"Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

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"Utopic Monkeys"

Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 1 - " The Legendary Knight "


Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

" When the world is filled with evil. Warriors of hope appear.
The Utopic Knights.
Long ago a virus has spread over the entire Earth. Most of the population
was dizimated. Only the stronger & the richer survived.
Chaos begun to rule the world. Destruction is the every day breath of the sole survivors and the richer got even richer and more corrupt, creating an entire new Utopic world shaped to their greed, desires and interests.
That's when the Knights of Hope appeared. They were called Space Monkeys.
With their bodies as their weapons; Their fists can rip the sky and reach the gods.
Their feet can split the ground and cause an Earthquake. And now,
these Knights with Bravery, proud and power have appeared once again as the new Space Monkeys.."​

Babilon A.D. , 2287 ( Utopic Future )

- Back in Bunny Larry's place. In a post-Apocalyptic Chaos.
Destroyed objects everywhere, broken doors, shattered windows, broken spirits, crushed souls.
it's all that can be witnessed in that place.

An enormous amount of Infected People thirsty for blood and flesh come closer and closer of an armless, wounded and almost passed out Ch?.

A fatigued and energyless, halfhearted Sujiro and Dante who seemly cannot watched out for himself in fighting situations.

The situation is not good for our heros.

Dante - What we gonna do?

Sujiro - Crap! I don't have enough energy to kill them all.
They are so many!

Sujiro - I'll try to buy some time for us to find a way out of here.

Ch? - Don't spend your last energies... It's useless... We gonna..

Ch?'s vision is cloudy and he re-starts to cough blood.​

Sujiro gathers some energy and performs an attack over the Living Dead.​

Sujiro - Hold on to your sits,boys!!

Sujiro - LIGHTNING EXPLOSIVE WAVE!!

Lightning Explosive Wave

Element Style:Lightning
Type:Attack
Rank:C
Range:Short
Speed: Mach 1

Sujiro draws upon his Energy reserves and unleashes a mighty blast that strikes down everyone nearby, releasing a lightning wave of energy from his body, causing a severe amount of destruction.

The explosive wave kills close to 15 Zombies in the front lines. Blood and limbs everywhere but the Deceased creatures that were in the back keep on getting closer.​

Sujiro falls on his knees fatigued and finding harder and harder to breathe​

Dante - It's of no use.. We won a few seconds at best.
They are all over the place.

Ch? - I told him it was useless.

One zombie who managed to got closer without being noticed approaches a kneel down Sujiro and jumps over him.​

Dante ( Screams in fear ) - SUJIRO!!!

Ch? spits at the zombie. The zombie turns into stone.​

Sujiro is relieved.​

Sujiro - Thanks!! I would have been caught..

Sujiro stands up.​

Sujiro - Ok. It's clear as daylight now that one of us has to serve as a decoy. While the other 2 escape.

Dante - But..

Sujiro - No but.. Dante.. It's the only way out.

Dante shows some sadness in his face​

Dante (Thinking) - One of them will do it for sure as they don't think of me as any important in a fight!! I'm always the same useless crap!!

Sujiro - You Dante don't know how to fight them and you Ch? are severly wounded and almost passed out.

Sujiro - I'll d...

Ch? interrupts.​

Ch? - I do it!!

Sujiro argues with Ch?​

Sujiro - No way. You are not in any shape or form to perform this task.

Ch? - Don't underestimate my will. You have almost no energy left..
You are not the one to play the Hero roll as well. Drop the act.

Ch? - Who nominated you the leader here, anyway?

Ch? - You need to save your friend. It's your reward for beating me.
I'll serve as decoy. GO NOW!!

Sujiro - You are crazy.. You will last 30 seconds at best in your state and condition.
They are way too many, even if they are weak. The numbers will take it's toll.

Ch? - Even those valuable 30 seconds are enough for you to get out of here.
Start gathering what's left of your energy now.. We have no time to lose.

Sujiro - But..

Ch? - You know Sujiro..
First, you have to give up..
First, you have to know, not fear, Know!!


That some day, you gonna die.

Ch? - It's only after we lost everything. That we are free to do anything.

Ch? ( Screams ) - GO NOW BEFORE I CHANGE MY MIND!!

Sujiro very surprised with Ch?'s words.. Expresses agreement and respect​

Sujiro - Ch?... Live to fight another day.

Sujiro - I'm counting on you. I want to fight you again.

