"Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "
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Good chapters - I just read them all.
Overall, the story is very good, but the chapters are a bit short in my opinion. ^^
Good chapters - I just read them all.
Overall, the story is very good, but the chapters are a bit short in my opinion. ^^
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "
I actually though that they had the perfect size to not become a turn-off for the readers.
Last chapter i wrote, Chapter 5 is actually a little bigger and i kinda feel it was way too big.
But it's nice you say that seems like you want to read more out of each chapter and that you are enjoying.
Thanks.
Last chapter i wrote, Chapter 5 is actually a little bigger and i kinda feel it was way too big.
But it's nice you say that seems like you want to read more out of each chapter and that you are enjoying.
Thanks.
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For me this chapter was the best so far
For me this chapter was the best so far
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again the last page and sujiro is in danger............in all good one, but sometime it seems you are dragging things.....
again the last page and sujiro is in danger............in all good one, but sometime it seems you are dragging things.....
Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "
My impulsive prediction proved me wrong as I didn't expect Dante to be some kind of a "sharp shooter", blocking the spit from reaching Sujiro.
Sujiro is like Kakashi or Sasuke, someone with wicked fast moves and with a chidori tech. The sword from heaven seems like a lighting blade (improved version of chidori) to me. OTOH, basing to Yu Yu Hakusho, I could see Sujiro's moves a resemblance of Hiei's.
Yikes, anyone whose weapon coming out of his/her mouth is a close resemblance to Orochimaru. Gross enough! xd
There are too many inconclusive statements that supports the cliff-hanger at the end. I hope they'd eventually be revealed one by one in the future chapters, as well as the main reason of Cho's vendetta in detail.
My impulsive prediction proved me wrong as I didn't expect Dante to be some kind of a "sharp shooter", blocking the spit from reaching Sujiro.
Sujiro is like Kakashi or Sasuke, someone with wicked fast moves and with a chidori tech. The sword from heaven seems like a lighting blade (improved version of chidori) to me. OTOH, basing to Yu Yu Hakusho, I could see Sujiro's moves a resemblance of Hiei's.
Yikes, anyone whose weapon coming out of his/her mouth is a close resemblance to Orochimaru. Gross enough! xd
There are too many inconclusive statements that supports the cliff-hanger at the end. I hope they'd eventually be revealed one by one in the future chapters, as well as the main reason of Cho's vendetta in detail.
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Well, you deserved it as even though we don't know each other on a personal level you have been a real true friend and I'm happy that you are feeling better much ^.^ Yes! I was right about Dante, he really is an epic character. Well, it was from what I have observed and the characters are all really kakkoii! I just read chapter four (I know right-I am extremely behind!!! sumimasen!) I am in the middle of doing something at the moment and then I'm logging off but I will read chapter five tomorrow, I promise and maybe even more if I have the time. Dante was awesome as he bought Sujiro that little chance. Sujiro's speed is epic and Ch? thinks he has everyone defeated but he underestimated them last move and sustained heavy damage as a result and apparently failed to learn the first time as he is doing it again lol The next chapter will be great and I can't wait to read it as well as the pictures of the characters as I would indeed love to see Dante?s.
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We'll see if he's still alive or not despite armless.
Ch? managed to have a great surprising turn in the end. And i almost felt sorry for him.
We'll see if he's still alive or not despite armless.
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "
Kind of hard to survive in a house surrounded by flames, 40 zombies, no energy left and armless. But you never know. 
Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "
You`re practically saying that he has no chance at all:-/
Hey! Don`t give away his fateKind of hard to survive in a house surrounded by flames, 40 zombies, no energy left and armless. But you never know.
You`re practically saying that he has no chance at all:-/John Constantine
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "
Hey! Don`t give away his fate
Odds can always be beat xd
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