"Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

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"Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

"Utopic Monkeys"

Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 1 - " The Legendary Knight "


Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "


" When the world is filled with evil. Warriors of hope appear.
The Utopic Knights.
Long ago a virus has spread over the entire Earth. Most of the population
was dizimated. Only the stronger & the richer survived.
Chaos begun to rule the world. Destruction is the every day breath of the sole survivors and the richer got even richer and more corrupt, creating an entire new Utopic world shaped to their greed, desires and interests.
That's when the Knights of Hope appeared. They were called Space Monkeys.
With their bodies as their weapons; Their fists can rip the sky and reach the gods.
Their feet can split the ground and cause an Earthquake. And now,
these Knights with Bravery, proud and power have appeared once again as the new Space Monkeys.."​

Babilon A.D. , 2287 ( Utopic Future )

- Back in " Pink Hot ***** Repairments " smelly and stinky, fishy urban city, shitty Old type of Garage.

Our main character live in Utopic, hierarchized and Post-Apocalyptic times.

A surprised Shura wonders.​

Shura - The Legendary Knight,huh? I see..

Dante - So it seems.
Sujiro is a reliable source.

Shura - Yeah, i know.

Some excitement starts make an apparition in Shura's face.​

Dante - So I gotta go for a while. Must pick up some pieces for a broken MotorCycle for a customer.


Shura - What type of pieces?

Dante - Just some random stuff.

Shura - Humm.. That old Moto??
Why he even gets in the trouble of try and get it fixed?
What type of pieces would work on that old crap?

Shura - Where you go to pick them up?

Dante - At Bunny Larry at the other side of Babilon. You wanna come along?

Shura - I'll pass, bro. Maybe next time.
I'll just chill in your joint..

Dante - Ok.. You'll stick around here?

Shura - Yeah i have my iNano.XY7 here with me and got an hold of a new cybernetic Porn called " Raw Intake - up yours! ".
Just gonna chill around here and check this out for awhile.
Maybe have a lonely date with my right one.

iNano.XY7 is the movement detection technology + motor skill sensory with adaptable voice that allows one to see videos, hear music or see live news through the combination of iNano.XY7 technology and inserted smart computerized mini-chips into one's brain.​

Dante - You never change, Shura. You need a real relationship in your life to shake things up.

Shura - Yeah..Yeah. The usual talk

Shura expresses a boring look

Dante - ok then. I'll be back in an hour or so. Later, Shura

Shura - Later, Dante. Drive safe!!

Outside one only can find a thick, heavy, sick musty air. Filled with disease, misery and despair.

People dying and crawling throught the streets in despair trying to escape from their fate getting infected by the virus and eaten up by them.
A layer of destruction all around.
Destroyed buildings,
dizimated bridges,
broken homes and shattered lifes.

Dante enters his car after avoiding some slow and hungry infected and drives to Bunny Larry on the other side of the town.

About 15 minutes later..

Dante arrives at the street of Bunny Larry and proceeds to get out of his red car.
Real loud noises are coming out of Bunny Larry's place.


Dante wonders what could be happening inside Bunny Larry's residence.

Dante enters Bunny Larry's place as the door seemed crushed open.

A man grabbing Bunny Larry's dead corpse by the neck is screaming.​


Mystery Man - Why did you sold him out?? Why??
He trusted you.. You just got what you deserved.

Dante is in shock by witnessing such violated and damaged body. The body of his friend.. Bunny Larry​

The Mystery Man turns around. A huge scar on his neck and right eye.
horse-headed monkey-face kind of features and messy, spiked blond hair.
Very dark eyes and a deep aura of revenge around him.
About 6?1 and 180 pounds.

Dante - Who are you?

Mystery Man seems surprised by the courage of Dante​

Mystery Man - Quite the valliant one you are!!
I'll be the one doing all the questions around here.
you may not have much time left to live, depending on what you say next.

Dante - I really don't care.
Why do you invaded and killed so ruthlessly Bunny Larry?
Who the hell are you?

Mystery Man - Didn't you heard me right?
You really pushing the envelop here.
I don't know who you are or what you want from this place but leave now and forget what you saw or else i'll be forced to..

Dante abruptly Interrupts him..​

Dante - I said it before and i say it again. I DONT CARE!!
No one kills without a motive and the person who does it is pure trash in my eyes.
Bunny Larry was a great person and friend.
I wanna know why you ended his life.
He has family...
Did you thought about that?? When you were ending his life?
You just marked forever the life of the persons who care about him, love him and need him.


Mystery Man - You shouldn't talk wise words when you don't know the facts of what just happened here.
I marked the life of those who love him just like he marked mine.
He just got what he deserved, this piece of scum.

I don't kill for no reason. I'm not one to take just for the sake of it.

Dante - Then why? Answer me..

