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If you read no other chapter of mine, at least read this one in it's entirty, this is probably my best and most important chapter in the entire series.

Chapter 10: Transition: Descent into Darkness​

In a classroom of nearly fifty children, cheerful laughter and talking fills the room. The children enjoy themselves, until suddenly the blackboard at the front of the class explodes and a large ball of flames heads straight for the children. As the giant ball of fire heads towards them, it shapes itself into the face of a demon and lets out a demonic laugh. The children all yell and close their eyes. The moment they open them they find Tsubaki standing at the front of the class, with everything perfectly fine.

Tsubaki “Excellent job Ino, extra credit for you”

The others look over at Ino who simply sits at her desk reading a book, seemingly ignoring her instructor's compliment. The students then realize that they were caught in a genjutsu, cast by Tsubaki.

Tsubaki “As for the rest of you, you should have been studying at your desks instead of talking, and you should have been able to defend against that technique”

Ko “That's not fair sensei! You're the strongest genjutsu user in the whole village, even better then those Uchihas”

Kai “Hey don't insult my clan you idiot”

Ko “I'm not, I'm just saying sensei is better”

Tsubaki “That's enough you two. It doesn't matter how skilled I am in genjutsu, the fact of the matter is that jutsu the most basic level technique, genin level. Most of you are supposed to be graduating this year, and you're going to be tested on that specific jutsu. If you can't repel a simple D-ranked technique then how are you ever going to become real shinobi?”

Ino “She didn't even sneak in, she walked in the room and even made the seal for the jutsu, you idiots were too busy talking to even notice. If you had you would've been prepared”

Ko “Shut up Ino”

Tsubaki “One of your graduation requirements is going to be, basic defense against genjutsu. I already told you which jutsu I plan on using for the exams, you should take that into account.”

Shizuko “Hey Hina, you didn't fall for the jutsu, why didn't you tell sensei?”

Hina “(quietly) It's not really a big deal...”

Neji “Let her alone she never speaks up for herself”

Shizuko “Neji she's your cousin why can't you ever be nice to her”

Neji “It's not my job to be nice to her, it's to protect her and to make sure she becomes strong. If she doesn't want to speak up for herself then leave her be, she'll get it eventually”

Shizuko “Well why didn't you say anything, the technique didn't affect you either”

Neji “I don't need to say anything, who am I trying to impress. Before you say anything else, I choose not to say anything because I don't care, Hina doesn't want to draw attention to herself because she's shy. Being the heiress of our clan she's supposed to stand out, not me”

Tsubaki “Alright roll call...Hyuuga Hina and Neji”

Hina “(softly) Here”

Neji “Here”

Tsubaki “Kato Shizuko”

Shizuko “Here”

Tsubaki “Nara Shika”

Shika “Here”

Tsubaki “Senju Misa”

Misa “Here”

Tsubaki “Uchiha Kai”

Kai “Here”

Tsubaki “Yaminaka Ino”

Ino “Here”

Note: Skipped some students to avoid a long played out roll call. Students mentioned: Hina, Neji, Shizuko, Ko, Shika, Misa, Kai, and Ino play importance later in the series.

After the roll call of the students Tsubaki begins her lesson, starting with the, in depth detail on genjutsu casting. Over an hour passes before class is dismissed and the shinobi leave from the room. As the children leave Shi enters the room.

Shi “Tsubaki-chan, don't forget about the meeting tomorrow about the graduation exams”

Tsubaki “Yes sensei”

Shi “You know, you don't have to keep calling me sensei, we're not master and student anymore, as a matter of fact you actually out rank me now...it's funny though, I can remember years ago when you were one of those little kids sitting at those desks”

Tsubaki “It's funny how time flies and changes things right (laughs). I won't forget”

Shi “Oh and Tsubaki-chan, one more thing, the Hokage wants to see you immediately”

Tsubaki “(whines) What?! I just had two meetings earlier today, I had to skip lunch to tutor a student, and I just had two classes back to back. I hope he's not sending me on another mission”

Shi “It's all part of the responsibility of being a shinobi of Konoha I'm afraid. The message said it was urgent so I wouldn't keep him waiting”

Tsubaki “(sighs) Fine, see you later sensei”

Tsubaki walks out the room holding her head as if she had a headache and heads over the the Hokage residence.
At Konohagakure Maximum Security Facility
In the maximum security facility of Konoha there is a crowd of prisoners in a circle in the court yard chanting. They're surrounding a fight between two inmates.

Prisoner “All bets in!”

Prisoner 2 “I bet a month's allowance on this fight”

The two prisoners begin going at each other demonstrating a fair skill in taijutsu. They grab hold of each other and bring each other to the ground. They begin wrestling on the ground and the one on top begins pounding his fist down left and right.

“Go for the neck!”

“Yeah the jugular, get the jugular!”

The shinobi on the bottom manages to release his left leg and wraps it around the other's neck and swing him onto the ground. He immediately gets on top and pounds his opponents stomach and face.

“Get his Ribs!”

“No the kidneys!”

As the prisoners cheer the guards begin pouring in and attempt to get through the large crowd and break up the fight. They're unable to get through the thick crowd of people, being pushed back by the barrier of people. Suddenly a shadow appears over the two fighters and they both stop and look up. The move from the middle of the court yard as Kagami leaps down with his hand coursing with lightning chakra. He lands in the center and places his hand down on the ground. A great surge of lightning shoots out from all directions, with Kagami standing at the radius. The two fighters, along with the other prisoners are electrocuted. The two fighters fall and so do many of the prisoners. Kagami stands up and grabs both shinobi fighters and drags them through the crowd. Everybody is still stunned from Kagami's jutsu and he simply remains unexpressed. Kagami hands the two shinobi to the guards.

Kagami “Here take them to the infirmary and then put them both in level A1 solitary. As for the rest of these idiots send them back into their cells”

Guard “Yes sir”

Another guard comes over to Kagami.

Guard 2 “Sir Hokage-sama has just sent for you, the message seems urgent”

Kagami “Are you sure you're going to be able to handle this by yourselves? You guys couldn't break up a simple fight”

Setsuna “Kagami, don't belittle your men like that”

Kagami turns around and sees Setsuna walking up behind him with four more shinobi guards with him.

Kagami “What are you doing here?”

Setsuna “I'm your relief little brother, now get out of here, unless you don't think I'll be able to handle myself”

Kagami “Idiot...fine I'm going”

Kagami walks towards the exit of the facility and heads to the Hokage's quarters.
At Hokage Residence
Tobirama “So how was the training?”

Shisui “Successful if I do say so myself”

Mito “You're lucky that your mother taught you how to unlock the seal on your eyes at such a young age...she was a really gifted kunoichi. Most Uzumaki are unable to unlock seal”

Shisui “Mito-sama, how long did it take you?”

Tobirama “What makes you assume that Mito ever did?”

Shisui “Mito-sama is the best fuinjutsu specialist in all of Uzushio and Konoha, she sealed the Kyuubi inside of me, and the only people who could know how to do that have to have read the scriptures”

Mito “You're mother taught me, some years before you were born. I'm not sure anybody else in our clan knows how to read the scriptures besides the two of us.”

Tobirama “Well now that everything has been settled...Shisui I have to tell you the second part of your mission”

Shisui “Second part?”

Mito “Tobirama-sama...”

Two shinobi knock at the door of the Hokage's office and they're cleared to go in. Tsubaki and Kagami enter the room and join their comrade Shisui.

