Vampire life

Roxas Uchiha

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Vampires chapter1 the beginning of it all

hey hope u like this story and for all of u that read my akira story or the other one please tell mi if u like it i might delet the akira story since no one rate or message or even take it so yeah anyway please banner would b appreciated if u want mi to read your story or quizes tell me and i will as soon as possible anyway injoy^^ yereanth16



that u for now anyways on with the story please read memo it important o.k and it might help u
Roxas UCHIHA
yes ma"am (ty goodquiztaker^^)
no-.- (bad quiztaker no present)
mizuki p.o.v
Hello i use to b your average 13year old normal girl i had school,family,and homework well my y dont we go backward some time earlyer
August,6,2002
today i was walking home from school with my older brother tsuki when we passed a ally we heard some noise so being as curious as i where we whent and follow the noise when we stoped we saw to drain girls with 2 kids and one man who looked to b 24 as i looked closer i saw that the boy had the drain women who looked to b in her ealy2o dead and the boy must b 14 or so the girl had the other lady who looked to b 25 her and the boy seem to have blood onb there lips just when we where going to run we heard a voise that sounded like a angle talking
"WHERE DO U THINK U R GOING AMAYA WAT SHOULD WE DO WITH THEM" the boy said and now that i look at him he was beyond stuning and not to mention his eyes where a dark purple his hair look so soft that i wanted to toach it it was a weird purple black color every part of him was stunning it was like he was a angle.
"i say drain there blood shaddow it will b a tasty meal" the girl known as amaya said as i look closely i saw she was stunning like the shaddow boy her beutiful ruby eyes was amazing and she as well sounded and looked like a angle
"yes i suppose" Shaddow said smirking and showing his 2 white fangs
"no u would not like us we taste bad horrible yuck discusting ewwww please we stink really let us leave and we wont tell a soul i promise " i asured him with a pleading look
"Mizuki listen to mi i want u to run as fast as possible and never look back promise mi u wont look back i...i ..i love u mizuki remember it and never forget mi now RUN AND NEVER LOOK BACK GOT IT" Tsuki told mi seriously while glaring at shaddow
I m sorry brother but u stay and i stay we promise to b together for ever and if u die then i shall die with u i will not make the mistake one more time of being scare and helpless"i said wile tears felt from my cheeks to the floor
"Give it up for the dovey lovey now if u r done saying goodbye to each other we will finish u up" Shaddow told us at this i felt 2 fangs at my necks i took one last look at my ride and saw Amaya biting my brother neck then i passed out

r u ending it here nooooooo i want more(dont worry i wont stop now^^ now chilax)
r u finishing it miss(with quiztaker like u never^_^)
STILL MIZUKI P.O.V
When i woke up the first thing i saw was that i was on my purple with black dragon room and to my suprise so where shaddow ,Amaya and the other man known as Andrew-sensei
"W..What am i doing here and ouch wat did u do to mi shaddow and how is my brother did u kill him if u killed tsuki then kill mi ouch my neck " At this my brother woke up
"where r those damn creature where r they i will destroy them i tell u those creature better not have hurt u where r they mizuki"tsuki was saying like crazy his face was beyond red
"Relax kid now look my brother and i accidentelly turned u to half vampire in other word our assisten u will have to come with us and get train in the vampire way unless u want to destroy your family now choose o.k "Amaya said sternly yet her angelic voice and figure where there
"I choose to go with u tsuki wat will u do"
if u r going i might as well go i dont trust this creatures with u"tsuki said while glaring at the vampires
"watch your tung please we did not ment for this to happen u must calm down please" there sensei Andrew said with a beutiful soft angelic voice and of course he was pale and angelic looking i wonder if i m drooling hope not

well that day we fake death and we where buried when at around midnight the funeral was done and the vampires amaya,shaddow,and Andrew came for us my last look was at my parent the rukison family i saw my mother still crying it broke my heart i wanted to cry as well i loved my small family so much the only good thing is that my brother was with mi