Ch? - I will.. I must.. My mission is not over yet.

Sujiro smiles to Ch? and electicity starts to emanate from Sujiro's body.

Sujiro is now gathering his last reserves of energy.​

Sujiro - Grab my arm, DANTE!!

Dante grabs Sujiro's arm.​

Meanwhile, Ch? takes up a scroll out from his left pocket and summons a huge circle of Fire that surrounds the three
and starts bursting throught the entire Room burning alot of Zombies to eternal death.​

Ch? - This way i'll have to fight less zombies as most part will get burn by the flames.
Hurry up and leave.

Sujiro takes a Silver Knife out of a pocket next to his right knee and hands it over to Ch?.​

Sujiro - I want that knife back..

My father gave it to me in his Deathbed before he died.
It's a precious item and will serve as a symbol that you must survive and
return it to me.

Sujiro looks deeply into Ch?'s eyes..​

Sujiro - See you soon, Ch?.

Ch? - Go now!! There's no time to sweet, small talk.

Dante - Survive!!

Sujiro - SHUKUCHI

Sujiro performs a Shukuchi that enables him enough force to break throught the roof with Dante grabbing his arm.

More and more Infected People approach an armless Ch?. The remaining of the Room is now set up as a Scenario that looks taken from an Armagedon.

Bursting flames everywhere, corpses,severed heads and bodyparts start to be disposed everywhere as Ch? tries his best to survive with whatever forces he still has, using his enormous will as his most precious weapon.

Screams of Pain of the cursed Living Corpses melting into oblivion seems to be the soundtrack of what's happening in what is left of Bunny Larry's residence. Inferno just broke free in Babilon.

Meanwhile, In the Roof.

Sujiro gets on his feet without any energy left, seemingly exhausted after breaking throught the roof with the right side of his Upper Body using his Shukuchi.​

Dante - I Cant believe this!!
More zombies here. How did they manage to climb up here??

Dante - Are you alright, Sujiro??

Sujiro - I'll survive. My MotorCycle is in the back of the house. We only have to jump there and we are out of here!!

Dante sees the big red MotorCycle close to Bunny Larry's garden from the roof but several zombies are circling it.​

Dante - Bad news, Sujiro!!

Dante - Zombies are circling your bike..

Sujiro - Annoying little bastards.

Dante - We have to run. This zombies in the roof are getting closer.

Sujiro kneel down trying to catch his breathe wonders and asks.​

Sujiro - How many zombies are next to the bike??

Dante - About 5!

Sujiro - Perfect..

Sujiro takes a little Scroll out of his back pocket and attaches some little stones left from the hole Sujiro made throught the roof with his Shukuchi to escape. He attaches them to the scroll.

Sujiro proceeds to throw the scroll near to the Moto's location.

The Scroll lands right near the Zombies that were circling the Motorcicle.
The Scroll opens and it's The Scroll of Bermudas.

Scroll of Bermudas - It's a scroll that when opens, creates a vortex that can suck up until 10 weak,low powered, moving, living materias into an alternative dimension in the Bermuda's Triangle in a never ending nightmare, trapped forever.​

The Scroll opens and creates a little tornado that sucks the 5 Living Corpses into the Scroll.
The Scroll closes itself again and explodes.
All the 5 Zombies have disappeared.

Sujiro - seems like they disappeared all.

Dante - Let's jump and get out of here.

Sujiro (Thinking) - Goodbye Ch?...

Both jump to near Sujiro's Motorcycle.

They start running in the Moto's direction and get in the Moto.​

Dante - I guess i'll have to pick up my car later..

Sujiro - Hold on tight, Dante.

Dante grabs Sujiro's waist.​

Sujiro looks behind to Bunny Larry's house. Only to see a seemingly never ending fire.
A lot of flames and smoke erupting from Bunny Larry's house. The house has turned into a living fire that could have been easily made by Amaterasu The Goddess of the Sun.
Just a giant and horrifying Labareda at this point.​

Sujiro - I can feel you are still alive... Ch?

Sujiro starts accelarating and they start getting out of there.​

In the road home to "Pink Hot ***** Repairments".​

Dante - How did you knew i was there?

Sujiro - I didn't.. I was in the area and some neighbour of Larry was running wild yelling that Larry was getting tortured and assaulted in his own house.

Sujiro - I tried to get there with caution as soon as i heard it.