Tsubaki “Hokage-sama I hope that you haven't called to give me another mission I just...Shisui?!”

Kagami “I see you're back finally”

Tsubaki “It's been five years, I heard you were on a top-secret S-class mission but I had no idea that you would be gone for so long”

Kagami “Thought you were dead”

Shisui “(laughs) Sorry to have worried you guys, the mission was just...kind of long”

Kagami “So is this why you called us back here? To see Shisui?”

Miyagi “You don't sound too thrilled to see your teammate after five years Kagami”

Miyagi appears outside the window and enters the room and the entire, Team Miyagi is reunited again after five long years.

Tobirama “I actually called you all here for different things...Shisui wasn't even supposed to be back for another year, however according to Uzushio he finished early and was on his way back. I didn't plan for the four of you to all be hear today”

Tsubaki “So what's going on?”

Tobirama “Well I'll start with you two. Miyagi and Tsubaki I have a special mission I want you to do. I need you two to act as backup to squad 14. They've ran into some trouble with their mission in Sunagakure and need backup force to complete their mission. They're a few miles south east of Suna”

Miyagi “Alright we're on it, right Tsubaki-chan? (smiles)

Tsubaki “(sighs regrettably) Yeah...”

Tobirama “Kagami...I'm putting you in charge of the investigation of the murders of the four murders earlier this week”

Kagami “Why me?”

Tobirama “You're one of my most trusted shinobi Kagami...I would like it if you could lead this investigation so we can get to the bottom of this. I want you to take two squads to deal with the leads we have already”

Kagami “Fine I'll take care of it”

Kagami leaves the room and the only remaining shinobi in the room are Shisui, the Hokage and Mito.

Shisui “Now, Tobirama-sama...you said that you wanted to explain to me...a second part to my mission?”

Tobirama “Yes...There is a second part to your mission however what I was going to tell you, was to stay on standby. You are to rest before I call you, meaning no other missions, not even training. I don't want you to do anything strenuous until I call upon you. Until the second part of your mission comes you are to remain on rest do you understand?”

Mito gets a solemn look of sadness and guilt on her face and Tobirama looks serious. Shisui is confused by the amount of tension he feels in the room but doesn't say anything regarding it.

Shisui “Yes Tobirama-sama”

Tobirama dismisses the shinobi and he walks out of the room. A short moment after Shisui leaves the room Tobirama turns to his assistant and looks at her seriously.

Tobirama “Mito...this has to be done”

Mito “Yes...Tobirama-sama”

The inside conversation between the two is unknown, but is extremely ominous and it leaves a bad aura in the room.
Late Night​
At night, in Konoha four hooded shinobi leap through the trees outside the village.

? “You guys~”

?? “We know”

??? “I'll take care of them”

???? “You better not touch him”

??? “Yeah, I'm going to destroy our last hope for our clan, calm down”

The shinobi makes the tiger seal and suddenly a seal emerges on the trees behind them, revealing a chakra based trap.

Kagami “Watch it, it's a trap!”

Kagami leaps from his hiding spot as multiple explosions erupt and immediately kills three other shinobi, who were trailing the shinobi, along with Kagami. Two manage to survive (other then Kagami) and they're revealed. The shinobi then makes the snake seal and suddenly a seal forms above the three shinobi. Kagami looks up with his Sharingan and he manages to escape the trap. The seal widens around the two remaining shinobi and surrounds them in a seal based sphere and then it explodes, killing the two shinobi. Kagami takes out kunai and several shuriken and throws them at the four shinobi. One of them takes out a kunai of their own and deflects all projectiles. Suddenly four clones of Kagami leap down from the tress above the the four shinobi and engage them in combat. The four shinobi react quick and take down the clones with ease. Suddenly a lightning charged kunai goes flying towards one of the shinobi. They evade it quickly but before he could react, Kagami was right under him and he stabs him with a kunai. The shinobi turns out to be a log, revealing a substitution jutsu. The four shinobi then surround Kagami on the ground and Kagami stays on guard.

Kagami “I saw your eyes and your reactions to my attacks. Quit taking me for a fool and reveal yourselves Inabi, Yoshiro, and Tekka”

Inabi “Kid isn't stupid obviously (takes off hood)”

Yoshiro “(Takes off hood) Just because he figured us out doesn't mean he isn't stupid”

Tekka “He's pretty stupid for tracking us so poorly (takes off hood)

Kagami looks at the last shinobi who has yet to reveal himself.

Kagami “Show yourself!”

Yoshiro “Come on Setsuna he's going to figure it out eventually”

Kagami's eyes widen at the statement. As Setsuna takes off his hood he looks away from Kagami.

Kagami “Setsuna....what...what is going on here?!”

Setsuna “Kagami-kun...I'm sorry that you had to find out like this...you weren't meant to find out about this yet”

Kagami “What the hell is going on here, I've been trailing a lead and it lead me to these three but you...you're involved with this too?”

Inabi “Maybe he is stupid”

Setsuna “You're talking about the murders of the Senju right...We were investigating that as we~”

Kagami “Don't lie to me!! Tobirama-sama place me in charge this investigation! You better start answering”

Inabi “If you haven't noticed you're in no position to be demanding answers from nobody”

Setsuna “Kagami...it's time you know everything...Inabi, Yoshiro, Tekka, and I are part of an organization within the Uchiha clan...The goals of our organization is to restore the Uchihas to it's former glory by showing Konoha that we can be trusted again...We've been working to restore our image. Whoever did this is trying to slaughter our image and we're trying to clear our names.”

Kagami “All this time...if what you said to me is true...why would you hide this from me? I could helped!”

Setsuna “You were our last resort Kagami...you possess a special power, a special power that can only be unlocked through very sensitive means and I had to train you before you could get involved here in order to make sure you could control it. Inabi and the others...they wanted to use you right away, they wanted to use your power to bring glory to our clan even back then but I didn't want you to go through the intensity it would take to unlock such power. I didn't want you to partake until you were ready...I promised that I would take care of you and that's what I've done”

Kagami “So...when you told me to stay away from them”

Setsuna “I case they tried to recruit you before you were ready”

Kagami “And when you three said I was too important to our clan and then just left~”

Inabi “Our leaders were getting impatient with Setsuna keeping you from us and we tried to reveal this all to you sooner but you wouldn't shut up for a moment to let us. When Setsuna was on his way he had to split”

Kagami “So this power you say I have...What is it?”

Suddenly Kagami is struck on the back of the neck by a hooded figure and he's knocked out.

???? “That's all he needs to hear for now...Setsuna take him back to the village and rest him up”

Setsuna “What about the other shinobi?”

???? “We'll take care of that, just do as I say”

Setsuna nods his head and takes Kagami back to the village. The four remaining shinobi begin cleaning up the scene of the dead shinobi and the hooded figure turns to his followers.

???? “Did it go as planned?”

Inabi “Yeah, Setsuna stuck to the script just like we told him too”

Yoshiro “Kagami didn't notice my genjutsu...he thinks everything Setsuna said was the truth”

???? “As for the...other matter...with the Senju?”

Tekka “All the tracks lead to Setsuna...he doesn't know a thing about it.”

