Nothing Is What It Seems Chapter 16
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Yes, but you can take Gabriel's mother away from him, and pain him so much as you've done?
I thought I was your Gabriel...is this what you want to do to me...cause me pain? :T_T: Why do you hate me sensei :T_T: I promise I'll be better, I'll make your proud anything :T_T:
lol it's not about hating love. Gabriel is going through a terrible moment in his life, and he's hurt. However this dramatic change is what I need for things to work. Trust me it's for a good reason. However I couldn't be as cruel as to leave him in the world with nothing, which is why I put the twist of Michael and Anilla....yeah I will go into that more on the last chapter. Gabriel is strong and will over come this great tragedy. He reminds me of you because he's able to over come the events in his life that try to keep him down. As the author of this story, I know everything about Gabriel and you mind me so much of him. <3 If anything it's a compliment love
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And you're like my Jiraiya-sensei...only in female form, and you're not perverted, and you're wiser, and kinder, and a better writerlol it's not about hating love. Gabriel is going through a terrible moment in his life, and he's hurt. However this dramatic change is what I need for things to work. Trust me it's for a good reason. However I couldn't be as cruel as to leave him in the world with nothing, which is why I put the twist of Michael and Anilla....yeah I will go into that more on the last chapter. Gabriel is strong and will over come this great tragedy. He reminds me of you because he's able to over come the events in his life that try to keep him down. As the author of this story, I know everything about Gabriel and you mind me so much of him. <3 If anything it's a compliment love
And don't just speed by that like you didn't just say what you just said, what happened with the whole Michale thing, where did that spring from?!
lol just because I'm not a perverted writer on the base doesn't mean I'm not a perverted writerAnd you're like my Jiraiya-sensei...only in female form, and you're not perverted, and you're wiser, and kinder, and a better writer
And don't just speed by that like you didn't just say what you just said, what happened with the whole Michale thing, where did that spring from?!
Lol you will just have to wait, though it's as obvious as I said it was.
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Sensei being a perverted writer O_O *thinks about sensei writing erotic Fanfictions*lol just because I'm not a perverted writer on the base doesn't mean I'm not a perverted writer
:rofl: trust me I've done a fewSensei being a perverted writer O_O *thinks about sensei writing erotic Fanfictions*
(not ffs)Like a love story and then just dived right into an intimate scene.
I think I have covered all genre's of writing to be honest lol
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I'm not as well rounded as you sensei, which is why I'm not as good a writer as you:rofl: trust me I've done a few
Like a love story and then just dived right into an intimate scene.
I think I have covered all genre's of writing to be honest lol
I need your teachings.You are a great writer Reborn!I'm not as well rounded as you sensei, which is why I'm not as good a writer as you
How many times must I tell you something that you refuse to see?
I'm always here for you, just ask!
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I didn't say I was bad...I just said I wasn't as well rounded in the things I write...but you assumed I meant bad, which must mean you think I'm bad :T_T:You are a great writer Reborn!
How many times must I tell you something that you refuse to see?
I'm always here for you, just ask!
No I never said bad either.
I just think you don't give yourself enough credit!
You are a GREAT writer and probably can be well rounded if you sat down and actually did stories in that certain genre
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Tank you wease:
I'm going to take a nap and wake up to do some writing and read Netsui-chan's FFs, she's kinda like a mini sensei, you should be her sensei too and she'll become like your one day and surpass me :T_T:
wease: I'm going to take a nap and wake up to do some writing and read Netsui-chan's FFs, she's kinda like a mini sensei, you should be her sensei too and she'll become like your one day and surpass me :T_T:
Firstly, I want to say awesome job sensei :T_T:
Okay, what I loved most is the tension and pain that was being shared between Elizabeth and Vincent, it was relatively easy to feel what they were feeling as they watched each others lives almost end on several occasions. I didn't have to force myself to try and feel what they were feeling, it was all natural.
I also love how I was pulled in from the very start, and remained sucked in to the end. The fighting was epic and brilliant, and it was timed so perfectly with the dialogue, the fight flowed nicely and I didn't feel like it was being cut short by conversation.
Every time I read your fighting scenes, it feel just like I'm playing a video game. That sudden since of urgency you get when your character is about to be hit with a crucial, to the need to protect someone that your character has been building a relationship with throughout the entire game. I can feel it all.
Simply put, I loved this chapter
Okay, what I loved most is the tension and pain that was being shared between Elizabeth and Vincent, it was relatively easy to feel what they were feeling as they watched each others lives almost end on several occasions. I didn't have to force myself to try and feel what they were feeling, it was all natural.
I also love how I was pulled in from the very start, and remained sucked in to the end. The fighting was epic and brilliant, and it was timed so perfectly with the dialogue, the fight flowed nicely and I didn't feel like it was being cut short by conversation.
Every time I read your fighting scenes, it feel just like I'm playing a video game. That sudden since of urgency you get when your character is about to be hit with a crucial, to the need to protect someone that your character has been building a relationship with throughout the entire game. I can feel it all.
Simply put, I loved this chapter
Firstly, I want to say awesome job sensei :T_T:
Okay, what I loved most is the tension and pain that was being shared between Elizabeth and Vincent, it was relatively easy to feel what they were feeling as they watched each others lives almost end on several occasions. I didn't have to force myself to try and feel what they were feeling, it was all natural.
I also love how I was pulled in from the very start, and remained sucked in to the end. The fighting was epic and brilliant, and it was timed so perfectly with the dialogue, the fight flowed nicely and I didn't feel like it was being cut short by conversation.
Every time I read your fighting scenes, it feel just like I'm playing a video game. That sudden since of urgency you get when your character is about to be hit with a crucial, to the need to protect someone that your character has been building a relationship with throughout the entire game. I can feel it all.
Simply put, I loved this chapter
ty ^_^ That means a lot to me! I'm so glad you liked it! I switched up a few things on you when I was editing, but it was all for the best Besides what kind of story would it be if Vincent didn't fight! I know what you mean though, the bond Vincent and Elizabeth share is strong, even when words aren't expressed. Just a simple gaze is like they can read each other's mind. Vincent is so awesome! @Reborn, I still have to check hers out!
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ty ^_^ this chapter I had my writing partner look over it for errors and such. Let's just say he didn't like me being lazy and demanded this xd I love you Bod<3 'd it
you were right ! it's great ! +rep
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ty ^_^ this chapter I had my writing partner look over it for errors and such. Let's just say he didn't like me being lazy and demanded this xd I love you Bod
then he'll just HATE me ! anytime<3lol I meant with my works.
When you write the series I have and then decide to slack off....>.>
Never a good thing lol
Maybe I set the bar too high xd
I enjoy your feed back, ty again for leaving it