Wasted

[Yuse]

Tell me what you think just a quick poem nothing special​

Wasted
with all the wasted hours
i could have built myself a hundred towers
with all the wasted money
i could have lived a life sweeter then honey
with all the wasted love
i could have created a relationship im proud of
and instead of wasting my time crying tears of agony
i could have chosen to be with my family​

 

[Bakimono]

Doesn't flow that well

 

[Lady M]

It's lovely, and I can relate to it so much!

Good job! ^^

 

[Zaphkiel]

I think it's simple yet effective. Add a little more 'umph' next time around and you have yourself a nice poem.

 

[Yuse]

I think it's simple yet effective. Add a little more 'umph' next time around and you have yourself a nice poem.

yeah didnt work to much on it just a quick poem^__^

 

[flamefletcher]

Gud one!
Bet i Couldnt write such a beauty

 

[Tenshi Hikari]

Very heartfelt and sincere.

 

[Jennifer Lawrence]

I liked the first few lines. You're pretty good

 

[Ψ Veritas Ψ]

Nice poem

 

[BusinessManTeno]

pretty lame to be honest
:|

 

[Akuma]

It isn't bad, but it doesn't have the "thing" to make it complete.

 

[Ryóma]

It's pretty good.

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Good poem =D

 

[Waindo]

well done bro!