Inabi “You assumed correct. Tobirama put him on a false trail while his Anbu did snooping around the real evidence. You convinced Tobirama that Kagami might get to the investigation and find out Setsuna's 'involvement' and try and hide evidence”

Yoshiro “We made sure everything looked convincing enough to make it difficult for them to find the trail, but not too difficult where the Anbu shouldn't be able to find it...by tomorrow they should have the evidence they need to convict Setsuna”

???? “Excellent...Finish up here and make sure the preparations are ready for tomorrow...”

The morning after the entire incident Setsuna meets back up with Inabi and the others. The four hooded leaders of the underground Uchiha organization stand before Inabi, Yoshiro, and Tekka as Setsuna arrives.

? “How is the boy?”

Setsuna “He's fine, and I'm going to tell him the truth...the real truth. I can't take lying to him, and I know that he'll be able to find another way to unlock his powers, but I'm not going to lie to him anymore and I'm not going to let him fall into your trap. There is still hope for our clan to live peacefully with the Senju just like Izuna-sama believed”

?? “So you intend to defy us?!!”

??? “What makes you think we'll let you leave here alive after confessing that to us?”

Setsuna “Because I know your limits...all of you. You're all washed failures, shells of what you once used to be...and none of you are as strong as me (looks at them, revealing a Mangekyou Sharingan)

???? “Is that a fact?”

Inabi, Yoshiro, and Tekka activate their Sharingan the moment they look upon Setsuna's eyes.

Setsuna “The only reason you're after Kagami is because of his legacy and his family's power...you didn't even notice my power...I'm more then enough to take on all of you here and now, the powers I possess are greater then all of you combine. I won't let you tempt Kagami and I no longer am going to participate in this organization...if any of you try to harm Konoha, I'll come at you with full force.”

Inabi “When did he?!”

Yoshiro “It doesn't matter regardless of his eyes if we all fight him he can't~”

???? “Very well then, leave here Setsuna”

The three subordinates look at their hooded superiors in shock.

Inabi “But he has~”

? “The same eyes as Madara-sama and Izuna-sama.”

?? “No eyes could even compare to those...the fact that Setsuna bares in relation to them and has their power...we could not fight them”

??? “It is crucial for us continue our plans but right now Setsuna remains stubborn. We shall wait for another opportunity”

Setsuna “I won't give that to you”

???? “Kill us now Setsuna”

Everybody in the room reacts in shock to those words even the other three leaders.

Setsuna “Be careful for what you wish for”

???? “Kill us now...or else you shall fail in your endeavors.”

Setsuna “You underestimate my abilities”

???? “If you really want to prevent anything from happening to the village you'll kill every single one of us right here and now and you'll go to the others and do the same.”

Setsuna “No I won't because I still see redemption in your future. I don't need to, but I can at anytime. You underestimate my abilities and you overestimate your own. I don't need to kill you but if I even suspect anything I will without hesitation and without mercy”

Setsuna leaves the room and his former peers and leaders, exiting the organization. The three leaders and subordinates look at their other comrade, in shock as to why he said the things he said to Setsuna.

?? “Why would you say those things? Why would you provoke him the way you did?!”

??? “We knew of his abilities, we had everything all planned why did you?~”

???? “I thought we could use some entertainment...Setsuna's arrogance is absolutely hilarious, he is completely clueless to his situation. I knew that he wouldn't kill us. He's always been an idealistic arrogant fool, and soon he shall pay the price. Just because he has the greatest power of our clan, doesn't make him even comparable to Madara-sama and Izuna-sama”

Inabi “What do you mean you knew of his abilities?”

Yoshiro “If you knew...then why not use him instead of?~”

? “Know your place, don't question our methods”

???? “Setsuna was already tainted by the ideals of Izuna-sama...but Kagami was, and still is a clean slate. Setsuna has kept everything about Kagami's past a secret to him...all to our advantage. He has filled Kagami's head with his idealistic foolishness but Kagami still remains confused and unsure of himself...after everything falls into place now, Setsuna will no longer be a threat to us...and Kagami will fall to us indefinitely”

Tekka “But how?”

?? “The trap is set...We took care of the Senju...and with our knowledge of Setsuna, we left the evidence for you to plant, that lead to Setsuna...we mimicked a drastically lower level of his abilities, and despite them being too pale, only an Uchiha would be able to tell the difference.”

??? “If you've done your jobs as well as you claim, then you will see the results of our labor and you will see Setsuna fall”
Several Hours Pass​
Kagami is in the KMPD headquarters when the entire department begins going out of control. Several shinobi are running out of the department and the Uchihas in the department are in an outrage. Kagami heads to Inabi who walks in.

Kagami “What the hell is going on?”

Inabi “It's Setsuna...he's been arrested by the Anbu”

Kagami “What?!”

Inabi “They're blaming him for the murders on the Senju and they've even given him the charge of conspiracy to assassinate the Hokage”

Kagami's eyes widen and he rushes out of the department and heads towards Hokage residence.

Kagami “*No...they've got it all wrong...Setsuna wouldn't do this...this is some sort of set up*”

Kagami gets to the residence and runs through the hall, he goes crashing into the room, startiling Mito and Misa.

Kagami “He's innocent!...huh?”

Kagami looks around and sees that Tobirama isn't in the room.

Misa “Kagami-senpai?”

Mito “Kagami...what are you doing here?”

Kagami “Where's Tobirama-sama, the investigation isn't finished, how did you guys conclude that Setsuna was...”

Mito “Kagami...you weren't supposed to~”

Kagami “This...this was all a lie...you sent me on a false trail...you thought it was Setsuna from the beginning, you thought that I would tamper with the evidence”

Mito “Kagami, let me explain we~”

Kagami “There's nothing to explain! You didn't trust me, neither you nor the Hokage, you both lied to me!”

Misa “Don't call my uncle a liar!”

Kagami looks at the child with a blazing rage and his Sharingan active. Misa's face darkens with fear and Mito steps in front of her.

Mito “Kagami just let me explain the situation”

Kagami “Setsuna's innocent...I know that for a fact, you have to believe me”

Kagami runs out of the room and when he gets outside he heads to the correctional facility of Konoha. A large crowd is outside and Kagami manages to push his way through. He sees Tobirama standing in front of Setsuna, who is bound by two Anbu soldiers in chains and two more standing in front of him on both sides. Kagami sees the blood and wounds on Setsuna, indicating a struggle.

Kagami “SETSUNA!!”

Tobirama “Restrain him!”

Three shinobi run towards Kagami and he activates his Sharingan. He takes down the three shinobi with ease, without killing them. Suddenly three chains wrap themselves around Kagami and they're reinforced with chakra, preventing him from moving. Three Anbu shinobi are seen holding the chains around him.

Kagami “Tobirama-sama you have to wait, please. Setsuna is innocent, he's not the one who committed these murders and he's not a conspirator against you”

Tobirama “Do you have any proof to what you say? Because there is a mountain of evidence against him”

Kagami “You just have to believe me?”

Tobirama “And why should I?”

Kagami's eyes widen as he remembers what Tobirama said to him, just a day before “You're one of my most trusted shinobi” Tobirama turns back to Setsuna.

Tobirama “Uchiha Setsuna, you stand accused of four counts of murder of your comrades of Konoha, as well as an assassination attempt in planning on my life, your leader. Do you have any evidence to your defense?”

Setsuna pants heavily as he looks at Kagami. Tears roll down Kagami's face as he looks at his cousin about to be struck down. A cousin, who was like a brother...no a father to him. Kagami knows that Setsuna wasn't involved but none believe him.

