WEAVING DESTINY CHAPTER ONE: Memories Of The Sun

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I'm back xd Hmmm What do I have to say about chapter one ?
Pros : Honestly, your skills as an author are quite impressive. You seem to adapt really well to the FanFic that people are looking for.

Cons : Well, I've gotta say that the story is a tad bit boring... I'm guessing you have that coming in the next few chapters seeing as you've got a bright mind and tons of potentiel. :D

Off to the next ^^
 
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geez, that's hot stuff... you're really good at writing :D

i'll be sure to learn a thing or two from your writing style :D
Thanks :D Had to complete that in a week. Always out of words as I said. xd:D

Love it! Would love to see more :)
Hi, you're new and thank you for noticing my work. I have this up to chapter 5 already. You will have to search thru the FanFic section tho. Or you can visit my profile and go to my Blog tab. Its all there. ;)
 

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Thanks :D Had to complete that in a week. Always out of words as I said. xd:D



Hi, you're new and thank you for noticing my work. I have this up to chapter 5 already. You will have to search thru the FanFic section tho. Or you can visit my profile and go to my Blog tab. Its all there. ;)
Great will take a look :)
 

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Another very enjoyable, the start part of the chapter had me giggling away. How typical Naruto. With a nice twist of events to the more sad/serious part of the story. Very nice writing of Kakashi's thoughts.

reposting comment here instead of the blog ;)
 

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I did notice. I'm glad you like it, thanks.

Well, the story kinda had a fall down after chapter 5 - I must say, I really loved the way I did the descriptions/narration there. After that, I had to go down to details and so it lost a number of viewers and commentaries. But as I've been having this story in mind even before I joined NB, I still went through it. Its currently running with 12 chapters. 13 is long over due as I've been caught up with a lot of other things. Though, I might post it within the week.

Cya,see you around then and sorry for the late reply.
 

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LOL! You just made a good humor out of Naruto's sleep. Its soo like him to be dreaming of Sakura, eh? :D I like the way you described kakashi's inner thoughts there. On to the next chapter now. ;)
 

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LOL! You just made a good humor out of Naruto's sleep. Its soo like him to be dreaming of Sakura, eh? :D I like the way you described kakashi's inner thoughts there. On to the next chapter now. ;)
LOL! I'm glad you had a good laugh at it. :) As for kakashi's somewhat solitary moment - you'll find answers to it as the story goes along. :) Thank you for reading. :)
 
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