3 Month later
we have been with shaddow, amaya, and andrew sensei for a couple of month Amaya and mi where best friend and Andrew sensei was like a father we never had my father left my mother and marryed another women when i was born leaving my mother by herself with us. Shaddow well i like Shaddow i feel funny like there r butterfly in my stomach i even look diffrent so does tsuki i found out vampires do not turn into bats but they r able to talk to bats and wolfs they do not turn to wolfs and they can stay in the sun for 8 hours then it will kill them i also found out they only drink a small amount of blood to keep alive and they r able to drink animal blood and humen food there r 2 type of vamires creatures there r vimpirity who r the vampire brothers in blood exsept they r evil and have light purple skin while vampires have pale skin and vimpirity kill when they drink blood they can only stay in the sun for 2 minutes some have the abbility to stay 1 hour max in the sun then they die they r more weak in the sun then vampires
we where in a forest in brazil heading to white blood vampire mountain in Austrailia we have only slep 3 day in this month and 16 time in all thru this 2 month we est durin day and go by night tsuki and i only drink animal blood we refuse to drink humen blood. full vampires run a lout in one sec they could be in 10 city of the same state while we vampires in a sec could only b in 5 city they r so fast that it looks like they where flying instead of running
May we rest for half a minute Andrew sensei i m beyond tired please"i ask Andrew senseias politley as possibble i was exsasted we have been running for more than 19 hours today it hard truthfully
"yes we may ^^" Andrew sensei said in his sweet angelic voice
"Well...well look wat we have here if it isnt some vampires this will b fun" A man that look around 27 said he had light purple skin and there i knew he was a vampirity but he was stunning as well his eyes had the same color as andrew sensei in fact they look a lout alike to andrew sensei exsept for the skin his hair was a beutiful red with black highlite
"Who.. who r u and wat do u want with us"i ask him trying to look strong and glare but i fale miserbly
in a blink of a eye the vimpirity was next to mi
"i m Akira Halexsanden Ivilian it a pleasure to meet such a beuty and u r" he said motioning to mi
"Mizuki"i reply then i punch him it seems it did not hurt him but man it hurt mi ouch his face is like medal actually stronger
"That all to bad "at this akira punch mi in the stomach and i spit out blood shaddow punch him in the face he felt to the ground and just kick shaddow then tsuki this went out for a while then
"Leave my student alone akira or u will pay dearly now childrens run and get out of here"Andrew sensei said with a cold voice that i never knew he had he seems serious and mad he tereffy mi
"Sorry drew we r staying here and fighting " Tsuki said replying and smirking
"Indeed" Shaddow agree

"I agree as well"amaya continue
"Hai as your student we r here for u Andrew sensei" i finished
"Boohoo give it up for the dovey lovey yuck it discusting i think i m going to hurl" Akira said with a discusted face
FFW to the end of the fight(i m lazy sorry i had to re-rite this hehe^^)
well the fight ended in a tie akira had a broken arm and a cut on his cheek
i looked like a bloody corps walking on earth
tsuki was unconsuse with a broken arm and to slash onein the right cheek and one on his stomach
Shaddow had a broken rib and 2 big slash on his stomach and a x slach on his forehead it was small but i was still worry
Amaya had a small cut on her face but her clothes and hat was still clean
Andrew sensei was the worst he had 2 broken ribs 1 bad leg 1 broken arm 2 big slash on his stomach and 1 big slash on his face
"we must rest Andrew sensei we need to take u to a hospital or tent your wond " i said in a caring tone with a worry look on my face
"We will b all rite do not worry mizu we vampire heal quick it will take this day and we will b back to normal"andrew sensei said back to his sweet caring voice and i was glad after convinsing mi everything was alrite we rested after all tommorow we must continue are journy
 

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Kura, what can I say other then u couldn't even make it past the first paragraph. I'm not trying to be harsh at all, but your story does not flow.

Maybe that's why people didn't read your other ones -.- .

It's hard to read, the paragraphs need to be seperated, so it is easier.

You need to find that flow I was talking about, read over your work, see if it makes sence to you, it sure don't to me. When I write I do at least 2-3 ruff drafts of my work before even showing people.

Also it's spelt angel.... -.- no angle
 
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