Tobirama “I take your silence as a no...As the crimes against you are treason to the highest degree, your punishment is death”

The two Anbu on either side of Setsuna get down on one knee, bowing to the Hokage and take out their katana. They take out their blades in a traditional manor, used in traditional execution procedures. Setsuna looks at Kagami with a solemn face.

Setsuna “Ka...gami...kun”

The two shinobi stab behind them and one strikes through Setsuna's heart and the other crosses and stabs through both his lungs. Setsuna's eyes are wide and as he coughs up a chunk of blood onto the back of one of the shinobi. Blood falls down the mouth and the wounds of Kagami and the Anbu who restrain him release him, and he falls to the ground.

Kagami “SETSUNA!!”

Kagami stands up and he struggles to break free. One of the shinobi knock him unconscious and Tobirama orders for Kagami to be locked up until he calms down. Tobirama leaves the correctional facility and heads back to his office. Setsuna is taken away and the crowd begins to walk away. In the background the four hooded shinobi are seen smiling. As a few walk in front of them the shinobi disappear.
 

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Several Hours Pass​
Kagami sits in a cell up against the back wall. His look of depression, and confused emotions can be seen on his face, a neutrally expressed hollow look. Kagami hasn't moved since he was brought to the cell. He has remained in that same state frozen.

Kagami “*Setsuna-nii-san...you were innocent...they...they didn't...trust us. They lied to me...Setsuna...Setsuna*”

Suddenly Kagami hears the guards outside being taken down. He sees three guards fall in front of his cell and then he sees keys unlock the cell door. Kagami's look is still of confusion and he doesn't move when the gate is opened. Inabi and Yoshiro come into the clearing and stand in the doorway of the cell.

Inabi “Shit, is this really the savior of our clan? If that's the case we're screwed, look at him”

Yoshiro “Get up and come on”

Kagami “Inabi....Yoshiro...why?”

Inabi “Because you don't want to be here right?!”

Yoshiro “Tobirama's doing the same thing to you as he did with Setsuna...he's setting you up for something.”

Kagami “(Eyes widen) Set up?!”

Yoshiro “Come on...it's time that you know the truth about everything, and I mean the real truth that Setsuna still hid from you”

Kagami gets up and he walks towards the two shinobi. Kagami, Inabi, and Yoshiro head out of the prison and meet up with Tekka on the outside.

Tekka “He looks a mess”

Inabi “I know right?”

Kagami “What are you doing here Tekka?”

Tekka “Putting everybody to sleep, you didn't think you guys just walked out of the correctional facility without any problems did you?”

Yoshiro “Come on”

Kagami is escorted to a secret location by Inabi, Yoshiro, and Tekka. They plan to revel the “Truth” of their secret organization to Kagami, however as far as the truth, in order to recruit him, certain hidden circumstances alter that truth. The truth that they bring Kagami to believe...is a lie...

It is late afternoon, Mito and Tobirama speak on even more important matters, concerning Konoha, outside of the incident that has just occurred with Setsuna. The ominous feeling left behind, after Shisui's departure is revealed.

Tobirama “Mito-chan, you have to keep a clear head about this...we've already talked about this...this has to be done”

Mito “The same thing was done to his mother and it turned the village even further against her. Shisui's dedicated his life and his training as a shinobi to protect this village, and yet he's still ostracized by the village. This will...push them over the edge, he'll be completely alone”

Tobirama “Don't forget his position...and your position as well...Mito”

Mito “But Tobirama~”

Tobirama “This is hard enough for me as it is...everything that's been going on in the past couple of years...even more so now. Suna and Iwa are getting more hostile and aggressive towards one another. Iwa has even invaded and taken over neutral territory between the two nations. The matter of our alliance with Kumo was never hence resolved after the attack by the Kin Gin brothers...and everything...even the atmosphere feels like war”

Mito “Then you know that by doing this you're only fueling the war that goes on between our nation. The hate and turmoil that the village places on one another...”

Tobirama “There is too much on my plate right now to be thinking about, sparing the feelings an idividual. Love is still out there, I have to maintain my leash on Danzo, the whole international crisis, and...the Uchihas....I sense a heavy aura around them...all of them.”

Mito “But you're the Hokage! You're supposed to take care of your people. Shisui is one of your many dedicated followers and he would put his life on the line without hesitation for this village! Please don't~”

Tobirama “Enough Mito! Think about what you just said about me being Hokage. I have to take care of my people...all of my people. Not just Konoha, but what my brother left me in charge of...the entire shinobi world's peace. You should be thinking about that too. What about Uzushio and Konoha? The horrible vision I have for the future...is very strong in possibility...I know war is almost certain to come to the Great Nations, and a war of this calibur requires a weapon...power enough to win it in order to shape the foundation of peace between our nations...Shisui...is that weapon”

Mito “...I know....”

Tobirama “Mito...you have to accept this...explain to me Shisui's position to this village”

Mito clinches her fist and looks down in disgust of herself and guilt.

Mito “Shisui...is the Jinchuuriki of the Kyuubi for Konohagakure...his purpose is to be used as a military weapon, to learn to control the Bijuu inside of him for war purposes and for Konoha...His learning to control his power...is crucial to the overall strength of Konoha”

Tobirama “What is your duty”

Mito “I...Mito Uzumaki...am the handler of Shisui Uzumaki. My duty is to restrict the outbursts of the Kyuubi and to tame the power should it get out of hand, and if necessary...kill him in order to protect the village and find another suitable host for the Kyuubi”

Tobirama “Those were your first words to me when you first requested to stay in this village to keep an eye on him. They still remain true I hope”

Mito “They do...Tobirama-sama”

The door of the room is cracked slightly. On the wall next to the door a shadowy figure stands with his fists clenched and tears rolling down his eyes. Suddenly both Tobirama and Mito feel the presence of the shinobi and realize immediately who was standing outside the door. Mito opens the door quickly to find that Shisui had left. She goes in pursuit after him. As Mito rushes to find Shisui, she meets up with Miyagi.

Miyagi “Mito, what's wrong”

Mito “It's Shisui...I think he's...”

Miyagi doesn't say anything in return and understands her. The two head to the training fields and they see a huge burst of chakra coming from one of them. They get to a wide open field and they see Shisui with the shroud of the four tails around him. Miyagi and Mito look upon him with horror in his eyes and then suddenly get on their guard. Shisui rushes towards them, although not at the speed expected. Miyagi makes multiple quick seals and holds his hand out. Suddenly the necklace around Shisui's neck shoots out with a sort of green aura like rope and begins to restrain him. Mito holds out her hand and the Four Symbols Sealing symbol appears on her palm and her palm glows with chakra. Shisui makes three seal and releases the sealing jutsu from the necklace. The fact that Shisui consciously reacted was astonishing. Shisui then catches Mito's hand before it touches him and looks into her eyes. His eyes are filled with tears and she realizes that Shisui is conscious.

Shisui “(altered voice) You thought I'd actually ever hurt you...so everything...was true”

Miyagi looks confused as to the situation. Shisui releases four tailed state and then makes the tiger seal. The seal on his stomach spins like a top and suddenly stops like a lock on a combination. Shisui looks into Mito's eyes again, however tears are not present. Mito looks back even more shocked to see the emotion within Shisui's eyes and his heart completely gone.

Mito “Shisui I...”

