Changed behaviour of the weapon and interaction with seals to make it more.. "weaponry". Also changed name.
(Igudorashiru) - Yggdrasil
Type: Weapon
Rank: Forbidden
Range: N/A
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: Yggdrasil is a savagely looking jagged longsword with a bunch of spots filled with bioluminescent light that shines in the same color as the wielders eyes. The swords grip is formed like a root and the entire sword is made by an unknown crystal that is extremey dense. On the grip of the sword there is also a seal;
調和 - Harmony. This seal is responding to a unique bond called harmony element. When the user is within short range from the seal, a passive stream of chakra is being fueled into the seal and out towars the user of the sword. The sword will transform its crystalline structure to that of the special element the user possesses and take on its traits. A harmony element is essentially any element the user possesses and wants the sword to transform into. This needs to be stated in the bio that has the Yggdrasil sword. The sword will not just resemble the element, but also adapt it's strengths/weaknesses and can be destroyed by such and dealing damage accordingly. As the user powers the sword, the sword also powers the user. In connection with the harmony seal, the sword will shift out chakra towards the user and enhance their harmony element that the sword mimics and give it a passive boost of +10 chakra and +20 damage.
The user can utilize the sword like any other sword and while free-form damage is applicable it costs a move and deals direct damage equivalent of the swords rank and whatever element it mimics at the time. If the sword is tossed it will instantly transform back into the crystalized form it originally has if it travels beyond short-range from the user. It will also remove the passive strengths towards the users harmony element. One unique move the sword has is also based on fuinjutsu. The user will simply pierce the ground infront of them and shove the sword with the edge into the ground and plant it there. This causes a quake of chakra to be unleashed from the sword in an omni-directional fashion and forms a dome around the planted sword that reaches up to long-range. This barrier afflicts everyone inside of it, including the user, potential clones, summons, allies etc. The barrier drains chakra from all entities inside of it and nulls usage of any forbidden ranked jutsu. Modes, dojutsu or other active techniques that are of forbidden rank are not affected by this if they are activated before the move has been made. The only advantage the user gets in this move is that they pertain the ability to use forbidden techniques, but not offensive ones. This barrier also deactivates the harmony seal as long as it is active. The name Yggdrasil is a nordic ancient name and means the tree of life and around the tree the world ends in a dome shape. The barrier is considered forbidden ranked.
Note: Can only be used by Skorm.
Declined: While I do like the harmony element component and the sword stabbing the earth dome thing, the forbidden rank direct damage attack at the start of the second paragraph is a hard no. You do also need to do a better job defining the chakra draining component of the dome. You also don't need to bold the whole submission next time when redoing the whole technique haha
-Inch
Edits in bold, removed freeform forbidden dmg.
(Igudorashiru) - Yggdrasil
Type: Weapon
Rank: Forbidden
Range: N/A
Chakra: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: Yggdrasil is a savagely looking jagged longsword with a bunch of spots filled with bioluminescent light that shines in the same color as the wielders eyes. The swords grip is formed like a root and the entire sword is made by an unknown crystal that is extremey dense. On the grip of the sword there is also a seal;
調和 - Harmony. This seal is responding to a unique bond called harmony element. When the user is within short range from the seal, a passive stream of chakra is being fueled into the seal and out towars the user of the sword. The sword will transform its crystalline structure to that of the special element the user possesses and take on its traits. A harmony element is essentially any element the user possesses and wants the sword to transform into. This needs to be stated in the bio that has the Yggdrasil sword. The sword will not just resemble the element, but also adapt it's strengths/weaknesses and can be destroyed by such and dealing damage accordingly. As the user powers the sword, the sword also powers the user. In connection with the harmony seal, the sword will shift out chakra towards the user and enhance their harmony element that the sword mimics and give it a passive boost of +10 chakra and +20 damage.
The user can utilize the sword like any other sword and use it in kenjutsu techniques while applying elemental properties to them in response to what harmony element the wielder have chosen. If the sword is tossed it will instantly transform back into the crystalized form it originally has if it travels beyond short-range from the user. It will also remove the passive strengths towards the users harmony element. The sword also incorporates a special move which requires the user to pummel it into the ground infront of them with the edge down. This will cause a tremor and erect a huge dome barrier that is invisible to the naked eye. This barrier incorporates fuinjutsu attributes in the sense of crippling chakra supplies of everyone inside the dome. The sword acts like the vessel and the move is the trigger. The barrier saps chakra from opponents and drains their jutsus of power to the point that all forbidden techniques becomes S rank instead. This means that techniques drop in rank and damage. The wielder of the sword loses the advantage of the harmony seal while the barrier is up but does not lose chakra from the barrier. Modes, dojutsu or other active techniques that are of forbidden rank are not affected by this if they are activated before the move has been made. The name Yggdrasil is a nordic ancient name and means the tree of life and around the tree the world ends in a dome shape. The barrier is considered forbidden ranked.
Note: Can only be used by Skorm.
Declined: Alright, this is looking good. There are only a couple of things that are keeping this from being approved as it stands. Firstly, the barrier's area of effect is unspecified. I feel like this would reach a maximum radius of mid-range. The second thing is the barrier itself being F-Ranked. Making S and F-Rank Fuin requires you to have Advanced Fuinjutsu, which I didn't see in your inventory. So right now, that barrier aspect of the weapon would be A-Rank at maximum, which would also change the strength of the effects. But other than that, the weapon is fine. – Goetia
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