranges].
Usable once per battle.
✗The user and opponent can only perform A rank and lower techniques while in the genjutsu.
No Genjutsu for the next 6 turns.

~Declined~ First of all, no need to make such a long jutsu for something that is obvious. Just saying you create a city in which the opponent was completely submerged would've been enough. Secondly, the abilities of this technique are ignoring the fundamentals of a genjutsu (check the part I bolded). Since you're not wielding a Mangekyo Sharingan or don't have an advance doujutsu bio (Second Mizukage for example)(correct me if I'm wrong btw), then there's no way for you to create such a genjutsu that defies the normal rules. The rest of the jutsu was fine.

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Doton/Raiton| Kishou Tsuchi Rippous: Doki za Erekutorikku [Earth/Lightning Release|Rising Earth Cubes: Wrath of Electrocution]
Type: Attack
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: With a chain of 4 handseals, Dog, Ox, Snake and Tiger, the user with clasp his hands, keeping his hands clasped, one hundred cubes will rise from the Earth, each cube has blue glowing lines running on them. These cubes are the height of a regular human body [and as cubes, all sides are equal]. They all rise into the air, from solid earth, they my rise, crumbling cliffs, rise out of lakes and rivers [the seabed] Each cube is at a different location, some may hover a meter above the ground, some may be 100 meters in the air, some 50 etc. They are scattered, and are in no orderly manner, once all the cubes have settled [doesn't take long], an electrical surge/charge will be released, the electrical charge is released from all the cubes, everywhere within Mid and Long Range is in contact with the electricity. Even if a few of the cubes are destroyed, it cannot stop the trigger of the jutsu, the Lightning will still be activated.
NOTES
Usable once per Battle.
Hands must stay clasped during the jutsu.
User cannot perform S rank lightning for the next turn.
Can only be taught by Drizzy

~Declined~ Simply OP. You didn't precise anything about the actual position of the cubes, hence being vague enough to place them to your advantage on the field. Even if your opponent tries to evade or counter you can simply say he forgot one or two behind him. This is ridiculous. Also, for you to keep so much lightning chakra within the earth cubes goes against the very principle of strength and weaknesses of the elements. Lastly, it's impossible for you to mold two chakra at once if you didn't receive yin yang training.

Crow Contract:

(Karasu Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Terra) - Crow Summoning Technique:Terra
Type: Summoning
Rank: S rank
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user performs 3 handseals, with the last handseal being of the Tiger, he summons Terra, a majestic female Crow. Terra is the younger sister of Black, the Boss of Crows. The is about the same size as Pain's Summoning Bird. Terra spends most of her time at Mt. Karasu [Land of Crows] as she enjoys resting. Terra has a special ability, massive strength and chakra, she also has the ability to perform Earth techniques up to S Rank without using handseals. Terra can perform all Earth techniques while in mid air, she does this by using a special technique. As she is summoned, with a flap of her wings, some feathers will fall to the ground, these feathers act as chakra recievers for doton, while in the air, Terra sends the chakra to the feathers, the feathers then release the chakra, which then utilizes the Earth for whatever technique. By utilizing her strength and chakra, she can fly at intense speeds with her strong wings, boosting herself with chakra, equal to Rock Lee without his weights, she does this by channeling chakra to her wings, and using her natural strength to alter her speed. Terra is also great for her Beak Charge, with her great speed, massive force and earth chakra, by thrusting her Beak into the enemy, she can crush bones and cause injuries, whenever Terra charges into the ground with her beak, a tremor is triggered which can be felt up to mid range. With her strength, she can smash Earth techniques B rank and lower,.
NOTES
Beak Charge usable only three times per battle.
Earth Smash is usable three times per battle.
Feathers must be on the ground to receive and spread the chakra.
Can only be taught by Drizzy.
Must be a signer of the Crow Contract to use this technique.
Can only be summoned once per battle.

~Declined~ Using feathers as chakra receivers to perform earth techniques tells me you didn't understand how jutsus are performed. You need to mold your chakra with hand seals in order to perform a technique. Even if you send you chakra to the feather, please explain to me how it will mold it to perform earth techniques?
 
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