Thanks dude.
Thanks.
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Thank you all for reading. :ice: for everyone!
Unknown Tales of Namikaze Minato: Minato's Speech
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Thank you all for reading. :ice: for everyone!
Now everyone has given you advise and credits for your work so i won't say anything else. You are doing great. The chapter at the start looked great just like your other chapters but the part where minato started to give speech didn't made me feel like reading with much interest but other then the speech everything was good. Keep it up dude.
Thanks dude.
Thanks!
Thank you.
I knew it sucked -_____- thanks for reading
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Simply EPIC! ... so kishi when did you decide to do minato's war stories arc and why in text instead of manga? lol j/k..... but seriously i just read it from chapter 1 to the end and although in comparison to other FF's i've read it is short overall but really really good for how short it is.
1: great detail in the battle scenes, you have a rare skill among the authors of FF i've read, (i've probably read about 175-200 separate naruto fanfiction's for reference to the pool of stories i've read and am basing your's off of),you can truely paint a picture with your words. So much so that when you are reading it the picture fill's up and you are watching these battle's take place. while that is one thing being able to accomplish this along with carrying out an exciting battle in a timely fashion that has great insight into the workings of battle in the narutoverse and also being strategic about its at the same time, simply epic Uzumaki16.
those were some of the best naruto battle scenes i've read, ever...i'll admit i'm already a bit of a minato fan anyway the team you set up for him was great and the fact that he actually used them was even better. Even kishi puts him in battles doing his own thing for the most part. I think this goes against the whole teamwork thing he's been establishing since the first season, but you made really good use of his team although i must point out that in battle you seriously neglected kakashi i know you pointed him out on several occasions but you never really used him, i only point this out because this was his team at the time and this being given he would find a strategy to attack using their assets as well as the other teammates such as kato kushina tekka and the baykugan user i cant remember his first name, as well as the akamichi aside from a summon he has traits that i seen could have been useful in some parts of these battles, this i solely for the purpose to point out that if your going for the teamwork thing with your battle scenes you can expand on other characters as well and only use about a 7 sentence paragraph for it would explain his teammates actions and coordination.
NONE of that was to criticize in a demeaning manner, I meant it as constructive criticism
Also i really loved how you show his level of uzumaki techs and you showed how kushina was on a whole other level in the defense category i did like how she took command and protected her teammates, also showing she could control the ninetails better then cloaked naruto was pretty awesome, naruto didn't really do much talking past 2 tails and here she was leading and crushing enemy forces and in control with 3 tails again awesome.
i cannot thank you enough for sharing this amazing work. i wont pick at your little grammar errors, god knows i make enough of them. they didnt even cause a hitch when you read so why pick at it. Please do another character maybe an ancestor of senju uchiha or maybe even a kimmimaro kaguya would be sick if you wrote the battle scenes, really doing just about any charachter that has some awasome ability that captivates the naruto fans would be amazing.
Again some of the best battle scenarios i've read in FF's
1: great detail in the battle scenes, you have a rare skill among the authors of FF i've read, (i've probably read about 175-200 separate naruto fanfiction's for reference to the pool of stories i've read and am basing your's off of),you can truely paint a picture with your words. So much so that when you are reading it the picture fill's up and you are watching these battle's take place. while that is one thing being able to accomplish this along with carrying out an exciting battle in a timely fashion that has great insight into the workings of battle in the narutoverse and also being strategic about its at the same time, simply epic Uzumaki16.
those were some of the best naruto battle scenes i've read, ever...i'll admit i'm already a bit of a minato fan anyway the team you set up for him was great and the fact that he actually used them was even better. Even kishi puts him in battles doing his own thing for the most part. I think this goes against the whole teamwork thing he's been establishing since the first season, but you made really good use of his team although i must point out that in battle you seriously neglected kakashi i know you pointed him out on several occasions but you never really used him, i only point this out because this was his team at the time and this being given he would find a strategy to attack using their assets as well as the other teammates such as kato kushina tekka and the baykugan user i cant remember his first name, as well as the akamichi aside from a summon he has traits that i seen could have been useful in some parts of these battles, this i solely for the purpose to point out that if your going for the teamwork thing with your battle scenes you can expand on other characters as well and only use about a 7 sentence paragraph for it would explain his teammates actions and coordination.
NONE of that was to criticize in a demeaning manner, I meant it as constructive criticism
Also i really loved how you show his level of uzumaki techs and you showed how kushina was on a whole other level in the defense category i did like how she took command and protected her teammates, also showing she could control the ninetails better then cloaked naruto was pretty awesome, naruto didn't really do much talking past 2 tails and here she was leading and crushing enemy forces and in control with 3 tails again awesome.
i cannot thank you enough for sharing this amazing work. i wont pick at your little grammar errors, god knows i make enough of them. they didnt even cause a hitch when you read so why pick at it. Please do another character maybe an ancestor of senju uchiha or maybe even a kimmimaro kaguya would be sick if you wrote the battle scenes, really doing just about any charachter that has some awasome ability that captivates the naruto fans would be amazing.
Again some of the best battle scenarios i've read in FF's
This was written masterfully; I felt like I was reading something from a book. All of your chapters flowed together so smoothly; I was drawn into the story. The detail painted a clear picture of what was happening, and I could imagine how it would be as an anime or manga. Nothing was too far-fetched, and it all fit very well with what we know of the past characters. The creative liberties all made sense, and added to the beauty of your fan-fiction.
Bravo
Bravo