Vengeance Chapter 5

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Setting: The House of The Abandoned

Characters: Izuma, Satan, Izuma's Dad, Izuma's Mother, Hideko, Emma, Ichiyo, Mr Fujima, Mystery Man, Juro, Nurse Watson

New Characters: Mystery Man-???


Mystery

A tall man walks in the door. His lower face is covered with a scarf of some sort, he has a fancy black hat on and his eyes were covered with a bandana. The man speaks.

Mystery Man: Has step 2 been completed?
Mr Fujima: Its a work in process, sit down take your coat off stay a while. Said with a wild smirk on his face.

The man looks at him confused. Then he replies in with a terrifying face and a voice that shook the foundations of the house.
Mystery Man: Do you know who i am? How dare yo speak to me in such a mannor!

Mr Fujima puts his feet up oon his desk. He grins at the angry man, then he wags his finger.
Mr Fujima: Ah, Ah, Ah, not so fast. If you really want to find it. You and i will need to work together.
The door screeches. Then eyes are spotted. "Right on time, Mrs Watson. Come on in." Mrs. Watson walks into the door.

Mrs Watson: Step 2 has been completed.
Mystery Man: Now we wait, Its all a matter of time before we find it

A book falls off of the shelf. Then a page in the book opens. Mr Fujima scurries to pick it up. The man ignores Mr Fujima's hasty actions. He walks out of the office. Mrs Watson sees him out of the house. She closes the door then thunder is heard. She reopens the door and the man is gone. Mr Fujima still in his office lays the book down on his desk. The book opens itself to the same page.

"The skys cried and the ground trembled in fear" "What lies dormant is hidden in plain site'' "All can be seen with through gold"


 

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I enjoy the aspects of Greek mythology but the story is a bit inconsistent. Continue and I would like to read the other chapters. I love the concept, but if you spend more time with structure and sentence fluency it can become better.
 

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sorry about that i wanted to put out a chapter when i hadn't fully finished the thought but i assure you the next chapter will be way longer
 
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