Sujiro - Luckily for you, i got there in time.
Larry didn't had the same luck as you, though.

Dante - I'm still shocked at Ch?'s story. You think he was telling us the truth??

Sujiro asnwers without any doubts.​

Sujiro - Yes!! I could see it in his eyes and through his soul.
I just knew he was telling the truth.

Dante - You think he'll survive.

Sujiro - I know he will

Sujiro has a smiley expression while saying it.​

12 minutes later​

They arrive at "Pink Hot ***** Repairments"

Both get out of the MotorCycle and Sujiro falls in the ground fatigued.
Dante picks him up and Sujiro starts walking supported uppon Dante's left shoulder until the garage door.

They getting near the door and start smelling an awful odor.​

Sujiro - What is this?? It's just plain awful and disgusting..

Sujiro - Owww!!

Sujiro twists his face in disgust..​

Dante - It can't be!!

Did Ch? survived??
And what is that awful smell that both Dante and Sujiro smell uppon arriving??
Stay tuned for the Next chapter of "Utopic Monkeys"..

Next Chapter is OUT Tomorrow or at latest on SUNDAY!!!


Enjoy!!!​
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Previous Chapters:

Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 1 - " The Legendary Knight "



Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 2 - " Ch? The Avenger, Introduction "



Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 3 - " Ch? The Avenger, Medusa Spit "



Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 4 - " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "



Utopic Monkeys - Chapter 5 - " Ch? The Avenger, The Revelation "

 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Bojakka Bojakka, 619, bojakka bojakka, Rey Mysterio!

Awsome, Awsome, Awsome! Your Nr. 1 fan is finally back!:D

The first thing i was thinking when Sujiro gave Cho his knife, was ZABUSA! Knife in his mouth, taking out everyone!:D

Btw, FIRST!!!:D
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Not that it already does, but if you could draw as well, this manga would be insane, maybe even officially published!:D

Harshit188 on this forum is said to be a very good drawer. Why don`t you and him join forces?

Your story and script, and his drawings!:D

Well, it may be streching it a little far, but its worth mentioning;)
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Not that it already does, but if you could draw as well, this manga would be insane, maybe even officially published!:D

Harshit188 on this forum is said to be a very good drawer. Why don`t you and him join forces?

Your story and script, and his drawings!:D

Well, it may be streching it a little far, but its worth mentioning;)
I dunno mate.
I know that he begun reading the FanFiction recently. Let's see what he says when he sees your post.
I don't know about a full adaptation with him drawing but maybe he would be interested and trying a prototype, like doing chapter one or something.
I would have to give him my sketches of the Characters though.
Yeah but it seems like some people here would like to push it to a manga version.
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Good to hear that you`re considering others opinions and advices. I personally would love to see this manga draw:D

The only drawback i can see, is that we would probably have to wait awhile between each chapter:-/
Or, you could make the script like you are now, and he would draw the manga later, possible with fillersxd

So you are Kishi without drawings, and he is the anime, but with manga instead:p
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Good to hear that you`re considering others opinions and advices. I personally would love to see this manga draw:D

The only drawback i can see, is that we would probably have to wait awhile between each chapter:-/
Or, you could make the script like you are now, and he would draw the manga later, possible with fillersxd

So you are Kishi without drawings, and he is the anime, but with manga instead:p
LOL xd
Glad to see people are this excited when the best is still far to arrive.
Shura is not even in the scene yet.

What you thought of Ch??? Is he dead??
And what about the awful, strange smell that's coming from the garage??
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

LOL xd
Glad to see people are this excited when the best is still far to arrive.
Shura is not even in the scene yet.

What you thought of Ch??? Is he dead??
And what about the awful, strange smell that's coming from the garage??
I`m not quite sure about that.

But the smell is probably coming from a broken/expired P****xd
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

should really b made into an anime
Thanks my good friend, Castiel.
All this great feedback means alot to me..

Chapter 1 was edited to fit the current mode of writing. Chapter 2 & 3 will need to be edited as well.
You guys can now revisit Chapter 1.
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

SOOO fun to read!!! i think Cho has to live! i bet they find the knife, get all sad because they think he died but then he makes a kick a$$ return. i think the smell is rotting bodies hehe :)
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Six.. " Ch? The Avenger - Sacrifice "

Enjoyed this chapter very much. Nice refference to Amaterasu the goddess of Sun
 
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