Shisui “Thank you Mito...for everything that you've done for me. You tried to protect my feelings but that's no longer any need for you to do that...Just as you've said...I'm the Jinchuuriki of Konoha. My purpose is only to be used as a weapon for Konoha, and that is exactly what I will be from now on. I understand my place...I'm not meant to get the approval or affection of Konoha...I am only to protect it and follow the orders of the Hokage.”

Mito “Shisui no~”

Shisui “Love is not my destiny so I shall not pursue it...I thank you Mito...for trying shroud me and protect me, but I'm ready now”

Shisui releases her and at that moment Tsubaki enters the scene, holding her left arm, which is flowing with blood.

Miyagi “Tsubaki!”

Tsubaki “Please...Shisui...it's Kagami he's”

Miyagi “Wait what's going on?”

Mito “*Kagami! He supposed to be in prison...did he?*”

Tsubaki “He said he's leaving the village. He said that he has to restore honor to his clan and get revenge for what happened to Setsuna and everything. I don't understand what happened while we were gone but I couldn't stop him. He...he (begins to cry) Shisui, you're the only one who can bring him back, please go after him”

Shisui “I'll bring him back. If he doesn't want go come willingly then I'll kill him if I must”

Shisui runs past Tsubaki and her eyes widen after he says that. As he runs by him she turns her head and looks at him. Again with her sensory abilities she sees the Kyuubi's spirit, however she looks past it into the black void, within his true soul. That small bit of pureness has shrunken to a point it's barely visible. Shisui runs past her and begins sniffing out for Kagami. The three shinobi left there are all watch as he heads to face his former comrade.

Tsubaki “Mito-sama...what...what happened to Shisui?”

Mito “Tsubaki...when you look Shisui...what do you see?”

Tsubaki “What do you mean?”

Mito “You're a sensor right? You see peoples chakra, and you can tell what type of person they are...well what do you see in Shisui?”

Tsubaki “It's hard to explain...I see two things...I see a very powerful evil, a monsterous chakra that's filled with hate, but then I see...this sort of dark void...with a small sliver of light but every time I see Shisui...it seems to get smaller, as if the void was sucking it up...I never did truly understand it and I still don't”

Mito “Shisui possesses two chakras....one of them is the chakra of a demon known as the Kyuubi...what you said was the evil presence you felt...Shisui is a Jinchuuriki meaning...he had that evil sealed inside of him for it's power. He was chosen...to act as a military weapon for Konoha...to learn how to control that power for the betterment of Konoha”

Tsubaki “But that's...”

Mito “That's a horrible fate...a fate destined to be without love, almost indefinatly...most Jinchuuriki don't ever receive the feeling of love, because...it's not up to them....it's up to those strong enough to see past the demon inside that person and see the beauty in who they really are...and also...be willing to fight for them no matter what”

Tsubaki “So...Shisui~”

Mito “You were able to see past that and into his heart...but you couldn't understand it so you feared him deep down in your heart...am I right?”

Tsubaki doesn't say anything but just turns her head in guilty truth.

Mito “I'll tell you what that void meant...Shisui has one of the biggest, kindest hearts I've ever seen. He's done nothing but love and protect...with his only desire to be loved back...that pureness you say you saw in him...it was what little of his heart after it was broken, after loosing the two who loved him the most, and after everybody turned their back on him...that void...is the pain that he combats daily. He tries to fight it all by himself but it's impossible. His heart gets weaker and weaker and...I...I killed the last of it just moments ago”

Tsubaki “Mito...”

Mito “His parents...my closest friends on this earth...left him to me...to take care of and I...I've hurt him in a way that I can't ever take back. I...I wasn't strong enough for him...and now...what was left of his heat is gone”

Mito's eyes are filled with regret and sorrow as the image of Hina and Koga in her head. Miyagi leaves to go alter Tobirama while Tsubaki heads over to Mito.

Tsubaki “Mito-sama...it's not you're fault”

Mito “Just leave me alone”

Tears roll down Mito's eyes and Tsubaki agrees. Tsubaki however begins heading in the direction Shisui went to follow him.

Tsubaki “*Shisui...I'm so sorry*”
At The Valley of Ends
Several minutes pass before Shisui catches up to Kagami. Kagami stands on the furthest cliff overlooking the valley while Shisui stands on the other. Both shinobi have neutral expression, however Kagami's is more along the side of hatred.

Note: The statures of Hashirama and Madara have not yet been established.

Shisui “Kagami, stop this foolishness now and come back to the village”

Kagami “Don't try to sound all high and mighty Shisui”

Shisui “I know what happened to Setsuna, but you have to get over it. You're going down a road you'll never come back from”

Kagami “You have no idea you idiot. Maybe you do, your clan is descended from that insidious Senju, you're basically one of them...my enemy”

Shisui “I'm only your enemy if you make it so. You're blinded by so much hate that not even your Sharingan can see~”

Kagami “I SEE EVERYTHING CLEARLY!”

Two clones of Kagami appear behind Shisui with kunai. Shisui ducks, with amazing speed and grabs both clones in the back of the head and smashes them together. The fire from the clones blows in his face and through the fire, several shuriken go through at him. Kagami used the clones as a smoke screen to hide his shuriken. Shisui takes out a kunai and quickly deflects all of them. He leaps towards Kagami and both clash with their kunai. Kagami's eyes allow him to keep up with the movements of Shisui as the two engage in taijutsu. However Shisui's reflexes are much faster and stronger then Kagami and he manages to pull off a kick to his ribs, sending Kagami flying down towards the water. Shisui heads straight down towards Kagami and stabs him. However his body disperses into crows.

Shisui “Genjutsu?!”

Suddenly Shisui is knocked out of the genjutsu by an electrical current. Kagami stands behind Shisui on the surface of the water with his hand on the water emitting an electrical current that stuns Shisui.

Kagami “Konoha was supposed to be a peace settlement between the Senju and the Uchiha, but in actuality it was a trap set by the Senju to assert their power of us...There can be no peace between our two clans. We are too far apart and two heated in our own endeavors. With the Senju and Uchiha there is only war...and who comes out on top...It is my job...to make sure my clan doesn't fall.”

Shisui “What...do you mean?...”

Kagami “Only I have the power to take back Konoha and defeat the Senju...my eyes, are stronger then any Uchiha. I have to get stronger then Madara-sama...in order to make sure that the Uchiha's rule is absolute.”

**Flashback**

Note: After Inabi and the others broke Kagami out

Kagami stands in a room with four hooded figures. Inabi, Yoshiro, and Tekka stand behind him as he faces the four overlords of the Uchiha.

? “Kagami Uchiha...It is time that you know the truth behind everything involving our organization”

Kagami “Setsuna told me. He said that you were trying to better the Uchihas name by restoring honor~”

?? “This was only partially correct. Setsuna lied to you when he said that we'd cooperate with the Senju. Our organization is meant to use the powers, left behind by Madara-sama and Izuna-sama to assert our power of the Senju, who have trampled all over us by the establishment of Konoha”

Kagami “No...I won't be a part of this then. Setsuna would never have~”

??? “Setsuna is dead because of them. He was part of this organization and he tried to hide you from us because he wanted to fill your head with the foolish hope of a peaceful existence between our two clans. He lied to you back in the forest when you confronted him and the others”

Kagami “What do you mean he's dead because of him?!”

