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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

Kenshin Himura said:
I'm not English that's the problem.
But i thought they were very well writed as all said in the previous threads. Just some errors here and there but thanks.

They take about an hour to write one. It's much quicker because i have all in mind in advance.
I already know about what i'm gonna write in the next chapters.
The plot is already outlined in my mind, that's why i'm able to write so quick.​
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I meant spelling and grammar errors.
The story is alright.

It's good that you know the plot in advance too.
Especially if it's 120 chapters in advance. Wow.

I will be surprised if it goes on for that long.
Now you have to keep on going just to prove me wrong.
xd
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

Jediah said:
I meant spelling and grammar errors.
The story is alright.

It's good that you know the plot in advance too.
Especially if it's 120 chapters in advance. Wow.

I will be surprised if it goes on for that long.
Now you have to keep on going just to prove me wrong.
xd
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It's just off the top of my head but what i have in mind has "fruit" for 100-150 chapters.
Just keep on subscribing the threads to be updated with what's going on in the Utopic Monkeys world.
Thanks.​
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

subuerb....
i read all 4 chapters in 1 go
it took some time but it was definately worth it..
i like how u made a fanfic that doesnt revolve only
around the naruto manga.
but im really interested in this sujiro dude, he's really interesting to me
and i think of kakashi when i picture him talking, thinking and fighting.
nice job...how often do your new releases debut?
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

Amat3ra5u said:
subuerb....
i read all 4 chapters in 1 go
it took some time but it was definately worth it..
i like how u made a fanfic that doesnt revolve only
around the naruto manga.
but im really interested in this sujiro dude, he's really interesting to me
and i think of kakashi when i picture him talking, thinking and fighting.
nice job...how often do your new releases debut?
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Thanks a lot mate. I figured people would like Sujiro because he can attain the Speed of Gods.
The speed that the eye can't see.
Subscribe this thread and you will be updated but anyway i will just send the people who comment my FanFiction threads a link with the next Chapter.
Chapter 5 will be out tomorrow.
Wednesday is a break day, so Chapter 6 will be out on Thursday.

Attention, no chapter in Wednesday.​
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

hmmmmm as much as i like it and think that you story is superflues

Ch? - That's Fast but not fast enough for me.

Ch? - HYDRA NEEDLE


Ch? starts hitting a sequence of Hydra Needle Attacks.


Ch? ( Thinking ) - Even if he can nullify Hydra Needle with Lighting. I still gain some seconds once he gets hit.
That would be enough to apply a strong enough Hydra Fang with my left hand.

i think a little more detail in scenes like this would be nice, by the way when are we goona get some rich assholish preetyboy antagonist who wont fight but instead send an army of lackeys to do his work (just throwing an idea out there)
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

sabbyxx said:
hmmmmm as much as i like it and think that you story is superflues

Ch? - That's Fast but not fast enough for me.

Ch? - HYDRA NEEDLE


Ch? starts hitting a sequence of Hydra Needle Attacks.


Ch? ( Thinking ) - Even if he can nullify Hydra Needle with Lighting. I still gain some seconds once he gets hit.
That would be enough to apply a strong enough Hydra Fang with my left hand.

i think a little more detail in scenes like this would be nice, by the way when are we goona get some rich assholish preetyboy antagonist who wont fight but instead send an army of lackeys to do his work (just throwing an idea out there)
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If i get into even more detail in the fight scenes. The chapters will be HYOGE and it will be kind of a turn off for some people, if the chapters are huge but i'll try to get a little more detail next time. Just a tad bit more xd

You'll have to wait and see if someone like that appears :D​
 

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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

sabbyxx said:
hmmmmm as much as i like it and think that you story is superflues

Ch? - That's Fast but not fast enough for me.

Ch? - HYDRA NEEDLE


Ch? starts hitting a sequence of Hydra Needle Attacks.


Ch? ( Thinking ) - Even if he can nullify Hydra Needle with Lighting. I still gain some seconds once he gets hit.
That would be enough to apply a strong enough Hydra Fang with my left hand.

i think a little more detail in scenes like this would be nice, by the way when are we goona get some rich assholish preetyboy antagonist who wont fight but instead send an army of lackeys to do his work (just throwing an idea out there)
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I don't agree!
It has enough details or else the fight would only drag and drag on longer.

Something i wanna say:

- Dante picked up a strange Ring that fell from the shelf of books.

- Sujiro is able to perform a Speed that only Gods can attain.

- Cho throws up rocks it seems LOL

- Sujiro seems very smart. Kakashi like smartness.

- Dante will be screwed with the thunder earthquake if Sujiro doesn't save his ass.

- Zombies getting near and near.
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

Kenshin Himura said:
Thanks alot, guys.
You guys keep me going.

The final, revised version of Chapter 5 is done and will be out in about 8-9 hours from now.​
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Hm.. didn't really feel it with that battle...
"Get on a table!" O_O
More destruction :p
It was too dramatic :(
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

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Hm.. didn't really feel it with that battle...
"Get on a table!" O_O
More destruction :p
It was too dramatic :(
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Hmm.. Battle is not over yet.

Yeah, Sujiro jumped to a big, long type of Medieval Table near him. Just a random landing spot.

More destruction?? You might regret those words xd

The drama has to be there,mate.. There's a reason for it. You might get to know in the next 2 or 3 chapters.​
 
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Re: "Utopic Monkeys" - Chapter Four.. " Ch? The Avenger, Shukuchi "

i wonder whats the reason Cho killed Bunny Larry, maybe they have no reason to fight... maybe they will be allys in future, but atm i feel like the whole building is gona explode :D
 
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