when it all ends the story

[desbes99]

Killer Bee - so this is it motha ****er you proper worked your ass of sucker
Naruto - yep this is the new tecnique
Killer Bee - it's even more powerfull than my tailed beast bomb yo
Naruto - the finished version of the 4th hokage's ultimate jutsu rasengan well of course it has some extras in it that make it super awesome
Killer Bee -
Naruto - so have you noticed ?
Killer Bee - noticed what newbie that has just learned how to control the kyuubi ?
Naruto - well when I'm in sage mode i can sense everybody's chakra and well i don't sense Captain Yamato
Killer Bee - let's go outside and check it out yo see if we're really missing a bro
They both walk to the outside of the turtle only to see that in the distance there are flames.
Killer Bee - oh no what's up with that bro
Naruto - i don't know but we should go check it out imediately
They both run of the turtle and straight away to the the fire in the distance. Meanwhile at Sasuke and Madara's hideout.
Madara - so ready to test out your new abilities Sasuke
Sasuke - first stop kill Naruto
Madara - i just have a few erands to run i'll be back in an hour be ready
Sasuke walks out only to see Kabuto instructing Iitachi to go out into section b and well practically just kill all.
Sasuke - you sumoned Itachi u bastard I'm going to kill you.

Next time sasuke vs kabuto

 

[desbes99]

Chapter 2
Sasuke - You b*****d how could you're just like all of them using Itachi for you're own puposes.

Kabuto - Now now Sasuke-kun there's no need to get all fired up i'm not using Itachi just his body.

Sasuke - That just makes it worse! I'm going to kill you!

Sasuke switched his eyes into E.M.S. and traped Kabuto into an ilusion.

Kabuto - you actually think you can trap me with you simple sharingan. You're still nothing but a fool Sasuke.

When sasuke used amaterasu instead of kabuto just thinking it is hapening it actually happend to him .

Sasuke - now release Itachi and all the people you used as puppets or die.

Kabuto realsed the technique.
-------------------------------Meanwhile on the battlefield----------------
Kakashi - everyone get away I'm going to use my M.S.

When suddenly all the puppets faded away and you could see all the dead bodies used as sacrifices.

Kakashi - what happened?

Sakura - Someone must have set of the technique.

------------------------------Back at the hideout-------------------------
Madara - Sasuke what are you doing we needed him and his E.T. to win the war!

Sasuke - Don't talk to me I'm really pissed of right now. You and your stupid war. Tsk...


BTW umm if you like this could you tell me why and if you dont could you give an idea of how to make it better. Because im not doing really well in my english and i thought it was a good idea to practise by making ff. So please tell me.
PS im only twelve so gimee some credit ty

 

[Escorpiius]

Well, it's short and indeed has lotz of grammar mistakes but since you're twelve...you should improve your english before trying FFs
Still, I like some rythms that KB had xd

 

[desbes99]

right can i just say that i got a couple ideas for the next chapter but im not really sure about them so its going to take some time before the next one comes out but it is going to be a lot longer

ps if you have some ideas could you tell me so i can add some to it thank you