Mystery Man - I don't have to give you any explanations,plus time has runned out.
You had your chance but you seem the stubborn type.
Unfortunely..
You were at the wrong place at the wrong time.
I can't risk the success of my vendetta because of a witness.

Mystery Man - I'll have to end your life as well.

Dante - Do what you have to do. I'm prepared for my destiny since the day i borned in this cursed land.
but..

keep in mind that everyone pays for their actions sooner or later.

Mystery Man - Strong, courageous words from a person about to leave this world for good.
hummm...
Fair enough..
I'll reveal a little about myself.

Mystery Man - You seem like a brave and honest man.
At least i'll let you know the name of who's going to save you from this cursed land.

Dante - ??

Mystery Man - Ch? of the Eight-Headed Hydra

Ch? - I'll kill you with my Fatal Hydra fang attack.
You'll feel no pain. It'll be over in seconds.
It's your reward for standing in front of me so bravely.

Fatal Hydra Fang - A lightning based attack executed with the user right hand that takes the form of
a small lightning blade that slits the opponent's throat.

Element Style:Lightning
Type:Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short/Mid
Speed: Mach 1.5

Ch? raises his right hand and performs a ruthless power strike at a high-Speed towards a defendless Dante..​

Dante ( Screams ) - You are not that type of person.. I can see that as clear as daylight!!

Is Ch? attack really going to connect on Dante's neck??
Is this the end for Dante??
Why is Ch? seeking revenge??
Stay tuned for the Next chapter of "Utopic Monkeys".


Enjoy!!!​
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

First.
Pure awesomeness. This is getting really interesting.
This Cho guy seems strong.
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

Ooo i can't wait till the next chapter ^^
& This is really good ^^
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

this is pretty awesome :p except for ipad part as there's nothing to love about it >.>
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

Here i am!... Stuck in the middel with you...

Nice chapter, so next chapter soon then? Nice:)

Comments?... Well. Its good. Not only the story, but also the character development and the enviroment describtion.

Keep going!;)

Since somebody else started. My turn:

The Legendary Knight will turn out to be Dante! That would shock Shura when Dante reveals that during their fight in the tournament!

Damn, i`m good in predicting stuff!:D

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Or it might turn out to be that other friend who told Dante that the legendary knight would appear in the tournament;)

EDIT2:

Sujiro, i believe it was;)
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

Good Job dude, it's getting pretty interesting. Can't wait to see whats gonna happen next, hopefully Dante beats up Cho but lets him live. I think they might get a relationship going and end up fighting in the tournament together.

A quick question. Is the iPad3X, 3 times better than the normal iPad?
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

Thanks guys so much..
3rd chapter is complete only needs some changes here and there.
Will work on the 4TH chapter today which i have an idea of what's going to be and i'm very excited to write about it.

Nice predictions going on but i won't give the story away that easy.. I can tell you, you guys will start shitting your pants in the end of this arc and by the time you are in the third arc you guys will be shitting bricks.

Please guys & girls subscribe the threads and you'll know instantly when the Third Chapter is posted that way.
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

Good Job dude, it's getting pretty interesting. Can't wait to see whats gonna happen next, hopefully Dante beats up Cho but lets him live. I think they might get a relationship going and end up fighting in the tournament together.

A quick question. Is the iPad3X, 3 times better than the normal iPad?
More like 30 times better.. This is 277 years into the future.
This is a prediction FanFiction xd

It looks like this FF became more popular than i expected my friend. Nice work:D

I finally got some time now, so i`m going to read part two, so be prepared for judgement day when i`m finished!;)
Yeah.. It seems it's getting pretty popular with only 2 Chapters so far.
Then again, i think i'm really onto something with this one.
Because i'm creating my own Universe with my own creations and characterists from the scratch and people will have time to get familiriated with them, pick his favourites, etc..
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

Good Job dude, it's getting pretty interesting. Can't wait to see whats gonna happen next, hopefully Dante beats up Cho but lets him live. I think they might get a relationship going and end up fighting in the tournament together.

A quick question. Is the iPad3X, 3 times better than the normal iPad?
Yes. I wanna see Dante beat the crap out of Cho as well despite Kenshin had pointed out in his other thread that the fighting skills of Dante are not known.

Really anxious for the 3rd Chapter. Can't wait!!
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

The Mystery Man turns around. A huge scar on his neck and right eye.
horse-headed monkey-face kind of features and messy, spiked blond hair.
Very dark eyes and a deep aura of revenge around him.
About 6?1 and 180 pounds.
I'm imagining Beavis from Beavis and Butt-Head but with a huge ass scar. xd

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Two.. " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "

I'm imagining Beavis from Beavis and Butt-Head but with a huge ass scar. xd

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LOL..
Beavis looks too much of an asshole to look like Ch?.
As some of you know, i draw as well.
So i'll be posting the sketches of the characters. Shura is made already.
 
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