???? “Setsuna...was set up by Tobirama and the rest of the Senju clan to take the fall for these crimes”

Kagami “No...that's a lie”

???? “If so, why did Tobirama send you on a false trail and send his Anbu to supposedly 'investigate' the real situation? Setsuna was framed by the Senju. They killed their own members just to see him fall”

Kagami “But why? Why would they?!”

?? “Setsuna possessed a power. The power of the Mangekyou Sharingan, the strongest eyes in our clan. He...along with Madara and Izuna were the only ones to ever unlock it. It is a power that is accessable to everyone in our clan, but his eyes were even more special then that of any other Uchiha capable.”

??? “He is the first son of Izuna Uchiha...and therefore he possessed the same bloodline technique of Izuna's Mangekyou. A technique even more powerful then that of Madara-sama's...Setsuna was our link to obtaining power over the Senju”

Kagami “Then why would you need me?”

???? “The Senju knew of Izuna's first son...and they knew of the power he possessed...however they knew not of the second son...of Izuna Uchiha...and that is why you, Kagami, were seen as our clan's last hope”

**End Flashback**

Kagami “The responsibility and power that I possess will assure my clan's redemption, and I won't let anybody interfere”

Kagami increases the power of the current and Shisui yells. Suddenly a kunai is placed to Kagami's neck.

Shisui “It is my job to protect Konoha...if I have to kill you I will”

Kagami “Shadow clone huh...so you saw through my genjutsu”

The clone of Shisui caught in the current disappears in a cloud of smoke.

Shisui “Hanging around you and Tsubaki has had it's advantages”

Kagami “You're nothing compared to me Shisui. The power I now possess is far beyond yours”

Kagami bursts in to flames, revealing another clone. Suddenly a powerful surge of electricity goes shooting towards Shisui at an amazing speed.

Kagami “Raiton: Raikou-ryu Touza (Lightning Release: Lightning Dragon Current)

It strikes down on the water letting loose a powerful wave of lightning all throughout the area, using the water as a conductor. Shisui appears above the range of the current however he wasn't able to evade the jutsu completely. In the air Kagami appears and lunges at him with his kunai. Shisui moves to block it but the electricity coursing through his body prevents him and he's cut on the stomach, near the kidney. Shisui lands on the cliff again and Kagami is on the other cliff as well. Shisui holds his side and looks at Kagami.

Kagami “You're fast Shisui...but my eyes are faster”

Shisui “You think so”

Kagami “I know so”

Shisui “(closes his eyes) then lets test that theory...*Shomon Kai!* (Gate of Pain Release)”

Suddenly the pressure around Shisui bursts and his chakra is enhanced. Another burst happens and the chakra begins spiralling around him...Another burst happens around him Shisui's skin begins to turn red and the earth around him rises as he creates a crater where he stands. One more burst of energy happens and then Shisui opens his eyes. Kagami is astounded at the level of chakra within Shisui as it sky rockets.

Kagami “*Is this the power of the Kyuubi?...no this is different...this is Shisui's chakra...but how can he~*”

Shisui suddenly appears behind Kagami and his eyes widen. Shisui lands a punch which completely obliterates the piece of the cliff that Kagami stood on. Large rocks and stone fall to the ground and water below. Kagami is on top of the water's surface panting heavily.

Kagami “*I was...barly able to block that...but...my right arm is*”

Kagami's right arm is drenched in blood after Shisui's attack. Shisui gets on top of the water and the intense chakra around him causes ripples in the water.

Shisui “I haven't used this in a while...I shouldn't have held back my speed.”

Kagami “*What?! He was still holding back?!*”

Shisui gets into his fighting stance.

Shisui “Kagami I'll say this once more...”

Shisui layers his arms with chakra and as he does it cause the water to splash upwards from the powerful pressure.

Shisui “Stop your foolishness behavior and come back to the village...or I will kill you”

Kagami shifts his foot subtly to position himself to leap away from Shisui. Shisui sees this and immediately hammers Kagami with a powerful punch sending flying. Kagami turns into a block of wood and it completely shatters. Kagami appears at a distance away from Shisui and uses his Fireball technique. Shisui turns around quickly and puts his arms up. As if he was hitting a ball, Shisui smacks down Kagami's ball of fire with his arms.

Note: Chakuraken: Nijuu Genkotsu (Chakra fist: Double Fist)

Shisui appears in front of Kagami and launches a punch. Kagami manages to just barely duck to evade it. Kagami tries to stab Shisui but he grabs Kagami's arm and whips him, sending him skipping across the water and eventually into a pile of earth, creating a crater. Kagami manages to get up but many of his ribs are broken and by this point he's panting heavily. His eyes widen as Shisui appears in front of him again and slams a kick, sending him into the air. Shisui appears.

Shisui “Kaika Hasu (Blossoming Lotus)

Shisui lets out a barrage of fast and powerful punches and kicks as he sends Kagami shooting downwards. Kagami hits the ground hard creating a crater and he see's Shisui shooting down towards him. Shisui's arms now flow with chakra in the shape of a flower at a great size. He looks up and widens his eyes. Suddenly his Sharingan changes its shape. Shisui makes contact with the ground, completely obliterating the entire short range areas where within field of that attack. After the dust and smoke clears Shisui is seen on the water panting heavily, and the power generated from his gates had faded.

Shisui “My time limit...is still only 120 seconds...but...it was enough...What?!”

From the dirt and dust in the air Shisui sees the dust he sees a figure, and recognizes its as Kagami. He then sees a giant shield like shape. As the dust clears Shisui's eyes widen and he sees a large white chakra sheild in front of Kagami and sees Kagami panting. The white aura from the sheild suddenly surrounds Kagami again and he glows with the white aura, as the Mangekyou Sharingan appears in Kagami's eyes.

**Flashback**

Note: Second part of Kagami's flashback to meeting the four hooded shinobi.

???? “Kagami Uchiha...you are the second son of Izuna Uchiha”

Kagami's eyes widen in shock and disbelief.

Kagami “No...No that's a lie”

???? “It is the truth...after your birth you were hidden for the very same reason we come before you now...you were hidden to protect our clan as it's last hope”

Kagami “No...Izuna-sama...he wanted peace between out two clans...not more fighting”

?? “Setsuna has truly twisted you...Izuna-sama was the brother of Madara and he wanted the same thing Madara wanted. Izuna hid his relation to you in order to protect you, so that you could grow unnoticed to the rest of Konoha and one day bring about honor back into our clan...”

Kagami “That...can't be...”

???? “It is Kagami...this is, and always has been your destiny...if you walk out on us now...the Uchihas are done”

Kagami holds his head in shock and confusion as to what to do.

???? “Will you join us Kagami...or will you doom your clan to destruction?”

Kagami looks up and he agrees.

???? “You will soon figure out this power that lay within you...you will figure out the power off...”

**End Flashback**

Kagami “Yawata no Kami (God of War)...So...this is the power of my Mangekyou Sharingan (closes eyes)...”

He opens them again and The white chakra begins to shape in the form of full body armor (see the style worn by Madara and Hashirama) and in his left hand he holds a sword of white fiery chakra.

Shisui “*His eyes have changed...is this the power that Madara used to defeat Shodaime?*”

Shisui makes a few quick seals and tears off his shirt. His seal on his stomach appears and he places his hand on it and spins it like a dial. Suddenly the shroud of the four tails surrounds him.

Shisui “*I used up too much chakra...I can't go six tails*”

Kagami “*He can control his cloak...I have to end this in one shot*”

Both Kagami and Shisui rush each other. Kagami has his sword ready to swing down and Shisui increases the chakra in his right hand and makes a large fox claw.

Kagami “UAHHHH DIE!”

Shisui “ROOOAAAAARRR!”

The two shinobi clash and it emits a large explosion. A white sphere surrounds both of them. In the sphere Shisui's attack goes straight into the left shoulder of Kagami and his arm...missing the heart. Kagami's sword comes down at a curve and diagonally slashes Shisui from the right shoulder to his bottom left rib, missing his heart, kidneys, and solar plexes. Neither shot from either was fatal...at the moment...At the end of the explosion both Kagami and Shisui are on their backs. Shisui's wound, leaking blood out of him rapidly, and both Kagami's arms drenched in blood...Kagami opens his eyes, however his Sharingan isn't active...He sits his body up and closes his eyes in pain from the jutsu. He looks over to see Shisui unconscious tries to move towards him...He's unable to and falls back down.

Kagami “*I have to move...I have to MOVE!*”

Kagami picks himself back up and stands over Shisui. He looks down at his former teammate, as he pants.

Kagami “You live today Shisui...only because I have nothing left to fight you with...but I win this match...If we cross paths again...I will be stronger, and I will kill you most defiantly”

Several minutes later Tsubaki arrives at the scene to see the massive destruction. She look and sees Shisui injured and unconscious but she doesn't see Kagami. She heads down to him and sees that he's still alive. Moments later several shinobi, and medical-nin arrive at the scene and they begin healing Shisui. The shinobi head to follow Kagami's trail. Tsubaki looks in the distance with a saddened look.

Tsubaki “*Kagami...Shisui...Please forgive me...*”

Team Miyagi...Tsuchi Tsubaki...Uchiha Kagami...and Uzumaki Shisui. Three shinobi of Konoha...three completely different people. Kagami...the son of Izuna Uchiha, the strength and tool of the Uchihas...his path is vengeance and power for his clan. Shisui...Jinchuuriki of the Kyuubi...tool of Konoha...his path is that of a emotionless tool to suffer the pain of hate from the people he is sworn to protect. The paths of two of these three shinobi have been decided, and the end of that path has also been decided...Tsubaki remains without her true path of the shinobi. The bonds that she has made, have not yet set into her and decided her path. This incident however is her deciding moment...what will her path become.
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This may be my second longest chapter but this is by far the most important chapter. I hope you guys enjoy it. I added the whole Naruto vs. Sasuke element with Shisui vs. Kagami and I hope you like my personal addition to the Mangekyou Sharingan I made here. I tried to find something that would be convincing as a unique family trait so yeah. Anyway thanks for reading (if anybody actually doesxd) and please rate my post and tell me how I did (besides making it too long thanks) Thanks :)

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awesome fight bw Kagami and Shisui
i never knew that he would open gates
also kyuubi fight was a bit less
overall
THIS CHAPTER IS GREAT
 

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thats gonna take a year to read.. for me anyways..
I know it's long as hell. However if you read slower then me...well lets just say that I have a reading disability and leave it at that...I have no problem writting hella long, in a short ass time, but re-reading it would take me too long. I may even loose interest in what in my own storyxd. However if you do read it as some point in time thank you

awesome fight bw Kagami and Shisui
i never knew that he would open gates
also kyuubi fight was a bit less
overall
THIS CHAPTER IS GREAT
I didn't want to show to much of either's abilities (Kagami's Mangekyou abilities, and Shisui's level of control with his Kyuubi) because, considering what's going to happen in the last three chapters, we're going to see them go all out next time.

Spoiler
These two are never going to fight each other again, they're going to fight different characters and win/loose.

the fight is more like Naruto vs Sasuke
in Naruto series
That's exactly what I was going for, however both were trying to kill each other but both failed to do so, and Kagami couldn't do anything with is busted up ribs, and arms so he had to split.
 

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who is the ??? guy in the flashback
The question marks are the heads of the Uchiha's secret organization that's planning another coup on Konoha, to finish what Madara started.

I have no idea what they're names are or who I want them to be so for now (and until the end) they'll remain ?, ??, ???, and ???? however the last guy is the head of them all (I was thinking of making him Madara or Izuna but I kicked that idea because I've had enough with Madara coming back, even though I like Madara. Also I wanted to have Madara act as a sacrificial peice for his clan. And I already stated that Izuna was a peace loving guy, even though they lied and said Izuna hid Kagami because he wanted the same as Madara)

They're just one of the organizations against Konoha (I think I made three, Danzo, the Uchihas, and Love)

Spoiler
The last three chapters from are going to show each one of these three organizations falling and Konoha prevailing, however immediently afterwards Konoha is going into war, having another rival, but I'm not going to show the war front in this series. It's going to be like...internal conflict ended, international crisis begun. Konoha gets rid of it's enemies from the inside but right after they have to face their enemies on the outside. Konoha is torn from the moment of its creation to it's present through strife
 

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I just managed to read three of your latest chapters...Where is my award ?

Awesome chapter and definitely the most intriguing.
I dislike how Shusui and Kagami's fight was like Sasuke's and Naruto's, but at the same time i like how the atmosphere surrounding the fight was different from that of S & N.

For some reason, i thought that something very unexpected would happen at Setsuna's execution...Something like...oh lets say Shusui saving him and have him Tobirama and Kagami talk it out....I know my imagination does not flow with your story line >_>

Spoiler
These two are never going to fight each other again, they're going to fight different characters and win/loose.
That has just got to be a heartbreaking spoiler. >.<

Anyways great chapter bro.
Come forth with the Next !!
 

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I just managed to read three of your latest chapters...Where is my award ?

Awesome chapter and definitely the most intriguing.
I dislike how Shusui and Kagami's fight was like Sasuke's and Naruto's, but at the same time i like how the atmosphere surrounding the fight was different from that of S & N.

For some reason, i thought that something very unexpected would happen at Setsuna's execution...Something like...oh lets say Shusui saving him and have him Tobirama and Kagami talk it out....I know my imagination does not flow with your story line >_>


That has just got to be a heartbreaking spoiler. >.<

Anyways great chapter bro.
Come forth with the Next !!
I have awarded you for your courage, and ability to read three of my chapters in a single day (check you gifts)

I was intentionally going for the Naruto vs Sasuke fight scene but also to add the atmosphere of both out to kill the other. In the real NvS battle Sasuke was the only one with the intent to kill but even then he couldn't pull through with it. In this case Kagami physically couldn't, he had exhausted his chakra, several broken ribs, and destroyed arm, and he knew that there were others coming so he wouldn't survive a fight, so he had to bounce.

Nothing unexpected except Setsuna's arrogance. I had to make him show off a little right before he died, I know I kind of made it seem like something unexpected was going to happend with Setuna's arrogant behavior, however I just wanted to show that side of Setsuna before he died and show the cunning of the Uchiha superiors over him.

Heatbreaking I'm sorry, but I never wanted a rivalry to go between the two. Although I had the team seven atmosphere with Team Miyagi, I've always tried to show respect between the two characters of Kagami and Shisui and rather friendly relationship (for the most part I mean Kagami still looked at him like a monster and even tried to kill him before, remember?). This situation in peticular was a result of their broken bonds, based on their two paths that were thrown at them, against their will and drove them too far apart. Shisui made acceptance with being an emotionless tool, killing his heart and becoming a weapon for Konoha and Kagami accepted the vengful status of the Uchiha. This battle represented the change in their beings and their broken bonds. This series is all about making, maintaining, and breaking bonds. If you think about it it's a puzzle, you have to find out which characters fit where when it comes to their bonds to others...

For example, Shisui to Tsubaki is different then Tsubaki to Shisui, meaning Tsubaki feels differently towrds Shisui, then how Shisui feels towards Tsubaki and the same goes for Kagami and Shisui's relationship, Tsubaki and Kagami's, Miyagi to each of his students, Mito to Shisui, Tobirama, and Misa etc.

Anyway thanks for the feed back.
 

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I think your right, this really is your best and most important chapter.
Either that, or I'm just really absorbed into the plot you've created...
Ah, I have so many random comments:
I liked the way you started this chapter, and the 'classroom aura' you created...I think it was a good beginning, to show the background/setting, after the last 'part'.
"Kagami was, and still is a clean slate." ...This statement reminded me of what Itachi had said to Naruto about Sasuke...
When Shisui overheard what Mito had said, I was just like, "o__o , nooo"....I felt so sorry for him at that point...Then when Tsubaki stepped into the scene and said Kagami had left, I felt a strange feeling of deja vu :p , specially when Tsubaki told Shisui to bring him back...
I'm glad you made Tsubaki a sensory-type, it was a nice way of showing/describing Shisui's feelings, and inner conflict.
I liked how you split the flashback of Kagami [I was about to type Sasuke xd] and his discussion with the hooded shinobi between parts of his and Shisui's fight...it was a good effect. xd
Lastly, I like how you ended the chapter, how the people of Team Miyagi were now branching off, into different directions...

I was intentionally going for the Naruto vs Sasuke fight scene but also to add the atmosphere of both out to kill the other. In the real NvS battle Sasuke was the only one with the intent to kill but even then he couldn't pull through with it. In this case Kagami physically couldn't, he had exhausted his chakra, several broken ribs, and destroyed arm, and he knew that there were others coming so he wouldn't survive a fight, so he had to bounce.

Nothing unexpected except Setsuna's arrogance. I had to make him show off a little right before he died, I know I kind of made it seem like something unexpected was going to happend with Setuna's arrogant behavior, however I just wanted to show that side of Setsuna before he died and show the cunning of the Uchiha superiors over him.

Heatbreaking I'm sorry, but I never wanted a rivalry to go between the two. Although I had the team seven atmosphere with Team Miyagi, I've always tried to show respect between the two characters of Kagami and Shisui and rather friendly relationship (for the most part I mean Kagami still looked at him like a monster and even tried to kill him before, remember?). This situation in peticular was a result of their broken bonds, based on their two paths that were thrown at them, against their will and drove them too far apart. Shisui made acceptance with being an emotionless tool, killing his heart and becoming a weapon for Konoha and Kagami accepted the vengful status of the Uchiha. This battle represented the change in their beings and their broken bonds. This series is all about making, maintaining, and breaking bonds. If you think about it it's a puzzle, you have to find out which characters fit where when it comes to their bonds to others...
I was surprised at Setsuna's arrogance. It didn't seem to fit with the rest of the character you created. But I understand now it was to highlight what the other Uchiha Shinobi had done to him...
Although Team Miyagi is similar to Team 7, there are a lot of subtle differences, I've noticed, so in a way, I can see why both teammates were striving to kill each other [unlike Sasuke/Naruto], and also the reason for what you said in your spoiler.
I wish we had seen more of their earlier relationship though. Back in your earlier chapters, I could tell that they could/were close friends, because they were both going through a lot of pain, and could relate. However, in some areas of the story, I've felt that Kagami and Tsubaki were more closer, and Shisui more distant/left out.
I also wish I had seen more of Kagami's anger during the fight.
Overall, good chapter, and really, it didn't feel long to me. I was too absorbed in the plot. ^^
 

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I think your right, this really is your best and most important chapter.
Either that, or I'm just really absorbed into the plot you've created...
Ah, I have so many random comments:
I liked the way you started this chapter, and the 'classroom aura' you created...I think it was a good beginning, to show the background/setting, after the last 'part'.
"Kagami was, and still is a clean slate." ...This statement reminded me of what Itachi had said to Naruto about Sasuke...
When Shisui overheard what Mito had said, I was just like, "o__o , nooo"....I felt so sorry for him at that point...Then when Tsubaki stepped into the scene and said Kagami had left, I felt a strange feeling of deja vu :p , specially when Tsubaki told Shisui to bring him back...
I'm glad you made Tsubaki a sensory-type, it was a nice way of showing/describing Shisui's feelings, and inner conflict.
I liked how you split the flashback of Kagami [I was about to type Sasuke xd] and his discussion with the hooded shinobi between parts of his and Shisui's fight...it was a good effect. xd
Lastly, I like how you ended the chapter, how the people of Team Miyagi were now branching off, into different directions...


I was surprised at Setsuna's arrogance. It didn't seem to fit with the rest of the character you created. But I understand now it was to highlight what the other Uchiha Shinobi had done to him...
Although Team Miyagi is similar to Team 7, there are a lot of subtle differences, I've noticed, so in a way, I can see why both teammates were striving to kill each other [unlike Sasuke/Naruto], and also the reason for what you said in your spoiler.
I wish we had seen more of their earlier relationship though. Back in your earlier chapters, I could tell that they could/were close friends, because they were both going through a lot of pain, and could relate. However, in some areas of the story, I've felt that Kagami and Tsubaki were more closer, and Shisui more distant/left out.
I also wish I had seen more of Kagami's anger during the fight.
Overall, good chapter, and really, it didn't feel long to me. I was too absorbed in the plot. ^^
I mentioned the class because those kids mentioned were going to play significance in the very end (you'll see)

Spoiler
Here's a little brain teaser for you to try and figure out...Notice there were eight right? Something is going to happen to shape them in a very...similar way to certain characters from here, and from the cannon, guess right and I give you a prize (but PM me)

Kagami is Sasuke...I was trying to make it obvious (guess it worked). I made Kagami=only Sasuke for a reason (Notice that Tsubaki=Sakura and a little Hinata, and Shisui is near opposite of Naruto) because I want to show characters how Sasuke acts and why I don't like his character.

Yeah I wanted to add the moment when Sakura begged Shisui to come back however I wanted to show Shisui's difference from Naruto: Naruto "I will bring him back I promise" Shisui "I will try to pursuade him to come back but if I must I'll kill him"

That was my favorite flashback to make.

Setsuna was supposed to be a weaker Itachi like figure.

Team Miyagi=Team Kakashi with minor personality changes (Notice Miyagi has been less involved in his team since they became jounin that's just one thing though, there's more but you have to figure them out)

Spoiler
You'll see a similarity in Tsubaki to another character in my series, guess after you see my next two chapters

When I said Kagami and Shisui were friendly I mean on the team, if you've noticed whenever I've put Tsubaki between the two they're always far apart, both literal and figurativly, and Tsubaki and notice who she chooses.

Shisui=Naruto in being outcasted (However their situation is different, in that nobody had the courage stand up for him) Shisui is what would happen to Naruto had he not recieved friends, but if Naruto still had the heart he did. If not Naruto would be Gaara. Notice I said Shisui's pureness (as seen by Tsubaki) was still there but very faint.

Thanks for the feed back I like your responses because I could answer somethings like I was in an interview.
 
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